I love it. That's one joke that would get old fast, but damn is it hilarious before it does.
Freya: puh at first ist funny as i make at this time self a Thor servant profile so ist interseting . a good build though a actual personalitty section would be nice i must say . One Question how would she react if she Encounter a "other" Thor ?
Err...Rasputin and Kirei might be closer and more compatible than you actually think.
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This is what happens when people don't pay attention to a very real and continuing source of official product.
My DeviantArt. Sometimes I actually upload something!The Waifu War never truly ends.TFW Thomas Edison is a lion, King Arthur is a girl, and Humanity's mom is Shin Godzilla
I actually do know about that.
Well, more I learned about that as I was reviewing the old concept.
It's just I truthfully am not a fan of Fate/Grand Order and the recycling of canon characters as "reskins" for Servants much (...at all), so I generally tend to play more "fast and loose" with it. Sometimes, it provides a concept I really like. And ignore it for the most part, as it seems every time I do see a bit of news or a new design from it, said design tends to... disappoint at best (Scheherazade), infuriate at worst (Rama).
Last edited by King of Braves; October 25th, 2020 at 06:34 PM.
ist okay to make one servant differen t as the nature of the servants and different Version like if you look at Vlad examplewise , About Grand order to be honest my greatest critic is the Explanation of the Greek Gods as Mecha /Mashines as i prefer the Concept they are embodiments of the nature , besides at first also to you a heartly welcome here in our rounds as servant makers my friend !
i saw your Macbeth and i am noting very positively the reference of the Gargoyles series which i saw , i am curious are you making a other class version of him as this build is very good?
your Maid Marian is also well thought out i am curious what would she think of my Tragic Warrior ?
"Evildoer, reflect upon your sins and understand, the time of your Destruction is now."
Class: Ruler
Alignment: Lawful/Neutral
Region: Heaven
Height: 180cm
Weight: 62kg
Likes: Law, order, believers
Dislikes: Disorder, fake immortals, non-Believers
Talent: Judgment
Armaments: Claws, locust
Natural Enemy: Helel ben Shahar
Stats
Str: B
End: C
Agi: B
Mna: A
Lck: E
NP: A
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Background
Personality
here is a list of my servant sheets(new and improved format for my servant sheets)
Come explore the White Library, and reach the bottom of this Abyss
Fate / White Memoria
Servant Gatekeeper:
Appearance:
Ka'ahupahau
Kahi'uka
True Name: Ka'ahupahau & Kahi'uka
Alternate Classes: Caster, Avenger (Ka'ahupahau)/Lancer, Berserker (Kahi'uka)
Alignment: Neutral Good
Strength- B
Agility- A+
Endurance- B+
Mana- A
Luck- C
NP- B++
History
Personality
Class Skills:
Bastion Erection- B+
Inherent Skill of the Gatekeeper Class. It denotes the ability to steadfastly guard a designated place. While the user remains in position, their defensive capabilities receive a significant boost. At the same time, the Skill's effects are dependent on the Gatekeeper's ability to repel invaders- should the user let intruders through, the effects of Bastion Erection will be lost.
Both halves of Gatekeeper were revered as guardian gods of Pu'uloa, protecting it from the evil man-eating sharks that sought to prey on humans who swam and fished there. As such, the damage-reduction provided by this Skill is increased when protecting humans or fending off enemies conceptualized as "maneaters".
Magic Resistance- B+
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, spells with a chant below three verses are nullified. Even if targeted by the likes of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals, it is difficult for the Servant to be affected.
Gatekeeper wasn't known for combatting or practicing magic, favoring their brutal maws and tails in battle over anything esoteric. Even so, as sharks in their era were worshipped as powerful Divine Beasts Gatekeeper naturally obtains a great resilience to Magecraft. Due to the Servant's nature, additional protection is conferred against spells employing the water-element.
Personal Skills:
Combination- B
Denotes the ability to fight on a united front with a certain person. In Gatekeeper's case, it symbolizes their eternal bond as brother and sister who defended Pu'uloa Harbor together. Ka'ahupahau would first snare evil sharks in a net made from her own body, while Kahi'uka would then smite the trapped enemies with his crushing tail.
While their personalities may differ sharply, both sides of Gatekeeper can read each other's intentions from a glance across the battlefield and devise strategies utilizing their unique strengths. But as he doubts his own intellect somewhat, Kahi'uka prefers to listen to his older sister Ka'ahupahau's strategies rather than come up with his own. In combat Kahi'uka mostly makes himself a machine who follows the orders of his "big sis", a onesidedness that somewhat dulls their teamwork and prevents this Skill from obtaining A-rank.
Apex Predator (Sea)- A
A Skill crystallizing Gatekeeper's existence as the by humanity crowned "strongest predator of the seas". They exert an aura of charisma that commands terror and awe in lifeforms born of the sea. Furthermore either halves of Gatekeeper obtain abilities commonly ascribed to sharks in both myth and popular culture, such as inhuman persistence, sprouting armor-like sharkskin and the ability to track their targets by the scent of blood. Just don't bring up a "certain movie" around them or you'll regret it...
Self-Seal- C+
A Skill unique to Ka'ahupahau. The hatred of humans she rejected and sealed away into the deepest recesses of her being. In return for somewhat dulling her combat power, an absolute compulsion is placed on Ka'ahupahau to "never stain her maw in the blood of humans".
She can weaken that seal in the middle of battle, gaining power by drawing on more of her bestial instincts. However the more she does this the more Ka'ahupahau risks eroding her morals and returning to the beast of destruction she once was. After all, a shark doesn't forget the taste of blood so easily.
Big Sister's Ally- B
Kahi'uka's unique Skill. In legend he was said to always strike down with his tail anyone who angered his big sister, Ka'ahupahau. While fighting to protect her, Kahi'uka gains a rank-up to his Strength and Agility parameters. Additionally this Skill donates Kahi'uka a form of prescience that lets him instinctively sense whenever his sister might be in danger and where she is anywhere within a 50-meter radius. Much to her chagrin, this makes him something of an overprotective little brother...
Noble Phantasms
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So after seeing all the Gawr Gura fanart up on Danbooru I started to wonder if there was another shark-girl sheet I could use her as a faceclaim for. A little bit of research lead me to Ka'ahupahau who I thought seemed interesting enough to have potential. At first I just planned on making her the Servant but then I decided it'd be more fun to include her brother too and make them a combo. I also took some artistic license with their backstory to fit with my vision of her character. Also thanks to Shiki-pon for inspiring me with his ideas for the Gatekeeper Class.
As usual, comments and critiques would be welcome. Hope y'all enjoyed!
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True Name: Tenjo no Usagi
Class: Assassin
Region: Japan
Alignment: True Neutral
Armament: None
Parameters:
Strength: D+
Endurance: D+
Agility: A
Mana: C
Luck: A
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm
Personality
Last edited by Vance; October 27th, 2020 at 12:00 PM.
Tenjo No Usagi: Pretty good sheet. A cheerful innocent yet sadistic person who doesn't hesitate to punish those she deems "evil". Her Torture Technique (Coincidental) sounds like it'd make some amusing imagery and the invisible flames NP is simple but certainly deadly. Out of curiosity, do you have any thoughts on my Ka'ahupahau and Kahi'uka sheet above?
Ka'ahupahau and Kahi'uka: Other than the obligatory well done on the sheet, I can easily that they are good kids. Props to using Gura as a face claim too! Also when I first saw her brother, I thought 'oh boy, this guy might make things difficult' until I read the lore and personality sections. But again, this is an overall good sheet from what I see.
Class: Lancer
True Name: Tugarin
Alignment: Lawful Evil
LANCER OF CONSUMING DESIRES
“I’ll tell you right now - I’m no good at following orders.
If you want me to fight, just start one and count me in.
If you want something destroyed to the high heavens, I’ll do it if I feel like it.
If you want me to save people…
...
I don’t do that anymore.”
Statistics
Gender: Female
Height: 179 cm (counting horns)
Weight: 69 kg
Blood Type: Abnormal
Voice: Tamura Yukari
Likes: Humans, food and drink, intimacy (physical and emotional)
Dislikes: Humanity, disguises, trickery
Forte: Acting on her desires, living in the moment
Weakness: Grasping human motivations
Attribute: Earth
Origin: Russian Folklore
Parameters:
STR - C
END - C
AGI - A
MGI - A++
LCK - E
NP - A+
Background:
A tempestuous creature of overflowing passions, Lancer’s true identity is that of the Russian zmey-bogatyr, Tugarin. In Russian legends, bogatyr were the equivalent of knight-errants, warriors of immense power and courage who traveled Russia and defended its people from danger and outside invaders. Counting household names such as Ilya Muromets and Dobrynya Nikitich, bogatyrs were men and sometimes women who were famed and loved across the country. Parents told stories of their exploits to their children and young boys and girls wished to be like them
The dragon Tugarin understood exactly how they felt.
Observing humanity from outside, Tugarin was one of many zmey who occupied the Russian texture. Slow to flee to the reverse side, Zmey were often the antagonists in Russian folklore, the most famous being the Chudo-Yudo, and as their age and power rose they grew into fearsome many-headed dragons. Like her brethren, Tugarin is also best known as the enemy of a famous bogatyr… but for a time before that, she was known as the Zmey-bogatyr, the dragon hero.
Rather than protecting the earth, or living as a dragon, Tugarin wished to protect and to be like the humans she observed living their short, difficult lives. With the power of a dragon, she could do so much, she reasoned. If she stayed with them, she could protect them. If she protected them, she could stay with them. All she had to do was find a way to blend in.
And so the dragon made herself a knight, and by degrees, gave herself the shape of a human. She traveled the country, living out her chivalrous dream and earning a reputation as a real, honest-to-goodness bogatyr! She became more human every day, as she ate and drank and loved like a human.
That was the root of her downfall, in the end.
For dragons are members of the greatest species - they generate magical energy simply by breathing and devour humans simply by existing as part of the planet, having no need to eat for sustenance. They were never meant to be compatible with humans, and in seeking to become one, Tugarin introduced a fatal error into herself.
For all her admiration of humanity, Tugarin could not fully understand their vices or desires, and the closer she came to crossing the anthropic divide, the more those passions and desires overwhelmed her. The need to eat. The desire to profligate. The urge to survive, to continue at any cost.
Her body was no longer able to support herself by breathing alone. She now needed sleep, and food, and sources of energy in ever more vast quantities. While she loved their virtues, Tugarin was unprepared for the onset of all the weaknesses and complications inherent in being human. She became a wild danger to others, destroying crops, plundering resources, and falling from a hero into yet another monster.
And so she became an antagonist like her brethren, the enemy of the young bogatyr Aloysha Popovich. Encountering her at a banquet held by the prince Vladimir I, Tugarin was said to act boorishly, insulting the prince and consuming entire trays of food before starting a fight with Aloysha.
In the duel that followed, Aloysha would slay the dragon through a combination of wit, disguise, and martial skill, cutting out her heart and putting an end to her menace. Even when she took to the sky on wings of flame, Aloysha’s prayers and faith brought rain to extinguish her flames, forcing them to battle on equal footing so he could overcome her.
Stories of her own exploits would be lost and forgotten as Aloysha’s grew in fame - and why not? She was no longer the hero she dreamed of being, but the hero’s stepping stone, playing out exactly the role she belonged to all along.
A self-centered villain rightfully stopped by the kind of hero she once admired.
Personality:
Hungry.
Most of all, Lancer is ravenously, violently hungry. She wants to be around people, but she hungers for blood and touch and the heat of a yielding body. She wants to eat with people, but she can not maintain her manners and devours food like a starved beast. She wants to make humans’ lives better, but she is three steps shy of becoming a curse upon their land and livelihood.
That is Tugarin near the end of her life. No longer able to support her own existence, overwhelmed by the competing urges and contradictory desires of humanity, she is manifest near the tipping point between “Tugarin the Zmey-Bogatyr” and “Zmey Tugarin,” the monstrous enemy of Aloysha.
She is quick to anger, acts on all of her worst impulses without a second thought, and can be likened to a Berserker when in battle, displaying a joy for battle and acts of violence!or conquest. The same is also true in bed - she is fundamentally the type to take, voicing and acting on her lusts without consideration or restraint. It is difficult for even a master she likes to reign her in, and all but impossible for one she dislikes.
Still, she admires beauty, and noble convictions, and kindness, and does her best to respond in kind. What remains of her honor as a bogatyr will not permit her to allow cruelty or deceit by others, even if she struggles to show self-control herself. In many ways, she has a childish mentality that loves values she lacks the maturity and restraint to show herself.
This is a digression, but it is said that when Aloysha killed the dragon Tugarin, he was approached by Prince Vladimir’s wife, the princess Apraksevna, who reproached him for taking away her “dear friend.” Given her presence at Vladimir’s court, it is said Tugarin had seduced the princess, and yet…
If asked, Lancer considers her an old friend and the one person she would absolutely not take to bed, and she seems to consider her affection for the princess a matter beyond her passions and desires. She was someone to talk to, to dream with, and to protect…
But even at her lowest point, that was a line she did not cross.
Class Abilities:
Magic Resistance
Rank: A-
Protection against magical effects. At this rank, due to the dragonic blood still flowing through her veins, Lancer may cancel spells of A-Rank or below, no matter what High-Thaumaturgy it is. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer". However, if it is water in nature...
Personal Skills:
Anthropic Modification
Rank: EX
An extreme form of Self-Modification with the intent of transforming one's body and features into another race. Rather than approaching the form of a dragon by swallowing a dragon's heart, Lancer performs the same technique in the opposite direction, seeking to become human through consumption and assimilation of human things.
While she still retains the heart, lungs, and spiritual organs of a dragon, Lancer successfully molded her body in life to take on increasingly human attributes and vices. Thanks to her lingering dragonic attributes, she retains the blood of a dragon and a dragonic reactor core, but her body is otherwise physiologically identical to a human’s in its current form.
Mana Burst (Flame)
Rank: B
A skill representing the increase in performance caused by infusing one's weapons and body with Magical Energy and instantly expelling it. Simply put, it recreates the effect of a jet burst by expending large amounts of Magical Energy. In the case of this skill, it imparts a flame effect by releasing the fiery mana from Lancer’s lungs and core. This skill may be used to wreathe her weapon in flames, coat her body or a steed in fiery materialized magical energy, manifest wings of flame, and so forth.
As a dragon, Tugarin would have had this skill at a level far exceeding the scope of a Servant’s saint graph, and its original rank was B+++. However, as she became more and more “human”, the rank of this skill scaled down accordingly as her dragon reactor and spiritual organs became less compatible with her human body. With time, the organs grew more unstable due to defects and incompatibility with her body, causing her physical pain and a corresponding reduction in performance. Where she was once able to generate vast amounts of mana simply by breathing, the energy she now produces is unstable and uneven, emerging in violent and fiery gasps.
As a Heroic Spirit, Lancer is manifest at a time not that far off from her encounter with Aloysha, and the blazing glow in her chest reveals the instability of the organs and power within.
She fights liberally with this skill to vent her own energy in an attempt to stabilize its throes, but even with regular venting and periods of heavy consumption, her body is hot to the touch almost everywhere.
Fallen Demon
Rank: A
A Skill given to mystical beasts and fallen ones - specifically, those of a man-made demonic nature, unattainable through natural means. Due to one’s reputation with humans, her Saint Graph is elevated beyond the limits of humanity, retaining a higher percentage of her power as a phantasmal species. In particular, it improves defense power, resistance against abnormal status, and so forth, though the ability slightly falls short to Natural Monster.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Tugarin-Zmeya - Great Dragon of Flame
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: A+
A Noble Phantasm representing Lancer's original self and the manifestation of her full power as a Servant. Zmey were the colloquial name for dragons in Russia, with the number of their heads indicating their power and constitution. Unusual among them was Tugarin-Zmeya, the Zmey-Bogatyr, the dragon who strived to live as a knight.
Similar to the many-headed dragon of a certain Slavic hag, Lancer's true form is that of a powerful, terrifying zmey, although in truth she may be said to be a child or teenager of the same breed compared to her elder, and she has not reached an age where her power is sufficient to manifest additional heads.
By sealing and unwinding her Anthropic Modification skill, Lancer may regress towards her original form, a colossal dragon capable of releasing fiery dragon breath equal to her constitution. It is easy for her to match even an A-Rank Noble Phantasm in pure power output in this way, releasing a torrent of magical flame sufficient to
set an entire city ablaze.
However, while Lancer has conflicted feelings about abandoning her human guise, her defective internal organs can no longer maintain this form for a long period of time. Not only would the sheer power needed to invoke this Noble Phantasm drain most modern magi in an instant, it also causes severe damage to Lancer herself in order to maintain it, forcing her to run massive amounts of magical energy through the equivalent of clogged, corroded arteries.
Thus, when using this Noble Phantasm, Lancer ordinarily limits herself to brief acts of self-modification, reverting a limb or claw, or manifesting armored scales in anticipation of an incoming attack.
If she manifests her full form, it means only one thing:
The end has come to her childhood farce, whether it be at the hands of another or to protect something worth ending her “human” life for.
Tugarin: I feel like this is the best sheet of the guy I've seen on this forum by far. You really nailed the tragedy of her character, where she desperately wanted to become a hero yet fell to the level of a monster precisely because of that admiration. The hint of a relationship with Apraksevna is fascinating story-wise (really curious how they met and how they could be fleshed out) and I love the flavor of her Mana Burst Skill with her body being constantly hot and having to discharge flames to keep her composure. Her NP is fairly straightforward compared to other Tugarin sheets I've seen (including the one I did myself), what with just transforming into her dragon form and all, but it works and you added some good flavor-text of it being an "ultimate last-resort" for her.
Tugarin: You have Valstrax represent her Dragon. 10/10 sheet right there.
@Royd: The NP is probably the weaker part, that's true... She's very high-performance in her default state given her parameters and constant Mana Burst (with the MGI and reactor to back it up), so I might have underclocked the NP a bit. It's a very large one-time burst since she can cause a huge amount of damage as a berserk dragon before she self-destructs, but fundamentally she never wants to use it.
It's probably the less interesting part of the sheet, but given there are so few stories about her, I ended up leaning more on the concept and personal skills I guess. The NP of the other takes are definitely more imaginative, I think!
She was intended as a one-off sheet, but one I grew rather fond of, I admit.
Some small additional trivia:
- The "Tugarin" name most likely isn't a name she was born with. Given the contested etymology of her name with Tugar-Khan and association as a stand-in for Steppe people, my headcanon is she got slapped with that name as a way to slander the Steppe people as monstrous by association, but she kept the name any way because she was just happy to have a "human" name given to her by humans.
- She doesn't respect the trickery Aloysha used in their battle, but she respects/admires him for killing her all the same. It's still a grand human accomplishment and if she was pressed to admit it, she doesn't hate him for doing it - on the contrary, w-well, it was admirable and looked really cool, so... *cough*
- This is vaguely alluded to in her NP text, but by dragon standards, she's not much older than a whelp or young teenage dragon pup. In a way, her lack of impulse control is also a result of that age as well as the incompatibility with humanity - she started off as the dragon equivalent of a kid playing dress-up as a knight, so no wonder she was unprepared for the complications of adult human life.
Last edited by Sunny; October 30th, 2020 at 12:20 PM.
Best dragon.
You nailed the themes, mechanics, interpretation of the character. Loved every part.
11/10.
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No fire snakes coming out of her body / 10.
Seriously, though, that is a really good sheet, Sunny! A character interesting enough I'd want to read stories about her.
My fanfics:
The Gift (F/SN): The last duel between Cú Chulainn and Scáthach.
Passion Acknowledged (F/SN): Shinji X Shirou lemon
He Was a Good King (F/SN): Was Beowulf a good king?
A Fairy Tale of Love and Death (F/SN): A meeting between Scáthach and King Hassan.
Palingenetic Descension (Tsukihime): The origin of the Tohno family's hybrid nature.
Happy Halloween everyone. A strange year it is when running around on this day without a mask is scarier than with.
Anyways
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Erich
"Hello Master, Servant class Archer. My name is Florence Foster Jenkins, the greatest opera singer the world has ever seen! I will give you the best show you can imagine, I guarantee it Master!"
"Pleased to meet you Flor…who's there? Show yourself!"
"How can that…I am sorry, but that is…he is my partner…we… we work together…I…"
"Florence? Are you okay?"
"Eh what? Oh you are the one in charge here i suppose? Let me introduce myself! I am Foreigner Lady Florence Foster Jenkins! I am sure you have heard of me, everyone by now should know the greatest singer of the 20th century! And this here is my Mas…-I mean friend Erich. He is a man of few or rather no words at all. He prefers to listen to me, who can blame him, right? Yohahahah."
Class: Foreign Archer
Other Classes (If Applicable): Archer, Avenger
True Name: Florence Foster Jenkins
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of Origin: Historical Fact, America
Parameters:
STR: E
END: E
AGI: E
MGI: D
LCK: C
Height: 164cm
Weight: 78kg
Likes: her music, art, piano, bringing joy with her singing, fashion
Dislikes: criticism, silent audience
Talent: making people laugh, piano, "singing"
Natural Enemy: the press
Attribute: Earth
Armament: a microphone, black cello
Catalyst: tickets or articles for/about her performance in Carnegie Hall
Description
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm 1
Noble Phantasm 2
Tactics
Personality
Relationships and Quotes
So who is Erich Zann?
And what is Skarl?
Creator's Notes
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