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    Caster of the Lanterns

    "Trick or treat! Yogurt Candy? Really? Don't you have any Whiskey bonbons?"


    Class: Caster
    Alignment: Chaotic/Neutral
    Region: Ireland
    Height: 148cm
    Weight: 44kg
    Likes: Candy, Parties, Alcohol
    Dislikes: Demons, Contracts, Killjoys
    Talent: Tricks and lies
    Armaments: Lanterns
    Natural Enemy: The Devil

    Stats

    Str: E
    End: D
    Agi: B
    Mna: B
    Lck: EX
    NP: B

    Skills


    Class Skills

    Item Construction(N/A): This Skill is lost in exchange for the Confectionist Skill.

    Territory Creation(E): The Servant is incapable of creating a proper territory, but can recover some mana by finding a good spot to rest. Caster never was one to stay in place for long.

    Personal Skills

    Mana Burst (Pumpkin)(A): A Increases performance by means of infusing magic energy to one’s weapon or one’s own body and instantaneously ejecting it. Caster claims that this skill is a manifestation of his status as "The spirit of Halloween", but in truth, it's just a more visually fancy version of Mana Burst (Flames).

    Hallow's Eve(A): A Skill awarded to one of the symbols of the night of Halloween, where the boundaries between the normal and the supernatural become thinner. It automatically increases the efficacy of spells and curses in the area while simultaneously decreasing the effects of anti-magic and anti-mystery Skills.

    Confectionist(C): The Skill to produce sweet and delicious candy, which is indispensable for the holiday Caster represents. Although not a master by any means, Caster can infuse magic into these confections for a diversity of special effects.

    Familiars(Lantern Jacks)(C): Caster is capable of crafting and commanding a type familiar called a "Lantern Jack". They are to resemble pumpkins (although they are not actually made out of pumpkin) and are very useful for support since Caster can direct them with thoughts alone. They boast high firepower with their capacity to expel powerful torrents of flames but have very low durability.



    Noble Phantasm


    Fool the Devil Once More
    Stingy Jack

    Rank: Anti-unit(self), B

    A Noble Phantasm embodying Caster's legend of using tricks and lies to escape the consequences of his actions, managing to fool even the Devil himself who came for his soul multiple times.
    Its effect can be activated when Caster finds himself in a troublesome spot, allowing him to instantly warp himself to a safe place far away from the problem. Furthermore, should he manage to trick someone into a verbal agreement, he can exchange that person into his place, forcing them to deal with it.
    However, there is a caveat to this Noble Phantasm, as Caster can only use its effects on the same person a maximum of two times. It seems that like in his legend, he cannot run away forever.



    Background


    Caster's identity is that of Stingy Jack, perhaps also known as Jack the Smith, Drunk Jack, Flaky Jack, and Jack of the Lantern, is a mythical character apparently associated with All Hallows Eve.
    As the story goes, several centuries ago amongst myriad towns and villages in Ireland, Caster lived a drunkard, known throughout the land as a deceiver, manipulator, and an otherwise dreg of society. On a fateful night, Satan overheard the tale of Caster's deeds and, unconvinced, went to find out for himself whether or not he lived up to his reputation.
    Typical of Caster, he was drunk and wandering through the countryside at night when he came upon a body on his cobblestone path. The body, with an eerie grimace on its face, turned out to be Satan. Caster realized somberly this was his end; Satan had finally come to collect his soul. So made a last request: he asked Satan to let him drink ale before he departed. Finding no reason not to acquiesce the request, Satan took Caster to the local pub and supplied him with many alcoholic beverages. Upon quenching his thirst, Caster asked Satan to pay the tab, much to Satan's surprise. He convinced Satan to metamorphose into a silver coin with which to pay the bartender Shrewdly, Caster stuck the now transmogrified Satan (coin) into his pocket, which also contained a crucifix, keeping Satan from escaping his form. This coerced Satan to agree to Caster's demand: in exchange for Satan's freedom, he had to spare his soul for ten years.
    Ten years later to the date when Caster originally struck his deal, he naturally found himself once again in Satan's presence. As Satan prepared to take him to hell, Caster asked if he could have one apple to feed his starving belly and Satan once again agreed to this request. As Satan climbed up the branches of a nearby apple tree, Caster carved a crux at the trunk. Like before, he made a demand: that his soul never is taken by Satan. Satan agreed and was set free.
    Eventually the drinking took its toll on Caster, and he died. His soul prepared to enter Heaven through the gates of St. Peter, but he was stopped because of his sinful lifestyle of deceitfulness and drinking. He then went down to the Gates of Hell and begged for admission into the underworld. Satan, fulfilling his obligation to Caster, could not take his soul. To warn others, he gave Caster an ember, marking him a denizen of the netherworld. From that day on until eternity's end, Caster is doomed to roam the world between the planes of good and evil, with only an ember inside a hollowed turnip (which would eventually become a pumpkin) to light his way.
    As the traditions of Halloween and of the "jack-o'-lantern" are intrinsically connected to Caster's legend, his Saint Graph was drastically affected by these concepts, causing his current child appearance. Caster himself is a little torn about it. It is something that helps him endear himself to others and lowers their guard more easily, but also, it makes it very hard to buy drinks.



    Personality


    Caster presents himself as a clueless and innocent child, but one should not believe in a single word that comes out of his mouth. He is a cheater and a liar with a predisposition to take advantage of people's goodwill. Despite that, what he experienced at the end of his life did succeed in giving him somewhat of a moral compass.
    He will absolutely refuse to harm children, and he is also reluctant to involve innocents in the war. He is not violent or evil, just very untrustworthy.
    Initially, he only pretended to like Sweets to fit his character, but afterward, he has come actually enjoy them. Specifically whiskey bonbons.



    Dialouge


    "Hey, Mister Master, wanna go to a pub? They are not gonna let me in? Tch, your probably right."

    "Look, if people fall for it, then is it really my fault? What, It is? Well, then what about if they fall twice?"

    Elizabeth(Halloween): "Well, not bad. I can certainly feel the spirit you put in this costume."

    Elizabeth(Brave): "I guess? I mean, it's a thematic costume, a very revealing one at that, but it feels like a stretch of what Halloween means."

    Mecha-Eli Mk I & II: "Ah, come on! You guys aren't even trying!"

    Shuten Douji(Halloween): "Hey, psst, can I have a sip? Just a little?"

    "What I like? Well, candy is not that bad, actually. Besides that, I wouldn't oppose a good shot"

    "People are too to hung up on promises and contracts. Do I really have to do something just because I said I would? I do? Well, fu..."




    here is a list of my servant sheets(new and improved format for my servant sheets)

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    Looks like Halloween's early this year! Honestly I used to think of Jack as a Berserker, but Caster is fitting too and it gives more things to stuff into his skillset. I love how he gets progressively more frustrated with the Halloween Elizabeths, it's hillarious.

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    Quote Originally Posted by King of Padoru View Post
    Looks like Halloween's early this year! Honestly I used to think of Jack as a Berserker, but Caster is fitting too and it gives more things to stuff into his skillset. I love how he gets progressively more frustrated with the Halloween Elizabeths, it's hillarious.
    Slowly do i think that the Name of Jack is somewhat often or almost connected with some obscure figures or what do you think ?

    and have you seen my idea of an "miniature" contest here if so what was/is your oppinion to such ideas ? and have you seen my Thales ?
    When you wake a Dragon in his Lair...





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    It's less of being connected to obscure figures and more of Jack being a quite common name.

    As you've been told by others, the idea for a contest would be more fitting for... the already existing contest.

    And I won't say more about your Thales than what Shiki-pon has already said. It's better to read, but it still has the same flaws as your other sheets: bloated stats and "these skills allow me to do anything".

    Though I must say, "water as the origin of everything" gave me an idea that I may use in the future if I ever finish writing the sheets I want to finish first.
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    Class: Caster
    Other Classes: Assassin

    True Name: La Sayona
    Alignment: Chaotic Evil
    Origin: Folklore


    Parameters:

    STR: E
    END: D
    AGI: D
    MGI: B+
    LCK: D
    NP: B

    Class Skills
    Territory Creation C
    Item Construction D
    Personal Skills
    Golden Rule (Body) B
    Cloaked in Death D
    Witchcraft C

    Lore
    In a small town on the plains of Venezuela, a most beautiful girl was married to a wonderful man who gave her unconditional love. This happy couple had a baby boy. One day, this girl was bathing in a nearby river as was her habit when a man from the village saw her. From then on, the man would always follow her and watch her bathe. On the day she discovered this man watching her, outraged, she demanded he leave her in peace. This man instead replied that he was there to warn her. "Your husband is having an affair with none other than your mother," he said. Possessed by a jealous rage, for her mother, too, was beautiful, the girl ran home and found her husband asleep with their baby in his arms. Blind with anger, she burned down the house with them inside. Even as the villagers heard the screams of her dying family, the girl ran to her mother's house. She found her mother on the patio and attacked her with a machete, striking her in the stomach. As her mother bled to death, she cursed her daughter, telling her that she would never be allowed into heaven, for she would for eternity avenge those women truly wronged by unfaithful husbands.

    Character
    A wraith whose life closesly matches the tale of La Sayona, she merely has the characteristics that enable La Sayona to be summoned as Caster. A kind witch who originally had everything in life, she lost everything in a blind moment of jealous rage. A woman who loved her child, her husband, and her mother, a woman who hates herself and who hates liars, a woman who knows herself to be damned. If she could achieve a single miracle, it would be...


    Noble Phantasms
    Moura Encantada: The Beautiful Illusion before the Skull – Anti-Unit (Self) [Rank B] – a hideous bone mask fashioned from the skull of a magical beast and stained with the blood of a fairy, it creates a perfect illusion that cannot be pierced by magecraft or the eyes of men. However, it is afflicted with the fickleness of the fairies as well. Women fail to see anything beyond a perfectly bland and forgettable face. A continuously active Noble Phantasm, due to how it was created, it grants the owner some protection from magical beasts and spiritual bodies.


    Estantiga: Nightmare From the Crystal Valley – Anti-Unit [Rank B] – the thing she once studied, the madness that once possessed her, the demons that consumed her, the hell that buried her, this is the Mystery that came at the price of everything she wished for. Similar to a Reality Marble, yet not a Reality Marble, Estantiga passively transforms the world around it into a distorted landscape that is both beautiful and horrendous. This High Thaumaturgy does not swap out the Self for the World, but rather builds atop the World with a nightmare recognized by the world. Once within the bounded field, the target cannot escape, as the host of man-eating demons comes to feast.



    I do believe I like the way she came out. What do you all think?
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    Oh my God they look like adorable kittens I want to take them home with me!

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    La Sayona: Is it just your style not to give flavor-text for Skills? Her Skills aren't exactly super generic ones, so I'm curious what her unique versions of them do (well, mainly Cloaked In Death and Witchcraft). And in general, a little flavor (tying in why they have the Skill to their life/legend) can work wonders in making the sheet more fully fleshed out and memorable. Tying her second NP in to ORT's Crystal Valley is a creative idea, though I'm curious why exactly she has it, since you didn't include any mention of her meeting ORT or anything in her backstory.

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    You're right, it's not my style to give flavor-text, but you helped me out, so I'll add some as a token of my gratitude.

    One Cloaked in Death: There is nothing in her legend that is life-giving. She killed child, husband, and mother, and went on to kill unfaithful and lustful men. However, it's always one or two or three at a time, and the disasters specifically fall under individual body horror. The low rank reflects the small disasters she creates and also powers up her abilities from life.

    Witchcraft: She's not a proper Heroic Spirit in the slightest, she's a wraith who fits the legend in the same way Sasaki Kojirou is a nameless wraith who fits that legend. Were she to be summoned as Assassin, there would be a different wraith summoned. She is from South America, she is a mage, specifically from a lineage dedicated to witchcraft. These are her abilities in life powered up with the additional mystery of being One Cloaked in Death and two hundred years old. I was actually considering powering it up to rank A, but since her legend is younger than that of Faust, I was conservative and went with C.

    Estantiga: The town where her specific tragedy took place is near the Crystal Valley and her family spent too much time trying to understand the Crystal Valley. The dying curse of her murdered mother, the blood sacrifice of her beloved kindred, the mad understanding that came in that fleeting moment united with the legend of La Sayona and other man-eaters to become her Noble Phantasm.
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    Was still hilarious, though.
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    Oh my God they look like adorable kittens I want to take them home with me!

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    Class: Archer
    Identity: Hersilia
    Gender: Female
    Source: Historical fact, Roman mythology
    Origin: Rome
    Alignment: Chaotic Good
    Height: 144 cm
    Weight: 36 kg

    Parameters:
    Strength: D
    Endurance: D
    Agility: C
    Mana: C
    Luck: EX
    NP: A+


    Skills
    Passive skills

    Magic Resistance: B
    Protects from spells with a chant of three verses and lower, including High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
    ---
    [Increase debuff resist (17.5%).]

    Independent Action: A-
    Allows to move freely without being tied to a mana source.
    Can survive on her own for a whole week, provided mana is conserved with maximum efficiency.
    Although she’s physically able to be alone for long periods of time, the mental burden is too much for her to exploit the benefits of this skill properly. In other words, she can’t bear being lonely.
    ---
    [Increase critical damage (9.5%).]

    Divinity: —
    Attitude as a Divine Spirit.
    Because she went on to become the goddess Hora, her rank would be very high, but Hersilia as a human is in bad terms with the god Jupiter, so she has sealed her Divinity with the help of Romulus.
    ---
    [Increase damage (0).]


    Personal skills

    Affection of ROMA: EX
    Having become the chief god Quirinus, Romulus, founder of Rome, transcended humanity and became stronger than ever. His love is not only the love of a supreme god, but the love of Rome and its people as well.
    The one who was the closest to him receives the full extent of this love in the form of a tremendously powerful blessing that boosts her class skills, rises her Luck parameter to EX, and gives plus modifiers to all checks.
    ---
    [Increase own critical damage (20 – 40%) for 3 turns.]
    [If applied Roman trait: Further increase own critical damage (30 – 50%) for 1 turn (Multiple stacks don't apply multiple times the effect.]
    [Gain (5 – 15) critical stars.]

    Natural Body (Body): B
    An in-between of the skills Natural Body and Golden Rule (Body).
    The possession of a perfect, goddess-like body since birth, whose shape won’t vary no matter how much caloric intake was taken or how long one stops training. If she was summoned with a more evolved Saint Graph, this skill would be replaced by a more advanced version, fitting for that Saint Graph.
    A woman of her beauty would be able to stop a battle by standing on the middle of the battlefield.
    Even though it has parts of Natural Body, it still won’t grant a temporary rank-up to the Strength parameter, so it’s absolutely forbidden to say it’s a “tomboyish” skill. There is nothing tomboyish about it. Is it clear?
    ---
    [Grants self debuff immunity (1 time, 3 turns)]
    [Increase own defense (15 – 25%) for 3 turns.]
    [Grants self invincibility (2 times, 3 turns).]

    Mana Burst (Rainbow): B+
    A variation of Mana Burst. Specifically, it’s a sub-variant of Mana Burst (Light) entrusted by the goddess Iris to Hersilia.
    Besides increasing mobility and overall firepower, a beautiful trail of rainbow is left wherever she goes.
    ---
    [Increase own Quick performance (10 – 20%) for 1 turn.]
    [Increase own Arts performance (10 – 20%) for 1 turn.]
    [Increase own critical star generation rate (30 – 50%) for 1 turn.]


    Noble Phantasm

    Arcus Iridium
    Seven-colored bow of light

    Type: Anti-Unit
    Rank: B
    Range: 1~99
    Maximum number of targets: 1 person

    The bow of the goddess Iris. A weapon that has been handed to Hersilia together with her Mana Burst skill. It’s a beautiful bow that appears to be made of a glass-like substance sparkling with the colors of the rainbow, and can be ridden in a similar fashion to Ištar’s Boat of Heaven.

    Being used by the messenger goddess to travel even to the Underworld, it’s an incredibly fast and lightweight vehicle-slash-weapon. Its True Name release allows to reach maximum speed, able to travel hundreds of kilometers in a matter of minutes. Wherever it goes, the seven colors are scattered behind. How pretty.



    Propter Amorem Ad Astra
    My love reaches everything, even the stars

    Type: Anti-Divine
    Rank: A+
    Range: 1~9,999
    Maximum number of targets: 1 god


    [Increase NP strength (20%) for 1 turn.]
    [Deal (800 – 1,600%) damage that ignores defense buffs to a single enemy.]
    Overcharge: [Deal (150 – 200%) extra damage to a Divine enemy.]

    A representation of Hersilia’s deification and reunion with Romulus as Quirinus. In Roman mythology, Hersilia ascended to heavens riding a star that came down from the sky, but there have been some slight adaptations.

    As an Archer’s Noble Phantasm, ‘Hersilia rides a star to reach the heavens’ has been altered to become ‘Hersilia uses a star to launch herself until the Throne of Quirinus’. A last-resort Noble Phantasm that overloads the standard Saint Graph of a Heroic Spirit with the power of a Divine Spirit and allows Hersilia to burn down everything with the incandescent light of a star before unavoidably curving her trajectory up to the firmament and vanishing. Its best way of using it is to directly aim to the sky, shooting up Hersilia as a rocket that will destroy anything airborne that stands in her path.


    Character
    Personality

    A small woman with a big heart. A lover of love that cherishes her husband and treats him as the most important thing in the world for her. However, it’s extremely important to note that, despite being married to the founder of Rome, she doesn’t share his infinitely vast love for Rome and all what it represents. How could it be? Why would she be married to him then? Well, here’s her own testimony:

    “I don’t have much to think about Rome personally, but romance is my weakness. That man didn’t bow to other kings, but he bowed in front of me and asked me to marry him almost on the verge of tears! A man that could have perfectly been a god on earth begged to me on his knees just for the fulfillment of his dream! Isn’t that the most romantic thing ever?”

    As it can be seen, she values people that are willing to do the unimaginable for the sake of their dreams. Although she doesn’t have Rome in her heart, she supports Rome and all that is Rome because it’s the dream of Romulus made reality. However, she has some doubts about that way of seeing things. Even though the initial approach wasn’t ideal, Romans certainly treated well, and even allowed her to be part of their pantheon, yet she only had eyes for her husband. From time to time, she often wonders if she wasn’t being selfish.

    Regarding her personal relation with Romulus, as it’s been shown before she fell in love with him for his wish to have his dream realized no matter what he had to do, but she actually feels slightly unsatisfied with his way of showing love. Rather than a love that can embrace everything and everyone, her affection is concentrated in a single individual. For that reason, she can’t help feeling a bit jealous when her dear husband demonstrates his endless love to others.


    Treatment with the Master

    Because she gives special importance to chasing one’s own dreams, Hersilia specially favors Masters that won’t give up until they achieve their goals.

    There are many questions that bother her, such as why she isn’t a Roma-maniac like other Roman Servants, or how could such a short woman… It’s better not to ask.


    Dialogue examples

    Bond 1:
    “I look too short for being Romulus’ wife?! H-How rude of you! I may not be really tall, but it’s not like you could possibly find a woman that doesn’t look short at his side! Hmph!”

    Bond 2: “You too are Rome, so you have a place in his heart. Do you wonder if you have a place in mine too? Hehehe. Maybe a liiitle.”

    Bond 3: “Many people say Romulus is like a spear, but I prefer to compare him to a tree. I mean, he’s imposingly big and strong, but he’s also serene and gentle, and being at his side is calming and refreshing. You, on the contrary, think he can be a bit too asphyxiating? Hahaha! That’s right, he could be very passionate too. But that’s his most notable charming point!”

    Bond 4: “To be honest, there was a time in which I was a bit confused. When Jupiter abducted Romulus, I felt really lonely. It was as if I didn’t fit in Rome anymore, and for that reason I may not have treated the Romans who took care of me as they deserved…”

    Bond 5: “I may be thousands of years late, but I’d be happy if you, on behalf of Rome, accepted my apologies. Although I was chosen to be the wife of the father of Rome, I didn’t act as a mother to you. But from now on, that will change, I promise you. So… Would you let me spoil you from time to time, as a mother…?”

    Likes: “Romance is a really nice word, isn’t it? It evokes a feeling of love, and it starts with Rome. It reminds me a lot of Romulus.”

    Dislikes: “I’m a lovebird that wants to be all lovey dovey with the one I love, so him being involved in things like unnecessary conflict and separation make me sad. But they won’t stop me! Even if Romulus rode a UFO and flew to the other point of the galaxy, I’d launch myself to the sea of stars to reunite with him again!”

    Wish for the Grail: “I don’t know about the Holy Grail. It’s not really my taste, but maybe I could wrap it as a gift for our next anniversary? I’m sure Romulus would be delighted to receive it!”


    Personal data
    Historical depiction

    One of the protagonists of the Rape of the Sabine Women, an event that took place in the early stages of Rome. Despite being called a ‘rape’, this incident wasn’t a sexual assault. That’s a misconception due to ‘rape’ being the proper translation of the Latin word ‘raptio’, whose meaning would be closer to ‘abduction’ or ‘kidnapping’.

    Rome at its beginnings, despite its fast growth, was inhabited mostly by men. Without barely any woman to ensure its growth in the future, the city wouldn’t survive more than one generation. The Divine Ancestor Romulus, concerned with the situation, asked the Senate for advice, and was told to ask the neighboring regions for women. Romulus did so, but his expedition was unsuccessful. One of the geographically closer peoples to Rome in particular, the Sabines, feared Rome’s growth and absolutely refused to give the Romans any of their women.

    Almost at the end of his wits, Romulus came up with an idea to achieve his goal. To commemorate the foundation of Rome, he held a festival of games in honor of Neptune and invited the surrounding towns to participate. Of course, many people eager to visit their new neighbor town and seeking to be at peace with them went to the festival, including the Sabines. In the middle of the festival, Romulus gave his men a signal, and they took with them a total of 30 women, all of them virgins except Hersilia.

    The women were clearly upset with the situation and unwilling to marry against their own will, until Romulus, the very same founder of Rome and son of Mars, knelt in front of them and implored them to assist Rome by marrying its citizens. Seeing a man of his stature willing to bow in front of simple women, they changed their minds and accepted the marriage offers. Hersilia, the only abductee to have been already married, would become the wife of Romulus himself.

    In the upcoming years, the surrounding tribes would separately declare war to Rome, just to be defeated and have their territories annexed to Rome. Eventually, the king of the Sabines attacked the city and managed to conquer the citadel thanks to an internal treason. Romulus rallied his men to take back the citadel, but when they seemed to have turned over the tides of battle, the Sabine women, led by Hersilia, irrupted in the middle of the battlefield and asked both sides to stop fighting. Later, Sabines and Romans would agree to unite into a single nation.

    Hersilia went on to have a peaceful life as the wife of Romulus, although there are no records about whether she gave him a descendant or not. In any case, they lived happily together until Romulus was abducted by Jupiter and turned into the chief god Quirinus. Unable to bear being separated from her husband, Hersilia implored the gods to allow her to be reunited with him. The queen goddess Juno listened to her pleas and made the messenger Iris descend to the mortal world. Iris came to Hersilia’s side and helped her rise to heavens with a star. Now under the name of Quirinus, Romulus gave his wife a warm welcome and changed her into a goddess, giving her the new name of Hora.


    Related characters

    Romulus
    He always was a fanatic of Rome, but… Isn’t he a bit too intense now? And what’s with that pose? Should I imitate him? Okay, I’ll try… Ehem… R-ROMA!!

    Romulus-Quirinus
    Hold on a second. If you could have done this from the very beginning, why didn’t you come down and see me in the past?! I thought I couldn’t see you again, sheesh!

    Caesars
    Thanks for preserving my husband’s dream for so long. I know he’s proud of all of you.

    Europa
    Not fair! Why does she get such cool presents and I have to borrow Iris’ weapon? I have to ask Romulus to make a giant eagle of gold only for me! And maybe a bronze wolf too!

    Solomon
    ‘Romance’ really is a nice word, isn’t it…

    Odysseus
    Oh my goodness, have you seen that man?! He went through hell just to reunite with his wife, and never stopped thinking about her!! He’s so romantic!!!

    Super Orion
    Being in a love relationship with a god or a descendant of a god can be troublesome sometimes, can’t it? Even so, I’m still loyal to my husband so please stop trying to hit on me or I’ll tell Lady Diana!!


    Concept: That thing where your couple is super-enthusiastic about something but you support them even though you don't really like it because it's what makes them happy and you love them so much. I made her a loli because the image of Romulus kneeling in front of someone half his size was amusing and kinda made the situation look more intense. I wanted to add a proper NP command card with a sprite, but my graphic tablet is broken.

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    Hersilia: Romulus' waifu, huh? This sheet is super cute and I love it. Her personality is adorable and you did a good job giving her fitting Skills and NPs despite her relatively sparse legend. Making her an Archer because she uses a rainbow was also a clever and fun idea. Natural Body (Body) is kind of goofily named as a Skill, but I'm guessing that's on purpose. Overall this is definitely someone I'd like to see summoned in canon.

    Out of curiosity, how do you think she'd get along with my Deianira?

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    Isn't Natural Body (Body) an actual canon skill? Salome has it, IIRC.


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    Quote Originally Posted by the god of world-0 View Post
    Isn't Natural Body (Body) an actual canon skill? Salome has it, IIRC.
    Oh, you seem to be right. Well, GO has lots of goofy Skills.

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    Unfortunately, there isn't a better translation than that, but that's what happens with Japanese sometimes.

    I think that regardless of their differences and how Deianira tries to deny all about Heracles, Hersilia would get along with her since at the end of the day she's a girl that followed her dream (and she'd like to get along with her possible mother-in-law). But she'd probably try to help her overcome her feelings of how marriage equals tragedy so she finds a good man or re-encounters the one she was meant to be with.

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    I'm perfectly fine with Natural Body (Body) because it's a translation that sounds exactly as stupid as the Japanese original.

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    Ridef of Sado

    "Rider here! You can one hundred percent count on me! Well, I am a Youkai, so you may suffer a prank or two..."


    Class: Rider
    Alignment: Chaotic/good
    Region: Japan
    Height: 163cm
    Weight: 53kg
    Likes: Sake, pranks, good stories
    Dislikes: Foxes, hunters, money-obsessed People
    Talent: Borrowing and lending money, pranks
    Armaments: Leaves, pipe, sandals
    Natural Enemy: Tamamo no Mae, Kuzunoha

    Stats

    Str: D
    End: C
    Agi: B
    Mna: B
    Lck: A
    NP: B


    Skills


    Class Skills

    Magic Resistance(A): Cancel spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer". As a Youkai, Rider has a natural high rank in this skill.

    Riding(A): All creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts. This rank is high enough to have an aptitude for the Rider Class.

    Personal Skills

    Divinity(B): The level of one's aptitude as a Divine spirit. While her true nature is that of a Youkai, Rider is worshiped as a
    Guardian Spirit
    Ujigami
    and a god of wealth by the people of Sado.

    Shapeshift(A): Shapeshifting refers to both the borrowing bodies and appearance change. For Rider, both appearance and personality can be copied exactly, to the point of being indistinguishable from the original. At this rank, a small handful of skills (if previously observed) can also be mimicked by the shapeshifter (No more than 3).

    Golden Rule(False)(B): A Skill representing a Tanuki's natural illusionary abilities. Rider can use her powers to do seemingly make a rock look like is made of gold and other tricks like that. In fact, she is famous for using leaves as money. The illusion will disappear after a while.

    Promissory Note(C): A Skill that represents the profound between that exists between Rider and the people of Sado. It is said that even if she steals the valuables of someone as a prank, she will leave a note with the date where she will return what was stolen. Effectively, it diminishes the stats of an ally to boost Rider's own for a while, then after that, it lowers Rider's stats to increase the ally.



    Noble Phantasm


    Magic Walls of the Racoon Dog
    Tanuki no Nurikabe

    Rank: Barrier, C

    A Noble Phantasm that grants Rider the ability to summon Magical living walls called
    Plaster wall
    Nurikabe
    . A mischievous power whose original use was for playing tricks on inattentive humans, which is a staple of Tanuki legends. They are bonafide Youkai and are classified as semi-sentient familiars.
    Rider can use them in the usual ways, that protecting herself or others and to block the path of the enemy in case of an escape but she also uses them in more unorthodox ways, like as stepping stones to aid her movements or as a weapon by manifesting them in the air and letting them fall on a target.
    However, there is a limit to how much the walls can take before they break. They also need a constant supply of Mana while existing, which limits the number of walls that Rider can deploy simultaneously. Because of that, her preferred tactic is to only summon them briefly to delay attacks while she gets out of the way.

    The Leader of the Tanuki on Sado Island
    Sado no Daimyo

    Rank: Anti-Group, B

    Rider's trump card and favorite trick, it is a Noble Phantasm that makes use of the full extent of her mastery over the shapeshifting arts by allowing her to transform herself into an entire procession.
    When activated Rider herself will disappear in a poof of smoke and, In her place, it will appear the "real daimyo and its procession" trampling over everything on its path. It is a conceptual attack that "cannot be stopped", meaning any defenses of lower rank then it in his way will be absolutely crushed.
    While Rider herself is safe through the duration of the Noble Phantasm, any strenuous damage suffered by the procession will be reflected onto her after the attack is over. This Noble Phantasm also costs a hefty amount of mana, meaning it cannot be deployed carelessly.



    Background


    Rider's identity is that of Danzaburou-mujina, also know as the Futatsuiwa Daimyoujin. She is a bake-danuki passed down in stories on Sado Island, particularly in Aikawa and Niigata. Together with the Shibaemon-tanuki of Awaji Island, and the Yashima no Hage-tanuki of Kagawa, they form the "three famous tanuki of Japan".
    The supreme commander of the tanuki on Sado Island, most tales about Rider focuses on her trickery of humans. She would create wall-like structures to block people's paths at night, fool people with mirages, and sell leaves from trees by making them look as if they were made of gold. If she ever became ill, Rider would disguise herself as a human and visit human doctors for treatment.
    Her reputation was not all bad, however. She was said to have often lent money to people struggling with financial troubles and some tales actually purport that Rider would repay what she stole; a story from the town of Orito (near Aikawa), reported that the tanuki left a sealed promissory note with the victim’s name, the sum of money taken, and the date it was to be returned. When the day came, the victim found the note had disappeared and the payment was left in its place. Because of these stories, Rider eventually began being worshiped as a guardian deity.
    It has been said that the reason why there are no kitsune (foxes) in Sado is that Rider drove them out. While she was on a journey, Rider met one kitsune. As opposed to the kitsune who boasted of her techniques, Rider simply said, I'm good at disguising myself as the daimyo's procession, so I'll threaten you" and disappeared. Soon after that, the daimyo's procession arrived. The kitsune jumped under a basket of a feudal lord within the procession, and mocked, "You surely disguised yourself well" as the kitsune was seized at once and put to the sword for the crime of causing a disturbance. The procession was not Rider but the real thing, and she knew beforehand that the procession was about to pass by.



    Personality


    Rider is a rare kind of youkai that is actually friendly to humans. She has a nice, albeit mischievous, personality and is extremely easy to work with, as long as her master is a good person.
    She may pull pranks on people she is interested in. This is actually a kind of affective gesture and a signal that things are going well. In the same vein, she is also a bit of a spender and easily gives away money to anyone who asks her.
    However, Rider does have a serious side to her. In specific, she can get pretty angry at the senseless violence and at people who kill and hurt others for money. In the way she sees it, money is only somewhat valuable, meaning it is idiotic to sacrifice something as important as a life to obtain it. She also seems to have animosity with foxes.



    Dialouge


    "let's get going! This procession cannot be stopped!"

    "Master, can you lend me some money? I would take it without you knowing, but last time I had to spend a whole week apologizing while Mash gave the stinky eye..."

    Tamamo no Mae: "You can't fool me, fox! I will keep an eye on you."

    Tamamo Cat "You can't fool me... fox? Wait, are you really a fox?"

    Ibaraki Douji "Master, you gotta help me! I tried to play a prank on Ibaraki by making a rock look like candy, but she just swallowed it without even flinching! Now she doesn't stop asking me for more!"

    "I like pranks, they are perfect for a laugh. Of course, they are only fun so long as no one gets hurt"

    "Foxes are the worst. They are all 'look at me, look at my powers, we are the best'. Freaking show-offs.




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    Another remake, because I felt like. I really liked this sheet back when I have it for the first time, but looking back on it now it seemed really barren and full of mistakes, so I decided to fix that. This may become a trend for a while, going back and fixing sheets that I think deserved better.
    Like before, opinions on the changes and additions, as well as in the sheet as a whole, are very much welcomed.

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    Herisilla :Roma erh*cough* nice cute waifu *add to my imaginery must be put in canon pedition list" i think that she really fit in the seting ,though i must admit that i understimated the bRoman mythology as i thought that it is just Greek Mythology with swapped names as i onc sought if a seperate Herkules or NEptune sheet would be reasonable but nevermind,great Job !

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    Hersilia: Romulus' waifu, huh? This sheet is super cute and I love it. Her personality is adorable and you did a good job giving her fitting Skills and NPs despite her relatively sparse legend. Making her an Archer because she uses a rainbow was also a clever and fun idea. Natural Body (Body) is kind of goofily named as a Skill, but I'm guessing that's on purpose. Overall this is definitely someone I'd like to see summoned in canon.

    Out of curiosity, how do you think she'd get along with my Deianira?
    OOi ! i wanted also during reading Hesilla to know how she would view my Deianira ? i think she could be a bit jealous that my Deianira is a tall strong Woman albeit would i be curious what she thinks of her atonements.hmm ..
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    Lancer - Ferdiad



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    (portrait 3 see boots, gauntlets, and tunic for reference of what they look like)

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    Characteristics
    Gender: Male
    Height / Weight: 183 cm, 77 kg
    Alignment: Neutral Good
    Home: Ireland
    Origin: Ulster Cycle


    Equipment
    Lancer is armed with a metal spear with a barbed tip, a sword as a secondary weapon he keeps on his belt and wears a set of fur and hide armor. Upon activating his noble phantasm the top half of his armor fades away leaving only the bottom half around his waist, his gauntlets, and his boots. The rest of Lancer’s skin turns a dark smoky grey and becomes spiked, particularly his arms and legs as well as his chest.


    Personal Information
    Attribute: Earth
    Likes: Battle, Cú Chulainn, Camaraderie/Brotherhood, Honoring the worthy dead
    Dislikes: Medb, Those who tamper with the dead, Those who betray bonds of loyalty or trust without good cause, deserters
    Talents: Honoring oaths, training, wrestling
    Natural Enemy: Lev Lainur Flauros (Grand order timeline), Semiramis


    Lore
    A warrior of Connacht and one who studied alongside many others under Scáthach. Yet of those under her tutelage only he and Cú Chuliann could be called competitors in the quest for the magic spear Gáe Bolg. However despite being equal in every aspect when it came to the aspects of martial arts, Cú Chulainn who held the divine blood of Lugh outdid him in skill, for he was talented in the use of runes as well as armed and unarmed combat. Accepting defeat, Ferdiad was still held by his brother in arms as “the greatest born among mortal men” and the two exchanged vows and became sworn brothers. Both wished to invite the other to their homes, yet as both were bound by oaths, neither could join the other. It would be several years until they met once more in the final battle of the war against Ulster. In that ford he had stood striking down countless warriors until he met Cú Chulainn. When the two fought over and over they proved equal and for three days straight did their battle continue before his brother, left with little choice, used his spear to pierce his skin and kill him. However, even in the end he held no malice towards Cú Chulainn, for he was as much a victim of the circumstances and meddling of Medb than any other in the war. His greatest regret in death was that he wasn’t there to held his sworn brother when he needed him, and that he never got to fight at his side as he had wished.



    Personality
    Lancer is a warrior who can be described as a fighter in many ways, he is a man who believes in the bonds forged and tempered in battle and training and who deeply respects those bonds. To him it could be said that memory of times gone by and things which have happened is a sort of way of measuring the worth and weight of a person. Someone who has opened themselves to the world and forged many bonds with those who live in the world, and in turn honor those bonds is someone he would feel kinship with. To this same end one who has betrayed these bonds and failed to honor the dead is someone who he would struggle to respect. Beyond this lies a man who feels that battle is a testament to one’s strength and the strength of how well they have formed bonds with the world and earned its strength, those who are stronger have stronger bonds or have made better use of them.

    In some ways he could be described as dishonorable, as he can and will use many tricks most would call dirty (attacking a foes weak points like their achilles tendon, the instep, the side or back of their knee, their shin, taking their legs from out under them, attacking their floating ribs, striking their sternum. Even breaking wrists, dislocating shoulders, or going for the throat or eyes (sand and such) is not beyond him. However, despite how “dirty” his style of fighting is he is not without honor, holding fast to oaths or bonds sworn unless given great cause to break them, respecting the dead, honoring the memory of the fallen, even things like not fighting others while they are not ready or at their best are some tenants of his code of honor.

    To Lancer, the code itself typifies his beliefs and is a way of showing that, in spite of his drive for victory, there are lines even he will not cross, as it would fall beneath him to do such, and dishonor those he associates with if done so. However, Lancer can also be prideful, although not so much as to admit himself as even the strongest in his myth, but if challenged or the honor of others or his fellows is put into question he will fight on their behalf.


    Relationships
    Cú Chulainn: My brother, such strength brought to an undeserving end, forgive me. If I had joined you then perhaps ... No, what’s past has past, even still so long as you fight I shall stand by your side. However, with you at are back, then I remain undettered.

    Scáthach: My teacher, forgive me, I could not aid him in his hour. Still I will hold strong, for their sake, and for his, such is our way.

    Romulus: What, Roma? I apologize, I don’t understand. Yet still, to hold such brotherhood at heart, your strength is mighty indeed godkin.

    Medb: Wretched fae, do not think I have forgotten your last insult. Tread carefully, if even a hint of your schemes grazes my ears, then it will be your end that awaits.

    Artoria: Hmph, so you are the warrior my brother spoke of, pray tell what did you mean to accomplish with that wish? To shatter the bonds of brothers by condemning your legend to dust, such madness, how is it that one who understands nothing of brotherhood would wear a crown and call themselves a knight?

    Lancelot: Honor? You speak of such things? What has your honor wrought, brothers in arms slain by your twisted hands. Speak no more of these things, I keep my honor in my own way, I will not be lectured by the likes of you.

    Mordred: Treachery, of lies and deceit and … Wait no, loyalty? Impressing thy father? Then what is it then?

    Diarmuid: I see, then that betrayal, truly, it was beyond your power? A pity, such bonds shattered by misfortune.



    Parameters (with blessing of the waterside):
    Strength – B (B+)
    Endurance – A
    Agility – C
    Mana – C
    Luck – D
    Noble Phantasm – A


    Class Skills
    Magic resistance [C]- Cancels spells with chants less than two verses and lesser rituals. Cannot protect against greater rituals and High-Thaumaturgy.


    Personal Skills
    Warrior of Siege [B]- A rare skill which denotes the ability of a person to stalemate a large number of foes through a combination of power, endurance (both physical and mental), and technical skill. Traditionally a siege is thought of as a mass assault on a fortified target which occurs over a great length of time, as such one who receives this skill could be called a human fortress as they alone can fend off and face a vast number of foes who would aim to strike them down. In practice it could be called a highly specialized variation of battle continuation where sheer will is combined with the physical and technical abilities of a warrior and the mental skill to fully immerse themself in battle as to be able to stalemate a force as great as an army for a prolonged length of time.

    Blessing of the Waterside [B]- While fighting in or near the water (on the coastline/shore of the body of water (must be at least the size of a creek)) Lancer receives an increase in his strength parameter.

    Affection Toward Ulster [B]- A skill which denotes the bond shared by Lancer and his sworn brother who he met studying under the “witch of Shadows'' tutoring. Impressed by their own skill, upon realizing that both wished to return home and invite the other they swore one day that even though lancer had proven unable to obtain the treasure he sought, they would both forge a legend for themselves and meet once more. Of his sworn brother’s home when returning he claimed “so long as that one stands” it will not fall, and “if all men of Ulster are even 1/2 as great as he, then the very gods would run in fear then face them”. Yet due to circumstance the two fought, and despite the war between their countries and the blood each other had spilt, as Lancer lay dying, there was no animosity between the two, only remorse at the circumstance and his brother’s rage at Medb. Upon his death he still extolled his brother “Of the many legends in Erin, you shine supreme” and “You remain the greatest amidst her students, as long as you live, our number (those who studied under Scáthach) lives on”.


    Noble Phantasms
    The Thorned Hide, an Fleshen armor of blades – A
    A set of grey armor (in actuality it’s his skin) which can block any manner of attack of less than B rank (this doesn’t count attacks against areas inside his body (like poison or magecraft targeting his internal organs without coming into contact with the armor)). In addition the armor is covered in a set of barbed blades which have a deadly poison (which is lethal to humans and magi, but would only serve to weaken (sap the strength of) servants, phantasmal or strong demonic beasts, or most beings. Those with endurance and luck above a rank of C could endure this effect ((or some kind of protection from this effect), and even then with skills like battle continuation it could be preserved through.

    The major drawbacks are that it reduces the user’s agility by 1 rank when in use and the energy cost of maintaining it for long periods of time is rather high. As a result the ideal defense to lancer in this state is another servant with high defense and offense, yet higher agility than him, or simply avoiding him and forcing him to remove the armor for the sake of being able to move around better.
    Anti-Unit (self)
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    Gáe Bolg (false), the ever distant spear of Ulster – B
    A noble phantasm brought forth from Lancer’s ties in legend to his sworn brother and a certain skill he has which denotes this. Since his brother was the greatest among Scáthach’s students it could be said that logically, if Lancer lives, that man must still exist too. Upon using this technique from a shadow is cast which cloaks Lancer and from it emerges the demonic Gáe Bolg. Even though it has manifested from the throne as a noble phantasm due to Lancer’s deep connections to both Cú Chulainn and the spear itself in myth (both in that he competed for its ownership was killed by it), due to the fact that he is recorded as never having owned it, it is noted to be treated as a fake, a falsity. In essence rather than truly owning the spear and using it, he calls upon his sworn brother’s aid and from the throne his spear is made manifest, but due to him never having owned said spear, yet it manifesting as a noble phantasm in his saint graph, it’s effects have shifted.

    Lancer’s belief remains unshaken, “against the power of Culann’s Hound, no army could stand equal” and as such no matter the number of foes, they will all be savagely struck as the spear explodes into a vast plethora of thorny projectiles which will strike them all; 100 foes meet 100 thorns, likewise 500 or 1000 foes. However, due to its nature as a fake the spear lacks the ability to reverse causality like the original and lacks the raw power when thrown by his sworn brother.

    In essence it is a tool to strike against a large number of foes with a large number of projectiles and damage or kills some of them. Now each strike is rather weak (around the strength of a E rank noble phantasm (or a C rank normal attack) individually), however when used against say 100 foes, they form a large amount of projectiles whose damage could be dangerous to a servant or even a small group of servant level foes (functioning somewhat like another a technique of a certain Impaler when summoned in his home country (Lancer of Black)). However Lancer himself lacks the mana to form more than 200 of these spears without aid or some means of fueling the attack.

    The ideal defense against this technique would be simply to fight Lancer with only a small group or a small amount of people, or to have so overwhelmingly many foes that without a command seal he wouldn't have the energy needed to use this skill. Other means like high endurance or skills which protect one from projectiles may also prove useful in blocking this skill, also most armor based noble phantasms, which work based on the amount of damage done by a single attack would be able to stop this blow, however due to the number of possible projectiles, this could cause problems with energy consumption. The wrong way to go about protecting from this skill is trying to use a ward or bounded field as the amount of damage done by 1 spear may not break it, but the amount of damage done by 100 spears battering it in short succession would likely prove too much.

    Anti-Army
    All targets (in practice 1 to 200 people)





    So, I'll be blunt with this
    one, this one was hard, I had the servant as a base from a while ago for a fanfic I was considering on writing (but like all other Ideas never got around to putting on paper), I just had to give the guy a personality, give some tweaks to the sheet for balancing and then fill in his lore and stuff. The problem was that I struggled to try and define his personality all that well, as I didn't want to make him too similar to some other people like Cú Chulainn, I hope I managed that, but honestly I consider the personality (and as a result the relationships) a bit of a weak point on the character.

    The other things I am a little nervous about is Gáe Bolg (false), which while not unprecedented for false noble phantasms to exist (see Valkyrie having a fake Gungnir) I hope the explanation I gave suffices. Also Warrior of siege, I kinda considered it a specialized sort of hybrid between martial arts, single minded, and a variation of battle continuation, but I didn't just want to give him battle continuation, because aside from him fighting for three days and being "equal to Cú Chulainn in martial arts" there was little to justify it. So that's the story behind the skill.

    Honestly despite being initially nervous about his armor, I think that's one of the aspects of the effort I'm happy with how it turned out (it really helps with giving him the whole, 1 man army/fortress feel I was hoping for (like Minamoto no Raikou being able to wipe out ramies of lies, yet struggling in 1 vs 1 with a foe her equal)).

    As for what's next? Well, I won't say for sure (my muse is a fickle thing as shown by having this sit at 90% done and struggling to finish it), but I have a few options. I have a Hassan which I've been working on and may finish. I also have an Archer and Lancer (two technically, but the ladder may need fine tuning) I could work on. But what looks most promising at this moment is a Rider which I worked on a while back and just needs touching up, and the final personality, relationships, and lore bits.

    As always feel free to give any thoughts and I will try to get back to them, I may be a little late replying as I'm starting class this summer this week and I will be out most of today, but I will try and respond when I can.

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    Ferdiad: Pretty cool sheet. Gae Bolg (False) is an unusual choice, but you justified it satisfyingly enough IMO. He definitely stands apart from the other Ferdiad sheets I've seen here. Out of curiosity, does Affection Toward Ulster do anything in mechanical terms, or is it just a "flavor" Skill?

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    That Gáe Bolg (Fake) is a really cool idea. I remember having toyed with a similar idea for my Ferdiad back then, but I discarded it because he already looked too much like Cú in terms of ability. Is Blessing of the Waterside based on how he fought Cú near a river, or is there any other anecdote about him fighting near water?

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    You got it in one, It's based on the fact that historically they fought by (or based on some accounts in) the middle of a stream or creek. I also remembered reading through how Lancer's (Fate:stay night) page described the battle with Ferdiad "The fords were a land of death, and the conclusion to the war was likely the greatest of living hells in his life." So I imagined the idea of Ferdiad literally standing by or in the middle of a creek, taking advantage of the terrain, striking down foe after foe, until the river ran red.
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    Alternate Classes: Rider, Caster, Gunner
    True Name: Suleiman I
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral
    Origin: Turkey (15th century)
    Armament: Sword, bow

    Parameters:
    STR: C
    END: C
    AGI: C
    MANA: D
    LUCK: B
    NP: B

    Skills
    Class Skills

    Magic Resistance - Rank D: Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
    Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.

    Independent Action - Rank B: The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master; the ability that allows for action even in the absence of the Master. At higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract.
    It is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for two days without a Master. However, this is the ideal value achieved by maximally conserving mana and avoiding battle and Noble Phantasm usage.

    Personal Skills

    Ruby Cup - Rank D: A Clairvoyance-type Skill derived from a drinking cup crafted from ruby, reputed to have belonged to the ancient king Jamshid. It bestowed the ability to observe everything under the heavens to its wielder, but that power has faded with the decline of Mystery.
    For Archer, Ruby Cup acts as a composite Skill of Instinct and Revelation. He receives glimpses of distant and future events, allowing him to choose the best course of action.

    Fire Support (Cannon) - Rank C+: A powerful long-range attack performed as a support for strategic actions. In this case, the form of the attack is artillery. A compound Skill that also includes the effects of Tactics.
    As Sultan of the Ottoman Empire during its golden age, Archer receives support from his army’s famous artillery. However, due to his current class and reliance on archery, this Skill’s rank is slightly lowered.

    Imperial Privilege - Rank B: An ability that, due to the insistence of the owner, Skills that are essentially impossible to possess can be obtained for a short period of time. In cases when the Rank is А or above, even the "burden to the body" can be acquired (such as Divinity).
    For Archer, the relevant skills are Riding, swordsmanship, fine arts, Charisma, Golden Rule and others. Though the ruler of a mighty empire, he does not wish to abuse his power. As such, the rank of this Skill has been lowered.

    Lawgiver - Rank A+: A unique Skill, born from the owner’s legend as a lawmaker cherished by his people. It improves the administration of the lands under their rule and provides a defensive effect to one’s subjects.
    Despite its current effects as a Skill, Lawgiver takes on the form of either a Skill or a Noble Phantasm of a different type in Archer’s other classes. It grants his allies bonuses to their defense while they are in Archer’s vicinity.

    Noble Phantasms

    Cannon Conquest Palace
    Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı

    Rank: B+
    Type: Anti-Fortress
    Range: 1~30
    Targets: 400 people
    A Noble Phantasm that manifests Archer’s palace. However, rather than recreating its namesake, Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı is a new construction. Following along the lines of the fortresses he erected in order to secure his conquests, Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı manifests a building that is both palace and fortress, signifying imperial and military might. Though it is a defensive tool, it bristles with armaments, chiefly cannons of varying sizes and uses.
    Upon activation, the magnificent fortress rises from the earth, placing Archer on top of its ascending walls. At his order, Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı’s guns focus on the enemy and unleash a devastating cannonade on a targeted area. As the original Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı was a place where many of Archer’s famous cannons were displayed, Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı as a Noble Phantasm carries a wide variety of famous armaments, including many of the guns used in the conquest of Constantinople. Combined, their firepower can bring down almost any fortress.
    In addition to its offensive capabilities, Ṭopḳapu Sarāyı also provides a defense for Archer and his allies. Its walls are capable of blocking attacks up to B rank.

    Description
    Likes: The thunder of guns, large hats
    Dislikes: The sound of bells, stubborn resistance
    Talents: Administration on all levels, many forms of artistry
    Natural Enemy: Ibrahim Pasha, several European commanders and rulers

    Archer’s true identity is Suleiman I, better known as Suleiman the Magnificent, the Sultan of Law.

    On the surface, serious and unforgiving. Someone you would never wish to cross. Still, he is not without a sense of humor.
    However, Suleiman shows his good side through his charity. He respects power and valor, and treats those that show either quality well, be they friends or enemies. He is also fiercely competitive, both in warfare and in art.
    He has an admitted weakness against beautiful red-haired women. Among Heroic Spirits, he has a tendency to consider others with magnificent headgear as rivals.
    Suleiman’s wish to the Holy Grail would be for his empire’s decline to be reversed. In other words, he wishes for better successors.

    Attitude towards Master:
    As long as he is afforded proper respect, Suleiman will act as a loyal Servant. He relies on his Master as an advisor, and wishes to seize any advantages that can be gained from their knowledge.

    Dialogue examples:
    Servant Archer has answered your call. As I brought glory to my people and my empire, so shall I do to you.
    The greatest of Sultans stands before you. Submit.
    ... Why I use a bow? It is a more reliable weapon.
    Ruin upon you!

    Lore
    Suleiman the Magnificent was the only son of his father, Selim I, and ascended to the throne of the Ottoman Empire in 1520, and immediately began a campaign against the kingdoms of Europe. He conquered Belgrade and the mighty crusader fortress of Rhodes, but the most consequential of his victories was likely the Battle of Mohacs, at which Suleiman's janissaries and artillery destroyed the Hungarians, plunging that nation into a long period of decline. During the course of his campaigns in the west, he was able to lay siege to Vienna, but could not conquer it. Central Europe became a long-simmering conflict zone under threat from the Ottomans from the Balkans to Poland.
    Three campaigns over twenty years against the Safavid Persians resulted in the Ottomans taking possession of most of Mesopotamia, including the rich prize of Baghdad. Ottoman naval forces, led by competent admirals, were able to control the entirety of the Eastern Mediterranean (although the Knights of St. John were able to hold onto Malta) and the Barbary corsairs were able to wreak considerable damage along the south coast of Europe.
    Suleiman was surrounded by a cadre of excellent advisors, most famous of which was his Grand Vizier, Pasha Ibrahim, who had been raised as Suleiman's slave from their youth, and who came to become the most important man in the empire after the sultan. His wife, Roxelana, was another canny advisor who served as a diplomat and a manager of intrigue at Topkapi Palace. The architect and builder Mimar Sinan oversaw the construction of the majestic Selimye and Suleiman mosques (as well as hundreds of other monumental buildings), and Istanbul acquired much of its new, Islamic architectural style, merging with the old Byzantine styles. There were countless other lesser viziers, military officers, admirals, and academics whose competent contributions greatly enriched Suleiman's kingdom.
    His epithet “the Lawgiver” refers to his efforts to reform the administration of the state. In this, he codified secular Ottoman law to run parallel to existing Islamic systems of jurisprudence, working with the Hanafi scholar Ebusuud Efendi. The happy result of their efforts was an Ottoman Empire which was, in comparison to some Christian states of the region, a relatively tolerant, religiously pluralistic state. There are accounts of serfs and Jews fleeing the kingdoms of Europe to come and live under the relatively benevolent Ottomans.
    Craftsmen and artists received special recognition of the state. Suleiman himself wrote poetry in Persian under a pseudonym (much of it is very good). He constructed schools to teach both religion and philosophy. Religious buildings and shrines throughout his empire received special attention, including the Dome of the Rock in Jerusalem and the Kaaba in Mecca.
    During Suleiman's lifetime, the Ottomans were able to secure a series of alliances with European powers (most notably France) due to their ability to influence the course of affairs in Central Europe. A great deal of the political actions of the states of Europe during his lifetime can be seen as in response to the growing power, prestige, and wealth of the Ottoman Empire.
    The end of Suleiman's reign was troubled. Pasha Ibrahim, his trusted advisor, was executed for conspiracy. Suleiman's succession was particularly fraught. Suleiman's son Mustafa was executed for attempting to seize power, and his other sons Selim and Bayezid began a succession war before their father died (Bayezid lost, and was executed). Suleiman himself died on campaign in Hungary.
    The Ottoman Empire never again ascended to the heights he brought it. Future sultans would focus on the intrigue of their courts, leaving the administration of their empire to advisors and beys who would work at cross-purposes. No other sultan was capable of uniting powerful subordinates in a common cause, nor would they achieve military conquests on his scale. He was a rare kind of leader—one who achieves greatness in multiple domains, and encourages his subordinates to excellence in their own discipline.

    Notes
    Finally got around to remaking this one. I hope I did a better job than *ugh* last time.
    Also decided to switch to a more Grand Order-y style of Description.

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