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    True Name: Hannibal Barca
    Epithet: "The Thunderbolt of Carthage"
    Source: Historical
    Region: Carthage (3rd-2nd Century B.C)
    Hidden Attribute: Human
    Alignment: Lawful Good
    Likes: Board Games, Theatrics
    Dislikes: Corruption, Rome
    Talents: Architecture, Economics
    Natural Enemy: Scipio Africanus

    Parameters:
    STR: (C) END: (D) AGI: (C) MGI: (D) LCK: (B) NP: (A)


    Character

    Despite his seemingly frail appearance, Hannibal is full of explosive energy and childish wonder. Constantly wandering around in search of exciting things in the modern age, it's difficult to imagine him as a ruthless general of ancient times. In particular he has a love/hate relationship with Civilisation type video games as while he loves the idea of practising war games without bloodshed, he constantly gets frustrated with the limitations of gameplay not allowing him to apply his more unorthodox ideas and strategies.

    Whilst he would love to settle situations through negotiation rather than violence - once he has perceived a threat to himself or his Master he suddenly undergoes a mental shift into a cold and calculating individual. Even in the midst of immediate danger, Hannibal's mind runs as fast as a supercomputer, weighing the gains versus the losses of each action and playing out countless simulations of each choice in order to find the optimal solution. When deep in thought, he can often be heard whispering something to the effect of "what would you do to counter this, Scipio?" It seems that even after two thousand years Hannibal still considers himself in the shadow of his arch-rival. Despite being known as a genius, Hannibal is genuinely curious as to his Master's input on battle as - aside from wanting to be praised - he fears any potential bias or blind spot that being a man of the distant past could cause.

    Though he is a trained soldier, Hannibal knows that he is a strategist first and thus is inferior compared to the combat prowess of the other Servants. Therefore he always keeps his trusty Falcata sword concealed within his cloak for a surprise attack and in battle relies on hit 'n run tactics and using the environment to his advantage, all for the sake of slowly manoeuvring his opponent into making a critical mistake so they he can end them with one of his Noble Phantasms. Hannibal is also not above targeting the enemy Masters as he mercilessly believes that if you willingly take part in War then you are not an innocent bystander. He similarly warns his own Master that while he'll do his upmost to fight for them, they must be vigilant and are expected to pull their own weight where possible.

    Hannibal's Wish in exchange for his Summoning? To be in a Holy Grail War to face off against his idol - Alexander the Great. However given that they are both Rider Class Servants, that may well be an impossibility. Nevertheless, if he can have an exhilarating time fighting in a Grail War anyways then he'll consider himself satisfied.


    Skills


    Class Skills

    Magic Resistance - (D)

    Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. As a normal human being, Hannibal has little in the way of sturdy magical resistance with his current Rank being a mix of being in the Rider Class and being from the Age of Gods. At this Rank, it will cancel all Single-Action spells but nothing more complex. It is Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.

    Riding - (A)
    A Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. As a trained soldier of Carthage, Hannibal possesses immense experience of mounted warfare from horses to the mighty war elephants. As a result, all vehicles and all creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts - even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception.

    Personal Skills

    Disengage - (B)
    The ability to withdraw from the battlefield in the midst of combat or reset the battle conditions. After his financial reforms to root out the corruption the Oligarchs had over Carthage failed, Hannibal fled into exile before his statesmen could hand him over to Rome. He travelled across Europe, taking shelter in many lesser kingdoms but always had to escape again after Roman forces relentlessly chased him until the very end. As a result, this Skill has the bonus effect of returning battle conditions to what they were at the beginning of the match (1st turn) and restores the condition of this Skill to the initial value.

    Father of Strategy - (A)
    A Skill given to one who made great advances in the art of military strategy - Hannibal's transcendent genius in the heat of battle led to several original techniques and strategies that the Roman Empire scrambled to copy and military academies all over the world continue to study his exploits. By merely grasping and analysing the situation, Hannibal can perceive the optimal solution (the silver thread) leading to victory so long as there is even a chance of success. In addition to this, Bonus Modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm.

    Protection of Melqart - (A)
    The blessings given by the tutelary deity Melqart, in exchange for a lifetime of prayer and sacrifices. Before his conquest of Rome, Hannibal made a pilgrimage to Gades to offer tribute to Melqart and that night he saw a vision of the deity saying he had been sent by the supreme god Jupiter to guide the young general to victory. During battle, Hannibal gains spiritual fortitude so that his body feels like that of a young man again and an automatic Plus to all Checks undergone by Hannibal and his allies is given.



    Noble Phantasm


    Surus The War Elephant
    The Rolling Thunder That Shakes The Earth


    [Type: Anti-Army], [Rank: B], [Maximum Range: 1 Metres], [Maximum Number of Targets: 1-500]

    Even before they saw his army approaching, the people of Rome shivered in fear as they heard what sounded like the rumbling of thunder coming. In reality it was the constant stomping of the Carthaginian War Elephants with Hannibal leading the pack on his personal steed - Surus.

    Now incarnated as a Servant, Hannibal's beloved partner returns to his side once more to do battle together. Decked out with luxurious red cloths and shields and equipped with a Howdah for Hannibal to ride upon it is an intimidating sight to behold as it flattens everything in its path. Even without the shields, Surus' skin is so tough that a regular blade would just bounce off and his tusks are so strong that they can bore through even concrete easily. When it comes time to use the finishing blow - "Continental Hammer", Surus charges at the enemy to skewer them with his tusks before tossing them into the air and launching himself as well. Surus then uses the full force of gravity to stomp the enemy all the way back down to the ground and bury them deep within the earth.

    However, though Surus is both fast and strong he is not without flaws. Whilst he can gain tremendous speed he cannot turn on a dime and so agile Servants like Lancer will easily be able to dodge Surus' charge and try to strike Hannibal. Likewise since neither elephant nor rider possess any method of ranged attack then powerful Archers and Casters will similarly pose a huge threat.

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    Road of Hercules
    The Labors of Hannibal


    [Type: Anti-Unit], [Rank: A], [Maximum Range: Self], [Maximum Number of Targets: 1-10]

    The final trump card in Hannibal's possession. Throughout his time as general, Hannibal encouraged the belief that he was the second coming of Hercules. He started his legendary march to Italy by praying at the Hercules Shrine at Gades and during the journey he took the same arduous route as Hercules was said to have in his Tenth Labor and furthermore he continuously tried to mimic feats the hero was said to have done such as blasting away a boulder that was blocking his path. This perception stuck in the minds of the people of Carthage and they minted coins featuring Hannibal as Hercules.

    Now in the Holy Grail War when his back is against the wall, Hannibal channels all of his magical energy into a ghostly aura surrounding his body which takes the shape of the legendary hero Hercules. Whilst in this form Hannibal's Parameters are forcefully augmented to those of the real Hercules had he been summoned. Thus Hannibal suddenly becomes a force to be reckoned with and truly lives up to his epithet of the "Thunderbolt" as his sword strikes turn lightning quick and pack tremendous power. Unfortunately this Noble Phantasm is a double-edged sword as Hannibal is unable spare any energy to call forth Surus and even with a Servant body he cannot handle the strain for more than 3 minutes every day and if he hits the time limit he will collapse mid-battle potentially leaving himself and his Master defenceless. It is also not immune to anti-Magic attacks such as Gáe Dearg and Rule Breaker.



    Bond Lines

    Level One
    1st Night

    You, the Master of Hannibal realise you are standing in a seaport of an unknown town, though glancing around it looks like a place from antiquity and the signs appear to be written in Spanish - you quickly realise that this is a dream of sorts. "Father, father!" You turn towards the source of the voice and are teleported inside the town's fort into a small room where a 9 year old boy is standing in the doorway as an older man turns to him. "Oh, Hannibal. You should be at home in Carthage, how did you follow me all the way to Peñíscola?" "But Father, even you can't take on all of Rome alone, so let me help you." Hearing this, Hamilcar took his young son to the sacrificial chamber, held him up over the fire and asked if he would swear to never be a friend of Rome. Despite his fear of the flames, Hannibal steadied himself and said "I swear so soon as age will permit...I will use fire and steel to arrest the destiny of Rome!" The world fades into darkness and the dream ends...

    2nd Day

    The morning afterwards you ask Hannibal about what you saw. "Hmm...sounds like you saw a glimpse into my memories whilst you slept like a log. What? You think it strange that a mere child would want to lay waste to another nation? Hah! I suppose to you who was born in modern times must think of me as some kind of savage. Well we weren't blessed with your technology nor your synthetic foods. When it came to resources to keep your people alive it was either "take" or be "taken from" and Rome was convinced they were the biggest dogs around so I figured I'd teach them a little lesson. This wasn't the first time Carthage had gone to war with Rome anyways and my father was a commander during our defeat last time so it was only natural I as his son restore the family's honour by claiming victory. 'Course I lost the rematch as well, but not before sinking my fangs into Rome - even after they'd won, whenever calamity struck the people would screech in terror 'Hannibal ante portas!' as if I were some kind of demon who had cursed them with misfortune." Waving off any further comments, Hannibal gets up and departs the room.


    Level Two
    2nd Night

    Once again you find yourself in a strange dream. The fact that the air is cold and it's hard to breath makes you look around to find your bearings and you slowly realise that what initially looked like a frozen wasteland was actually some kind of mountain range. Suddenly you hear a thunderous rumbling sound and turn to see an incredible sight - a giant army complete with cavalrymen on horses and elephants climbing up and down the mountain range as they try to cross it. However the slopes were steeper than they appeared and several soldiers with their animals would periodically fall to their deaths. In response the general at the front yells out "Fight on brave soldiers... man dies but glory lives forever! Fight on men, death is better than defeat! Fight on, and prove that we follow in the footsteps of gods!" The leader is younger and has both of his eyes but you can still clearly recognize him as Hannibal as they slowly march out of sight and you wake up.

    3rd Day

    "Ah yes, my journey across the Alps on my way to conquer Rome." Hannibal says as he relaxes in his chair. "I hear that historians still to this day debate how I exactly managed it, ha ha. But it was actually my older brother Hasdrubal who planned out the journey since he was the leading General at the time. But sadly Rome caught wind of it and had him assassinated...leaving the task to me. Anyways since the Carthaginian navy was decimated I tried to go on foot by recreating the Road of Hercules, you know from his Tenth Labor? Oh, you don't? Well it doesn't matter either way, point is I pulled it off in the end and I became a legend myself. Of course I lost half my army just getting to Italy but that was always an expected outcome and so I had more soldiers hired from overseas ahead of time to join up with us as we arrived at our destination. But enough of that~" With that Hannibal gets up and gestures for you to follow him out into battle again.




    Level Three
    3rd Night

    As sleep fills the mind, you feel water lapping at your feet. Looking around you find yourself this time standing at the edge of a lake, peering closer you can see through the muddy waters are pike and carp swimming around agitatedly. "Have you found him yet!?" Turning to the source of the voice, you raise your hand to shield your eyes from the setting sun as you see countless African soldiers digging around waist deep in the marshy waters as they search for something. Amongst them you can see Hannibal himself barking orders as always but even he has rolled up his sleeves and is searching too. "But sir, we've been looking since this morning and we're all tired, can't we call it a day already?" Hannibal looks at the soldier and snaps back "How would you like it if your soul was left to wander the earth for an eternity because your body wasn't given a proper burial!?" However despite their renewed vigour they could not find the body and were forced to give up after night had come. With that darkness fills your vision and you return from dreaming.

    4th Day

    "Oh what now!?" Hannibal protests, but you don't let up and continue to press him. As he scratches his head he contemplates "A body in a lake? Must be him - Gaius Flaminius." Startled at the name, you ask why Hannibal put so much effort into looking for the body of a despised Roman. "Heh, don't look at me like that, Rome is Rome but people are still people it's as simple as that. It was the Battle of Lake Trasimene which was my first major obstacle upon reaching Italy and Gaius Flaminius was the Consul that stood in my path. As far as tactics go, it was a simple turning movement followed by a swift ambush to crush the enemy. But amid the heat of battle the Celtic mercenaries I had hired had mobbed Flaminius to death and ingloriously dumped his body into the lake." Hannibal sighed before continuing "Regardless of who he was, he was still a person and deserved a proper burial so his immortal soul could be put to rest. It saddens me that I couldn't even do that for him." Hannibal falls silent and you leave the matter at that.




    Level Four
    4th Night

    This time the strange dreams take you to some kind of academic hall, filled with desks and scrolls for learning. You sense a strange atmosphere and see in the centre of the room are two men - one a blonde haired blue eyed man of seeming importance who you don't recognise, the other obviously being Hannibal complete with a missing eye now and gray streaks in his hair make him look closer to his Servant incarnation. Though the men are smiling, you feel electricity in the air around them as if they might try to kill each other any second. "Hail, Hannibal of Carthage" The blonde man says, "I expected you to be licking your wounds back in your homeland, do you honestly believe any good will come of teaching this backwater country to wage war when its enemy is Rome itself?" In response Hannibal merely laughs, "Some things never change Scipio. If King Prusias asks only for my genius in return for food and shelter then surely I can't refuse another chance at striking at Rome." An awkward silence fills the air before Scipio changes the subject, "Tell me Hannibal. When it comes to the generals of the past and present who would you rank -" "Alexander of Macedonia. There is no question." Hannibal cut off Scipio before he could even finish but the latter merely nodded in assent and let him continue. "After that I'd put...Pyrrhus of Epirus second, because boldness is the first requirement of a general and you wouldn't find it in greater quantities than those two Kings." This time Scipio raised an eyebrow at the answer and interjected "O-okay I don't necessarily agree, but who would you yield third place to?" and Hannibal gave a mischievous smile "of course that would be myself; for when I was a young man I conquered Hispania and crossed the Alps with an army, the first after Hercules." In response Scipio grimaced at the level of conceit and so squared his shoulders and said "Well then, where would you place yourself, Hannibal...If you had not been defeated by me?" The air around the men instantly turned cold and silence filled the room. "...In that case, I would have surpassed Alexander and ushered in a new dawn of humanity without Rome." Another pause as the two men simply stared into each others eyes but unexpected they simply laughed and walked out of the room discussing the possibility of drinking together sometime as the world fades to black.

    5th Day

    "Publius Cornelius Scipio." Hannibal said without prompting this time. "Better known as 'Scipio Africanus' after defeating me at the Battle of Zama. There's no doubt in my mind that he was the only worthy adversary of my era. It does sting my pride somewhat to have a Roman given the title of my homeland of Africa, but I cannot deny his achievements. Sadly his glory was short lived, both he and I tried to root out corruption in our respective countries but the swamp that is politics was unbeatable and we were both made into pariahs. That particular meeting between us took place in the Gymnasium of the Selucid Kingdom. What...'were we doing sports'? No it was a diplomatic meeting in a house of learning, stupid Master. Anyways, though my fight against Rome never ended, I was sadly denied a chance at a rematch with Scipio. I suspect if he could see me now, he'd be laughing at this old fool trying vainly to recapture the glory days of his youth. Say, humour an old man will you? Why are you risking your life in this Holy Grail War...what is it you Wish for?"


    Level Five

    5th Night

    For the final time you find yourself in an unknown location. The rising sun slowly illuminates the area revealing a moderately sized living quarters. The sound of scribbling in the background causes you to turn to the desk and see a familiar face hunched over it. It is Hannibal now exactly as he looks as a Servant, face scrunched in concentration and reed pen in hand flying across the parchment. "Finally done!" he exclaims as he put the pen down and relaxed into his chair "hah, and just in time for breakfast it seems" as he squints outside the window at the sunrise. Suddenly there is a lot of noise outside and a regal looking man bursts into the room out of breath "Ah...L-Lord Han...nibal" he gasps in between breaths. But Hannibal is unperturbed "Good morning your highness. It's nice to see you care about your health but perhaps a diet is prefferable to running around until you collapse?" However Hannibal's face darkened as he looked out the window to see a battalion of Roman soldiers had completely surrounded the castle. "It's the Empire!" King Prusias said having regained his composure "I don't know how, but they found out I had been giving you shelter and now Titus Quinctius Flamininus has arrived to demand your surrender." Hearing this Hannibal slowly turning back to face him and said nothing, instead he silently stared at the king with such an intensity to cause him to start sweating under pressure. "You don't know 'how' you say? Yet you arrived moments ahead of them despite having no means of transportation. Very strange." Hannibal turned back to his desk and took out a vial of strange liquid. King Prusias became very nervous at his friend's behaviour. "What are you planning to do?" but Hannibal merely laughed in response "that old dog Flamininus will chase me until the ends of the earth. A shame since I had just finished the plans for Artaxata's new capital - a wonder of architectural achievement if I do say so myself. But no matter, let us relieve the Romans from the anxiety they have so long experienced, since they think it tries their patience too much to wait for an old man's death." With that Hannibal opens up the vial and downs the contents in one go. He stumbles backwards and collapses onto the bed as the world turns dark and you wake up once more.

    6th Day

    "What? No twenty questions this time around?" Hannibal asks sarcastically but with subtle twinkle in his eye. You decide it would be tactless to discuss a man's death right in front of him. "Your silence is deafening, It must be my final days, right?" You nod and he continues "you can probably guess what political intrigue went on - King Prusias of Bithynia got too big for his boots and tried to pick a fight with King Eumenes II of Pergamon. I naturally lent my aid and won several naval battles against Eumenes, the last one in particular had a nasty trap involving venomous snakes haha. Anyways, Eumenes turned to Rome for help and the Empire put their boot against Prusias' neck and he immediately squealed my location to them in return for his own life being spared. However I made a promise to my father that I would fight Rome for as long as I lived so I chose to deny them the pleasure of capturing and executing me." Hannibal falls silent for a considerable time, but eventually turns back to you. "I suppose, if I did have one regret in life it would be having to leave behind my pregnant wife Imilce. Because of my exile I was unable to spend any real time with my family...but enough about me. I've got a war to win for my Master don't you know haha." With that he slaps you on the back and motions to follow him out for the climax of the Holy Grail War.



    Relationships

    Alexander/Iskandar - "Hah! Who would have thought the King of Conquerors would be such a buffoon. I wouldn't have it any other way!"

    Boudica - "Ah, you have my condolences. Any enemy of Rome is an ally of mine."

    Ereshkigal - "Hmm...wait a minute, aren't you Melqart's wife!?"

    Heracles - "What a shame. It turns out we don't look anything alike after all. I pity the artists who had to depict me as you in my homeland."

    Roman Servants - "We will never come to accept one another. We shall always be in conflict!"

    Zeus - "L-Lord Jupiter is that you?"


    Creator's Notes
    Can't believe no one seems to have done a Hannibal sheet yet, this is a disgrace that needs immediate rectifying.

    Yes, I'm aware that the title of "thunderbolt" really belonged to Hamilcar rather than his son Hannibal, but it just sounded so cool that I couldn't resist.

    The Faceclaim is obviously Hannibal himself from the Drifters manga/anime. I did briefly consider using someone else...but in the end I went with him as I liked the whole "eccentric old master" trope - I could definitely see him stuck with a younger Master quite like the Waver/Alexander situation.
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    Wow, I love it. Skills and NP-wise, it's pretty much what you'd expect from the man (though that 2nd NP is admittedly a pretty creative one), but most of all, I like how you integrated both his lore and characterization to his dream sequences.
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    That's a really good Hannibal sheet. The dream-sequences to flesh out his lore definitely add some nice flavor. I also love how you gave him a Skill based on his favor from Melqart. That's an aspect I'd never seen acknowledged in any Hannibal sheet before and one I would've used myself if I ever wrote up a sheet for him. I hadn't heard of the legends comparing him with Heracles before but that also makes for a unique NP. Of course, the war elephant NP is obligatory but certainly badass. I like how you add touches like "finishing moves" to some of your NPs. It helps make them feel like the kind of thing that'd be used in a story for an epic moment rather than just a stat sheet.

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    Hannibal: an good concepti must say ,your Version is really good and different than how i would make mine ,though small nitpicks at that time of Hannibal existed no "spanish" actually .

    And i must correct you the Chief god of the phoenician carthage were Baal Hammon and not Jupiter .
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    Quote Originally Posted by Kabalisto Koga View Post
    And i must correct you the Chief god of the phoenician carthage were Baal Hammon and not Jupiter .
    I'm aware, but according to the legend as told by Livy - Melqart says he was sent by Jupiter and not Ba'al Hammon. So blame him not me.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kabalisto Koga View Post
    though small nitpicks at that time of Hannibal existed no "spanish" actually .
    I will however cop to getting this wrong. When I said the signs "looked like Spanish" (to Hannibal's Master) it was because I had boneheadedly confused Valencian with Ibernian. The former can easily be mistaken for Spanish, whilst the latter definitely cannot.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Skull View Post
    I'm aware, but according to the legend as told by Livy - Melqart says he was sent by Jupiter and not Ba'al Hammon. So blame him not me.


    I will however cop to getting this wrong. When I said the signs "looked like Spanish" (to Hannibal's Master) it was because I had boneheadedly confused Valencian with Ibernian. The former can easily be mistaken for Spanish, whilst the latter definitely cannot.
    ok thank you for the clarification then , and your Hannibal is raelly good though you could have included a sort of Divination skill with which he can call upon Enforcement Magecraft as the phoenician had such a sort of Magecraft that as Canaanitic Sorcery was presumably the preform of the Kabbalah System . and that ereminds me i made a Thales profile a while ago ,which were like your Hannibal the first made one please take a look and say me your oppinion as i went there with the phoenician roots Version from his Background.
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    Has somebody plant Girl or heavily plant or Flower themed Picture as i working currently on a non human servant , if possible with an heartly Impression ?
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    Something like this?


    here is a list of my servant sheets(new and improved format for my servant sheets)

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    Not bad perhaps a bit more like a Inn landlady ?
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    Quote Originally Posted by Kabalisto Koga View Post
    Not bad perhaps a bit more like a Inn landlady ?
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    How about this?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Anju Addams View Post
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    Thank you this fitts quite well ,Anju

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    Quote Originally Posted by Skull View Post
    How about this?

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    Lilymon ? hm i will Keep that in any casee in mind ,also thank you Skull !
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    Huh, weird. I swear I saw once a very cute pic of a plant wife with an apron that could fit very well, but now I can't find it anywhere.

    Oh well, have a look at these instead even though they may not give an inn landlady feeling:

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    Quote Originally Posted by King of Padoru View Post
    Huh, weird. I swear I saw once a very cute pic of a plant wife with an apron that could fit very well, but now I can't find it anywhere.

    Oh well, have a look at these instead even though they may not give an inn landlady feeling:

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    THank you Padoru i will see which Pictures will ftt but i think i can also make a Ascension line with multiple Pictures !
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    Lancer – Katō Kiyomasa

    "Lancer. Kiyomasa. Are you my master? You haven't heard of me? Unsurprising. Tragic, but unsurprising"



    Characteristics

    Gender: Male
    Height / Weight: 161 cm, 50 kg
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral
    Home: Japan
    Origin: Historical Fact
    Equipment: His spear


    Personal Information

    Attribute: Human
    Likes: Buddhism, those devoted to their work or duty, optimizing systems or situations, hunting
    Dislikes: Those who shirk their duty or work, most foreigners and foriegn ideas (his limit of tolerance is as far India and to the south the Philippines anything beyond that he dislikes (as he feels the lifestyle they live is too laxadasic and their ideas threaten to usurp or conflict with Japan’s own, not to mention he thinks most of them are very arrogant and rude), imperialism and colonialism, overt rudeness, poorly trained warriors
    Talents: Philosophical thought and debate, making tea
    Natural Enemy: Ronin, Billy the Kid, Cortez, Christopher Columbus


    Lore


    A warrior of some renown who fought in the Korean invasion during Hideyoshi’s rule. He is noted for the creation of several castles one of which he held for a few months against numbers at least 3 times as great as his own, he is noted to be a determined and militaristic man. He also was noted for reasons still unknown to have gone on hunts for tigers during the war, according to some this was merely to pass time, others claim it was under orders to help a sick lord or general. He later would become reputed for his military style of ruling his land in Japan and his ruthlessness to any Christians found or captured in his area. In another time or another era perhaps he would have earned a place in history, yet in a era filled with geniuses among men and figures who shaped history and Japan’s culture all he would become is a mere footnote to those greater and more famous than him.



    Personality


    A man who carries himself through life with a firm dedication to his tasks and goals, Lancer is in many ways almost mechanical in his dedication towards a goal or task he has been assigned and will follow through without fail. Be it dealing with those who followed forigen ideas of religion which disrupted the traditional shinto and buddhist practices, defending a fort, gathering taxes, or ruling over an area of land, all is done without compromise or hesitation.

    Once upon a time Lancer was filled with envy and rage towards the world he was born in, a world filled with so much talent that he could never hope to stand out, and to a degree, beneath all his formality and dedication that resentment of being doomed to be forgotten even from the start burns brightly. However, Lancer does deeply respect the effort and dedication taken by many of the warriors of the time to earn their places in history. In Lancer’s mind the era of Sengoku was an age where men honed skills great enough to rival the legend of old, even if he was merely a footnote to stand among and know some of their number is an honor in and of itself.

    In his downtime and while he is doing a task he often can be found meditating as is proper for a devout buddhist, trying out new additions or recipes for tea, hunting, and contemplating or sometimes writing out philosophy.



    Relationships


    Honda Tadakatsu: The Greatest warrior of the East, The strongest of the 4 heavenly kings of the Tokugawa, the divine spear who struck awe into even the demon of the 6th heaven. Need I say more master, I respect him, and If you wished for a capable lancer he is without doubt among the greatest in Japan’s history.
    Tachibana Muneshige: Ah Muneshige, come relax, I’ve been recalling those days back in the war. Ah I see you still care for your hair just as much as before, I remember how you would always take such care of your hair, even in the midst of battle you would get annoyed if it got tangled after you would strike down scores of men with your blade. Huh, Muneshige are you ill, your face is all red.

    Toyotomi Hideyoshi: The sword thief. Yes I know of him, don’t expect any compliments though, the man is a moron, and his downfall is due to his own lack of cultivation. If only he dedicated himself more to the kingdom than luxury than perhaps things would have been different. The war I joined for it was required of me, I had no love for it, nor any belief of its necessity. The land was a nice bonus for my efforts I suppose (not that it helped me stick out at all though).
    Oda Nobunaga: The fool of Owari, Her brutality is remarkable, and her tactics even moreso. I suppose it was that same ruthlessness and brutality which struck her down; her dedication gave way to fear amidst her allies. On that note, master remind me to stick away from Martha, I’ve been having an off feeling as of late when I stick around her too long.

    Takeda Shingen: One of the great warlords of Japan, I remember hearing tales of his prowess, and that even Kenshin considered him a rival. Tis naught but a tragedy that he too fell victim to the blood coughing sickness of that time.
    Nagao kagetora / Uesugi Kenshin: The great student of the war god, the only one among countless warlords to match Oda Nobunaga. Without doubt a warrior and leader worthy of praise whose firm will never faltered even in the face of death. Living every day without hesitation or fear, even I cannot help but admit myself unable to match his dedication. But I also admit curiosity, can such devotion even be called human, is it not inhuman to obess to such an end, if so then how sane truly was Kenshin, or in the grander scheme could one so skilled and devoted even be called sane to start with?

    Tokugawa Ieyasu: The last loyal subject of the demon king Nobunaga, he who finally succeeded in leading and unifying Japan in a shogunate as the great demon of the Oda clan wished. Like many others I revere him, and like many others I too fear him and the 4 great warriors he commands. Their skill and power truly is is inhuman, and his dedication to Japan is without question.
    Miyamoto Musashi: Master normally, I don’t care much for ronins, they lack a master and often lack purpose beyond their selfish interests. Beyond that I care even less for those who disregard rules and their superior’s judgement, however, I must ask what was her father thinking? Scratch that was he thinking at all? I can see her skill, and it rivals that of the likes of the gods, it is worthy of being called peerless, and is without doubt among the greatest in Japan’s history. Why would the fool cast one like her aside?!?

    Jaguar Man: Beast! A foul beast!
    Shirou Amakusa Tokisada: What, afraid of a little tiger? (What a loser, no wonder they never took root after I died.)
    Tamamo no Mae: Just a little fox huh? This is hardly much of a worthy hunt, but I’ve got some free time. Let's dance Beast.
    Siegfried: A dragon?! You hunted a divine child of the heavens?! Most impressive, I see that there is more than just your sword’s strength to you, that skill and such a feat cannot be denied. But bathing in it’s blood isn’t that a little excessive?
    Sasaki Kojirou: What are you doing? “Killing swallows”? Fool that isn’t, well I guess it does have wings, and can fly, and is annoying, but I mean, it isn’t, but it sorta is … I need to think on this matter. (What does define being a swallow mean, is anything similar to a bird a swallow, If so then are all birds swallows, I mean all swallows are birds, but does the reverse apply?)



    Parameters:
    Strength – B
    Endurance – C
    Agility – B
    Mana – D
    Luck – D-
    Noble Phantasm – A



    Class Skills

    Magic Resistance [D]- Cancels single action spells.


    Personal Skills

    Tactics [D+]- A skill denoting the ability to command and martial groups of men, this ability allows one to direct fighting and increase the effectiveness of anti-army attacks as well as increase the resilience against them. Due to the combination of Lancer’s own unbending will and militaristic style of command and action he is naturally skilled in making the most out of disadvantageous situations, particularly where he is outnumbered, but may have some form of tactical advantage (like a fortified position). As a result he can often drag out tasks which some may deem easy to take multiple weeks of months due to his mindset and will.

    Single-Mindedness [B-]- A skill which denotes the ability of Lancer to perform a task, be it defending a fort, fighting an enemy, or such for a lengthy period without hesitating or holding back. Part of why his charisma is ranked so high, as an individual Lancer saw that any who took up the life of battle must uphold it without distraction and he would go through with actions even if others wouldn’t due to his force of will. Yet perhaps this only applied to acts when he governed or was in battle for otherwise he was a Buddhist, and spent time hunting beasts in the Korea campaign for reasons not fully known. Even when greatly injured he can and will try to ignore and push past sensation, which also allows him to partly shut out mental interference from affecting him as he fights.

    Uncrowned Martial Arts [B++]- Opponents will see Lancer’s abilities (his physical stats and charisma appear as one rank lower than they are) until they have seen or observed him fighting or discover his true name. After having either of these conditions fulfilled this skill is useless, unless the foes are made to forget Lancer somehow, and even then they will have an inkling of skill and danger in his abilities and thus it will be less effective than before.

    However this only applies to Japanese servants from the sengoku era, against anyone else the effects are a little different to the point that even trying to figure out his name is a major problem, for servants from japan, but not natiuve to the sengoku era or with ties to Japan, then they will have a “tip of the tongue like effect” where even after seeing him in action (which they still see his parameters and charisma as one rank lower than it is), seeing him fight, and finding out what time period he was from, and even if they found out he fought in the Korean war they still would find something inhibiting their ability to place his name. The exception to this is if he uses his noble phantasm they would be able to recall his name.

    This is due to the fact that being so overshadowed by others this has become a part of his own myth and thus that obscurity makes it so anyone except those who would have been his comparitos from the same era would struggle to place his name even if they were given a great deal of information. As a result even with a direct connection to the throne servants enjoy, Lancer is a mystery unable to be solved without the proper clue (his noble phantasm). This is made even worse against foes who have no ties or connections to japan whatsoever, for them Lancer’s stats and personal skills would be totally hidden, in fact it is as if he has low level presence concealment allowing most to struggle to identify him as a servant at all until he attacks, but like before this effect is broken if he uses either of his noble phantasms.



    Noble Phantasms

    Imjin Tora, The tiger slaying spear – D+
    A spear used by Lancer in Life to both fight and kill tigers in the Imjin war, as a weapon it increases in power against tigers or other beasts.
    Anti-Unit, Anti-beast
    1 person

    Ulsan, The great Fortress of Kiyomasa – A (only works in Japan or Korea)
    An embodiment of Lancer’s skill at creating military outposts/fortresses/castles in areas he conquered in life, due to Ulsan being the most prominent in his legend and being the site of his greatest feat (holding a position against largely lopsided odds for 9 months (albeit only 1000 or less men survived, yet still, he won under those circumstances and against a foe that may have outnumbered him anywhere from 5 to 1 or 2 to 1). As a fortress it is built in such a manner that it can sustain a standing force for a period of time and so that archers can rain arrows from above with relative safety, it boasts power enough to withstand most anti-army attacks below B rank without significant damage. However in order to manifest it must be on a leyline to maintain itself. Due to limitations of it from his legend it can only hold a maximum of 1000 people at any time.
    Fortress
    1 to 1000 people





    Dev notes


    So, I actually found this guy by chance a few months ago and decided to make a sheet on him. The first thing I made was the summoning of a castle feat, which due to restrictions on such things I made it has to be in Japan or Korea, the next feature was his primary noble phantasm, a spear of beast hunting. This was also easy enough and fairly swiftfully done. I considered giving something allowing a personal skill denoting how he treated christains in his domain, but dropped it as I didn’t think it would fit too well with the rest of his abilities. Developing him the final change I put in was the detail regarding his Uncrowned martial arts, considering how the dude essentially became just a footnote in the Sengoku era due to benign surrounded by far more famous and capable people, I turned that into an aspect of his abilities as a heroic spirit and thus that change was implemented.

    Personality wise I elected to go for a classic military philosopher type character, who takes his duties seriously, and follows through on things to the letter, yet gave him an inner side of being resentful that he became a footnote in history. However given that he also knew one such person who outshone him I elected to make it so even if he doesn’t like being a footnote, he can appreciate the skill and devotion it took for people like Oda Nobunaga and such to gain their legends and respects them for rising up to become new legends of Japan which would shape their future.


    Overall in terms of effectiveness, he is a painful average (in some ways below average) Lancer whose parameters are beneath average, his magic resistance is laughable, his noble phantasm unless used on beasts is very weak (and even then it’s only average strength), and his castle ability isn't even useable everywhere. The main benefits that make him even remotely workable are that he is stupid how determined he is (he could get implied and would still try to keep going), and he will see matters through with his single mindedness (which can serve as both a blessing and a curse in battle), he can serve as an alright leader of a fortress, and that due to his Uncrowned martial arts (something which really is more due to how history failed to remember him rather than his own abilities or feats in life) he can make foes underestimate him and make use of that getting in a fair amount of damage or possibly badly injuring (or killing them) them, so that Lancer can have a kinda even fight against them.

    This of course is much less workable against foes with instinct or clairvoyance, protection like God hand, that are from the Sengoku era, or are able to heal or are too tough for this to work against. So in effect while he can operate a “lancer type assassin” this is very restricted and doesn’t work as often in practice without planning and other support.



    Author Notes


    Koga, sorry for the delay on the response, regarding Milon of croton, the usage of his noble phnatasm as essentially guaranteed success in any one task is certainly an interesting idea (it reminds me of the design details around prototype Heracles and gilgamesh one which was to live through twelve days, and the other to win twelve battles), it is a idea that I am curious at to what the limits would be, and in terms of things it is something that is close to the ability of the gril to grant wishes if one knows the means how to obtain them (which I assume is how his ability works, but then it would have to have limits else some things (like trying to be strong enough to say punch the bull of heaven to death) burn out his saint Graph (see Lostbelts 3 and 5 part 2 for examples)). The idea of him working best at repetition tasks is certainly an idea I can’t say I’ve seen before as most servants' combat generally only ends with them having at most 2 or 3 battles with the same foe before that foe dies.

    Aside from that the relationships seem unfinished (although I have forgotten that once before so I’m hardly one to talk), and he seems standard enough and a reasonable enough berserker servant. The focus on martial arts and such does make me a little curious why he even has a weapon at all when he seems to have a skill which would make it more advantageous for him to just punch things to death.



    Regarding Rostam, I’m certain he would have around 50 bajillion questions (as usual) regarding Kay and wondering if he is an alter, a being from another parallel world, or if simply he (rostarm) has gone insane. And then Rostram would proceed to ask a lot of questions about birds and such, Rostram really isn’t the kind of person who is bothered by weird stuff like that (at least not my rostram), he is the kind of guy who kills a dragon, skins it like he would a boar making a coat out of it, his father Zal (based on some interpretations of the myth) may or may not have been the physical embodiment of a mountain (so possibly a spirit or elemental of some sort), and he adopted a horse into his family, and had him married, just because he felt like it.

    To be fair Rostam never really was all that loyal to Kay to begin with (at least in my eyes) in my version merley being interested in seeing what it’s like to serve someone like him. As such although he may be slightly concerned, his own endless curiosity far outsrips that, if he had a wish for the grail and he found out about the Kaleidoscope, he would probably want immortality and the 2nd simply so he could explore the multiverse (essentially becoming a less trollish, younger, immortal Zelrech, except with a few more morals and far less common sense regarding if he should or shouldn’t interfere).



    On that note, I am curious as to what your (or anyone really that wants to pitch in) thoughts were on me drawing parallels with other NP and myths with his mace. It is something that has been weighing on me a little if I should or shouldn’t tie some of my characters and NP in with other material. On one hand it may create a sense of a more interconnected world (what I want), but on the other I fear it may be a little intrusive and may make the characters feel like side acts or foot-notes to other more well developed or well made characters (what I don’t want).

    Then again I do suppose It also may just be another case of me being my harshest critic (the author being the harshest critic of their work) {Which I will admits does sometimes contribute to the delays as I want this stuff to be good, but I also know if I don’t draw the line somewhere, I will never release any of it}.



    On Zarathustra, I am of three conflicting viewpoints.
    Viewpoint 1: as a human servant he is very strong (almost absurdly so) especially for a human, even if his physical parameters aren’t along the lines of Artoria or Heracles. But given he essentially is all but a divine spirit, not to mention a very powerful and important one who literally shaped the future and gave Dis Patar (the god of the bible) the power his religion did and created monotheism and the idea of a holy book, he should be really strong. The issue is I’m not all that good at judging Divine spirits as often when dealing with them I have trouble drawing the line as many often lack the kind of weaknesses or limits which make other heroic spirits beatable.

    As a result, with beings like Buddha (who I think is considered a divine spirit, but don’t quote me on that), Ishtar, Ereshkigal, and especially beings like Quexacoatyl and the Lion King from singularity 6, I often see them as beings who just really have no business being summoned by anyone really as unless you are one of the rare few with weapons which grow in effectiveness against gods or divine constructs then it already is a hopeless fight. Granted the whole Grand saver issue is a bit thorny, but given that it’s been shown how strong actual gods (and even the strongest divine servants are; on the level of being creatures who even grand servants need help or even specific conditions to consider beating) then I really don't think it’s out of place, I mean in head cannon I just justify why beings like Surtr and Zeus have weird classes as they are so strong that they literally can essentially bend not just space time, but the class system to roll over and do what they want.


    I’m not certain but as the grand summoning system is controlled but the Gaia and Alaya, I figure the system which governs what classes can be grand or heroic spirits may be controlled by them too, so strong enough beings may be able to forcefully moscule their way with magic to get the system to do what they want. As a human he is way too strong, he could overpower gilgamesh with Ea which is something which no human heroic spirit should normally be able to do (I don’t even think Leonardo da Vinci with her counter everything ability could counter or do that).

    Viewpoint 2: As a Divine spirit, it is roughly on the level of power as Quexacoatyl or a fully fledged God (which I don’t even think can be summoned, but then again Quexacotayl was summoned at full power without a vessel and is strong enough to make Ishtar look weak and literally has two noble phantasms which can obliterate continent sized areas so and devastate most of the planet. As a result even for divine spirits I think it may be pushing it a little bit (maybe weak it’s NP abilities, but make them stronger against those of “pegan” faiths as an idea?) Either way it reminds me a lot of Quexacoatyl and the Lion king considering how I feel about her power level or that of the Lion King, and as much as I love Rider as a character (and am neutral to Lancer Artoria), I don’t like how ridiculous strong she is as it makes every other servant feel pathetic by comparison. Also if he is a divine spirit due to his authority shouldn’t he have a version of god’s divine core rather than divinity?


    {That she was essentially was a character designed to justify the protagonist standing any chance against the 7th singularity’s foe by giving a way to counter her sea of life and hurt her (as well as a visual way of impressing how strong the 7th singularity’s foe was by having her beat someone who could make the Goddess who is stronger than Ishtar be unaffected by her assault in her true form)}


    {Which I still don’t understand the lore of how the user can turn into a divine spirit when it is literally said the divine spirits which were said to literally have left as there wasn’t enough mana on earth to sustain them could be as strong as full goddess much less live when mana is like blood to divine spirits. Even with Artoria’s dragon core it shouldn’t have been able to sustain that power (see the info on the clock tower’s depths in Lord El Melloi case files 2 for why I claim as such) much less act as she does summoning countless heroic spirit level foes, firing a weapon as strong or stronger than Excalibur with ease in what isn’t even a lostbelt (which would have more mana than the normal world). Even divine spirits on the levels of goddesses have limits (see singularity 7) and doing all that and maintaining a massive shield should drain her dry in hours max. No selling one of the strongest Heroic spirit’s best efforts (Ozymandius is said to literally be as strong as weak divine spirit and his dendera bulb was able to overpower excalibur in prototype when it was at A++ anti-fortress level power, you shouldn’t be to do that so easily with a shield, much less when he fires it 10 times in a row at the same spot) only adds to this weirdness. Not to mention it was said after 1 BC the gods lost all authority in this world and would die if they used it anymore, she shouldn't even be able to exist anymore, much less hold any real power.}


    Viewpoint 3: Lastly, there is my third perspective, from a standpoint of lore it does make sense that a being who is so significant to the history of the world and who created a schism in the very nature of the gods which would culminate in Abheramic religions essentially outsing out all the other religions almost everywhere (except those like Buddhism, Hinduism, Jainsim, Shintoism, and other local beliefs which survive) he would be very strong and have a lot of power due to his fame and age (if not for people knowing him, then knowing of the influence he had on the world).

    His personality seems well developed enough, but I really don’t know if I can comment on his abilities as a servant as I really am not an expert on what is normal in terms of divine servants levels of power. I apologize if this may have been inconvenient.



    So that’s that, sorry for the wait school is on and it’s been a thing to deal with. I also apologize if the bit on Artoria and Quetzalcoatl may have come off harsh (I personally prefer the Fate stay night, Zero, or Apocrypha over Grand order due to the power escalation), but I just wanted to clarify why I struggle to categorize divine spirits power levels. I do love Quetzalcoatl as a character and by all means if you don’t agree with me or think I’m wrong, then you’re probably right.


    I’m the moron who it took way too much time to understand how the anti-army, anti-fortress, anti-unit classification worked and meant & who thought a while back “I wonder if they are ever going to give Tomoe a swimsuit version” … completely forgetting I hadn’t checked the wiki in like 5 weeks and missed they already did so along with the rest of the summer update as I forgot those existed or that it was still summer in the first place.

    As mentioned before, I really am hardly qualified say my viewpoint is right, or even good (story wise it would be very boring if the 6th and 7th singularity ended in the protag losing or the Artoria just keeling over dead after exhausting her mana) when I actually have never have read or seen most of the fate works beyond Stay night and am still only in singularity 4 in Grand order campaign.


    Anyways, regarding that Saber I teased, well I can say that they are mentioned or alluded to in this servant sheet and they are indeed next. If you have any comments or questions (or arguments as to why I am wrong and missed something obvious lorewise) either leave a reply or send me a message and I will get back as soon as I can.

    Last edited by Cursed by Fortuna; October 8th, 2020 at 07:17 PM.
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    Saber of Tumapel
    "Life's too short to be spent worrying about things like justice and honor. All that matters is to find a dream worth fighting for, reach out to it, and enjoy yourself along the way!"


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    "There's no such thing as fate or divine protection sent from the heavens to save you. If you want something, you oughtta take it yourself; fight, kill, and get your hands bloody for it!"

    Class: Saber
    Other Classes: Assassin, Berserker

    True Name: Ken Arok
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Origin: Indonesia (13th Century)


    Parameters:

    STR: B
    END: C
    AGI: A
    MGI: D
    LCK: A-
    NP: B

    Likes: Women, riches, trying out new things, achieving his dreams
    Dislikes: Poverty, obstacles preventing him from achieving his dreams
    Talent: Thieving, thuggery, orchestrating conspiracies
    Natural Enemy: Tunggul Ametung, Mpu Gandring, Kebo Ijo
    Armament: Kris (short sword)
    Catalyst: A certain cursed kris, a page taken out of a certain Javanese chronicle

    Class Skills
    Riding (B)

    A Skill denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.

    Magic Resistance (D++)

    Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy. While Saber himself had little encounter with magecraft in life, this Skill's rank can be significantly increased for a limited time by invoking his Noble Phantasm, Kitab Pararaton.


    Personal Skills
    Scapegoat (B)

    The accumulation of cunning techniques designed to escape the battlefield in one piece, implicating another individual as a "perpetrator", and allowing them to gather ire and ill will from others. During his quest for power, Saber assassinated his king and pinned the blame on the king's attendant. Afterwards, Saber slayed the man under the pretense of avenging the king, before taking the throne for himself. This conspiracy would not come to light until decades later, where it spelled Saber's end.

    Charisma (B+)

    A composite Skill consisting of a person's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. At this rank, one is sufficient to lead a nation as its King/Queen. The morale of military forces he commands is extremely high. It also allows the user to negate the Emergency Prerogative skill of enemies. A boy from humble origins who rose to become the most powerful ruler of Java, Saber's talent as king is undeniable. He would do anything in order to increase his fame and influence over his people, including claiming himself to be an incarnation of both Vishnu and Shiva. While his claims were nothing more than baseless attempts to gain his people's favor, this aspect of Saber's legend can be invoked through his Noble Phantasm.

    Cunning Outlaw of Tumapel (A)

    A Skill denoting Saber's legend as an outlaw, long before his days as king. Raised by a master criminal from childhood, Saber was trained in the ways of thievery, thuggery, and street-fighting. This is a composite Skill consisting of Subversive Activities, Disengage, and Espionage, allowing Saber to effectively function as a pseudo-Assassin. Combined with his natural cunning and the mindset of "doing everything necessary to win", this Skill allows Saber to find a way out even in the most dire of circumstances.


    Noble Phantasm(s)

    Book of Monarchs
    Kitab Pararaton

    Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
    Rank: C
    Range: 1
    Max Targets: 1 (Self)

    An ancient Javanese chronicle detailing the history of the kings of Singhasari and Majapahit, presented in narrative formats in chronological order. While it provides historians with a relatively clear account on Saber's life and bloodline, the chronicle borders between factual history and myth, exaggerating certain feats and placing kings on the same level as demigods or semi-divine beings.

    A Noble Phantasm bestowed to all kings of Singhasari and Majapahit. Upon activation, it allows the user to tap into the more "mythical" side of their legend, akin to a self-inflicted Innocent Monster. Its effect differs depending on the user's legend, ranging from increasing their parameters to granting them certain Skills they never could have possessed normally. In Saber's case, it grants him Divinity at rank C, which in turn strengthens his Charisma Skill based on legends of Saber claiming to be an avatar of Vishnu and Shiva to enforce his rule. It also grants him a small portion of authority belonging to the two deities, allowing him to conjure flames and powerful gusts of wind. While this Noble Phantasm makes him considerably more powerful, it also comes with several downsides. First, Saber's mana cost is much higher as long as this Noble Phantasm is active, since it turns him into an entity close to a Divine Spirit. Secondly, his other Noble Phantasm is sealed for the duration of his Noble Phantasm, as it is tied so deeply with Saber's feat as a human, rather than a demigod written within the pages of Kitab Pararaton.

    Ill-Fated Blade of Seven-Fold Death
    Kris Mpu Gandring


    Source

    Type: Anti-Unit
    Rank: B
    Range: -
    Max Targets: 1

    A cursed kris (short sword) Saber used to enforce his rule. Imbued with a curse foretelling that Saber himself and seven generations of his descendants will be killed by that kris, the blade became synonymous with his rise and fall. Saber used it to assassinate his master and usurp the throne. Years later, Saber would meet his end at the hands of his stepson who wielded the very same kris. Following his death, the kris continued to change hands until the curse was fulfilled; seven generations of Saber's bloodline was killed by the kris.

    As a Noble Phantasm, the curse translates to the ability to "kill something seven times over". If the enemy does not have seven "lives", it instead translates to the ability to pierce through up to seven layers of defense including armor, shields, magical barriers, and even certain defensive Noble Phantasms. By spending even more mana, this Noble Phantasm can even cut through abstract variables such as time and distance to find its intended target, granting it a sure-hit attribute. After all, the curse also considers these variables as another "layer of defense" preventing it from killing the target. At this stage, Saber can instantly kill a target from a great distance away just by focusing on their name and uttering a certain incantation to unleash the curse. Only those possessing extremely high luck or certain Skills such as Instinct or Clairvoyance may survive this Noble Phantasm.

    That said, Saber himself is not safe from the curse. Every time this Noble Phantasm is activated by uttering the incantation, Saber's luck parameter drops by one rank. With each life he takes through this Noble Phantasm, he gradually leaves himself more vulnerable to unfortunate instances which may result in his death. Should seven lives be claimed by this Noble Phantasm, its blade would instantly, unfailingly plunge itself into Saber's spirit core, resulting in his demise, exactly as the curse had foretold ages ago. Such is the nature of this Noble Phantasm, one belonging to a tragic king whose greed and lust for power had costed him everything.

    Description
    Saber's True Name is Ken Arok, the founder and first ruler of the Javanese kingdom of Singhasari. He is also considered to be the founder of the Rajasa dynasty of the Singhasari and Majapahit line of monarchs.

    Born from humble origins and raised by a thief, Saber was aware of the hardships faced by peasants since a young age. Having no money and skills to offer, he had to resort to mugging and stealing just to have something to eat. This lifestyle led to him having a rather cynic outlook on life. He scoffs at the notion of fate or divine intervention, claiming that "believing in such things could never save anyone. It certainly never saved me". Instead, he developed a somewhat hedonistic worldview of "if you want something, you have to take it for yourself". Highly pragmatic and individualistic, in most cases he would prioritize himself over anyone else. Yet at the same time, he resents seeing others live in poverty, as it reminds him of his own struggles in his youth.

    Outside battle, Saber is a carefree individual eager to experience the luxuries of the new world before him. Ranging from sampling new cuisines, getting drunk on alcohol, to trying out new hobbies, he is highly curious to experience everything the world has to offer. He's also somewhat of a perverted womanizer deep down, as much as he denies it. Overall, he tries to emotionally distance himself from his life, claiming that "what's done is done". That said, as much as he tries to maintain this outlook, it's clear that he still harbors several regrets over how his life turned out.

    Deep down, Saber wishes for a world where everyone can live unrestrained by the burdens of money and social status. Despite his usual cynicism, Saber talks about this one wish like a wide-eyed idealist reaching out to a far-off dream. He would do everything in his power so that no one else may suffer, even if it means he would have to make several sacrifices along the way. As a Servant, Saber deeply regrets ever losing sight of this childhood dream, and wishes he could rectify this with the Grail. He also has several regrets pertaining to his life he wishes to fix; perhaps if he treated his son better, or if he took a different approach as a king, or made several different choices altogether... Ultimately, however, these regrets are considered to be of secondary importance to him. Claiming that "what's done is done", Saber believes that he should prioritize his greatest wish, his dream utopia, before all else.

    Lore
    Ken Arok (died c. 1227), was the founder and first ruler of Singhasari (also spelled Singosari), a medieval Indianized Hindu–Buddhist kingdom in the East Java area of Indonesia. He is considered the founder of the Rajasa dynasty of the Singhasari and Majapahit line of monarchs. He came from humble origins but subsequently rose to be the most powerful ruler in Java.

    According to the Pararaton, a semi-mythical literary work on the kings of Java, Ken Arok was born to a poor peasant family on the bank of the Brantas River in East Java. His mother was the wife of a Brahmin Gajahpura in the kingdom of Kediri. According to the chronicle, the infant Ken Arok was sent down the river by his parents, hoping he would be found by a wealthier family and live a better life. However, the baby Ken Arok was found by a thief called Lembong. His foster father taught him all his criminal skills and young Ken Arok grew to be the most cunning thief in Kediri. Doing much mischief and crimes, he was known all the way to the capital, Tumapel. Many people were sent to catch him, but none were successful. One day, Ken Arok met Mpu Lohgawe, a travelling Hindu monk who patiently taught him to abandon his life as a thief. To persuade him, the monk claimed that he was an avatar of Vishnu, and promised to get him proper work so that he may forget his sinful ways. Ken Arok did not believe the monk one bit, but seeing this as an opportunity to live a more comfortable life, he went along with the monk's plans. Mpu Lohgawe ​managed to get Ken Arok to become an attendant of Tunggul Ametung, a powerful regional leader of the Tumapel area. Believing this to be a chance to not only get a better life for himself, but for other peasants in the capital, he vowed to rise up the ranks and one day create a kingdom where everyone can live happily, unshackled by poverty.

    By chance Ken Arok accidentally saw Ken Dedes, the beautiful wife of Tunggul Ametung, when she was taking a bath. Legend says when the wind blew over her dress and revealed her legs, Ken Arok said that he saw a beautiful light shining. He later told this to his teacher, who stated that it was a sign that Ken Dedes would bear a royal dynasty and any man that took her as wife would be king. Ken Arok, already infatuated by her beauty, became even more eager to take her by any means- including killing Tunggul Ametung if necessary. He convinced himself that this is just another step in his plan to become king and change the world for the better.

    Tunggul Ametung however was a very powerful man and held an important position. Thus, Ken Arok needed an exceptionally strong weapon to defeat him, and also had to find a way to do so without himself being punished for the crime. He managed to get this by ordering a kris from a famous smith called Mpu Gandring. However the kris casting took a very long time. After several months, an impatient Ken Arok visited Mpu Gandring to check on the kris' progress. He saw that the kris had already taken shape and was strong enough to be called an exceptional weapon. However, Mpu Gandring stated that he still needed several months to perform rituals to imbue the kris with more magical power, not only to make it strong but also to prevent it from becoming an evil weapon. Ken Arok became furious on hearing this. Knowing that Ken Dedes was pregnant, and determined to murder Tunggul Ametung before his wife gave birth to a possible son and heir, Ken Arok took the kris from its maker and stabbed Mpu Gandring. With his last breath, Mpu Gandring cursed Ken Arok, foretelling that he himself and seven generations of his descendants would be killed by that cursed kris.

    Now owning an exceptional weapon, Ken Arok prepared the next step of his plan. He gave the kris to Kebo Ijo, another attendant of Tunggul Ametung. An arrogant and boastful man, Kebo Ijo showed his new kris to everyone he met, all according to Ken Arok's plan. The kris was not only strong, it also had a unique pattern that made it easily recognized. It wasn't long before almost everyone in Tumapel knew about the kris. One night, Ken Arok stole the kris back from Kebo Ijo while he was asleep. He then secretly went to Tunggul Ametung's room and stabbed him to death, and left the kris at the scene. In the morning, everyone in Tumapel was shocked to hear of Tunggul Ametung's death. When they found the kris, they accused Kebo Ijo of being the assassin, just as Ken Arok had planned. Before Kebo Ijo was able to defend himself, Ken Arok stabbed him to death, on the pretext of avenging his master. And so Ken Arok was able to kill Tunggul Ametung, take Ken Dedes to be his wife, and proclaim himself as the new ruler of Tumapel.

    Ken Arok's ambition did not stop there. Soon after his ascension, the new king defeated king Kertajaya of the much-larger kingdom of Kediri and founded the kingdom of Singhasari. Remnants of Kediri became a vassal kingdom who served under him. Ken Arok thus founded a new kingdom and started a new dynasty. He took the title Sri Ranggah Rajasa Bhatara Amurwabhumi (The Rainbow King of the Universe and All Lands), and his dynasty was called the Rajasa Dynasty. His new kingdom was centered at Tumapel (which he renamed into Singhasari) about 50 kilometres east of Kediri. To further enforce his rule, he appealed to his people's more superstitious side and claimed to be an avatar of Vishnu and Shiva. For the next few years, Ken Arok's ambition grew; he conquered nearby kingdoms, turning them into vassals, and killed their kings with his kris. As time went on, however, he grew increasingly paranoid of Mpu Gandring's prophecy. Fearing that one day an enemy might take the kris away from him and use it to end his life, Ken Arok hid the kris within the furthest recesses of his palace.

    Alas, despite his best efforts, Ken Arok could not avoid the curse. Anusapati, son of Ken Dedes and Tunggul Ametung and thus Ken Arok's stepson, had suspected for a long time that Ken Arok was responsible for his father's death. One day, after finding out the truth, he went after and killed Ken Arok. Legend says that Anusapati used the kris of Mpu Gandring to kill Ken Arok; the same kris that Ken Arok used to kill Tunggul Ametung and thus fulfilling the beginning of Mpu Gandring's curse. Afterwards, Anusapati claimed the throne for himself as the second king of Singhasari, but he too met his end at the hands of the very same kris, wielded by Ken Arok's biological son, Tohjaya. The kris continued to change hands until it fulfilled its intended purpose; killing seven generations of Ken Arok's bloodline.

    The kings of Majapahit were believed to be descended from Ken Arok, as also were the Mataram rulers. Ki Ageng Pemanahan, the founder of Mataram, claimed himself to inherit the royal blood of Majapahit. This makes all subsequent Mataram kings descendants of Ken Arok who is also believed to be the ancestor of the new Mataram Empire founded in the 17th century which split into two in 1755 to become the kingdoms of present-day Surakarta, and Ngayogyakarta hadiningrat (The Sultanate of Jogjakarta or Jogja), thus making Ken Arok and Ken Dedes the ancestors of all Javanese monarchs.
    Relationships
    Sir Gowther, Robin Hood (Roger Godberd):
    "Oh boy, drinking buddies! Come, let's forget all about the drama and complexities of our previous lives and use this chance to kick back and have fun! Drinks on me tonight!"

    Artoria Pendragon (Saber):
    "As kings whose reign ended up terribly, I understand why you'd think we'd get along, Master, but no. Well, to begin with, she has waaay too much emotional baggage! Wanting to change history, blaming everything on herself... There's a point where you just have to accept how things went and let the past go, you know."

    Lancelot, Tristan:
    "MARRIED WOMEN REALLY ARE THE BEST, AREN'T THEY!?"

    Robin Hood (Archer):
    "You're a good man. I wouldn't consider you as some kind of noble savior or anything, but... the poor were lucky to have someone like you looking after them."

    Raden Wijaya:
    "So you're my descendant, huh... Ahaha, hearing your legend, it's nice to know that my descendant is every bit as cunning and deceitful as I am! Seriously, good job, kiddo."

    Lembong, Mpu Lohgawe:
    "Tch, how foolish... Just when exactly... did I lose sight of that dream..? No, it's not too late, it can't be. I'll try again and do everything correctly this time! This time for sure, I'll-!"


    Creator's Notes/Fun Facts
    So I've had this sheet in mind for a while. He's kind of like a continuation/prequel of my very first sheet here (you can really see how I've improved since then, that Raden Wijaya sheet was really meh compared to my recent sheets). On to the fun facts...

    -Character-wise, he's kind of similar to Christopher Columbus, in a sense that they're both pretty terrible people overall, but they possess the admirable mentality of "follow your dreams, whatever it takes". While Saber here tends to push this mentality towards everyone else, in a way, it's also his way of compensating/berating himself for losing sight of his dream.

    -As a founder of a dynasty, he's very much unlike your stereotypical depiction of kings. He's less of a regal, majestic ruler and more like a cunning street thug who got his hands on power. Then he got drunk on this newfound power, which transforms him from a youth with relatively good intentions into a ruthless king addicted to warmongering and expanding his territory out of fear for his own life.

    -The Saber-class is arguably Ken Arok's most "stable" class. As an Assassin, he'd be summoned at his youth, when he was a feared outlaw in the capital, before his time serving Tunggul Ametung. While he retains his cunning and craftiness, he radiates powerful "chaotic good" energy to the point of naivete, which makes him hard to work with in some cases. Conversely as a Berserker, he'd be summoned in his later years as a ruthless king addicted to chaos and warfare. There, his alignment is chaotic evil, and he's highly paranoid and mentally unstable. As a Saber, he's summoned at the point where he had just recently ascended the throne. Thus, he retains a part of his youthful idealism, while also being aware of his duties as a ruler.

    -Despite him playing it cool, it's clear that he's much more bothered by his past actions than he lets on. Those lines directed at Artoria, Lembong, and Mpu Lohgawe shows him to be a huge hypocrite. Every time he says something along the lines of "you have to let the past go", he does it more to convince himself instead of persuading others. Even then, he cannot fully resist the temptation to go back and fix his mistakes should the chance present itself.

    Legend says when the wind blew over her dress and revealed her legs, Ken Arok said that he saw a beautiful light shining. He later told this to his teacher, who stated that it was a sign that Ken Dedes would bear a royal dynasty and any man that took her as wife would be king.
    -Oh God, this one scene... It just sounds like something you'd expect out of a bad ecchi romcom anime, but I assure you, this part really did happen in his legend. Then instead of dismissing it, Mpu Lohgawe made things worse by claiming that the woman with the shining crotch would bear a royal dynasty. Could the monk secretly be some sort of closet pervert as well..? That's totally my headcanon now.
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    Kato Kiyomasa : not bad Lancer a good Concept ,his skills are -- quite good he makes a good (mild)Assassin like Lancer though About his Spear fiven that outside Japan and Korea he has only this noblephantasm does it feels Abit to weak as you could give the Spear a Hiden /Hissatsu like technique like one movement or Attack style that was inspired from the Beasts he slew examplewise ,but really ood idea of include the aspedct of an historical "footnote" into a sort of abbillity or power ! also would i be curious what he think of my Jimmu given that he was the fisrt Tenno and so on and ow he would see my Tugarin am i curious ?

    About Zarathustra He is like i mentioned in his profile a Born Human but through his deeds ass Prophet ,the Blessings of the first category Yazatas aswell that the Prophets later were partially deified goes into the Account, you must know ,and should he be in other classes is Divinity swapped with a divine corre type .

    About his powerlevel have i hinted it in his summoning line that a Master is able to summon him as SAver is a extremely unlikely phenomenon as it almost only occure if tzhe world is in immediate danger ,and that it is not forceable to summon him willfully in this class as he then either doesnt appear at all or that he appears in one ofhis other classess

    About his power well as first Chosen Human which reached his true potencial in the class of where he sheduled to save the world does Dakhma Mazda embodyment the Concept of unavoidable judgement .

    And i have put it as "western Counterpart" of Buddhas Amita Amitabha . beside that in which other class would you see my Zarathustra Saber,Archer,Lancer,Rider or CAster ?

    Ken Arok: i rememmber you said that you are quite knowledgeable and welll readen in the indonesic Myths , he is indeed a quite no really different then the founders be it Canon Romulus ,my Jimmu etc he is no divine child or favored Person but basically a commoner that went to the top ,Right ? his first Noblephantasm is i must admit quite a good i must say , as you said he is a womenizer how is actually his oppinion towards queen type servants ould i be curious like what would he think of my Neferusobek ? and o you plant to make one of his descendants that has a own Version of Kitab Pararaton ?
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    Thanks for the feedback Koga, Yeah Lancer is fairly weak, however I would hesitate to make him stronger as I think that may very negatively impact the whole character idea and personality I have going for him. Essentially you could compare him to Emiya in a way, but far less Idealistic and naive (and a bit more selfish), he grew up in an era of chaos in the Sengoku period learning and hearing of men and women whose skills bellied belief and learning of the great men and women who shaped Japan in days past. In that he saw an opportunity, a world filled with chaos would give rise to both heroes and villains who may also ensure their names in legend and history. As such he trained to become like those he so admired, heroes and legends whose skill and actions had come to be revered and worshipped and whose choices would shape the future of his country.

    But much like Shinji Matou or Jason he just couldn’t do it, surrounded by people far more talented and skilled than him, who held the blessing of the gods through their bloodline, weapons filled with mystery, magecraft, or access to tutors who could teach them their ways, and skill to rival the heavens; he was merely a man way out of his depth. He had none of the resources or blessing his compatriots enjoyed and no matter how skilled he grew or what acts he did, he never would earn recognition. If I had to name his backstory in a word, it would be echo, he was naught but a distant echo of far more impressive men and women. And while he does respect those who have reached the heights he saw, he also envies them for doing what he couldn’t and for having the ability to make their trip to the top easier through resources he never had.


    In the end what major deeds did Kato do? Fight in a War? That isn’t special and many others fought in great conflict both Honda Tadakatsu and the the other 4 heavenly kings of the Tokugawa did that, heck even Mitsuhide fought in the Korean war, and he was praised by Hideyoshi (despite himself being a fairly remote figure if you go by his wikipedia page) as being the strongest warrior in the east of Japan (with Honda being the strongest in the West). Use a spear skillfully? Honda Tadakatsu has him beat as does Kenshin, and Hōzōin Inshun among others. And all of them are either more skilled or famous and noteworthy than him. Be strict in enforcing policy against Christains in his domain? That wasn’t anything special at the time and if you are talking about religious purges around the 1600s in Japan then that topic has to go to Oda Nobunaga. Create good castles and be a good military leader under pressure? Staring with the ladder point others like Tokugawa Ieyasu and Hideyoshi (before he lost it) (who also started out as a relative nobody like him, but gained great fame and success for a time) would outshine him as leaders of the military as would many other warlords.

    And while nobody can take away that he made strong fortresses, really that’s about it and other myths about castles and fortresses at the time (the Sanada 10 braves invading a fortress) and such outshine him, rarely do people remember men who built fortifications and defended them, most remember the people who destroyed them or beat those who defend them. The only thing aside from his fortresses that makes him unique is his attitude and how it contradicts him suddenly going hunting in Korea during a war for tigers (which his motives are debated as being for someone else to try and help them get over sickness, maybe following an order, food possibly?, or just being bored (and this is still a question we really don’t have answers to)).


    I have as of recently considered in one of my ongoing ideas for a fate grand order fanfic toyed with the idea of Kato being the first servant the protag summons during the singularity F (which in terms of servants follows the First order manga / anime version rather than the game). In this event he proceeds to beat Lancer with his spear (with help from Shielder who buys him time and Caster who tells him who he’s dealing with), however fighting berserker Boudica (who is essentially in Fate is somewhat similar to a heavily downgraded version of Artoria) he missteps and Caster and Olga have to help him with olga’s spell dealing the final blow. He already disliked that a Caster class servant could fight about as if not a little better close quarters with enhancement as he could, but now he, a heroic spirit, has had to be saved by a human, while fighting a weakened version of a heroic spirit without their noble phantasm due to the blackening process. FInally when fighting the corrupted Saber he can’t help any against her and is forced to be saved and play the distraction mostly to Caster, Olga, and Shielder.

    Moreover Shielder, a demi-servant who doesn’t even know her noble phantasm’s true name saves him and his master from an A++ attack, anti fortress attack (meaning even if he did summon his fortress it wouldn’t have helped). All of this happened mind you in Japan, where he has his power at it’s peak, even then he cannot save Olga, or help his master in that regard. Even when he gets back to Chaldea, he can’t lead them as they have better operation support than him, and he doesn’t really fully get the technical details on the situation due to it being a lot of magecraft weirdness. Moreover with Da Vinci around they have a better engineer and natural genius (something he was always outshined by and wanted to be, but never was) who could make a creation better than his fortress, make mystic codes which unless you are talking about beasts would be as strong as his own spear. Moreover his master is summoning far more skilled and talented servants than him, and even the demi-servant mash has outshined him.


    Finally in France while he is able to do well against the wyverns his is almost powerless against the very strong servants (his best matchup would be archer due to her beastly traits and myth), they are then saved by more heroic spirits including relatively modern ones who are more famous and successful than him and he isn’t able to help against Martha’s dragon (it’s too tough even for his spear), has to rely of Siegfried to kill Fafnir, and feels he is useless to his master.

    His most notable trait aside from his castle is his own personal skill which denotes and highlights how badly he failed to actually carve his name into history, but like Rama’s curse of separation it is a permanent reminder (which while useful certainly doesn’t help his own self confidence or him being bitter) that he never became anything more than a footnote and barely is even qualified to be a heroic spirit as his existence is barely famous enough to scrape past that threshold. Mind you given the situation he cannot turn back and give up, but as a servant of Chaldea he is miserable as he feels really he has no real purpose or use, he is below average unless in Japan where he only jumps up to average, and he isn’t able to help much. Therefore, he is trapped in a situation where his own self-esteem and sense of worth is constantly in question and eroding, but due to the circumstances he would be forced to scold the Protag for choosing him over stronger servants as they would be risking the fate of humanity over his own hurt feelings. And trust me he is keenly aware of the vicious downward spiral he is in, but due to his sense of duty, his desire to help out, and his desire to protect those he did consider friends and protect humanity and the history of the world, he cannot back out of that spiral.


    I imagine he would be someone the Protag would understand his feelings keenly (I just want to be special), yet struggle to grapple with the practical fact that they need to save the world (and that at Lancer’s own insistence they can’t prioritize him over humanity), but also Lancer isn’t that strong or useful most of the time (not to mention he really doesn’t want his own master’s (or really anyone’s pity) as that would wither make him feel worse) and he would be angry at them pitying him and placing not just human history but those he respected or considered ally in jeopardy if they gave him a slot over a more qualified servant. I also imagine that an interesting sort of dynamic would form between him and other servants especially those like Da Vinci, Gilgamesh, and Arash (where they may argue being special stinks and how lonely it can be at the top) and/or military commanders (who may understand the desire to be special which some of their own soldiers (who most of the time faded namelessly into history) may have had similar to Lancer).

    In those terms making him stronger would throw all of this into question, being an average servant is irritating, but at least you can help sometimes; being a weak one (and not even one like Mata Hari who can essentially bend men to her will) is the kind of thing which prompts an existential crisis of “Why am I even a heroic spirit when 75% of the time I can’t do anything most others could do much better?” In that respect the whole historical footnote thing evolved from the idea that heroic spirits can be influenced by the way their myths are perceived in the modern era (ie. nobody knows who Jack the ripper is, so even Berserker Jack from Strange Fake doesn’t know “his” own name, gender, identity, race (and quite possibly “his” own motives), “he” knows that “he” is Jack the Ripper, but cannot say anything more than that). Much like this being so constantly overshadowed and his own motivations being that of pursuing and failing to attain his dreams sowed a seed for the potential to be “a ghost who nobody remembers”, the fact that even after 400 years barely anybody remembers the guy who lived in one of Japan’s most impactful and well known periods essentially solidified that he gained that skill (essentially like a sort of innocent monster ability, he didn’t ask for it, but due to circumstances he got it nonetheless).


    With regards to how Lancer would see Jimmu, he would very greatly admires and reveres, him the man is essentially the father of all things Japan and one of the men who birthed the nation, followed by others who remade it at different times (Oda Nobunaga, Minamoto Yorimoto, etc.), but on the same hand he likely would see himself as unworthy to even speak with him, his is by all metrics in his mind one of if not the weakest servant in all of Japanese history, from an age of much stronger servants, this in his mind makes him a failure and a disgrace to Jimmu and unworthy of his time (moreover he doesn’t really want anyone’s pity).

    As for Tugarin, given he essentially is a far more capable warrior and hunter than him (any dude who hunts dragons who are seen as being just beneath or sometime rivaling the Kami in power is someone he knows is powerful), he would like everyone else respect his skills, although the whole drenching in blood and eating their flesh would be a little excessive in his eyes (though he can’t argue with the results), and the influence he had on his time and history, and also be jealous of him de to him being successful where he failed. He also would somewhat look down on him for potentially getting distracted at times when it comes to women (although given he does seem to have morals and can clamp down on that behavior when it matters he would give him credit for that at least). Also due to how insular Lancer can be and his experiences with foreigners he may come off as a bit brash and rude, but really given Tugarin is in his eyes a fair enough warrior he essentially would be like mentally ‘I may not like that you are a foreigner and have a bit of a messy sense of priorities with women, but given that you understand when is the time and place for such things, are skilled, try to improve on your flaws, and aren’t totally morally bankrupt or a barbaric savage I’ll essentially give you a free pass on your failings *

    * with his failings being highly subjective and informed by Lancer’s own somewhat closed minded and insular conservative (as well as not necessarily xenophobic but biased against forigen ideas and peoples) beliefs and personal code.


    Also thanks for the clarification of Zarathrusta, that bit did confuse me a bit, the bit about him only being able to be summoned as Saver does make a bit of sense. As for his power level, I'll defer to your judgment on the matter, as I really have no clue what thresholds quantify the upper or lower limits of divine spirit level beings and he is an important figure in history. Moreover, I apologize if the bit from my prior author’s note may have come across as saying he was too strong as that wasn’t my intent. My intent was to communicate that I recall have no idea what qualifies being too strong or not strong enough for a divine spirit’s powers so I wasn’t sure how to judge him in that regard. As for Amita Amitabha, thanks for the info, I legit didn’t know about this guy, he sounds really interesting though.

    As for what other class, maybe Rider as I would be curious to maybe see him pull a revelations and summon a 7 headed dragon with 7 crowns (or if we follow persian myth a 1000 headed dragon with 1000 crowns) which embodies the darkness which seeks to corrupt men (like the beast of revelation and the mark if the beast). Also the idea of a servant just essentially getting to reenact stuff from revelations sounds interesting to me.
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    "Remembered by bones....what a joke."

    Name: Teutobod/Teutobochus
    Class: Berserker
    Origin: Germania Teutons (Conflicts with Rome)
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

    STR: A+
    END: A
    AGI: B
    MAG: C
    LCK: D



    Ferocious King of the Teutons, allied with the Cimbri and Ambrones they would leave their homelands and eventually enter in conflict with the Roman Republic. Sweeping through the roman forces as a wave of destruction, Rome's collapse soon became a possibility before the bloodthirsty horde. Eventually out of necessity and from sheer the amount dead Gaius Marius would lead reforms and due to a strike of luck the tribes would wander away after so many victories thus giving him the time to train the new army.

    Thus 'Divide and Conquer' was born. The tribes split and arrogant suffered several ambushes and were utterly destroyed. In the aftermath Teutobod was dragged in chains through the capital and ritually executed, as for the survivors the man were to be made gladiators and women mistresses, fearing their fate they begged Marius to serve in the temples of Hestia. Denied the Teutonic women committed mass murder and suicide. This event would leave a mark upon history and was named Teutonic Fury

    As a Berserker he embodies the barbarian scourge that forced Rome to change it's ways or die, filled to the brim with bloodlust and unrestrained hatred he does not fight for victory. He fights to make everyone else lose more, to drag all blessed ones to the despair he felt when chained by his enemies, any peace and joy will only be found in the utter annihilation of enemies while bathed in their blood

    Hidden in his depths are jealousy and anger, the first towards Rome and the second towards himself. Jealousy for the Allied Tribes had the chance to snuff Rome and become the ancestral superpower that shaped the world, jealousy of Rome's lands and resources, jealous of a life beyond a nomadic warlord, he truly earned to be a 'King' like Gaius Marius yet......in a certain way one could say he is a Romulus whom failed or a Remus who never attempted to become human while being a wolf, a contradiction that would only end in destruction

    And anger at his people's arrogance and whimsical brutality, living like beasts enjoying the today but never thinking of the tomorrow or learning of the past. No different from a horde of locusts eating everything in a frenzy and leaving nothing good behind. He will not say it but there's an element of 'good riddance' and amusement in regards to his noble phantasm since to him its the mere mewling of arrogant fools who let a star (chance) fall out of sloth and gluttony

    Skills

    Mad Enhancement (-): Subsumed by Noble Phantasm

    Personal Skills
    Terror Cimbricus (A): Phrase used by Romans to describe the mass panic and state of emergency which followed the approach of the Cimbri tribe post the Battle Of Arausio. A mass immigration that devastated the land like a horde of locusts murdering and pillaging all in their path. One of the greatest examples of 'barbarian enemies' noted in Roman history. Grants resistance against 'Man' attribute heroic spirits and works of civilization

    Innocent Monster (Foreign) (C): The anedocte of Theutobochus Rex where upon modern analysis was a grave containing the bones of deinotherium. But due to belief and cultural spread of decades (since 1613) it lead to the belief that it was the Tomb of a Giant King and thus it manifested as transforming Teutobod into an rampaging monster of nature. Bane of civilized men and lord of savages

    Profligate Pillager (A): A skill of similar nature to Golden Rule, rather than one whose existence generates gains its the skill to become fortunate by plundering from others. In exchange obtained objects can be sacrificed to generate magical energy

    Noble Phantasm

    Teutonic Fury- Chained Beast's Dying Defiance
    Anti-Unit (Self)
    Rank A
    A noble phantasm similar to Spartacus Crying Warmonger but it possesses the defiant nature of the Teutonic Tribe, death before humiliation, to deny others their victory even at the cost of their own kin. A self-destructive nature that tears the self apart solely for the sake of spitting on the victor's face. As Teutobod suffers damage and comes near death his body automatically begins to generate corrosive magical energy but instead of being contained in his body it spreads around corrupting his surroundings and turning all living beings into 'Teutons'. The possessed can be used to attack enemy master, spread the curse faster, become as living bombs or simply have their life drained to sustain Teutobod's rampage. As the curse spreads Teutobod starts to lose his self amidst the rampage and from King he will degenerate into a monument for his people's wrath seeking only to despoil and pillage as the envious hatred continues to tug at his soul
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    ah... i see, i see... It seems the time for me to join the fight has come, though i offer only moderate combat skill, i hope my skill in administration and charisma will prove most useful here. But lets cut to the chase, usually I would be referred to as Mr. President, but you can refer to me as Abe, and please let us use something else than "Master" and "Servant"...
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    Class: Saber

    Identity: Abraham Lincoln

    Alignment: Chaotic Good

    H/W 193cm/68kg

    Armament: Cavalry Broadsword

    Wish: Freedom...


    STR: B
    END: (A++)
    AGI: B
    MNA: E
    LCK: E
    NP: EX


    Backstory
    A child born into poverty inside a log cabin, one would never think that he would become known as "The great emancipator". Saber worked hard to teach himself the art of legal defense, he served as both a Lawyer and was semi-prominent in politics, being a leader of the Whig party.

    what classifies him as a Saber is the famous dueling incident with James Shields, who instantly backed down when he saw which weapon his opponent has chosen, a cavalry broadsword.

    When he won the election, he was made sovereign over a nation that was held together by Spit and Prayer, the question of slavery wrecked the relations between the north and the south, indeed, the union was on the verge of falling.
    For every Free state, there was a Slave state, every new state threatened to break the balance of power and give the other side total majority. Not wanting to push things further, Lincoln wanted to keep the balance between the north and the south as best as possible, however, history had other ideas...

    On the December 20th 1860 South Carolina declared it secession from the union, and the dominoes began to fall. through the next year, all of the south seceded from the union, a series of crises had declared the beginning of the Civil war.

    Though Unsuccessful at first, Saber held together the Union army by the pure force of popularity and charisma alone, Though it was arguably his greatest generals, Sherman and Grant who did all the work, Saber was the one holding the entire country together in a moral sense, trough its greatest crisis, even with the death of his own son. and the war not only served an end to slavery in america, it provoked revolts elsewhere as well. His fate would be to die at the hands of an assassin, but not without first changing the world for better.


    Class Skills
    Riding: C
    Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.

    Magic Resistance: C
    Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.


    Personal Skills
    Elected office authority: A++
    A skill which denotes the owner's authority as a sovereign of the state, one not inherited through a monarchy or taken by force, but elected by the popular will of the people, it grants a skill boost +1 against enemies that are considered tyrants and against those of evil alignment, as well as grant him a boost in attack power when he is being supported by other people.
    The united states was born as, and continues to be a democracy, each of its leaders was elected through popular support of the masses. a power derived from the people's support.

    Charisma: B++
    Having B Rank in this Skill is sufficient to lead a nation as its King/Queen. The morale of military forces he or she commands is extremely high. It also allows the user to negate the Emergency Prerogative skill of enemies, in Saber's case, it also allows him to deal more damage against tyrants and evil aligned enemies, as well as weaken their abilities.
    It is only natural that the great emancipator would have a high rank in charisma, in spite the superiority of the southern armies, in spite of the deep division that plagued the united states, and in spite of his own personal tragedies, he signed a document which would grant freedom to thousands upon thousands of people who were until then considered slaves. There are few figures who can claim greater popularity than the 16th president.

    Great Emancipator: EX
    A title given to Saber by a certain Italian general, denotes the man who dedicated his entire life to liberation of people. Saber was staunch abolitionist, a staunch opponent of slavery. as such those who are enslaved by corruption and otherwise will tend to naturally gather under his banner, and he will, in turn grant them freedom, and the more people he liberates the stronger this skill's influence will become. not only does it naturally inspire others into following him, around him forms an invisible, invincible aura of of absolute moral authority, sending into pain all those who are considered evil and despicable, for he himself is the bulwark of liberty, and until all people have gained freedom, this skill will continue to be active.


    Noble Phantasm
    The declaration of the Great Emancipator - "And henceforward shall be free"
    Emancipation Proclamation
    (EX) (Anti-Army/Anti-Evil)

    A document, a simple piece of paper, yet this piece of paper would have words written upon it that would grant freedom to more than a hundred thousand people, its the basis of freedom, and would prelude the 13th amendment, which confirmed those freedoms in the constitution of the United States forever.

    Upon activation, the area surrounding saber will be engulfed in a blinding light, the sky will become clouded, then after a few seconds have passed, a massive hand will emerge from the clouds, bearing down on the ground below. The hand itself is the hand of the divine spirit of goddess Columbia, Taking form as her God-Corpus of the roman goddess Libertas though only her hand is visible. Anyone, Servant or Human that the hand touches will become free of corruption and suffering, and will be purified and anyone, servant or human, who is considered evil and despicable, tyrannical rulers, who deprive people of their freedom who have not deserve it shall instantly be obliterated.

    Once this phase of the Noble Phantasm finished, Saber will emerge, along with the full might of the union army, the Union artillery will then fire and the infantry will charge and destroy anyone and anything remaining that dared survive the wrath of the goddess of liberty, they can remain active for exactly 10 minutes before disappearing.

    This Noble phantasm requires a great deal of magic energy to activate, and as such requires both the presence of a master and a Ley Line close by, as Saber simply isn't a great magic user.


    personality/etc
    CE: Gettysburg Address.
    The piece of paper with perhaps one of the most famous speeches of history
    Declaring that the government of the people shall not perish, it second only to the Declaration of independence.
    It inspired the union army to fight on.
    yet when saber is asked about it, he only stares blankly on that very same parchment of paper
    "Have i truly preserved the Union, or have i just created more division"
    He asks himself this question, is he as resolute, or are there seeds of doubt deep within him?


    Personality: There are many words that can be used to describe saber, none more so than "Resolute", "Honest", "Merciful", "Kind". Indeed, for he was known as "Honest Abe", he is down to earth. But at other times, he is indifferent to acting morally ambiguous in times of need. yet if it brings a good end to a story, he is willing to go to the ends of earth to achieve that Good end.
    A friend to everyone expect the evil and despicable, a unquestioned supporter of liberty and justice, Brutally honest about his ideals and beliefs. Indeed, no other man is deserving of the title of "Great Emancipator"
    His speeches highlight his more Philosophical side and unquestioned leadership, while in private, he would act like a good grandpa, humble to the point where one would not even think of him as a President, much less a liberator.
    Yet, those would try to take advantage of this innate Humbleness would find themselves deeply surprised by his Resolute action and sheer strength of characters, for a servant, such a personality might even be uncharacteristic, but there is even a degree of irony to that as well, for he himself, the Great Emancipator, is a servant that works under a master.

    Relations:
    Deborah Sampson Gannett: Very well if it isn't lady liberty herself, i'm looking forward to the company of one who has the same ideals as me, miss Sampson.

    Billy the Kid: A cowboy from the frontier are you not? Most interesting! though i had little time to worry about the frontier during the civil war however... i do wish your kin the best.

    Medb: I feel physically revolted by the mere presence of this tyrant, her crown dominates the people? preposterous! But i shall tolerate her for as long as she is our ally, so help me god.

    Thomas Edison: Patent thief, now stealing the souls of other presidents as well! you are the most despicable.


    Afterthoughts
    And here is a sheet on what is possibly the hardest historical figure to do as a servant, but challenge is what advances one's writing skill, so i took it.
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