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I've been sitting on this sheet for years because I wanted to finish it up with a Lore section. The Lore section isn't any more written than it was at the start, but I'm dropping it in this thread anyway because I finally got tired of this thing collecting dust in my hard drive. My lack of discipline has failed me yet again.
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BERSERKER
LA HIRE
Name: Etienne de Vignolles
Title: La Hire
Gender: Male
Source: Historical Fact
Origin: France
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Strength: A ( B )
Endurance: A- ( B- )
Agility: B- ( C -)
Mana: D
Luck: D
Noble Phantasm: B
Height: 196 cm
Weight: 107 kg
Likes: Initiative, bravery, card games, mustard
Dislikes: The English, being the butt of the joke, lack of discipline
Faceclaims:
ARMORED
Original Source: https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/87216438
UNARMORED
Original Source: https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/82317829
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement: C
Rank up to Strength, Endurance, and Agility. Berserker is able to speak coherently and form proper thoughts, but he has a quick temper and can only fight properly for a short time before he loses his patience and starts fighting like a wild animal, especially if his opponent is goading him into a fit of anger on purpose.
Personal Skills:
Life of Conflict: C
An ability to live through dire times, accumulated through a rough way of living. Berserker spent most of his adult life fighting through the Hundred Years’ War right up until he died, and has a knack for barely escaping certain loss and surviving on a low pool of magic energy, though some dangers are simply above his level of skill.
Reputation of a Ruthless Sellsword: B
Berserker can strike fear into the hearts of his enemies, forcing them to pass an Endurance check or give in, causing them to flee or stay rooted in place. Servants with at least B-Ranked mental defenses or a Strength or Endurance rank that’s at least equal to Berserker will not be affected. The British and Burgundian armies considered Berserker an especially dangerous foe, so much so that they gave him the nickname of La Hire, commonly translated as the Wrath.
Weak Constitution: C
Berserker’s leg serves as a weak point, lowering his agility and being especially susceptible to harm. His leg was broken by a collapsing fireplace and it never fully recovered.
Golden Rule (Pillage): C
Berserker can accrue a large amount of wealth through stealing it by force. He was infamous for being an ecorcheur, one of the raiders who scoured France during the reign of Charles VII.
Noble Phantasm
Faux Ange d’Ire - Brigand Bearing The Cross
Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Rank: B
Range: 0
Max Target: 1
Berserker’s Noble Phantasm sets his sword ablaze with white flames, which have a mild suggestive affect that convinces normal people and Servants with a lower knowledge of holy magic that they will burn demons and unbelievers of Christ more harshly than other targets, a deception that is unlikely to succeed against religious devotees of any faith and higher level demons. In reality, the flames’ strongest quality is their quick incineration of containers and buildings, especially those that “store valuables” like vaults and armories. Territory reinforced by Casters and constructs like Reality Marbles can resist being instantly reduced to burning, collapsing wrecks by these flames, but summoning Berserker is nonetheless a risky endeavor thanks to the sheer amount of structural damage he can cause.
However, his Noble Phantasm is not the flames themselves, but the gleaming white armor he carries. Shrouded in his association with the Maid, Berserker gains a genuine benefit from his armor and takes less damage from demons and enemies of Christendom, even when he inevitably fails before his own temper, making the armor singe black and crack with glowing orange fissures as he does so. Though the armor will be damaged just as a side effect of Berserker’s rampaging, it will repair itself if he survives the fight, pulling itself together as he comes down from the high of battle…
…unless he is pushed past his breaking point, shattering his armor and leaving him in the leather vestments that he actually wore in life. His defenses will drop significantly, but in exchange, his apoplectic state will fuel an assault that few but the mightiest Servants can withstand, and most defenses will crumble before his enhanced speed and strength until Berserker gets in range for a killing blow. If Berserker wins the fight, his armor will not come back to him and whatever benefits he had as a result of its breaking will subside, leaving him with weakened defenses and orange flames that aren’t nearly as destructive to his surroundings and forcing him to fight with his still irascible demeanor and a lessened ability to act upon it without consequence.
Personality
Off the battlefield, Berserker is a jovial man with a sardonic sense of humor, fond of making jibes at the expense of others and occasionally himself. He curses slightly less than you would expect from a man of his disposition, but only slightly, though he’ll go to the trouble of holding his tongue in the presence of his honored Maid. He is nonetheless quick to get along with his comrades-at-arms, and even if he doesn’t take kindly to someone at first, a few fights alongside them and celebratory feasts is usually enough for him to treat them like a good friend, provided he doesn’t find them especially aggravating. He is especially fond of people who go for what they really want despite having everything working against them, as well as people who came from humble beginnings like he did.
He is nonetheless possessed of his infamous temper and it’s not uncommon for him to be set off by things that are seemingly insignificant or trite. He’s especially quick to blow up at the English, but some of his most bitter venom is saved for himself. He doesn’t show it much, preferring to limit it to simple statements about not being a good person, but a part of him is still stuck on not being able to save Jeanne at Rouen and failing to live up to the standards of character she set after she was executed. Upon being summoned, he will try to act a bit more nobly than he did in life, but his own cynical view of himself coupled with the characteristic madness of the Berserker class will make this a frustrating task for him.
Relationships
Jeanne D’arc:
“Mon dieu...I never thought I’d see the day I could see you like this again.”
Berserker was one of the first of the French Army to wholeheartedly support Jeanne and served as one of her dearest companions. Their friendship continues as Servants, with them having a surprisingly good rapport, though Berserker is a bit more subdued than she remembers.
“No, no, no, I didn’t take the Lord’s name in vain. Okay, maybe I did, but this is a lot to take in!-"
Jeanne Alter:
“Damn, it’s like somebody flipped a switch on the original Jeanne and made her the complete opposite. Well, not the complete opposite…”
“Jeanne Noire” is quite different from the one Berserker fought alongside, but she’s got the same fiery resolve that endeared Jeanne to him, just expressed more aggressively. It is for this reason that he took a liking to her anyway, though he expresses this like by needling her in the style of an annoying uncle. Jeanne Alter seemingly treats him like a foolish minion who’s only good when she needs some muscle, but sometimes, she’ll let down her guard enough for the two of them to have something resembling a friendly conversation.
Gilles de Rais (Caster):
“I don’t want either of your eyes looking at me, filth.”
He thinks of Gilles as being lower than him. Gilles disagrees because he thinks of the two of them as peers, united in the common purpose of spiting God for Jeanne’s demise. Berserker hates him for that line of thought.
Gilles de Rais (Saber):
“…don’t cause any problems.”
Their interactions are much more strained than they were in life.
Any Child Servant: “I hate kids. They cost too much to raise, they ask dumb question after dumb question, and they’ve got too much energy. You couldn’t pay me enough to look after one for a second.”
Jeanne Alter Santa Lily: “Oh, hey, Jeannette, you want something?…yeah, okay, I’ll put something in the swear jar. Just don’t poke me.”
William Shakespeare: (Berserker sneers and grits his teeth. He mumbles something about “singing off that English fop’s beard” under his breath.)
EMIYA, Raikou, Boudica: “What do you mean I can’t empty this entire bottle? Goddamn prima donna chefs-!”
Altera Pendragon (Ruler):
“I can’t trust that rabbit woman to play an honest game of piquet. Not only is she playing with some fancy magic deck, but I’ll be six feet under before I trust one of those accursed rosbif.”
“Oh, shut up, I already know I’m six feet under. Stop quibbling about shit that doesn’t matter.”
Altera: “They call this girl the Scourge of God, huh? I don’t think I can do justice to her title. I don’t know what she looks like when she’s angry, and I’d rather not find out…”
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I was originally going to write La Hire as a sort of foil to Gilles - a rotten man who changed for the better when Jeanne entered his life - but reading about his pillaging ways lessened my interest in that idea. Boy, that sure sounds interesting, maybe I should have written several paragraphs about La Hire's li
Creative frustrations aside, I really did enjoy writing this sheet. I'm especially proud of the Noble Phantasm: it took me a while to work out an ability that felt right for La Hire and I was very happy when I landed upon something that satisfied me. I also feel like the Relationships section is going to be my favorite part of any future sheet I put forward.
La Hire: Definitely my favorite take on the guy. Simple but flavorful Skills and I second your opinion on his NP. I thought of doing a sheet for him myself a while back but couldn't come up with anything other than the obvious blessing status buff or holy flames, whereas you took it in a much more interesting direction. The false holy effect on the flames and the true one of the borrowed armor works well to represent the veneer of sanctity wrapping his rampages, and then how it breaks to expose the true beast lying beneath. Despite that though you did a good job making him sympathetic with how he was genuinely inspired by Jeanne and regrets being unable to live up to her example.
Ah… the sweet wine staining my sword is almost dry…
Class: Saber
True Name: Etienne de Vignolles
Alias: La Hire
Gender: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Origin: Historical Facts and Rumours
Attribute: Man
A French military commander who fought in the Hundred Years War, gathered under the banner of Joan of Arc. Once an infamous brigand and sellsword, earning him the name of “Ira Dei” (the Wrath of God) for his brutality in the battlefield and hot-tempered personality.
Parameters:
STR: A
END: A
AGI: C
MGI: E
LCK: D
NP: B
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: B
Cancel spells below three verses. Can withstand even greater magecraft and rituals. Due to his well-known piety and the blessing received from the Saint he followed, Saber's magic resistance is quite high.
Riding: B
Most vehicles and animals barring those of the Phantasmal Species can be handled with above average skill. A proper knight well versed in the arts of chivalry, Saber's mounted capability is well above average.
Personal Skills:
Saint’s War Order: B+
Proof of having rallied under the righteous banner of Jeanne d’Arc, and dedicating their soul to her holy cause. Exclusive to her most trusted soldiers, it is the protection they received from their own faith, and also the saintly blessing they received from Jeanne herself. Grants Saber practical immunity to any kind of mental interference. It also endows his attacks with the Holy attribute, dealing bonus damage against demonic and evil type enemies, and in addition ensures that even during his most brutal and violent state, his blade will never stray from the path of chivalry.
The Wrath of God: B
The infamous title which signifies the reverence and fear that Saber has garnered from both his enemies and his allies. During his early life as a brutal sellsword, he is only known simply as “La Hire”, but as he joined Jeanne’s army, it became “La Hire de Dieu”.
If summoned as a Berserker, this would be his Noble Phantasm, but as a Saber-class that represents him during his most noble and pious stage, this wrathful nature has been severely toned down, or rather, it has been tamed and controlled.
In essence, this skill can be considered to be a combination of Mad Enhancement and Avenger skill, which raises his parameters and lowers his mental restraints in proportion to the negative emotions he absorbs from others.
Wine of Consecrated Debauchery: C
The legacy of the Vignolles noble family which Saber belonged to, known for their winery and vineyards. It is a heirloom sword which allows for the transformation of blood into wine, and vice versa. It has properties deriving both from the Eucharist sacrament, and the ancient rites of Bacchus
This wine has the properties that can spread divine madness on either himself or others upon drinking or even smelling it, temporarily granting the Madness Enhancement skill to anyone within the range of where it may spill.
Noble Phantasms:
Le Valet de Coeur
The Sanguine Knave of Heart
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: C+
The Knave of Hearts yearning for the blood of the Maiden's enemies.
In the classic French-suited playing card, La Hire is often associated with the Jack of Hearts, perhaps due to his crimson personality, alongside other historical figures such as Ogier the Dane (Jack of Spades), Hector (Jack of Diamonds), and Lancelot (Jack of Clubs).
A Noble Phantasm which activates after Saber has fully accepted and embraced his own signature wrath and madness, becoming the Knave of Hearts that will solemnly dedicate himself to the King and Queen, his Master. It transforms Saber into the sword and armour that attunes fully to his Master’s soul. In other words, he becomes the Silver Chariot Stand.
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wack, just throwing this out here without bothering to fill in the intro
Last edited by Kamera; January 31st, 2023 at 12:52 AM.
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Blindfold your eyes, so that the approaching night may strike no fear in you.
Let it not burden your soul, nor numb your strides.
La Hire (again): Didn't expect another take on this dude so soon. Much sparser personality-wise as is usual for you but definitely striking and well-written. Wine Of Consecrated Debauchery is a great Skill that weaves together a part of his history I'd never heard of before, entwining his ancestors' winemaking with his own crimson feats on the battlefield. That NP is a fairly wild stretch, but I do have to applaud you for coming up with something so creative. So it basically turns him into a divine armor and sword that his Master equips? Reminds me a little of your Khalid's second NP. Also some very good Pol art. Silver Chariot overlaying him as armor and those pauldrons are sweet.
Thomas Malory
“Legends are fascinating. The ways of tragedy, of romance, of love and quests. Of course, a poor knight prisoner like myself wouldn’t know of things like that. I just write about them. Hello Master, I’m Thomas Malory.”
PARAMETERS
STR
D
END
C
AGI
C
MNA
B
LCK
A
NP
A
PERSONAL TRAITS
Class: Saber
Aliases: Thomas Malory of Newbold Revel, Thomas Malory of Hutton Conyers, Thomas Malory of Wales
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Traits: Female, Servant, Humanoid, Weak to Enuma Elish
Attribute: Earth
Gender: Female
H/W: 183 cm/64 kg
Source: Historical Fact
Region: Britain
CLASS SKILLS
Riding (C)
They were definitely skilled in riding horses, having participated in various battles. However, no central anecdotes of doing this exist and they have it at an average rank.
Magic Resistance (C)
Due to never actually encountering magic, they have this at a low rank.
PERSONAL SKILLS
Innocent Monster (A+)
They are so associated with the Arthurian canon that it has overwritten part of their personality and story. This makes their body a composite of how they actually were and Artoria, which is why they have stats that are better than the normal writer as well as much enhanced sword skills. This is also why they are female.
Item Creation (Swords) (C)
As a knight, and one heavily associated with stories of chivalry, they are able to create the symbol, nay the icon of knights: a sword. They can imbue these weapons with legends they have devised for them, thus increasing their quality.
The pen is mightier than the sword, so as both a writer and a swordsman, they can use as many swords as they want. These are high power mystic codes. (About A rank)
Compiler of Tales (B)
Malory did not write the tales of Arthur. Rather, she compiled them into a readable and enjoyable format. This skill lets them draw “legend energy” and mana from the surroundings in order to write a better story. Think of it as a form of Territory Creation.
NOBLE PHANTASMS
Le Morte D’Arthur
Type
Anti-Story
Rank
A
Range
1-20 m
Max. Targets
1-5
The famous work of Malory which was a defining work in the “Arthur” canon.
It lets them force servants around them into a story. They will take on the role of Artoria and gain some of her stats as well as a MUCH weakened copy of Excalibur. Other servants will take on the roles of Lancelot, Tristan, Gawain, and gain similar benefits.
This can only be used on people who are already somewhat compatible with the chosen knights and only on one person at a time.
She can change one of their stats to be equivalent to a stat of the chosen knight and they will each gain a weakened copy of that knight’s phantasm as well as one personal skill of the Knight at C rank.
Moreover, on enemies, he can give them the bad traits of those knights and lead them to terrifying ends. Her chosen Tristan will be stricken with depression, Lancelot with madness and lust, Mordred with envy and inferiority complexes, and Gawain with insensitivity and self righteousness. Additionally, it seals away their phantasm and provides a useless brittle copy of the arthurian phantasm, making them a mockery of all the shitty parts of that knight’s legend. It also downgrades one stat to E and seals away one other skill.Use of this feature requires ooc consent.
Using this on the actual arthurian knights would just act as a minor buff.
The phantasm can either give a buff or debuff and requires OOC consent. Usable OPS
BIOGRAPHY
Much of Malory’s life is unknown. It is known that they spent much of their life as a wandering knight (read: bandit) and committed murder, rape, and theft. For this they were jailed as a “knight prisoner” and from prison wrote one marvelous work: Le Morte D’Arthur.
PERSONALITY
Their personality is a mix between “Arthur fanboy”, “Romantic Optimist”, and “Amoral Narcissist”. Truly an odd servant.
They also use both male and female pronouns to confuse people.
DIALOGUE AND RELATIONSHIPS
Wish: “I want to have lived in the time of Arthur. To see the world my imagination brought life to.”
Likes: “Sugar, beautiful women, writing, praise.”
Dislikes: “Being jailed mainly. Also stupid literary critics.”
When she talks to Artoria: “Senpai!”
When she talks to Dante: “Now, I know that self inserting is fun, but do you really need to go that far?”
When she talks to Hans: “Why so cynical?”
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Nice, I always knew Grand Berserker Florida Man vs. Grand Foreigner Ohio isn't so far-fetched in the Nasuverse!![]()
Lol too late
As someone who also wrote a Malory sheet before, yours is... fine. Straightforward enough, though they feel more like a Caster than Saber. I feel like you could elaborate more on their Innocent Monster, cuz' as it stands now, it's basically just a justification for genderbending while not really leading anywhere else. Does it have any other side effect? Maybe the fusion could have jumbled their memories due to being 50% Artoria, giving them memory problems or mental instability where they get too attached to their Artoria persona, losing their original self in the process. Maybe that's just my angst-seeking brain, tho.
Peanut Gallery
Also, to be fair, sorry to be harsh on anything, but a Malory sheet often suffers the fate of being mid, partially because this person's only defining trait or feat is that... they made Le Mort d'Arthur, aka King Arthur haha funni.
He is often described as just some writer, sometimes being able to manifest the stuff form this book(it'd be funny to see her going wild with Knight of Owner or the Sword of Strange Hangings)
I really have no comment on the skills and other stuff. It just comes off as pretty "eh generic stuff".
But your version of their NP is different. Most sheets usually just manifest the stuff from the book into real life, but for you, it straight up just pulls em into the book. It's almost Bookworm Adventures all over again! You really deserve the creativity points there.
Also, to the other guys, it's always ok to not give your servant Magic Resistance. I kinda feel that sometimes it can be a little out of place.
Ok, I fucked up, not every Malory sheet is mid. I kinda liked Bnel15's one.
Last edited by Spelror; January 31st, 2023 at 01:27 PM.
Thanks for giving me the creativity point there. My idea was Malory through sheer fanboyness forces people into cosplay (they're a saber since Malory was also a knight, although not a good one)
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Prometheus
“The best kind of thought is forethought, which the early humans, my children, personified as me. Seems kind of ironic considering y’know, I got myself tortured for eternity. Never again. Humanity will never again find itself without my protection and guard.”
PARAMETERS
STR
D
END
D
AGI
D
MNA
A
LCK
E
NP
EX
PERSONAL TRAITS
Class: Caster
Aliases: Titan of Forethought
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Traits: Male, Humanoid, Divine, Titan, Weak to Enuma Elish
Attribute: Star
Gender: Male
H/W: Varies
Source: Greek Myth
Region: Greece
CLASS SKILLS
Territory Creation (C)
Since for most of his life he was homeless, (unless you count a rock as a house), Prometheus can’t really use this to do much. He tends to get bored before he is finished.
Item Creation (A)
The ability of a mage to create items. For Prometheus, who made humanity, making high quality mystics codes is child’s play.
Divine Core of the Creative Titan (A)
Prometheus’s divine core. Although it is different in composition to that of a deity, representing how Prometheus is a Titan and not a God, it still functions the same. His Divine Core prioritizes creativity, the making of new things, and independence.
PERSONAL SKILLS
Forethought (EX)
A skill infinitely better than Divination. Prometheus is, at his heart, a thinker and one who thinks about the future. He gave the gift of this manner of thinking, Forethought to his children. This skill lets him, through the process of reasoned deduction, find information that would normally be impossible, predict the future, discern crucial facts about his enemies, and many more. One may call it the ultimate deduction skill.
Self Modification (A+)
Prometheus, a master of clay, formed humanity from it. This grants him instinctual knowledge as to the nature of a human body and especially how to modify it. However, here’s the thing: he’s currently in a human body. He can easily manipulate his body and statistics as well as use this skill to manipulate the bodies of others.
Battle Continuation (Torture) (A)
For years and years, every single day as his punishment, a vulture would eat Prometheus’s flesh and organs. Every single day, he would regenerate. Although Zeus may have created this as a punishment, this instead made Prometheus stronger. He has extremely good endurance and a pain tolerance, capable of staying on his feet while fighting even when taking massive damage. However, the more he uses this skill, the more it hurts.
NOBLE PHANTASMS
Klemméni Fotiá; Reclaim your Stolen Birthright
Type
Anti-Divine
Rank
EX
Range
1-100
Max. Targets
1-???
The prototypical fire Prometheus stole and which all fire is based on. This phantasm can replicate any skill, machine, or phantasm related to fire and in some cases even surpass the original due to the higher quality of this flame. He uses this as his main offensive tool. However, that is not the true power of this phantasm.
Its true form is the primordial, untamed flame. It in its perfect true name released phantasm can burn away almost anything: people, structure, even abstract concepts and divinity. Prometheus plans to use this phantasm to shatter the rule of the Gods, showing how they are weak in the face of flame.
Vélos tis Pronoitikótitas; Your minds are your Glory
Type
Anti-Fortress
Rank
A
Range
99
Max. Targets
1-700
Prometheus gave his children two gifts. The first, the obvious, was the fire. The second, oft forgotten, was their own minds. He granted them the gift of forethought and kicked off roughly all human inventions.
With this phantasm he gathers these inventions, each a shining star of its own, into an abstract shape resembling an arrow. He then fires it at full power at a target, striking them with the full dreams and thoughts of humanity. The only thing that compares in scope is the King’s Signal Cannon.
BIOGRAPHY
“Where do I begin? I was a Titan and then the Gods took over. It happens. Then I, on a lark, made humans. I saw the potential in the clay. But then! That fuckhead Zeus wasn’t sharing the fire, so I took the fire and gave it to them. You’re welcome. So, for that, I got chained to a rock with vultures picking out my liver. But Herc saved me, so I’m fine now.”
PERSONALITY
“I don’t feel the need to explain myself to you. I’m just who I am. The crazy thinker, the doctor, the thief. I’ve got a million roles. Just know that … I did it for love.”
DIALOGUE AND RELATIONSHIPS
Wish: “I want to see all of my children smiling, happy, and creating.”
Likes: Freedom, Praise, Warmth
Dislikes: Zeus, Vultures, Repression
When he talks to Heracles: “Oh, hey, I never thanked you properly for saving me.”
When he talks to Odin: “You’re a dick.”
When he talks to Zeus: “You’re a dick and a rapist and a bad father and oh where do I begin?”
Bond 10 CE: There’s a thing people get wrong about me. I wasn’t a God. I was a Titan. I was the raw will and artistry that made humans. I was forethought, knowledge and fire. I regret nothing."
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I've got some old servant sheets I feel like sharing.
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How is Prometheus?
See that's a lot better.
Thanks. Any particular parts you like?
when i saw the NP i thought "man, another robot?" but now it makes sense.
Fucking weird concept, but now time begins ticking
who makes the first city Servant after that. And what city?
Vatican City? Hiroshima/Nagasaki? El Dorado? Constantinople?
I bet the Brazil gang is already brainstorming something
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I do had that sheet in mind too, but its just the NP itself, not the city
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