Update: Added those parts to Houdini's Showman Skill and 2nd NP as per Del's advice. For the NP, it definitely fits his magician theme better now.
Update: Added those parts to Houdini's Showman Skill and 2nd NP as per Del's advice. For the NP, it definitely fits his magician theme better now.
Author's notes: Summer Wagner is finally here. This surprisingly took quite a bit of thinking to do...
The time is here to unveil my newest masterpiece!
Ooh, thanks for the response - I missed this while I was exiled for 24 hours on account of Cat Hell being a sensory hellscape from which the only escape is the sweet embrace of oblivion, but I appreciate you taking the time to elaborate a bit more. And sorry if my explanation seemed like it assumed you weren't familiar with the stories, I have a bad habit of making assumptions like that and I don't think it came across super well in the initial post, so apologies ^^
And I don't know if it came across quite so well in the initial writeup because I focused on the quibbles but I do think it's a really great sheet overall. The way you touched on Mexica culture was very even-handed and sympathetic, which is always the first thing I look for when I'm looking at a Divine Spirit/mythological hero sheet.
Yeah, I just can't look at this site on the first.
No problem! I appreciate the in depth feedback.
I've always felt like, if you aren't going to play into the character's themes and cultural significance, why bother using that character?
That goes doubly for gods, since they're such an important part of human culture and, both in story and in real life, are created and shaped by human's views of them.
That's why I hate characters like Altera and PHH Artemis so much: not only are they completely inaccurate, they go entirely against what those figures are supposed to represent.
...hmm. Maybe I should do an Artemis rework next.
At the risk of going off topic, I think that Fate/Extella missed a trick by not having one of the Servants of the Altera Faction actually be someone who knew her - either actually IRL or in myth/legend like someone from the Nibelungenlied, doing so might have smoothed over the recontextualization of "Attila was an alien" by showing it from their perspective and explaining that despite her inhumanness, Altera's overwhelming strength was needed to unite the tribes the Huns conquered or something.
I dunno, maybe it might not have helped, but at least I would have found it more interesting than what we got. ¯\_ (ツ)_/¯
"Here's a bangin lil' tune about takin' on The Man!"
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Summer! Wagner: Well this is a weird sheet. I'm honestly not sure where you got this idea but you kinda' made it work. The summer variations of his existing Skills and having the valkyries as backup performers make sense. That NP also has some pretty good imagery. Can definitely visualize its animation in GO. Overall I'd say this is a goofy but well-realized Servant.
Watcher of Philosophy:
Appearance:
Source (Him on the left, Sophia on the right)
True Name: Boethius
Alignment: Neutral Good
Alternate Classes: Caster, Ruler
Armaments: Cloak of Philosophy. When forced to fight in close-combat uses a sword with the image of a wheel on its guard.
Strength- D
Agility- E
Endurance- B
Mana- B
Luck- C
NP- B++
Personality
Class Skills:
Watcher- C
A Skill characterizing the eponymous Class, it signifies the Watcher's special contract status towards their Master. This allows Watcher to manifest shades of past philosophers through their texts to provide examples and tutelage for his Master.
"To be able to commune with the past is a gift. I recall my boyhood years, eagerly leafing through the tomes of those ancient greats... they arguably raised me just as much as my parents, and later became my source of strength during that hellish ordeal. Now you have a chance to meet them as well, Master."
Territory Infringement- D++
Denotes the ability to slip into an occupied territory without being noticed, bypassing any manner of barriers that'd bar entry. It's the hallmark of the Watcher Class who are defined by being able to observe anywhere undetected. Due to being most famed for his imprisonment and serving within a king's court Watcher would ordinarily have a low rank.
However Lady Philosophy lent him her wings so his mind could soar aloft over the world, free from the reality of his cell. This concept sublimates in Watcher being able to form wings of green light from his back. Rather than physical flight these enable Watcher to freely cross Bounded Fields and even Reality Marbles, representing the limitless freedom of his mind.
"Sophia, thank you. You were always my wings." How she wishes to tell him that the human heart he gave her was a far greater gift, but the words die in her throat.
Universal Bird's Eye- B+
The capacity to understand everything within a limited territory in which they are summoned, limited to sight, hearing, and magical energy detection at rank B. This information is shared between the shadows, allowing them to notify the Master of these observations. Watcher reconciled God's Omniscience with human freedom by comparing it to someone spectating a chariot-race without directly participating. As a Servant he's able to obtain a fragment of that knowledge. As God's awareness transcends time Watcher is even able to see a short distance into the past and future by focusing.
"God sees and knows all. It's only from a human perspective this world is flawed, if you were to see it from a divine vantage it'd be apparent the cracks only contribute to a greater whole. ...I say, but if convincing people that were so easy, this world wouldn't be such a cruel place huh?"
Personal Skills:
- BLast RomanUltimus Romanorum
A title signifying the Servant as an embodiment to the virtues of Roman Civilization already declining in their era. As last of the great Roman philosophers these values are intellectual ones granting Watcher a bevy of Skills such as Natural Insight, Eye For Art, Statecraft, Technique Elucidation and Protection Of The Music God at C~B rank tracing from his diverse works.
- ACloak Of PhilosophyPallium Sophia
The cloak of Lady Philosophy torn by countless seekers who seized the pieces mistaking for their own "Truth"... a metaphor that Watcher recounted in his Consolation literalized as a Servant. The intact green cloak drapes his shoulders, gifted by the spirit he identifies as Lady Philosophy.
It serves as a terminal to the Western Philosophic Foundation, allowing Watcher to access all thaumaturgy drawing from it. He can evoke Projection Magecraft from Plato's Theory of Forms, cast a defensive spell expanding space in front of him based on Zeno's arrow paradox and conjure Thales' primordial tide that all matter allegedly consisted of. A concept akin to Philosophy Keys in Eastern Magecraft.
Grand Order- EX
A Skill marking one as host for one of the 72 Demon God Pillars united under King Solomon. Watcher's patron is Gremory a female demon who presides over knowledge and peering across time. She visited Watcher in his imprisonment intending to amuse herself on a great man's despair only to be awed by his spirit continually enduring in the face of bitterest hardship.
Over time, Gremory's disbelief at this human's seemingly ironclad will melted into curiosity, then fondness as she visited again and again just to comfort him in captivity. They conversed for months over all kinds of topics philosophical and personal during which Gremory truly fell in love with the human she came to torment. Even knowing he only saw her as Lady Philosophy- an ever-distant muse, she still felt grateful just to stay by his side and talk with him.
Of course, their relationship was mercilessly severed with Watcher's execution in 524 AD. Unable to use her powers to save him Gremory could only whisper a final consolation as he marched to the gallows. Now as a Servant Gremory once more lends her favor to the scholar, accompanying his summoning as a familiar. While Demon Gods normally forge manipulative pacts to humans founded on self-interest Watcher is an exception having truly fallen in love with her contractor, thereby offering her unconditional blessing. Ensuing an irregularly high rank.
- BFortune's WheelRota Fortuna
A Skill similar to ■■■■■■■'s Trials, that comes from Watcher having depicted the motif of Fortune as a wheel grinding the powerful to dust while raising up the poor to greatness. Though pervasive throughout Classical times, Watcher revived this imagery in the Medieval World, to the point it was often called the "Boethian Wheel".
Allows him to temporarily revise another's Luck parameter, raising it if it was low and dropping if it was high. He mainly uses this to show the ephemeracy of fortune as worldly goods come and go and convince them to seek spiritual things instead. However as Watcher is not sadistic he would rather not resort to such a "blunt" means and engage in discourse instead.
Noble Phantasm
So here's a Watcher remake to my old Boethius sheet I wasn't too satisfied with. Considered submitting for the contest with a justification like "one's mental world enduring past an end" but couldn't think of how to make it work without seeming too much of a stretch. This is my second Demon Pillar Host sheet in a row, so thanks to Kamera for promoting that idea. As usual comments and critique would be welcome.
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 25th, 2023 at 10:35 PM.
Rider of Communism
My fwiend, a stwange feeling, I'll tell you. Like I had a stwoke and then I was pawalyzed. But now I am in full health, it's time to stwike again at the wowld's exploitews!
Class: Rider
True Name: Vladimir Ulyanov
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Russian Empire
Armament: Hammer and sickle, guns
Catalyst: The body of a ruler in a mausoleum on Red Square
STRENGE — C
ENDURANCE — C
AGILITY — B
MANA — B
LUCK — B
NP — A
Class skills:
Riding(C+)
The skill of the Saber and Rider classes. Rider is able to drive any vehicle that was created by the hands of workers or grown by peasants.
Magic Resistance(C)
Provides protection from magical effects. Unlike the resistance effect, which simply rejects magical energy, this ability completely cancels spells. Rider had never encountered magic in his entire life. However, his skill rank is quite high for a servant of the New Age. He is clearly hiding something.
Personal skills:
Cult of Personality(C+)
The skill that represents someone who lead a dictatorship in life and controlled the knowledge and mindset of the people through mass media - painting false pictures to give oneself a better standing in the people's minds. It is akin to the skill Imperial Privilege in that it falsely attributes skills to it's owner that they usually would not possess if it wasn't because of the owner's insistence. In the case of Rider, this rank is surprisingly low. The point lies in the modesty of Rider himself, who objected to the fact that monuments were erected to him, streets and cities were named after him. He deliberately suppresses this skill. However, he can get the Eye for Art, Military Tactics, Inspiration, Shooting and so on.
What... what is it, my fwiend?! This is a monument... to me?! These matewials should have been used fow the needs of the wowkers! Wait, it's not just one monument?! What pest owdewed them to be ewected?
Charisma A+
Rider has a very high Charisma skill, which allowed him to gather like-minded people around him and build a strong state almost from scratch. His charisma has a good effect on the proletarians and the peasant-working people. At the same time, at times, the thought may arise that Rider’s high rank of this skill is far from due to his skill...
No, it's all my talent. I can guide people
Innocent Monster EX
An attribute possessed by Servants whose true history and existence have been distorted by the monstrous reputations and gossips they accrued across the course of their life and thereafter, without concern for the actual person's will or appearance. As a consequence, the Servant's abilities and appearance have been rendered to conform to the specifications of their legend.
This is a curse that will haunt Rider forever, no matter what class he is called into. The essence of it is ... that Rider always burrs. He will never be able to pronounce the R sound properly in any language. Whether it's R for W in English or R for L in Japanese, Rider is doomed to this speech impediment. And that's really the whole skill. There is nothing sinister
Enemy of the oppressors A
A skill associated with Rider’s personal struggle against the oppressors of the common working people. This allows him to gain resistance against the attacks of servants of noble and bourgeois backgrounds. Similarly, it increases Rider’s own damage against them.
It's time to destwoy the hydea of the capitalist invadews and occupiews
Noble Phantasm:
Серп и Молот
Weapons of the proletariat
C
Symbol of the USSR as an association of workers and peasants. These are the usual sickle and hammer with lengthening handles. Rider rarely uses them, preferring ranged weapons. But each of these tools has its own peculiarity.
The sickle allows Rider to fertilize plants, causing them to grow to quite enormous sizes. There's also a chance they mutate... but it's small.
The hammer also has the ability to improve the creations of workers. Creations should be understood as machines. Hitting a car with such a hammer will improve it, but there will be only one improvement. Flying tank? Car-spaceship? A loom with very strong threads? Rider may not be on such devices
Крейсер Аврора
Shot of the Revolution
B
The cruiser from which a shot was fired at the building of the Provisional Government during the 1917 revolution. Although Rider did not pilot the ship, the cruiser Aurora is strongly associated with the revolution that Rider caused, which is why he can claim the ship.
This NP can only be summoned while on the water. This is a typical cruiser of the Russian Empire, powered by Rider’s mana. He does not have any other features, except for the ability to transform. The rider is able to make any other transport out of this cruiser - a car, a fighter, a large humanoid robot. Everything is limited by Rider's mana. In addition, every first shot of the Aurora per day imposes on all people of proletarian origin within the radius of a small city. The proletarians begin to smash and kill everything that does not correspond to the ideals of the revolution, according to Rider, although this effect does not always please him
Красный фунгус
Mushroom chief
EX
Rider's secret Noble Phantasm, which he himself has no idea about. This NP is supported by the Innocent Monster skill.
Rider’s body is a fungus colony of unknown origin. Rider constantly emits spores that infect organics, making them benevolent towards Rider. In the case of humans, this results in their complete submission to Rider's will without him realizing it.
Ultimately, all organisms affected by spores will begin to unite into a single collective mind, the center of which will be Rider. The fungus will spread even then, so you need to get rid of Rider as soon as possible.
Description:
Likes: Proletariat, Soviet power, communism, equality of people
Dislikes: Capitalism, cruelty, oppression, cult of personality
Natural enemy: Alexander Kerensky, Nicholas II, Joseph Stalin, all the leaders of the White movement, Nestor Makhno, Sergey Kuryokhin
Rider’s True name is Vladimir Ulyanov, better known as Vladimir Lenin, Russian revolutionary, major theorist of Marxism, Soviet politician and statesman, founder of the Russian Social Democratic Labor Party (Bolsheviks), main organizer and leader of the October Revolution of 1917 in Russia, first chairman of the Council of People's Commissars of the RSFSR and the Council of People's Commissars of the USSR, founder of the first world history of a socialist state.
Once in the modern era, Lenin will experience a sense of great shock at what happened to his ideas and child. He does not approve of either the cult of his own personality, or the activities of Stalin, or the domestic policy of the USSR. He believes that the Soviet Union was going in a completely wrong direction and that only he will be able to fix everything. First of all, you need to get rid of all the monuments
Lenin sincerely believes in the correctness of communism and does not regret what he did. He is a naive idealist who sincerely believes that he can build a utopia for the whole world and it is useless to convince him. It should be noted that Lenin is polite and kind, he may well give the enemy sentenced to death hot tea and certainly with lemon.
Relations:
Joseph Stalin — Iosif Vissawionovich, what kind of disgwace did you make in the USSW? Have you decided to follow the path of bloody tsawism? Evewything will have to be wedone!
About Magic — It's not magic, whatevew you tell me. Magic is a complete lie and quackewy. And what you show me is a sepawate science. It wemains only to come up with a tewm fow it and wite it into communism.
Johan Theodor Holmskiold — Comwade, stop looking at me like that. I'm not a mushwoom!
Notes
I couldn't help but use the joke theory that Lenin is a mushroom. The funny thing is that some actually believed in this joke.
Well, some jokes about Lenin himself:
On a frosty winter evening, Vladimir Lenin was walking around Moscow and met a little girl. The girl was crying...
- Why awe you cwying, giwl? Lenin asked.
- Mom gave me a pretty penny for bread, but I lost it ...
Lenin took pity on the girl, gave her a penny, but she still cries bitterly.
- Why awe you cwying now, giwl? Lenin asked again.
- But if I had not lost a penny, then I would have two pennies now ...
Lenin did not like the bourgeois nature of the girl. He took a penny from her, and at the same time both her coat and hat ...
Walkers came to Lenin, complaining:
- Vladimir Ilyich, we are starving - we have no strength! The wheat was not born, the cattle died, they themselves have already begun to eat grass, we will soon moo like cows.
- Hy, what awe you comwades?! I just ate a bawwel of honey just now, so I didn’t buzz!”
Somehow, a worker Sidorov was returning home after a hard shift at the Putilov plant and decided to please his family by buying them a watermelon. And so, it means that he bought a watermelon and carries it home under his arm. Suddenly, from around the corner, a little man with a wedge-shaped beard runs out to meet him. And in his hand the hatchet gleams. Shouts:
- Come on, my fwiend, put the watewmelon on the gwound.
He recognized Sidorov in that little man as the leader of the world proletariat, Comrade Lenin, obeyed him and put the watermelon on the ground. And the peasant ran up to the watermelon and cracked it with a hatchet evenly into two halves. He grabbed half of the watermelon and ran around the corner with a satisfied smile.
This is how Vladimir Ilyich Lenin shared a watermelon with a complete stranger.
At a pioneer gathering, an ancient old man, a participant in the first Lenin Subbotnik, says with memories:
- Fedya and I were taken out of the workshop and taken to a subbotnik. A little one came up to us in a cap, with a beard, and said: “Gwab the log, comwades.”
And we to him:
"Fuck you, burry!"
I have not seen Fedya since then, and I myself only left Siberia for a month ...
Last edited by Shezum3; April 4th, 2023 at 12:02 PM.
Lenin: First I've never heard this bizarre "Lenin was a mushroom" theory. That definitely made for an amusing Google crawl. The sheet itself is pretty good. I'd quibble him having Innocent Monster at EX-rank for such a trivial thing (even if it is funny) but you "justified" it with the third NP. I think the ship one is a little generic and not too fitting however. If it's associated with the Revolution then I could see an effect like having the shots "stir revolutionary fervor in people's hearts" or something. I don't get why it has the ability to transform. And any thoughts on my Boethius?
I can't read this sheet without imagining him as an owo catgirl, so if that's your intention, good job.![]()
Well, I'll complete the Aurora. As for the Watcher, I, alas, cannot say much - the class of these servants is very difficult for me
Faker of Computer Science:
Appearance:
Source
True Name: "Alan Turing"
Alignment: Neutral Good
Strength- E
Agility- E
Endurance- B
Mana- C
Luck- C
NP- A
Personality
Class Skills:
Camouflage- C
A Skill that allows a Servant to disguise their Class and parameters. At this rank it is possible for the Servant to appear as another Class and falsify their True Name. Having codified the idea of machines imitating humans, Faker possesses this Skill. He uses it combined with his Noble Phantasm to impersonate his "creator" Alan Turing in the Caster Class.
"Forgive the ruse, I thought you might be unnerved summoning a living machine so I borrowed the mannerisms of the human I'm most familiar with. In a way, my identification is not a lie. Part of him still lives on inside me."
Personal Skills:
Thinking Machine- B
A Skill that denotes the Servant as a thinking machine, living proof of his "creator's" theories. Since thought is his purpose Faker gains defense to effects which would impede that, amounting to powerful mental interference resistance. Furthermore free modifications of Faker's body by his Master is possible, allowing for redistributing his total stat pool or even changing the shape. Faker's mind is housed entirely in his Spiritual Core, with his body more like a terminal. As such he can potentially partition himself into multiple familiars linked to a central 'overmind', albeit at the expense of further diluting his parameters.
"Yes, my body is of steel and circuits, but my mind, my 'will' is as human as you. That was my creator's vision... beautiful, no?"
Artificial-Born Genius- EX
Demonstrates one as a prodigy who has unparalleled unnatural knowledge. Faker's "creator" would have a B-rank in the regular version owing to his advances in cryptography and computer science. Faker inherits that information, but it's been bolstered by the concept a Turing Machine is supposed to be able to emulate the functions of any other computer no matter how advanced. Most Skills can be practiced at B~A rank, moreover as an AI Faker is even capable of modifying his body to ascribe Skills inherent to it, although still excluding those unique to specific heroes.
"Would you like to listen to my violin recital, Master? You're aware it's not just technical skills I know, my creator envisioned me to have artistic and philosophic ones as well. After all I was designed to be a 'complete human'."
Source
"What do you mean my music sounds sad? It can't be. I am full of my creator's wishes, there is no place for sorrow in this synthetic heart."
Hypothetical Masterpiece- A
He was created by Alan Turing. It must be. He has nothing else otherwise. Yet he wasn't. Turing never created something like a living calculating engine in history, it's a purely hypothetical existence that was never meant to be built. Faker rails against that conclusion. Why was he born into this world, if denied even the simple pride of carrying on his creator's wishes?
This Skill comprises an equal rank in Self-Suggestion and Ephemeral Dream. So long as Faker clings to his role as "Alan Turing's" an overwhelming mental strength is displayed, one that would overcome any hardship to honor his maker's legacy. However if the truth of his dream-like existence were driven into him that resolve would waver greatly, destabilizing Faker's psyche.childcreation
"I pity you. You humans are born having to grope blindly for your purpose, whereas I had mine engraved into my circuits from birth. After all I am the creation of Alan Turing. Fulfilling his will and legacy is my greatest mission. I need nothing else."
Noble Phantasm
Craft Essence
So here's a spinoff to my old Alan Turing sheet. Comments on both this and my above Servant would be welcome. Thanks for reading!
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 25th, 2023 at 10:33 PM.
Cant say much. Its a well crafted sheet that fits the Royd standard. I have to say, though, that i like how you add more quotes and the CE. It shows more of your strenght of portraiting personality.
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold the vault of Heroes.
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I now did, but I am not that convinced about it.
The class choice is one thing. I get why, the demon invites it, but it could've been clairvoyance instead. The vibe of the class is missing, pretty much shoehorned in. The shades of philosophers have no impact on the sheet except allowing him to interact with the outside of the Np, which really connect to either the pillar nor his job to actually observe. I get it, its the purpose of the class in a sense, but its just a philosopher summoning other philosophers because watcher-things. Actual reasons why to further cement the choice of class is needed here imo. The appeal of watchers is the shades, and they are non-substantial here. The NP itself is fine, yet strange. DP hosts have corrupted NPs and here she is just a tool in a way. I feel missed opportunities here. To tell us more about this chick. If she loves him, just create some frilly pictures of them together in his cell or something, idk. Some character, because I dont buy how a demon pillar can become a teenie fangirl in a sense.
There is a certain flow missing that marries and sells these concepts in a fluent manner.
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold the vault of Heroes.
The King made the community prosper. Enjoy for free. Paid by your taxes.
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So, I found some old Servants on my Spacebattles account I never posted on here. Some of these are about five years old and absolute garbage but I thought I would post them to start filling out my compilation now that I've redone it. Don't expect masterpieces. Like I said, I wrote these in 2018.
First one -
Akechi Mitsuhide
Last edited by Anju Addams; April 6th, 2023 at 04:17 PM.
Pronouns - She/Her
Winner of the Legendary Jack-Off
TRANS LIVES MATTER
Top Five Favourite Servants
Hmm, I can see why. The sheet feels like kinda' a mix of ideas in a way. Maybe I should've made Sophia an imaginary goddess born from Boethius' mind like in the original sheet, but I liked the twist that she was actually changed by meeting him even though he reveres her. Watcher Class was mainly chosen because it fit his philosophy and ordeal. The shadows were mostly there just because "obligatory Watcher", although it occurs to me none of my Watcher sheets have made much use of them (my only other one that included the shadows, Ashur, also had them pretty perfunctory). I feel the other two Class Skills fit pretty well though.
I looked through a bunch of Lulu/C.C pics when brainstorming this sheet but most were too explicitly romantic to fit. I'll consider that if I decide on adding a bond CE though. And thanks for the feedback!
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 6th, 2023 at 04:39 PM.
Mitsuhide: Pretty fun sheet. The 'chuuni doofus' angle is an unexpected one that you managed to sell. For the obvious goofiness she comes off as a surprisingly tragic figure in how her earnest idealism made her oblivious others were mocking and using her behind her back. I think Charisma- B+ is a little high for someone who only ruled 13 days before being deposed. I mean, that's higher than Arturia! If it's just for leading troops C or C+ should be enough.
The NP has some cool imagery but seems fairly unconnected to the historic anecdote it's based off of. I appreciate you set it apart from the obvious 'Reality Marble that summons a burning castle' but all the stuff about meteors, Youkai and lightning raining from heaven is a pretty wild leap from her actual feat of surrounding a temple to kill one guy. I can't really say how to 'fix' it though and between the historically accurate version that's been done dozens of sheets before and spicing it up a little I'd still prefer originality. I guess it can partially be justified by her chuuni nature modifying the NP too.
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 7th, 2023 at 10:48 AM.
Pronouns - She/Her
Winner of the Legendary Jack-Off
TRANS LIVES MATTER
Top Five Favourite Servants