OhOriginally Posted by Kamera
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I kind of feel what Kamera is talking about heck, I posted a sheet in the middle of Jishara's chain post, and it got buried. I wanted to ask in the feedback thread, but Dreamless was still waiting for his Feedback on Hatfield, but I don't really have any comments on it, yet maybe I should post a thing or two. To keep the ball rolling on that thread as well. Though I just don't want it to sound forced.
I agree with this. Back when CaS first started, not only was Type-MOON information limited, but there just wasn't a ton of material. There was Fate/stay Night, there was Tsukihime, and there were two or three spinoffs each. This left a lot of room for people to just do whatever they wanted. But now, not only are we glutted with Type-MOON content, but we're also glutted with Nasuverse worldbuilding, which means there's more and more information that people feel they need to take into account when they're writing. Plus, FGO is constantly putting out new Servants, which drains the pool of potential figures to use. All these pressures generally produce higher quality sheets, but these sheets also take much more effort, especially with things like the Collapse Tag trend and heavy story elements. And when you're putting that much effort into something, it helps to have something specific to focus on, like a contest topic. Hence the increased predominance of Monthly CaS in comparison to original flavor CaS.
Or at least that's my perspective.
Your Fatima looks fine. The personality is well fleshed-out and Skills mostly fitting. It's worth noting Eternal Arms Mastery is meant for warriors who were unrivaled in their era. I'm not sure if that really describes Fatima (don't know how famous she is in the Islamic World for one thing), much less at such a high rank. The NP has some cool and evocative imagery but makes me think there wasn't much in her legend to create a suitable NP if you had to reach for the vague "condensation of her legend" angle. I also noticed you switch between first and third-person erratically sometimes in her Lore section.
And I think the Feedback thread is deader than this one by now. I posted my John Gomez in it before Dreamerless and got nothing.
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To be fair I think the "chain-posting" is really more a result of others just not using this thread very often. I'm not sure if waiting would really invite people to contribute between posts.
Thank you for the Feedback, Royd; I thought I change all of it to a first-person view. Thanks for spotting those errors, but yeah, I have been listening to an Audiobook version of her tale, don't worry. The tale was dated back to the 12th century, so I know this isn't a modern book. But in the story, she was never defeated in combat, not even once, and she has a life of it with the constant raiding, so that is why I gave her the Eternal Arms Mastery Skill and at such a high rank. As for the NP, yeah, you are right on that front as I listened to her tale, it became clear that there is not a lot of supernatural element in them. There is no Excalibur equivalent or some sort of legendary blessing. Much of her feats translate better as skills instead, so that is why I went with the "condensation of her legend" angle in her NP. I even briefly put a spotlight on it in her Bond CE. Compared to most epics, hers is by far the tamest of them all.
Thou, sinful humankind. Even if thou vieweth thyselves as guilty, I deem thee worthy of the Father’s light.
Author's Note: This was a sheet I was going to post for the Monthly Contest, but life happened so I finished it late. And yes, I will eventually explain whatis.Them???
Class: Caster
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Olimpia Maidalchini
Alignment: True Neutral
Place of Origin: Papal States (16th Century)
Stars: 4/5
Parameters:
STR: D
END: C
AGI: C
MGI: B
LCK: C
NP: A
Height: 176cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Serenity
Dislikes: The rumors around her
Talent: Intelligence
Natural Enemy: Pope Julius II
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A golden crucifix
Catalyst: The portrait of her
Class Skills:
Item Construction (Fake) EX: Subsumed within Caster's Noble Phantasm.
Territory Creation B: The capability to create a "papal office". Due to it technically not suiting her, it works for her on par with a workshop.
Personal Skills:
Popemaker B: The sublimation of Caster's work to get Pope Innocent X on the throne. With him starting from a mere monsignor, Caster caused him to rise in the ranks through careful bribes and use of influence, eventually even bribing the cardinals to elect him. The capacity to grant someone the status of a "pope", granting them magecraft based in the Roman Catholic traditions, along with the capacity to use sacraments.
Power Behind The Throne A: Caster was well-known as the power behind the throne to Pope Innocent X, with her making most of the decisions for him. Naturally, this manifests into a skill. The one that Caster denotes "pope" is viewed as a low-tier Caster class servant, achieving rank-ups in statistics to be able to pretend to be a very weak Caster while the actual Caster schemes, viewed as merely the "master".
Pay Up B: The sublimation of her forcing the aristocracy to pay her vast amounts of money to be permitted to speak with the pope. This tended to happen through gambling games which diplomats tried as hard as they could to lose so that they would spend enough. The capacity to extract Mana from a target through Caster's words, naturally working on those words of her Master as well.
Noble Phantasm(s):
All Wealth Is My Wealth
My Power Is That Of Money
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C~B
Range: 100 meters
Max Targets: 100 targets
The sublimation of the time that Caster stole the entire contents of the Vatican Treasury. This didn't merely include vast quantities of wealth equivalent to Golden Rule B, but also sacraments and relics that Caster uses as her primary weapons. When the true name of this noble phantasm is called, Caster manifests vast quantities of relics, ranging from Black Keys to the blood of saints, using it to smite the enemy with the wrath of the Vatican. As an alternate usage, Caster can absorb parts of a target's treasury as long as they have Golden Rule or a noble phantasm storing weapons or items.
Heaven Will See You Now
For Prayer, For Peace, For Prosperity
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: A
Range: 100 meters
Max Targets: 1 target
Caster was viewed as controlling access to the pope completely, requesting payment for access to his appointments. This practice bore great similarities to the concept of indulgences, payments for your soul to instantly jump from purgatory to heaven, for after all the Pope is viewed as the voice of Heaven on Earth. Together, these concepts form into a noble phantasm permitting Caster to grant a spirit "instant access to heaven", instead of being stuck in purgatory. In other words, to purify a servant in a flash of light and a bang of trumpets, removing them from the Grail War. Naturally, this holds several limitations. This grows weaker against enemies who aren't Catholic, and weaker still against enemies who aren't Christian in faith. In addition those that are viewed to "already be in heaven" such as popes and saints, and those that have not died such as servants from the future or Immortals like Merlin or Yu Meiren are nigh-immune.
Lore: Olimpia Maidalchini, Princess of San Marino was the sister-in-law of Pope Innocent X. In her early life, her father attempted to send her to a nunnery, but she refused, instead getting married to the wealthiest man around, who died not long after. She then married an impoverished noble, Pamphilio Pamphili. This is when she grew accquainted with her brother-in-law, the later pope Innocent X, and worked to raise him from Monsignor to Pope, through well-placed bribes and use of her influence. Once this was done, she became the power behind the throne, controlling both access to the Pope and his decisions.
Personality: A stern and serious person to those who held power. She clawed her way up from low status, and as such dislikes those who were already born into it. On the flip side, those with little power at all or those that earned it like she did would naturally gain much acclaim from her, and would be shown her softer side. Her wish for the grail is just to remove the depictions of her as a vile person who didn't even allow her brother-in-law to be buried.
Relationships:
Julius II: "So, your status came from... your acquaintances rising you up? Well, at least that's similar to my Innocenzo."
Zhengde Emperor: "...You don't deserve your throne. If you want peace of mind, you must pay."
Marozia: "Oh, you're very similar to me, aren't you? But the shadows... they aren't necessary."
Lola Montez: "You were... truly impressive. Like a younger me."
Antipope Benedict: "You lost your title, but tried to gain it back? ..Now that is truly not sanctified."
Antipope Clement: "I... must at least admire your effort."
Creator's Notes:
Simon: I love that sheet! The first NP is very creative, and so is the second. Is the ???mark Judas?
Olympia Maidalchini: This is a really interesting sheet actually. I especially like the Heaven Will See You Now Noble Phantasm, it could be really cool. I'm wondering what her opinion would be on my sheet I just posted?
Class: Caster
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Olimpia Maidalchini
Alignment: True Neutral
Place of Origin: Papal States (16th Century)
Stars: 4/5
Parameters:
STR: D
END: C
AGI: C
MGI: B
LCK: C
NP: A
Height: 176cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Serenity
Dislikes: The rumors around her
Talent: Intelligence
Natural Enemy: Pope Julius II
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A golden crucifix
Catalyst: The portrait of her
Class Skills:
Item Construction (Fake) EX: Subsumed within Caster's Noble Phantasm.
Territory Creation B: The capability to create a "papal office". Due to it technically not suiting her, it works for her on par with a workshop.
Personal Skills:
Popemaker B: The sublimation of Caster's work to get Pope Innocent X on the throne. With him starting from a mere monsignor, Caster caused him to rise in the ranks through careful bribes and use of influence, eventually even bribing the cardinals to elect him. The capacity to grant someone the status of a "pope", granting them magecraft based in the Roman Catholic traditions, along with the capacity to use sacraments.
Power Behind The Throne A: Caster was well-known as the power behind the throne to Pope Innocent X, with her making most of the decisions for him. Naturally, this manifests into a skill. The one that Caster denotes "pope" is viewed as a low-tier Caster class servant, achieving rank-ups in statistics to be able to pretend to be a very weak Caster while the actual Caster schemes, viewed as merely the "master".
Pay Up B: The sublimation of her forcing the aristocracy to pay her vast amounts of money to be permitted to speak with the pope. This tended to happen through gambling games which diplomats tried as hard as they could to lose so that they would spend enough. The capacity to extract Mana from a target through Caster's words, naturally working on those words of her Master as well.
Noble Phantasm(s):
All Wealth Is My Wealth
My Power Is That Of Money
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C~B
Range: 100 meters
Max Targets: 100 targets
The sublimation of the time that Caster stole the entire contents of the Vatican Treasury. This didn't merely include vast quantities of wealth equivalent to Golden Rule B, but also sacraments and relics that Caster uses as her primary weapons. When the true name of this noble phantasm is called, Caster manifests vast quantities of relics, ranging from Black Keys to the blood of saints, using it to smite the enemy with the wrath of the Vatican. As an alternate usage, Caster can absorb parts of a target's treasury as long as they have Golden Rule or a noble phantasm storing weapons or items.
Heaven Will See You Now
For Prayer, For Peace, For Prosperity
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: A
Range: 100 meters
Max Targets: 1 target
Caster was viewed as controlling access to the pope completely, requesting payment for access to his appointments. This practice bore great similarities to the concept of indulgences, payments for your soul to instantly jump from purgatory to heaven, for after all the Pope is viewed as the voice of Heaven on Earth. Together, these concepts form into a noble phantasm permitting Caster to grant a spirit "instant access to heaven", instead of being stuck in purgatory. In other words, to purify a servant in a flash of light and a bang of trumpets, removing them from the Grail War. Naturally, this holds several limitations. This grows weaker against enemies who aren't Catholic, and weaker still against enemies who aren't Christian in faith. In addition those that are viewed to "already be in heaven" such as popes and saints, and those that have not died such as servants from the future or Immortals like Merlin or Yu Meiren are nigh-immune.
Lore: Olimpia Maidalchini, Princess of San Marino was the sister-in-law of Pope Innocent X. In her early life, her father attempted to send her to a nunnery, but she refused, instead getting married to the wealthiest man around, who died not long after. She then married an impoverished noble, Pamphilio Pamphili. This is when she grew accquainted with her brother-in-law, the later pope Innocent X, and worked to raise him from Monsignor to Pope, through well-placed bribes and use of her influence. Once this was done, she became the power behind the throne, controlling both access to the Pope and his decisions.
Personality: A stern and serious person to those who held power. She clawed her way up from low status, and as such dislikes those who were already born into it. On the flip side, those with little power at all or those that earned it like she did would naturally gain much acclaim from her, and would be shown her softer side. Her wish for the grail is just to remove the depictions of her as a vile person who didn't even allow her brother-in-law to be buried.
Relationships:
Julius II: "So, your status came from... your acquaintances rising you up? Well, at least that's similar to my Innocenzo."
Zhengde Emperor: "...You don't deserve your throne. If you want peace of mind, you must pay."
Marozia: "Oh, you're very similar to me, aren't you? But the shadows... they aren't necessary."
Lola Montez: "You were... truly impressive. Like a younger me."
Antipope Benedict: "You lost your title, but tried to gain it back? ..Now that is truly not sanctified."
Antipope Clement: "I... must at least admire your effort."
Creator's Notes:
Simon: I love that sheet! The first NP is very creative, and so is the second. Is the ???mark Judas?
Note: ??? is not Judas, my interpretation of Judas is slightly... stranger.
Source: Yangfan
Class: Rider
Other Classes: Archer
True Name: Francesco Morosini
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Place of Origin: Venice (17th Century)
Stars: 3/5
Parameters:
STR: B
END: D
AGI: C
MGI: D
LCK: C
NP: B
Height: 180cm
Weight: 160lbs
Likes: Destruction
Dislikes: Dissent
Talent: Looting
Natural Enemy: Ancient Greek servants, especially deities
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Male, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A mortar
Catalyst: The Piraeus Lion
Class Skills:
Riding C: The capacity to ride mounts. He was adequate at it and thus gains this rank.
Magic Resistance E+: He never encountered magecraft in life, but due to his legend as one who "destroyed the sacred temple", Rider gains empowerments against magecraft hailing from the Greek mythosphere.
Personal Skills:
Destructive Looting A: The manifestation of Rider's destructive looting of parts of the Parthenon, attempting to steal several statues of deities. However, each statue he attempted to steal got destroyed as he tried to do that. This enables him to self-destruct works of art, causing them to burst in an explosion.
In Red B: Rider had frequent battles, and the fact that he always wore red, representing the blood spilled during the battles. This manifests in the form of a skill granting Rider the capacity to imbue his clothing with the blood he spills, enhancing his own defense and offense in a scaling fashion.
Voyager of the Storm C: Rider was the Commander in chief of the Venetian navy for a time, and as such naturally gains this skill denoting his skill for commanding ships. This also incorporates Charisma and Tactics at the same rank, as ships need crew and not just a single person to pilot.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Parthenon Oblivion
Even The Most Holy Places
Type: Anti-Temple
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 1 target
The Mortar shot that Rider commanded done that destroyed parts of the Parthenon. This manifests, when the true name is called, in an enhancement to the next mortar thrown, it becoming covered in designs that cause it to shatter through magical barriers at or below C rank, and also crack divine protection.
Piraeus
Oh Lion Of Venice, Roar Out
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: B
Range: 8 meters
Max Targets: 100 targets
The Piraeus Lion, one of the most famous items that Rider looted and one of the few that actually survived. When the true name is called, the great statue manifests. The runes carved into its sides animate it into a Phantasmal Beast, with ferocious claws and teeth, as well as venom imbued into its breath and fangs. This beast tends to follow Rider's commands, but will occasionally rebel, so Rider must be careful to not overuse this Noble Phantasm.
Lore: Francesco Morosini, Doge of Venice (1619-1694) was Doge of Venice and prior to that commander in chief of the Venetian Navy. His most notable actions occurred during the War with the Ottomans, wherein Francesco destroyed parts of the Parthenon and looted items from all around Greece.
Personality: A greedy person. He deeply enjoys collecting items of all sorts, and will build up a stockpile as soon as he's able, though his favorite type of items to collect are fine art. He would bemoan having to sacrifice any pieces of his collection to his skill. He feels that his looting was truly the best way, but his wish is to have been able to successfully loot the entire Parthenon without anything breaking.
Relationships:
Olimpia: "What a clever plan. And such interesting artifacts, too!"
Victoria: "No, this isn't the Lion of Britannia."
Julius II: "Venice shall never fall."
Ennigaldi: "Your museum is fascinating. Mind if I take a look?"
Creator's Notes: Olimpia to Petrus: "So, the great first Pope of the church was once ordinary too? How impressive."
Remade NP of Tugarin.
Коркодил
Ruler of snakes
A
Gift of Yig, father of snakes. When using this NP, Tugarin turns into a Corcodile, a giant hybrid of a snake and a crocodile. In this form, Tugarin has wings, his body releases a fetid gas, which has a very nasty property - it wraps the entire flora and fauna into snakes. Where there is Tugarin, there will be trees from which snakes grow, snake animals, grass from snakes, and so on. These changes also affect people.
That's definitely a more "eldritch-y" NP with some good creepy imagery in the form of random features of the environment turning into snakes. I think I'd edit it into the old sheet for completeness and link back rather than just post an NP disconnected though.
Source: RPNATION
Class: Rider
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Saint Hilda
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: England (7th Century)
Stars: 3/5
Parameters:
STR: D
END: D
AGI: D
MGI: D
LCK: C
NP: C
Height: 167cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Supporting others, talent
Dislikes: Caustic critics
Talent: Making others influential
Natural Enemy: Marozia
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A crozier
Catalyst: A stained glass window depicting her
Class Skills:
Riding C+: She is naturally decent at riding, but far better with avians or serpentine animals due to the connections in her legend
Magic Resistance B: A saint who lived in an era of magic naturally gains a fairly high rank.
Personal Skills:
Mother Hilda's Monastery B: The sublimation of Rider's monastery, of which many people who were within became influential, including multiple bishops, famous writers, and even several saints apart from Rider herself. A skill that allows Rider to act like a talent scount, granting her an eye for talent that is extremely effective, as well as enhance the talent to propel them to new heights.
Synod of Oswiu C: The synod of Oswiu, which took place at Rider's monastery. As this was viewed during the time as the subjugation of the "alternate Christian churches" to Rome, this skill grants Rider empowered attacks against anyone who was a christian but not Roman Catholic, such as anglicans or protestants.
Saint C: The capacity to choose between "rank up to HP, rank up to sacraments use, or rank up to Charisma" upon summoning. Rider tends to prefer Charisma.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Thou, Snakes
Oh Coiled Fossil
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 100 targets
The sublimation of Rider's connection with ammonites. It was said that they once were a plague of garter snakes that Rider petrified. Manifesting as her weapon, her staff itself is a petrified snake, coiled at the top akin to an ammonite. This staff can jut out the ammonite's tendrils. When the true name is called, this snake awakens into an ammonite-basilisk, which Rider stands atop of. This ammonite can petrify entities nearby through a gaze, or through a tap with the tendrils. It's also extremely enduring, its shell being extremely tough.
Lore: Saint Hilda of Whitby was a Saint of the Roman Catholic Church and an abbess who founded the Whitby Monastery, wherein the Synod of Whitby, done by Oswiu, took place. She was said to have transformed a pandemic of snakes into ammonites, and to make sea birds bow to her. She was also noted for having within her monastery numerous people who became renowned.
Personality: A kind and nurturing, but also showy, person. She constantly keeps her eyes out for talent, dramatically entering competitions in order to do that. Although she deeply cares about everyone, she also views herself as the "superior talent scout who will find all the potential" in everyone that has any. She holds no true wish for the grail, allowing her manifestation in order to spot new talent.
Relationships:
Marozia: "Manipulation? That is talent, but your strategies go too far."
Olimpia: "Ah, yes, yes. I would have snapped up your talent in no time. You would have been my successor! Ah, if only we lived in the same era."
Satie: "You hold no talent!"
Boulanger: "Your eye for music is certainly impressive. But never forget this, I am the real talent scout here."
Y'know, you sometimes pick some of the strangest faceclaims brother.
Mitsuru's saucy leather catsuit under a fur coat is certainly not what I expected a dark ages holy woman to wear, I must say.
"Here's a bangin lil' tune about takin' on The Man!"
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It kind of suits how her personality is described though. Just out of curiosity I looked for any FCs actually featuring ammonites/nautili but they generally had a more serious vibe.Y'know, you sometimes pick some of the strangest faceclaims brother.
Mitsuru's saucy leather catsuit under a fur coat is certainly not what I expected a dark ages holy woman to wear, I must say.
Source: Kernyanne
Class: Assassin
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Micheletto Corella
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Place of Origin: Italy (15th Century)
Stars: 2/5
Parameters:
STR: B
END: B
AGI: C
MGI: D
LCK: D
NP: B
Height: 179cm
Weight: 150lbs
Likes: Loyalty, trust
Dislikes: Being distrusted
Talent: Assassination
Natural Enemy: Pope Julius II
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Male, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: Bare hands, spears
Catalyst: An executioner's axe marked with the Borgia mark
Class Skills:
Presence Concealment B: A capable assassin who can blend into the shadows until making his move.
Personal Skills:
Keys to the Papal Treasury B: The sublimation of the time that Assassin threatened the holder of the keys to the Papal treasury, to have him hand the keys over to Cesare Borgia. This naturally manifests in the form of a skill which allows Assassin's presence to radiate an aura of terror and unwillingness to resist, weakening others around's will as soon as he reveals his existence. In addition, if an intimidation check is successfully passed, one item can be confiscated, though it cannot be a Noble Phantasm.
The Borgia's Executioner A: The sublimation of Assassin's title as the Executioner of the Borgias, who killed countless important figures to grow the Borgia fortune and increase the power of the Borgia family. This manifests in a skill empowering Assassin's offense against those counted as human, and once again against those who were nobility of some kind or priests.
Unyielding Will B: The sublimation of his unyielding loyalty to the Borgia family, to the point where he refused to reveal even the tiniest piece of information regarding them, even as he was tortured and imprisoned for two years. An ability that ranks up Assassin's physical and mental defenses.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Morte Complessa
The Death Of Alfonso D'Aragon
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: B
Range: 15 meters
Max Targets: 1 target
The sublimation of the death of Alfonso of Aragon, Lucrezia Borgia's husband and one of the people Assassin killed. In his case, Assassin made sure of the kill by killing him in numerous ways: stabbing him, strangling him, tossing him out a window, drowning him... This Noble Phantasm, thus, serves as an "undodgable attack", which will always attack in such a way as to be the exact thing that the target can't defend against, no matter how specific it is. Visually, Assassin's hands begin glowing a brilliant purple, as Assassin reaches out, strangling the enemy. Naturally, the weak point of this ability comes in the fact that if a target can "defend against anything" at that moment, the attack completely fails, and rebounds instead.
Lore: Micheletto Corella (d. 1508), the Executioner for the Borgias, was a condottiere and warrior who was a major ally of Cesare Borgia. Micheletto killed numerous people for Cesare, including the Papal Secretary, Prince Alfonso de Aragon, the Lord of Fermo, the Lord of Montone, and so on.
Personality: A stern and serious person. He is extremely loyal to the Borgias, and as such, will try to work with anyone with similar cunning and political acumen as they did, although his ideal allies are naturally the Borgias. He views killing as something that must be done, though he takes no pleasure in it. His wish for the Holy Grail is to bring the entire Borgia family reincarnated, though especially Cesare Borgia.
Relationships:
Julius II: "You. You must die."
Marozia: "A borgia? No, no. You just seem similar."
Pope Alexander VI (BnEl15): "Oh, Rodrigo. How interesting. Tell me, has Cesare arrived yet? No? Oh, bother."
Louis XI: "A spider in a web? Indeed, the borgias were akin to that, and I was the one who chased the fly in."
Stephanie St. Clair: "It seems their legacy has been maintained."
Creator's Notes: Yea, I was originally thinking a fairly standard abbess faceclaim, but as Saint Hilda's personality took shape, I decided I wanted to go for a more talent-scout like faceclaim as opposed to a traditional nun, hence the one I chose with the sunglasses.
Last edited by jishara; May 9th, 2023 at 08:04 PM.
Corella: Is there a reason his The Borgia's Executioner and Unyielding Loyalty Skills aren't just Executioner and Unyielding Will? I feel you've fallen into a disease of making almost everything a unique Skill when it sometimes doesn't add much. And Keys To The Papal Treasury IMO would fit better as an ability where with an intimidation check he can confiscate one of the opponent's possessions, not just a terror aura.
Berserker of the Nepra River
Quiet, Master. I hear the river singing...
Class: Berserker
True Name: Sukhman Odikhmantievich
Alignment: True Neutral
Place of Origin: Kyivan Rus
Armament: None
STR — A
END — B
AGL — B
MGI — B
LCK — C
NP — A
Class skills:
Mad Enhancement (D)
The Class Skill that characterizes a Berserker, raising basic parameters and strengthens one's physical abilities in exchange of hindering mental capacities and/or in exchange for their sense of reason. Rank up for all parameters, but most of one's reason is robbed.
A berserker may seem strange at first glance, but if he sees a bad attitude towards rivers, he falls into a violent rage
Personal skills:
Dialogue with the river EX
A very strange ability of the Berserker, which allows him to communicate with the rivers. Whether this is communication with the spirits of the rivers, or whether this is a different nature of this skill, but with the help of it, Berserker is able to receive accurate information from the rivers. This skill also allows the Berserker to use river water as a weapon, asking the river to attack.
Help, sister-river, I will not remain in debt, you will be wider
Weapon Crafting (Trees) B
Berserker can use uprooted trees as a weapon. Trees are much stronger in his hands. In his legend, Berserker, with the help of an oak trunk, killed an entire army of Tatars who were building bridges on the Nepra River in order to attack Kyiv
In skillful hands and a tree there is a club
Leaves on wounds A
Berserker's special skill that allows him to cover wounds with leaves. This does not heal the Berserker, however, by removing the leaf from the wound, it can attack with a stream of blood under great pressure.
It's useless to treat me. I'll die anyway
Noble Phantasm:
Сухман-река
Birth of a bloody river
A
Berserker's suicidal Noble Phantasm, his rebirth into a river. To activate it, the Berserker must have enough leaves that cover his wounds.
When receiving a fatal blow or from the desire of the Berserker himself, the body of the servant will begin to bleed heavily, turning into a bloody turbulent river. The berserker can manipulate its waters to attack. In this state, Berserker's mind quickly dies, he has only seven hours, after which he will become the most ordinary river.
Description:
Likes: rivers, hunting
Dislikes: When they are neglected, when rivers are disrespected
Berserker’s True name is Sukhman Odikhmantievich, little-known bogatyr of the Kyiv epic cycle. In his legend, he goes to get a white swan for Prince Vladimir, otherwise he will be executed. To be fair, Sukhman himself boasted that he could get the swan alive. During the trip, he sees that the Nepra River is fighting the Tatar force, which is building Kalinov bridges on it in order to go to Kyiv. Sukhman beats the Tatar force with an oak torn out by the root, but during the battle he gets wounds, which he covers with leaves. Sukhman returns to Kyiv without the swans. Prince Vladimir does not believe him and orders him to be imprisoned for boasting in the cellar, and sends Dobrynya Nikitich to find out if Sukhman told the truth, and when it turns out that the truth is, Vladimir wants to reward Sukhman; but he removes the leaves from the wounds and bleeds. The river Sukhman flowed from his blood.
Odikhmantievich is a strange person. He can talk with the rivers for hours, he respects them and calls them nothing more than sisters. He likes to brag about his prowess, but he doesn't like being snubbed and may well kill himself because of it. Master should be very careful with Sukhman
Notes: I'm starting to come out of my creative gloom. For a long time I was not with my servants
Class: Rider
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Heloha and Melatha
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Choctaw mythology
Stars: 3/5
Parameters:
STR: C/B
END: B/C
AGI: C/B
MGI: B/C
LCK: C
NP: B
Height: 165/178cm
Weight: 140/150lbs
Likes: Each other, protecting others
Dislikes: Needless destruction
Talent: Causing and warning of storms
Natural Enemy: Atkor Kamuy
Attribute: Sky
Traits: Weak to Enuma Elish, Duo
Armament: A bow and arrows
Catalyst: A piece of a thundercloud captured from the sky by magic, placed atop an egg
Class Skills:
Riding N/A: The two of them didn't have any legends of riding in their mythology. This skill, however, is not necessary for their Noble Phantasm due to Combination.
Magic Resistance B: As magical entities from the Age of Gods, they naturally gain high ranks in this skill, resisting magecraft.
Personal Skills:
Combination A: The two can act in perfect sync no matter what, the duo having an extremely strong connection between them as husband and wife.
Lightning-Streaked Step B: A skill held by Melatha only. It was said that his flight was so fast that it generated bright flashes of light, which were lightning. Melatha naturally possesses this skill, causing his limbs to crackle with lightning, primarily his legs, which enhances the faster he moves. This lightning also ranks up his Speed. This serves as his primary method of offense.
Crackling Eggs B: A skill held by Heloha only. She dropped her eggs onto clouds in order to create the rumbling noise which is thunder. As a skill, this permits Heloha to utilize egg-shaped blasts of electricity and thunder towards her targets, rolling them before detonating them at her targets.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Omba Malvtha
And Thus Comes The Storm
Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Rank: B
Range: 0 meters
Max Targets: 1 targets
The two of them were primordial thunderbirds. As such, this noble phantasm serves as theirs. When the true name is called, one of them takes on their true thunderbird form. They both could at the same time, but it would require titanic amounts of mana, and so normally Melatha takes on the form if possible. In this form, the transformed one holds a constant storm around their wings, while massively increasing their physical statistics, with a caw like thunder. Despite them not holding the Riding skill, they are able to work together utilizing their Combination skill.
Lore: Heloha and Melatha were primeval thunderbirds from Choctaw mythology. In the legends, they were tasked with warning humanity about storms through their particular powers. Meletha held incredible speed, creating bursts of light, while Heloha's eggs, combined with clouds, could produce massive amounts of sound. Thus came lightning and thunder.
Personality: An affectionate and caring couple with each other. They are caring towards humanity as well, viewing them as akin to the duo's little nephews and nieces, as it were. However, they tend to not get along well with other non-human entities, especially those who dislike humanity. Their wish is to reincarnate.
Relationships:
Atkor Kamuy: "..Well, at least you somewhat care."
Cipactli: "No devouring humanity! Stop it!"
Nia Ngao Zhua Pa: "A lightning thread? How unique!"
Moni Mekhala: "Oh, another storm deity? Wow, there are a lot of us here. You're... thunder, lightning, or both?"
Creators Notes: Updated Corella! Also, that's an interesting idea, the whole sister river thing.
Challenge accepted. I knocked this up in a couple of days, so go gentle with the scathing criticisms.
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Avenger
“A land of men without countries, such is the sorry state of Britain now. The people do not endeavor towards greatness, but rather mire themselves in their petty strifes - few are they who would lay down their lives for a friend, let alone a king…”
True Name: Richard III
Epithet: “The Last of the Plantagenets”
AKA: Richard of York, Dickon
Region: England (15th Century)
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Likes: Order, Roses
Dislikes: Greed, Traitors
Talents: Administration, Oration
Natural Enemy: Henry VII
Parameters
STR: (C) END: (B) AGI: (C) MGI: (D) LCK: (E) NP: (C)
Character
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Relationships
Creator's Notes
As usual, all comments and criticisms are welcome~
"Here's a bangin lil' tune about takin' on The Man!"
(Check out my Super Special Awesome Servant Compendium here)
Richard III: I love the way you're so... Unabashedly old school, for a lack of a better term (I swear I say this with the ultimate amount of praise it deserve) and you make it work. You make us love this quality of yours. Like, there's really nothing out of norm with this sheet - it has straightforward character, straightforward skills that remind me of early FGO era, it has a straightforward NP (THAT'S SOMEHOW SO FITTING?? I WUV IT??) and yet... There's this charm behind every work, I guess one could even call it "love". Like, we're acquainted with a character in the end of the day, something that will stay with you like a lingering taste, not a one-note sheet and I think this is beautiful. My favorite favorite part has to be to come to the author's notes and see that it was inspired by The Hollow Crown tho... I swear I was thinking "mannn what a THC feeling this sheet has" the whole time. BUT OF COURSE IT DOES.
Also, in the end of the day it's just that. The last "generation" is up in their discord servers (GOOD FOR THEM I HAVE THE HONOR OF BEING IN ONE AND THEY'RE AMAZING), the "generation" I was in is currently busy with life and the new "generation" is yet finding their pace... Which for this time seems to be post sheet after sheet and wait magically for comments that won't even come if no one begins to be the change they want to see in the world... But that's life.
I know I need to post something if I want to have my name on the next milestone. It will be a shame if I lose another one because the thread moves SO fast.
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