So, I dunno if anyone cares, but I updated Izanami. Hopefully it's better than it originally was.
So, I dunno if anyone cares, but I updated Izanami. Hopefully it's better than it originally was.
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She does seem much more intimidating now. The fact that she leaves enemies behind after being defeated sound like it would be very hard to deal with.
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Fate / White Memoria
Imhotep: Pretty fun and creative sheet overall. She's definitely very powerful for a fairly obscure legend, but it does make sense given how much she's contributed to fields like medicine and architecture.
Her personality is quite well sketched out, with an interesting mix of cockiness and humility and her habit of referring to herself in the 3rd-person being an amusing quirk. I do feel that Item Construction at rank EX is a little excessive though. Being a legendary architect and craftswoman is one thing, but should she really have a higher rank than the likes of Archimedes whose names are practically synonymous with invention? Just A or A+ would probably be enough. I won't begrudge Territory Creation having the same rank since that comes from her NP and has the same justification as Semiramis' EX-ranked Territory Creation in canon, but that irked me a little.
Also, I think that Egypt Magecraft and High-Speed Divine Words are a little redundant together. Just one Skill to encapsulate her Magecraft abilities should be enough, especially since she has four other Skills already. I'm not sure whether a modern movie would really shape Imhotep's existence on the Throne enough to give her a Skill like Innocent Monster, but it makes for an amusing image and some funny reaction lines so I'll accept that.
Lastly, making the step pyramid a UFO based on popular conspiracy theories was a hilariously awesome idea. Kudos there.
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Class: Berserker
True Name: Yamata-no-Orochi
Gender: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Origin: Shinto Mythology
Strength: A++
Endurance: A++
Agility: D
Mana: A
Luck: E
Noble Phantasm: B
Class Skills
Mad Enhancement E+
The Class Skill that characterizes a Berserker, raising basic parameters and strengthens one's physical abilities in exchange for hindering mental capacities and/or in exchange for their sense of reason. In some cases, it also affects and/or seals away some techniques, Personal Skills and Noble Phantasms.
Normally does not receive the benefits of Mad Enhancement. In exchange, one retains a normal capacity to think. However, it is possible that this Skill has a negative effect on Orochi's temper.
Personal Skills
Monstrous Strength A+
Skill that temporarily grants a rank-up to one's Strength parameter for a time limit determined by the ranking of this Skill. It is borne from the holder's nature as a monster or Demonic Beast.
Breath of the Dragon B
The ability to release a torrent of mana like the breath of the dragons, the strongest of all Phantasmal Species.
Uniquely, the element of Orochi’s breath changes depending on which of his heads is using it. Each of his heads correspond with the elements of fire, water, earth, win, light, darkness, lightning, and poison.
Demon of Mutation A
A Skill that denotes how a hero or god was transformed into a demon in life. A Skill that considerably strengthens one's abilities as a Servant by emphasizing a fact from the past.
Orochi has achieved a rank of Strength and Endurance that is absolutely impossible for the human body. Orochi was originally the god of Mount Ibuki, but over time, his savagery gradually increased until he became a Demonic Beast.
Noble Phantasms
Yamata-no-OrochiRampage, Fallen God of Mount Ibuki
Rank: A
Type: Ant-Unit (Self)
A Noble Phantasm that allows Orochi to revert to his true form.
Orochi’s true form is a gigantic demonic serpent with eight heads and an eight-forked tail. Its body is said to be large enough to cover eight peaks and valley and its body is covered in moss and trees. Its eyes are a deep red and its body is inflamed and smeared with blood.
While in this form, Orochi’s power skyrockets while in this form, though its massive size makes him incredibly slow. Additionally, maintaining this form requires an astronomical amount of mana and most Masters will not be able to do so for long. However, that short amount of time is enough for Orochi to cause a large amount of death and destruction.
Ame-no-Murakumo-no-TsurugiGather, Clouds in the Heavens Above
Rank: C+
Type: Anti-Army
Range: 1~60
Maximum Number of Targets: 600
The sword that Susano-o found in Orochi’s tail while cutting him into pieces. In truth, it is a sword that Orochi had since before he fell to the level of a demon.
Upon True Name Release, a spiral of wind will begin to form around Murakumo, eventually forming a great tornado. When released, the length of the tornado’s path is determined by how much power was built up by then. At maximum power, it will carve a path of destruction through all that stands in its way.
However, there is a major drawback to this Noble Phantasm; the amount of mana required to use it is quite extreme. Additionally, the fact that it is a Divine Construct and Orochi is now a demon means that he cannot access its power as well as he once could. This is quite fortunate for everyone else, because there is no telling how much destruction Orochi would cause if he could tap into its full power.
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Personality:
Relationship:
Creator’s Notes:
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Have to say from the opening line I totally imagine Orochi being voiced by Galand's VA from Seven Deadly Sins. Guy does a great job playing those kinds of "cocky eat shit" monster type villains. The multiple voices echoing in unison part does sound like it'd make him an interesting character to voice. Tangents aside this is a pretty good sheet, though I don't have much to comment on since I already reviewed it over PM.
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Better indeed, now her role as a boss is fleshed out more and more terrifying as well. Well done.
As for Orochi, I think you should give him the Authority of water, because he is the embodiment of flood (to threaten Kushinada who is the goddess of rice fields). Raising water levels, causing heavy storms, floods...etc. or even cause drought by absorbing water from rivers. This might be useful for the LB setting, especially when combined with Izanami.
As a side note, after he died his soul turns into a stone called the snake stone (Hebiishi) that is still exist today, worship in Yamada shrine. Legend said that each year the stone becomes bigger bit by bit, eventually Orochi will return to life from it. So you can even let him have a line for Tamamo due to their similar death and make a self-revival NP out of it, making him a fearsome asset in the LB setting you posted.
It may be a bit too much, sometimes is not that good to cram every aspect of a legend in a sheet.
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Fate / White Memoria
I said the idea is for the LB setting tho? Since it's a Japan setting where everything aligns and from what I've read, his role is kinda not that important. A degraded god like this sheet went with obviously cannot utilize so many abilities, but it should be usable in a LB setting where he is working with Izanami. And I suggest you look back at Nasu's servant profiles, especially the JP servants lol. By far this is pretty lacking if you go by his standard. Heck not just JP servants, go check out Archimedes's profile in Extella Mats.
That Orachi sheet is pretty dope.
You make a fair argument on the Item Construction skill, I'll lower the rank on that one.
On the subject of her having both Egypt Magecraft and High-Speed Divine Words, I more or less got that idea from Nitocris' sheet who possesses both of those skills (while I was making Imhotep I looked at canon Egyptian Servants to get a general feel of how to make her). I'd argue that it would make sense that Imhotep would have both skills as well given she is a magus living within the age of Gods, is divine herself, and is/was a high priest. Not to mention, while uncommon it isn't exactly impossible for Servants to have more than four Personal Skills (Hassan of Serenity in FGO has five, and Karna in Apocrypha has five).
Anyway, thank you for the critique! I'm glad you enjoy the sheet. Also, I am really proud of the pyramid UFO idea. :v
That sounds cool. You could also combine his authority of flood with Kusanagi to create some kind of giant water-tornado.
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I guess that's fair enough. I just happen to think GO's use of certain Skills is needless padding for gameplay purposes, but I can't deny there is precedent in canon so whatever. Just a personal preference on my part.
Rider
"Servant Rider, Dr. Barnum Brown at your service! It is a pleasure to make your acquaintance!"
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True Name: Barnum Brown
Epithets: King of Paleontologists, The Bone Collector, Father of the Dinosaurs
Class: Rider
Alternate Classes:Caster, Assassin, Berserker
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Attribute: Man
Origin: Historical Fact — America (20th Century)
Likes: Finding fossils, women, dinosaurs, traveling
Dislikes: Lack of funding, turning up empty handed
Talent: Fossil hunting
Natural Enemy: Charles Sternberg
Armament: M1911
Traits: Humanoid, Male, Riding, Servant
Catalyst: An old beaver pelt coat
Parameters:
STR: E
END: B
AGI: D
MGI: C
LUK: B
NP: A
Personality
Lore
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RelationshipsCreator Notes
Last edited by TheLordOfAwesome; February 10th, 2020 at 04:14 PM.
Barnum Brown: He's a very fun character. Explosives (Excavation) is a nice ide,a I always enjoy skills that are not related to fighting but that become great assets for it in the context of a Servant, though I think that Rank is a bit high.
I love the small stuff like him giving Guda a Cryolophosaurus and his wish being able to see the fair (this being his wish was my first thought as soon as you mentioned it, good stuff).
I think you could do better with some stuff though. His womanizer personality is clashing with the story you tell on his biography, so maybe mention his love affairs? Just from the Bio, I would assume he wouldn't involve himself with anyone after the loss of his wife, but that's clearly not the case.
Also, his NP is really simple, really needs something to spice it up. Maybe play around with Fantasia or the Dinoland? Or with the concept of T. Rex being the most fearsome predator ever (to actually exist)? I think a regular animal ride seems barebones compared to current Servants.
Thanks for mentioning Dinosaur Fascination. Great to see people enjoying him so long after my post.
Edit: Actually, thinking about that concept of him being "the most fearsome predator that actually existed", the apex predator that's real, perhaps do the opposite of Astolfo's Hypogriff? It is able to phase in and out of reality because of the fact that it is a very vague, impossible existence. How about attacks from equally "improbable" creatures phasing in through the T. Rex, since they couldn't exist and therefore, can't affect a predator that does. This wouldn't give him a huge power-boost against most other Servants, but would make him a real threat against monsters and other Riders.
I don't know if this concept in particular is that great, but you get the idea.
Last edited by pinetree; January 29th, 2020 at 10:20 PM.
Thanks for the critique! I will admit, the sheet wasn't the most well planned out compared to Imhotep's, so this helps a lot in improving him!
The stuff about him being a womanizer is actually something factual about the man. It wasn't something I just made up, but you make a fair point about it. I'll include a bit about it so it doesn't feel out of nowhere.
I also really like the suggestion for the T. rex that you made! I think I can work with it so just hold on and I'll improve the sheet. Also, the idea of doing something with Fantasia and Dinoland have given me some ideas, so I may add a second NP to the mix.
And I just want to say that Dinosaur Fascination is a great sheet! As a huge dinosaur shill, it was a delight to read!
edit: Made the changes! Lowered the rank in Explosives and gave Barnum a second NP as well.
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Imhotep: Yes, good, I was in need of more waifus. Lovely sheet, a bit OP I feel but whatever, I love the UFO-Pyramid NP a lot tho.
Orochi: Why he only got three heads? Where the rest he heads at? Poor snakeman.
Lancer of the Furioso
"Servant Lancer, Roland of the Twelve Paladins of Charlemagne, at your service. Hm? What's that? My clothes seem a little too big? Nonsense. It must have been your imagination."
Source
Class: Lancer
Other Classes: Saber, Rider
True Name: Roland (?)
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: Scotland, Orlando Furioso
Parameters:
STR: B
END: C
AGI: A
MGI: B
LCK: D
NP: B
Likes: Chivalry, a certain French paladin, a certain Spanish princess
Dislikes: Thieves, not repaying his debts
Talent: Jousting, politics
Natural Enemy: Mandricardo
Armament: Durendal, his horse
Catalyst: Fragments of the Durendal
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm(s)
Description
LoreRelationships
Creator's Notes
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Hmm... For some reason Cao Cao's name always pops in my head when thinking of a Darnic Pseudo-Servant, but I'm not completely sure if he'd be a good fit or not.
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