Create-A-Servant 3

[Serra]

I don't have much prior experience with Fate (long story but it's mostly reading crossover fanfic involving Bazett, watching all 6 hours of Camelot cutscenes from F:GO, listening to people who actually know Fate well talking about it a bunch, jumping through the wiki, and having been linked to this thread a bunch of times) so let's see if I made anything passable, hahaha.

Class: Caster

Other Classes: Saber, Rider

Appearance

Source: Official art from Atelier Lydie & Suelle: The Alchemists and the Mysterious Paintings

True Name: Maugis d’Aigremont

Alignment: Chaotic Good

Source: The Matter of France (?)

Place of Origin: Aigremont, France

Parameters

STR: D

END: D

AGI: C

MGI: A

LCK: B

NP: A+

Height: 171 centimetres

Weight: 60 kilograms

Likes: Pranks and relaxation

Dislikes: Friend groups being torn apart

Talent: Making a fool out of anyone

Natural Enemy: Sorgolant

Attribute: Earth

Armament: Book

Catalyst: A surviving fragment of their Book of Spirits

Class Skills

Item Creation —

For Caster, this skill has been sealed due to shift of the focus of their magic towards their summoning-based Noble Phantasm after they acquired it.

Territory Creation B

Caster’s sanctum was located in a cave in the middle of impregnable mountains. This skill allows its recreation.

Personal Skills

Riding B-

Caster has been able to ride the legendary horse Bayard, but has given him to Renaud. As such, their rank in this skill, which would have normally been higher thanks to Bayard’s own exceptional nature and their expert teamwork, is effectively lower when summoned in this Class.

Clairvoyance B+

Caster can spontaneously see more than 700 years in the future, though their divination is very hard to control and does not necessarily always provide the whole picture, usually rather focusing on either very minute details or quite vague broad strokes, if not both at once: neither the details nor the broad strokes are guaranteed to always be relevant to Caster’s present, at that. As long as they have their Book, Caster’s foresight is passively enhanced in the extremely short term during combat, usually by just enough to react to feints or attacks they would have not seen coming otherwise.

Illusionism A--

This skill was taught to Caster by the fairy Oriande, and its efficacy is not affected by whether Caster is holding the Book of Spirits or not. Caster’s illusions are tangible, visible, audible, and can be smelled or tasted. However, Caster’s illusions cannot cause physical harm to any Servant or Master. They would be able to manifest an entire village, but operating on such a scale for them would take nearly one night. They’re also adept enough in illusionism that, with access to enough mana, they could momentarily replicate the Presence Concealment skill of an equivalent rank even on the fly: however, the drop in ranks that occurs when one prepares to attack is much sharper with this simulated version than it is with actual Presence Concealment, and it cannot be maintained at all in the moment in which one’s attack connects with the enemy. In general, among Caster’s skills, this is generally the one that requires the most mana consumption other than their Noble Phantasm. Moreover, it’s the one most likely to show up across all different versions of them that were summoned with another Class.

Summoning C+

Caster can forcibly cause humans, animals, and objects to be possessed by demons. However, demons deployed this way without the usage of the Book of Spirits are merely neutral to them, rather than under their command, and even if they do have the Book, their control over the demons remains imperfect, subordinate to the desire of the demons to use their newfound body to cause short-term chaos. Certain particularly strong minds may require more than one demon’s strength to be overpowered, but no more than one demon can possess each target unless Caster has the Book, and several demons within one target may quarrel with one another.

Following a very similar process as the one with which they can induce demonic possession, Caster can induce sleep into humans, animals, and objects (in which it translates to momentarily stopping mechanisms without breaking them and the like, and inducing sleep in any who eat or drink the object). However, there are a few key differences. The spirits stuffed into the target will not attempt to cause chaos, and will not quarrel between themselves if multiple are assigned to one particularly strong-minded target (something Caster can only do if they have the Book); on the flipside, these spirits can’t ever be commanded to do anything rather than cause sleep, and casting this spell takes more time than inducing demonic possession, to the point that it’s usually pretty much unfeasible to cast it after Caster has already got involved in a fight. It’s possible to wake others up from this magically induced sleep in any way one can wake others up from regular deep sleep, causing the spirits to flee.

Noble Phantasm

Libro de li Spirti: The Book of Spirits

Type: Anti-Army

Rank: A+

Range: 1~99

Max Targets: —

Caster can summon more than twice as many demons armed with lances as France had soldiers in Charlemagne’s time. Any amount of them can also be summoned in the form of a horse.

Caster can also summon a demonic birdlike creature, black-feathered, with a beak thrice as long as your average arm and sail-like patagia like a bat’s wings: this beast is able to carry them in flight and aid them in combat.

Lastly, though only within the confines of the Territory created by Caster (or, under special circumstances, other willing Servants), the Book can be used to talk to invisible forces in general about the present and past: effectively, it comes with an intelligence network; these are actual real-time conversations, though; they take up time, they do not grant omniscience, and in certain cases are limited by the invisible forces’ own ignorance.

If the Book is somehow taken away from Caster, this weakens several of Caster’s other skills as well as a consequence; typically, even if taken away, the Book cannot be employed with the same efficiency by an opposing Heroic Spirit, even by another Caster, unless they already specialise in a similar kind of summoning magic.

Lore

Originally the child of the ruler of Aigremont, Caster was kidnapped as an infant, but their captor was slain by wild animals who left them unharmed. Caster was then picked up and brought up as a sorcerer-knight by the fairy Oriande. Their twin underwent a similar fate, but wasn’t found by Oriande, rather by someone else.

Caster would often end up aiding Charlemagne and his Paladins. There were a few occasions in which Caster was opposed to Charlemagne: for example, Caster once unsuccessfully fought on the side of their grandfather, who had risen up against Charlemagne, and later fought on the side of their cousin Renaud, himself one of the Twelve Paladins of Charlemagne, against his liege until a compromise was reached.

There are rumours of Caster having been a hermit for a time, as well as a Senator in Rome somehow.

Caster had the magical sword Froberge and the magical horse Bayard for a time, and eventually gave them to Renaud. Even so, not just Renaud, but they, too, would have been able to harness Froberge and Bayard as Noble Phantasms if summoned in the appropriate Class (respectively as a Saber and as a Rider), in exchange of not being able to access their Book of Spirits.

Personality

Caster seldom hesitates to mock anyone, whatever their rank or status might be, over even the littlest things, but typically does so with the same calm, light-hearted, laid-back attitude they reserve for most things in life. They constantly think up scheme after scheme, most of them amounting to pranks or little more, to keep everyone entertained. That said, when the time comes, they can be a great advisor and listener, and when they’re actually invested in a plot of real importance, they will handle it with their utmost care and become able to terrify even the bravest.

Notes

The Book of Spirits, as well as Maugis’s demon summoning abilities in general, are actually a characteristic typical of Italian epic poems involving the character, such as the Orlando Innamorato and the Orlando Furioso – hence the usage of an Italian expression for the name of the Noble Phantasm, rather than of a French one, and of the (?) in the ‘Source’ section, especially given that they come from a far later period than the Matter of France on which they’re based; there would have been no (?) in the ‘Source’ section if this sheet was for Maugis as a Saber with Froberge or a Rider with Bayard.

Sorgolant, the one I put down as Natural Enemy, is the adoptive father of Maugis’s twin; Maugis learns the truth of their lineage while slaying Sorgolant in battle; I didn’t want to weigh the bio up too much by giving follow-ups on that section, though, especially considering how many versions of these characters exist; still, it felt like the closest thing to a ‘destined foe’ I could pick for Maugis for that slot of the sheet.

[RoydGolden]

Maugris: I wrote a sheet for his cousin Renaud a while back so nice to see this guy here. Overall for your first sheet you included a nice amount of detail to make it entertaining to imagine. His NP could've easily been kind of boring being just a spellbook that bolsters his demon-summoning Magecraft but details like the freaky bird creature help it stand out more.

I do feel like Possession Inducement and Sleep Inducement are maybe a bit unnecessary as Skills. Since both come from stuffing spirits into things you could've just given him a broader Summoning Skill and mentioned some feats he's capable with it. Not like Casters normally have everything special they can do with their Magecraft get a unique Skill...

Also, with respect to the criteria you outlined for a FC, this fits everything except the "without a weapon" part unfortunately. Maybe consider it?

[Morg van Destro]

Sir Thomas Malory: I'm surprised he didn't have a single word for EMIYA. My Vortigern Pendragon might also throw him for a loop.
Having read so much of what he's written by this point, I can definitely see where you got the personality and beliefs from. What the dude considered 'heroic' is not necessarily what I would always define as such. I remember all the justifications he gave for the knights actions when I was researching Tor, and most of them were like "But they were bad people or it had to be done so it's okay". It's part of the reason I took Tor in another direction and made it seem obvious Malory tweaked things to make him more 'heroic'. I like him, even if he's a bit of a tool.
Coincidently, my next Arthurian exists partially because of Malory, so that'll be interesting

Maugis d’Aigremont: A good first go that gets right to the point. Let's see how you develop as we go forward.

[Frigix]

Caster of Petrification


Source

Class: Caster
True Name: Ursula Southeil
Alignment: True Neutral
Attribute: Earth
Origin: Historical Facts / English Folklore

Parameters:

STR: D
END: C
AGI: E
MAG: A
LCK: B
NP: A

Likes: Euclidia mi, tea, humans
Dislikes: Her own existence
Talent: Prophesy, witchcraft

Class Skills

Territory Creation (A)

Territory Creation is a Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana.

At this rank, creation of a "Temple", which is superior to a "Workshop", becomes possible.

In Ursula's case the territory is a recreation of the "Mother Shipton's Cave", rather than a Temple it’s a cave, yet it’s still an excellent mage territory. When someone enters her cave without her permission he will be turned to stone or paralyzed, a powerful magecraft only stopped by a C ranked Magic Resistance.

"Isn't it a nice house? Hum? You don't like it? Come on, don't be picky it's pretty comfy... I think? I don't really care about this sort of stuff to be honest. I might have a different opinion if my body needed to sleep though. Well anyway, come inside, I'll make you some tea~!"

Item Construction (B)

Item Construction is a Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. Also, this Skill requires time to gather components and manufacture items.

Ursula is an expert in potions and medicines creation, she can make many quality magical products. Just ask her and she can create a love filter or even a powerful poison! Ursula isn’t called a witch for nothing.

Personal Skills

Clairvoyance (EX)

Clairvoyance is a visual ability that is also called Hawkeye. This is generally a must-have ability of the Archer class. It is also frequently used during scouting. Simply looking from a high location is sufficient to fully survey a town and search for enemies. In addition, Clairvoyance will affect the accuracy of bows. It connotes superior visual perception and dynamic occipital capture, such as to supplement the long-range aiming of projectile weapons. At higher ranks, it is possible that the bearers of this Skill have acquired abilities such as precognition ("future vision") and other forms of perception beyond standard eyesight (X-ray vision and so forth) - this is also considered a prerequisite for being a Grand Caster. It is a Skill furnished on the flesh.

Mother Shipton made predictions in the 1500s England of important historical events which turned out true as she predicted. She is one of the first clairvoyants known in the world of divinatory arts. Unlike many other seers such as Nostradamus, the success rate of her predictions was extremely high, after all she possesses excellent Clairvoyance enabling her to see all of the future but also all of the present and past.

"Oh my, your death is quite hilarious! Oops, I may have said too much. Forget about it, you'll live a happy life! Well maybe not, but try staying positive okay? Your fate won't change anyway."

Witchcraft (A+)

Witchcraft is a Skill that signifies one as a practitioner of Witchcraft. This magecraft has roots in both the eastern and western worlds.

Her style of Witchcraft is the classical western Witchcraft, of which she excels at. It has varied uses, like returning the favor multiplied to those who hurt oneself, sowing discord upon personal relationships, or giving nightmares using succubi. It's difficult for the average magus to resist it.

"I can curse you if you don't behave. But don't worry, as long as you'll stay a good child I'll show you some funny magic tricks!"

Mixed-Blood (EX)

Mixed-Blood indicates that the blood of something inhuman is mixed in with that of a human.

Legend has it that Ursula is the daughter of Satan, the devil himself. The truth is, she is the result of a much stranger and unusual union. Her father, if you can call him that, is an alien creature that is not from this world, an entity that is found in the 6th imaginary aspect, a daemon. The result is a strange creature, a woman with a feminine appearance but who is in every way inhuman. She is something that should not exist. Daemons aren’t born by reproduction, they exist to empathize and solve the suffering of mankind. She is a mistake, an imperfect existence. Neither human nor daemon, superior to humanity but inferior to daemon.

A consequence of her mixed blood is that she is a fundamentally empty entity, she doesn't feel emotions. She was not born to fulfill someone's desire but rather is the result of the fulfillment of a desire. She’s a daemon that does not possess any of their distinguishing features which is their empathy and desire to help humanity. An error that shouldn't exist.

Ursula perceives the world in a different way, indeed it seems that by her inhuman nature she has developed the ability to observe humanity in the past, present and future. The ability to see the mores and problems of humanity in order to be able to satisfy them no matter the moment, however for Ursula who’s not a real daemon, this skill is useless. Clairvoyance is limited by the existence of humanity, it cannot see past or future where humanity does not exist, nor can it observe the inhuman.

"I don't understand. I genuinely don't understand humanity. But still, I find it beautiful. Yes, there is without a doubt beauty in your meaningless existence. I wish I could be the same, but sadly I'm neither a daemon nor a human. I'm just a wish granting machine without someone to grant a wish. I'm a broken monster."

Familiar (Butterfly) (D)

Familiar (Butterfly) allows the use of butterflies as familiars.

To be more precise the butterflies on which Ursula relied on to create these familiars are Euclidia mi also called Mother Shipton Moth.

"Well, well... Aren't my butterflies cute? Do you know why they are named after me? People say that they can see my face in their wings. I find it a bit mean, come on I don't look like that old hag. Well, I guess it fits the descriptions of a witch, so they associated it to me... But still, don't you find it a bit annoying that all witches must look like old women?"

Noble Phantasm(s)

Stone King and Stone Knights
Whispering Knights

"I’m bored, let's play a game okay? You see, I’m pretty clever so I think I might be able to test your mind with a little test~! Oh and let’s make it more interesting, if you lose I’ll turn you into stone!"

Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C

A king riding the county with his army was once approached by a local witch named Mother Shipton and was turned into stone with his army after failing her test. It’s a minor Noble Phantasm derived from the many legends where Ursula turns people into stone. Although originally a magecraft, its nature was strengthened to be much more effective as a crystallization of the petrification legends.

Individuals with a Magic Resistance ranked below C will be petrified, even at rank C they can be petrified if they do not pay enough attention. Ursula can turn off the effects of Whispering Knights if she wishes but the individual will also turn back to normal if she moves too far away from the statue.

Book of Future Knowledge
The Life and Prophecies of Ursula Sontheil better known as Mother Shipton

"Hum? You want to know your future? Now, now, mother Shipton is a bit busy. Just check this book, it’ll do a better job, trust me~"

Type: Anti-Fate
Rank: C++

The Life and Prophecies of Ursula Sontheil better known as Mother Shipton is the book compiling all the predictions of Ursula Southeil. Taking the form of a Noble Phantasm which predicts destiny, it allows the user to see the desired future. A Noble Phantasm totally useless for Ursula who already possesses a far more effective and precise Clairvoyance. But the book can be useful for others who do not possess divinatory abilities.

Thus even a mage would be able to see the desired future written in the book and thus undo even destiny. However the predictions are written in the form of strange poems. In consequences, the predictions can be a little bit too vague… Asking Ursula directly is a much more efficient method to know the future.

Lore

Once upon a time, a woman named Agatha Southeil lived in despair. Coming from a poor background and living in misery, she felt incredibly alone in these difficult times. She had only one desire, to have a child. A person who will keep her company, and whom she can take care of. Agatha would then have a goal, to take care of a child, she preferred that than to live an aimless and senseless life. Unfortunately the woman was sterile and couldn't bear a child. To make her dream come true, she was even ready to make a deal with the devil. It was then that a daemon appeared, and offered her what she wanted. Agatha fell pregnant, the demon had granted her wish... But at what cost?

Ursula Southeil was born in the year 1488 in England. Little Ursula was therefore born in miserable conditions after the union between Agatha Southeil and the unknown daemon. Agatha succeeds in having her daughter baptized by Father Beverly, despite local opposition. He was not from her ward and he traveled many miles to do this baptism. Agatha left her two-year-old daughter in charge of the parish, then she retired to a convent where she will remain until the end of her life, not being able to bear the idea of having given birth to a demon.

One day, while working outside, Ursula's nanny heard screams. She tried to enter the house but an invisible force prevented her. She asked her neighbors for help, but they couldn't get in either. A priest managed to calm everyone down, fight the invisible force and enter the house. He then found the cradle empty, and little Ursula, naked, smiling and sitting on the ground. Ursula wasn’t a normal child. She was clever, she learned to read and write much faster than other children her age. From her father she had obtained a high level Clairvoyance allowing her to see all of the past, present and future. And it didn't take long for her to realize that she wasn't human, she was unable to empathize with other kids of her age, everything was so bland to her. They called her a witch, the devil's child, they said she was very intelligent and malicious: she was frightening. It was claimed that she could take revenge on those who made fun of her physical appearance. Ursula did not understand the fear of others. But their feelings... She envied them, she wished she could feel them. Having emotions seemed a lot more interesting than being an empty creature.

A carpenter, Toby Shipton, proposed to her, she was 24 and agreed. Perhaps she was hoping a marriage could give her human feelings, though unlikely she was willing to give it a try. After her marriage, she was nicknamed "Mother Shipton". They never had children because Toby died a few years after their marriage. Ursula was incredibly disappointed not to feel any sadness, this experience had been a failure.

Using her clairvoyance, she decided one day to make predictions to humans, which made her feared and know more. It wasn't long before her reputation as a clairvoyant spread throughout England and Europe, crowds of people flocking to hear her prophetic words. She was then honored and esteemed by those around her. Then tired of living an empty, meaningless and totally boring existence... She decided to end her life. Ursula was neither human nor a daemon. From the start she was a creature that was not meant to live in this world, it makes sense that when realizing the mistake that she was, she decides to kill herself.

"That's what you humans would call "suicide" right? But I don't think is has the same meaning with me. I'm not human. I wasn't supposed to live in the first place. Would you let a child without eyes, hears and limbs live? It just wouldn't work. The same can be said about me, I'm not made to live in this world."

Personality

Ursula is not human, she has inhuman blood within her, the blood of a creature who responds to the sufferings of humanity. But she herself does not respond to the sufferings of humanity, unlike her father she was not born to solve a problem. She has no purpose in this world, she feels no emotion, all she does is live without any specific purpose.

All she could do was observe humans, their love, their hate. Ursula observed humanity, present as well as past or future, she saw their stupidity, their intelligence. She saw humanity, and she felt envy. Ursula envies humanity's ability not to have specific goals, to be able to be happy without being useful.

Ursula desires to have a function, she is fundamentally a creature based on an entity that exists to help men. Losing this goal, she desperately seeks a function in this world, a goal that she will never be able to achieve due to her nature. That's why she envies humans who exist without specific goals, she admires their meaningless existence.

Her wish for the Grail would be to become human.

Although unable to sense human emotions, she is able to imitate them. After all, she has watched all of human history. She then tries to be a nice woman and always very calm. A woman who knows what she is doing and who can be very serious although she does not hesitate to make sometimes questionable jokes.

"As you know, I can see the past. And you won't believe what I saw of you! Did you know you were adopted? You poor thing, your parents died because they didn't know they weren't supposed to enter the shark aquarium..."

"..."

"Well I'm joking of course! Ha ha!"

"..."

"Hey, why are you looking at me like that? Do you want to be changed into stone? Or maybe you would like to have your entire bloodline cursed to die in a shark aquarium? You don't right? So laugh at my joke."

Relationships

Merlin:
"Oh my, we look a lot alike, don't we? Well, at least you seem to have found a meaning in your life. Come drink tea with me when you have time. It's not every day i find a fellow EX ranked Clairvoyance user~!"

Solomon:
"A human with this kind of Clairvoyance... I always wondered how it would work! You don't look too much like a human, but still you're without a doubt one. Oh and I see you have daemons as familiars! Ha! Until the end they stay servants to humans."

Creator's Notes, Fun Facts and stuff

I'll start with reminding you that I'm not english, so if you see any grammatical mistake, do not hesitate to point it out to me.

As for the sheet in itself, I tried to do something with daemons. I tought the legend saying that her father is satan was a very cool thing so I wanted to put it in the sheet. But as we know, nasu tends not to give us to much information on anything god related so I didn't want to straight off put satan. But I also didn't want to do like Merlin and replace satan by an incubus. As a result I decided to make her father a daemon. The problem is it doesn't seem like there is much information about them. I struggled to find information on daemons, so I'm really, really unsure about what I did. I doubt a daemon can have a child with a human or something from earth. But for the sake of my sheet I made it so that it became exceptionally possible because it was made to fulfill a wish. So to me deamon can't really procreate, but because of the wish of Agatha the daemon developped the power to do so.

But anyway, I like the idea I had for this whole sheet and I think it made a genuinely interesting character. But I have no clue if it works in the nasuverse, for some reason I have the feeling I wrote something totally wrong. So I would be really glad if someone pointed to me any mistakes or dumb stuff I put in this sheet.

[BnEl15]

Sir Thomas Malory: I'm surprised he didn't have a single word for EMIYA. My Vortigern Pendragon might also throw him for a loop.
Having read so much of what he's written by this point, I can definitely see where you got the personality and beliefs from. What the dude considered 'heroic' is not necessarily what I would always define as such. I remember all the justifications he gave for the knights actions when I was researching Tor, and most of them were like "But they were bad people or it had to be done so it's okay". It's part of the reason I took Tor in another direction and made it seem obvious Malory tweaked things to make him more 'heroic'. I like him, even if he's a bit of a tool.
Coincidently, my next Arthurian exists partially because of Malory, so that'll be interesting

I get where you're coming from. The guy had some valid ideas of chivalry and heroism, sure, but he occasionally justified less-than-heroic actions by saying "they deserved it" or "it was meant to be", even if said actions can be misguided or wholly disproportionate. That example with Tor is on point; reminiscent of how he wanted someone to save him in prison, his best definition of heroes basically amount to tools who would willingly sacrifice themselves without a second thought for the sake of the "greater good".

On another note, he would probably start out treating your Vortigern(s) as enemies since they are enemies of Arthur. Overtime, however, he would perform this mental gymnastic where without a great evil like Vortigern to overcome, Arthur probably wouldn't have become as famous as he is now, so Vortigern basically served as a "sacrifice" the same way Lancelot did. This raises another interesting question: would Malory be willing to create some terrible villain in order to make a hero "shine even brighter"? Who knows, maybe he would, in some specific scenarios. Definitely watch your back around him.

[Morg van Destro]

This raises another interesting question: would Malory be willing to create some terrible villain in order to make a hero "shine even brighter"? Who knows, maybe he would, in some specific scenarios. Definitely watch your back around him.

I got a chill up my back from that thought. Reminds me of my sister's story where she made a Chaotic Good main villain. You honestly kinda root for him, and he has charisma in spades. He plays the protags and actually basically succeeds and escapes, impacting the world in ways to be explored later. Guy pretty much did what you said, except it was all in the name of making a "better world" rather than an "ideal hero".
Nothing worries me more than the phrase "for the greater good".

[Serra]

Maugris: I wrote a sheet for his cousin Renaud a while back so nice to see this guy here. Overall for your first sheet you included a nice amount of detail to make it entertaining to imagine. His NP could've easily been kind of boring being just a spellbook that bolsters his demon-summoning Magecraft but details like the freaky bird creature help it stand out more.

I do feel like Possession Inducement and Sleep Inducement are maybe a bit unnecessary as Skills. Since both come from stuffing spirits into things you could've just given him a broader Summoning Skill and mentioned some feats he's capable with it. Not like Casters normally have everything special they can do with their Magecraft get a unique Skill...

Also, with respect to the criteria you outlined for a FC, this fits everything except the "without a weapon" part unfortunately. Maybe consider it?

Thank you! Some of the details I filled in on my own (for example the fact that the sleep inducement worked by roughly the same principles as the possession inducement, and that you could stuff multiple spirits or demons inside the same thing or send objects to sleep) but a lot of them were already in the original texts. The bird's actually a pretty fun case because on a few occasions Maugis is described as flying on a demon, without much more elaboration, and then there's one place in the Orlando Furioso where that bird shows up (canto 33) and the author, Ariosto, describes it in detail and then iirc pretty much goes 'Yeah so that sure seems like something that Maugis would've summoned to help the Paladins in their battle the previous day, alright, and Renaud thought so, too, but it tried to snatch Renaud's lost horse Bayard from under his nose and Bayard fought back and ran away to leave the bird behind, so Renaud chewed Maugis out before giving chase, whereas Maugis swore up and down that it wasn't his demon-bird thing, and who am I to tell anyway?'

I took a look at the Renaud sheet: I'm not an expert at evaluating these but I liked it! The two fountains in particular were represented in a very cool way, and the Castle has an interesting drawback that I feel could be pretty fun in a story involving that Servant.

Yeah, Sleep Inducement and Possession Inducement could probably be unified. The Skill name 'Summoning' might cause a bit of confusion with Maugis's Noble Phantasm, but it's probably a good move anyway. I think I'll make the edit soon.

I had also found that image, but the main thing stopping me from using it is that I feel it could be really, really good for a Lancer at some point down the line

Maugis d’Aigremont: A good first go that gets right to the point. Let's see how you develop as we go forward.

Thanks! My next few ideas might end up being a bit worse than Maugis's sheet since that's the idea to which I was attached the most, but hopefully they'll still be enjoyable!

[DelRey]

Malory: Really interesting. BUT no interaction with your Demon? His NP really make him "Watcher-y" without being fully fledged to be one. Being summoned by Laplace's Demon makes total sense, but I hoped to see an interaction between those two, because Malory's NP and Demon's personality kinda clash, don't you think? His NP is really interesting and I really do hope to see your Caster in some kind of Sg or even Lostbelt. And where is the interaction with the legendary Morg van Destro? The second coming of Malory?

Maugris: nothing to be added that wasnt already said

Ursula: just a reminder, chat, dont drink her tea. I personally think for a person of her standing she seems too strong. Her ability to turn others into stone except those with Age of Gods level Magic Resistance for a 15/16th century Spirit and her having EX clairvoyance is just too big of a deal. Else the backstory is fine

[BnEl15]

Malory: Really interesting. BUT no interaction with your Demon? His NP really make him "Watcher-y" without being fully fledged to be one. Being summoned by Laplace's Demon makes total sense, but I hoped to see an interaction between those two, because Malory's NP and Demon's personality kinda clash, don't you think? His NP is really interesting and I really do hope to see your Caster in some kind of Sg or even Lostbelt. And where is the interaction with the legendary Morg van Destro? The second coming of Malory?

Good point about the Demon. While their NPs and characters don't completely clash, having someone who wants to grant unpredictable freedom to humanity interact with someone who wants to force them to fit a certain narrative of heroism would be interesting to see, either as friendly rivals or complete archenemies. Maybe Malory would use his NP and the two of them would make bets on whether the targets would reject or carry out their established roles until the end?

Also Morg as Watcher!Malory pseudo when

[Frigix]

Ursula: just a reminder, chat, dont drink her tea. I personally think for a person of her standing she seems too strong. Her ability to turn others into stone except those with Age of Gods level Magic Resistance for a 15/16th century Spirit and her having EX clairvoyance is just too big of a deal. Else the backstory is fine

Yeah, for her ability to tun peoples into stone, I initially intended for servant having a C ranked Magic Resistance to resist it but I tough it was a little weak for a NP so I made it stronger. I'll change that to put back C. As for the EX clairvoyance, while I understand that a 15/16th century shouldn't have this kind of power, I think that being the daughter of a higher form of existence is a good enough excuse.


Anyway, thanks for the review, I appreciate it thanks.

[Morg van Destro]

Also Morg as Watcher!Malory pseudo when

You want me to be possessed?! I'm already crazy enough as it is. I don't need an additional voice running through my head.

[DelRey]

Faker Morg, acting like he is Watcher!Malory pseudo

[Kabalisto Koga]

Good point about the Demon. While their NPs and characters don't completely clash, having someone who wants to grant unpredictable freedom to humanity interact with someone who wants to force them to fit a certain narrative of heroism would be interesting to see, either as friendly rivals or complete archenemies. Maybe Malory would use his NP and the two of them would make bets on whether the targets would reject or carry out their established roles until the end?

Also Morg as Watcher!Malory pseudo when

You want me to be possessed?! I'm already crazy enough as it is. I don't need an additional voice running through my head.

i was somedays not here ,but if i see this got i several questions !?

But okay maybe do i make Berserker or Caster Koga perhaps?

[Morg van Destro]

This one's for you, Gen.

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The ribbon tightens its hold on Ritsuka as the girl leers at him, a deep scowl and glare unbefitting her young face directed at the kneeling master.

How dare you, you pathetic human! You think you can call and command me?! You have no right! You never did!

The ribbon further encloses on him, cutting off his airways and leaving him unable to breathe.

You will be the first! You will...

The door opens, and another ribbon whips out and wraps around the girl, forcing her arms to her sides.

Who...!

That's enough, Mila!

First Lady walks into the room, the other end of the ribbon firmly grasped in her hand.

Release my master now!

The girl stares in utter shock at the Servant. The dark ribbon around Ritsuka slowly slackens, allowing him to breathe once more as it returns to its bound wielder still fixated on First Lady.

A... Alina?


Source
Class: Avenger
Other Classes: Lancer, Berserker
True Name: Mila
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Place of Origin: [ERROR]
Height: 163 cm.
Weight: 58 kilo.
Likes: Alina.
Dislikes: Humanity. Inability to take responsibility.
Natural Enemy: First lady

Parameters:
STR: B
END: A
AGI: B
MGI: C
LCK: E
NP: A+

Class Skills:
Avenger (A):
Resentment, pain, and failure. They hurl their insults and burdens on all but themselves. Pathetic creatures, humans.

This Skill could also be seen as an extension of her own psychic powers of reading and absorbing the emotions of others. While she gains power from pain, she gains much more from the hatred and other emotions she leeches from others.

Oblivion Correction (B):
How could she forget all the horror, the evil mankind inflicted on her and others? More so, how dare they forget those who shoulder that evil? From the forgotten corner of their minds, she strikes without mercy.

Self-Replenishment (Mana) (B):
“They caused this. They wanted it all to disappear. They tossed it all on her. They’re horrible. Monsters! They don’t deserve her! We never deserved her!”

Personal Skills:
First Lady (Corrupted) (A):
As the name implies, this corrupted version of the Skill allows Avenger access to every power and weapon that was ever possessed by a magical girl that fell to corruption similar to herself. While their numbers are fewer, the break within them tends to remove whatever limiters they possessed, allowing them to fight with greater power often at the cost of personal destruction, something she can use.

Hero Corruption (EX):
Similar to the Skill possessed by a certain Avenger, this is the ability to corrupt other beings and bend them to her whims. Unlike the other’s, this one has enhanced effectiveness against heroes and anti-heroes while being unable to corrupt normal people.

Mental Pollution (A):
Formed from her descent into being an enemy of humanity, this Skill represents the break in her psyche that forced her closest friend to kill her. Almost all mental interference is negated, and mutual understanding with any human even with an equivocal rank in the Skill is categorically impossible.

Noble Phantasm
Voile de Deuil: Veil of Mourning (EX)
Anti-Magical Girl
A living ribbon that drains the mana of anything that touches it and can even restrain extremely powerful Servants.

The prototype for all Magical Girl cloth weapons (there are more than you think) as well as Avenger’s primary weapon, Voile de Deuil is a ribbon of indeterminate length that wraps around and restrains targets, siphoning magical energy from them the moment it makes contact. While already strong enough to even hold powerful Servants, it uses the siphoned energy to further strengthen itself, making the target its power source. However, while it can only hold one target at a time, it can be used like a whip otherwise, stealing energy with every strike and even moving to her whims.

The reason for its typing is not because it only affects Magical Girls, but because it represents the antithesis of Magical Girls: oppression and conformism stripping away freedom, meaning power.

Were she summoned in her Lily form, the name and effects of this Noble Phantasm would be different.

Mila: Enemy of Humanity (A+)
Anti-Self
The culmination of her own corruption, the collection of hatred that caused it, and her psychic powers as one. Similar to the Avenger Skill in collecting the pain and hatred inflected on her to increase her strength, this Noble Phantasm uses them to empower the concept of her being an “Enemy of Humanity”.

The effect of this Noble Phantasm is an exponential increase in damage to all humans or those with human attributes. The more she gains, the more effects that are added, such as rising levels of intimidation, inflicting multiple debilitating statuses and mental interference, and an increase in all Parameters.

The other side of this power is the continual loss of humanity for Avenger, degrading her into something no longer human but not quite a beast or demon. Were she to reach the pinnacle of this Noble Phantasm’s power, she would become an existence rivaling even Primate Murder and ORT in her ability to kill humans, even if she doesn’t quite reach them in terms of overall power.

Lore

Mila was not a girl with a healthy childhood. Her mother dying in childbirth and her father blaming her from the beginning, Mila was always aware of the darker parts of humanity. Beyond that, she seemed to be able to ‘read’ people’s emotions like they were laid bare before her. Using this inherent skill, she worked to make herself invisible, avoiding others. However, this just made her a target for bullying and further ostracization.

She was always forewarned when her father or others were angry at her or others. She trained herself to placate them for the sake of avoiding further harm at their hands. All she did was try to keep her head down and fade into the background. At least that way, they might ignore her.

That was… until she met her.

She shone as bright as the sun. Confident, proud, strong, and graceful. Able to do whatever she wanted simply because she could. Brimming with every single thing Mila herself didn’t possess, and more genuine than anyone she ever met. And yet, this girl looked at her. This girl saw her. For the first time, she felt… important.

Alina became her first friend. She encouraged her to come out of her shell, helping to build her confidence and become… well, herself. She was like an idol for Mila. She was everything she aspired to be.

Yet, as Mila spent more time with her, she realized just how much Alina was restraining herself. Alina showed her what she was capable of, but she still acted like she was just like everyone else. This actually only served to further raise her in Mila’s eyes. All that strength, all that power, and she still treated Mila like an equal. Like a friend. How could she not admire her?

Then, the monsters attacked, and everything changed.

Suddenly, everyone else was able to see what Mila already knew. Alina faced them alone, defeating them with power beyond humanity. When she was finished, Mila could see it on her face as the people cheered for her. She was the happiest she had ever seen her.

If only it could have lasted.

Mila watched Alina continued defeating threat after threat, each time becoming truly dazzled the power she put on display and all she could accomplish with it. However, she also saw how the others reacted to her. Whether it was fear of what she was capable of or anger at her inability to be everywhere at once to protect their loved ones or property. Mila could even see it beyond what everyone else or even Alina did. Such darkness.

But Alina took it in stride. She took it all equally, their praise and ridicule, and bore it with a smile. Mila saw past it though. She saw just how greatly it weighed on her. It was amazing how well she carried it, but Mila was afraid that something like that would destroy her. She couldn’t just stand by and watch her slowly lose herself. To lose the girl she loved so dearly.

So, after much convincing, Mila convinced Alina to give her the power to fight alongside her and carry her burden, and the growth Mila began to see in Alina seemed to shrink.

It was only then she understood just how exhilarating Alina must have felt. Mila felt like more than herself. Like the version of herself she always wanted to be. Like Alina. But she also felt just how terrible the weight it came with was. All those people placing their hopes and fears upon them. All those lives relying on them. All those deaths they were unable to prevent. All the anger and sadness they had to accept from others.

She watched Alina put on a continuous front, smiling even as she cried in her heart. Mila fought even harder, hoping that she could see her smile with all her heart once again if only she could do more. She fought, and fought, and fought, and fought, but there was always more. There was almost no break. Even when the threat was gone, the people themselves refused to give them a moment to themselves.

Every day was a new challenge. Every day was even more responsibility heaped on top of them. Every day was more malice directed at the powerful girl who just wanted to save them and the girl who wanted to saver her. It grew, and grew, and grew, and grew, and it began to take its toll on them both.

Mila watched as the inky growth in Alina slowly began growing once more.

More than that, it was almost unbearable to watch Alina continue to shoulder it without complaint. She hurt more than anyone else every time she failed, but she never let a soul know, and Mila, who did not share Alina’s mentality, began to resent the humans who placed so much on them and yet still deemed to berate them when they didn’t meet their expectations.

This anger grew more and more, and she began to realize that Alina was becoming distant. Not only to Mila, but to the people she was protecting. The wear was becoming noticeable on Mila, but something far darker was growing in Alina, and she was the only one who could see it.

Mila didn’t know what to do. What was going to happen to them? What was going to happen to Alina? Would the people even care? By this point, all they were seen as was tools. The only reason they’d care is if it affected them in some way. What selfish beings.

It finally reached a breaking point when, rather than meeting them with a smile, Alina faced their praise and anger with… nothing. No smile, no frown, no anger or happiness. Just a blank expression, like she didn’t even comprehend what was happening. Mila collapsed when she saw it.

It nearly consumed Alina.

No. No. No!

The wail of her heart echoed out in a nearly palpable wave. Alina reacted as she felt something inside her being torn out in a furious jerk. But it wasn’t just her. Everyone else in the area suddenly went cold as the waved rolled over them, coursing back towards its origin and stealing something from them as it did.

So lost in her pain that she didn’t realize what she’d done. She, in her desire to free her friend from the numbing burden humanity had piled on her, had accessed a power she didn’t even know she possessed.

Mila was a psychic. More specifically, she was a form of empath. Her power, originally only able to read and understand the emotions of others, had been enhanced by the power she gained from Alina. This enhancement gave her the ability not only to read them, but draw them out and into her like an emotional vampire.

All the hate and darkness. All the elation and joy. Every emotion around her suddenly swarmed into her, and it only served to fuel the darkness that had been growing inside her. It overwhelmed her. It consumed her. It raged inside her.

She lashed out at the horrible monsters that had done this to her. She slaughtered them, destroying them for their evil, their selfishness, their anger, their pride. For every evil they denied and passed on to others, she inflicted back on them tenfold. She bore their evil, and she was their punishment!

Which is why it was so shocking to her when Alina stood in her way.

Even now, how could she still defend these people? Didn’t she know what they were doing to her? Couldn’t she see they deserved this? These horrible creatures didn’t deserve her kindness! They deserved her rage! She was doing this for her!

She fought Alina in a mad fervor, no longer able to separate her rage for humanity from her love of Alina. Still, it wasn’t enough. Alina was always the stronger of them, and Mila could only struggle in her insanity as she fought a losing battle. Unable to surrender even at the end, Alina so no other option but to kill her.

As Mila faded away, and as the overwhelming flame of anger cooled into embers, the last thing she saw was Alina, the one she loved, crying as she held her in her arms. But Mila couldn’t do anything. She couldn’t even speak. Even in death, the image of her friend, now bearing a new weight on her heart, was burned into her soul.

And the hatred of those responsible for it.

Personality

A monster that only exists to destroy humanity. That is an apt way to describe the Avenger named Mila. Whatever kind of person she once was or could have been has been wiped away, replaced by a monster who can't even take joy in the pain she inflicts on others. Of the two types of Avengers, she was one born from love beaten down by hatred and evil until only the darkness remained. A ever-present need to punish and destroy the beings that harmed the one she loved and drove her to this state.

She will never accept a human master. Even if she were restrained by a command seal, she would also seek some method to eliminate them alongside every other human she lies her eyes on. Even a beast like Lobo, who still works with Chaldea to protect the family that may still walk the earth despite his distaste for humans, would fight against her, as the complete destruction of the world is acceptable so long as humanity goes with it.

The only person who can rein her in is First Lady, whom Mila still feels immense guilt and love for. Mila is absolutely ashamed to still be such a source of pain for her, the feeling at odds with her desire to do exactly what causes that pain. This dichotomy forces her into a very uneasy and tenuous alliance with Chaldea. First Lady has made it a habit to watch over Mila, both to try and bring her back to the girl she knew and to ensure she doesn't begin rampaging through the facility.

Relationships

First Lady (Saver): I... I did it for you. You understand, don't you? They're... they're monsters. Please! Just... Just let me win! Let me protect you!

Angra Mainyu: I see it in you. You hate them, but you want to be like them. You're like me, but you blind yourself!

Vortigern: No. You must take it farther!

Lobo: You understand. Of course you would!

Lucian of Samosata (Saber): Stand still and die already!

Samyaza (Foreigner): You're a monster, so die like one!

Non-humans: Stay out of my way and let me do what needs to be done.

Mila Lily: You know the truth. You've always known. This is the only way to protect her!

[DelRey]

Outstanding storytelling. How much of it is actually canon fact and how much did you add? In any case it is really good and imo better than FL. Guess because she has a deeper character

[BnEl15]

Dang, I always love myself some tragic revenge story born out of some misguided sense of love (if my Avenger Fersen is any indication), and this one is no less impressive. I'm not that knowledgeable in Prismaverse lore either, but I can tell you put a lot of thought to her lore and characterization, which translates well to her Skills and NPs. Having her fight Lucian would be interesting as well, since while on the outside Lucian represents the "perfect hero", he could also empathize with her grief, seeing Alina's blind heroism not as a good thing, but as a tragedy.

[Morg van Destro]

Outstanding storytelling. How much of it is actually canon fact and how much did you add? In any case it is really good and imo better than FL. Guess because she has a deeper character

It's all original. First Lady wasn't given a name, we know nothing about their childhood or how Mila was corrupted. We don't know how FL died. All we're told is FL was a demon raised by humans, Mila was her best friend and the first corrupted Magical Girl, she killed Mila, then eventually died herself. Any tiny bit of canon characterization is from the FGO event. Basically, this was all me.
I'm both offended and grateful.

Dang, I always love myself some tragic revenge story born out of some misguided sense of love (if my Avenger Fersen is any indication), and this one is no less impressive. I'm not that knowledgeable in Prismaverse lore either, but I can tell you put a lot of thought to her lore and characterization, which translates well to her Skills and NPs. Having her fight Lucian would be interesting as well, since while on the outside Lucian represents the "perfect hero", he could also empathize with her grief, seeing Alina's blind heroism not as a good thing, but as a tragedy.

Thought. Yes.
*glances around nervously*
Definitely didn't just... write a bunch of things without any presence of mind like I always do. That would be crazy and irresponsible, especially when people keep praising me for it.
My subconscious is a much better writer than I am. I basically just let it take the reins and don't give it much thought until after it's done. After all, the point of the second draft is to make it look like you knew what you were talking about the whole time.

[Serra]

Alright, unified the Possession Inducement and the Sleep Inducement skills on Maugis into a Summoning skill and found a temporary picture for them, here's a new sheet!

Class: Saber

Appearance

Source

True Name: Bayajidda

Alignment: Neutral Good

Source: Hausa myth

Place of Origin: Unknown (possibly Baghdad)

Parameters

STR: A

END: B

AGI: B

MGI: C

LCK: C

NP: B

Height: 177 centimetres

Weight: 69 kilograms

Likes: Helping those in need, anything that looks beautiful

Dislikes: Lingering on the past

Talent: Coolheaded altruism

Natural Enemy: Sarki

Attribute: Earth

Armament: Sword

Catalyst: A snake's head and stone from an ancient well

Class Skills

Magic Resistance B

There are no specific tales of Saber withstanding spells. However, he does not receive the lowest rank a Saber could have in this Skill, because Sarki might have been magical in nature and there are numerous tales involving magic from the same period as he.

Riding C

There are no well-known tales of Saber riding anything out of the ordinary, so his Rank in this Skill is low despite it being a Class Skill.

Personal Skills

Charisma B-

Saber has led groups of warriors in battle, and his descendants founded their own kingdoms. However, even after marrying the ruler of Daura, he seems to have never attempted to take revenge on the king of Borno who had once tricked him out of all of his soldiers; similarly, in the versions of the tale in which he's a prince from Baghdad exiled after its conquest, he seems to have never attempted retaking his hometown. Though this is more likely a sign of Saber's temperament than a true lack of abilities, it's reflected in the fact that his Rank in this Skill might've been higher, had he been more vengeful.

Favour of the Metalworkers C

Though not a metalworker himself, Saber garnered the help of blacksmiths from Gaya, who forged the knife with which he slew Sarki. Due to this bond, Saber's stats experience a Rank-up when fighting an opponent whose offence is based on weapons - or tools - made out of metal.

Poison Resistance A-

Though Saber did not possess an extraordinary resistance to venom when he fought Sarki, he has since then developed this Skill as a result of routinely handling his poison and its components. Saber has become completely immune to Sarki's venom, as well as several other venoms and poisons that share commonalities with it, up to and including many toxin-based Noble Phantasms. He theoretically knows how to treat all of those, too, though he requires the right materials and enough time to apply the treatment.

Noble Phantasm

Sarki: To Be The King

Type: Anti-Unit

Rank: B

Range: 1 / 1~40

Max Targets: 1 person / 1~12 people

'Sarki', meaning 'king', was also the name of the snake slain by Saber. The fact that slaying the serpent gave the city of Daura access to water once more is represented by giving Saber a degree of magical control over liquids. However, he cannot move large quantities at once, as there are no records of him doing so and he is not a Caster nor a marine deity or anything of the sort. He can also not manipulate liquid that is not directly exposed to the air, so nothing internal to one's body unless it's through an open wound: for example, he couldn't stop someone's heart or brain without touching them, but he could hasten the flow of blood out of wounds he produces, or manipulating the flow of blood for wounds he or his allies suffer so that the wounds scar rapidly but without risk of hemorrhaging.

Saber can at any time manifest Sarki's decapitated head, or, likewise, make it disappear whenever he wishes. Sarki's head can still produce an extremely powerful venom with a paralysing effect. He can fill vials with it and install them on the knife with which he had cut the snake's head off, the one that the blacksmiths from Gaya had forged for him, which has since then been modified into a peculiar sword by his summoning, and is itself highly destructive and durable on account of being part of this Noble Phantasm. Saber can then coat the sword in venom through his powers, or utilise them to manipulate the venom in other way. He is even capable of solidifying the venom in structures with sharp edges and points, though he can no longer manipulate it after he's fixed it in a solid form and it's no longer fluid.

Lore

Saber's exact origin is unclear. Some say he was a prince from Baghdad, possibly named Abu Yazid, who was exiled after the city was conquered.

In any case, he arrived in Borno together with what was left of his warriors, and was married to its king's daughter, Magaram (also known as Magira). However, he was forced to leave the city with his wife but without his soldiers after the king became his enemy and possibly tricked his warriors so they could not reach him. Eventually, in Garun Gabas, Saber was even forced to abandon his wife, who at the time was pregnant with their child.

Saber travelled on to Gaya, where he met with metalworkers and had them forge a knife for him. From there, he arrived in Daura, where he was welcomed as a guest by an elderly woman named Ayyana into her house. However, when he asked for water, he was given very little, and, after asking for an explanation, he learnt that the well from which Daura depended on had been taken over by a serpent, whose name was Sarki. Due to Sarki's whims, water could only be drawn from the well once a week. Saber travelled to the well and defeated Sarki, cutting his head off and letting the people have free access to the water once again.

The following day, the ruler of Daura, Magajiya Daurama, offered half the town as a reward for whoever could show proof that they had been the one to kill the snake. Many came forth with heads that didn't match the body. Ayyana informed the city's ruler that her guest had been the one to slay Sarki, so Magajiya Daurama had him summoned. Saber showed her Sarki's decapitated head, the only one that matched the body, but refused the offer to rule over half the town, instead asking for Magajiya Daurama's hand in marriage. Initially, she gave him a concubine named Bagwariya due to the difficulties of breaking the long-standing tradition that forbid Daura's queens to marry. However, in the end, she accepted. Daura's residents took to calling their first king 'Bayajidda', meaning 'he did not understand [the language] before'.

It's said that Saber's descendants eventually became the founders of the Hausa states.

Personality

Saber's usual behaviour is essentially characterised by calm nonchalance. He's levelheaded and to avoid at all costs making problems seem bigger than they actually are. He appreciates art and the beauty of nature; he likes to help others, doesn't hold grudges, and is quick to forgiveness. He is conscious of his abilities and although he is often soft-spoken, that does not prevent him from coming off as bold or daring when he takes a risk he's confident he can handle even when others might balk at it. In such occasions, the lack of tension or stress he displays through the danger can be truly awe-inspiring.

On the other hand, he can get evasive if someone tries to dig too deep into his past, and will discourage others from doing so to people other than himself as well. Very, very rarely, he might get vehemently defensive over such matters if someone were to push him too far.

[Kabalisto Koga]

Interesting new profiles here ! i will later tell you more detailed review but good work Frigix and Morg !

also during some Researches have i found About this Guy perhaps can some one make a servant out of him \/?

[RoydGolden]

Honestly a little surprised no one here seems to have done a sheet for him yet.