Create-A-Servant 3

[Baron Magnus]

Opinion time once again with a new batch of servants.

Xiaoqin: I like this one. It's pretty interesting and delves deep into chinese myth. I'm honestly not that well versed in it and often get confused researching so it's refreshing when a sheet shows up that explains things in a clear coherent manner. A+

Tamar: Not just christian myth I was unaware of but also one that would've been great to work with (I do happily admit mine probably would not be as good as yours). Good job. I especially like the direction you took her in. Also, gotta admit the first response to it made me chuckle and then I laughed when I realized I just missed the click needed to reveal more.

Hayy: Thankfully more islam than christian/catholic/abrahamic so I don't feel bad that I didn't know this guy but I also feel like I've.... wait isn't this just the story of tarzan but with the twist subverted? Even so great sheet and it rocks. Be cool to see this guy in action.

Morgause: A really great sheet. Would've loved to see some interactions or quotes but the skills and noble phantasm tell a great enough story. I especially love the tie-in to the Gaheris sheet.

[Skull]

You ever just get an idea for a Servant and it just comes together so naturally?
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Rider



True Name: Cassivellaunus
Epithet: "The King of the Catuvellauni"
Region: Britain (1st Century B.C)
Hidden Attribute: Human
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Likes: Women, Wrestling
Dislikes: Betrayal, Elephants
Talents: Charioteering, Cordwaining
Natural Enemy: Gaius Julius Caesar

Parameters
STR: (B) END: (B) AGI: (A) MGI: (D) LCK: (D) NP: (C)

Character

Rider takes the form of Cassivellaunus, the King of the Catuvellauni tribe in Celtic Britain. A tall and slender but still muscular man dressed in pelts and fur which combined with his long hair gives him a regal if somewhat wild appearance.

Cassivellaunus is far from what you would expect from a king - a loud and eccentric man who always says what's on his mind no matter who it offends and he was a restless soul that was prone to wandering off whenever he felt like it which left his kingdom eternally unstable. He certainly did not care too much about the title of king and even tells his Master not to bother with formalities and just call him "Cass". But he truly did love Britain and its people which is why he personally cut down several fellow kings who were going to submit to the Roman forces when they arrived on the island and then led the combined resistance himself to the bitter end. Though they would often question their leader's sanity, there's no doubt in the minds of the Catuvellauni that in the heat of battle, the figure of Cassivellaunus charging into battle ahead of everyone in his chariot was their king.

Gaius Julius Caesar...the relationship between him and Cassivellaunus can only be descried as "complicated". Officially they were "friends" after Rome defeated the British forces but while the two leaders do hold deep respect for one another's abilities, there is ultimately nothing but animosity in their hearts towards the other. For the Caesar it was when Cassivellaunus stole his fiancé away in front of all of Rome, publicly humiliating him. Whereas for Cassivellaunus it was when the Caesar personally struck down his brother in battle. Even if fate were to put them on the same side, they would certainly spend most of their time bickering with each other rather than fighting the enemy. It would seem the only way to get them to somewhat cooperate would be to bait them into a competition where the one that defeats the enemy is the better man or whatever.

Throughout his life, Cassivellaunus became intensely passionate about building complex things to the point where he considers himself more an artist than a king. He gets very excited at the prospect of seeing new things in the modern era even if he already should have the information downloaded into his brain. When combined with his vain nature, it leads to him looking like an excitable child who is more interested in wearing trendy clothes and riding motorcycles than fighting other Servants. But underneath the eccentric exterior belies a sharp mind that through a mixture of guerrilla warfare and elaborate contraptions was able to keep the Roman Legion at bay even with Julius Caesar leading them until he was betrayed by allies. Now in the modern day, Cassivellaunus can often be found in his downtime working on building whatever new zany idea he comes up with, usually revolving around an excuse of fortifying his Master's house to which upon being asked why what on earth he has created this time, Cassivellaunus merely looks at his newest finished invention and says..."groovy~"

In a Holy Grail War - once Cassivellaunus is finally taking things seriously, he will take his time observing the strength of the enemy forces discreetly via the use of his Cloak of Invisibility. Then he would plan accordingly by setting up traps and weapons that could target potential weaknesses of each Servants and engage in hit and run skirmishes in and effort to wear them down rather than fighting directly in a contest of strength as while Cassivellaunus is decently strong, he lacks both a method of decisively finishing off strong opponents as well as robust defences from enemies with abstract attacks such as magic. He laments that this puts him closer to an Assassin type fighter but does not regret it as he would do anything to bring forth his and the Master's shared ambition.

His Wish upon the Grail? Naturally, to go back in time and get a second chance at defeating his mortal enemy Julius Caesar. But because things can never be simple with Cassivellaunus, he wants the Caesar to have all his memories as well so that there can be no squabbling over unfair advantages.

Skills

Class Skills

Divinity - (C)
The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. At high levels, one is treated as a mixed race of a Divine Spirit - a demi-god. This Skill has an effect which reduces special defensive values called "purge defence" in proportion to the Divinity's Rank. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig. As the child of the divine figure Belenus with one of his mortal mistresses, Cassivellaunus has a decent amount of aptitude of divinity.

Magic Resistance - (C)
The protection granted against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. As a warrior king from the Age of Gods, Cassivellaunus has a decent amount of immunity to where he can automatically cancel spells with a chant below two verses even if he is not aware of being targeted. However, he cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

Riding - (A)
A Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. As a dedicated charioteer, Cassivellaunus has both the talent and experience to manoeuvre a vehicle at speed over a vast array of environments. All vehicles and all creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, in an attempt to be "hip", Cassivellaunus would prefer to ride a motorcycle into battle rather than his chariot Noble Phantasm.

Personal Skills

Item Construction [Fake] - (C)
A Skill that acts as an equivalent of Item Construction due to the user's lack of magus aptitude. What started as a goofy disguise of a cordwainer eventually developed into a life long passion for building things. This became essential when defending against the invasion of the Romans necessitated building elaborate traps and devices which Cassivellaunus oversaw gladly. Even as a Servant, he enjoys thinking up various contraptions to solve problems and build them - from fortifying the Master's household to a Rube Goldberg machine, if Cassivellaunus can see it in his mind and he has the required materials he can make it...even if half the time they are completely ineffective against Servants.

Military Tactics [Guerrilla] - (B)
The tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. This variant Skill is specialised towards either solo or small group operations against larger forces. Cassivellaunus honed his particular style of warfare against the legions of Roman troops invading Britain and so ambushes, traps and hasty retreats became his bread and butter. It got to the point that Cassivellaunus rarely bothered to disembark to fight and instead would mow people down in his chariot and then leave at top speed. Now as a Servant, bonus modifiers are applied for when dealing against an enemy party and a Critical Chance is initiated if Cassivellaunus and allies strike before the enemy has become aware of their presence.

Presence Concealment - (B)
The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. Despite not being an Assassin Class Servant, Cassivellaunus is able to have this Skill because of his trusty Cloak of Invisibility which masks his presence and makes it possible to disappear and become extremely difficult to be detected. Perfect for spying on other Servants but because the Cloak is cumbersome the Rank of the Skill drops considerably when launching an attack. Because it is tied to an object rather than an innate ability, the Skill can be lost if the Cloak is destroyed or even transferred to another such as Cassivellaunus' Master if the situation is dire enough.

Noble Phantasm

Meinlas
Slender Gray of the Full Armoured War Machine

[Type: Anti-Army], [Rank: C], [Maximum Range: 100 Metres], [Maximum Number of Targets: 50 Units]

The pride and joy of Cassivellaunus' kingship, a large battle chariot that he would ride across the battlefield on - pulled by the majestic war horse Meinlas who was gifted to Cassivellaunus by Julius Caesar as a token of their friendship.

Being a beast from the Age of Gods, Meinlas is a tough warrior despite not having any supernatural powers and even a Servant would taken damage if trampled under his hooves. The chariot is similarly impressive as Cassivellaunus' wild tinkering over the years has led to it being reinforced to bounce off regular sword strikes and contains several hidden machinations for when enemies try to swarm the duo such as firing omni-directional spikes or releasing flammable oil onto enemies to be ignited. The true power of the Noble Phantasm is when the chariot driver and the horse are in complete synch with one another, this allows Cassivellaunus to pour his magical energy into Meinlas and share the Divinity he inherited from his father Belenus in order to lift the horse and chariot and allow it to ride through the air and into the sky...it doesn't really accomplish anything but the sight made Julius Caesar laugh and he remarked that it reminded him of Apollo in his chariot of days past.

However despite the reliability of the Noble Phantasm, Cassivellaunus refuses to use it, for the sole reason that he is vain and thinks that riding around on a motorbike is a lot cooler.

Lore

Long, long ago there existed various Celtic tribes that ruled over Britain. The strongest tribe usually had an Overlord who held authority over all other tribes but the current one, Brân had just fallen in battle during a war with Ireland. Thus when the King of the Catuvellauni tribe, Cassivellaunus caught wind that Rome was thinking about invading again, he feared another Boudica situation and so he decided that Britain must have a united front at all cost.

Donning his cloak of invisibility, he went around the island and cut down six of the other tribe kings with the seventh, Mandubracius fleeing for his life to Gaul in the hopes of gaining sanctuary from Julius Caesar. Cassivellaunus gave chase to the continent, using the disguise of a genius shoemaker as he travelled. By chance he stumbled across the beautiful maiden Fflur in Rome and became intensely enamoured with her but there was one problem... Julius Caesar himself was there and was trying to court her affection. The maiden said that despite how charming Cassivellaunus is, she just could not marry him because she was taken against her will from her family by evil men and offered to Julius Caesar as a bride and so Cassivellaunus ripped off his disguise and announced himself as the King of Britain in front of everyone and carried off Fflur back to Britain, killing as many Roman soldiers as he could along the way. Enraged, Julius amassed his men and prepared to invade Britain at all cost and in return Cassivellaunus was given command of the combined British forces to oppose the invasion.

When Julius arrived in Britain with his army, he attempted to gain entry by sailing up the Thames Estuary but Cassivellaunus predicted that and had it fortified with sharp stakes to gut the ships and drowned many men. But Julius was not done yet as he simply called in a squad of armoured elephants to stamp out the stakes and proceed. When asked what they should do by his generals, Cassivellaunus responded that a war of attrition would be suicide and so they would use the territory to their advantage and commit to guerrilla tactics through the speed of their chariots. Despite the Brits' best attempt at harrying the Roman forces, their camps gradually spread up the coast and further into the country. It was at this point where Cassivellaunus' brother Nennius made a suggestion - he would take four Tribe Kings and make a suicidal assault on the Caesar's stronghold in an attempt to eliminate their leader and crush morale. The attack went through but the Romans defended themselves well and Nennius was forced to desperately charge though and engage Julius in single combat which they did but despite his large size, the Caesar was formidible in swordsmanship and dealt a fatal wound to Nennius but in doing so got his sword Crocea Mors stuck in his opponent's shield. Seeing his chance, Nennius grabbed the magic sword and escaped from the camp, cutting down every Roman that tried to stop him and made his way back to Cassivellaunus' fort, the Devil's Dyke. Nennius apologised to his brother for his failure as well as not fighting to the death but explained that whilst in combat with the Caesar, he spotted a handful of Tribal Kings that were supposed to be allied with Cassivellaunus in the Roman camp eating and carousing and figured that they must have defected to the Romans in exchange for the information of Cassivellaunus' whereabouts. Once he had finished talking, Nennius collapsed to the floor dead and Cassivellaunus barely had time to bury him before the Caesar's forces were at his doorstep. Despite their best efforts at repelling the siege, the Brits were overwhelmed and forced to surrender.

Cassivellaunus was ready to accept his fate but to his surprise Julius merely laughed and said that not many men could give him such trouble as Cassivellaunus and it would be a waste to kill him so if he agrees, he would be made a Vassal King under the Roman Republic. Begrudgingly, Cassivellaunus agreed and the majority of Roman forces returned to Gaul to quell and uprising there. Although he gave his word, Cassivellaunus predicted that Rome would not be satisfied with such a level of autonomy and would return one day to control the island completely. But the day of their rematch never came as it took 97 years before Rome could afford to invade Britain again and by that point both Cassivellaunus and Julius Caesar had passed away.

Relationships

Artemis, Hector, Heracles & Perseus - "I feel very much at home with you all."

Artoria - "The Red Dragon eh? When my brother first sealed it away, I doubt he thought it would end up in the body of a little girl."

Bedivere - "Lad, why do you possess my brother's silver arm? Depending on your answer, you may get a length of iron in your gut."

Boudica - "As another who stood against the might of Rome, it is an honour to fight alongside you."

Cú Chulainn - "Hmm...You kinda remind me of my nephew Lleu. Funny that."

Gaius Julius Caesar - "Caesar! We meet again at last. I still owe you one for killing my brother Nennius."

Morgan le Fay - "Tch! I figured you must be blind, otherwise why else would you have a son with that fatass Caesar..."

Creator's Notes

When it comes to the Welsh Triads, outside of King Arthur himself, Cassivellaunus would probably be the next most referenced figure - usually in relation to Julius Caeser but not always. Therefore since he's such an interesting figure I felt like trying to bring him to life through a sheet. I feel I might have made him a little too similar to Iskandar when I was trying to go for Ash Williams from Evil Dead but oh well.

The FaceClaim is Shishio Tsukasa from Dr.STONE. Originally I was going to use him for Aurelius Ambrosius but since I've sworn off doing anymore Arthurian Servants I decided to recycle the FC here.

As usual, all comments and criticisms are welcome~

[Kamera]

wait isn't this just the story of tarzan but with the twist subverted?

Yes. In fact, the novel Hayy ibn Yaqzan is the earliest example of the deserted island story, which among other things directly inspired Defoe's Robinson Crusoe. The more you know, I guess.

[Kamera]

Cassivellaunus: Pretty cool biker dude, but the sheet itself could use some more polish. I think the NP is fine, but curious why the chariot can't just transform into a bike, with his preference towards bikes and all. Also, I don't see why can't the Cloak of Invisibility isn't an NP and is just a generic Presence Concealment. His unique Item Construction and Military Tactics is basically just Robin Hood's Subversive Activity -- actually he sounds more like Rider Robin Hood now that I think about it...

[DelRey]

wish i could properly read the sheets, but i am still too sick right now to concentrate.
when i get back to making sheets, I think i will return to Servants with lots of research and effort behind them or are more connected with others.
At least the current one is a hard nut to crack for me.

[Spammin Spiff]

Get well soon DelRey

[Skull]

Cassivellaunus: Pretty cool biker dude, but the sheet itself could use some more polish. I think the NP is fine, but curious why the chariot can't just transform into a bike, with his preference towards bikes and all.

Eh, I didn't want to stray too far into the realms of wackiness, just limit it to believable modifications.

His unique Item Construction and Military Tactics is basically just Robin Hood's Subversive Activity -- actually he sounds more like Rider Robin Hood now that I think about it...

True, I am sure they would get along well lol.

wish i could properly read the sheets, but i am still too sick right now to concentrate.
when i get back to making sheets, I think i will return to Servants with lots of research and effort behind them or are more connected with others.
At least the current one is a hard nut to crack for me.

Don't force yourself. Get well soon.

[zero_traveler]

So I made this a long while back on a different forum, and I figured I could put it here.

Someone made a post about a "Cavewoman Saberface" and it just kind of clicked for me at the time.

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Class: Berserker

Alternate Classes: Saber

True Name: *&%$

Alignment: n/a

Faceclaim(?)

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Bio:
The Human Blessed with The Light of Promised Victory to drive away the Threat From The Sky. A simple existence, when they are not focused on finding their next meal, they lounge in a relaxed atmosphere.

When the Threat From The Sky appeared, They were caught completely off guard. Their simple life was not prepared for the Threat's attack. That was when the Light appeared, and they were compelled to take it up and strike the Threat out of the skies.

When the battle was over, the Light remained in their clenched grasp.

Parameters

Strength: C (A)

Endurance: B (A)

Agility: B (A)

Mana: B (A)

Luck: ZERO

NP: EX (B)

Class Skills

-Madness Enhancement (A)

Berserker's 'Madness' is simply the lack of what would be considered 'civil' thinking, being more akin to a wild animal. There is a mind there, but it has no concerns for the future nor regrets of the past. Unconcerned with the vagaries of social interaction, the thought process is simple and direct: Eat when you are hungry, Sleep when you are tired, Fight when something threatens or opposes you. All Parameters are increased.

Personal Skills

-Feral Instinct (A)

The ability to sense danger and account for it based on intuition or prescience. Staying at the top, despite everything around threatening their life. Having fought, days and weeks at a time, in a world where everything wants to kill them, the edge of their awareness is honed razor-sharp.

-Natural Body (A)

A muscular shape even without training, what's more, the body shape won't change no matter how many calories are ingested. STR Increases

Noble Phantasms

HERO

The One That Stands Against Destruction

(EX)

Coming from a time before the Concept of "Heroes" existed, A single existence was uplifted by the will of the planet, and granted a weapon to repel the forces of an invading alien existence.

This Noble Phantasm encapsulates the essence of the singular figure, standing resolute against forces beyond comprehension. Conflicts are contextualized into battles that can be won, and abilities or movements that attempt to circumvent and prevent the user from acting or fighting are themselves negated or otherwise rendered useless.

EXCALIBUR

The Sword of Promised Victory

(EX) -> (A/C)

The Sword of Promised Victory, in its form as the Planetary Defensive Weapon. Berserker, no longer in the throes of it's heady power as the enemy it was unleashed to defeat is now vanquished, has no idea how to properly use EXCALIBUR as a Noble Phantasm. As a Weapon, however, It's still of a high rank on its own. Berserker's Really Sharp Stick is the deadliest thing it knows of, and there's no way they are letting go of it. Also when they swing it just right, it burns things to nothing, and that's amazing and hilarious to them.

The Inciting Quote

From a poster named "CrossyCross"

Saber Cavewoman/Ur-Saber would be pretty cool to imagine if taken seriously.

Personality-wise, even more food-obsessed than normal but with crude tastes/low bar for quality (imagine them being so terrible that they think that potato knight of the rounds' cooking is okay), and a complete -snip- caveman in terms of manners and attitude but with the saberface flair of instinctual grace.

Combat-wise, utterly lacking in finesse and structured skill, all in on a ridiculous amount of deadly Instinct (Instinct EX?), almost-bestial qualities of brute force and ferocity/feral Madness Enhancement, and some kind of trait pertaining to being a really really really ancient human hero with all the benefits it entails. Might also have a beast-like ability pertaining to the lion skin or just lion-esque traits.

Or heck, an ability pertaining to her potentially eating things alive and raw, just to drive in the "savage human" theme.

Noble Phantasm-wise, she'll be using Excalibur and not saying a name, just screaming angrily while swinging it at her opponent's face multiple times, with the last one activating the beam seemingly on accident.

I'd dig it.

[RoydGolden]

Servant Rider:

Appearance:

Source

True Name: Shulgi 'The Traveling King'

Alignment: Neutral Good

Alternate Classes: Saber, Lancer, Archer, Caster, Shielder, Avenger, Voyager

Strength- B
Agility- A+
Endurance- B+
Mana- C
Luck- A
NP- A+

Personality

Cheerful and gregarious, Rider acts oftentimes more like an excitable tourist than a king. He shows great joy for traveling to foreign lands and sampling their various wonders, so being summoned in modern times through the Grail is a dream come true for him even without the chance to match his skills against other legendary heroes. A lover of speed and the road he's particularly fond of modern vehicles like motorbikes as well as motels due to having founded the first recorded instance of them to shelter wanderers.

He also takes pride in his footracing speed and will often challenge his opponents to one. One of his favorite things to do to amuse himself as king was by having advisors race with him while he carried out meetings. Rider still chuckles at the memory of those usually out of shape politicians left panting and gasping by the end while he was still perfectly fine. "You shoulda' seen those guys Master, and I wasn't even using half my full speed either!"

Apart from his nomadic nature Rider's other most notable trait is his extreme ego. While Rider won't look down on others as blatantly as a certain golden king he claims brotherhood with, he's very insistent to be recognized as the best at anything he sets out to do. This leads to a somewhat off-putting degree of arrogance as he's constantly showboating and trying to flaunt his skills around others, which might lead more cynical individuals to falsely assume he actually doesn't have the abilities he claims to.

This gloryhound behavior and egotism in truth masks a deep vulnerability as Rider is desperate to know that his legacy was immortalized in history. The thought of being truly forgotten terrifies him and is the one of the few things that can break his usually sunny demeanor. If he were summoned in past eras where knowledge of Sumerian legend had largely been forgotten, it's likely Rider would show a far darker and more bitter aspect to his personality. While he performed great deeds and became a king his people admired, it was all for the sake of his own fame making him a rather selfish person- though not incapable of caring for others.

He can empathize with others who share his wanderer's spirit and believes that when someone has a dream, they should chase it as far as they can no matter where it leads them. "You might even be half as amazing as me someday!" Conversely, he can't forgive anyone that'd persecute those who just wish to innocently travel.

Rider is also a flirty guy who'll try to pull moves on any girl who catches his eye. His "type" is strong and passionate women who can kick the crap out of him like his beloved Inanna/Ishtar. Incidentally, once he finds Ishtar has been summoned in a vessel amongst Chaldea, he'll waste no time finding her and teasing her over her new body.

Rider's wish on the Holy Grail is simply to ensure his fame truly lives on for all time. Aside from that, he'd like to be reborn in the modern age and try opening up a motel chain.

Likes: touring foreign lands, running, fame, strong women, sweet fruits on the side of the road
Dislikes: being forgotten, settling down, people who "harsh his buzz", persecution of travelers
Talents: everything necessary for a king, running, praising himself
Natural Enemy: Ishtar

Class Skills:

Riding- A++
The ability to ride animals and handle vehicles. At this rank, even Phantasmal and Divine Beasts can be ridden at an exceptional degree of skill. Under special conditions even beasts up to the level of Dragon-Class may be successfully tamed. Living in the Age of Gods when mythical monsters roamed the earth freely and extolling his prowess as a hunter who could bring the mightiest beasts under submission, Rider receives the maximal rank in this Skill. He'll also freely boast that it includes "the other definition of riding" as well.

Magic Resistance- B++
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, spells with a chant below three verses are nullified. Even if targeted by Magecraft at the level of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals, it is difficult for the Servant to be affected. Having received the protection of all the Sumerian Gods upon his birth and being crowned king, Rider obtains a strong resistance against the works of wicked enchanters. Due to the special favor from fertility-goddess Inanna additional protection is garnered towards spells that'd sully the immaculacy of his physical form.


Personal Skills:

Talented In All Fields- A
In his titular praise-tablets Rider boasted ability in a wide and oftentimes eclectic litany of subjects including oratory, fine arts, reading and writing (a rarity amongst even kings of the time), hunting, fighting, lovemaking and religious rites. While the sheer diversity of these claims might be suspected to be scarcely more than self-promotion, his instantiation as a Servant seems to support that Rider really did possess all these abilities. Rather than one chosen to be a king, perhaps it'd be more accurate to call Rider an all-purpose polymath who just happened to apply himself to kingship.

Skills ranging from Alluring Nightingale, Eye For Art, Rune Magic (Scribe), Innate Wisdom, Military Tactics, Knowledge Of Melee Combat, Clairvoyance and Sacraments can be displayed at C~A rank. Furthermore it becomes easier for the Servant to pick up and learn even abilities they weren't familiar with in life.

Affection Of The Love Goddess- EX
The king who courted the goddess of love Inanna and ritually bedded her to renew the prosperity of his kingdom. Having received the fullness of Inanna's blessing Rider is showered in a bevy of auspicious effects. That are; rank up to all parameters, a superior sculpting of the body (Natural Body equivalent at rank A+) as well as enhanced restoration of health and Mana through exchange of sexual fluids.

Furthermore just once per Grail War Rider can evoke Inanna's authority of renewal- both over virility and the crops upon harvest- through his Saint Graph. A complete "restoration to one's full vigor" that brings Rider's HP to maximum while also purging any status ailments like poisons or curses that'd enfeeble him.

Incidentally, when asked about his experience with the goddess Rider claims Inanna was "a needy kitten" and "always got mad whenever I had to go back to running a kingdom".

"Nonono! Revoke those remarks immediately!" a certain crimson devil/goddess poutily proclaims.

Crossing Arcadia- B+
The matchless runner. Rider boasted such anecdotes as catching a gazelle on foot and hunting a lion without nets or traps, solely on the basis of his incredible speed. In his most famous feat he sprinted from the city of Nippur to Ur- a full distance of at least 100 miles- in a single day and amidst a raging storm to conduct a religious observance there. Extolled by historians to be the first champion long-distance runner, the footwork that got him enshrined in legend is amply displayed as a Servant. He can dash over obstacles in the field and weave a path between enemy projectiles as if evading hail-stones in a pounding storm.

Lapis Lazuli Scepter Of Kingship- A+
An evolved Charisma comprised from the anecdotes of "crowned king while still in the womb" and "personally invested authority by the entire pantheon of Sumerian Gods". A supreme authority meant for ruling over other kings of foreign lands, Rider's charisma radiates as a

Melam

physical presence

of divine power, subjecting those who stand against him with a rank-down to all parameters as long as they stand in defiance to him. Can be surmounted by having an equal or greater Divinity rank.

Territory Creation (Vagrant Soul)- C+
A unique variation of the Territory Creation Skill Rider possesses. A lover of travel, one of his notable accomplishments as king was expanding the roadways and constructing gardened rest-houses (the precursor to modern-day motels) for weary wanderers. By securing the leylines of his surroundings Rider can create either "roadways" that warp space to allow near-instantaneous travel between two points or "rest-houses" that recharge the stamina and magical energy of those who spend a night there (think inns from an RPG). Multiple such territories can be established at a great distance apart and they remain active even without Rider to directly sustain them.

Noble Phantasm

Etemenniguru

Great Temple, Shake The Earth

Rank: A+

Type: Fortress/Anti-Army

The crown jewel of Rider's kingship, the great Ziggurat of Ur he splendidly constructed to complete the legacy of his father Ur-Nammu. Normally a temple Noble Phantasm Rider could establish by securing the leylines of his surroundings, due to his current Class, love of travel and role in "carrying the glory of Sumer to distant lands" through his conquests it has undergone a "rather outrageous" transformation into a tank-type mobile fortress he can summon at will. Boasting humungous wheels strewn with divine script supporting a sprawling complex of multiple concentric layers, each reinforced by magical defense, the Great Ziggurat is both Rider's greatest weapon in trampling over foes and shield against attack.

Furthermore, by invoking the name of the moon god Sin the temple was dedicated towards, a secret function is unveiled of condensing ambient Mana in the moonlight and focusing it into a powerful beam from the Ziggurat's top. This is an an Anti-Army level attack and the Noble Phantasm's greatest destructive power, but naturally, it can only be brought to bear at night.

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My dad's been reading a book that mentions this guy lately and I thought he sounded interesting so I got inspired to write up a Servant sheet for him. As usual comments and critiques would be appreciated. Thanks for reading!

[DelRey]

I like that guy, fun personality and cool skills. Good job!
But when I started reading I thought all the time "wasted opportunity for a Voyager". But I waited for the NP and yeah of course that can make him a Rider, but as much as Koyonskaya Light would qualify for it in a sense with her NP.

You even gave him a Territory skill, which is something i tried to do with my proposed Voyager class skills that are a related to independent action and territory creation by gaining mana/independence when inside a certain territory. Tho yours has a different basis

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Oh and i am relatively fit again.
My throat is still tattered from my violent coughs earlier, but i can read all your stuff again, folks.
And you all better be active next contest

[RoydGolden]

I like that guy, fun personality and cool skills. Good job!
But when I started reading I thought all the time "wasted opportunity for a Voyager". But I waited for the NP and yeah of course that can make him a Rider, but as much as Koyonskaya Light would qualify for it in a sense with her NP.

You even gave him a Territory skill, which is something i tried to do with my proposed Voyager class skills that are a related to independent action and territory creation by gaining mana/independence when inside a certain territory. Tho yours has a different basis

He could fit as a Voyager yeah (at least as you've outlined it). I just didn't think of using that Class and it's not something I had any particular plans for. Thanks for the feedback and glad you're (somewhat) better!

[DelRey]

too silent here. Here a question I wondered about

what was the most challenging Servant you have made so far?
In terms of research or time, thought behind them etc.

[BnEl15]

too silent here. Here a question I wondered about

what was the most challenging Servant you have made so far?
In terms of research or time, thought behind them etc.

Hardest has to be Watcher Jack. Anna Anderson was difficult formatting-wise with relatively simple lore, while Airlangga was difficult to write lorewise with straightforward formatting. Jack... was difficult on both aspects. The format was pretty experimental back then, and the content was just as hard to research. The Watcher-Class is already a rare Class, even in this forum, and Jack was my first proper Watcher (Laplace doesn't entirely count, as entertaining as he was to write, since he didn't properly utilize the shadows). I had the basic premise easily enough (everyone can become Jack if you squint hard enough), but looking for shadow candidates was hard (Prince Albert and Inspector Abberline was obvious, the other two, less so), and dividing which abilities I'd like to put as Skills and which ones to put as the NP effects was also pretty complicated in my mind.

On the other hand, one of the easiest sheet I've written is Sheriff of Nottingham/King John. I literally came up with around 80% of his entire kit while half-asleep. Actually typing it out is another story though.

Train of thought while writing this sheet

--> What if I make a Sheriff of Nottingham sheet, similar to Penth but with Robin?
--> Too obscure, the Sheriff would probably only qualify as a phantom, not to mention idk what NP to give him.
--> What if I fuse him with another phantom?
--> What if I fuse him with King John, as fellow enemies of Robin Hood?
--> I have this backwards, John should be the main man between the two.
--> What if John and the Sheriff was actually the same person all along, like a split personality? (I'm half-convinced that this crack idea came from my sleep-deprived mind at the time)
--> ...Nah, that's wack.
--> What if John has an NP that transforms him into the Sheriff somehow?
--> Yeah, that works. It also takes care of the NP problem. I'm sure there's more to John aside from his obsession with Robin, unlike the Sheriff.
--> What if he's so bad at ruling that he just outright kills anything he touches? (another semi-crack idea I had while half-asleep)

Everything else just spiraled down from there, and by the time I was fully awake, I had most of the sheet figured out in my mind. Then I rushed to my laptop to write down these ideas before I forget them.

[DelRey]

I can imagine, for Jack you had an interesting idea on how to format it. Figuring out how to do it spurned me on to create my current formatting.

Of course my biggest sheets were the most difficult to make in terms of research and stuff. But I remember how draining it was to make my Hindenburg. Formatting the poems with translation and colors and the dual nature of the skills, the different kind of research that was needed for that, it was hella annoying to do.
And I think my current one will be pretty difficult. Have to do stuff i am not that good at and find a new way to depict what I want to convey. What I wanna do with that sheet is not something I have seen here yet.

[WhiteFrenzy]

what was the most challenging Servant you have made so far?
In terms of research or time, thought behind them etc.

Liechtenauer. Turns out Servantverse-fying people and still making them look like the real figure somehow and not just make an OC who shares their name is harder than it looks. But the hardest Servant I've ever done was Faker by sheer virtue of me being in a bad place during that contest (not that I'm much better now but it was worse) - I couldn't for the life on me to gather any strength to do the things I truly wished I could've done with her and it shows in the messy executions and sense of incompletness of that sheet. But oh well.

Also hey Rey. Good to see you back and in full health!
Also hey guys. I'm looking at these sheets and I'm loving every single one of them - I hope y'all can forgive me for not being able to properly comment on anything lately, but I uhhh, I'll eventually come back and retify my mistakes. I swear. Until there, keep being amazingly talented people.

[Kabalisto Koga]

wish i could properly read the sheets, but i am still too sick right now to concentrate.
when i get back to making sheets, I think i will return to Servants with lots of research and effort behind them or are more connected with others.
At least the current one is a hard nut to crack for me.

Looks like i am not the only one here that is sick i to had to fight with a cold ,a melancholy and my Remainer is a difficult one. In other words i am back !

Though i got by chance on a servant idea for a servantverse servant .

[Tabris]

A bit of a weird question (if predictable under certain lights): any Servants in this thread whose Noble Phantasm(s) features roads or passageways of any kind?

[NittyGritty]

too silent here. Here a question I wondered about

what was the most challenging Servant you have made so far?
In terms of research or time, thought behind them etc.

all of my sheets come easy to me

upon the wings of sudden inspiration

the haunt my dreams

i see them in my morning oatmeal

fucking help

[DelRey]

its Nittys world and we are just renting it. you better turn up next contest.

regarding the road NP, i have seen nothing yet. If somebody knows about that then it is Royd. Else, my guess is you have someone related to it. If you dig a bit into the history of roads (idk how tho) perhaps you find some names that you then can look up here.
I hope you consider making a Voyager

[Frigix]

A bit of a weird question (if predictable under certain lights): any Servants in this thread whose Noble Phantasm(s) features roads or passageways of any kind?

I thought about making an NP/Skill for Trajan based on "Trajan's Bridge" that would make him able to instantly cross any rivers, pits, stuff like that, instantly. A bit like teleportation. Never got to do something with this idea for Trajan.