I'll never understand why people manage to consistently misspell Gandhi as 'Ghandi'. Especially when the two sound pretty damn different when you hear them pronounced.
I'll never understand why people manage to consistently misspell Gandhi as 'Ghandi'. Especially when the two sound pretty damn different when you hear them pronounced.
"The Archangel of Water, Gabriel has answered your call Mage. Hmph, you look like a rather underwhelming man but I suppose you'll be able to make do. Now, get down on your knees and worship me. If you want the loyalty of one such as I, that level of supplication is the least you can do."
Servant Lancer:
Appearance:
Source
True Name: Gabriel
Alignment: Lawful Good
Alternate Classes: Archer, Caster, Ruler
Strength- B
Agility- A
Endurance- B
Mana- A+
Luck- A+
NP- A+
Personality
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance- A+
Confers protection against magical effects. Spells A-rank and lower are nullified. The Servant is virtually untouchable to modern Magecraft, and it wouldn't be an exaggeration to dub them a 'Magus Killer'. As an Archangel, an emanation of Yahweh, Lancer's very existence rejects the occult on principle. However having to manifest under a human hero's Saint Graph has downgraded this Skill to A from its original EX-rank. From her patronage over water, a + modifier is applied to defending against Magecraft employing that element.
"Wahahahaa! Seeing your feeble spells totally fail to harm me is positively hilarious! Now I can understand why demons love toying with you guys so much..."
Independent Action- A
The ability to sustain oneself in existence without a supply of magical energy from one's Master. At this rank, Lancer can linger in the World for a full week in the absence of an active contract. Typically a Skill exclusive to the Archer Class, Lancer obtains it on personal pride that "an Archangel never subordinates herself to humans!".
Personal Skills:
Archangel Advice- EX
A Skill that denotes assistance from an Archangel, a Divine Spirit in Judeo-Christian lore. For Lancer whose most famous under her role as "one who guides heroes" she can bestow great blessings to those under her care. Under exceedingly rare conditions Lancer, despite being a Divine rather than Heroic Spirit, can be summoned as a Servant by "hijacking" the legend (Saint Graph) of one of the heroes she lead to glory.
In this summoning, she latches on to Gideon due to him having the most laidback personality that's easily dominated by her most of the time. Lancer herself manifests as the primary Servant, while Gideon just takes the form of a small chibi-looking sheep accompanying her (this references the legend where Gideon agreed to believe Gabriel's prophecies after the omen of a sheepskin soaked in dew while the rest of the ground was totally dry).
However, because of her arrogant and lazy personality it'd be the rarest circumstances where Lancer actually accepts to be summoned. Only if specifically ordered by God or all of humanity is in peril will Lancer reluctantly come forth and offer her full strength instead of just letting her heroes fight for her.
"I may not have the Divinity Skill right now, but I'm still an Archangel! So feel free to worship me to your heart's content, mortals!"
Mana Burst (Water)- B+
The Archangel presiding over water, Lancer can freely wield her chosen element. She favors expelling spiraling blasts of water from her spear, but can also apply it for defense and movement-boosting via propelling herself with controlled jets. Since Lancer is an Archangel (even if she doesn't always act like one) any water produced by this Skill has the attribute of "Holy Water", burning and dealing additional damage against evil and demonic existences.
"Flowing wherever it pleases, refreshing and beautiful as a clear mountain stream, truly that is the element most fitting for one such as I! ...W-what do you mean 'I'm just as temperamental as an ocean too'? Grr... you'll pay for insulting an Archangel like that! Take this, Water Sparkle Punishment Attack!"
Hero Creation- A+
In legend, Lancer is one who chooses heroes. Samson, Gideon and Charlemagne are all examples of heroes selected by her hand, who went on to obtain peerless glory and renown. As such, Lancer can "mark" those she favors as "heroes", giving them a great blessing from the World. Those affected receive stats on par with a low-tier Servant and any unique talents/abilities they had in life are elevated to the level of Personal Skills. Given training, it's possible the target can further raise their stats and develop new abilities as they come into their own as a hero. While theoretically a valuable Skill, given Lancer's merciless personality there's few who'd agree to her training regimens.
"Come on, carrying me to the market on your shoulders is part of your heroic training. No, it's not just because I'm lazy and want to be spoiled! Just saying that is going to make me add 50 more squats to your exercises when we get home!"
Noble Phantasms
So here's a Gabriel sheet to go along with the other Archangel ones I wrote up a while back. I had some trouble coming up with NPs for her, and I'm aware the Durandal one is a bit of a stretch, but I think it works. As usual feel free to drop by with comments and criticisms. Thanks for reading y'all!
Last edited by RoydGolden; May 15th, 2023 at 01:06 AM.
Archangel Gabriel: A nice sheet, solid and despite what you say about the stretch with Durandal, it's not outside the conceivable in reality, or in fate, what with how much some things are stretched in the franchise.
Nothing is a greater stretch than the Gate.
On the subject of Durandal, I like how you differentiated it from other renditions of the weapon. Infusing it with the concept of water and re-working it's aspects to fit definitely help make it unique, and the water whip form kinda keeps the idea of Durandal/Durandina being able to pierce any defence, although more in the idea of it pierces a defence by flowing around it than pierces a defence by thrusting through it.
The balance you gave the horn of being resistible but not completely negotiable is a good call, considering how powerful items from God have been so far in fate(Arc killing Heracles, despite Godhand for example, or the 10 rings)
Two questions I do have about the sheet is the lack of something like the Revelation skill. Gabriel is probably the most used angel for bringing prophets from various religions the words of god.
Also, as we know that a prototype of Durandal exists in the Gate, what would her reaction be Gilgamesh calling hers a knock-off or some other Gilgamesh insult.
Overall a solid sheet, nicely done and a nice addition to the Angel sheets we have.
Thanks for your commentary Chain. I did consider giving her a Revelation-like Skill, but thought that might run too similar to the Intercessor Of The Divine I used for Metatron, so I emphasized Gabriel's aspect as the "muse of heroes" over a messenger more generally. Maybe more of that would be emphasized as Caster or Ruler. And yeah, I do imagine her and Gil having an ego face-off, over the sword or otherwise.
"Rejoice, Master. The strongest champion of the Israelites, Samson, has answered your call! Now, show me some good booze or strong opponents already!"
Servant Berserker:
Appearance:
Source
True Name: Samson
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Armament: A donkey's jawbone carved into a war-axe. But Berserker rarely actually uses it in battle, instead relying on her hair and bare fists to crush her foes.
Strength- A+
Agility- A
Endurance- A
Mana- C
Luck- C
NP- EX
Personality
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement- C
A Skill that characterizes the Berserker Class. Raises parameters in return for a loss of sanity and/or hindering mental capabilities. At this rank, all parameters save Luck and Mana are ranked-up. Berserker isn't truly "mad" but she is wild, tending to act impulsively on her own desires without thought for the consequences.
When slighted there's a significant chance she'll enter a destructive rage, attacking every enemy in sight without regard for strategy. There's not much her Master can do when she's like this (save wasting a Command Seal) so their best bet is to stay out of her way until the object of her ire is destroyed or she (eventually) calms down on her own. Otherwise, showing her a pretty woman is a good way to snap her back to her senses.
Personal Skills:
Heralded Birth- B
A Skill crystallizing the legend where Archangel Gabriel appeared before Berserker at her birth to announce that she would one day become a great hero who'd liberate Israel. As one decreed from her very birth to be the "world's strongest (wo)man", Berserker gains a bonus to all Strength and Luck-related checks.
Battle Continuation- A
The ability to continue combat after receiving fatal wounds. At this rank, Berserker can keep fighting even in the face of debilitating injuries, only falling once she burns out all her life's energy or a decisive killing blow is struck. In legend even while blinded, shackled and deprived of her God-given power, Berserker still mustered one last burst of strength to bring the Temple of Dagon down upon her oppressors.
Riddle Master- B
A talent to spin up riddles and word-games. Berserker, while seemingly just a battle-crazed meathead at first glance, is surprisingly eloquent when it comes to devising riddles. According to a famous legend she humiliated the other groomsmen at her wedding by presenting a riddle they couldn't solve, which was an allusion to her own slaying of a lion earlier. She's especially adept at coming up with riddles to taunt those she's annoyed with. However this Skill is pretty much useless in combat, unless Berserker can enrage the opponent and provoke them into making a mistake with a taunting riddle.
Instinct- A-
The ability to instantly identify "the best personal course of action" during combat. Because this Skill allows for the prediction of trajectory, it is possible to avoid attacks from firearms. At rank A, it is essentially in the realm of predicting the future. Through this ability, it is possible to halve the penalties inflicted by visual and auditory interference. Even while blinded Berserker can still fight effectively, just by relying on her instincts.
Having participated in many fierce battles over the 20 years she "judged" Israel, Berserker naturally acquired a keen sixth sense for combat. This was heightened by her receiving guidance from God, essentially perceiving the world through His eyes rather than her own. However, Berserker was known as someone who often followed her eyes rather than her spiritual senses. As such she may neglect the advice of her own instincts on occasion, either by being too caught up in the thrill of battle or an attack coming from her "blind-spot" like by someone she'd trusted previously. As such, a - modifier has been attached to this Skill.
Noble Phantasms
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So along with Gabriel this is the second sheet I'd been saving up just in case it fit the contest theme. This is a remake of my old Samson sheet, since there were a bunch of things I wanted to do differently to bring her up to my present standards. I decided to emphasize the "solar hero" aspect in her NPs, since that's not something I've seen used in any other Samson sheet and helps set her apart.
As usual, comments and critiques would be appreciated. Thanks for reading!
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Samson: You know a sheet is pretty damn high quality when one of your only gripes is the FC, damn.
You're right when you say you did something different with the sheet, my lord I think this sheet probably emphasis the hair more than the god damn source material!
Honestly, while I would question the rank of her second and first NP's, biblical heroes have been broken so far as I said with gabriel, so it's not out of line, and the second NP has a fair balancer with the not able to defend herself thing.
While I would say it's a missed opportunity to use Yang(RWBY) as the FC, the personalities match so damn well, it's swept away by just imagining her having an Escanor style last stand and fading away next to her master. Well done.
Side note, is it known if Giants are considered an Elemental or Phantasmal in fate? My new sheet is kinda hitting a snag with that question.
Whoa Royd, are you okay? Did you snapped? Did you just woke up today and felt like OBLITERATING US ALL with so much contained awesomeness? I dunno, we can talk about that...
But anyway, jokes aside I hope you know you did great. Two amazing sheets, back to back? That's something else.
I love Gabriel, the angel. I think it's one of my favorite Christian figures actually, so I love when fiction does something good by this figure. And you not only did good, but went above and beyond too! Loved that "guide of heroes" role you gave, which is something very fitting. (And yes, good to know that great minds think alike, because I always believed that, as a servant, she'd most definitely have the Hero Creation skill.) AND THOSE NOBLE PHANTASMS??? WHOA. Also, at last, I love how she's such an arrogant figure - it's my favorite interpretation of this angel thank you I owe you my life.
And yes, also, Samsom. NOW THIS IS A GENDERBENT I CAN GET BEHIND. (And I liked the reasoning, "of course such a strong individual would be a man!" it's always simple but effective.) There's a lot of power in this sheet, in the sense that even as I was reading I could feel her vibrant personality - and I don't know HOW you consistently manages to translate so much of your characters in the reading in such a seamless way. I want what you have hahah. (I wish I could say that I loved everything about her abilities and her powers too, but it kinda became me gushing over your writing abilities... I'M SORRY.)
Howaito please can you look at my last servant Girl when you are real back as i am curious to hear your oppinion !
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She's very cute, Koga. Good work on that sheet. I liked how you expanded the Tree of Ténéré's lore - that in itself would be quite boring - with faerie references and made something unique out of that. In this regard, you've come a long way! Her abilities are what you'd expect from a plant that gained a moving body, but the way you described them was good and it gave us a clear idea of her range and capacities. And did I mentioned that she's cute? THE SWEETEST. All in all, you did great there!
"I am Assassin. Lowly human, I'd kill you right now. However, I have a wish for the grail, and a Master is required to obtain the relic"
Class: Assassin
Alignment: True/Neutral
Region: Middle East
Height: 157cm
Weight: 40kg
Likes: Traveling, freedom, deserts
Dislikes: Imprisonment, cities, closed spaces
Talent: Rushing
Armaments: Wind
Natural Enemy: Cursed Arm Hassan
stats
Str: E
End: E
Agi: A
Mna: A
Lck: D
NP: B
Skills
Noble phantasm
Background
Personality
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Simoon: A nice sheet Zero, and overall quite impressive. While there are a few things I question with the sheet, there are some good points I'd like to touch on first.
Familiar and child of nature are two skills that I feel are well chosen and reasoned, with your use of familiar being nicely different from the other examples of it. Only thing I could say is a little more detail on the child of nature, like exactly what the blessings entail, would be nice. Although, I am a hypocrite to call another person vague. *Looks at Colt sheet*
The noble phantasm I have no problems with. Actually, I really must complement you with the idea you went for. The closest I've seen before with the erasure of self concept was Nameless Forest from Extra, and that never really showed up again for ages, so it's nice to see someone using the concept again over another Insta-kill NP, or such.
I am guilty of this
The only things I have to question would be why Sirroco is given a unique name when the effects are identical to how many have used a theoretical Mana Burst(Wind)/Mana Burst(Air)? Also, may I ask why his natural enemy would be cursed arm?
Simoon: Hm a interesting srevant where have you got the idea for him Zero ? I have two Questions first have you seen my Dessert fairy if so please tell me your oppinion ? ans second as she is also a Spirit of the Desserts how is he finding her as fellow Nature Spirit ?
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I think because Hassan has protection of the Wind which gives him also protection from Djinn like beings so are his attacks basically useless would i say . and hae you seen my Arbre du Tenere profile if yes i would be curious to hear your oppinion .
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Thank you for your feedback, I'll try and answer your questions the best I can.
First, Child of Nature, This is a Canon skill, and the description I used was a slightly modified version of the canon one, so I am sorry if it's a bit too vague, but that is because the original is actually that vague too. From what I understood, I guess it's the world helping him with Mana gain? But there is no way of knowing for sure...
With Sirroco, I wanted to give his abilities a bit of personal identity. While it may look like the same as Mana Burst, it is actually a limited release of his Noble Phantasm (who is always active under his mantle). He also cannot infuse it into objects like Mana Burst usually allows for.
Finally, Cursed Arm is a bit of a small jokey mention. To understand, just look at one of Cursed arm's Skill: Protection from Wind is a chant that offers prayers to God, that oneself might receive a charm (spell) of protection against sandstorms and evil spirits such as Jinns. Originates from the Middle East. To call it a "charm" smacks of superstition, but the strength of its warding is tremendous.
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Dessert Fairy: it is an interesting concept, and you did it very well. The only thing is, and honestly it's a token criticism, the grammar mistakes made it quite hard to understand everything in the first reading.
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Thanks for clarifying Zero, and it's nice to see a bit more of your reasoning. Honestly a great sheet, and the extra just makes it better. Now...
Abre du Tenere: Haven't seen many gatekeeper class servants, so it's always nice to see a less utilised class make an appearance. And it definitely fits. Her build seems to almost always geared to be the impassable guardian who stands in the way and demoralises her foes, much like a gate.
Her personality is interesting, and someone I'd be very interested to see interact with some of my planed sheets. The personal skills are quite a breath of fresh air when it comes to the unique ones, as a few sheets I've been looking back through took uniques skills as fair ground to just break things.
Her NP's are interesting, although I like the first more than the second. The second isn't without it's justifications, but it just feels a little forced to put such an offensive sounding NP on a largely defensive servant from the rest of the sheet. Although, I will say that I do like what you did with how things function and the time restraints making it more fair.
However, her first is definitely the best bit. Turning the legend of a tree whose shade saved it from being ripped down into an area that is so peaceful even the mad return to sanity in it's presence is an amazing transformation, and one of the best way's I think you could have used it. Overall, nicely done. A long way better than Avenger Goliath.
Our Faith is Yet Fickle. Our Sin is Still Plenty.
Let us Hollow Our Soul, Let Us Mortify Our Flesh.
Let Us Journey to the Kiln of Sacrifice.
To Accept the Fire. To Kindle the Flame.
Our Souls as Fuel, Our Flesh as Clay.
The Flame Shall Scorch Our Flesh to Ashes,
The Flame Shall Burn Our Sins and Purify Our Souls.
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"Please do mind my attire, I can assure you that it will not hinder my combat ability in the slightest."
True Name: Brunor Le Noir
Class: Saber
Source: Arthurian Legend
Region: Britain
Alignment: Lawful Good
Armaments: Sword and Shield
Parameters:
Strength: C
Endurance: A
Agility: B
Mana: B
Luck: C
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm
Personality
Class: Foreigner
Other Classes: Caster
True Name: Howard Philips Lovecraft
Alignment: Neutral Good/Evil
Place of Origin: North America
Parameters:
STR: E
END: D
AGI: E
MGI: A+
LCK: C
NP: A
Class Skills:
Existence Outside the Domain (E-EX):
Forming a connection to the Other Gods, however briefly, has forever changed Foreigner. Though it was severed when he disassociated all knowledge of them from his mind, it still exists, waiting for the two halves to be reconnected. Should the connection be reforged, he will become their conduit to Gaia. While he will avoid doing such, it is still a possibility.
Divinity (D):
Though fully human when he was alive, his connection with the Other Gods and the perception of him being the creator of an entire mythos has granted him low level Divinity, making him completely exempt from the ailments of his life.
Personal Skills:
Librarian of Knowledge (C):
Though his Origin makes him forgetful of things he deems unnecessary, his is able to catalogue every piece of important information he has ever gained by the book in which it is contained within his Noble Phantasm. To prevent his own insanity, he has only given himself vague recollections of what is contained within each, but it is enough for him to discern what is appropriate for any situation.
A Dreaming Existence (B):
One of the few things he never allowed himself to forget was the futility of existence, though where this knowledge came from was lost in his life. The truth was brought back upon his summons. Realizing that he and all else were merely a dream by the slumbering Azathoth, Foreigner accepted how meaningless everything truly was. As a result, his stats are completely visible to all, as he sees no purpose in concealing them. Likewise, all other Servants stats are visible to him and his master.
Orator of the Call (A):
A personalized form of Loss of Sanity, this Skill stems from Foreigner’s soul being touched by the Other Gods. As such, he exudes the madness of knowledge from his very person, distorting the perceptions of those with magic resistance below D rank. Whenever he casts, the forgotten tongue he speaks amplifies this effect, requiring B rank resistance when heard and A rank when directed at a specific person or persons. Prolonged exposure to these effects results in the deterioration of the target's mental faculties.
Loss of Knowledge(A):
An evolved form of Self-Suggestion born of his Origin: Disassociation.
Foreigner is capable of completely disassociating himself from anything to such a degree, he is able to temporarily warp reality around him. If he chooses to forget something, the world around him will change to fit his narrative. This Skill also has a permanent effect on Foreigner. However, he is capable of relearning anything he has forgotten. As an example, if he forgot what a sword was, anything around him represented as a “sword” would disappear. However, if someone then explained to him what a sword was, they would return into existence. The effects of his removal when he has not relearned something last only five minutes before reality corrects itself.
Weak Constitution (D):
Weakness of one's body because of an illness. During his lifetime, Foreigner suffered from malnutrition and intestinal cancer, causing this Skill to reflect that by making Foreigner’s body physically thin and weak. However, when summoned as a Foreigner, this weakness is absent due to Divinity, though his appearance remains the same.
Noble Phantasms
Miskatonic University: Haven of Forbidden Knowledge (A)
It is unknown if Foreigner discovered this extra-dimensional space or if it was created when he conceived the fictional town of Arkham. Either way, Miskatonic University manifests as a Reality Marble accessible only to Foreigner and those he chooses. Though it is an entire campus, Foreigner only cares about the library, and spends the majority of his time among the tomes within. Having filled the building with as many of his own books as those already present, any knowledge he could possibly desire is stored here, and acts as his main base of operations.
Necronomicon: An Image of the Law of the Dead (EX)
Foreigner’s greatest achievement. Passed off as being created by the Arab Abdul Alhazred in his fictional works, the Necronomicon is the ultimate culmination and collection of all knowledge he gained from connecting with the Other Gods. Though he immediately expunged all knowledge of them once he had completed it, he used it sparingly as a guide for his writings. As Foreigner, he uses it as his central weapon, using the lost knowledge within to call upon the power of the Other Gods, quickly erasing the knowledge from his mind after use. If he were to regain the knowledge for an extended period of time, the gods would once more take notice of him.
Lore
Personality
Relationships
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