What a nice servant, Kamera though the NP made chuckle a bit. I imagine she just does that chorus when she uses it also I wonder how she would react to Solomon or Goetia even and vice versa
What a nice servant, Kamera though the NP made chuckle a bit. I imagine she just does that chorus when she uses it also I wonder how she would react to Solomon or Goetia even and vice versa
That is an interesting one, kamera
So in your interpretation she was a temporary Pseudo Servant in life and left her with a skill that makes her more suitable to be one as a Servant? Her connection to the root also seems pretty weird
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uhh, no? why would being spooked by the holy ghost makes you a pseudo servant lol
Class: Rider
True Name: Zheng He
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origins: Ming China
Parameters:
Strength: C
Agility: B
Endurance: C
Mana: A
NP: A
Summoning Line: Class Rider, Zheng He. I bestow upon you the treasure that I been collecting for years. Impressed. These are not a but a few that I have receive in my journeys. Not only gold or silver but many other valuable things.
Class Skills:
Personal Skills:
Noble Phantasms:
Mics Line:
Bond Lines:
Relationship:
Creator's Notes:
Last edited by Ismail2002; January 23rd, 2022 at 10:02 PM.
i though this will be your first non-muslim servant, turns out i was wrong lmao
pretty interesting, but i think it's about time you put more effort in describing the NPs
Yeah, I guess they have been quite short any tips so I don't seem repetitive in the wording
"Faith is what keeps one going in trying time, even when all appears lost. The moment you lose faith in what you believe in, you have already lost."
True Name: Baligant
Class: Saber
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Source: Song of Roland
Region: Egypt
Parameters:
Strength: A
Endurance: A
Agility: B
Mana: C
Luck: A-
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance B-
Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Typically, Saber, who was said to be an equal peer to a fantastical existence known as the king of the Franks, boasts an above average Resistance to spells and the like however, in the situation where Renouncement of Faith fails, it is lowered temporarily.
Riding B
A Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.
Personal Skills:
Renouncement of Faith B
The denouncement of one's convictions whether it be in a supreme being, an ideal, or yourself. In life, the meeting of the two armies occured not for just an expansion of territory but of faith as well. A double-edged skill where successfully tearing down one's faith will lower all parameters except Mana and Luck by one. However, in the case, where the attacker is rebuffed, then they themselves will feel the effects of the skill. Can be rebuffed by skill such as Protection of the Faith or Zealotry at A rank or higher.
Warrior of Ancient Times A
An anecdote that describes Saber's very existence. A long lived warrior who has fought in the domain of sand since during the age where gods roamed the land. Combines the effects of Eye of the Mind (True), Military Tactics, and Robust Health at varying ranks.
Hero's Mirror A
An observation of the underlying theme of one's existence being a counterpart to another. Said equal in all aspects to the leader of the Paladins, Charlemagne, yet nonetheless inferior at the end of it. When encountering others that bear similarities to that of Charlemagne, the more Saber would understand, and therefore be able to counter, them, predicting their tricks, methods of attack, and motivation with increasing accuracy.
Noble Phantasm
Personality
Creator's Note: Damn, its been a while since I posted or people are just getting their creativity engines flared. Oh, as a response to some back posts, my speciality is reaction/response sheet i.e things like the Brazilian servants for Wyvern's Lostbelt or Claudes des Armoises for the Jeanne face craze.
doesn't need to be mechanical descriptions, just add some flowery words to add flavor and reinforce the np's basic conceptOriginally Posted by Ismail2002
Hmm, possibly their limitations, tactical uses of the NP, and some examples, if necessary? Some more descriptive visuals of the NP might also help. You gotta strike a balance though, between being descriptive and not writing massive walls of text that doesn't contribute much to the overall sheet. I reckon that would take several trials and errors. Other than that, this is another fine sheet.
Edit:
Baligant: Another fine sheet for a relatively minor figure (I didn't find much on him besides being a rival to Charlie and having a named sword). It's a straightforward concept (hero who fights with the power of faith and friendship), but you pulled it off well.
Last edited by BnEl15; January 14th, 2022 at 12:28 PM.
Thanks for the tip Kamera
Baligant: It's a nice sheet though I feel it is quite short. I think you add more to his personality with some dialogue or something to flesh it out a bit
I mean, those are the places he belongs since he isn't a real person so they can't put him into the Pict section.
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How does one hide the faceclaim behind the class card again? I can't seem to find where it was talked about last, sorry
This is how I've always done it.
[COLLAPSE="Class Card Goes here"] Servant Faceclaim goes here[///COLLAPSE]
Remove the extra forward slashes of course.
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extra tip putting your code between (noparse]...[/noparse] and it shows as regular text
[COLLAPSE="Class Card Goes here"]Servant Faceclaim goes here[/COLLAPSE]
there is a formatting guide explaining all the buttons on the top of the Fanfic General Discussion in green text, very helpful
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Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Servant Rider:
Appearance:
Source
True Name: Guthrum
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Alternate Classes: Lancer, Berserker, Caster, Avenger, Ruler
Strength- C
Agility- B
Endurance- B
Mana- C
Luck- D
NP- A
Personality
Class Skills:
Riding- A+
The ability to ride animals and handle vehicles. At this rank even Phantasmal and Demonic Beasts can be ridden at a high degree of skill, exempting only the Dragon-Kind. In life Guthrum was only a war-chief with experience riding horses, but never more fantastical mounts. This rank has been garnered to properly utilize his first Noble Phantasm.
Magic Resistance- B-
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank spells with a chant below three verses are cancelled. Even if targeted by the likes of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals it is difficult for the Servant to be affected. Rider stood astride the twilight of the old gods in his homeland and bitterly resisted their domination by the followers of the cross. Being endowed with the lingering vestiges of a prior era Rider receives a strong resistance against mysteries that belies his youthful legend. However through the distortion of his Demon King Skill Rider suffers a weakness against Christian sacraments and holy magic that bypass his defenses.
Personal Skills:
- B+Raven's BannerHrafn Guðfani
The fearsome banner bearing the image of a black raven that Viking warriors would allegedly bear setting forth into battle. While actually not as universal amongst Viking tribes as popular folklore would suggest and it's unclear whether Rider himself would've ever marched under this banner, his association with it combined with his infamy as a Danish warrior-king is enough to manifest as a Personal Skill. A variant of Charisma, those blessed by the Raven that symbolizes Elder God Odin have their spirits emboldened in battle (obtaining + modifiers to every kind of check) while enemies are stricken with dread at the sight and receive demerits in their parameters.
However through Rider's distortion into a demonic enemy of Christendom the nature of the Banner has likewise corrupted into an icon of infernal power. A beacon of slaughter that draws the despair and death on both sides of the battlefield and greedily absorbs them into Rider's Saint Graph, strengthening himself in proportion to the magnitude of fallen. Rather than a glorious symbol of victory this is the aspect of the raven as a carrion-feeder who pecks the corpses of the slain.
The charismatic effect of this Skill mutates into a mental interference that compels allies to fight even as they're cut down in droves, reduced to a half-dead army that will continue to advance as even their bodies fall apart. Their victories go to Rider while their deaths become further sacrifices that empower the King of Warriors, either way he rejoices. The longer battle rages on the less Rider can be called a Servant but a personification of death itself that exists to scatter it wherever he goes.
"King Guthrum was a dread king,
Like death out of the north;
Shrines without name or number
He rent and rolled as lumber,
From Chester to the Humber
He drove his foemen forth."
Demon King- B
An ability "similar to but dissimilar to Innocent Monster" that affects those who were called a monster in life, later twisted to be different than they were in life. Rider was a Danish war-chief who opposed Alfred the Great in life, and ordinarily that would be all of his legend. Yet through the work of G.K Chesterton in his famous poem "The Balled of the White Horse" Rider's name was rendered synonymous with a fated nemesis of Christendom vanquished by its chosen champion in the form of Alfred the Great.
This distortion influences Rider's appearance upon summoning into a Demonic High King with runic sigils along his body and black antlers emerging from his forehead evoking the horned god of the woods Cernunnos that was believed to be an alter-ego of his own patron god Odin. A faint aura of sulphur perpetually surrounds him and Servants belonging to any of the three Monotheistic faiths will feel an instinctive unease around Rider's presence. Some of his Skills and Noble Phantasms are affected by this transformation and he gains resistance against demonic spells and curses alongside corresponding vulnerability towards holy Magecraft and sacraments.
Rider himself might resent that he was transformed like this, but overall that is drowned out by the sense of apathy permeating his existence. In any case he has no qualms wielding the benefits it garners him.
Emotional Freezing- B-
An empty heart only filled by acts of destruction. Rider's frozen emotional state allows him to block out most mental interferences that would stir him to joy or sorrow. His heart only slightly warms on the battlefield, as immersed in the throes of blood and death he can temporarily forget the emptiness of his own existence. Were he to meet a worthy opponent who challenges his own views this Skill might be sealed as Rider shatters the coffin of ice around his heart, yet for one who embraced the role of a demon-king that may be only a vague dream.
"What have the strong gods given?
Where have the glad gods led?
When Guthrum sits on a hero's throne
And asks if he is dead?"
Primordial Rune- N/A
The possession of and knowledge about Runes that came from an older era. Those with possession and knowledge of Primordial Runes can also make use of the classic Rune Magic. Rider obtains this Skill as a last gasp of the Scandinavian Age of Gods against the encroaching Christendom of Alfred the Great. Thanks to his Demon King Skill he's become an embodiment of all practices of the old Nordic Pagans who also grants him knowledge over their runes.
Rider receives runes directly from the Norse god Odin whom he devoted himself to in life, far superior to the ones modern Magi use. He can evoke runes to summon swarms of crows that peck the opponent down to the bone, create a scrying eye to view remote battlefields or imbue into his weaponry for various effects. However Rider's own apathy dulls the potential of this Skill as he can't be bothered to study enough to explore their full power.
Noble Phantasms
So I'd been thinking of writing up a Guthrum sheet ever since Shiki-pon floated him amongst his suggestions a while back, but only now got the inspiration to do it. Of course his characterization and abilities are heavily influenced by G.K Chesterton's The Ballad of the White Horse which I even quoted from in the sheet. FC doesn't quite match how I described him but it's the closest I could find that fits my image of the character. As usual comments and critiques would be welcome. Thanks for reading!
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 23rd, 2023 at 05:16 PM. Reason: Changed FC
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"My liege, your servant, Richard Neville of the Caster class, has arrived. If my liege wishes to ascend to the royal dignity, then I only ask for one thing: your complete and total cooperation with my designs. Is this agreeable?"
Class: Caster
True Name: Richard Neville (Light)
Alternate class: Saber
Gender: Male
Height and Weight: 189 cm / 78 kg
Source: Historical fact
Region: Europe
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Attribute: Man
Parameters
Strength: C
Constitution: D
Agility: B+
Magical Energy: A
Luck: A
Noble Phantasm: B
He is surprisingly sensitive when it comes appearances, especially his own. "The most important part of being king is looking like one!"
Class SkillsBiography
Territory Creation: EX
It is the Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana. Neville is skilled enough to construct a Workshop; however, his way of being currently treats "being at my liege's side" as equivalent to "being in a Workshop", so there's little need to make a separate one.
Personal Skills
Instinct: C
The ability to instantly identify "the best personal course of action" during combat. Because this Skill allows for the prediction of trajectory, it is possible to avoid attacks from firearms. However, rather than use it for battle, Neville finds that its optimal use is in "divining the other party's intentions, personality, etc".
Golden Rule: B
A Skill that refers to the measurement of one's fortune to acquire wealth. It becomes possible to live an upper-crust lifestyle by living off on one's riches alone, and it is unlikely that money will run out. Neville's financial power from obtaining high-ranking positions became a part of his strength as much as his combat ability, which eventually allowed him to prop up and tear down kings as he saw fit. In this case, however, 75% of the income he generates is automatically donated to the Master.
Hero Creation: A
A Skill that represent the techniques and arts to artificially give birth to and raise a "King". As expected of the man whose actions led to the coining of the term "kingmaker", Neville's rank in this Skill is remarkable. However, it appears to be a bit higher than usual, perhaps because his current mindset does not emphasize "overthrowing the king I myself installed".
Vapor Mirror: A
The Neville family's Displacement-type magecraft that is descended from the Mirror magecraft of Morgan le Fae. Instead of transferring something from one place to another, it is a mystery that transports the past into the present using the concept of the mirror as its foundation. Functionally replaces the Caster class Skill Item Construction.
The image reflected by the mirror is microscopically delayed thanks the mechanics of light; therefore, looking into a mirror can rightly be called "looking into the past". By reaching into the mirror using magical energy, one can obtain objects, concepts, and even phenomena that existed in the past. If unsupported by the continuous application of magical energy, the displaced items can only persist for a short while in the present era, and disappear in a manner similar to those created using Gradation Air.
Although Richard's death at the battle of Barnet spelled the end of the Vapor Mirror's users, research into its mechanics eventually found its way into the hands of the Peligor family, where its concepts were incorporated into their family magecraft, Shell Projection.
Noble Phantasm
Crown of Londinium: The Now-Ephemeral Majesty
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit Noble Phantasm
Range: 1-9
Max targets: 1 person
The crystallization of Richard Neville's legend as the arbiter of English royal power, Light version. A trial run of sorts for Richard Neville's services created by enrobing an allied target with regalia made from "the royal authority of the English monarchy during Richard Neville's time" and "the target's desire to walk the royal road (right path)" that have drawn into the present day using the Vapor Mirror. Put bluntly, it's power dressing conceptualized as a Noble Phantasm.
The garment itself provides considerable attack bonuses when worn, and is durable enough to withstand several blows from a low-ranking Noble Phantasm. However, due to the mechanics of the Vapor Mirror, it only persists for a few minutes before fading away. In this respect, it's similar to evening formalwear made by one's fairy godmother.Miscellaneous Notes
Last edited by Nuclear; March 14th, 2022 at 03:04 AM.
Dang, I was just looking him up as a potential sheet. Mine would be a more straightforward Avenger as an angsty, angry dad lamenting the fates of his daughters, as well as being disappointed at the incompetent Kings whom he previously supported, only to further prolong the war, though.
This is not a bad sheet, but I do feel like it focuses a bit too much on him being a mage over the conflicts he faced in life (like his relationship with Richard, Edward, and Henry, or his defection to the Lancasters), which isn't any less interesting. Maybe that's because of the whole Light/Dark split you got going on, though it's just a personal gripe of mkme.
great and creative works from Royd and Nuclear.
I hope to see Alfred and Dark respectively someday.
Using the Light and Dark stuff from Tamagovitch is interesting. Maybe I can use it somewhere too
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
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This is a fair assessment of things, and I am aware that Neville (Light) isn't a "conventional" take on the historical figure. I mostly used him as a part of a thought experiment in integrating Pascaline philosophy into my trashy Fate OC profiles.
In Pascal's Pensees, he rebukes two inadequate responses to the data of divine revelation: dogmatism (i.e., ardent belief that cannot be defended by reason) and skepticism (i.e., reason untethered by belief). Light, with his emphasis on intuition to the detriment of reasoning, represents dogmatism, and Darkness would represent skepticism. What I wanted to show with this duality was that just as neither Light nor Darkness completely capture the essence of "Richard Neville", dogmatism and skepticism are likewise untenable responses to divine revelation, and that both reasoning and intuition are needed to make full sense of it. The theme of mirrors and being a descendant of Morgan le Fae were essentially accessories to enhance that effect.
That said, I am aware that a significant shortcoming of this project is that Richard Neville isn't an established character in TM lore unlike Kominsky, which makes it so that there isn't a comparison between the Kominsky we meet in the main story and her Light incarnation, for example, so I'll take that L.
i think it is fine but if you base Light and Dark on such a philosophy this should have been noted at least somewhere in the sheet. That is vital information
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
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