The time has come.
Kim Il-sung: R.I.P. Olga: We hardly knew ye. …Unless you watch/read El-Melloi, and even then...
Have to say, her being Rider makes more sense than Marie Antoinette. I love her. I love the Orleans singularity because both she and Amadeus made me tear up in it, but she just seems more Caster. Also, agreement that this genderbend doesn’t make much sense, but that’s enither here nor there by this point. I like’em as a whole, but I feel that second NP needed a better description because you don’t really discuss the attack itself. Just that it ignores and is effective against other authorities. You say “A light close to a real sun which imposes its worship and divine judgment”, but what does that mean damage-wise? Without any descriptions, it just seems like something to depower Servants with divine sources, which still leaves plenty of options to fight off the would-be god.
Enlil, God of Usurpation: Hoo boy. This… this is gonna take a second. You just went insane with this one, didn’t you?
I could tackle the expansive nature of his forms, his weaving through the pantheons, the frankly staggering amount of effort to do the lore, Skills, and NPs in both varitations, or the fact that you called me out in a post for story creation. The scale of your madness knows few bounds. …I had a feeling I’d like you when I read Delahaye, despite its original flaws, even if I had her marked for creation. Maybe you should pace yourself, though, before you do something on this scale again. Things like these are better spread out rather than concentrated into a single sheet. Repeated cases are bound to drive you crazy.
Have to say, though, he’d probably be in the top three of the contest. Too bad.
Rocambole: Tip my hat to you here.
An interesting fellow with an intriguing NP. I actually feel you could have leaned more into the meta-narrative direction in a more interesting way in that, so long as his master is alive “writing his story”, than Rocambole must be too as he’s the one telling it to the master. Thus, he can’t until the one telling his story also has. Would be an interesting way to keep a relatively weak Assassin alive and opens the door for some interesting tactics to be used. Still, the NP with manifestations of his companions is pretty neat.
Erlang-Shen: Ah. My old enemy. Walls of text. The only King of Warriors is Sigurd!
I thought I had heard of him before. That guy Wu Kong fought and… can’t remember if he beat him or they just kind of quit fighting. Either way, dude got some cred just from that. Probably should have realized he had a story beyond that anecdote, but, with how episodic Journey to the West is, I honestly wouldn’t have been surprised if he was made specifically for just a minor obstacle before Sun even got met the priest whose name I can’t remember. Nice.
Franz Liszt: We all need a little more piano in our lives.
I’d finish my review, but I’m just kinda… swept away by the music. I see you off, Liszt. Perhaps at the end of your journey. Till then.
Iara:I feel conflicted about Emerald as a faceclaim.
Inhuman seems like a poor man’s Camouflage. Considering all the other Servants far more inhuman than her, the Skill just kind of feels pointless. I… really don’t have anything to say beyond that. Just kinda… nonplussed, I guess? Suppose it feels like something more interesting is lying underneath it.
Wendigo Curse: Cannibalism go brrrrrrrrrr
So, Nega-World, huh? …Quite the statement there. What exactly is its sin? Space? Nothingness? Consumption? The Wendigo is tied to corruption and loss of humanity alongside Insatiable gluttony. In a lot of ways, the wendigo seems to represent the kind of monsters humans can become in the insatiable thirst for …well, anything excessively. They possess people who have cannibalized another, turning them into gaunt giants that look as though beyond the point of starvation and closer to skeletons that smell of decay and death. So, how does this exactly translate to Nega-World? If anything, this seems to fall under Beast III’s purview of Lust and Depravity. If it’s linked to destroying humanity’s growth as somewhat alluded to in the Skill, isn’t that just Tiamat’s Nega-Genesis with her sin of Regression? Or are you implying that consuming everything is a form of growth like how humans consume resources, making the Skill something that would be more accurately named “Nega-Withering or Decrease or Starving”, making the sin Growth or Expansion or Consumption? So, again I ask, “What is the sin that somehow translates to the removal of the entire world so the sin is all that remains?” I’m trying to understand because I’ve always loved the wendigo and am here for this concept. I just need clarification.
Dame Ragnelle: Gawain best be running. She’s a mean one.
I like her. Don’t have that much else to say beyond that. Is good.
Tomas De Torquemada: No one expects the Spanish Inquisition!
I… I just wanted to make the joke. He’s a fine Servant. Like the art. Rather than C or False, Preseance Concealment should have just been E or just locked out like Li Shuwen’s.
Jaguarê: Himbo looking for wife. Doesn’t know how to use Google Maps. Not that it would help him.
He should [I]not[/B] have B rank Luck. D. I don’t think one case of disguising is enough to gain a Skill in it.
Moving on, I like the guy. Wish him happiness. Just kind of wish his NP was something more interesting or relevant to his character than a divinity dlayer.
Lev Lainur Flauros: I like that guy’s hat. I wonder what happened to him…
A great way to continue a character that kinda got shafted before he could even really do anything. Slapping a few extra pillars in him to account for his multiple personalities and the rewriting brought on by a lack of purpose and want for understanding into a Servant for human protection is certainly an interesting one. Nice job.
Takiyashahime: Wrath of woman scorned brings about destruction for all, including herself.
Skull golem and righteous anger are a dangerous combination for anyone, let along a witch. Add in laser focus to the point of not seeing anything else beyond her goal, including the opinions of who she does it all for, and there’s a protagonist we can all hope finds happiness.
Claiomh Solais: Ah, yes. The sword waifu.
I. Really. Like her. She’s so simple, yet she just feels right. I’m a man of overcomplication, but I’ve always been a lover of things that are so beautiful without the need for complexity. She’s good. Definitely on my list of Servant from here.
Hachikō: One of the most famous of the doggos.
Not much to say here. Give him some head pats and forget trying to convince him his master’s gone. Let the pup dream.
Accolon: Well, I know someone getting dialogue whenever I make Pan-human Morgan.
Skills and NP are on point, though I wish I could get a slightly better grip on her personality. You can make out some parts from the story, but the broader strokes need a little more paint in them to form a picture. May ask you about that when the time comes if you’d be willing.
Monster Slayer's rank is mostly based around reputation than pedigree. I could be convinced to B, but the association seemed enough. All those modifiers are from his Parameters in Prototype Materials, so giving them a reason for existing as a Skill just felt right alongside explaining his high luck in life which honestly could be attributed to the favor he got from the gods. His continued survival in Prototype is because his mask acted as a pseudo-master that stored the magical energy he collected and feed it to him enough to stay manifested alongside the use of all his master's command seals being used at once to incarnate him. A Skill based around a very specific set of conditions that arrive not in his life but in an alternate present as a Servant isn't something I'm gonna do. A Skill around killing a giant sea monster protecting Andromeda also doesn't feel right because it honestly doesn't seem deserving of one considering how easy the Cetus was to kill in both act and pressure compared to the Gorgon. Anything related to the Greae just feels pointless considering he honestly could have gotten the information from Athena herself or really anyone in that sphere. I wouldn't even be able to argue it as a form of Instinct because the advice literally just entail "go here", and that was it. If you want to talk about being an excuse to increase Parameters, bring it up with Nasu.Originally Posted by Cursed by Fortuna
I just forgot about the wound part. Fixed that now.
I didn't add anything to Bellerophon except that it belongs to the person it's named after and Perseus has it because of the constant merging of their myths. Bellerophon is the bridle that releases Pegasus's power while enhancing his attack and defense. That is the literal description and purpose of Bellerophon.Kibisis is a little tricky to figure out, but it just seemed to make sense to me. The problem was trying to explain it properly. Medusa's head is still in it as a NP, as stated in Gorgon's profile, but I wanted to tackle and explain the bag's effects more than I wanted to mention Medusa's head was there too. Glad I was able to get it across.Bellerophon
The shield didn't have any details beyond giving a sonar-like overlay of the area and surroundings, so giving it some more detail and limitations made me personally find it more interesting alongside giving it an interesting relationship to Perseus and possible utilization.
Making a downgraded and modified version of the Cap of Invisibility was fun. The few details we were given on how the mantle and mask work gave me a little room to work alongside the true Cap's abilities.
I separated the Lore into two sections. Might make it a bit easier with those checkpoints.
For personality, I always felt that Perseus was a bit more relatable than most Greek heroes because almost everything he did in his legends was out of love for another. In most versions, he doesn't even seek out killing his father because he wasn't interested in anything like revenge. He even stopped doing anything crazy and settled down. That was part one. Part two was translating that base into someone who I could also see doing what he did in Prototype.
"I don’t have a wish for the Grail.
As this body had already been filled.
I always believed.
In the world’s warmth.
In the goodness of people."
An idealist, knowing the world is a dark place but believing still in the goodness evident in such a place. Someone that, when forced to fully confront his own ideals that come up short, has the potential to break.
When Aro dies, Perseus becomes fueled by anger.
"I remember my anger till it was repulsive, at everything that couldn’t save you.
――――My anger melted muddily, with my honour, with my affection."
Although he has sociable manners, is easily moved, and is a gentle hearted young man, he has the flaw that, once motivated to do something, he will not stop until he gives it his all and then some more. In this sense, he is also an anomaly. Once he decided to stain his hands with wrongdoing, he became capable of killing innocents with a gentle manner and smile.
Hard line to walk. Relatability was just an aftereffect of trying to write him well.
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I wholeheartedly agree. Wyvern, get on that.
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