Create-A-Servant 3

[DelRey]

He's already there as a Counter Guardian though. Anymore presence is just superfluous for someone like him. Besides, I don't think it'd be a fitting match given Muramasa was made into an old man Shirou, and I don't see Masamune as an old man Kiritsugu.

NOW i get it, i did not understand what you mean by that. I really thought the Assassin EMIYA was a tired version of Shirou or something. It never occured to me he is Kiritsugu, with white hair he looks so different, especially with that art style. When i played FGO for a few weeks last summer i even used him.
Damn that took a while.

[Frigix]

Mad Jack Summer: Ah yes, glad to see you made the summer version, he's not the servant we deserve, but the servant we needed.

[JDMan9011]

Hope you don’t mind me showing off my first ever Servant creation. I’m confident I’ve done well.

A/N: Click on Image to reveal Servant.

“I’ll never… forgive them… People who casually throw the lives of their children away… should all just DIE!”

Avenger

Source

True Name:

Spoiler:

Avenger on a Misty Night

Jack the Ripper

Also Known As: The Legendary Serial Killer
Pseudo-Servant: False
Demi-Servant: False
Phantom Fusion: True

• Phantom(s) included: Geraldine

Proper Human History: True

Alignment: Chaotic Evil & Insane
Attribute: Earth
Origin: England (19th Century)
Armament: Knives, Black Scalpel
Catalyst: One of her knives stained in old blood

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Parameters:

Strength: C+ * * * * *	Endurance: C * * * * *
Agility: B+ * * * * *	Mana: D * * * * *
Luck: E+ * * * * *	NP: B+ * * * * *

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Background:

Talent: Dissection, Seduction
Natural Enemy: Scotland Yard, Bluebeard

Spoiler:

The legend of Jack the Ripper is one of history's oldest cold cases. There are many theories and interpretations of what Jack's identity could have been. One version could have been the amalgamated wraiths of the unborn children aborted by Whitechapel prostitutes, taking the form of a little girl. Another version of them may not even know themselves, and only knows they are the embodiment of the mystery of Jack the Ripper in a shapeless form.

This version of Jack the Ripper is one of the many prostitutes that inhabited 19th-century Whitechapel. Jack herself doesn't remember too much about her past, not even her name, but all she remembers starts with her discovering she was pregnant. Unlike her coworkers, "Jack" was too softhearted and naive to go through with the termination of her unborn child. Said child was her only ray of light in the dreary and cruel world of 19th Century London, and "Jack" was desperate to escape her life in Whitechapel for a better one suited for a family.

In the late stages of her pregnancy, an accident she cannot remember gravely injures her. "Jack" survives thanks to medical staff, but internal injuries were so severe the medical staff had to abort her child to save her. Even with the circumstances not in her control, the guilt crushed her hard. To add insult to injury, she discovers from the doctors that the years of prostitution and the unhealthy conditions of London had left her sick with diseases that would most likely kill her at an unspecified date. Deep down, she must have realized she was never going to escape her life from the slums and even if her child was born, they were not going to survive the harsh environment.

Shortly afterward, "Jack" overhears a woman in a conversation with her friends revealing she recently got an abortion, claiming children to be a nuisance. Being powerless to save her child and witnessing too many prostitutes aborting their children, this final disregard for human life made her snap. Later that night, she stalked the woman and killed her in a crazed frenzy. Mary Ann Nichols' body was mutilated to the point she no longer resembled a human.

Her mind lost in a maddening haze, "Jack" swore to kill every woman, prostitute or not, that would dare throw away the life of their unborn child as brutally and painfully as possible.

And thus, Jack the Ripper was born…

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Geraldine is one of the main characters of Samuel Taylor Coleridge's poem Christabel, which involves the titular female character's encounter with the former. Compared to the innocent and pure Christabel, Geraldine represents carnal desire and the darker side of human nature. There are elements of the supernatural in the poem as well. When Christabel brings Geraldine to share her bed, Geraldine puts a "spell" on her that makes it impossible to tell anyone about what had happened that night in the bed. The only time Christabel realizes her true nature until she is too late is when Geraldine reveals her scarred and deformed body she hides under her white dress.

In regards to the supernatural aspects of the poem, Geraldine is considered to be one of the earliest literary portrayals of the female vampire. While it is never explicitly said that Geraldine is one of the blood-sucking demons, she still possesses vampiric qualities that make it seem so. For example, Geraldine's supernatural charm and the deformed body she hides.

Geraldine's true identity is never revealed due to Coleridge never finishing the poem. Despite Geraldine's story being incomplete and very obscure, she helped lay the early foundations for other literary vampires to be created.

—<—>—

When it came to summoning this version of Jack the Ripper, multiple setbacks prevented this from happening. Her illnesses had left her body extremely weak to the point she couldn't even be considered a Servant. The only reason she got away with murder was that how easy it was to commit one during Victorian England. Her weak body had also interfered with any combat abilities she could have had. The other problem was she is a much more obscure interpretation of Jack the Ripper, making it difficult to summon her directly. Chances are her Assassin and Berserker counterparts would be summoned instead.

The solution to these problems came with Phantom Fusion. She was fused with the Phantom Geraldine from the poem Christabel. While the reason for this choice of Phantom is unknown, the fusion made the summoning of Avenger possible. It has allowed Avenger to inherit abilities she never had in her life before.

Besides her skill in murder and stealth, Avenger has inherited vampiric-like abilities from the fusion. Her speed and strength have been increased by a margin, and she has obtained a healing factor that has stalled (not cured) her illnesses. She also can charm people into doing her bidding, although they can only follow simple commands given by Avenger.

Despite Geraldine never confirmed to be a vampire, Jack is still able to replenish herself by absorbing people's blood. This new bloodlust damaged Jack's already unstable mind...

Personality:

Likes: Children, disembowelment
Dislikes: Neglectful parents, herself, the world

Spoiler:

A vengeful young woman whose brutality and madness could mistake her for a Berserker.

First impressions show her to be polite if not a bit indifferent towards her Master. She has no reasons to despise someone she just met after all. Her casual talk about killing those women and how they deserved it may be a bit unsettling though, describing every excruciating detail of the murder paints her as a psychopath. This is where her true personality begins to show.

When out to kill, she is very cruel and sadistic. As mentioned before, she savors every moment of pain inflicted on her victims. She has an obsession with people's guts and blood, bathing in their entrails. She first slashes at their throats, enjoying the look on their faces when they can't cry out for help. She then disembowels them and toys with them by dangling their entrails in front of them. This bloodlust may be slightly influenced by her Phantom Geraldine, who was described to be pure evil.

She can be very seductive when situations call for it. Years of prostitution have sharpened her appeal with people, men and women included. Her charm translates into one of her Skills. She is also extremely good at acting, playing the victim, and concealing her bloodlust very well. Her nature as a Servant won't be hidden, but she will be able to act innocent and be saved by an unexpecting ally– before slashing at her savior's throat when they get too close.

Her personality drastically changes when child abandonment or abuse is mentioned around her. She becomes cold and enraged, with the intent to kill the people who brought harm to children. She makes sure that her victims suffer pain before dying, making sure they know they are dying because they abused children. She makes their deaths even worse if they are the parents of their child, with her failures as a mother brought back to light. At this point, she is as mindless as a Berserker and cannot be controlled; the use of Command Spells may not work, most likely requiring two to keep her under control. This is why Servants like Gilles de Rais should never enter Avenger's line of sight, as she would most likely butcher him until one of them is dead.

She wouldn't dare harm or kill any children. She would commit suicide to prevent a Command Spell from ordering her to. Despite her love for children, she does not feel worthy to be a mother again. She still believed the loss of her unborn child to be her fault and tried to push these children away. On the other hand, though, she doesn't want to just leave these children to fend for themselves. After all, she would be no better than the people she killed. In a surprising turn, she takes time to find a loving home for abandoned children and allows these children to stay with her for a while for the time being. Her personality becomes more like she was before her descent into madness. She becomes kind and loving; a complete contrast to the brutal killer she truly is. Regardless, she knows she can't become too attached. She has already committed far too many crimes, and these children are not safe with her around with everyone out to get her. It is far too late for redemption, and she knows it.

Avenger is an interesting contradiction in terms of her personality. Despite being a psychotic murderer, she somehow has a sense of morals. She refuses to kill children of any age. This even extends to parents who have treated their children well. This moral code seems to pale in comparison to her sadism and bloodthirst, whose victims are less human by the time she finishes killing them. Surprisingly, this makes her very predictable. Just as long as you are a child or a good parent, you are guaranteed to be spared. Everyone else though, whether completely normal or completely evil, are not safe from Avenger.

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Skills:

Class Skills

Avenger on a Misty Night: (A)
A composite Skill of Avenger and Murder on a Misty Night. This Skill is associated with an Avenger's nature as a serial killer, allowing a Servant to gather people's fears and hatred onto oneself. The rate of mana generation becomes higher when receiving damage and the Servant is allowed a pre-emptive strike against all opponents. This Skill also grants a weak form of Presence Concealment, but this requires Avenger to be in the shadows at night.

As long as there are suffering children in the world and the adults that prey on them, her hatred will never subside. This hatred is shown on her victims, butchered to the point people believed a demon killed them. From the conditions of their bodies, it is believed that all of the victims of Avenger were assailed when unguarded. The unconditional success of the Skill is possible only at night.

A unique Skill only available to Avenger.

Oblivion Correction: (C)
A Class Skill of the Avenger class. People are creatures that forget many things, but an Avenger never forgets. The critical effect of Avengers who attack from beyond one's memory is strengthened.

Memories of her past life have been forgotten. The only thing she remembers is the rage she felt towards the uncaring world and its treatment of the powerless children.

Self-Replenishment (Mana): (D-)
A Class Skill of the Avenger class. One's Magical Energy endlessly surges until their revenge is accomplished. Recovers a minuscule amount of magical energy every turn.

Avenger was an average prostitute with no connection to the moonlit world, which should have resulted in this Skill being ranked lower. But due to Phantom Fusion with the "vampire" Geraldine, her mana recovery has received a Rank-Up.

Personal Skills

Pheromone: (A)
The general term for substances secreted/emitted from inside an animal's body, and affects the conduct and physiologic state of a different specimen of the same race.

Not counting her experience as a prostitute, Avenger can relieve the worries of men and women alike; she could even charm them into doing simple tasks. This Skill is drastically improved by the Phantom Geraldine, a seductress known for charming people. Her charm is one of the factors in how she was able to commit murder.

Sadistic Constitution: (A)
A Skill that augments one's aggression in battle. It appears to be a positive Skill, but the longer its owner stays in battle, the more their abusive disposition will grow, causing them to lose their usual composure. It's possible to say that this is just one step short of the Skill that causes Berserkers to go insane. The more one attacks, the stronger one becomes, but on the other hand, one's defensive abilities drop.

A Skill that fits perfectly with the normally insane Avenger. Because of her placement in the Avenger class, she can use this Skill fully.

Mental Pollution: (C)
A Skill where due to possessing a distorted mentality, it is possible for one to shut out any mental interference thaumaturgy. However, at the same time, it becomes impossible for one to come to a mutual understanding with individuals who do not possess an equivalent rank of Mental Pollution.

In the condition that the Servant's master is of the Evil alignment, or perpetrates acts of cruelty against her or any children, her Mental Pollution will increase in rank; a Rank-Up in this Skill increases the chances of blocking magecraft. However, as the Servant's psyche is inherently broken, this may result in irreversible corruption.

Bloodsucking (False): (D)
The act of absorbing another's blood to replenish their health and physical and/or magical strength. Unlike the true Skill, the Servant is not a proper vampire nor confirmed to be. As the Rank raises, the power of absorption increases.

Avenger has Bloodsucking (False) due to her fusion with Geraldine; Geraldine was never confirmed to be a vampire but still showed vampiric abilities. Despite not being a vampire, Avenger is still able to replenish herself by absorbing the blood of others.

Weak Constitution: (–)
A weakness struck by the nature of frail health. Similar in nature to Innocent Monster, where the perception of the people in the future affects the existence of the Heroic Spirit.

Because of Geraldine’s regenerative abilities that prevent status drops, this Skill has been Sealed.

Noble Phantasm(s):

“It’s nice to meet you…”

“… Now please, die for me.”
“Let’s see… how much you’ll squirm!:”
“「Judge of Whitechapel」!”

Bounded by Pain and Retribution

「Judge of Whitechapel」

Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: D
Range: 1~10
Max Targets: 1 person

A Noble Phantasm that specializes in pain curses.

Taking the form of four sharp knives, any injury inflicted will curse the target with an enhanced sense of pain. This curse will linger as long Avenger is still alive, constantly leaving its victims in a state of pain. Certain conditions can double both this Noble Phantasm's attack power and curses. The first condition involves the victim being female. The second condition depends on how "evil" a person is. The third condition depends on how severe the injury is. If all conditions are fulfilled, there is a high chance to guarantee instant death. At its worst, the curse can immobilize people in a state of eternal torment that makes them wish for death.

Despite the usefulness of the curse, there is a flaw with this Noble Phantasm. To keep the curse activated, Avenger's knives must be recently stained with new blood. The curse will not be removed, but it will be inactive until Avenger stains her knives with blood. It's also a curse that Avenger can't remove herself. The only way it can be removed is magic from the Age of Gods. The higher the rank of the Magic Resistance Skill, the lesser the effects of the Noble Phantasm.

“I’ll kill you…”

“...I'll kill you, I’ll kill you, I’ll kill you, I’LL KILL YOU!:”
“「Christabel’s Bane」!”
“UuuAAa, ▂▂▃▃▄▄▅▅!”

Demonization of the Ripper

「Christabel’s Bane」

Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Rank: B+
Range: 0
Max Targets: 1 person

A Noble Phantasm not possessed by Avenger, but belongs to the Phantom Geraldine. This Noble Phantasm is the embodiment of Geraldine's true nature, exaggerated by Christabel's account during the night spent with Geraldine in her bed chambers.

Its usage grants Avenger Berserker-class abilities without changing her class. She is transformed into a vampire-demon hybrid that has lost all sense of reason, only focused on killing the people that have wronged her. All parameters except Mana and Luck are increased, allowing Avenger to easily kill Servants stronger than her.

More worryingly, Avenger still has access to all her other Skills and Noble Phantasms. For example, even in her berserk state, she can take advantage of her Avenger on a Misty Night Skill to hide in the shadows.

Demonization of the Ripper

「Christabel's Bane」

enhances all her Skills and Noble Phantasms, making her more dangerous than before.

In this state, Avenger's appearance mostly stays the same with a few key differences. Her eyes glow red, dripping blood, losing their sense of intelligence and sanity. She gains razor-sharp fangs and claws designed to shred the strongest Servants apart. Any injuries sustained begin to stitch back together, but are not healed.

Unfortunately, this Noble Phantasm drains magical energy extremely quickly. A Master must have a lot of magical energy to supply Avenger to sustain the Noble Phantasm. It's also a Noble Phantasm that cannot be turned off, permanently stuck in a frenzied state until death. She could replenish herself by draining people dry using her Bloodsucking (False) Skill, enhanced by this Noble Phantasm, but that depends if there is anyone left after killing everyone.

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Relationships:

Spoiler:

Master: "You must have a death wish just to talk to me, Master. You know how dangerous I am, right? I'm meant to kill your enemies, not socialize. If you're not careful, you might end up dead in an alley with your guts strewn everywhere… Eh? You still want to talk? My God, you must be madder than me."

Avenger's relationship with her Master is… complicated. She's tired of her Master's attempts to connect with an irredeemable murderer like her and has to threaten them multiple times to stay away.

Although, she is fascinated by her Master's persistence. Perhaps she's impressed by their bravery, or stupidity as she calls it. Why would they summon her in the first place anyway? Avenger is far from a Heroic Spirit, and yet… they still summoned her. At least for now, she'll play along with her Master and be as nice as she wants to.

Remember though, this is the same woman that brutally murdered 5 women and sent London into a panic. Tolerable she may be, her treatment of her Master is more akin to a predator playing with their food to satisfy their curiosity and boredom. It is required that the Master does not let their guard around her.

Holy Grail: “Every day I think about the young innocent souls disregarded by this cruel world. I can't stand to see their despair anymore. I'm going to make sure every child that ever lived will be loved, then my purpose will be complete.”

Avenger wishes for the salvation of all abandoned children in the world. Some people may think she would want to wish for her children or something similar, but she fears that she will lose them again. Instead, she wishes to help the children who have nothing left. She knows she can't save everyone by herself, so relies on the miracle the Holy Grail can grant. She will be determined to win the Holy Grail and will work with a Master as long as they follow her sense of values.

Assassin - Jack the Ripper: "You… I- I'm sorry… You're everything I wished to prevent… I don't want to see you suffer anymore…"

Out of all the child Servants, this one, in particular, hits Avenger the hardest. Their circumstances are so different, yet so similar. In a sense, Jack is the embodiment of Avenger's guilt and fear, made to taunt her about her failures. Instead of anger, Avenger feels remorse and pity towards Jack, blaming herself and the world for making Jack suffer.

With Jack, she sees Avenger as the ideal mother regardless of her confusion why Avenger seems so apologetic towards her. She's almost convinced that Avenger is her actual mother supported by the similarities of their appearances. So it is understandably shocking for Avenger when Jack willingly accepts her as "mother." Jack may be the only person that makes Avenger reconsider her "path of vengeance."

Even with the irony of sharing the same identity, both of them are tragic souls made for each other. They may be the only two that work efficiently together; both as a combat duo and a "mother-daughter" pair.

Berserker - Jack the Ripper: “How many of us are there? First Smaller Me, now this bloke… For God’s sake, it seems like everyone can become Jack now. What’s next? A magical gi– oh.”

Avenger does have a sense of respect for the Berserker - Jack the Ripper. She is impressed by the range and potency of this Servant's power. The problem with Berserker she is annoyed and confused by is how many versions of Jack exist. Berserker's shapeshifting and cloning Noble Phantasm doesn't help at all, leaving Avenger to wonder which is the real Jack.

While Jack knows she shouldn't be surprised at the variations of the same person, she thinks it can get annoying that a group with the same name is running around, confusing people when referring to Jack.

Caster - Bluebeard: "▂▂▃▃▄▄▅▅!"

Words aren't even needed to describe Avenger's hatred towards Bluebeard. Chances are she will actively try to kill him and anyone like him as brutally as possible.

Archer - Atalanta: "Your wish… it's just like mine. Even with all our differences, our dreams are the same. Heh, at least I finally met someone in the world that cares."

Despite Avenger being a serial killer and Atalanta a hero, both at least acknowledge and understand each other's wishes. They find kinship in their desire to protect and save the children in the world, even if they butt heads sometimes due to conflicting personalities. Nevertheless, they have one of the strangest, but understandable friendships to date.

However, if they are forced to kill each other, they will do so as they have confidence in each other to fulfill the one wish that drives them.

Caster - Irisviel von Einzbern: "So, this is what a happy family looks like. Even through hardship, you faced it all with the people you loved and pulled through. I don't understand how you all could still stay happy after everything that happened to you. I… really envy you."

With Irisviel von Einzbern and the Emiya Family, Avenger considers them what a model family should be. Even with all their faults, their bonds remain stronger than ever.

At least, that's what Avenger thinks.

Avenger puts them up on a pedestal that she disregards any other doubts or flaws they may have. It may be because she is this desperate for something good in the world to exist. She believes that everyone, child or parent, should have a family just like the Emiyas.

In her eyes, Avenger sees what she might've had if fate had been kinder to her. This kind of admiration is a double-edged sword, as it turns to jealousy. She imagines herself in Irisviel's place many times, dreaming of having the family she would never have. But in the end, it is a selfish dream born of jealousy and hope.

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Author’s Note:

Spoiler:

Hello everyone. I hope you don't mind me giving a try at creating a Servant. This is the first time I've ever done something like this and I think I did a great job with this Servant. I know that feels arrogant to say, but I had way too much fun making this Servant.

The inspiration for this Servant came when I was making a fanmade Singularity that took place in London. It was meant to be a complete rewrite of London Singularity from the original game, where Jack the Ripper is the main focus of the story (link here). After looking at Jack the Ripper (Assassin version), I thought to myself: What if I made the complete opposite of Jack? Well, this is the result of that thought.

In a nutshell, Avenger is pretty much the reverse Assassin Jack. The latter is the amalgamation of London's aborted children while the former is a random prostitute who lost her unborn child by accident and angrily killed the 5 prostitutes for aborting their children. The vampire Phantom fused with her was just a personal touch, making her a pseudo-vampire Jack the Ripper. You may be wondering why I would make another version of Jack the Ripper. Well one, Jack the Ripper is meant to have different interpretations since nobody knows his identity, and two, there are literally 12 versions of King Arthur, so don't think you can pull that card on me! :mad:

I feel like the weakest part of the Servant is the Phantom and the Noble Phantasm. I wanted to make the Phantom a vampire, but the problem with Phantoms is that they have to be a very obscure legend. Surprisingly, there aren't a lot of obscure female vampires at all. Geraldine comes close but she isn't officially a "vampire." Considering Noble Phantasms, I think the second Noble Phantasm is good. But the first one, 「Judge of Whitechapel」, feels very lazy and uncreative. I ran out of ideas at that point, trying to rake through my mind what Noble Phantasm would fit Jack the Ripper's legend.

Still, I hope you liked MILF Jack the Ripper. You can't have enough of them, can you? Yeah, she's completely crazy and homicidal, but has that stopped anyone before? Nope! If you could summon nutjobs like Salome and Ashiya Douman, why not summon her as well? Just keep in mind though: You try mana transfer with her, chances are you'll get an STD.

Anyhow, I hope you liked my first attempt at a Servant! Is there anything good about this sheet? How about something bad? Leave your thoughts so I might know!

[Lambda-Nu]

Avenger Jackie: Jackie is my favorite Servant, so I am obligated to give some commentary on this.

Giving her a Skill that hybridizes Avenger and Murder on a Misty Night was definitely an interesting choice, and I think all of her Skills are fitting. Although, minor gripe in that I feel that her having five Personal Skills is a tad bit excessive, but having one of them be sealed is fine. While her personality does make her rather predictable, it is rather interesting nonetheless. I really like this interpretation of Jack. MILF Jackie is great!

...Maybe I should try my hand at making a Jack the Ripper one day.

[DelRey]

Ah yes, the MILF-killing MILF, one thing that was sorely lacking here. First of i dig your simple yet stylish presentation of the sheet. Else I agree with Lambdas opinion and cant say anything else. Could be because i am currently hangover from an overdose of indian food.

I never looked deeper into Jack the Ripper, but werent there a bunch of suspects that could be Jack and werent confirmed? Like the guy with elephantiasis? If that wasnt already done, perhaps a phantom fusion Jack that is made of the different suspects we have in the real world.
I doubt I would make a Servant like that rn, so if anyone is interested take it.

[Kabalisto Koga]

Jack the Ripper : Mhm .. Not bad really good! A heartly welcome in our round JD ! quite well done the first noblephantasm is really abit similar to Assassins Maria the Ripper but its okay . The build is remember me on my idea on a Jack the Ripper servant that is summoned with two hundred more years of mystery ,i think she's lookin fine but i think about Mana transfer i would say summoned as servant she should be clean from diseases of that sort . Imean can Servants or other Magical Beings get any mundane humen deseases and Arent they immune etc ?

That inspires me to make also a Jackie servant Version ! and i would be curius what she would think of my Shamaness Girl ?

[Kabalisto Koga]

Just... insert pictures? It's literally that simple, I don't understand the question.

i meant how you can make these \/ do i Need photoshop ?

Parameters:

STR: D

END: D

AGI: C

MGI: A

LCK: B

NP: A


and how do you the Grand order Frame on Pictures ?

[Serra]

Class: Archer

Other Classes: Rider, Shielder

Appearance

Source

True Name: Mithridates I of Parthia

Alignment: Lawful Neutral

Source: Historical fact

Place of Origin: Parthian Empire

Parameters

STR: B

END: B

AGI: A

MGI: B

LCK: B

NP: A

Height: 185 centimetres

Weight: 80 kilograms

Likes: Feeling admired, loyalty

Dislikes: People who are quick to complain

Talent: Earning recognition

Natural Enemy: Demetrius II Nicador

Attribute: Human

Armament: Light

Catalyst: Intense sunlight, a crowd nearby, and an effigy of the Heroic Spirit in question

Class Skills

Independent Action A

Perhaps in recognition of their role in affirming Parthia as its own major political power rather than a country less significant and subordinate in importance to its neighbours, Archer was granted a high Rank in this Skill.

Archer can act even without a Master and stay in the world without one for about a week, but would need backup from one to use a Noble Phantasm that demands great quantities of magical energy.

Magic Resistance D++

Archer's overall Magic Resistance, despite the year they originated from, is rather low due to the relative lack of relevant anecdotes, but is highly increased towards divine mysteries due to the concept of khvarenah on one hand and the episode of the parade at Babylon on the other.

Personal Skills

Charisma B

Archer's conquests transformed Parthia from a small kingdom to a major political power in a heartbeat, and their exploits have been compared to those of Cyrus the Great. Archer's personal charisma and skill at leading armies and raising their morale are extremely high.

Imperial Privilege A

Not only were Archer's conquests compared to Cyrus the Great's efforts: Archer was also the first among the Parthians to readopt the title of 'King of Kings' that had been used by him, the founder of the Achaemenid Empire. This is represented by this Skill, which allows Archer to temporarily acquire Skills they don't normally possess, such as Riding or many others.

Philéllen B

The title of 'friend to the Greeks' that Archer gave themself and had inscribed on coins, which represented them wearing the Hellenistic royal diadem. This commitment in life makes it so that, although those who consider themselves Greek would not consider Archer Greek, Archer can be affected as though as they were Greek by any Skill that would affect Greeks up to B Rank included, even by Noble Phantasms. It also functions as Rank C 'True Name Discernment' when facing Servants who consider themselves Greek: that Skill is an anomalous rarity for a Servant that is not a Ruler, and this aspect of the 'Philéllen' Skill can be rather dangerous when it comes into play.

Gifter of the Golden Dice B

Archer once famously gifted the Seleucid ruler Demetrius II Nicador a set on golden dice. Though Demetrius was, likely in the main for political reasons, treated kindly by Archer, and had even married Archer's daugther during his captivity, he had de facto become a prisoner to the Parthian Empire. The gift occurred after his second failed attempt at an escape, and was likely meant to bill Demetrius as a restless child in need to be entertained. This Skill lets Archer essentially bypass all Luck checks invoked by Skills up to B rank included, even by Noble Phantasms: Archer is above such childish matters.

Noble Phantasm

Mithridates: Given By The Glory Which Subdues

Type: Anti-Unit

Rank: A

Range: 1~99

Max Targets: N/A in theory but can't effectively mantain maximum efficacy with more than 2 targets at once (i.e. can dual wield just fine, but things get tricky after that)

Mithra, from which Mithridates's name (roughly meaning 'given by Mithra') derives, is a figure of divine nature important in many religions. Archer was not seen as particularly devout to Mithra in particular, but the concept of khvarenah - the divine royal glory in Zoroastrianism, of which according to certain hymns Mithra is said to be the chief dispenser and the one who possesses the most - pairs well with Mithridates's life and fame. The concept is complex enough that it could certainly lead to many different interpretations and manifestations. For Mithridates I as an Archer, it's represented as a Noble Phantasm which harkens back to both Mithra's role as a solar deity in certain interpretations and to one of the possible etymologies of Mithra's name: that which causes binding; the fame of the prisony of Demetrius II Nicator under Mithridates I likely also contributes to the relevance of this second aspect to this Noble Phantasm.

Essentially, Archer can curve sunrays into highly durable snares like ribbons which can be used to bind opponents; they can also choose to make the snares sharp, however, and slice apart those who get caught in them. Archer must however impress the movement themself, and cannot cause a sunray to curve into a snare around an opponent's neck instantly. Sunrays 'grabbed' by Archer this way turn visible in the form of shining white ribbons, and movement through them does not propagate at the speed of light but only as fast as Archer's physical parameters allow.

Other than with the light from the Sun that illuminates Earth during the day, this Noble Phantasm also works with moonlight (the light of the Sun reflected off of the lunar surface and towards Earth) and with the light of other stars (suns that aren't the one from Earth's solar system).

Tauroctony and Babylon: Horns of the New Year

Type: Anti-Army

Rank: A-

Range: 1~99

Max Targets: 1000 people

Though Mithridates I was not in the main a worshiper of Sumerian deities, an anecdote involving Mithridates and them has remained famous. After Mithridates's conquest of Babylon, the Parthian is said to have introduced a New Year's Festival parade in which a giant statue of Marduk and one of Ishtar were led along while holding hands. Moreover, though there is a Bull of Heaven that makes part of Ishtar's legends, Mithra is also associated with bulls by some - though mainly in the territories of the Roman Empire, which often depicted Mithra in the act of slaying one: tauroctony.

In any case, thanks to the fame of this anecdote and its connection to their own name, Archer is able to invoke a burst of destructive light in the form of the horns of a bull by mimicking the shape with their arms: though the amount of damage this Noble Phantasm can cause is significant, opening massive fissures in its wake, they need to keep in position for the (admittedly short) duration of the attack, meaning there's a brief window during which they can't effectively block unless they choose to stop the attack early and massively diminish its damage output (no fissures, no earthquakes, etc.).

One wonders why the emphasis on the 'love' aspect of Ishtar and the Festival is so diminished that it doesn't seem to reflect in this Noble Phantasm despite the nature of the anecdote from which it derives. Perhaps it has something to do with the odd issue of Demetrius II Nicador's marriage in captivity with Mithridates's daughter, or perhaps it may be related in some way to Ishtar's choice of Pseudo-Servants.

Lore

Mithridates I's reign saw the rise of the Parthian Empire from a small nation to one of the major political powers of its age, leading to Mithridates's conquests being often compared with Cyrus the Great's efforts.

The expansion of the Parthian Empire under Mithridates began with a military campaign against the Greco-Battrians and towards the East, where Parthian authority would end up reaching as far as the coast of the Indus river under them. In the West, Mithridates's main opponent was the Seleucid Empire, which the Parthians attacked while other rebellions were ongoing in it. Mithridates first took Media and Atropathene, then Babylon and the rest of Mesopotamia; the latter two were briefly reconquered by the Seleucid ruler Demetrius II Nicador for a time, who was however himself eventually taken captive by Mithridates.

It's reported that Mithridates treated Demetrius kindly, but this was likely in the main for political reasons, perhaps in the hope of using him as a tool to conquer Syria or to better legitimise the conquests they'd already achieved: Demetrius was still de facto a prisoner, and though he married Mithridates's daughter Rhodogune during his captivity, he still attempted to flee on multiple occasions.

The history of Mithridates I's depiction in art is rather interesting. They stopped the tradition of depicting the king with the traditional soft cap on coins, and instead went for a depiction that was entirely unprecedented in Parthia, yet, from a certain point of view, not any less conventional. Most coins from Mithridates's reign depict the King of Kings with the Hellenistic royal diadem, sometimes accompained by the epiteth 'Philéllen' - 'friend to the Greeks'. The other details of the coin, however, might be seen as no less propagandistic, only in a different direction: Mithridates I is depicted with a beard as tradition for Parthian rulers, which could've theoretically been also included to signal to his subjects that, despite the open intent to better Parthia's relations with various Hellenistic kingdoms as indicated by the diadem and the epiteth, Mithridates was however still firmly a Parthian, not a stranger who intended to throw away Parthian culture.

As both Mithridates I of Parthia and Mithridates II of Parthia were known as Mithridates the Great, it has been noted that it might be theoretically possible to summon a sort of hybrid of the two as a Servant, though this seemingly has yet to occur.

Personality

Archer is extremely confident and possesses much pride. They appreciate praise, but try to present themselves in a more sober way and are therefore not the type to openly demand it; they also try to avoid overreacting when receiving it, to conserve their image; also, they're intelligent enough to more often than not recognise the cases in which praise is faked.

Archer is neither cold nor unfriendly, and often approaches collaborating with others with jolly enthusiasm, but they do have a significant ego, and aren't above mocking enemies or people that fail after straying from Archer's plans.

However, Archer respects loyalty to one another, in friends and foes alike. When one of Demetrius's friends broke him out for the first time from the captivity under which Mithridates had placed him, they didn't punish the fugitives when they captured them once again, and instead rewarded Demetrius's friend, Kallimander, for his evident loyalty to Demetrius.

Notes

I don't actually know much about Fate's version of Ishtar but I tried to look up all the relevant aspects, hopefully I didn't mess up anything for that part.

The second Noble Phantasm is also inspired by Taurus Aldebaran's 'Great Horn' technique from Saint Seiya.

Shielder version would have Mithradatkert ("Mithridates' fortress") as the Noble Phantasm and emphasize the cult of the dynasty to which Mithridates belonged, a cult for which Mithradatkert became a hub. Rider would be focused on the aspect of the conquest of Bactria and the imagery of Mithridates as its conqueror associated with that country's war elephants: that might possibly make it a potential Lily version, given how early in their reign the war against the Greco-Bactrian campaign took place, but Mithridates was noted to be rather experienced already when their predecessor and sibling Phraates I picked them as their successor rather than picking their own young child, so perhaps not.

[realcasually]

i meant how you can make these \/ do i Need photoshop ?

Parameters:

STR: D

END: D

AGI: C

MGI: A

LCK: B

NP: A


and how do you the Grand order Frame on Pictures ?

Just go onto literally any Servant's page on the FGO wiki and copy them from there. It's really that simple. As for the frame, I use this: https://meguerreroa.github.io/FGO-Ca...rator/fgo.html

[realcasually]

Avenger Jack: Wow. This... this is excellent. I'm transfixed by the formatting above all else. It's set out in such a beautiful way that so excellently communicates all the things you're showing off. And make no mistake all those are amazing too. The concept behind it, the narrative voice you've got, the interesting use of Skills and NP to create something really, really unique that you should be proud of. My only single criticism is that I don't like the second NP. It feels a little unnecessary to tack on what is essentially just Legend of Dracula on there. Everything else, though... utterly deserving of the highest praise.

[RoydGolden]

Mithridates: Cool sheet and creative choice of NPs, but I don't get the reason why s/he's a girl. I know that genderbends don't always have much of a justification even in canon, but the fact you even still refer to him as a "him" in the profile itself makes me wonder what the significance was meant to be.

[Serra]

Mithridates: Cool sheet and creative choice of NPs,

Thank you!

but I don't get the reason why s/he's a girl. I know that genderbends don't always have much of a justification even in canon, but the fact you even still refer to him as a "him" in the profile itself makes me wonder what the significance was meant to be.

Did I use 'him', though? I may have messed something up without noticing and/or worded some sentences awkwardly or something, but from a quick ctrl+F it seems like all instances of 'he' or 'him' in the sheet already refer to other characters (Demetrius, Kallimander, Cyrus the Great...) whereas this version of Mithridates uses 'they' (and is actually neither man nor woman).

As for the reasoning, that's basically the last second-to-last paragraph of the Lore section i.e. there are political and cultural reasons for which Mithridates could've altered their public image to get the favour of Hellenistic kingdoms while mantaining the image of a traditional Parthian ruler in the eyes of their subjects. So basically this is just postulating that the imagery on the coins, which we can in fact see as a meld of two stereotypied depictions of rulers from different traditions, essentially left out any realistic depiction of Mithridates as an actual individual because it was far less relevant to the plan at large. The genderlessness here isn't something that I feel would be a 'must' for every version of the character or anything, though.

Mithridates's daughter Rhodogune could actually possibly make for an interesting female Servant, but from what I've read she'd probably be a Rider and I just made a Rider (Conrad the Red on the previous page) so I wasn't interested in doubling down so soon, whereas I hadn't made an Archer yet, so, there you go.

[RoydGolden]

Did I use 'him', though? I may have messed something up without noticing and/or worded some sentences awkwardly or something, but from a quick ctrl+F it seems like all instances of 'he' or 'him' in the sheet already refer to other characters (Demetrius, Kallimander, Cyrus the Great...) whereas this version of Mithridates uses 'they' (and is actually neither man nor woman).

As for the reasoning, that's basically the last second-to-last paragraph of the Lore section i.e. there are political and cultural reasons for which Mithridates could've altered their public image to get the favour of Hellenistic kingdoms while mantaining the image of a traditional Parthian ruler in the eyes of their subjects. So basically this is just postulating that the imagery on the coins, which we can in fact see as a meld of two stereotypied depictions of rulers from different traditions, essentially left out any realistic depiction of Mithridates as an actual individual because it was far less relevant to the plan at large. The genderlessness here isn't something that I feel would be a 'must' for every version of the character or anything, though.

Mithridates's daughter Rhodogune could actually possibly make for an interesting female Servant, but from what I've read she'd probably be a Rider and I just made a Rider (Conrad the Red on the previous page) so I wasn't interested in doubling down so soon, whereas I hadn't made an Archer yet, so, there you go.

The flavor-text for Charisma does reference them as a man, but you're right those pronouns were much less frequent than I thought. And I did read that part of Lore, but in general it feels like an extremely weak justification. Just him being depicted in different ways doesn't explain why he'd appear as a woman in particular, when none of the depictions show him that way. If "he" was biologically a woman in life I guess that would make sense as a (weak, but mostly Nasu-compatible) justification for why that fact wasn't relevant to "him" being a king (a la Arturia being remembered as a man because she sacrificed her individuality to become the "perfect king"- an archetypally male role) but I don't think it'd explain him being genderbent from what he was in life, which would imply him actually being depicted as a woman or something IMO.

[Lambda-Nu]

So, got some sheets that I had ideas for but can't really get myself to care about. Do whatever you want with these, just know that I wasn't able to get these off the ground much. Unfortunately, you'll be on your own.

Foreigner - Nezahuacoyotl: Based on his supposed encounter with an "Unknown, Unknowable Lord of Everywhere". The empty temple he built in honor of the UULoE might provide some decent basis for his NP, but that's about all I have to say.

Rider - Long John Silver: That guy who inspired many of the stereotypical traits of pirates. The most I got for him was that I gave him Charisma C, but that's it. I completely forgot about him until I was going through the doc again.

Saber - Constantine XI Palaiologos: The last emperor of the Byzantine Empire, so the last emperor of Rome as a whole. I have completely forgotten about what I wanted to do with him.

Avenger - Duryodhana: The big bad evil guy of the Mahabharata. All I remember is that I wanted to try my hand at making a sheet for him since Karna is in Fate canon and we've had plenty of Pandava sheets but no one else seems to have made a sheet for him. I gave him Bravery because he had the balls to duel Bhima (even though we all know how well that went) and Golden Rule A because of that one time the Vaishnava Yajna sacrifice making him the wealthiest man in

India

the world

. Other than that, nothing. But I did buy a copy of the Mahabharata from Barnes & Noble, so I may just pick this up again sometime.

Assassin - Alcibiades: Inspired by Everywhere and Nowhere, which had him as a recurring character. He would have Presence Concealment at D-Rank because I based his having the Assassin class on how much of an underhanded prick he was, not because he was a good spy or anything. Other than that, I also have him Independent Action B (because of his Chronic Backstabbing Disorder), Golden Rule (Body) A (he actually was known for being tremendously handsome), and Military Tactics C+ (general and all; would give a boost to tactics considered unconventional).

All yours, gentlemen. I'd appreciate it if you gave me credit for whichever idea you use, since I usually tend to do that when using ideas from other people (or at least try to).

[Morg van Destro]

With work done and my mind rested, it's time to do some rapid fire comments.

Newton: #ReleasetheOkabeCut. Also, how's that CE I asked for coming along? You're still willing to do it, right?
What can I say? Dude's crazier than I expected. I shifting Mad Enhancement held by someone who can control gravity just sounds like a terror waiting to happen. Add in genius, and it'd be best to skip the posturing and kill him quick.

Konrad der Rote: I actually don't have much to say about him. His own story is interesting, but the Servant himself is pretty standard.

War: Three down. One to go.
My first thought was to kill him through pacification, but I see you already told them that, so I'm unneeded in that. Man, I'm definitely not someone for making or dissecting poetry, as I prefer more direct and blatant communication, but I can appreciate all the effort that must have gone into them.

Innocentius VIII: Time for pope wars! ...No one's gonna get that reference.
I like him. A tool with a literal nepotism skill and NPs that show how terrible a person he was. Anyone remember that anime Pope named Innocentius from Horizon in the Middle of Nowhere? He literally had the power to basically make himself be unquestioned, which is just the best power a pope could have.

Mad Jack: Girls need their fanservice too.

Geraldine the Ripper: Insane mama needs a Snickers. Might calm her down.
I would say the relationships are over explained, but the way its written keeps it from being tedious. Same with the personality. Skills and NPs are good, except for Pheromone, which I think is unearned because it's definitely not pheromones that charmed people. Maybe change its name to something more fitting, but that's just me.

Mithridates: Even after reading your explanation and Royd's reply, I still don't see why he would be a she here logically other than you wanted to make another fem-king waifu, which is the Nasu way if a little more blatant in it.
It's kind of the same with Konrad here. I have to say, I like her unique Skills and NPs, but I'm just left with a feeling of wanting more. A pattern with those like you, Vance, and world-0. Great ideas, but I just need some kind of expansion or personal touch to rely make the sheet shine through and grab me.

[Serra]

The flavor-text for Charisma does reference them as a man

Oh yeah, there was an 'his exploits' left over in there, good catch.

Anyway, I'll think about the rest of what you said, but really, the appearance is not of huge importance to me unless the expressions / gestuality it depicts really clash with the personality, so for now I've kept the pronouns the same, switched the image to something a bit closer to the depictions on coins etc. to avoid some more convoluteness, and took out one sentence from the second-to-last lore paragraph and one from the notes. Hope you'll enjoy!

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Saber - Constantine XI Palaiologos: The last emperor of the Byzantine Empire, so the last emperor of Rome as a whole. I have completely forgotten about what I wanted to do with him.

First idea that comes to mind here for me is the possibility of having a sort of 'composite Last Emperor of the Romans' Heroic Spirit together with, like, Romulus Augustulus and maybe even Francis II of the Holy Roman Empire. Not quite sure how one might want to delineate that, though.

Anyway, on a related matter: it seems in your recap most of my sheets are in the right places, so, thank you! (kind of funny that my Lope de Aguirre one and NittyGritty's are in different places but that does certainly match what we've written on our sheets); however, you've placed my Pope John XII sheet in Roman History and Mythology; while he certainly was from Rome, he was from the 900s, so after the fall of the Western Roman Empire, so he might want to go in the Post-Classical Italy section instead if the Roman History section is meant to stop at the fall of the Western Roman Empire (or in the Christianity section due to being a Pope, maybe, idk).

[DelRey]

Rider - Long John Silver: That guy who inspired many of the stereotypical traits of pirates. The most I got for him was that I gave him Charisma C, but that's it. I completely forgot about him until I was going through the doc again.

Curse my wretched mind, i thought of Long Dong Silver, a legend that had his own stereotypical traits in a way. While Rider ironically would fit as well, after the Alfonso Affair on twitter a while ago, i would have made a guy like him a Lancer
But as a joke servant i would probably make a fertility god Servant a Lancer sometime in the future.

Regarding the Neza Foreigner, i vaguely remember you once mentioned him before. I already researched Meso/Southamerican mythology and i personally think it is hard to make a Foreigner there, just a personal taste. There is Yig, who is just the lord of all snakes that in the HPLverse is implied to be quetzalcoatl, but it doesnt vibe with me. Only idea i had to make Yig interesting for me is to go

"Worms, eels, snakes, serpents, tentacles, living vines and roots...you mortals found many names and explanations for my presence..."

And perhaps go from there and find creepy stuff all over the world.
Right now I have no plans for Yig or any Americas Foreigner, so anyone may feel free to expand on my idea

[Kabalisto Koga]

Curse my wretched mind, i thought of Long Dong Silver, a legend that had his own stereotypical traits in a way. While Rider ironically would fit as well, after the Alfonso Affair on twitter a while ago, i would have made a guy like him a Lancer
But as a joke servant i would probably make a fertility god Servant a Lancer sometime in the future.

Regarding the Neza Foreigner, i vaguely remember you once mentioned him before. I already researched Meso/Southamerican mythology and i personally think it is hard to make a Foreigner there, just a personal taste. There is Yig, who is just the lord of all snakes that in the HPLverse is implied to be quetzalcoatl, but it doesnt vibe with me. Only idea i had to make Yig interesting for me is to go

"Worms, eels, snakes, serpents, tentacles, living vines and roots...you mortals found many names and explanations for my presence..."

And perhaps go from there and find creepy stuff all over the world.
Right now I have no plans for Yig or any Americas Foreigner, so anyone may feel free to expand on my idea

Just About South america it remembers me that i work on potencial American Mages, beside that Delrey have you thought or guesses which sort of Thaumaturgy would the Maya ,Aztecs ,Omeks etc have nause verse wise as i think on a South/Middle american MAge ?All in all had i thought out on a "Afro-american Magecraft" example wise but beyond that not much . Are there in the Southamerican mythology some magic concepts Delrey ?

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So, got some sheets that I had ideas for but can't really get myself to care about. Do whatever you want with these, just know that I wasn't able to get these off the ground much. Unfortunately, you'll be on your own.



Saber - Constantine XI Palaiologos: The last emperor of the Byzantine Empire, so the last emperor of Rome as a whole. I have completely forgotten about what I wanted to do with him.

Avenger - Duryodhana: The big bad evil guy of the Mahabharata. All I remember is that I wanted to try my hand at making a sheet for him since Karna is in Fate canon and we've had plenty of Pandava sheets but no one else seems to have made a sheet for him. I gave him Bravery because he had the balls to duel Bhima (even though we all know how well that went) and Golden Rule A because of that one time the Vaishnava Yajna sacrifice making him the wealthiest man in

India

the world

. Other than that, nothing. But I did buy a copy of the Mahabharata from Barnes & Noble, so I may just pick this up again sometime.

Assassin - Alcibiades: Inspired by Everywhere and Nowhere, which had him as a recurring character. He would have Presence Concealment at D-Rank because I based his having the Assassin class on how much of an underhanded prick he was, not because he was a good spy or anything. Other than that, I also have him Independent Action B (because of his Chronic Backstabbing Disorder), Golden Rule (Body) A (he actually was known for being tremendously handsome), and Military Tactics C+ (general and all; would give a boost to tactics considered unconventional).

All yours, gentlemen. I'd appreciate it if you gave me credit for whichever idea you use, since I usually tend to do that when using ideas from other people (or at least try to).

Constantine XI and Alcibiades are sounding interesting , two more on the list that makes uhm atleast 23 ideas in working .

[DelRey]

Interesting question. Magecraft related to the body. Blood, bones, skin, perhaps even transfiguration into animals due to their animism. On the other hand magic related to Fire/Light/Sun and Darkness in the form of perhaps forgeries are possible as well. Gold and Obsidian and the importance of the big deities Tezcatlipoca, Quetzalcoatl, Huitzilopochtli & Co. and what they represent suggests that to me.
A different way that is similar yet different from Egyptian Magecraft.

[Kabalisto Koga]

I cannot believe not a single person has done William Wallace yet. Someone should get on that.

What di ya Sey !?

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William Wallace
(Archer)

"Hello Master i am the First Fighter of Scotland , My Name is William Wallace "



"Wait did you really think i am Looking like this ? please this is a bit Cliche like i were never a Highlander Haha !"

Titles:First Fighter of Scotlands Freedom ,First Guardian of the Scotish Kingdom, Wiliam Walays(Gaelic Version)
Height: 191 cm
Weight: 91~ kg
Origin:Scotish History
Alignment: Lawfull Good
Attributes:Men ,Star,Brynhildr beloved
Weapons:Beside the Bow and its Arrows a Scotish Two hander Sword and some Daggers
other Qualifying Classes: Saber ,Rider, Berserker,Ruler,Avenger,Gatekeeper
Likes:Freedom ,justice ,THe Scots, normal People (from social Position ), brave companions, heartly feasts
Dislikes:Cowards,Oppresors ,the Britain ,(British )Monarchs
Hobbies:to read History Reports , to taste cuisines

Parameter:

Strenght: B
Endurance:B
Agility:B+
Luck:B+
Mana: C++
NP:A

Background

William, Son of Alan Wallace born as a Member of lesser Country Nobility where he learned under his Father the arts of War aswell a Wholesome Education ,though the FAmily was a Nobility had they more a hereditiary wise passed down small owned Land as such were they quite grounded and well connected with the normall People of their Coutryside , so was Wallace a rather warm hearted by that liked his Neighbours but he was amongst the Young Men that was recruited by the Scotish Higher Nobles during the Scotish heir Crisis where he fought once in King Edwards I units but he soon developed sheer resentment for the Actions of the English Crown as he saw how their treat his Landmen and women as such did he defacted and he started to plann a first Revolt against the English Army where he found in Wiliam Douglas a Scotish Baron which was a Man of similar spirit aswell the Bishop Robert Wishart aswell two other noteworthy Bishops that saw that the Independence of the Scotish Church aswell the Freedom of Scotland were one and the same did they made the Background supports during Wallace , Douglas and the other Noble Moray ortganised the Milirtary front side part were they ere able to succed in mutiple Campaigns against the English Groups during These times did Wallae marry a Women Marrion and sirred a Child . However he was demanded to stand firm .

So was he only able to spend short timeframes with his Family not only to as he was very needed but also to ensure that eventual spies could not made their way to his famil as he knew that thir security was of national interest so did he left them war away from the BAttle front places . It pained him that he was forced to stay away from them out of all involved best interests despite that he longed to spend time with them.

After the Battle of Falkirk which he managed to survived and flew ,resigned he the positionof the Guardian of Scotland he was passed during the Events of the year 1297 which was the deafacto Replacement Regent of the Land wher he had similar obligations and privileges as a King however he seldom made use of them aside that he tried beside the Military Actions to distribute foodstuff to the poor Scots aswell to secure a small amount of fortune for his Family so that they are atleast financial secured he did this to ensure that he can full focussed act in his Agenda of Scotish Freedom.

So left he Scotland in hope to collect support from outside Forces that were willing to Aid his Side. So was he abble to reach the French Throne Court where he was able to gain the support of the French King Philip IV ,he also made the decision that he brouht his Wive Marion and his Child(s) to France as he thought that they were outside Scotland during the Waging state permanent in danger of being abducted and used as political hostages . The French King obliged this request and did called them to France ,he then went to Rome in cause of the Scotish Church . Also as he was quite Knowledge full of history did he traveled towards Norway as he knew they were old Enemies of England .

1304 Did he returned to Scotland to continue his direct Militaric endeavors where he participated in atlteast two skirmishes . One year later was he betrayed by his servant Jack Short which told John de Menteith about Wallaces daily Routine especialy when he was at the vulnerabelst so was Wallace seized in his Bed .

Wiliam was then deported to London where he was put on his Trial and accused of treason and atrocities against civilians , however those later so called atrocities were caused by the English troops .

However he answered upon the treason charges with "I could not be a traitor to Eddward for i was never his Subject"

THen was he in the most painfull and tormenting way executed to death . However he cursed the English Peoples and although never made public did in his last Moment activated his Magic Circuits instinctively and he caused a Plague which was though the work of the Magic Association aswell the Workings of Edward I covered up . However he was then able to place a Geas type Curse on the King which should he ever enter again the Soil of Scotland rob his Lifeforce aswell turned him Insane.

His Legacy should however last forever in the Memory of Scotland and he was venerated as the greatest of Scotlands Martyrs and he was sanctified by the Bishops that once supported him from the Background . THe fate of his Wive Marion and their Child however was lost to history …

Personality

He is summoned as Archer summoned at the early Phase of his Militaric Carrer at the start of his Resistence movement .

He is a determined and quite pridefull but also well grounded individual . So was he since his youth a Boy that was not only quite handsome but also had he a noble demeanor as he liked to help his Neighbours however None of them had expected that he once should be one of the National Heros of Scotland .

At first did he just wanted to prove himself in a fight but as he saw what he English Men caused for Atrocities and he saw how his Landsmen and -women were treated did he couldnrt beared anymore so did he killed a Criminal High Sheriff which marked his art of Agenda.

As he is quite headstrong and stubborn at times did he once he made his decision made seldom Compromisses only if the actualk Situation demanded it ,however in battle was he Always one that acted Brave ,fearless and shrewd .

Despite that he lacked the Charisma to be a Ruler was he equipped with great Leadership mentalities as he was able to notice the crucial steps hat must be done aswell was very compassionated as he was concious that for the freedom of his Homeland great sacrifices had to be made however he atempted to hold them as small as possible however after the Battle of Fallkirk did he aknowledged the fact that his Menpower might be to weak so did he attempted to refresh the Fighting thirst oft he old Enemies of the English Crown the Monarchs of French and Norway .

Beside his rather prominent Militaric side is he however a rather passionful Person which loved the few time with his Wife and wished he had spend more time with her aswell that he had actively had been a Father for his Daughter .

Demeanor as Servant:

As said before is he summoned in his youthfull aspect however he has still all memories of his life and is some times quite saddened due to this.

He has though the desire to prove himself in a fight so does he see the Grailwar as Chance to meet worthy opponents to test his skill and prowess . So does he like to engage in open and fair fights in contrast to should he be summoned as Rider where he would be more oppportunistic in his Tactics has he as Archer still the unspent idealism he had at the start .

So is he quite battle eager . So does he has great curiousity to fight against the other two Knight class servants . It goes without saying that should he Encounter a Non Scotish Britain Servant he want to demonstrate the power of a Scotish Warrior , however his hatred against them is lower as would he be summoned in a other class . Also is he quite interested should he Encounter a Celtic Servant they were the Ancestors of his People in this case is overjoyed and would like to talk with them to learn About the life of his Ancestors .

He is however like impled before not only a brutish Warrior as he was quite knowledgefull in history as he wanted to unite the old Enemies of Britain with his diplomatic travels . So is he quite curious to encounter Warriors of the Age of Mysteries and to have the Honor to fight with them .

Aside the Grailwar does he enjoy to get to know the Land in which he is summoned respectively to get to know About the state of Scotland ,so does he like to read some historic report not nly from Scotland as Hobby and enjoys to going to eat at Restaurants and enjoying the modern cuisines.

Demeanor towards Master

Initially does he prefer to have and treat his Master as Comrade in arms in a equal manner. However should his Master be a british Men /women will he be more distanced and mistrusting , inn this case will his Master have to work for his trust as he never Forget the crimes of Edwards men that they accused him to have done. However towards Female Master in General is he more softer in interactions with them.

Should his Master be a child would be this for him a bit .. complicated as he feels still guilty int hat he couldnt be a real Father so is he unshure in how to treat and Approach childrenn so is this fr him rather stressing at first until he has acquintated with them .However he is highly protective towards them and like to teach them some Things like Self Defence ,Horse Riding (if situational possible) , cultural Knowledge ´. So after awhile he would start musing in that perhaps like this it could have been with his own Child.

It goes withoutsaying that the best compatibility would he have with a Scotsh Master then yah then would it be if possible a equal frenship from Williams side .

About his Wish to the Grail would he have several ideas like that he was able to persuade the French and Norway kings to go into War with Edward I and to liberate Scotland Lasting. Respectively to be able o reunite with Marion and their Child or atleast get to know what after his death became of the two .

Dialogues:


Jack Churchil:"WEll even i am a quite battle hungry one but man you are crazy one no Wonder why they called you Madman "

Burebista:" You would have been the King the Scots had could needed as you strove to better the live of your Kinsmen , you have my respect for even not shy away from a World empire ,i am curious could you tell me about the peoples of your time especially th Celtic tribes ?"

Jack the Ripper: "I know this Feelings i to am feeling guilty to not had the opportunity to be a parent , also do i understzand the Sentiment with London this dirthole where they dragged me down and called me a traitor to someone i never was a subject."

"Lu Bu": "That s a quite tragic but also touching way of life , i must say though i am glad that atleast my Cild had could spend a life of Peace ."

Boudica:"You have my Respect Boudica as you are having fought agains a Overwhelming Enemy of the outside , ist nicee to meet a Ancestress of the Scot in any case."

Arthoria Pendragon:"Dont expect me to respect you !"

British Monarch servants: *silent hatefull glaring*

King James IV (of Scotland):"you wer a really good King that made Scotland proud in any case thank you for caring of my Sword , what you want that i tell you About the Scotish freedom Battles i dunno the better Talking Partner would be my Rider or Saber Version "

Skills

Classkils:

Magic Resistence:C+
Although whereduring his time Magecraft already a rather secret manner did he possesed a certain amount of Magic Circuits so does he possess a atleast decent amount of resistence further emphased by a certai Myszic Code of Scotland. further does he rceive plus modifier if a Thaumaturgy that resolve around Royality or British origin should be used against him.


Independet Action:A
As he is the Icon of Scotish Idomitability and Independence does he naturally receive a high ranking in this skill ,aswell receives this skill even outside the Archer class.

He is able to act without greater Dependance on his Master supply aswell does this skill allows him to stay atleast a week in the World without a Master.

Personal skillls:


Unyielding Will: B
Wallace was the embodiment of Scotish freedom and Fighting spirit so did he never gave up during a fight .

He never gave up during a fight however this is not a reason of to not retreat if neccesary.

"Ist not a shame to retreat if the Situation is calling for this Option ,however to flee out of fear is another matter."

Eye of Mind (War): B
Special Version of Eye of Mind which not only is useable for one selves One-to-One fight but allows also one to firmly grasp the flow of a battle on War scale where he is able to deduce the Group pattern and is able to lead allies effectively . Unlike his Rider Version where his Militaric and tactical aspect would made their appearances does this skill represent his inate Talents.



"Well if One against One or a Side against the Ennemy ist actually quite similar Master"

Bravery:B+
Wiliam was the Symbol, of Scotish Bravery aswell did he ,so does he possess a high Rank as his Mental Fortitude was over the Centuries reinforced .So doews he possess he a resistence against Mental Interfernce aswell does it increase caused Melle Damage.


Martial Glory (Spark of Rebelion):C
The Abillity or Inate skill to incite camaraderie through the Engagement of battle akin to what today is called "to understand each other through the fists" ,aswell isit a certain type of Charisma but not the of a Ruler no one of a Fighter for Freedom which gets to lead other likemminded individuals for their shared Goal as such does this skill bypass Nature of a Rebelious Spirit or certain forms of Mental Polution.

As Archer represent his state Prior the great battles of freedom has this skill not ist maximal Rank .

Noblephantasm

Scotish Braveheart

Wall of Wallace

Anti-Army (Support)
B
Is the Sublimation of Wiliams state as the first Guardian of Scotland , it is also the full power release of his Martial Glory skill which he actibate by Holding his Bow high upward and the exclaiming of his true Name does he Bow start brightly and Archer and his Allies are obtainning plus modifiers a small bost in physical performence aswell are all Mental interfernces negated and they obtaining a Bravery skill equiivalent of D for a short time. At the same time is the Opponent receiving minus modifiers aswell are they induced with a Fear type mental effect .

However would be Wiliam be summoned as Saber or Ruler would this Noblephantasm able to demonstrate its true powers.

Unleashed Freedom of Oppression

Rhyssis Rhydd Rhag Gormes

Anti-Unit~Anti-Fortress (Anti-royality)
E- ~ A+++
Is the Sublimation of Wiliam Wallace state as breaker of the British hold over Scotland aswell his through the history which even in the modern World was enforced . This Noblephantasm is ting out of a Arrow shoot whichs potencial of destruction and power is accordingto the Degree of Royality of the target as this Arrow respresent the resentiment of hte Scotish Island against the forreign Royalities .

So for instance if activated against a simple wooden hut of a poor Men it just got stack i the Wood wall but if used against a Royal Fortress (perhaps a Noblephantasm ) it becomes a Burning Meteor that strenght is equal to a Anti Fortress Noblephantasm . Similar is it with other servants so is ist power based on the Affiliation oft he Opponent servants Disposition towards any dort of Royality or Empire so does it posess a Rank of B and Anti Army esignation if the servant is General thus having the burden of a Army on him . Should it be a King or equivalent servant will the power be equal to a A++ Rank and Anti-Fortress Noblephantasm . However against servants that werent affiliated to any sort of Royal or Official Work is this Noblephantasm at best just a C Rank Anti-Unit servant, aswell would this Noblephantasm be useless against Beast type servants or Rebell type Heroic Spirits.

Additionally does this Noblephantasm possess a Anti-World Attribution if used against a Non Scotish Britain servant where its power is equal to a Rank B+ , but ist true power Shine only if used against a British Monarch then it will unleash he full hatred of the Scotish Folk .

"WE Scots dont Forget neither hostility nor hospitality so be carefull Master!"

Notes

So i have it done after Morg did mentioned it did i made the decision that Wiliam Walace will be me next servant after the contest , i hope he is well done as , he is quite classic but as he s the first Wallace in the Forum i think it should fitt.

i have tried he Frame maker of Realcasually but every time i tried to use the made Picture had a sort of error also one time once an i thought i had to write a part of the priifle a second time with a expected Freak out so i refarin from using it perhaps do i tr to insert it later .

in any case hope that the Grammar is atleast sufficient and am curious About your oppinions .