Simple is as simple does. Especially when its well done. You honestly didn't do bad at all... if I'm permitted I'd even be as bold as to say its good. Has places to work on for example you could use him to create some original headcannon lore. However what you did here is perfectly acceptable and competently done which is good for a first sheet.
All I can really suggest is to keep sheet making whatever feels right so that overtime you get the hang of it.
Rookie Lorekeeper, Amateur Extraordinaire, and all around nasunoob.
Slacking off? Haha… Nope, this is part of my job too!
Well, it’s not like only you human beings deserve happiness in this world.
Cats, and especially saints, need love too!
I love the idea of saints realizing people’s wishes similar to a holy grail.
Don’t worry about it. You have plenty of time. Its not like the current index will be updated anytime soon.Originally Posted by DelRey
(I’m betting ten bucks that the current index won’t be updated before the year ends.)
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Master, I will try to fufill your orders to the best I can but there are some boundaries that I can’t cross. Now that out of the way, where the enemy you want me to beat up”
Class: Archer
True Name: Saad ibn Abi Waqas
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Arabia
Parameters:
STR: C
END: B
AGI: B
MGI: D
LCK: C
NP: A
Likes: Other Muslims, Archery, and Creative Thinking
Dislikes: Scandals, Strife, and Debt
Talent: Archery, Horse Riding, and Military tactics
Natural Enemy: Enemies of Islam.
Catalyst: His Personal Bow that is kept in The Medina Museum
Armament: A Quiver of Floating Arrows that he can manipulate with his mind
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance (C Rank): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Independent Action (EX Rank): The Ability to remain independent even when rejecting the magical energy. The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master; the ability that allows for action even in the absence of the Master. It is possible for Archer to stay in the world for years without a Master. If he doesn’t engage in combat. The effects are much shorter down to about a week at most. But he can reject the command seals of his master at the cost of his parameters all go down by one rank. Inspire by his vow towards Islam, where his mother tried to starve herself to only be replied that even if she has multiple lives and each of them slowly departed, he would never leave his faith.
Personal Skills:
Mark of the Zealot (B+ Rank): A type of Madness Enhancement, this skill boosted Archer’s Strength for a while but at the cost of being only able to focus on one single target. This skill is defined on how single minded he can be when people of his faith was attack even down to his own brother. Who he vows to kill, when ever he sets his eyes upon him again. After he mortally wounded the prophet
Protection of the Faith (A + Rank): The absoluteness of one’s body and mind that was born from their beliefs and their zealous mind. To go far as to retaliated at the offender.
Protection from Arrows (C + Rank): The ability to is the ability to deal with projectiles, an increased defence against ranged attacks by predicting the projectiles' trajectories through exceptional means, such as hearing the sound of air being cut, or sensing the killing intent of the enemy. Such as his defensive tactics that he employed in the battle of Qadisiya which his army was able to withstood the rapid volley of arrows from the Sassanids without a single of them penetrating.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Sham Al Janah
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: A
Description: An Arrow that was guided from the heavens after the prophets Muhammad’s Prayers to God that let Saad arrow always strikes true and powered by the spirit cores of Muhammad Parents. Based on this Hadith that said “Shoot Saad let my mother and father be your ransom”
Waqfat 'ahad Akhar
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: B+
Description: A defensive NP, Saad multiples his arrow until they started to encircling himself and his master, he can make the circle big enough to guard up to 10 people. Any intruders will be torn by the waves of arrows as soon they appear within 5 feet of it. Based his on this stand at the battle of Uhud where his occupy an oncoming cavalry charge by shooting multiple arrows at the same time, repeatedly. With the Prophet delivering the arrows to him.
Lore: Saad is one of the 10 companions that was promise heaven by the prophet. Early in life he was very zealous of his faith and prone to outburst. When it was challenged or mock. But over the years his fiery temper began to cool down and he became a much more composed and calm manner man. Even in a civil war in the Muslim world he won’t join a side and he was the last of them dying in comfortable wealth in his 80’ies
Personality: Saad that was summon in Chaldea is after the Battle of Uhud. He still has a fire in his eyes for battle in the name of Proper Human History. He tries to tackled every problem to head on. Sometimes to the determent of every other servant and Ritsuka. Such as whenever he charges his enemy first and runs of at the first sight of them and despite being in the Archer class, he much preferred close-range combat.
Creator Notes : This is my first servant sheet, any criticism would be very much appreciated, I tried find unique way ways to implement his anecdotes in the Hadith but worried that I wank it a bit to much.
Last edited by Ismail2002; December 25th, 2021 at 06:25 PM.
Congrats on your first sheet. I kinda like it.
Saad ibn Abi Waqqas: Really cool to see one of the Prophet's Companions, they're definitely among one of the most underrated historical group of badasses. That said, for your first sheet it's not bad at all. The formatting could use some more work and the skills as well as NPs are a bit on the sparse side, but otherwise it's pretty neat. One advice I can give is that Servants are meant be cool and strong, so do not worry too much about wanking, and just go with whatever you see fit.
"Yeesh, why do I have to be Santa this year? I was content with just watching but fine, I'll give it a go, I guess?"
…
"Oh, these clothes? Eh, just a blast from the past, nothing more."
True Name: Krampus
Class: Assassin
Alt. Class: Ruler
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Source: Alpine Folklore
Region: Alps (or Germany)
Parameters:
Strength: C+
Endurance: B
Agility: B+
Mana: C
Luck: A
Class Skill:
Presence Concealment A+
The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. It is a common Class Skill of the Assassin class. Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. It is possible to disappear completely and become almost impossible to be detected, even against a Servant's perception. However, efficiency will decrease once preparations to attack are taken.
…
"Breaking and Entering unnoticed is not as hard as people make it out to be."
Divinity B+
The measurement of one's aptitude as a Divine Spirit. For some reason, Assassin's Divinity has been heightened significantly.
Personal Skills:
Gift of the Saint (Traditional) B
A Skill acquired by completely turning into Santa Claus and enriching hearts by giving presents, albeit a variation of the original. Assassin's gift giving mostly consists of rapid consumables like fruits, nuts, and some simple candies and chocolates.
…
"I'm not exactly one to give out material goods. How about a piece of candy instead?"
Projectile (Coal) A+
A skill that denotes an aptitude for thrown weapons; which, in Assassin's case, is coal. Receiving coal is noted to be a common punishment for being naughty though Assassin interprets the idea of receiving coal much more openly than others would like.
…
"Naughty children will be punished. No exceptions."
Appreciation of Drinks (Yule) B
A skill that denotes the owner as a consumer of alcohol. It allows the identification of any beverage, drink or cocktail, particularly those consumed during the winter months in celebration of Yule and the like.
…
"Pah~, that hit the spot."
Noble Phantasms
Personality
Creator's Note: I can't believe I nearly forgot about Krampus.
@Baron Magnus: Thank you! Olyndicus is my first Lancer sheet, but actually my seventh overall lol (well, eight, but I ended up deleting the original second one so it doesn't really count). I posted the rest between the 11th of April and the 1st of May though, so makes sense you wouldn't have seen the rest given your join date and assume Olyndicus is the first given that and his purposeful simplicity. I'm just a p casual fan who hasn't delved that deep into the franchise yet and doesn't really post that frequently lol.
I actually made a creator index now, it's my one blog entry and should be linked in my signature too if I did everything right. Also, here's less than elaborate collage of the faceclaims, w grails to fill the empty spaces. First row is Saber, Lancer, Archer; second is Rider, Caster, Assassin; third is Berserker. Who do you all think would normally win in a war between them excluding Masters as a factor, btw?
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@Vance: I get the impression that, while he's got his grievances with his new role and really the world at large, Santa Krampus actually cares a lot more about how Christmas turns out than he lets on, lol. It seems like in this role he's trying to put an old-fashioned but ultimately benevolent bent to it, too. I love the skills, and the Naughty List as his first NP is a great idea!
Has anyone created a Rider Nero Servant sheet? I'm thinking of throwing my hat in here for it, but just wanted to see first.
Just do it. Don’t late arcade hold your imagination down.
Twink Santa and Twink Krampus back to back. Amazing.
Not exactly back to back there is something in the middle. Though looking at it, it's kind of awkward positioning. For my sheet to be in the middle
Getting ready to upload my sheet, but I'm just wondering; how can I embed an image into a spoiler box like some people do here? Whenever I try it just comes up with a blank box.
You mean when you click on an image and it expands into more text? You might be confusing COLLAPSE with SPOILER.
I personally have an imgur account and I upload pics to it and then use the image edit... which you can nest inside of a spoiler edit.
Rookie Lorekeeper, Amateur Extraordinaire, and all around nasunoob.
I mean where it's labelled 'Appearance' and you click it to reveal the physical reference. If that's collapse, thanks. I'll be sure to look into the BB code for it.
Oh you mean just putting an image in the spoiler?
Just do this then
Appearance
Funnily enough, I've actually used the Saber FC for a Ruler Hugues de Payens, so I'd say he got this one.Also, here's less than elaborate collage of the faceclaims, w grails to fill the empty spaces. First row is Saber, Lancer, Archer; second is Rider, Caster, Assassin; third is Berserker. Who do you all think would normally win in a war between them excluding Masters as a factor, btw?
Spoiler:
Damn it it's useless! I can't do it!
Whenever I try to format the sheet for posting, it keeps on duplicating the boxes for no reason! I can't find a reason out of it, no matter what I do.
Maybe I should just avoid trying to post for now. Is there some sort of template I could use from you guys to post it instead?
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