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    Quote Originally Posted by the god of world-0 View Post
    dude, i know people joke about it, but you should not just literally just copy and past the wiki article on your lore section. It is full of junk like random numbers and broken links, so maybe clean it a little. A bit more development for his personality whould also be good, those two entire sections just for four lines of text seem like a waste of potential.
    I added the remaining story part and relationships, and put a little tweak in Noble Phantasm 2. Thx for the critic.

    Renewed post: https://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthrea...=1#post3051026

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    Jiesheshuai: Pretty good job on your first sheet. Though I'm not sure why none of his Skills have ranks.

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    Hello! I've been lurking the CaS threads for quite a while and decided to finally make my debut~ And what better way to do it than my first try at an Avenger? Had a bit of help from fellows more experienced than I in making this and I'm pretty satisfied with the outcome.

    Sorry if my formatting is off, by the way. I'm new here...


    Name: Kullervo

    Title(s): Vengeful Son of Evil

    Class: Avenger

    Gender: Male

    Attribute: Earth

    Alignment: Chaotic Evil

    Legend
    A wicked child of evil born from the collected grudges of his slaughtered tribe to its sole surviving mother, Kullervo was considered as a son spawned from evil. After a series of misfortunate events that influenced his upbringing, Kullervo finally achieved his vengeance at the cost of everything dear to him. Because the weight of his people's grudges along with the sins he had committed against his surviving family were too heavy of a weight to bear, Kullervo had resolved to end his cursed existence soon after he had his revenge. Essentially, Kullervo is the same as he was depicted in the Kalevala with one important denotation that he is made up of the tribe of Kalervo’s negative emotions. A “living curse” of his tribe whose sole existence is to bring justice to the slaughtered.


    Personality
    The embodiment of hatred taking the shape of an all-consuming storm. A wicked child who was never given the chance to truly grow, Kullervo acts purely on his own impulses, doing what he believes is right and ignoring those around him. Being summoned as an Avenger has only warped Kullervo's mentality further, going so far as to destroy anyone who would dare spite him. Despite this, reasoning can be reached with his Master, especially if they share the same pain he had endured in his life: The pain of abuse and abandonment, to be torn from his family and sold off as a slave, and to have every semblance of his life taken from him. To those who are familiar with this abuse, Kullervo would sympathize with, taking on their burdens and allowing them to fuel the ever-raging tempest stirring deep within his heart, where naught but an overwhelming desire for vengeance remains. Kullervo knows that his very existence is painted with the misery of his people and that he must carry that burden even in the Throne of Heroes. Rather than changing that fate, his wish is to ensure that no child should carry the same burden.


    Armament
    Aside from the broadsword of the High God Ukko, Kullervo's main weapon of choice as an Avenger is the grudges surging through his body and manifesting as blackened lightning, representing both his overflowing desire for revenge as well as his latent magical power. Kullervo also carries a copper hand-ax as a focus for casting spells as well as a complementary side-arm.


    Parameters
    STR: C

    END: B

    AGI: C

    MGI: A

    LCK: -


    Class Skills
    Avenger: B+
    Signature class skill of the Avenger class, denoting one's state of being that gathers the hatred and resentment of others onto one's self. In other words, the very way of living as an Avenger. Not only is it easy for negative emotions to be drawn towards Kullervo, but he is empowered by them. The grudges of those around him only serve as fuel for Kullervo's tempestuous rage, that resentment automatically converted to both strength and energy. Gathering grudges is exceptionally easy due to Kullervo being a "living curse".

    Memory Correction: A
    Class skill of the Avenger class. Humans, as living things, are forgetful of many things, but an Avenger never forgets. Consumed with a rage for the vast misfortunes both he and his tribe have suffered, Kullervo's hatred will never falter. An endless storm rages through Kullervo's heart. It’s this unending torrent that caused him to abandon and even curse his own family in his desire to obtain revenge. By attacking from beyond the memories of his opponents (and because he also carries the memories of his tribe), critical effects are strengthened.

    Self-Replenishment (Mana): -
    Class skill of the Avenger class. Until one's revenge is complete, magical energy is endlessly replenished. However, this skill has been sublimated into The Vengeful Storm That Rages Endlessly due to Kullervo's form of mana replenishment going above and beyond the limits of this skill.


    Personal Skills
    Witchcraft (Wild): B-
    Signifies one as a practitioner of the black arts. Kullervo was noted to have an incredible talent with sorcery and alongside the nature of his body containing numerous grudges, he would truly be a first-class genius at the art if not for his ill-fated life. Instead, Kullervo impulsively wields a vast assortment of curses and other dark magics as a weapon against all those who would spite him. However, because he wildly casts spells due to his anger, the expected outcomes are more varied and the effects are much harder to control.

    Madness of the Spirits: A
    The maddening howls of Kullervo, a child born from the countless grudges of the murdered tribe of Kalervo, scour the Earth, causing the spirits sleeping from within to stir and crush the will of all opposition. A mental interference effect that temporarily decreases the STR and AGI of his opponents, Kullervo's screams carry the collective weight of his entire tribe's rage and anguish.

    Prana Burst (Lightning): C+
    Magical energy is infused with the element of Lightning, surging from one's weapons and body. A skill that combines Kullervo's internal magical energy along with the properties of his Noble Phantasm, Ukonvasara. Summoned as an Avenger, blackened lightning overflows from Kullervo's body, enhanced and made stronger by the resentment accumulated within him, bestowing this lightning with a grudge effect and further darkening it. Eternally, Kullervo is covered in a furious tempest that grows along with his anger, protecting him in an armor of cursed lightning that also serves as a manifestation of his all-consuming desire for vengeance.

    The Vengeful Storm That Rages Endlessly: A
    A mutation of the Galvanism skill made by synchronizing his Noble Phantasm with his existence as an Avenger. Rather than stray magical energy, negative emotions and even curses are instead converted into electricity used to further fuel his quest for vengeance. The grudge-filled electricity paints Kullervo's mana, darkening his magical energy. Because of his state as an Avenger, who is constantly filled with negative emotions, this skill constantly fuels Kullervo like a Perpetual Motion Engine, allowing him to survive even spiritual core damage momentarily so long as he remains sufficiently angry. So long as the storm within his heart continues to rage on, not even the World can end his existence.


    Noble Phantasm


    Name
    : Ukonvasara

    Title: Blood-Thirsting Thunderbolt of the Sky God

    Rank: C ~ A+

    NP Type: Anti-Fortress

    Range: 1 ~ 50

    Maximum Number of Targets: 300

    The magical broadsword given to Kullervo by the High God Ukko, Sky Father of the Finns. A "sentient" sword that can move and attack on its own, its main ability is to grant its wielder the destructive power of Ukko, the blade itself containing the High God's lightning. However, it seems as if this power has been severely weakened due to not being summoned under the Saber class, losing the ability to launch direct bolts of lightning. Instead, Kullervo has directed Ukonvasara's power internally through the use of his witchcraft, granting him the Prana Burst (Lightning) skill and essentially serving as a glorified lightning rod.

    Because Kullervo's body is filled with grudges, the lightning borne from the blade is also strengthened with these negative emotions, resulting in a peculiar effect that allows the blade to transcend its normal limits. By invoking the blade's True Name and striking it into the ground like a thunderbolt, the tempest of hatred held within Kullervo is brought outward all around him, resulting in a destructive maelstrom that scales in conjunction with Kullervo's accumulated grudges. If sufficiently powered, this storm has enough destructive power to raze an entire forest or wipe an entire village off the map, permanently scouring the Earth with Kullervo's hatred.

    Interestingly, the sword is also capable of speech. However, the personality of the sword has been significantly warped into that of a blood-starved murderer due to holding the countless grudges contained within its wielder. Even the blood of Kullervo's allies or even the wielder himself would satisfy the sword's blood lust. A terrible conversation partner, but otherwise loyal to whoever wields it. A sword is made to be a tool used for killing, after all.

    Last edited by Hound of Ulster; July 24th, 2020 at 10:51 AM. Reason: updated the faceclaim because it wasnt screaming "living curse" as well as i wanted it to

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    Kullervo: this is actually very good. The concept of "Grudges in human form" is not new but you integrates it with his legend very well. I especially find Witchcraft(wild) a very cool skill and the NP very interesting. Overall, a very strong first impression.


    here is a list of my servant sheets(new and improved format for my servant sheets)

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    Quote Originally Posted by arrowofsky View Post
    Source: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ashina_Jiesheshuai

    Class: Assassin
    Other Classes: Rider, Archer
    True Name: Ashina Jiesheshuai
    Alignment: Lawful, Evil
    Place of Origin: Central Asia-China

    Parameters and Characteristics
    STR: C
    END: B+
    AGI: B
    MGI: E
    LCK: C
    NP: C to B

    Height: 170 cm
    Weight: 60 kg
    Gender: Male
    Likes: Riding, conversation, team work
    Dislikes: being ignored
    Talent: Riding, archery, commanding, persuasion
    Natural Enemy: Emperor Taizong
    Armament: Bow, quiver, two short swords, leather armor or long cloak
    Catalyst: bow remnant under 5 meter depth of soil near to Wei River, Shaanxi


    Skills

    Class Skills:

    Independent Action: Independent Action is the ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master; the ability that allows for action even in the absence of the Master.

    Personal Skills:

    Charisma: Charisma is a composite Skill consisting of a person's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. Rather than relying on presence concealment and other hideous ways of many assassins(except in his Noble Phantasm "Assassination to Our Death") Jiesheshuai directly confronts his enemies and what he lacks as in assassin way, he makes up with posture, words, persuasion and courage.

    Cavalry Archer: The Turkic tribes of the past are renowned with their ability to shooting arrows extremely accurately and rapidly while riding horses, a.k.a. Parthian shot.

    Theft of Ride: Jieshehuai can use other servants horses or ride belongings almost as if he is their actual owner. Of course, rather than a magical trick, he either forcefully obtains them or convinces their master to dismount before.

    Noble Phantasm 1
    "With all these powers and status, who are you serving?"
    Conspiration
    Rank C - Anti-Unit
    Range - Whereever there is a servant

    Through his 9 years service of commanding armies against nomadic tribes of Central Asia for Tang Dynasty, he had seen lives flourishing and perishing, ascending and descending, shining like a northern star or being corrupted like a spoiled mushroom leftover. There are times even the hardest metal bends, there are golds even to purchase something unthinkable to attain, and there are words and ways to disrupt people's seemingly indestructible loyalty. He knows what to say who, when, how and where, and in no-time one's meek servant might be found to openly attack him/her with Jiesheshuai's assistance.
    This is a telepathic way of communication with other servants, in analogy of the intricate ways of information flow in palace for conspiration. The target servant's will not be aware of it directly. Requires very low amount of mana and can be done multiple times to anyone. However, it only (has a chance to) work against a servant with "Independent Action" skill.

    Noble Phantasm 2

    "We eat, drink, enjoy, toil, live this life together, now it is the time, we kill TOGETHER!"
    Assasination to Our Deaths
    Level 1
    Rank C - Anti-Army
    Range - What meets the eye's of Jiesheshuai

    Jiesheshuai is not a delinquent, he has his principles, status, dignity and of course, comrades. After the last word of the incantation, "TOGETHER" , the weather around becomes stormy, with occassional thunders and incessant rain, 20 comrades of him appears from the Palace Raid event. Each of them equally as capable as Jiesheshuai, and their unison boosts their endurance stat to level B++. Additionally, all of them including Jiesheshuai wear a long cloak which makes it impossible for enemies to distinguish him from his comrades.
    This Noble Phantasm will require more mana to sustain, and still it will have a time-limit. The death of Jiesheshuai completely destroys his other comrades as well, and the last thing to remove it is, its ascension to Level 2.


    "Looks like we are not accustomed to walk on our bare feet, HORSES!"
    Assasination to Our Deaths
    Level 2
    Rank B - Anti-Army
    Range - What meets the eye's of Jiesheshuai

    Each alive comrade of Jiesheshuai and he as well immediately mount an unarmored horse. No stat is boosted but practically their agility and endurance increases. They can perform hit-and-run and Parthian shot tactics fully, the number of arrows is limitless as long as sufficient amount of mana is supplied by Jiesheshuai through his master or other ways.
    When this stage is reached, the time-limit of this noble phantasm further reduces, and with still increasing mana consumption with horses and arrows. Literally, it is a last-ditch effort but using it on the verge of defeat or death will only accelerate them. If Jiesheshuai and comrades managed to obtain Holy Grail while this Noble Phantasm is active, they may survive. In all other cases, all of them including the servant will die.

    Background


    Historical Background:

    Ashina Jiesheshuai ( b: ? – d. 19 May 639) was a member of the Ashina clan of the Eastern Turkic Khaganate and general (Zhonglangjiang) of the Tang dynasty.
    He was one of Shibi Khan's sons and the younger brother of Ashina Shibobi (Chinese: 阿史那什钵苾), who was a vassal khagan of the Tang dynasty and used the title of Tφlis Khan. Tang China defeated the Eastern Turkic khaganate, which became a vassal of Tang China in 630. During this period, some Turkic nobles were members of the Chinese army. Ashina Jiesheshuai was among these nobles. By summer 639, as Ashina Jiesheshuai had not been favored by Emperor Taizong (because he had falsely accused his brother Ashina Shibobi of treason, which Emperor Taizong found despicable), he formed a conspiracy with Ashina Shibobi's son Ashina Hexiangu (Chinese: 阿史那賀暹鶻) to assassinate Emperor Taizong at his summer palace, Jiucheng Palace (九成宮, in modern Linyou County, Shaanxi). They had planned to wait for Li Zhi, the Prince of Jin, to depart from the palace in the morning and use that opportunity to attack the palace. On the day they planned, May 19, Li Zhi did not leave the palace due to a storm. Ashina Jiesheshuai attacked the palace anyway, engaging the palace guards, but the guards were supported by troops who came outside. Ashina Jiesheshuai and his comrades stole some 20 horses from the stable. They fled to the north, but were caught by pursuers near the Wei River and killed. Ashina Hexiangu was exiled to Lingbiao.
    Story


    ...steppes...a breeze blew through but not strong enough to disrupt the serenity...then some vibration on the soil...thousands of horses were galloping on the horizon with a huge dust behind...suddenly he felt near to them...nearer...nearer...and now one of the horseman was him. A teenager he was, but capable of riding horses that much. Arrows flying, swords clashing, blood spilling, people passing away...it felt as a trivial, common thing to Jiesheshuai, except that his father, Shibi, died at that raid and life started to be quite different...that time an arrow was about to hit his nose and he suddenly woke up in sweats.

    This was the only remnant of Jiesheshuai's childhood. He does not want to remember those years anymore, and not forced to see this dream almost every night. Losing his father that time, he started to distance himself from everyone as things kept going on very smoothly, like nothing happened, even to his brother. Kinship, friendship faded gradually. The days started to pass by herding animals, hunting, training Parthian shot and with some survival necessities. He was growing, becoming stronger and firmer, maybe more dependable, but something was lacking, some subtle thing...

    One eventual thing is that there was a growing interaction with Chinese, they looked weak and strong, oscillating between them. But they have a solid foundation of culture and every other thing, and a massive population. Once he daydreamed like having an army of 8 million Chinese warriors and conquering all the known world. Of course, there won't be anything like that. Still, China attracted him. He started to communicate with people who both know Chinese language and his Turkic language at that time and started to learn to speak in Chinese as well. Two language, two people, it occured to him that there are far more things to see and care in this world than only herding animals and killing people.

    The fate created the opportunity. Emperor Taizong of China at that time was merciful and cosmopolitan, with sympathy against nomadic ways and culture, and of course utilizing these as much as he can so that his influence grows over Central Asia as well. Year 630 A.D. was the demolition of Jiesheshuai's khaganate, and his transfer to Tand Dynasty. With his calm and trustworthy manner, exceptional war talent and ability to see through people, as he was watching them afar for years, it did not take long to appoint him as military commander. Under this title, what was being done is continuously scheming and warring to push the boundaries to north and fight the nomadic people there. And he started to be center of attention, a thing that he never knew in Khaganate years and quite enjoyed here. Two years later, his brother Shibobi died on the way to Chinese capital, he did not do anything particular about this. But this was kept in mind of others...

    Things were different here, unlike nomadic people, Chinese spoke much more and used much more words, sentences and meanings. At first, he found this ridiculous and meaningless. Later he started to be overwhelmed by their interaction speed volume of information exchanged in a given time. But finally, he started to become like them. He kept thinking, solving the mysteries, intricacies of the power dynamics in both his milieu and in palace. He slowly started to use these dynamics on his advantage, to make himself more influential. The people who he could not startle with his archery skill, got drawn to him by the knowledge they would like to know about their adversaries. Sometimes, Jiesheshuai also be amazed by some properties of other people, and he established his connection with them as well. As it was like a star collection, they started to do things all together. They would practice riding, archery, Parthian shot and even oratorship together, and they grew familiar with themselves, always trying to improve both themselves and each other. But Jiesheshuai found this insecure, getting more familiar might look a stranger cute and well but in the eyes of palace, the rivers would flow anti-gravitationally. So he started to put random people in his collective activities as well, in total he was always with more than 100 people whatever activity of merit he does. He realized that there were Chineses taking Parthian shot even better than him, and also some other were slightly better than him in the other ways. He left the pleasures of the life aside completely and started to train alone sometimes to surpass everyone. Yet this was no joke, being the best was not that easy anymore. Fortunately he still got the attention he seeks from the people so he did not need to feel bad about his distance to his ideal, or hold grudges against the people who is more talented.

    This kind of connections did not actually make him more sociable or less alone, yet he filled a certain gap in his heart. He started to feel the warmth of comradeship. He was a realist, that with certain push everyone may change their attitudes 180 degree, so he never expected an unbreakable friendship or invincible loyalties.

    And the calendar showed 639 A.D. At a palace ceremony, Emperor Taizong favored this people and that, but overlooked him completely. This, was speculated later as done due to Jiesheshuai blamed his late brother for treason. But at that instant, he barely kept his cool while his mind was entirely shaken. A few days passed and he found no way of return, he kept seeing the dream he was always seeing, with additional scenes of insolence from weak Chinese emperors, ministers and stuff. There is a visible interest loss on his trainings and activities as well. Without further ado, he found that with the people who he can still influence, he would take that Taizong hostage and put another person in his place so that the history will completely be overwritten in favor of him, among many other benefits on his side.

    He knew that the longer you plan a rebellion, the less chance it will have for success. The quickest he can have as assitants in this undertaking seemed to be 40 people. Sometimes openly, sometimes with innuendos, he sway these people to his side. He planned to ambush palace Emperor Taizong resided after a prince, Li Zhi left it with his army. Days passed and still he did not left. And when they had a date for his depart, they put everything on that day and made preparations. Poor thing that there was not any farmer or knowledgable person among them on weathers, that day was messed with a storm, inceassant rain and hence prolonged stay of prince. Jiesheshuai still wanted to attack the palace as according to him was too late to change the plan. 20 of people found this extremely unpleasant and fled in many directions (whom the Chinese authority later would found and exile many of them, if not all), but giving chase to them was not an option for them. The remaining people take a look at themselves and found that none of them actually knows each other, another fluke of fate maybe, but they did not bother to delve it anyway.

    They attacked the palace. Started to bring down guards one by one with arrows, swords, lances and the like. They could not pierce through as there was an army against, even though they held out much longer than expected. Some enter the stable and brought 20 bare horses, with that they fled to the north without thinking much of what will happen later. They kept dropping the numbers of followers but to no avail. There was the Wei River and constant rain, as if to bury them alive. But that did not happen, they valiantly fight to the point that no one knew which one was Jiesheshuai, but there are times numbers matter, and that was not an exception. A hopeless rebellion of Jiesheshuai and his comrades was torn to the pieces at that place.



    Relationships
    Relationships:
    Emperor Tang Taizong: "You, who find my manners despicable, those "manners" carried this empire through the vast steppes"
    Ashina Shibobi: "I did not accuse you of treason "falsely", anyway whatever.
    Qin Shi Huang: "I would rather like to compete and surpass you instead of my disgusting contemporaries"
    Li Guang (a.k.a. flying general): "People here, still keep losing their way"
    Bumin Khagan: "If you guys were not be too obsessed by some afraid archnemesis, we would farm the Sichuan and fish in Yangtze peacefully with our tribes."
    Attila: "I heard that he was also a renegade for a few years in a distant step, then his uncle pull him and later he became a ruler of a very strong empire, while my uncle was going back and forth with indecisive Shibobi and his already strong emire crumbled, what would I do other than what I did?"

    Say, the god of world-0 is right, where are the ranks for his skills?

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Jiesheshuai: Pretty good job on your first sheet. Though I'm not sure why none of his Skills have ranks.
    Oops I corrected them. Updated post.

    By the way, I quite liked Kullervo, also reminded Kalevala ofc. He has not only interesting skills and noble phantasm, but also acts like a counter-hero imo, further makes the result of any possible encounter with him more unpredictable, and consequently, more exciting.
    My Servant sheets:

    Ashina Jiesheshuai

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    Saber of Absolution
    "Heheh, well then, did someone see it fit to summon a warrior like me? Well, since my sins were forgiven long ago, I guess I'll just make use of this opportunity for a good time!"


    Source

    Class: Saber
    Other Classes: Rider, Caster, Berserker

    True Name: Sir Gowther
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Origin: English literature (15th century)


    Parameters:

    STR: A
    END: C
    AGI: B
    MGI: B
    LCK: C
    NP: B+

    Likes: Pranks, beautiful princesses
    Dislikes: People without a sense of humor or adventure, his past
    Talent: Hunting, deception
    Natural Enemy: Merlin
    Armament: Sword, magecraft
    Catalyst: An old letter of absolution, bestowed by Pope Innocentius VIII

    Class Skills
    Riding
    Rank: B

    A skill denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.

    Magic Resistance
    Rank: B+

    Grants protection against magical effects. Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for them to be affected. Saber possesses greater resistance against dark or demonic magecraft due to obtaining the approval of the Church, yet at the same time, he is weak to church sacraments due to his half-incubus blood.

    Mixed Blood
    Rank: C

    A half-brother of the great mage Merlin, Saber was born from the union between human and incubus. This grants him increased mana generation, allowing him to use various forms of magecraft in rapid succession. However, unlike Merlin, Saber never learned how to properly tap into this power, limiting its effectiveness.


    Personal Skills
    Charisma
    Rank: B-

    A composite skill consisting of one's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. Despite being an Emperor of the Holy Roman Empire, Saber's free spirit, unwilling to be restrained by a ruler's obligations, has given this skill a rank down.

    Illusionism
    Rank: C

    A skill denoting excellence in the art of illusion within the field of magecraft; a magecraft for the use of beguilement. While his illusions can be highly convincing, Saber's lack of training significantly limits its range and duration, preventing it from manifesting for more than a few minutes within his vicinity. Saber normally uses these illusions to pull off pranks, but in battle, they can be used to confuse the enemy, executing feints, and creating openings.

    Hob, the Fool
    Rank: B

    Saber's disguise during his penance. Adopted into the court of the Holy Roman Empire, Saber disguised himself as a foolish court jester who ate under the table with the palace dogs in the evening. This skill creates an illusion presenting Saber as much weaker and more insignificant than he truly is, leading enemies to underestimate him, and leaves others who see traces of his actions thinking "It couldn't have been him."


    Noble Phantasm(s)
    The Unknown Warrior Rides Again
    Thrice-Riding Knight

    Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
    Rank: C
    Range: 1
    Max Targets: 1

    The armor Saber wears, originally a set of Heavenly armaments that Saber earned through his prayers. Wishing to stop an ongoing war, Saber fought three days in succession with impeccable skill, first fighting as a black knight, then a red knight, and finally a white knight. After the war concluded, no one, safe for a certain princess, knew who the mysterious knight was. Working similarly to disengage and information erasure, This Noble Phantasm can be activated whenever Saber is heavily wounded, or if his True Name became known to his enemies. At that moment, Saber would withdraw from battle and any information regarding his skills and True Name will be erased from the enemies' minds. While it is useful for obscuring his identity, Saber can only activate this Noble Phantasm three times at most.

    Curse of the Incubus and Blessing of the Holy Father
    Sword of Absolution

    Type: Anti-Army
    Rank: B+
    Range: 1-99
    Max Targets: 200

    Saber's main weapon. Originally a demonic sword that had taken the lives of many, it also gained Heavenly attributes after God had fully forgiven Saber's sins. This makes it effective against enemies of both divine and demonic origins, capable of bypassing most of their protections. In addition, by invoking its True Name, the sword would release a beam of light embodying the concept of "absolution". Its damage is further increased if the target possesses evil alignment or had done something generally considered "evil". After the initial damage, those struck by it would have their aggressive and hostile urges significantly reduced, as the sword had "absolved" them of their sins. In a way, even if the sword failed to kill its target, it is possible to erase their will to fight, unless they believe themselves be fighting for an exceptionally just cause.

    Description
    Saber's True Name is Sir Gowther, the protagonist of a short story contained within a poem set in the late 15th century. The son of an incubus and a human, he wreaked havoc, repented for his sins, saved a princess, was canonized and crowned as Holy Roman Emperor, and lived happily ever after... Or so the story goes. In truth, he hated life as an emperor. His free spirit was ill-suited for monotonous political and governmental obligations. Thus, unknown to anyone else, one day he decided to abandon his position and leave the empire with his wife for a life of adventure, after delegating his post to a close friend of his, Maximilian I. Eventually, his life faded into obscurity, relegated into a lesser-known piece of literature, while the world believed that Maximilian I had ruled the empire the whole time during the late 15th century.

    An easygoing, free-spirited young man with little sense of responsibility and obligation, Saber only desires a fun adventure and a good time. He's the type who believes "it's okay to sin as long as you just repent sooner or later", although he does seem to genuinely avoid crueler, more inhumane sins committed by his younger self such as massacres and arson. Despite loving his wife, he is also somewhat of a womanizer, easily smitten by any beautiful woman he encounters.

    Saber has a fondness for pranks and practical jokes. In battle, he rarely takes his enemies seriously, preferring to draw out the battle and openly mock his enemies through his illusions. That said, the enemy bringing up his past or saying something along the lines of "a despicable incubus is all you'll ever be" would most likely succeed in pissing him off enough to take them seriously.

    Saber shares a close sibling relationship with Merlin, despite the two never having met in life. It's as if their personalities are highly compatible, despite the frequent fights they have and Saber's constant pestering to have Merlin teach him more magecraft for his pranks and mischief.

    Saber doesn't have any specific wish to the Grail. To him, being summoned for any reason simply beats the boredom of governing an empire or sitting around for eternity on the Throne.


    Lore
    Our tale begins with the Duke of Austria, who threatened his wife with divorce if she does not quickly conceive an heir for him. She was in her garden one morning when a person she believed to be her husband arrives and they made love beneath the trees. However, she had been the victim of the utmost deception. Her "husband" was actually an incubus using magecraft to disguise himself, similar to how Uther Pendragon bedded the Duchess of Tintagel through Merlin's help.

    The child the lady carried in her womb is Merlin's half-brother, we are told. But he was a fiendish child. As a young child, he sent numerous wet nurses to their graves and bit off his mother's nipple on the only occasion she dares to suckle him. As he matured, hunting became one of his favorite pastime. Another one of his favorite involved terrorizing nearby villages while carrying a demonic sword, murdering innocents and burning entire villages to the ground. Perhaps due to his incubus blood, he seemed to possess strong hatred towards anything holy, as he burned an entire convent of nuns to their deaths. It was said that his father, the Duke of Austria, was so sickened of his son's behavior that he died of shame.

    Eventually, rumors of Gowther's incubus father and demonic blood began to circulate around the villages. Gowther was outraged hearing these rumors. He confronted his mother to see if they were true, and at the point of his sword, she confessed everything. Now appalled by his actions, Gowther resolved to travel to Rome and see the Pope to receive absolution for his sins.

    Gowther received an audience with the Pope and was given the penance that he may not speak, and that anything he swallows must first have been in the mouth of a dog. With nowhere else to go, by some luck Gowther was taken in by the Holy Roman Empire as their court jester, allowing him to eat under the tables with the palace dogs.

    The Holy Roman Emperor had a daughter who is mute, but that didn't stop a tyrannical sultan from a nearby kingdom from asking for her hand in marriage. When the emperor refused, the sultan declared war. Gowther, still disguised as Hob the court jester, prayed to put an end to the conflict, and he was rewarded with three sets of divine armor, as well as a majestic horse outside his small room. For the next three days, Gowther joined the emperor's army and fought with remarkable skill, first disguised as a black knight, then a red knight, and finally a white knight. As the war concluded, the people were left wondering on who was the mysterious knight who saved them all. Only the princess knew of the knight's true identity, but she was mute and thus unable to reveal it to anyone.

    Yet ultimately, victory comes at a price. Seeing Sir Gowther badly wounded, the princess fell from her tower in anguish. The Pope was summoned to bury her, but just before she was buried, she awakened, fully capable of speech. She declared that this is a miracle, and God had fully forgiven Gowther's sins, lifting his penance.

    Following this, the two married and soon Gowther was crowned as Holy Roman Emperor. He built a number of abbeys, churches, and convents, as atonement for his previous action of burning down a convent in his youth. Eventually, bored of ruling, he named Maximilain I as his successor and set off with the princess for a life of adventure. Nothing else was known regarding his life afterwards, but it is most likely safe to assume that the two lived happily ever after.


    Relationships
    Qin Shi Huang:
    "You've conquered the furthest reaches of the known world, crushed every opposition, and ruled your empire for more than a thousand years? Don't get me wrong, that's impressive in its own right, but seriously I just don't get you... After all is said and done, where's the fun in that?"

    Maximilian I:
    "Ah, Maxie, old friend! Sorry for lumping all those responsibilities to you on such a short notice. Hope you had more fun than I did taking care of those complicated political stuff. On the bright side, history remembered you as a great ruler who expanded the Habsburg influence. I say that's impressive enough!"

    Pope Innocentius VIII:
    "Hoho, if it isn't the old man! I'd like to repent for my sins again... Eh? What do you mean this is the third time this week!? I-I didn't do anything suspicious, trust me!"

    St. Martha (Ruler):
    "Hoo boy, a saint, and a beauty at that! 'Scuuuuse me lady, I'd like to repent for- wait, what do you mean you're going to 'punch the sin out of me'? W-Wait, put those gauntlets down, I- AAAAHH!!"

    Merlin:
    "Oh dear Onichaaaaan~! It's time for my usual magic lesson! Refuse and I'll let everyone know who this Magi✰Mari really is!"


    Creator's Notes
    Basically what would happen if Merlin chose the warrior/swordsman build and doesn't have a protege like Artoria to keep his more... mischievous impulses in check. Hopefully that little in-universe explanation on how "he's actually a real figure all along, but history didn't record him as one due to him running away from the throne" works well enough. Let's just say the church and the empire covered up his actions or told his tale simply as a fictional piece of literature since having an emperor run away from his job would definitely look bad for them.

    Also that Oniichan bit with Merlin is 100% ironic. He just figured out the cringiest, most annoying way he could refer him as and decided to tick with it just to pester him more.

    Finally, I feel kinda bad that his second NP is pretty much the generic sword beam, but I just couldn't think of anything else involving his sword.
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    Sir Gowther: his "Merlin but with no restraint" personality is really fun, it alone makes me want him to be a real servant. His Hob, the fool skill is really creative and, while his Np's are nothing crazy, they are not bad. In fact, I think there is a "cool simplicity" to them that matches his character. Really good, would summon.


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    Sir Gowther: I know you worried about his NPs but they're cool. This whole character is so cool. I had a blast reading his sheet. Now this is a character that I'm so sad he doesn't exists in canon; he'd be such a nice Saber. I love those free-spirited types, he's right up my alley! I also loved the concept of "as long as you repent somewhere along the line, you can do whatever you want" because THAT'S a dangerous concept in its innocence and carelessness. I'd love to see a HGW with this guy
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    That is an really interesting saber BnEI15 ! he has the air of Canon in that he Looks like Canon material i would say one im curious have you thought what his noblephantasm in his other classess are ?and is that Illlusionism part of the Incubus Heritage ?

    like i wonder in General where somewhere stated in nasu verse which abbillities or properties pure Succu - respectively Incubus would have ? because i have some Problems in judging Merlin in some aspects..


    Kullervo:He is wuite well done can i say also can i tell that you are quite Long here in either case officially welcome here !


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    Thanks, so far I imagine as a Rider he would still have Thrice-Riding Knight, and he would be summoned with his horse, increasing his maneuverability. Not sure about the other classes, other than Caster would probably focus more on church sacraments or divine magic gained through his absolution, while Berserker would embody his youth and his darker incubus tendencies. Illusionism is just a specific branch of magecraft not exclusive to Merlin, since apparently Prelati is also pretty proficient at it according to the mats. Then again, idk if incubus blood could influence or strengthen it somehow.

    For alter Nitocris, maybe make her more focused on vengeance to those who killed her brothers (although it feels a little too one-note to build her entire character on that alone), or emphasize more on her connections to the egyptian underworld. Perhaps by making her a pseudo of some egyptian underworld deity?
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    Quote Originally Posted by BnEl15 View Post
    Thanks, so far I imagine as a Rider he would still have Thrice-Riding Knight, and he would be summoned with his horse, increasing his maneuverability. Not sure about the other classes, other than Caster would probably focus more on church sacraments or divine magic gained through his absolution, while Berserker would embody his youth and his darker incubus tendencies. Illusionism is just a specific branch of magecraft not exclusive to Merlin, since apparently Prelati is also pretty proficient at it according to the mats. Then again, idk if incubus blood could influence or strengthen it somehow.

    For alter Nitocris, maybe make her more focused on vengeance to those who killed her brothers (although it feels a little too one-note to build her entire character on that alone), or emphasize more on her connections to the egyptian underworld. Perhaps by making her a pseudo of some egyptian underworld deity?
    Thanks for the Suggestion ist really difficult to think of an Alter Version of Nitocris as she is not the pharaoh of which we have many informations nd also her various names doesnt give much Inspiration but she is also named Saptah >Son/Child? of Ptah which was at one Point connected to Osiris the ruler of underworld respectively has she as other Name Neith ikeri the Connection o the elder Egyptian goddess which has also one Underworld function ,hmm thanks for tthe usefull note !

    ps:look after your servant compilation the link guides to an "Invalid Blog specified" message .

    respectively an Question to the veterans here which pharaoh that would have potencially enough material/info werent adapted as servant like i have seen Chufu ,Neferosobek is already adapted as servant here but their are some more candidates that could have potencial as servant ?
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    Lancer of the Thick Shoe

    ...I am Lancer...
    ...Nice to meet you...



    Class: Lancer
    Alignment: True/Neutral
    Region: Europe
    Height: 155cm
    Weight: 51kg
    Likes: Silence, her father, praise
    Dislikes: wolfs, meaningless noise, losing
    Talent: Wolf slaying
    Armaments: Spear, boots
    Natural Enemy: Fenrir

    stats

    Str: A+
    End: B
    Agi: B
    Mna: C
    Lck: B
    NP: A

    Skills


    class skills

    Magic Resistance(A): Cancel spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer"

    personal skills

    Divinity(E-): The measure of one's aptitude as a Divine Spirit. Lancer's Divinity was originally equivalent to A~B rank, but it was degraded after the twilight of the gods.

    Twilight Survivor(N/A): A Skill signifying one’s status as a survivor of Ragnarok, the Twilight of the Gods. As one of the ones who came to inherit the World, the user is granted some of the lingering Authority left in the wake of the disaster, manifested as a rank-up to all parameters. In exchange for what is gained, the user’s Divinity receives a rank-down due to outliving the Age of the Gods.

    Natural Body(A): The possession of a perfect body as a living being since birth. Grants a plus modifier to his STR. Furthermore, even without training, she is capable of maintaining her figure. Power gained through her Jotunn heritage, no matter how many calories she ingests, her body shape will not change.

    Giant Beast Hunt(EX): A Skill that denotes having abundant combat experience against giant enemy lifeforms. As the one who slew the Great Wolf Fenrir, who itself was a Beast without equal, Lancer is awarded the highest rank possible to this skill.



    Noble phantasm


    Declaration of the Great God
    Gungnir

    rank: Anti-unit, A

    One of the most famous spears of all, inherited from her father after his demise during the battle of Ragnarok. It is a Divine Construct of the highest order, powerful enough to considered one of the
    Ultimate God-Forged Illusion
    Last Phantasm
    . Unlike with other weapons inherited by the kin of the Aesir, the Divine core of its previous user is mysteriously missing.
    The spear serves as an ancestor to later weapons who carry the concept of "No matter how many times it is dodged, it will strike the enemy". In this case, the effect is achieved momentarily isolating the user and the target from the rest of reality, creating a situation where the spear absolutely has to hit the target since there is nothing else for it to hit.
    A cheating weapon who removes any obstacle, it wouldn't matter if Lancer threw it in the opposite direction or from behind several walls, the spear will ignore anything and pierce the target, not even affecting other objects of persons on the way. From an outside perspective, it would appear as if the weapon is simply phasing through Shields and barriers, so even an infinite amount of defensive value would be useless.
    The only way to potentially block the attack is to have a high enough degree of luck as to be able to alter fate or having a conceptual defense intrinsically connected with one's internal world.

    Iron Stomp of the Silent God
    Jarnskos Vanagandr

    rank: Anti-Army, EX

    A Noble Phantasm original to Lancer herself, it is a crystallization of her feat of slaying the wolf Fenrir which she accomplished during the battle of Ragnarok. It is a strong conceptual attack that "forces into submission a strong foe" and "breaks their bodies along with their spirit".
    The technique is initiated by Lancer stomping into the ground, creating a powerful shock wave that manifests a special boundary field with a strong gravitational force that pressures her target into place, almost as if they are being held down. Lance will then jump into the air and come down into what can only be described as a "diving kick" who's power can be equated to a full-force swing of the divine hammer Mjolnir, completely eradicating her target along with anything on the area around it.
    If she so desires, Lancer can activate the boundary field to immobilize her enemies without having to finish the attack. This Noble Phantasm also caries strong Anti-Beast effect and in fact, only Divine Beasts on the level of the "White Whale" or the "Bull of Heaven" would be able to survive this technique, and even so not completely unscathed.



    Background


    Lancer's identity is that of Vidar. She is one of the Aesir and the child of the god Odin and the Jotunn Gridhr. She is referred to as "The Silent God" and as the third strongest after Magni and Thor, it is said that the god's relied on her in times of immense difficulties.
    During Ragnarφk, after the wolf Fenrir devours Odin, Lancer avenged him by stepping down with one foot on the lower jaw of the monster, grabbing his upper jaw in one hand and tearing his mouth apart, killing him. Lancer's "thick shoe" is described as consisting of all the extra leather pieces that people have cut from their own shoes at the toe and heel, collected by Lancer throughout all time.
    Following Ragnarφk and the rebirth of the world, Lancer, along with her sibling Vali, have both survived the swelling of the sea and the fiery conflagration unleashed by Surtr, completely unharmed, and inherited the position of their father, dwelling on the field of Idhavollr where the city of Asgard had previously been.



    personality


    Lancer is a naturally stoic person. She has seen the fires of Twilight and the end of her world, so she is hardly ever startled by anything. It is safe to say that experiencing this destruction has had a great impact on her personality.
    She is quiet, rarely speaking and when doing it so, having a soft voice. From the beginning, Lancer always knew what her purpose was and never really diverged from it. In a sense, her existence is somewhat similar to that of a Valkyrie, being almost mechanical on the way she approaches duties.
    Besides that, however, she not entirely emotionless. She enjoys being praised for a job well done and conversely hates when she fails at what she is attempting. Lancer can also be surprisingly competitive since she was never really challenged during her life.

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    Vidar: I'd thought of making a sheet for him/her a while back, but never came up with enough inspiration, so I'm glad to see your take here.

    I planned on making him an Avenger based on the whole "born to avenge Odin" thing, but Lancer works too. Though I never thought of her having Gungnir, it fits as she is Odin's "son" and all. The giant boot stomp NP is of course obligatory given the character involved. Would definitely make for some epic imagery in an anime.

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    La vie est juste drole

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    "Hoh you pig has summoned me ?! I hope that you are clear that my Asssistence isnt earned easily..






    Title: Lostbelt Queen of the Lone Sun Lostbelt ,The Queen of the Sun Aton

    Height: 181 cm
    Weight: dont mentionworthy

    Alignment:Chaotic Evil
    Attribute:Earth,Heaven
    Weapons:the Rays of Aton ,Two Swords.

    Other Qualifying Classess:

    Rider,Caster,Archer,Saber,Lancer,Assassin,Berserke r,Avenger,Forreigner(Lostbelt selv)
    Assassin,Caster,Rider,Forreigner (her greater History self)

    Likes: Aton and "his" purryfying rays of Aton,Herself ,Seth (her Husband),Her childrenn,the New Humanity
    Dislikes:Imposters of Aton(All other Sun gods),Hu-vermin

    Hobbies:to take Sun Baths , to spend time with her hubby

    Natural Enemies: The Horus Child,The Misterious Phantom

    Parameter:
    Strenght:B+
    Endurance:B+
    Agility:A
    Luck:B
    Mana:EX
    NP:EX

    Background

    The First parts of her life were quite the similar to her greater History Counterpart as she were an girl that spend her childhood in poor circles that raised her social status through inteligence aswell by her charms and beauty with hich she was able to seduce her way up the ladder until the Pharaoh at that times named Amenophis IV has spectated her beauty and intellect.

    Thus he took her at his court and made her his wife and quite fast his Co regent as she showed quite fast that she possessed not only dazzling beauty but also briliant intelect so that she and Echnaton became a equal Ruler pair with the same degree of Authority she gave birth also to his Childrenn five Daughters and the one son that later will become the most famous pharaoh in the modern world.

    However the luck and perfect times soon meet heir end as both started to etablish the Worship of Aton were they gradul increasingly accused of heresy for the Violation of the pharaohnic duti as Ambassador and representative of Amun and Horus which soon ingnited the Anger of the priesthood and the resentment of the populace which let the pair and their childrenn made goint more and more worried but neither the populace nor the priesthood of the old order knew the reason why the Echnaton and Nefertiti worshipped Aton their reason where that it were due to that Tutankhaton(later Tutankhamun)s mother an side wife were got sick and the illness endangered the life of the unborn child which were foretold to become the only Male Child that
    Echnaton
    this King
    may be allowed to receive so has the Royal pair seeked the help of the Gods and "Aton" answered in that "he" drov in the ill mother of the child , untied the unborn and placed it in Nefertitis womb aswell did it connected with her and grant it and Nefertiti his Blessings thus saved the child .

    after this special pregnancy of Tutankhaton whih was complicationless gave she birth to an healthy Boy and out of this Reason were the pair indepted to Aton and were determined to return the deed by proclaim Aton as the only Right Deity (that helped them), although they knewthe appearing consequences were they still Adamant to repay their debt but finally were they pressured by the priesthood aswell the from the priests stirred up populace as both King and Queen feared for their and the lives of their Childrenn as one evening as she went to the Altar where they received the help of Aton did she pray to him aswell even the other Deities she knew and as the sky turned Deep red indeed were her prayings answered ,by two being were answering her prayers at first Aton himself as Shining Spehre and Seth as dark Shadow and both Deities offered an aggreement which she aggreed eagerly ,then did she the next night gathered her Family to discuss the Details of their aggreement understandably were the Childs,Kiya,Tutanhkatons original Mother and her Husband at one side quite shocked but also glad that two deities had offered a deal or better said an contract that openly said Nefertiti in her Fear for her life and those of her Family and as she explained them the Details appeared the two Higher Beings and Echnaton stated to Nefertiti

    "Honey Why have you made an pact with Seth ,i have Nothing against Aton as he were Tutankhatons savior but Seth the Dark God ?"

    in shock. Seth then answered "Tzeh you have broke the oath of Amun and Horus so where is the Problem i have waited for so Long to become the Patron of the royal Family i promise i will be aside Aton the Guardian of your Family and their descendants fear not Echnaseth my Darkness shall be from now on your Shild and Atons Rays your Spears that will protect you also ge shure my demons are now your Allies" said Seth as he was influencing ,Echnaton was cautious as he heard from his Father Amenophis III that Seth has done over the centuries countless attempts to lure and seduce the former Pharaoh before him so said he that he is still unshure if he can trust him.

    Then walked Echnaton outside the Altar-room and told the others to be wary of Seth but to trust Aton.

    Then explained Nefertiti the stil staying Family members that one conditions were that Seth and Aton are wanting to "adopt" two Daughters of her which later became Meritaten and Mekataten which accepted the offer were later engulfed in the essences of the Two Deities similar like they flooded their Mother with their Essence .Tutankhaton and the other four daughters of her were also bestowed with the Blessings but Kiya and Tutankhatons original Mother were reluctant and both left he Scene during Kiya was juast scarred was she at that Moment spared by the two deities as she were at this Moment just a "scarred Child" for them but Aton used his still existing Link to the other Wife to took away her complete Ka thus killed as she were standing by a hill so that Echnaton thought she lost for a Moment her conciousness and has received in her fall an lethal jaw and head fracture.

    As he knew that she had an weak constitution didnt he notived the real death cause and mourned her death some time later did the priests approached his younger childrenn and on the other side did the Citizen of Achet-Atons gathered befoere the Royal Palace,as the Priest started to attack the Children appeared Seth and dispelled the Hierogyphic spells of them and clamed the Childrenn as he said that he holds his word and that he is towards his followers and proteges more loyal as it seems as he state that nlike Horus or Amun he doesnt have any hesitations to help and protect them directly then did he teleport the Childrenn to a safe Location and as they were away did he slaughtered the Priests an deed he outright enjoyed as he never thought that he get the Chance to Revenge himself on the worshippers of Amun and Horus. at the ther side as the Citizens were going to invading the Palace as an Shining Spehre appeared before the Gate and shooted ray of light that pierced and scorched the rebels Echnaton spectated hat on an window from the Palace and was shocked as Nefertiti huge him softly and says" Darling look that is the power that shall be our own with this are we abble to reach height equal or even surpass the great former Pharaoh Chufu ,Djedefre,Nefrosobek,Djoser or Sesistris I our names will be burned into the Stone that even the chisel shall noot be able to carve out!"said she in an sultry and seductive voice but Echnaton backed some stepps as he was shocked he knew that she were Always an shrewd Woman and that she were also quite tenacious in to get what she wanted traits that he liked but he had never seen her this greedy,then told he her

    "I wanted just Peace and prosperity for my for our land and not this Chaos or Tension specially as at the east the other kingdoms wage raid and conquer atempts but aslong as i dont know that you,Kiye and our Childrenn are safe cant i go there and initiate an serious counterstrike " is the Pharaoh exclaiming visibly fazed,

    as Seth manifested and answered" Fear not my Pharaoh of this chaos it is normal that in the past aswell in the Future Pharaoh are fearing Chaos as it is the primordial state of order as it means that their order breaks apart but fear not my Pharaoh this Chaos shall birth the order of your Reign ! Besides; your Childrenn were attacked by the priests should i mention but be insured they are safe as i rescued them"

    "What they were attacked by the priests and where are our childrenn !?

    was Echnaton asking as Seth affirmative nodded.He then said im sorry Nefertiti i have to stop this massacre before our Palace do not trust Seth even if he has safed our Childs!"

    said he determined as he left the room and runed to the entrance as he stepped out of the Gate shouted he "please stop Aton spare them you proved the people of Ta-meri your existence so please quell your wrath great Aton ."

    was he shouting at the spehre as he fall to his knees ,which let the Spehre stop with its "Hail of Light" as Nefertiti saw the disgracefull behavior of her Husband was she shocked as she couldnt understand why he was refusing such power to freely use as she was reminded as she were the daughter of an harem wife of an Royal Official and at one point discarded so that she had to life in poor circumstances and this pain has reawakened as she couldnt understand why Echnaton as Pharaoh could lower himself so Deep.

    as then Seth is putting his Hand on her Shoulder and then told her "I feel your pain my Queen ,he pain to loose all and everything once as my Brother Osiris was selected over me and i brought the concept of "Murder" and "violent Death" into the world Milenias Ago ,out of this Reason because i feelt this pain that you are bearing have i answered your pleads and this is the Reason why you are the ideal Queen Nefertiti you know from the Shadows and the uglyness of the world during Echnaton had seen only the honey side of the world maybe he isnt the real King ?" as he spoke to her in an serene calm tone has shifted his voice towards an subtile provokative color and as she were also an proficient Manipulator and seductress does she notice it "You dont mean i should betray and backstab him he is still my Husband !? reacted she in shock as she still holded some affection for Echnaton,

    Seth then stated that she should be concious that her affection for him is honorable but can also be negatively for her and their Children as Aton seems dissapointed with Echnatons determination and also does Seth admit that even that he himself has much more compassion for the fragility of the Men he also is unsatisfied with Echnatons demeanor,that is so un royal like .So confront he her openly "Decide which path you want to go my Queen which Queen and fate you want to chose Echnaton and the certain demise for yourself ,your blood and the shame of lose or to become the Third True Deity of Egypt beside myself and Aton i will be the proud and strong partner a Queen like you is worthy to possess and you will become the sole true Ruler that will even rule over Divinities and that will guide an new Humanity ,one that will follow your Guidance ,my Shadows and Atons Light!"

    "Now tell me and Aton which option you want to chose do you want to die as Human Woman or to live as Goddess,Nefertiti ?" as he gave her this answer did he helped her to stand up and vanished into an vanishing Shadow "You are given one day time to think about it besides your Childrenn are in the Altar Hall..."

    After some Hours as the surviving Citizen retreated terrified by Atons fury and moved by Echnaton plead aswell as the remaining Priests (that didnt attacked Tutankhaton etc ) left the temples did she meet with her Childrenn and hugged them dearly and asked them "Are you Sweeties okay ? !

    The Tension broke free from the Childrenn (they were roughly from 8~ to 14~ years old) as their Tears broke free were in the same momnt also their eldest Sisters entering the room now the Altar Hall hugged their Little siblings comfortingly and Nefertiti patted their heads and talked lines like "Shhhh everything will be good again" to calm and sooth them albeit that Nefertiti knew that she had to make an tons heavy decision for herself and for them has she for an short Moment reveled in this peacefull Moment yeah she even shed som Tears of motherly delight out of her Agitation she feeled.

    "thank you my dears you have also comforted me in this Situation" said she to them in honesty as she had ever balanced beetween to take her Children serious in to tell them the bitter reality and to let them remaining in the happy smiles of childish inocenceness that made her happy to observe .

    She then sighed and started to tell her that they are targeted from the world for their decisions and that she must think if ist safe to make the deal with Seth and Aton ,"as both arent helping us without to get something for themselves must you know that sadly in the world outside the Palace if you want something you have to give something " as her Two oldest Daughters understood the Situation completely were on the other side their younger siblings albeit they uunderstood the gravity of the Situation unable to fully realise it ,as Kiye came to them to calm them but her appearing made Nefertiti angered as she disliked her a quite a while as she were an well sheltered princess aswell ,naive and if put outside the protection of an royal court quite dependet thus did she saw her never as "Sister" like Echnaton wished as for herself she saw that Kiye was the " Little Trophy wife" to Play occasionally with but that Nefertiti self is the real Royal Queen thus glared she towards her spitefully but took an Deep breath and asked her with an neutral smile where Echnaton is ,which Kiye answered that he is in his planning room and thinks thoroughly .

    She then told the Childrenn to get to eat something as she then went she to Echnaton to talk with him as she entered the room saw she him covered in cold sweat and she raised her voice cautious" May i enter Echnaton ?" He saw surprised up to her and nodded so entered she the room and sat beside him and asked him what he plan to do . He "I dont know because even if our Soldiers are still for the Moment on our side but i dont know for how long they are stil loyal to us and the Major priesthood arent on our side repectively are we having virtually no priests or citizen that are on our side ,and i dont think that Aton is still willing to help us aswell cant i trust Seth no matter ,ist a really desperate situation .

    I just wanted to have peace and prosperity…"

    She listened him with an worried expression but then told him with an smile "i understand darling you wanted to be a liberator and Hero but look this world is far more cruel and merciless as you thought to be, the World doesn need to be saved by an "Hero" it needs an Ruler that governs over it and leads the directionless cattle that the most people are Darling you should accept that ,that the value you are seing in the people are non exisiting and if they dont accept your concept of Peace then you must demosnstrate them "War" so that they are starting to craving peace ,you know ?"

    "You mean i should be an Tyrann which enslave his subjects and rules with an ironclad fist !? you mean like once Chufu did ? was he answereing with Indignation.

    "please be not naive , i understand your ambitions but you are not a Hero you are a Ruler ,you should haven no hesitation in to preserve your Reign so why do you hesitate ? Aton and Seth are still willing to help us if you aggree to the pact so why do you refuse it are you consious that with this stance you have you also endanger our Childrenn !?" shouted she at him in disdain. Echnaton then sacked on his chair an moment to catch his breath as he then stood up and told "Im sorry but i cant go against my populaze like this ,maybe we should plan to use Kiyes ties and flew to the Mitani to have a shelter there and plan there where our Childrenn are in safety a plan to reclaim the Throne with the help of the few loyal official? this is the only option i could see " was he answering with heavy breath .

    Nefertiti was pissed and couldnt understand she thought"What is that for an pathetic idea firstly we should hope that the Mitanni are friendly enough to not only offer us shelter,secondly,how has he thought we get to their Kingdom we could never travel unnoticed or recognised so would we be unable to rest in villages without the danger of assaults from the unsatisfied citizens or traitorious soldiers and that with a to big stock of food and water would we are getting to easily identifiable respectively are our Childrenn not old enough to endure this violent march through Desserts, Kiye hasnot the discipline to be reliable and he.. i mean if it would not be the his naive pacifism could be Echnaton an ideal Warrior afterall he could himself defeat some Enemies aswell if he would be willing to use his knowlede of Heka and Hieroglyph spells could he himself slaughter an squad of Warrior but instead to demonstrate his power does he prefer to run away with his tail drawn !?" was she thinking .

    "Are you serious Echnaton ,this plan is ridiculous we could never reach the borders without to be spotted respective would this march cause the death of the childrenn !!! you should rule and subjugate your subjects to create respect ,i know that you adored your father but even he had caused War to secure his kingdom and role as Ruler ,so should we accept the pact of the higher beings thats our only real solution ! Echnaton discard your morality and cowardice and face the brutal reality becone an true Pharaoh ! is she screaming to him and she dont atempt to conceal her disgust .

    She then stormed out of the room as she couldnt stand the sight of him then entered she to the Altar Room and called "Seth ,Aton can you hear me !? I have made my decision !"

    Upon that call is appearing Seth and Aton, Seth then mae an questioning Gesture toward her with his hand "So what is your choice , Live? or Demise ? Nefertiti …"

    She then smirked evilish "Live.."

    Seth replied in the same expression"Good... excellent choice my Queen"

    "Then upon you oath shall be our power become yours!"

    exclaimed Seth as he then holded his flat handpalm to her and shoot and dark stream to her aswell did Aton send an bright stream to her which engulfed her and then she was clad in an rainbow like light which strenghtened her Body and made her already appealing body even more beautifully ,as she noticed the changes was she engulfed in a wave of pleasure that flowed through her ,she felt extatic.

    "That is the feeling of power ,*she looks herself on an mirroring water basin * am i that ? i look like an Goddess !"purred she gleefully.

    "you are now just see your true self my love" was Seth reacting to her as he approached her and lifted her chin as he kissed her passionfull. as he then released the kiss did he state that is only the beginning but before that must be certain actions like i think you know what i mean ..." said he as he gallantly helped her up .

    She then nodded confirmatori "Yes i know to dispose the old Ruler by an true one namely....Myself!"


    Personality
    She is appearing as highly proud and levelheaded Ruler that guides her subjects with firm but friendly gestures which she truly is on one side does she treat them wiit great care as in her city Nefer Achet Aton she enables them life in bliss and luxury as in this florishing city the citizen are living in buildings with glass like tower building similar to the modern cities ,she holds once per week an public audience were she let her citizen bath in her "love" for them where she affirm them that they live in an paradise in contrast to the other cities where the people live in poorness and without grandour ,
     
    "My dear citizen of Nefer-Achet-Aton hear my words we life in the manifested utopy in an paradise here if you look outside hot scorching desserts ,dark stone walls at the smaller cities hopelessness and here no one must hunger or thirst feast my people of the fruits that Aton and Seth has given us and bath in the Water that Seth let free what the old Gods had denied us !"
     
    also does she invite the citizen to come before her and that they are given the opportunity totell her their wishes and problems they would wish to solve and after hearing them does she "try" to so.
     
    This compassion of her towards her subjects is genuine in that she loaths the dreary of the poornesss so has she made Achet Aton to a city where only upper and middle class
    citizen life partially through "artificial means" as through honest economy so are her subjects withhinAchet Aton more then happy (in real) and perceive her as great Queen and are obedient citizen that are encouraged to work hard but also give in their hedonistic desires so that inside Nefer-Achet-Atons only an small minority is dissatified with her Reign,outside her capitel does she has barely any consideration for her subjects their does she rule like an tyrann beside should be noted that their arent many other cities unharmed or left with free administration only certain other cities are still "functioning on heir own" namely Kom ombo and the area of Nubet are given this privilege due to their Role as former Worship places of Seth which gives them the luck that they are be given also compassion from her in that they flourish.
     
    She entrust he Administration of These Areals and the control outside of the privileged regions mainly to Neferuseth which she sees as Twin Sister she wished to have ,she is towards this small resistence movements ruthless and merciless to those Groups (there are roughly 5 to 7 resistence Groups) as they are unable to see the Advantages of their Utopia Nefer-Achet-Atons and are unable to perceive the Beauty of the world as they for her are patheticaly clinging to the uglyness of the world ,beside that she hates such "Human-vermins" of the old Humanity that Arent willing to be cleansed by Seths Darkness or Aton Light and be an part of the "New Humanity" but she admit herself that she likes to search after These vermins as the chase of them fulfill her with glee aswell their later humiliation and torture she gives them which demonstrates that she finds sadistic pleasure which developed out of her desire after superiority .

    As she has developed an disdain towards officials ,has she replaced them completely with the most loyal ones she has and trust namely her childrenn are enacting the Positions of the Ministers to her Children with Meryetaten as her vizier example wise ,she is towards her Family very protective as she seen once as her Daughter Nefernaten was attacked by the resistence did she visibly angered personally Slaughter them as in contrast to as she was attacked were she just was "amused" .Which demonstrate that she highly care for her Childrenn aswell for her Husband Seth which she likes to spoil and indulge in sensualities which she also share with her Twin Queen Neferuseth which she sees as Similar Soul to herself thus does she trust her with the Frontline works and treats Neferuseths childrenn as her own and likes if they are calling her "Auntie" ,she still likes to see the laughter from childrenn and is Adamant in that she doesnt harm them as she is reminded on the harsh Treatment she had to endure as child so does she put the Children of Nefer-Achet-Aton under her financial cost in Schools here they learn the "important Things " they must know so that they become happy ,so does she hate those that are wanting to poisen their innocence .

    As her have only two deities helped her is she perceiving beside her dear Seth only Aton as real deity as the other egyptic gods had never made any atempts o help her has she disdain to them especially to Solar deities has she disgust and after she was able with the help of an masked indifidual to break through the Cultural spehre of the Ancient Egypt and expand he Domain of Aton over the bundaries of Egypt by imprisoning (Sun) deities of other Culturspehres and conquer during he centuries nearly whole africa ,was able to weaken the Greek Roman Pantheon aswell launched attacks against the Pantheon of North and South america aswell to the hethitic,the deities of the Arabian Peninsula and even one against India.
     
    Through that she has now obtained knowledge of the world far away the borders of Ta-meri is she determined to conquer the world ,usurp their pantheons and replace the humans with thefrom Seths Darkness and Atons light "awakened" Humanity and lastly to entrust her childrenn with the parts she conquered.
     
    In one point does she differ from her greater History Self namely that she doesnt mourn the death Echnatons as her affection to him has long ago vanished .





    Skills
    Classkills:

    Magic Resistence: A
    Normaly would (like her greater History self) she have only rank C ,but through the Essence of Aton that flows through her Body and the Blessings of Seth does she possess high resistence against Thaumturgy in General.

    Goddess Divine Core:B+++
    A composite Skill that comprises the Skill Divinity, preserves the absoluteness of the mind and the body, repels all mental interference, prevents the body from growth and prevents the figure from change no matter how much calories are absorbed

    She is not an Goddess since birth instead has she received this state of her body through the "bathing" in Seths and Atons essence and by her status as the "true Pharaoh" aswel through the power of Atonion Seshem is her Divine Spirit is she only few steps away to entering the Throne of Gods but to reach it she must find the last Sun-deity of the Egyptian Pantheon...

    Territory Creation:EX

    Product of her first Noblephantasm .

    With this is she able to draw the Authorithy over the Landscape from the Deities imprisoned in Atonion Seshem .

    With this shill is she able to create Cities completely after her liking aswell can she create Woods ,Desserts , mountains after her leisure.Through this has he developed Achet-Aton into an with Oasis like Jungle Islands withhin the Sahara connected City hat has certain similarities to modern cities like crystaline transparent Buildings that let Atons rays enter them or having an Underground corridor System that gives place for the vassals or worshipper of Seth aswell harvestable fields of fertile soil full of fruits and groin...

    Personal Skills:

    Incitement:B+
    Is the trough Seth-Atons bestowed present that enhance her naturally Charisma and Atrraction through their powers by bestowing her words with "divine charm" so is she able to lead great masses and through this with great efficience aswell is she able to direct troops aswell can she by Focusing at one target evoke mental interference attacks and even hynotise them.

    Queen of the two Real Gods:EX

    Is the Sublimation of her Position as the First Pharaoh of the "Dinasty of the true Double Deity" whoose Founder she is destined to be ,at first does it contain the abbillities that Seth and Aton has bestowed her namely Nega-Solar A+,Mana Blast Sun(Aton),Self-Modulation (C),Demoncraft(B),Metalomancy(B),Shapeshifting(Phφ nix)(A) aswell does it allow herself Access to skills she is familiar with or perhaps originally has no possesion like Finer arts,Swordmanship ,Spearmanship,Archery,Hieroglyphic spellcraft(B) ,Military tactics (B),Eye for Art...

    Mental Polution:A+
    The prize she had to pay for the powers that the deity Seth-Aton bestowed upon her namely that she also enchant herself by her words,aswell the traumatas of the past she still has withhin her ,it donates her a nearly complete resistence against Mental inferences ,but its really though to communicate with her at times...

    Eye of Aton:EX
    Is an type of Mystic Eyes but contrary to orthodox Mystic eyes is this not one inherited by Flesh no ist obtained by the ingraining of divine essence similar to the practises in certain Relict keeper Clans that hold the divine ecenses alive by letting their member atleast regularily be possessed or turned into hosts for it.In her case is it the through the essence of Aton is she after the imprisonment of the Egyptian Solar deities able to turn the Sun self into her third eye and look kilometres away and use the Sun as medium for the catsing of spells or unleash scorching attacks,albeit on the days is this abbillity undisputed strong is this abbillity unuseable at night .
    Respectively can she use her own Eyes as catalyst for thaumaturgy or attacks but if she does it are her eyes inflict great fatique and cause temporary blindness if used to much in qan short tim Frame .




    Noblephantasm

    Atonion Seshem

    EX
    Anti-World
    Is the Foundation of Atons "existence" that Seth and Alter Ego crafted out of the mummy bandages of the countless former Pharaoh before Exhnatons time to harnness the Royal Authorities the former Rulers holded and redirected them with the Authority and Magic of Seth to negate the "worshipp" of the Egyptian Deities to surpress their power and drain their strenght from them to direct them towards Aton and in broader sense also towards Nefertiti and enable her to reach the throne of Gods (theoretically).It functions as device of Reality Warping in an similar sence like the Holy Grail self in that it uses Divine Spirit Energy similar like the Grail the from Heroic Spirits and to fasciliate the "Arrivel" of Aton in analogy to the "arrivel of Angra Mainyu" of the tainted Grail.

    The Functions of this Construct is that it "swallows" by wrapping around the deities and place them into its insides where their strenght is ΄drained and guided to Aton and to an lesser Degree towards Alter Ego aswell Seth ,also can she use Atonions chain like tendrills as shackle or use them for impaling direct attacks.

    by using the bandages as catalyst is she able to summon the former Pharaoh as Shadowed servants tainted by Seths Darkness through two different ways ;Firstly like normaly as normal Alter servant who is dependet on the Mana supply of Alter Ego or through Atonion Seshem itself. Secondly by paying an Tribute ,by tributing one Human to summon the servant into a host vessel and manifest the Pharaoh as fully Living being of flesh and blood ,(class System still grasps)

    As it is functioning as device for the strenghtening of Aton is she able to draw the Solar powers of Aton directly with it and unleash powerfull streams that equalise Anti Army Noblephantasm strikes aswell does it strenghten her aswell is she able by swallowing the deities of other Cultures Spehres/Pantheons able to expand the Dominion of aton over the borders of Ta-meri and of harnessing the powers of the "captured" Deities.



    Aton Hai Hepet

    EX
    Anti-Army (Self)
    ???




    Some Commentaries


    This is perhap the most ambitious non crossover ever

    since some weeks ago where the talk about an servant with an Ragyo faceclaim was i motivate to think bout one and i had the spontane idea that Ragyo was
    quite often
    always
    clad in Rainbow Lights so thought i one the Radiation of the Sun so had thought on the Egyptian kings and quite fast have i got the idea of an Lostbelt Nefertiti Version ,

    I will in the Lostbelt/Singularity thread lso upload the Story to the respective Lostbelt aswell will i add in the next days Infos how she act as "Player" Servant (and an Relationship section). as she is in this case an Living Person . so can be said that at the Moment is this sheet the "Enemy Data" profle

    i have tried to write it correctly so i hopee that some spelling/Grammar Errors does not harm the reading joy.

    every Feedbacks are welcome !


     
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    "To love, and to be loved in turn... ufufu, I can't say I understand those things completely, but such romantic fairytales are wonderful, don't you think? How I envy them..."


    Source

    Class: Caster
    Other Classes: -

    True Name: Alcina
    Alignment: Neutral Evil
    Origin: Orlando Furioso


    Parameters:

    STR: D
    END: C
    AGI: B
    MGI: A
    LCK: C
    NP: A

    Likes: Fairytales, romance, theatrics
    Dislikes: Her representation as a villain
    Talent: Magecraft (illusionism), creating 'stories'
    Natural Enemy: Bradamante
    Armament: Staff, spell books, potions
    Catalyst: Fragments of her staff


    Class Skills
    Territory Creation
    Rank: B+

    The skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana. Despite tales of her transforming a deserted island into her own personal paradise, this transformation was achieved through the use of illusions instead of "true" territory creation, which explains why this skill isn't ranked higher. At this rank, the creation of a "workshop" becomes possible. Its range and effectiveness may be further increased through the activation of her Noble Phantasm.

    Item Construction
    Rank: B

    The skill to manufacture magical items for various purposes. A magus well-versed in various fields of magecraft, it would not be an exaggeration to call her a jack of all trades, master of one (namely her illusionism). Thanks to her vast knowledge, Caster is capable of creating a wide array of items ranging from weapons, concoctions, familiars, and even small golems.


    Personal Skills
    Illusionism
    Rank: A

    A skill denoting excellence in the art of illusion within the field of magecraft; a magecraft for the use of beguilement. Caster's greatest talent, in life, her illusions could only be dispelled through the use of a magical artifact that shows its users how things really are, and by destroying an object represented as the source of her powers. This skill is more effective now that she manifested as a Servant, since she could simply absorb mana from her surroundings instead of storing them in a singular object. At this level, it is possible to go beyond people and fool the environment.

    Rapid Casting
    Rank: B

    The ability to speak magical incantations at an accelerated speed. For the great witch of illusions, it is simply natural for her to possess this skill.

    Witch's Romance
    Rank: C-

    The misguided love of an innocent young maiden, combined with the cruelty of a terrifying witch who would not hesitate to punish suitors when she deems that their love aren't genuine enough. A skill similar to low-ranking mental pollution and single-mindedness, protecting Caster against mental attacks through her single-minded obsession towards achieving her "happy ending". While its effects aren't anywhere as intense as madness enhancement possessed by a certain Japanese snake or a certain daughter of Herod, this obsession may occasionally cause Caster to prioritize her own emotions and ideals over reason. On another note, she claims that this skill comes with a curse that weakens her powers the more she genuinely falls in love with someone. It is uncertain whether this curse truly exists, or if it was simply a self-imposed mental block born out of her unwillingness to hurt Ruggiero back then...



    Noble Phantasm(s)
    Deceitful Realm of Lies
    Isola delle Illusioni

    Type: Anti-Army
    Rank: A
    Range: 1-100
    Max Targets: 100

    A conceptual replication of the island that Caster inhabited in life, imbued with the true essence of her magecraft, namely "the ability to make others see things the way she wants them to see it". Upon its activation, a bounded field is laid on top of the world, enough to envelop a small town. At first, this bounded field only serves to increase the range of Caster's territory creation, granting her a boost to her mana generation rate.

    Its true effect serves to further strengthen her illusions. The mana cost for her illusions is halved under the bounded field, and rather than simply "deceiving the people" or "deceiving the environment", this Noble Phantasm allows her to go beyond and "deceive the mind". Essentially, this allows her to induce certain thoughts, ideas, and emotions within the people trapped inside her bounded field, weaving a narrative and turning the field into her own personal "story". Similar to her actions in life, her illusions under this Noble Phantasm has become so convincing that it is also possible for her to "turn" the enemy into inanimate objects by convincing their body and senses to shut down.

    Caster can maintain this bounded field for around 2-3 hours, although she may need to consume more mana for this Noble Phantasm to affect individuals possessing high-ranking mental resistance skills or anti-illusion magical artifacts, shortening its duration.


    Description
    Caster's True Name is Alcina, the devious witch who trapped Ruggiero on her island during the course of the legendary Italian epic Orlando Furioso. Caster initially presents herself as cold and distant, partially due to not wanting to get hurt by love again, and due to her own unfamiliarity to the topic of romance. Deep down, she possesses a highly idyllic view of romance (being a character inside a chivalric romance story doesn't help matters), which may cause her to easily fall in love, get jealous, and act somewhat obsessive towards those she deems as her "prince charming", although she would just as easily ditch them (if not worse) the moment she deems them lacking in any way. A witch who desires the perfect fairytale romance despite having little to no understanding of the subject.

    Caster deeply envies romance protagonists who "had everything handed to them without any effort". As someone who takes the saying "you are the protagonist of your own story" a little too seriously, she deeply believes in working hard and doing anything in her power to achieve her "happy ending", even if her misguided attempts may occasionally (okay, more often than not) come off as unsettling and obsessive. Due to this belief, she despises her representation as an antagonist (albeit a sympathetic one) in later retellings of her story, as she defiantly, yet innocently proclaims that "there is nothing wrong with falling in love and wanting to be loved!". Ultimately, while she had already moved on from Ruggiero and forgiven Bradamante for foiling her plans, it is unlikely that Caster could get along with either of them due to her envy towards people with wholesome, lovey-dovey relationships in general.

    Caster is not quite sure on what she would wish upon the Grail. Realizing her dream romance fantasy seems like the obvious wish, but that would defeat the purpose of the wish and go against Caster's own mentality by using "an obvious Deus ex Machina" to realize her dream. After all, the true love she longs for must be achieved through her own efforts only, and it must be "as natural as can be, like a real-life fairytale". Truly, a hopeless romantic capable of committing various atrocities in the name of her love.


    Lore
    The tale of Alcina begins somewhere along the course of Orlando Furioso. Bradamante has just rescued the brave knight Ruggiero from an enchanted castle. Suddenly, Bradamante's hippogriff takes a liking to him and flies away carrying Ruggiero before Bradamante could intervene. The hipogriff lands on an island in the middle of the ocean and when it starts nibbling on a nearby myrtle bush, the bush begins to speak. The bush introduces himself as the paladin Astolfo, and told Ruggiero that the island is home to two sister witches, Alcina and Morgana. The two were said to have seduced countless men and turned them into inanimate objects such as stones, statues, and bushes whenever they tire of their lovers. Despite Astolfo's warning, Ruggiero decides to find the two witches and ask them for a way home, convinced that his pure heart could protect him from the witches' influence. Then Ruggiero promptly falls under their spell.

    A few days later, Bradamante arrives at Alcina's island accompanied by Melisso, a benevolent mage and Ruggiero's former tutor. Bradamante disguises herself with a full set of armor, adopting the name of her brother, Ricciardo. Melisso also gives her a magical ring that enables the wearer to see through illusions, which they plan to use to rescue Ruggiero. The two first encounters the witch Morgana, who immediately falls head over heels for "Ricciardo" and dumps her previous lover, Oronte. Morgana escorts the two to Alcina's court, and on the way, they encounter Oberto, a young boy searching for his father, Astolfo. Hearing this, Bradamante deduced that Astolfo must have fallen for the witches' trick and had been transformed into something, but she decides to hold her peace and prioritize finding Ruggiero first.

    On Alcina's court, Bradamante was appalled to find out that Ruggiero is now engaged to Alcina, in a state of complete amnesia about his previous life. Bradamante tries to snap him out of it, but under the spell, Ruggiero cannot think of anyone or anything else besides Alcina. Suddenly, Oronte barges into the room, convinced that "Ricciardo" has stolen Morgana from him. Bradamante, still wearing the armor, attempts to clarify the misunderstanding, but Oronte, still in a foul mood, decides to take it out on Ruggiero. Oronte claims that Alcina, as far as he knows, has fallen for Ricciardo as well. Still under the spell and overwhelmed by jealousy, Ruggiero defeats him in combat.

    Bradamante witnesses the whole fighting going on and becomes jealous seeing how far Ruggiero would go to win Alcina's heart. Having had enough, Bradamante discards the armor, revealing her true identity and causing the entire court to become very, very confused. Outraged, Alcina threatens to turn Bradamante into an animal, but she was stopped by Morgana, who begs Bradamante to leave before things get any worse. Bradamante refuses, claiming she would not leave without her beloved (Ruggiero). Morgana misinterprets Bradamante's "beloved" as herself and sings a dramatic aria describing the feeling of love she experiences.

    Eventually, Melisso managed to snap Ruggiero out of Alcina's spell by forcing him to wear the magic ring. Now Ruggiero sees the island as it truly is; a barren wasteland populated by monsters and ruled by a terrifying witch. Melisso tells Ruggiero that he cannot just escape as Alcina still wields immense power. Instead, he should cover his escape by telling Alcina that he simply wishes to go hunting. Ruggiero agrees to the plan, but still bewildered by the illusions he just saw, he refuses to believe his eyes when he sees Bradamante, accusing her of being another one of Alcina's illusions. Bradamante falls into despair, as does Alcina when she realizes that her "prince charming" will be leaving. Desperate to prove her love for him, Alcina appears before the two, and is about to turn Bradamante into an animal as a "symbol of her love". At the last moment, Ruggiero pulls himself together and convinces Alcina that she does not need to prove her love to him. Seemingly satisfied with his response, Alcina left the two alone. Secretly, it pains Ruggiero to do this, as now he knows that Alcina genuinely loves him, in her own misguided way.

    Afterwards, Melisso, Bradamante, and Ruggiero shared their escape plan with Oronte and Oberto, and the group swiftly executes their plan. By the time Alcina and Morgana realized the plan, it was too late Alcina tried to stop them with her spells, but she fails, as her magic powers fade away when true love enters her life. Perhaps she was unwilling to hurt Ruggiero, or deep down, she realizes that it would not be right to deprive him of his "happy ending" with Bradamante. Either way, she stops pursuing them and weeps in sorrow.

    The tale is resolved quickly afterwards. As Alcina's magic fades, the illusions are dispelled and the bodies of her previous lovers are restored, including Astolfo. Before they leave, Bradamante and Ruggiero destroys the source of Alcina's magic, an ancient urn, and after the deed is done, the entire island sinks into the ground, taking Alcina and Morgana with it. The survivors sing of happiness and relief, while Alcina is forgotten.


    Relationships
    Sigurd/Brynhild, Sakamoto Ryoma/Oryou, Orion/Artemis, Xiang Yu/Yu Miaoyi:
    "Ah, look at them, such fluffy, fairytale romance... I wonder if I could experience something like that in this second life..."

    Kama:
    "A god of love!? Th-Then, could you- Hm? Even you don't understand what love is anymore? I see... Yeah, me too, sometimes."

    Circe:
    *The two seems to share a close, sisterly relationship due to their similar experiences and outlook on life*

    Bradamante:
    "Apparently even if you're a part of a romance epic, you're not allowed to have a happy ending unless you're the established protagonist, huh... And no, you don't get to complain. Normie, plot-armored protagonist, grumble grumble"

    Astolfo:
    "Ufufu, my apologies, back when I heard tales of the legendary Sir Astolfo, I imagined you were some gallant knight in shining armor. Then turned out you're just a crossdressing pervert, so... I just can't help but turn you into a bush, you know."

    George Frederic Handel:
    "Master, the nerve on that guy! He adapted my story, got my name on the title and all, and he didn't even bother to tweak the ending a bit to give me a happier end! Maybe I should sue him for some royalties as payback, I heard that lion-man is good at this sort of thing..."

    Ruggiero/Bradamante (bond 5):
    "Those two? Don't worry Master. Sure, it was painful back then, but maybe that was for the best. I hope they're happy, at least... W-Well, not like I'd ever say that to them directly!"


    Creator's Notes
    The thought just dawned on me when I finished the sheet, but she could probably be a good pseudo with Manaka Sajyou due to their obsessive love towards their "prince charming" and their expertise with various forms of magecraft.

    And wow, that lore. There's just so much comical misunderstandings there that I wouldn't be surprised if this literature was one of the early pioneers of those misunderstanding tropes you'd often see in anime these days.

    NP-wise, it's a rather generic "grand illusion" type, partially inspired by an anecdote I heard on psych class on how it's theoretically possible to give someone a fatal shock or heart attack by blindfolding them, then firing an empty gun accompanied by a light tap to the chest, as the body convinces itself that the gun was loaded, and the body had died from the gunshot noise and the sensation of something hitting the chest. Kind of a basic Caster NP, but I feel it suits the character well as "illusions" are pretty much her main thing.

    Overall, enjoy the witch waifu.

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    Alcina: I loved this sheet. Is simple, but in its simplicity lies its biggest strength: her personality. I'm such a sucker for these types of characters, the ones who will do anything for a misguided ideal. And the fact that she is indeed a maiden in love inside of her heart, despite being a "villain" with terrifying illusionary powers is nothing to laugh at. I almost want her to find happiness with her Master or someone else, but at the same time, her capricious and even naive nature will make difficult for her to truly find a satisfactory conclusion... Maybe, when she grow up (in her heart) one day... Anyway, what I'm trying to say is: 10/10 WOULD ROLL FOR HER WOULD GRAIL WITH MUCH LOVE.
    Also, look, I'm not saying that the Monthly contest's Alterego and her would sigh a lot about love life together, albeit for different reasons, but I'm saying that they would indeed sigh a lot about their love life together.
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    Alcina: well goddamn man, you're on a roll. Seriously, I never thought of her character like this, but know I will probably never thought of it differently. I also quite like her third skill, specifically her "Curse" because it is something that fits her perfectly. I also love the FC, but that may just be my Touhou fanboyism and bias.


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    Haha, thanks everyone, quarantine has really given me a lot of free time for research and finishing half-made sheets. Haven't really found any ideas for the contest though, other than one Assassin-class Servant who I'll be posting in a day or two (which I'm still kind of iffy on their skills and NP).

    Anyway, Alcina here is an attempt to write a Servant with a bit more "waifu" feel to it compared to the usual "cool" approach I take with most of my previous Servants. Glad to see it conveyed pretty well.
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    Quote Originally Posted by BnEl15 View Post
    Haha, thanks everyone, quarantine has really given me a lot of free time for research and finishing half-made sheets. Haven't really found any ideas for the contest though, other than one Assassin-class Servant who I'll be posting in a day or two (which I'm still kind of iffy on their skills and NP).

    Anyway, Alcina here is an attempt to write a Servant with a bit more "waifu" feel to it compared to the usual "cool" approach I take with most of my previous Servants. Glad to see it conveyed pretty well.
    She is i must say an quite good servant and her ilusioncraft is also good worked out as i like it more if the possibilities/aplications of their thaumaturgy is mentioned,also do i like that she is an vilain but not really one if seen from an other angle ,i would like to see her in an anime Adaption and get the Medea route ( i mean that she find her love and not the part of demise) one Question are the effects of her noblephantasm after its releasing still active like the Suggestion like ilusions ?

    Also is she a quite nice waifu ,i would wish that she goot an own Story where she is the Heroine .

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