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End of an Empire
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Originally Posted by Daneel Rush
What Lyco saidtoo much awesome and insanity rolled into one
Wow, we're getting close to the ending aren't we?
Chapter 6 part two.
Enjoy
***
Shirou, Nanoha, and Yuuno were all standing in front of Lindy and waiting for their verdict. They had all known that they would be breaking orders when they helped Fate, so they would accept their punishment.
However, it didn’t mean that they weren’t nervous about it.
None of them could look at Lindy and kept their heads down as she began her lecture.
“Following orders doesn’t affect a single person, but an entire group of people. What I mean is that the selfish actions you took could have affected not only yourselves, but it could have also affected the people around you.”
Shirou suppressed his wince and kept his head down. He was used to being scolded for things like this, but this was the first time it had been for something that could affect more than himself and the person he was helping. He hadn’t really thought about the consequences when he made his decision.
“I trust you understand?”
“Yes.” All three of them responded in sync.
“If this were a normal case, you both could expect severe punishments, but taking your magnificent results into account, we’ll overlook your actions this time.” Lindy saw the look of surprised joy on the three of their faces and decided to make sure the lesson stuck. “However, I will not do this a second time. You understand?”
“Yes.” They repeated again, this time with a bit more enthusiasm.
“I’m sorry, it won’t happen again.” Yuuno apologized with a small bow.
Shirou kept quiet and silently thought that he would take the consequences and disobey orders if it mean saving Fate again.
Lindy sighed as she finished her lecture. Now they could finally address the real problem. “Now then, the big problem starts now, huh?”
“Chrono, have you learned anything about the incident, even superficial data?”
Chrono pushed off the wall he was leaning against and walked over to the viewing screen on the table in front of Lindy. “Yes. Amy, please transmit it to the monitor.”
“Aye, aye!”
A small screen lit up in the middle of a table showing the profile of a woman.
“Oh my!” Confusion ran over Nanoha and Yuuno’s faces, but both Lindy and Shirou recognized the woman, though for different reasons of course.
“That woman…” Shirou closed his eyes and recalled the picture he saw in Fate’s apartment.
“Yes. The mage hailing from the same place as us, Mid Childa. Precia Testarossa.” Chrono continued his explanation. “Her field of study is in the development of energy sources allowing one to traverse dimensional space. Despite being a great mage, she was involved in an accident while doing illegal research, and was thus exiled.”
“The data we already have about her and the data from the magical assault earlier both match. And that girl named Fate is most likely…”
“Fate-chan. Back then, she said Mother…” Nanoha recalled the moment that the lightning had interrupted her chance to talk with Fate.
“I saw that woman before.” Shirou walked towards the hologram above the table. “When I was at the apartment when Fate took me, there was a picture.”
The woman in the picture in front of him wasn’t smiling like the picture he had seen, but it was definitely the same woman.
“Fate was in it, she was standing next to this woman.” Shirou wondered if this was what was hurting Fate. The memory of the girl covered in lashes came to mind and Shirou wondered if it was possible for a mother to do this to her child.
“Mother and child, huh?” Lindy whispered softly. That would make this much more complicated.
“U-umm… rather than being surprised… she seemed to be more frightened.” Nanoha looked down and recalled the frightened expression on Fate’s face.
Lindy broke out of her thoughts and made her commands. “Amy! Are you able to pull up any more details about this Precia woman? Like where she went after being exiled? Or anything about her familial relationships? Anything at all?”
“Aye, aye. I’ll look into it right away.”
Shirou stared at the picture of Precia Testarossa and wondered what could take away the bright smile he saw in the photo.
***
It had taken a little bit of time before Amy had been able to pull the data that was requested. She walked in front of all of them and started her report.
“Presia Testarossa according to Mid Childa records was the third director of the Central Science & Development Bureau twenty six years ago. But, she was also privately working on a thesis involving energy sources allowing the traversal of dimensions. Then, the concepts of this ‘Hydra’ thesis were tested.”
Shirou blankly wondered if he was supposed to understand any of this. He gave Yuuno a glance and was glad to see that he seemed to understand what was being said. Hopefully he could ask him for a simple explanation later.
“She conducted her experiment with illegal materials, and the experiment failed. The results included a mid-scale dimensional disturbance at the beginning, which caused the fissuring of the entire central area, eventually engulfing the surrounding areas.”
Shirou tried to imagine the kind of disaster that had been created by the experiment. He didn’t really understand a lot of the terminology that Amy was using, but even he could tell that a disaster from messing with dimensions wouldn’t be small.
“Apparently, there was a large dispute about the incident, saying that the failure didn’t exceed her expectations and that the materials she used weren’t illegal. She moved many times after that, continuing to perform her secret projects. But at some point, the records lost track of her whereabouts. And that’s about all I could find.” Amy concluded her report.
Shirou closed his eyes and wondered how Fate came into this picture. A young girl being dragged along by her mother while on the run. Constantly moving from place to place, dealing with the dangerous experiments that her mother created, and her only companion being the familiar she created.
“I think the three of you should take some time to rest.” Lindy’s voice directed at them broke the image that Shirou had created and dropped him back into the meeting.
Wait, rest?
“Huh? But…” It looks like Nanoha was just as confused as he was.
“Especially you and Shirou. It’s not good for you to miss school all the time.” Lindy cut off any argument they could make. “I’ll approve a return trip for now. It’d be a good idea to see your family and make an appearance at school again.”
“Yes.” Shirou wanted to protest but the soft agreement from Nanoha cut him off and he sighed in agreement. He didn’t think that school was important when there was someone needed help like Fate. But, he had promised to obey orders, so he would obey for now.
***
Shirou and Nanoha had returned to the Takamachi house along with Lindy. Yuuno had come too, but he had to return to his ferret form. Shirou had been worried that he would get in trouble since he had disappeared once Fate had kidnapped him. But luckily, Kiritsugu had made up an excuse that Shirou was out with an old friend of his. So when he had come back to the Takamachi house, he was greeted with cheerful smiles and nothing that indicated that they knew what he had been through.
Though he was sad to find out that his kitchen ban was still in effect for disappearing without informing them.
Lindy was talking with Nanoha’s parents but it had been a bit boring so he had moved to the dojo to practice a bit. Shirou swung the pair of wooden practice swords clumsily through a kata. He was trying to recall the strength and speed that he was able to wield when he used his Projected weapons, but it didn’t seem like he would succeed anytime soon.
“You’re trying too hard.”
Shirou yelped and tripped over his own feet at the voice. He looked up to see an amused Takamachi Shiro standing over him with a hand extended. Shirou accepted the hand and pulled himself to his feet before picking up the practice sword he dropped.
The older Shiro smiled at his daughter’s best friend and offered a bit of advice. “You’re swinging too wide. That maneuver is more about precision than power, so you don’t need to swing as hard. I know it looks like a fast swing when Kyouya does it, but you need to build up some more arm muscle before you can control the sword at such speeds.”
Shirou blushed at being caught practicing what was essentially their family style, but he was silently amazed at how quickly Takamachi-san had picked up on what he was doing. He had noticed that the sword style that the Projected swords used were similar to Kyouya’s so he wanted to get his body used to the movements. “A-ah… I just thought I would try it out.”
Shiro pulled one of the practice swords off the wall before facing Shirou. “The techniques we’ve taught you are rather basic, but they’re essential before moving onto the advanced maneuvers.”
“Um…” Shirou was a bit embarrassed at the gentle scolding. “Right.”
“But, you have shown quite a bit of improvement.”
Shirou would have normally blushed at the praise, but at the moment, the fact that he had gotten stronger didn’t erase the fact that he wasn’t strong enough. His hand gripped the handle of his practice sword so tight that his knuckles turned white. “Not enough though.”
The bitter comment was muttered under his breath but it wasn’t quiet enough for the man to ignore. Nanoha’s father stared at the red haired boy that had become a pseudo part of his family and wondered, not for the first time, if he was doing the right thing by not stopping him and Nanoha. Kiristugu had mentioned that the both of them were up to something dangerous, but he had assured them that they were under the watchful eye of someone he trusted to keep them safe.
It was time for desperate measures. Takamachi Shiro sighed before patting Shirou on the head. The boy looked up at the older man with a curious look.
“Come on.” Seeing the reluctant look, Shiro decided that he should throw the boy a bone. “If you’re quiet, I might just be able to sneak you into the kitchen. We need to serve some snacks for our guests.”
The starry look on the boy’s face was a bit disturbing, but Shiro decided that it was an improvement from the self loathing he had seen before.
***
“Nanoha-chan!”
Shirou smiled at the sight of seeing Suzuka hug Nanoha. Nanoha looked happy to see her school friends again. His appreciation of the scene was cut off by a swift swat to the back of his head.
“Ack!” Shirou rubbed the wound and glared at his assailant. “Bannings-san, what was that for?”
Alisa huffed at him. “You disappear for half a month and then get Nanoha dragged into whatever mess you created and you have the ask what you did? Are you an idiot?”
Shirou winced at the accusation and quickly tried to defend himself. “I didn’t think it would be that big of a deal.”
“Not a big deal?!” Alisa swatted the back of Shirou’s head again. “You disappear without a word and you think we wouldn’t make a big deal out of it! We’re your friends, you idiot!”
Shirou stepped back away from the angry girl and looked around for support. To his dismay, Suzuka was glaring at him from her position of hugging Nanoha and his best friend didn’t look too happy either.
“But-“
“No buts, Shirou.” Suzuka was actually glaring at him. It was a look that he didn’t see very often on the kind girl, so it unnerved him to see her angry at him. “You left your friends hanging and thus you need to be punished.”
Shirou’s eyes went wide and he shot a pleading look towards Nanoha. She was actually giving the idea some thought before smiling at both Alisa and Suzuka.
“Um! Good idea. Shirou needs to learn his lesson.”
“Ahaha…” It seemed that Nanoha still had a little anger leftover from when he was kidnapped. Shirou slowly backed away from the three advancing girls. “Mercy?”
The response was unanimous.
“Denied!”
***
“I need male friends.” Shirou sighed as he rubbed a bruise on his head that Alisa had given him.
The comment got Shirou another hit to the head. He would have made a comment about being abused, but the combined glare from all three girls shut him up quickly.
“So the both of you need to go back again?” Suzuka turned back to Nanoha.
“Yeah.” It was a little sad that their reunion would be so short.
“It must be hard.”
“A little, but everything will be fine.” Nanoha smiled brightly. “And I have Shirou to keep me company too.”
“Did you hear that?” Shirou squawked when Alisa suddenly pulled him into a headlock. “You have to make sure Nanoha is okay. Not the other way around.”
“I got it, I got it!” Shirou flailed his arms as he tried to escape the hold.
“Do you have time after school?” Suzuka and Nanoha expertly ignored the two struggling next to them. “Do you think we’ll be able to play for a little bit?”
“Yeah, that’s fine.” Nanoha agreed.
“Then… do you wanna come over to my house.” Alisa released Shirou from the headlock. “I have a new video game.”
“Really?” Shirou sighed a little at the invitation. He was terrible at video games.
Alisa tilted her head as she recalled something. “Oh, now that I think about it, I also found a hurt dog last night.”
“A dog?”
“Another one?” Shirou tilted his head. “Don’t you have like ten dogs already?”
“Another isn’t going to hurt.” Alisa huffed at Shirou. He didn’t really have any room to talk. He helped people, she helped dogs. “Anyways, it’s rather large, has orange fur and has this funny red jewel on its forehead shaped like an oval.”
“Ah…” Both Shirou and Nanoha recognized the dog that Alisa was describing. It was a pretty unique look for a dog.
***
The group of four had gone over to Alisa’s house like they had planned after a quick stop to pick up Yuuno. Once they had gotten there, Alisa pulled them over to see the dog that she had talked about.
Shirou saw the beast form of Arfs within the cage and winced at the severity of her injuries. There were a lot of bandages around the dog’s frame and he couldn’t help but wonder what had been able to injure her like that.
A familiar tug at the back of Shirou’s head told him that Yuuno wanted to open a connection with Telepathy. Shirou easily let the ferret take care of the spell so that he could be a part of the conversation.
‘So it is Arf after all.’ Nanoha peered closer at Arf through the cage bars.
‘You, eh?’ Arf didn’t seem too surprised to see them at all.
‘Where did you get those injuries… and where is Fate-chan?’ Nanoha asked with a hint of concern.
However, Arf didn’t seem to have any inclination to answer the questions. The dog turned around and laid down with her head facing the other directions.
While the girls talked a bit, Shirou felt Yuuno hop off of his head and stop in front of the cage.
“Ah, Yuuno that’s dangerous.” Suzuka stepped forward to pick up the ferret when Shirou stopped her.
“Its okay, Yuuno is smart.” Shirou smiled as he sat down next to the ferret.
‘I’ll listen to her story myself, so you guys can go play with Alisa and Suzuka.’
Shirou scowled a little at that before turning to the girls. “I’ll make sure Yuuno is safe and catch up with you.”
“Eh?” Alisa frowned down at the red haired boy. “Well, I guess it would be nice to spend some time without a boy hanging around.”
“Ah.” Nanoha looked a little hesitant about leaving. “Are you sure?”
Shirou nodded while Yuuno sent an affirmative through their link. ‘Shirou, you don’t have to-‘
‘I want to hear this.’ Shirou shot back. He needed to hear this.
“Alright.” Nanoha would leave this to the two of them and relax. She was sure that Yuuno and Shirou would tell her what they heard later.
“Make sure to keep Yuuno safe.” Alisa gave a last command before leading the girls to her house.
The girls walked towards the house chatting happily, leaving the three of them in silence on the front lawn. Shirou waited patiently until their voices finally disappeared into the house.
“Alright, I think they’re gone.”
‘Thank you.’ Yuuno nodded before turning back to Arf. ‘What happened between you two?’
‘If you’re here, than that must mean the Administration Bureau is watching, huh?’
‘I’m Chrono Harlaown of the Time-Space Administration Bureau. It would appear that your circumstances are quite complex.’ Chrono’s voice echoed through all their minds. ‘If you could explain them to me truthfully, I promise nothing bad will happen to you.’
‘Nothing will happen to you, or your master, Fate Testarossa.’
‘I’ll tell you… everything.’ Shirou sighed in relief as Arf cooperated. ‘But promise me… promise me that you’ll save Fate. That girl’s done nothing wrong.’
“I already promised that.” Arf looked over at Shirou who had not moved his gaze from her from the start of the conversation. “I said I would save Fate, and nothing is going to stop me from doing that.”
‘You…’ Arf was speechless. There was no doubt in the child’s words or his eyes. He would save Fate, and looking down she saw the same determination in Yuuno’s eyes too.
‘As you can see, we have no problem keeping that promise.’ Shirou wondered if he heard any amusement in Chrono’s voice, but he quickly tossed the thought away. Chrono was too serious to joke like that. ‘Amy, start logging.’
***
Shirou leaned back against the cage that Arf rested in. His mind was trying to piece together the full picture. He held some pieces because of the memories he held when Fate had taken him and now with Arf’s story he could paint a much clearer picture of what was going on.
He took his image from before and started adding some details to it. A mother lost to her own obsession, a daughter frantically trying to please her, and a familiar doing her best to support her master. The marks that Fate had back than made much more sense now.
‘Shirou?’ Shirou looked down at Yuuno who was looking at him in concern. ‘Are you alright?’
Shirou wondered briefly what would have happened if Yuuno had never found the Jewel Seeds, or if they had never been dropped onto Earth. Nanoha would have never become a magical girl and he would have continued his training as a Magus in secret. Would he have had the same success as he had before, or would he have continued to fail to do even the most basic Magecraft? This power that he now held, would it have come naturally, or was it just something from the Jewel Seed? And more importantly, would Fate have been punished like this despite not having the Jewel Seeds to chase? Without the failure that they had caused, would that woman still have treated her daughter in the same way?
But all the questions that whirled around in Shirou’s head didn’t change the one truth that had appeared in this moment.
They had to save Fate.
“Yes.” The pieces had all lined up and now all they could do was act. Nanoha was all ready to go help Fate, maybe even more than Shirou. Chrono and Lindy even had given them the okay to save Fate rather than defeat her.
A bright smile was on Shirou’s face as he pushed himself to his feet and picked Yuuno up. “I’m just glad.”
‘Ah. Good.’ Yuuno was glad that he didn’t need to worry about Shirou. He had been afraid of what Shirou would do when confronted with Fate again, but the Earth Magus only wanted to help Fate despite the past. ‘Then we’ll make our move tomorrow morning. I’m not really sure what we’re going to do, but we do have one thing that can lure her to us.’
Shirou looked down at the manacle that was wrapped around his right arm. The Jewel Seed that had reacted to him was stuck inside his body. No attempts to extract it had been successful, so the Device was the only thing keeping the Jewel Seed inside of his body from activating. Several others were held in Raising Heart and a few were held in Chrono’s Device. “So she’ll be coming for them?”
‘Probably. If Fate is going after the Jewel Seeds, than this is the easiest way to obtain them. I doubt Fate will try to storm a TSAB ship.’
“That’s fine.” Shirou started to walk towards the mansion.
It was fine if Fate came after them. After all, as long as she was in front of them, as long as she was within reach, they could do something.
But for now, Shirou had some friends to play with. The last thing he needed was Alisa yelling at him because he didn’t spend any time with them.
***
The rest of the day had gone by in a blur. Shirou had died horribly at the video game that Alisa and Suzuka showed him several times before following Nanoha to her house.
Nanoha was determined to spend some time with all of her family members and Shirou was content to follow along. He enjoyed his time with the family and before he knew it, the day was over.
Shirou sat in the middle of his bed and slowly controlled his breathing. The rest of the family had long since gone to bed. Shirou was going through some last minute preparations. He needed his Projections to be at its best and he finally recalled the last bit of advice that Kiritsugu had given him.
It had been a while since he had meditated. With all of events that had happened, and his focus on his experimenting with his new Projection magic, Shirou had let the practice fall to the side. He honestly didn’t need it too much, since he did not need the absolute concentration that he used to forge a Magic Circuit, but it was something that was familiar and comforting. Kiritsugu had mentioned that it would probably help with his Projections, but Shirou had not really listened.
Breathe in.
“Trace… on…” He pulled back the hammer in his mind.
Breathe out.
The hammer fell and fire surged through his body, but it was controlled, held back from burning through his body like it did before. His own Magic Circuits doing a much better job of channeling Od than the makeshift ones he created before.
Breathe in.
He held back from using the Od. He didn’t want to cast any spells at the moment. The blueprint of Kyouya’s swords flashed through his mind. The materials, the crafting process, the history of the blade all were stored in his mind. However, with no Od to craft the blade, the blueprint quickly faded from Shirou’s mind.
“Trace…out…”
Breathe out.
The Magic Circuits closed and the fire was gone. Shirou let his body relax and cleared his mind.
‘Are you still practicing?’
Shirou opened his eyes and found Yuuno watching him from the bed he had thrown together. Yuuno had slept with Nanoha at first, but after a bad night where Nanoha had tried to eat him in her sleep the ferret changeling had slept in Shirou’s room. Shirou had mentioned that he was going to stay up a bit to practice his Magecraft. That had been hours ago.
“Yeah, I want to make sure that I’m ready.” Yuuno shook his head at the idea. Shirou had been absentminded the entire day. It wasn’t hard to see that his thoughts were on Fate and their promise to save her. He really took this Ally of Justice thing seriously.
‘Don’t worry. You’re not the only one that wants to save her after all. If you burn yourself out tonight, then you’ll be too tired to do anything tomorrow.’
“You’re right. I guess I forgot.” Shirou felt a little embarrassed at the gentle scolding. He wondered again if Yuuno was the same age as him or if he was older. The question kept slipping his mind during conversations. “I guess I’m just a little nervous.”
It would be the first time that he would see Fate after his escape. He wondered how she would react to him and how he would react to her. The faint memory of his promise echoed in his mind and only made him more nervous about the next morning.
‘Get some sleep. I have a feeling that we’re going to need it.’ Yuuno curled back into a ball to take his own advice.
“Right.” Shirou nodded before lying down.
His mind was filled with the thought of saving Fate yet he dreamed of nothing but swords.
***
Shirou slowly closed the door to the Takamachi house. He nodded to Nanoha who was waiting for him outside the house and let Yuuno climb onto his shoulder. All three of them shared a brief smile before running down the street. They ran silently for a moment before Yuuno got their attention. A brief look to the side showed Arf running along the wall next to them. She leaped down to the ground and ran next to them. Shirou smiled brightly. All of the pieces that they needed were here.
Now they only needed Fate.
Hopefully, she would come find them. The biggest problem that they had was that Fate would most likely not come quietly. That meant there would be a fight. The magic that Nanoha and Fate threw around had a very high chance of causing collateral damage. Shirou wondered why a Barrier spell wouldn’t work, but Yuuno was unsure if he could hold back Nanoha and Fate’s full power if they fought. So they needed a wide area where Nanoha and Fate could let loose.
Shirou had pointed out that no one was hurt when all those Jewel Seeds had activated over the ocean and suggested the seaside park. Nanoha agreed that it would be a good spot.
It was still early in the morning and the normally lively park was empty when they arrived.
“This place should be perfect.” Nanoha was happy that they had found a good place. She turned to face the group with a solemn expression. “Now, all we need if Fate-chan.”
Shirou closed his eyes and waited. A small breeze swept past the area and Shirou felt it ruffle his hair. The sea tinted air was a familiar scent, but another one slowly made itself known. The smell of burnt ozone alerted Shirou that it was time.
“She’s here.” Shirou whispered before a mechanical voice called out.
“Scythe Form.”
The group all turned around to see Fate standing on top of a light post holding Bardiche in Scythe form. Arf took a step forward.
“Fate, let’s stop this once and for all. You can’t listen to what that woman says anymore. Fate, if you keep going like this, things will get worse and worse. So Fate…!” Arf cried out desperately.
For a moment it seemed like Arf’s voice had reached Fate, but she shook her head. “But even so… I am her daughter.”
“Fate…” He took a step forward and looked up at the girl. Fate’s eyes shifted over from Arf to him and for the briefest moment, he thought he saw her flinch. Would their words even reach her? “Please, stop this.”
“I…” Fate grip on Bardiche tightened as she gathered her resolve. “I will be taking that Jewel Seed from you also.”
Shirou felt a pang in his chest. He knew what was going on in Fate’s head. He had given it a lot of thought after Arf had told them what Fate was doing and even if he wanted her to listen, he knew that Fate would not be swayed by his words.
“You can’t just throw away everything you’ve done so far, right?” Nanoha walked past Shirou and transformed into her Barrier Jacket, Raising Heart held in her hand. Her words conveying the thoughts that plagued Shirou’s mind. “You can’t even considering running away now.”
“I’m sure that the Jewel Seeds are the reason behind your actions. So, let’s bet them. Each of us will put our Jewel Seeds on the line!” It was a gamble, but it was the way that Nanoha wanted to do this.
“Put Out.” Raising Heart summoned all the Jewel Seeds that they had collected so far. Opposite them, Bardiche did the same with the Jewel Seeds that Fate held.
Fate’s gaze turned to Shirou and paused for a moment as he recalled his promise.
Flashback
“Shirou, I want to fight Fate-chan by myself.”
Shirou choked on his own breath before staring at Nanoha in complete confusion. “What?!”
Nanoha blushed a little and repeated herself with a bit more force. “I’m going to fight Fate-chan by myself.”
“No way. I’m going to fight too.” Shirou didn’t need Nanoha protecting him. He may not have the magical power that she did, but he was still strong in his own way.
“Shirou, I want to do this myself.” Nanoha looked out the window. The night sky was clear and she could see a few stars in the sky. “You understand Fate-chan, don’t you?”
Shirou paused a little as the conversation went in a completely different direction than he thought it was going. “I… I guess.”
“You do. I can tell.” Nanoha smiled at Shirou. He was always trying to help people, and even though Fate had done so much to him, he still wanted to help her. “I still can’t understand Fate-chan yet, but I want to.”
“So you’re going to fight her.” Shirou understood the idea, even if he didn’t like it, he understood it.
“Yes. So promise me you won’t interfere.”
Shirou looked away. He wanted to say no. He wanted to say that he couldn’t make such a promise. But he saw the look in Nanoha’s eyes and knew instantly that saying no wasn’t an option. It was just like when they had first become friends. There would be no arguing with her.
“I promise…”
End Flashback
Shirou placed a hand to his chest. “I can’t pull this one out, but it’s included in this bet.”
He would believe in Nanoha’s strength. Even if it burned him inside to rely on someone else, there was nothing else he could do. His hands still couldn’t reach Fate’s.
“Now… let’s settle everything.” Nanoha swung Raising Heart forward. “Everything about us has yet to begin. So, in order to truly start things between us…”
“Let’s begin… our true first and final match.”
...
AN: Mostly just a build up for the finale. I can't really think of any thing to say so I'll just leave it as it is.
Tell me what you think.
Last edited by Heroslayer; March 30th, 2012 at 07:25 PM.
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Great update, Heroslayer. Nice job all around, really. ^^
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Nice. Could still use a bit of clean up in a couple spots though.
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D'oooooooohhh, update!
I'd say it fulfilled its role as a build up chapter quite nicely. Though I wonder if Kiritsugu is still going to interfere in any of the coming events... (and if he is, I hope he brings his gun along, for one last job :P)
In the scene in the dojo you accidentally left in a beta's comment.
Think you left one of your beta's notes in here. I agree, by the way- or maybe "wasn't quiet enough to be ignored."
EDIT: Um. What gwonbush said.
Fixed the note deletion. Thanks.
I'll be doing a much more through editing of all the chapters later. Sorta like Fraggles rewrites except for minor details rather than an entire rewrite.
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ahhhhh..... the calm before the storm....... pretty nice build-up towards the climatic fight between Nanoha and Fate.
I'm curious as to when Kiritsugu would make another appearance though, I mean granted he's technically already dead due to the curse, but I'm sure he still has his Contender locked away somewhere......
Last edited by Carpe_Noctem; March 31st, 2012 at 12:01 AM.
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It would be really fucked up if the jewel seed somehow connected to the Throne and temporarily fused Shirou with EMIYA for a climactic fight.
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It would be fucked up...and insanely Deus Ex Machina'd =/
Most importantly, an ass pull like that is it even allowed?
It'll happen somewhere in the multiverse...just hopefully not here :3c
Is that so?
In any case, Heroslayer, you've shown us once again that even Suzuka and Alisa has authority over Shirou
So far we have 4 females controlling over him
1) Nanoha
2) Momoko
3) Suzuka
4) Alisa
and soon to be
5) Fate
...and a little bit after that
5)FATE
Women >>>>>>>> Shirou. That's canon. Not that he really minds that much. Because nice guy. And sex.
In any case, he live his life being commanded by women young and old
Seriously that will affect his future self somehow.
Shirou is shared property among the females of the Emiya household :3
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