(Bi)Monthly Rework-a-Servant Contest

[Dreamerless]

3points-Erik
2 point- Edward
1 point-Madawg

[Vididii]

[TrueMrMultiverse]

3 points: Anti-Rider Boudica
2 Points: Anti-Caster Edward Tudor
1 Point: Anti-Saber Nakazawa Koto

Was a great audition, everyone did pretty good!

[ErrantGalantine]

Honorable Mentions:
Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
Kamo Serizawa
Konrad der Rote
Erik Vachon
Courtaud
Ihy
Madawg

1 Point: Anti-Rider, Boudica
2 Points: Anti-Binder, Tokugawa Iemitsu
3 Points: Anti-Caster, Edward Tudor

[Saron]

Honourable Mentions

Literally everyone.

Yep.

Everyone came into this month SWINGING haymakers with the concept. While I think some are weaker in execution or concept, none are bad.

Everyone should feel proud of themselves. Good work!

Third Place

Lancelot by Errant

The best example of how an Anti functions and behaves, and is what I'm going to use to show people how Anti-Servants differ because he's based on a Canon Servant.

Lancelot is already known as the knight of grief, so him being summoned with that grief magnified is a natural idea, so using him as an example of Anti being summoned with their curses and how it affects their skills and abilities means that Anti-Lancelot just works fundamentally.

Second Place

Ihy by Salt Pillar

Gnosticism makes my brain go brrr, even if I have no idea what's actually happening.

Especially if i have no idea whats happening.

Man I really gotta do a deep dive on it one day.

Anyways, Salt your capacity to write really good narratives in your sheets continues it's amazing trend, Ihy is suitably eldritch, and I got bamboozled by google because Ihy is the name of a minor deity known for banging the tunes out on a singular instrument..

First Place

Boudica by Viidii

In your own words:

"Would."

I mostly am voting for this because it recontextualizes that awful manga moment into something that feels more realistic to Boudica and Nero as characters, and how perfectly this does. Plus the image of wedding rings growing from the bone and biting off your fingers? Very Evil Dead to me.

Love and Hate are divided by a thin yet important line, and we can see how breaking that line can be messy.

[DracoScribe]

Bah. Late, but got Erik's relationships updated to include everyone after him! And thanks so much to everyone's comments on Anti-Servant Erik! I was so worried so I'm glad it worked out for you.
...i'd give my thoughts in return but i don't feel as up to it this time despite less entries. Sorry. X/
So. Uh. Best I can do is one: like Saron said, everyone was POPPING OFF for this prompt. WOW.
And two: give my thoughts on my votes.
Which are:

1 point: Madawg
...the craft essence got me
Of course, the sheet before and leading up to it was great (and yes i read the original too when you posted it...but didn't comment on it danggit)
But that craft essencr
Just...ugh
Yeah
Hit me with a something-something-tonne of feels and emotions why don't you?

2 point: Boudica
I love it when someone makes the most out of a bad thing without "getting rid" of it and instead, shockingly, makes it work, because I feel like it takes skill and creativity to think of how to do it and execute it well. And that's what this is.
...also i am also fond of boudica tho proly nowhere near as fond as you

3 point: Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
...ok
ill admit
i cant quite parse...why this one stuck out to me so much.
Okay that's not quite right. I couldn't quite decide what is it about this sheet that got to me for a while.
Maybe because I'm fond of Herlock Sherlock. Maybe it's because I like mysteries and thus like mystery authors (tho i havent read too many...i really need to). Maybe because it's a format that is more my taste. Maybe it's because I can sympathize with Conan Doyle's feelings of "the work I'm most proud of isn't popular/liked, but my popular work isn't the one I'm proud of/don't care for at all".
...but I think, after thinking about it, in the end, it's because I went "HOLY SHIT THIS SHEET WAS AMAZING" from a sheet of yours Dreamerless, when before most of them don't land for me (except for Don Quixote before now), makes it really, really stick out in my head.
Add in the above and other factors I can't remember off the top of my head, and I can't help but wanna give all my points to my new favorite sheet from you. So take your three points.

[Dreamerless]

Bah. Late, but got Erik's relationships updated to include everyone after him! And thanks so much to everyone's comments on Anti-Servant Erik! I was so worried so I'm glad it worked out for you.
...i'd give my thoughts in return but i don't feel as up to it this time despite less entries. Sorry. X/
So. Uh. Best I can do is one: like Saron said, everyone was POPPING OFF for this prompt. WOW.
And two: give my thoughts on my votes.
Which are:

1 point: Madawg
...the craft essence got me
Of course, the sheet before and leading up to it was great (and yes i read the original too when you posted it...but didn't comment on it danggit)
But that craft essencr
Just...ugh
Yeah
Hit me with a something-something-tonne of feels and emotions why don't you?

2 point: Boudica
I love it when someone makes the most out of a bad thing without "getting rid" of it and instead, shockingly, makes it work, because I feel like it takes skill and creativity to think of how to do it and execute it well. And that's what this is.
...also i am also fond of boudica tho proly nowhere near as fond as you

3 point: Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
...ok
ill admit
i cant quite parse...why this one stuck out to me so much.
Okay that's not quite right. I couldn't quite decide what is it about this sheet that got to me for a while.
Maybe because I'm fond of Herlock Sherlock. Maybe it's because I like mysteries and thus like mystery authors (tho i havent read too many...i really need to). Maybe because it's a format that is more my taste. Maybe it's because I can sympathize with Conan Doyle's feelings of "the work I'm most proud of isn't popular/liked, but my popular work isn't the one I'm proud of/don't care for at all".
...but I think, after thinking about it, in the end, it's because I went "HOLY SHIT THIS SHEET WAS AMAZING" from a sheet of yours Dreamerless, when before most of them don't land for me (except for Don Quixote before now), makes it really, really stick out in my head.
Add in the above and other factors I can't remember off the top of my head, and I can't help but wanna give all my points to my new favorite sheet from you. So take your three points.

TYSM DRACO!! *Kiss*

[MuramasaMachII]

1 Point: Kamo Serizawa
This sheet was just... great. The combining of Serizawa with his GudaGuda lore was an excellent decision, and it doesn't help that I'm biased towards Metal Gear Rising.

2 Points: Courtaud
As a local Rome addict, this was... great! The idea of the Wolves of Paris being a 'Roman legion' admittedly, hit hard as well. The only slight nitpick I have is how the Noble Phantasm's description sort of... doesn't make sense to me? This might just be me as a more function based person though.

3 Points: Arthur Conan Doyle
There's a few reasons I'm giving my maximum points to this.
1. I absolutely adore the Sherlock Holmes series. 2. While Omnipotent Insight at first looks overpowered, on closer look, it's amazingly inventive. 3. That Craft Essence hit me so damn hard. And finally... 4. I may or may not have my own interpretation of Arthur Conan Doyle planned...

[Dreamerless]

...wow, was not expecting to get 3-pointed twice. Thanks, Machi! Looking forward to your Doyle

[sutaa]

1 point: Arthur Conan Doyle
It's brave being the first to take a shot at writing an unknown quantity like Anti-Servants, and I admire how perfect an example of one you managed to turn out. The sense of Doyle being crushed beneath the weight of his own work's something you really managed to get across here, plus the Craft Essence that got me right in the heart, probably one of your best.

2 points: Courtaud
And it's another amazing Simple sheet! Your style really works its magic here, how we slowly just keep compounding more and more of her struggle, her personality, all the things that make her who she is, like the steady march of an army. You've got a real knack for imagery and applying it to convey character, I love her.

...
"What's a mutt like you doing around here? Rome has already fallen, lost wolf, rotten as the heresy that stands atop its corpse today. There's no meat for you here, no, none at all. Our Kingdoms are fallen, a child like me no worthy prey. Burning my flesh won't bring out the juices, and there's nothing in these fragile bones of mine to sate that lust of yours. ... But you already know that, don't you? Then by all means! Sink your fangs in deep, Legion of Rome! Even if the meat won't fill your belly, feast on me still! And while you do that, haha... I think I'm going to ruffle that fluffy fur of yours."

3 points: Tokugawa Iemitsu
Of course I have to vote for a fellow angst-lover. Your writing is always so evocative, but the way you took the self-destructive subtext of Anti-Servants and made it delicious, unabashed text? Perfect. The steady build-up to his Viral Phantasm is an absolute treat to read.

...
"Do you mean to look at me with such repulsive eyes? No, of course not; those are my eyes, the eyes I could have had, if I'd lived to carry my father's dreams........... You might have denied yourself, but little boys have the pleasure of being a little more honest, so I'll be clear. I hate you, Great Iemitsu. I despise you. The envy I feel is so absolutely unbearable that, had I still a heart in me, by now it might have burst over the floor. But you're the winner here, aren't you? You have the right to look down on those of us who lost. So by all means. Hollow yourself out as you please, empty king. Drive deep your blade. When your heart goes numb, when your name is forgotten, when all the hatred you feel for yourself finally dwindles down into naught - I will be here, to hate you still. Forever and ever."
(The mere existence of Anti-Binder qualifies as a form of torture. Anti-Caster's Viral Phantasm will not simply fail to harm him. It will negate all the boy's efforts to escape him.)

[DelRey]

First: I am really sorry it took me so long. week has been busy and it will stay that way for three more weeks. I will survive!

unto the winners, i sadly could not read yet

1st place is Vididii with his Boudica with 12 points
2nd place is sutaa with Edward Tudor with 9 points

and, unprecedented, we have 4 3rd places, each with 7 points: Eric Vacho by Draco, Madawg by Saron, Lancelot by Dreamerless and Courtaud by Simple

congrats to you all. I hope you made Random proud.

[Vance]

Congrats y'all. Was pretty satisfied with my entry just getting an honorable mention tbh.

[Dreamerless]

First: I am really sorry it took me so long. week has been busy and it will stay that way for three more weeks. I will survive!

unto the winners, i sadly could not read yet

1st place is Vididii with his Boudica with 12 points
2nd place is sutaa with Edward Tudor with 9 points

and, unprecedented, we have 3 3rd places, each with 7 points: Eric Vacho by Draco, Madawg by Saron and Courtaud by Simple

congrats to you all. I hope you made Random proud.

Um... Del... I also have 7 points

[DelRey]

Altering quotes to gain attention is a serious crime, Dreamerless. I hope you know that.
Xmas is approaching.
I'll let it slide.

[PA270]

Sorry to be that guy, but you got the Servants mixed up. Dreamerless was "Sherlock Holmes." Lancelot was Errant's.

[pinetree]

What an embarrassing display from our host Mr. Del Rey

[Salt Pillar]

Utterly risible. An insurrection is overdue.

[Vididii]

Yo, thanks for the votes everyone! I don’t think there was a bad servant in the bunch- but regardless, I’ll see you in like 2 months at Quetzamania

[DelRey]

talking to the king in his own throne room like that is punishable by death

btw, the next contest is actually in March, because in january the beloved Secret Santa Contest will commence