Originally Posted by
RoydGolden
Manfred: I agree with NMR that the suicide-jokes paint the sheet as a bit glib. Makes it seem like you didn't care all that much for the character despite writing about them. Characters who deflect from their depression with dark humor can work (I consider Dazai from Bungou Stray Dogs a good example of such) but you didn't really flesh it out that way. Given how powerful that NP is you might want to go into more detail on the process of summoning the spirits and how long it takes. If it's compared to obtaining a Grail it'd make sense if he couldn't do so instantly upon entering the War.