Koga wanted me to look at his
Augustus and
Psammtik sheets, and requested I put things here, so here we are.
Octavian-
Got a few qualms on this one- mostly in matters of personality and stats.
I like the idea of him being written as the second founder of rome- a very nice angle, and a deserved one with all he accomplished in history. That being said:
- I don’t like his energy. From what I can understand through the personality and relationship sections, he’s very prideful (as he should be with how you’ve manifested him) and kind of a dick, but everyone loves him anyway?? That’s how it came off sounding to me. I would not want to summon or hang out with him.
- Why does he have divine core, and at such a high rank too? He’s no actual god, merely the founder of the greater Roman religion. I can see him having a sprinkling of Divinity as Caesar’s grand nephew, but he has a D rank in that skill. I don’t see how he can have a Grand Rider qualification this way either, as having a divine core rank higher than Ishtar and Ereshkigal would certainly disallow him the position due to not being human. You gotta remember, Romulus=Quirinius was an exception.
- Additionally, I feel as if his stats are WAY too high. His lowest parameters are 2 B-ranks, the LOWEST ranked skill, both in personal and class, that he has is A! And he has FIVE Noble Phantasms, the LOWEST BEING A+????? Like, holy shit mate, if he were real, I’d ask you if he sucked you off to get you to write this.
So yeah, really not a fan of the guy, sorry. I’ve made my own bullshit statline Grand Rider Candidate, but even he wasn’t this egregiously wanked.
Psammtik
I actually really like this guy’s vibe! Eccentric artist king rooted in his own unwavering views, it has a good feel to it. I think there’s an issue with skills being way to high ranked again (lower those skills and NP’s dude!), and I would recommend you replace divinity with “protection of the gods” or something since he has no actual divine heritage. Like, you gave him a higher rank that Cu Chulainn of all people, who is the direct son of the Sun God Lugh.
I like him, but please rank his skills down- as important as he is to establishing Greco-Egyptian relations, he isn’t a very well-known figure. Fame plays a surprisingly important part in servant power.