I'm betting that nuclear made either pool 7 or pool 13. It fits his entire thing of short snappy sheets and his whole catholic thing for herman the recluse. I am also betting that pool 22 is wyvern for obvious reasons.
I'm betting that nuclear made either pool 7 or pool 13. It fits his entire thing of short snappy sheets and his whole catholic thing for herman the recluse. I am also betting that pool 22 is wyvern for obvious reasons.
Ame no Minakanushi
NGL this was so close to good for me. It is good but it could've been more. The second half just... didn't ruin it but its a bit much? Like it kinda feels rushed. I get why though. Still good job nonetheless rampant AI is tough to write and this is a decent enough job.
Dyson Sphere
Well, well well. I'm happy to say this is the first servant to receive perfect marks in my notes. 20/20. Sure there are minor flaws here and there that I could nitpick but the whole is just so good. Congrats your being voted in. I'll literally throw any other considerations into honorable mention for being the first servant on the list to get that.
Heeren XVII
IT WAS SO CLOSE! THE SECOND SHEET TO NEARLY REACH IT! All it needed was some explanation of who they were and what sort of person they were! Sure the intro gave a taste but that's all!.
Still pretty sure this is a Kamera sheet. Its def his style.
Pool 11
Gonna lump these together real quick for a general critque. Author, please don't space like this. It's annoying. thanks.
Abel
Hmmm. Interesting idea. Quaint. execution. NPs a bit weird but whatever. Its fine enough.
KINAP
.... the hell's a Kinap?
Euroswydd
.... I literally have no idea who this is. Probably the best of the three. Spacing issues are still present though.
Moving on to the next set of sheets....
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13 is Morg, 7 is... I'm guessing Spiff or Serra, still got their styles mixed up sometimes.
Anyways, that pool 17 was totally awesome, I wonder who wrote that one. Heck, they even used the same fc as the one I teased in Laplace Demon's sheet a long time ago, on top of the style being similar to my own. Whoever wrote him must really be a big fan of mine. Totally deserves my vote, hahaha
7 is definitely serra given the style. Victoria is definitely whitefrenzy, no doubt there.
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Based on some keywords being highlighted (like what happened with Sarashina), unless I missed something, I'm guessing Vicky is Pine.
Edit:
Oh wait, it's WF cosplaying Pine's style? Wow, not bad at all, queen.
See WF? You still tricked some people lol
I have a confession to make remember pool 19, I was the one who submitted that prompt
Tbf at first I also thought Frau Holle was WF, so I may not be the smartest inspector in the precinct.
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Fate/Without Justice
I don't deny that it's rushed and furthermore, I wrote about half of it while being like piss drunk, so...
I've already called back the cast (Random please let me rent Moriya for a short while) and we're finishing up on how to end the story properly before I move on to the next one.
I wish I could join on the guessing game too. I envy not being able to know everything by default.
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Blindfold your eyes, so that the approaching night may strike no fear in you.
Let it not burden your soul, nor numb your strides.
Let’s start working by process of eliminaton.
Sure.
I know the first is Draco-Scribe... and I know pool 22 is Wyvern. I'm fairly confident that Heeren XVII is Kamera.
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Lotta contenders today. Took a bit to break them down, but my sass was also me making preliminary investigations. Helped the process along.
Honorable MentionsAbel: Has an interesting interpretation on Abel being a LB king. A cycle that ends only when it wants to. Abel being a girl, which everyone seems to do as well. Not bad. Just doesn't strike me hard.
Inkarri: An interesting Servant from the place Nasu ignores with a Class that is completely underused in the Nasuverse.
Niya: A lovely lady taking you on a moonlit ride through the underworld on her corpse boat. An interesting Servant that has some strangely enticing imagery.
Hank Morgan: Didn't expect this one of all people to be a genderbend. Still, an unexpected and cool take on someone I REALLY WANTED TO DO! YOU GET NO VOTE!
Nice job.
Hatsheput: So, she was originally a Caster? It's leftover in one of her Skills.
Anyway, she's pretty good. I'm not totally sold on the Amun connection, and there are a lot of details I myself actually would've included whenever I thought about making her, but this is still great stuff.
Sima Qian: A haiku dedicated to this emperor.
The angst, gone away
Only history remains
Snow on Mt. Fuji
Roald Amundsen: A adventuring pusher of limits. Also, using a flag as a weapon? If I had a nickel for every time a Servant used a flag as a lance, I'd have two nickels, which isn't a lot, but it's weird that it happened twice.
Good job. I like his moxie.
Heeren XVII: I think this video sums up my feelings about them quite well.
The spice must flow. I love them.
Caleb: I guess it doesn't matter since my prompt wasn't completed, but he actually fits what I wanted for Simple Like a Sword. I love this boy.
Palaestra: Girl has issues, but so do most people. I just want a bro to work out with. That so wrong? I could probably learn wrestling at the same time.
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Now, to attempt the prediction game once more. Following my heart, which has always brought me close, I predict that the top three will be Bobby, Victoria, and Dyson. As for order, Dyson 2, Victoria 3, and Bobby takes the win. Now, let's see how rusty my prophetic abilities are.
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Fate/Without Justice
I just wonder which prompts were legendary or nuclear. Legendary did say that his method of anonymity was to copy some of his earlier sheets but i have found nothing resembling his earlier joseph smith alter.
Honorable Mentions
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Huh, ngl I was kinda scared people weren't going to like my sheet, but it seems to be going over decently well imo
I kinda want to talk about my sheet, but then again, there's no point of it being secret santa if I do. Definitely going to try and make a redux version later on tho.
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Niya [Updated]
I got this one wrong. A kinda forum member pointed out that I had missed some things on first reading and that I had missed a servant. So apologies. Aftera reread... I still have some issues but i've corrected a big mistake I made; that there is a history to the servant and its simply woven into it akin to a story. I have updated my notes and its actually shot up significantly. It will very likely get an honorable mention.
Herman the Recluse
The one I missed... and I like it. It works well enough and the NP is similar to something I've delved into though more restricted. Honestly my only issues with the sheet are restricted to nitpicks.
Pool 13
Now to contradict Pool 11 i'm going to have a praise for this pool. Excellent job. I can say that each one of these sheets graded excellently and you did it with three different formats. Admittedly one of them had personal bias play into it but still. Alternating formats and three sheets with excellent quality is definitely not something just anyone can accomplish.... Morg.
Sinbad
A wonderful rendition of the classic adventurer. I love it. Its almost perfect. My notes say that the problem is... introduction. huh. Wonder why. Its fine enough... whatever changing that. So Sinbad is similar to Dyson Sphere in that its achieved a perfect score. So it'll be part of my votes most likely.
Unless more than one other 20/20 shows up. Then... i dunno. need to think about that.
Lady Liberty
Wonderfully american and perfectly emblematic of Liberty. Good job on portraying us Americans in our best light. It too achieved 20/20 but that was because some choices were simply so perfect. For example I love that the intro is just the Team America theme song. And the faceclaim is quite literally exceptional. Honestly if the sheet flowed just a bit better it'd have actually broken my normal scoring convention. This sheet is that good to me. Anyways congrats on getting into the vote!.... yeah definitely getting in the vote.
Gregson and Lestrande
NGL this one just didn't grip me. The formatting is excellent and they're good servants. Just.. my attention slipped here. My notes say they're an excellent servant and I believe it but I do know my attention slipped here... so I'm going to guess its not your sheet quality but my attention span, which seems to be 5 servants long, hitting its limit. So Kudos.
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Pool 1: dracoscribe
Pool 4: whitefrenzy
Pool 5: Gl4re
Pool 6: vididii
Pool 7: Serra
Pool 8: Spelror
Pool 9: kamera
Pool 12: alexcoene
Pool 13: morg
Pool 14: delrey
Pool 17: bnel15
Pool 18: I will cut my arm off if this isn’t skull.
Pool 19: jishara
Pool 22: wyvern
Pool 24: nuclear probably.
Pool 25: sutaa.
That leaves pool 2, 3, 10, 11, 15, 21, 23 and 26 to Axe, Baron, DesReploid, FarewellToMrA, pinetree, Legendary and Spamming. I'd place pool 23 to spamming due to the second sheets format and pool 26 to Axe due to the new format. Pool 21 to frigix due to format and pool 10 due to general modernity and format as well. I'd also bet that pinetree did prompt 2 or 15 due to general content and style.
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Nodens
The first servant to break my scale. Good job Delray. Superb. I refuse to let any other servant knock this one out of the running except maybe Dyson Sphere. I think I know why too... this one flows so, so well. It gripped my attention and kept it the whole way. Good job.
Shiki Tohna no not that one
Heh. I like this one. It's getting an honorable mention at least cause its lowkey a solid sheet that works really damn well. If not for LL and Nodens I might've even put it in for voting. However... well sometimes things don't work out.
Sima Qian
I like the NP. It's solid and I love it. Good job.
Actually... glanced through the rest of the entries and I'm gonna vote in a second. Just want to double check my notes and one sheet among the ones left to see if anything changes before I do. I'll do honorable mentions later.
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Honorable Mentions
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As for my predictions... I'm betting Vicky and Fischer will make it to the top three, though I can't say for certain who'd take the last spot yet. I might be biased, but Heeren XVII has a pretty good chance. Hank Morgan and Yamato Takeru might also be something of a dark horse here, but who knows.
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