Does anyone have the collected lores on Dead Apostle? I have an idea for a bardic vampire that I want to write for this prompt but I'm kinda rusty on this side of the lore. Anything specifically on TATARI would be nice too.
Does anyone have the collected lores on Dead Apostle? I have an idea for a bardic vampire that I want to write for this prompt but I'm kinda rusty on this side of the lore. Anything specifically on TATARI would be nice too.
Best I can give is Terminology-Vampires, TYPE-MOON Wiki - Dead Apostles, and TATARI(look at the first 3 entries).
The young Konstantinos Annius Adamantos ran through the streets of Benghazi, his eyes filled with terror.
It had been his first official mission to support the NATO intervention in the 2011 Libyan Civil War.
While he was only 18 years old, he had already gained the title 'Living Missile' through his supporting of NATO convoys.
Everything had gone well... until she appeared.
A tall Frenchwoman who walked like a predator through the streets, licking her lips at the constant bloodshed as she sang:
"Aux armes, citoyens, formez vos bataillons, marchons, marchons!"
While it seemed calming at first, everything came crashing down in pure terror as the woman sang the last words:
"Chanson-nous la Liberté ou la Mort! Oui, cela c'est."Desire Demonstration DomainLa Marseillaise
Last edited by MuramasaMachII; March 3rd, 2024 at 01:33 AM.
Louisette Sans-Merci: Another fantastic entry! I loved both previous entries in the GMS series so far, and this one is certainly no exception. The French Revolution theming is a really strong thread to tie the whole sheet together, and Louisette truly does feel like a concept distilled, which is exactly what a TATARI-inspired DA should feel like. Not to mention her fantastic Magecraft and her rich backstory! Great job!
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Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
Draynor Xanier
The Cancer
"What will tomorrow bring? The only way to find out is to run towards it with all your might."
Name: Draynor Xanier
Epithet: The Cancer
Age: 82
Sex: Male
Height: 390 cm (186 cm)
Weight: 264 kg
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Personal Attributes:
Likes: The pursuit of success, a passionate romance, the feeling of progress
Dislikes: Peace, mediocrity
Forte: Never giving up
Weakness: Never giving up
Status:
Race: Dead Apostle
DA Rank: IV
Affiliation: Clock Tower
Faculty: Zoology
CT Rank: Fes
Magical Attributes:
Element: Water
Circuit Quality: B
Circuit Quantity: C
Circuit Composition: Aberrant
Origin: Stagnation
Profile:
The Cancer of London. A Dead Apostle created by magecraft.
Draynor Xanier is a talented magus and an esteemed member of the Clock Tower’s Faculty of Zoology. Despite his old age, he is a youthful, charismatic fellow who could easily pass as a fresh-eyed, green-faced student. His magical talents speak for themselves and he has experienced a rapid and steady rise through the ranks of the Clock Tower over the decades. Due to his natural aptitude at magecraft and magnetic personality, he has many admirers within the Clock Tower who both celebrate and envy his talents. He has managed to remain within the Top 50 of the Clock Tower’s “the man at the Clock Tower you want to sleep with the most” ranking among the female students.
Unbeknownst to most, however, Draynor’s youthfulness is not merely the result of typical anti-aging magecraft. He is actually a Dead Apostle, a former human who became a vampire through magecraft. For decades now, he has managed to hide this fact from the rest of the Mage’s Association, just pretending to be an ordinary magus in London retaining their youth with anti-aging magecraft. Unlike many other magi who seek the immortality of the Dead Apostle solely to buy themselves more time to fulfill their true goals, Draynor’s current existenc as a vampire was his goal.
Through the power of magecraft, Draynor Xanier has obtained what he considers the true form of Ideal Immortality.
BiographyAbilitiesCharacter
Intermission
Draynor Xanier: Woo, just in the nick of time by my count! Shame about the limited number of entries this time, but considering that it had to compete with Secret Santa, I can't say I'm too surprised. And hey, quality over quantity is always a good thing!
Speaking of quality, Draynor is really fascinating. I love how you took a seemingly silly concept (immortal lobster man) and managed to impart it with genuine pathos and tragedy. Draynor is a tragic figure, someone who tried to avoid stagnation and ended up trapped in it all the same. A different kind of stagnation, perhaps, but still. It's a relatively simple entry, but it feels very weighty, and I really enjoyed reading it! Great work!
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Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
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Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
What Enlightenment Can't Protect
“You don’t need to go.
You deserve to stay in the place where our loves lived. Just like everyone else.”
Personal Information
Name: Dr. Amalea Apelhoven
Epithet: Denier of Enlightenment, Dr. Nozen Allmind (Dead Apostle Name)
Birthdate: 7th March, 1920
Nationality: Switzerland
Height/Weight: 167 cm/ 48 kg
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Image CV: Tomori Kusunoki
Likes: saving life, good ending, determination
Dislikes: comforting lie, giving up, fate
Talents: surgery
Natural Enemy: Michael Roa Valdamjong
Decisive Battle: The day her father decided to reach the Root and fail
Magical Attributes and Information
Affiliation: None (Formerly Clock Tower)
Origin: Material Existence
Attribute: Ether
Composition: Normal
Circuit Quality: C
Circuit Quantity: C
“Even toxins can save lives depending on how one uses it. Even the vilest of curses can be used to prolong the life of others. Even monsters can be a savior of humanity if we understand their nature.”
That is what Amalea believes in her heart.
Background of the Apelhoven
Magecraft - Odin's sacrifice ritual
Character
Dead Apostle - Dr. Nozen Allmind
Author's Note
Last edited by Spartacus; May 10th, 2024 at 12:52 PM.
Dr. Amalea Apelhoven: Absolutely amazing work! Amalea is a truly fascinating individual, deeply disturbed and yet heartbreakingly relatable, especially to anyone who has an especially acute fear of mortality. The basis of her Magecraft is fascinating, and it translates really well into a Dead Apostle's skillset, which helps the whole sheet feel even more complete! Excellent job!
EDIT:
3 PTS: Louisette Sans-Merci
2 PTS: Draynor Xanier
1 PT: Knox Dow Royales
Honorable Mention: Dr. Amalea Apelhoven
Last edited by PA270; February 20th, 2024 at 09:53 AM. Reason: Voting, wanted to avoid double-posting
Knox Dow Royales
You came up with a neat reason for vampirism in this one, and a pretty powerfl magecraft system for the DA transformation. It leading where it did due to such a grudge, and the choice to tie it into the Barthomeloi lore was fun. It's a nice exploration of devotion, and while this one focuses a lot on things and organizations, you mix in a lot of her own views so you still get a strong sense of character despite how easily she could have ended up lost in the details.
It still feels, on the whole, a tiny bit more along the lines of a faction or setting/world bible than a singular character, but... taken as a mix of both, I think it went pretty well.
Louisette Sans-Merci
Mm... I like the decision to render her similar to a TATARI phenomenon, and the connection to the French revolution and the policy of Terror is really neat (especially the idea of trying to turn it into a magecraft system). Her upbringing and connection to the revolution is well-established and it gives a strong image.
Personally, where I feel it falters is that the magecraft aspect feels a bit... coincidental or nailed on, in so far as it's really a coincidence she becomes what she is and the connection between the cool Thermidorian magecraft idea and the DA that ends up coming of it doesn't quite bridge for me.
But the two halves, while they don't quite meet, are still both strong conceptually. There’s also less time than I might have liked given to her character and personality, both before and after, and the actual individual is a bit glossed over or summarized - which is fine if they’re purely a concept, but she’s given existence outside of the Terror incidents so I have to look at the character as well.
Draynor Xanier
It's interesting how what could be a very goofy idea played earnestly can become a pretty emotional affair. The premise of the magecraft that led to the DA transformation is, and can be, goofy, but it's explored in interesting and serious ways and tied pretty well to the singular issue of his story.
A good DA, even one via magecraft, should definitely have that sort of unending/unresolveable path they'll always walk, and his is set up methodically and clearly. Funny FC aside, you do a nice job of exploring the costs, benefits, and needs the transformation entailed, and it's tied into the Cancer myth in a cool way. Plus the lobster facts were just fun to learn about.
The real cost and what's left behind in the pursuit being saved for the end was a good decision, and the intermission at the end was ouchies. ;.; Especially since it was, and only could be, an intermission, which is a good capstone choice for the sheet. Nothing can be more than that, when there's no end to reach.
Amalea Apelhoven
Oh, this was an interesting one... The FC was very well chosen, and it shows that you had this on your mind in various forms for awhile, given the depth of references. She's very single-minded and pure in convictions.
There's a few things I'm not totally sold on which are mostly lore quibbles (the family having technically reached the Root already and repeatably being one of them), but the sincerity behind the obsession is really clearly conveyed and the writing is heartfelt.
One of those times where the character is more concept than person, but intentionally so. I think the decision to render her more ambiguous was a good one, versus something more muddy which might have cheapened her obsession/POV towards being a DA.
She feels unstable for a DA, but that too would go in an interesting place, so she's a fun character narratively.
That being said, my votes… hmm…
3: Draynor Xanier
2: Amelia Apelhoven
1: Knox Dow Royales
honorable mention: Louisette Sans-Merci
Last edited by Sunny; February 21st, 2024 at 03:53 PM.
1Pt Draynor Xanier: You has the knack to write something silly and 'LNy' while remaining an authentic character with interesting character study, Draynor is one of them. The concept of lobster magus is so dumb yet very in line with Dead Apostle mechanic. But I don't enjoy reading the lover part as much, I feel like it doesn't integrated well with the rest of the Sheet.
2Pts Knox Dow Royales: I must say the idea of A Dead Apostle "King Maker" is really-really cool, I really love the image of a crown controlling the host, it makes me think a scenario where the crown become the center of the plot. And I really like that it is a crown, something a ruler will pride themselves in, but it is also function as a cog, something that makes me think of a 'slave'.
3Pts Dr. Amalea Apelhoven: I love the irony of her existence you are going with her here. She become a Dead Apostle entirely because she loves human, she doesn't understand Magi's obsession over the Root despite nearly arrived there, and I love how a Mage like her become twisted because she seek something normal. Her magecraft is also a very interesting interpretation, and I like how natural it shifted from pro-humanity god-based magecraft into the anti-humanity Dead Apostle power.
But I think the part that makes me impressed the most is how easily you can imagine story scenarios from this character. There is a conflict of morality, my mind immediately think "if she is killed, that would be unfair to her children (which I imagine they will die too as they share the same Soul?), they did nothing wrong" or I can just imagine a protagonist sympathize with her as the story goes on; the birthday girl too, geez, you sadistic bastard, she deserve to live...! And that's part is the reason why I rate this highly.
3 Points: Dr. Amelia Apelhoven
The idea of a DA hospital is ingenious and such a strong premise for a character. I could honestly have considered this sheet for the top spot on that basis alone, but the sheet itself is also full of heart and consideration. The core of the Dead Apostle named Amelia is so rooted in humanity and morality that her turn to the inhuman feels not only reasonable but perhaps inevitable. Not only that, Amelia as a character has so much potential for more to be told with her. My only minor quip would be that some of the lore stuff like the Root business might be a little iffy to me, but that’s all small fry to the brilliance of this sheet. Great work all around.
2 Points: Knox Dow Royales
A powerful and evocative sheet that doesn’t feel like it was made with the fastest hand in the west. It’s full of varied detail that shows that you really thought things through regarding the character and her place in the world. And despite the focus on her history and surroundings, a vivid picture of Knox herself resonates through the wording.
My biggest gripe with the sheet, though, is the Black Crown itself. As cool as it is, as a magecraft, it feels a little… loose to me. I struggle to put this into words but, in essence, I think it feels too DA and not enough magus. Normally, magecraft synergizing with DA abilities is a mark of a well put-together set of abilities for a DA Magus, but here it feels like it leans too closely to the DA side while the foundation of the magecraft itself seems neglected. As it is, it just feels like a super DA ability rather than a magecraft that takes advantage of DA abilities. And since prompt is “A Dead Apostle is created or born because of Magecraft.” I feel like that’s a big mark against it.
1 Point: Louisette Sans-Merci
A really interesting idea, tying together the general ideas of Tatari with the Terror of the French Revolution. It feels appropriately haunting and demonic while staying true to its themes. You went really hard on the concept of La Terreur Divine and all the fear that surrounded it, and I think that really shines through in the sheet.
Unfortunately, while I think Marianne was pretty well-established with the little we get of her biography, it’s Louisette Sans-Merci as a Dead Apostle herself that feels a little underbaked. I would’ve liked to get a bit more of how she is now that she’s a DA. Even if she’s just a living event or phenomenon, a bit more on that would’ve really nailed it in, I think. Also, Robespierre just casually being a magus is a little jarring and hard to swallow when sprung up like that.
Special Note:
For a while, I struggled to pick between Knox Dow Royales and Louisette Sans-Merci for my 2 point pick. They were pretty close in my mind for a while. I think Louisette had the cooler, more interesting idea, but Knox was the more developed character. If I could, I would’ve let them tie for it, but eventually I weighed them together and judged I liked Knox a bit more. They were still both really cool sheets though, so a shame I couldn’t give them both the 2 points they deserved.
3pt - Draynor Xanier
Goodness. Zikari has a uncanny affinity for turning seemingly silly concepts into really well thought-out content with heart, and Draynor is no different. The desire for infinite potential for growth is a great motive for DA-hood as well, a breath of fresh air from the likes of immortality. While the mythological Cancer was the core of Draynor's foundation, the biological factor about lobsters' infinite growth is a great addition and gives more weight to his attachment to the animal in his background.
Most importantly, what really charmed me about Draynor is that while he is not a threat to humans due to his synergistic brand of "immortality," he is still fundamentally incompatible with them. Humans cannot sustain a consistent growth or potential by themselves, and as someone physically and personally never settles, the Lobster-Man will naturally leave everyone behind in his never-ending road (obsession). A "gifted" person destined for loneliness, forever running forward and never looking back. Needless to say, well done Zikari.
2pt - Amalea Apelhoven
Oh man, Amalea's motives is sympathetic in its sincerity yet unnerving in her intensity. The principles of a doctor and determination of a magus makes for a dangerous combination, a really nice example of DAs being a monster born of a person's earnest ideal (obsession). How the Apelhoven magecraft evolving into a Dead Apostle metamorphosis through Amalea's genius application was a detail that I appreciate, a "senseless" self-sacrifice morphing into sacrifice of the self for the sake of many.
If there was something I have to wish there were more about, then it would be more outside perspective of Amalea, for someone whose intentions are wholly benevolent, it would be fascinating to hear a persepctive of one of her "children." And the depths of her convictions makes me wanting to see more examples of her breach of ethics for human betterment -- with how her Principle swaps the function of Body and Soul, I kinda wish to see more applications of it besides her siring more undead.
It was really a toss-up between Dr. Allmind and Mr. Cancer, so take comfort knowing that deciding who gets the 3-points took way longer than I like to admit, ahaha.
1pt - Louisette Sans-Merci
A DA/Vampire embodying the mania of revolution is already a great foundation, an automatic function that incites and demands endless upheaval leaves a striking impression. A monster preying on humans desire for change and justice, a perversion of the ideals of revolution. Rather than a person whose ideals (obsession) warped them into a monster, Louisette can be considered a monster spawned from that person's ideals -- and in that distinction from the rest of the submissions, she stand out nicely.
At the same time, however, I feel that the idea and abilities of something embodying "Violent Insurrection" solely revolving around the trappings of the Reign of Terror is kind of limiting. While the idea of Divine Terror is of French origins, its use of humanity's self-destructive drive and desire for change is universal. Personally, seeing how the conditions worm itself to the factors of other revolutions as examples would have elevated the sheet further -- with the Libyan Civil War mentioned at the starting snippet, it feels even more like missed potential.
Including how coincidental the Thermidorian magecraft was linked to her, Madame Guillotine cannot go higher than 1-point for me.
Honorable Mention: Knox Dow Royales
The nature of the Black Crown and its corruption to a Dead Apostle artifact is a highlight -- something originally intended to reach [ ] through soverignty, but the selfish nature of the undead has subverted into a mere mantle to carry out their whims. The personal -- if not petty -- vendetta Knox has for the Bartomeloi embodying the devotion of her anger was also a neat interpretation/exploration of "Devotion" as well.
As Sunny mentioned, how the profiles feels more like a faction sheet than wholly focusing on her character. Not a negative point per say, but it does end up feeling more divorced from a 100% personal focus.
In the end, what kept Knox from attaining 1-point place was purely on preference of concept.
The Act of dozing off in the afternoon is a luxury indeed.
Coffee would be nice, though.
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1Pt Louisette:
I have a soft spot on Dead Apostles that born from admiration toward humans, I always find the idea is deliciously ironic considering their nature as anti-humanity. I wish you expand more on the whole designating the revolution itself as 'God' thing, which I find the most interesting part of her.
2Pt Draynor:
If people tell me they make a Dead Apostle Lobster, I will laugh in its silliness. If Zikari tell me he make a Dead Apostle Lobster, I will laugh in it silliness and the sheer absurdity that I somehow can take it seriously. Simping aside, I always sees Magus as the seeker of the infinite, and the fact what he seek is infinite growth fits that impression. I think he is the one that felt the most Magus among the entry, which I can very appreciate.
3Pts Knox:
Out of the three, I think Knox felt the most focused on being a DA and that too is something I appreciate a lot. I agree that Knox the Sheet felt more about a faction Sheet than herself, but I also think that enhance the experience of reading her. She is less a person but more about the concept of devotion, be it fanaticism or pure spite out of Barthemeloi, and that's concept transcend life and death in the form of the Crown. Just like the Sheet pointed out, it's in line with Idea Blood, and I really vibe with that.
Event Contestation Band = 4 possibilities
- Dr. Amalea Apelhoven by
Spartacus= 10 QP- Draynor Xanier by
Zikari= 11 QP- Louisette Sans-Merci by
MuramasaMachII= 6 QP- Knox Dow Royales by
GilgameshKingOfMemes= 9 QP
REPRESENTATIVE OF MYSTERY HAS BEEN DESIGNATED:
Draynor Xanier : The Cancer
THE DREAM MUST CONTINUE
Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
Congratulation for the well deserved win, Zikari!
Congrats on the winning the DA prompt, Zikari! Lobster supremacy prevails.
The Act of dozing off in the afternoon is a luxury indeed.
Coffee would be nice, though.
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Congrats Zikari! Absolutely a well-earned win!