Good to see the man who paved the way for Isabel here. I can't give proper feedback right now, but I'll say for the moment that Pioneer of the Stars is always EX rank and that Lobera shouldn't be ranked higher than Excalibur.
Good to see the man who paved the way for Isabel here. I can't give proper feedback right now, but I'll say for the moment that Pioneer of the Stars is always EX rank and that Lobera shouldn't be ranked higher than Excalibur.
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"He who makes a beast of himself gets rid of the pain of being a man."- Samuel Johnson
Advent Beast- An Evil Of Mankind Approaches
Beast III/L:
Appearance:
Source is here
True form
Soundtrack: Gluttony Fang from Blazblue OST
True Name: Kali
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Alternate Classes: Rider (with his donkey-pulled chariot as Noble Phantasm), Berserker, Caster
Armament:
"Koka & Vikoka"; a pair of jagged obsidian swords named after the twin demons that served as Beast's most powerful generals.
The swords' hilts are connected by a long chain, which Beast can use to tangle enemies or extend the reach of his strikes in a nunchaku-like fashion.
Strength- A++
Agility- B+
Endurance- A+++
Mana- A
Luck- E-
NP- EX
History/Identity
Personality
Class Skills:
Authority Of The Beast- BAn Anti-Humanity Skill that raises effectiveness of the user's attacks against existences conceptualized as "human".
Independent Manifestation- A
An ability which utterly crushes the conventions of the Grail War ritual, allowing Beast to summon and sustain himself in existence regardless of a contract or supply of Mana. Being that the skillholder is signified as a confirmed existence, the bearer gains a resistance towards instant-death attacks and attacks affected by time manipulation. Beast is born from the sinful desires lurking in the hearts of every human. As long as evil exists, he can never be permanently killed. Conversely, destroying him would mean eradicating the concept of evil itself from humanity.
Personal Skills:
Nega-Dharma- A+
As a being created to oppose Dharma, Beast gains a massive damage bonus when attacking Lawful and/or Good-aligned foes. Damage from their attacks against him is also reduced.
Natural Monster- EX
A Skill endowed to those who were given birth as a monster rather than to a hero or god that has fallen down to the level of a Magical Beast. Makes possible to attain ranks of Strength and Endurance that are absolutely impossible for a human body. As a demon born fully formed from drops of the primordial venom Kālakūṭa that fell to earth, Beast is endowed with a matchless rank in this Skill.
Incorporeal Form- A-
The ability to become intangible at will. While intangible, Beast's body appears as a shimmering after-image and attacks will pass harmlessly through him as if he weren't there. Attacks with a holy or demon-slaying attribute are capable of bypassing this and damaging Beast while he's still intangible.
This ability also has a natural weakness that Beast himself is unable to attack while immaterial, forcing him to return to corporeal form before striking. He can only remain intangible for ten turns at a time, and afterwards must face a five turn cooldown time before being able to use it again.
Possession- A
Beast can possess people by entering their bodies while intangible. The possessed individual remains conscious and aware but Beast is able to manipulate their actions completely like a puppet. For every ten turns they remain possessed, the target undergoes a harsh mental resistance check as they try to fight back against Beast's control. If it succeeds, they will expel Beast by vomiting him out in the form of black mud that quickly reconstitutes into his original body. It should also be noted that when Beast possesses a Servant, he will gain access to their parameters and Class Skills, but not Personal Skills or Noble Phantasms.
Monstrous Strength- A+
An ability inherent to monsters and beasts; allowing to temporarily raise one's Strength parameter for a duration based on the ranking of this Skill. At this rank, Beast can grant himself a boost in Strength lasting for the entirety of battle. Using this Skill causes Beast to regain his original appearance as a monstrous black demon.
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So, after Padoru and Shiki's discussion on the concept I decided to write up a Beast- Kali Servant. I was inspired for a few parts by Daneel's excellent Beast- Chiyou (especially the mechanics of his second NP), but I hope it still managed to come together in an original way. As always, feel free to drop by with comments and critiques. Thanks!
Last edited by RoydGolden; August 6th, 2019 at 12:48 AM. Reason: Added theme song
Kiara is R/"Rapture", right? What do we know of L so far? I only made Kali Beast III because Shiki-pon suggested it might be a fitting idea. If it doesn't work I can always switch him to Beast V instead (actually my original idea).
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Also, by the way Asterism, I got the idea of Kali Yuga as a pseudo-Spirit Bomb from your (at least I think it was yours, I'd have to check back to be sure) old Berserker Nobunaga sheet. Thanks for the inspiration there.
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https://www.reddit.com/r/FGOGuide/co...rom_fategrand/Originally Posted by Kiara
I just looked it up, and apparently III/L "gives their love to all" while Kiara/R "takes love from all". I think arguably you could say my Kali wants to give his love to everyone by making them "beings like him" (while still separate, as unlike Kiara he doesn't want to sublimate everyone into himself), allowing them to indulge in all the pleasures he does, but I admit that's a bit of a stretch.
Aside from the numbering issue, any thoughts on the sheet itself?
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Ninja'ed. Thanks anyways, Asterism!
Pelagius: I missed this guy at first so I'll come back to comment on him now. I agree with Padoru's points, but would also add that Driving as a unique Skill is incredibly unnecessary given the ability to drive vehicles is already encompassed under Riding (which, as a Saber, he should have). Weaponsmaster is also a bit of an odd Skill. As far as I can see, it's basically a combo of Eye Of The Mind (True) and Eternal Arms Mastery. Not necessarily a bad idea, but it wouldn't hurt to include some lore justification as to why Pelagius has it, since it seems a little wanked. Expugnation could probably be renamed Baptism Sacrament, a canon Skill that has pretty much the same effects.
A personality section would also be nice to flesh him out a bit more, but I understand you were in a hurry to get the sheet out Gryffynn.
Ninja´ed ? ma iy one Question Royd if Kali possess someone has it after he leave the Body some echo effects like personality Change etc?if yes which one?
About III/L and /R i think yours is quit Fitting and that your III/L is a male is a good dualism with the female beast III/R , if you dare imagine them Encounter each other. on the other side could be Kali also be the Beat Gilgamesh mentioned that answers Tiamats appearing by evoke itself.
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Well, since I was the one who suggested the possibility of a Beast Kali, some feedback is in order.
Though the sheet is overall good, I somehow don't really get the final boss feeling he should have as a Beast and an actual final boss in mythology. Perhaps it's because of the Noble Phantasms. None of them strikes me as the insanely powerful attack a Beast would have. Ars Almadel Salomonis is millions of times stronger than Excalibur, while Kali Yuga is only described as "able to easily clash with it". In my opinion, I'd remove Alakshimi and include its effects in Nega-Dharma, or making it a separate skill, as well as making Possession be a usage of Incoroporeal Form.
As for Don Pelayo, I was going to same basically the same as Royd. Driving looks meaningless, and I don't get the reason why he has Weaponmaster.
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Thanks for the feedback Padoru. I see what you mean about power-levels. While I was writing Kali, I realized he was shaping up to be closer to an "ordinary" top-tier Servant like Gil or Ramesses than the nigh-unbeatable threat a Beast is supposed to be. I might rewrite Nega-Dharma to make it more haxed (I had an idea that was like Estarossa's "Love" Commandment from Seven Deadly Sins) and fold the damage boost into Authority Of The Beast instead.
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I considered making Kali's possession impart some aftereffects on the target, but I decided to go with just physical possession instead of mental corruption. So no.
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Now im finished with my Hel profile, please give me your Feedback everyone.
Last edited by Kabalisto Koga; October 25th, 2018 at 12:29 PM.
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Okay, since I said I'd do it. It's better than your first sheets, but still with lots of problems:
- Necromancy doesn't need to be a skill at all, listing it as something she can do is fine. Also, banshees are Irish, not Nordic.
- Abnormal Physique grants immortality, yay. At least say for how long she can last without her core.
- Summoning wank gives wank. The Grail War and all that stuff don't matter when you're better than the Grail itself in all senses.
- Garmr could perfectly be just a summoning from her second NP rather than an independent NP. Also, three heads and become Regend-kun but better for not reason at all.
- Second NP: blah blah summon blah blah creatures from other cultures for not reason blah blah fuck everything this Reality Marble doesn't need sustainance or whatever
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First thank you ,king of padoru for the Feedback im glad i get atleast one or two.
i have something changed in the skills,but i thought really that because Necromancy is her main-magecraft would it deserve it to be a skill.the summoning of other servants is i must Mention for Hel more disadvantagious as it seems because she must endure the doubel mana drain as a ordinary Master because their intern Manastore is roughly the halv of their normal storage and she act like their phylactery.
About Garmr i wanted it to be a Noblephantasm on ist own because ist also on as Rider but i give your Statement a second thought.what do you mean with Regend-kun ?
About the creatures of the other cultures i thought that as their are appearances/embodments of the death they are like lesser beings as a Deathgoddess which governs About the death and thus also it lies in her Authority Domain i hope you can understand my thought proces here.and sorry but what do you mean with sustainance again ?
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Servant Rider:
Appearance:
Source is here (Calais on the left, Zetes on the right)
True Name: Calais and Zetes "The Boreads"
Alignment: Neutral Good
Armament: A pair of jagged bronze swords resembling icicles
Strength- C
Agility- A
Endurance- D
Mana- B
Luck- C
NP- B
Personality
Class Skills:
Riding- A
The ability to ride animals. Rider lacks anything that could ordinarily be called a mount, but their first Noble Phantasm allows them to "ride the wind"; in other words, fly. Thus Rider possesses a high rank in this Skill anyways.
Magic Resistance- B
Confers protection against magical effects. Spells with a chant below three verses are cancelled. Even Magecraft at the level of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals has difficulty affecting the Servant.
Personal Skills:
Divinity- B
Qualifies one's aptitude as a Divine Spirit. Fathered by Boreas, the god of the cold northern wind and bringer of winter, both sides of Rider naturally boast a high level of divinity.
Mana Burst (Frost)- A
A variation of Mana Burst inherited from Rider's divine lineage, allowing them to channel the soul-searing cold of the north wind into their strikes. Weapons imbued with this ability glow with an icy blue aura, and leave trails of shimmering ice crystals when swung through the air. Enemy armaments below the level of a divine mystery will be flash-frozen from merely clashing with Rider's attacks, making it easy for the pair to shatter them with a follow-up strike. Attacks that draw blood will freeze some of the blood in the opponent's veins, slowing them down and weakening them.
Combination- B
A Skill that displays how much one's combat power increases when on a united front with a specific person. Both sides of Rider gain + modifiers to their parameters while fighting together, and can convey thoughts and strategies by simply glancing at each other from across the battlefield. However, if one of the pair is slain, the other will be doomed to die as well, fading away from the world only a few turns later.
Known together as the, Calais and Zetes' deep bond allows for them to be summoned as a single Servant.Boreadswind brothers
Noble Phantasms
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Say hello to my third ever dual Servant, everyone! I'd been meaning to write up these guys for a while, but I never had the inspiration for their NPs until now. As always, comments and critiques are welcome. Thanks!
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a quite good Twin Rider i think i know now what everyone has m entioned about the lack of interaction between the brother in my Sahadeva/Nakula sheet/proflile,One Question why is Herakless their enemy ?
and please say me Royd how do you find my recent Caster Hel ?
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Herc is their enemy because he killed them in the myths after they persuaded the crew of the Argo to leave him behind on an expedition. (It would have been clear if I'd included a lore section, sorry)
Your Hel sheet is okay, but suffers from you cramming way too much stuff into it. Hel should either have Rune Magic, Necromancy or High-Speed Divine Words, not all of the above. Keep in mind before GO there was basically no precedent for a Servant having more than one dedicated Magecraft Skill. Being able to summon other Servants, when (correct me if I'm wrong) Hel showed no ability even close to that in her myths also seems rather absurd to me.
The Reality Marble NP is actually fine by me (though I don't know why you didn't just call it Helheim instead of using random German). It's overpowered, sure, but I can forgive it since it's basically her ultimate trump card. Garmr doesn't really need to be EX-rank given its abilities (just A+ would be enough). I also don't know why you depicted it with three heads, since I can't find any source for that in the (very sparse) legends about it.
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That seems almost like the opposite of summoning; offering to release them from her instead of calling them to her. I guess you could still argue she can summon dead heroes by releasing them from the land of the dead, but since Heroic Spirits are on the Throne and not in Hel's afterlife, it still doesn't make much sense IMO. By the way, any thoughts on my Calais and Zetes Servant?
Sanctus Albanus
Nicknames: Saint Alban
Source: Early Christian History
Origin: Roman Britain
Alignment: Lawful Good
Class: Ruler
Strength: C
Endurance: D
Agility: C
Mana: C-A
Luck: B
Likes: God, Amphibalus, Britain
Dislikes: Pagan Gods
Talents: Martyrdom
Natural Enemy: Pagans
Class Skills-
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Personal Skills-
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Noble Phantasms-
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Weaknesses-
Albanus is very weak offensively, in fact he can even be considered rather useless when initially summoned. But as the attacks on him grow and his forgiveness increases his power will expand exponentially.
Personality-
Albanus is a man of peace and forgiveness. He is serene in his actions and almost never ceases to smile and laugh. A golden man of piety and faith he will pray constantly and try and covert his master if they are not already Christian. His conversion attempts will not be forceful, and Albanus will also not become angered if his master does not convert.Albanus will also be incredibly kind and generous to other servants, no matter their actions, their words, or even their backgrounds, for Albanus forgives all. Albanus will also never attack first and will only act in self defense as a good Christian must. This, of course, makes him a terrible offensive servant.
Desire: Albanus has no desire.
Relationships-
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Post Scriptum
All of the Latin in this sheet is as perfect as a man who has taken two years of Latin can make it. If you want a translation for something just ask away, I don't have a life anyways.
He who is the Spræcwalda, his words hymns and his thoughts archaic.
ᛖᛏᚩᚾ ᛒᚣᛏᛏ ᚨᚾᛞ ᚳᚩᛏᛏ, ჭამა კონდახით და საშოდან, Bwyta cig a chath
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