Holy crap, someone actually took the "First Pretender" crown, and you've written a pretty good one at that. Congrats, man.
Holy crap, someone actually took the "First Pretender" crown, and you've written a pretty good one at that. Congrats, man.
Ruler of SalvationProfile True Name Siddhartha Gautama Sex Male Origin India Height/Weight 156 cm/56 kg Armament Khakkhara Alignment Lawful Good Attribute Heaven Likes Helping Others Dislikes Despair Natural Enemy Souls Filled With Darkness Parameters STR B MAG E END C LUK A AGL B NP EX
Class Skills Magic Resistance: A Throughout his many lives, Siddhartha has gathered a deep understanding of the Mysteries of the World. Because of this, he is able to negate all but the strongest or most esoteric of Thaumaturgy. True Name Discernment: A Due to Siddhartha’s nature, he is able to see into the Souls of others. Because of this, he is able to discern the identity of any Servant. Yet if the Servant possesses a soul that has never been present in Samsāra, he is unable to perceive their identity.
Personal Skills Divinity: E (A) “I am divine. I am Honored. But above all, I am someone who just wants to help!”
Normally, Siddhartha would possess the greatest form of Divinity. However, due to being summoned in a form prior to his Enlightenment, this Skill has been heavily downgraded. Seven Steps From Enlightenment: A+ “This is my final rebirth. At the end of this life, I shall achieve Enlightenment, and I will help Deva and Human alike!”
Through countless reincarnations, Siddhartha has gained unparalleled knowledge. With this wisdom, he is but a few steps from reaching Enlightenment. Thanks to this, he can use many skills with great proficiency. Light of Salvation: A “Nothing good comes out of despair. Despairing won’t change anything, and it won’t make me feel fulfilled. If I want to save everyone, I have to take action myself.”
Siddhartha was beloved by most all he met. His sheer joy, cheer, and desire to help others was so strong, it allowed him to touch the hearts of all and made them want to be better. But those who have no desire to better themselves, or possess no light in their soul, are unable to find Salvation.
Noble Phantasm Anuttarā Samyaksaṃbodhi
Revelation Beneath the Bodhi Tree Rank: EX Type: Anti-Unit Throughout Heaven and Earth,I Alone am the Honored One.
Above the Heavens, Below the Earth,
I Alone am the Holy One.
Abandoning Worldly Desires,
Sacrificing the Six Emotions.
Pursuing the Ten Pāramitā,
Traveling the Path of Dharma.
I Walk the Path to Enlightenment for the Sake of All,
And So I Vow, I Shall Guide Humanity to Salvation!
Despite being summoned in a state before his Enlightenment, Siddhartha is destined to become the Buddha. Because this is fated to happen, with this Aria, he is able to briefly touch upon the Enlightenment he will achieve, and share it with his opponent.
Unless they are a Bodhisattva themself, they will inevitably be unable to handle the knowledge of a Buddha. The limitless information of the universe will render them unable to act due to their perception of existence exceeding their body’s ability to act, making it seem like a single second drags on for centuries.
While Siddhartha can only maintain this state for a few seconds, those scant seconds are all that is needed to bring an end to things.
Biography When Siddhartha was born, it was predicted that he was destined to become the greatest among all humanity and would one day come to rule the world. In order to assure that this would come to pass, King Śuddhodana confined him to the palace, and made sure he did not want for anything. He was given the best clothing, the best food, the best education, and even the best wife possible, the princess Yasodharā. It was not until the age of 29 that he was finally able to leave his palace and see the city of Kapilavastu.
It was during this trip that he saw the suffering of the people; something he had never known before. It was at this moment that a flame was lit in his heart. He vowed that he would do all he could to help others, so that they would not have to feel despair. With his power, he made sure the hungry were fed, that the sick were treated, and that the feeble were cared for.
However, despite it all, it was not enough. While he may be alleviating the despair of the people of Kapilavastu, he knew there were more people outside the city that must be suffering. And so, he left, giving up his status, his belongings, and even his family, in the pursuit of helping others.
He traveled all across India, helping all he could, wherever it was needed, while also learning the teachings of Asceticism. But he believed the extremes taught by Asceticism were not the proper way, nor were the teachings of the Noble Eightfold Path, and so he forged his own path: the Dharma.
His path decided, he found a suitable place: a nice, shady spot beneath a fig tree, beside a river, and he meditated there for 49 days, until he Awakened, and achieved Enlightenment. Renamed as the Buddha, he began his journey anew, to spread his teachings so that he could show humanity the path to Salvation.
Athena (Summer): HOW COME A SUMMER JOKE-ISH SERVANT IS SO GOOD? THAT AIN'T FAIR, CHIEF. But really, I'm beyond amazed by this entry, because it was so, so interesting (and in a good way too, I mean as the highest of compliments). It was really fun the way you managed to incorporate her legend in this context and I'm so sure she's gonna join Minamoto's Public Decency Comitee and perhaps even take it over... Scary. (Also, the Lancer jokes? ON POINT. I almost want to thoughtlessly give my 3 points to this one just out of sheer amusement. You're not helping me here, Del.)
Gloriana: Ok listen, I love the Fairy Knight trend so this was already bound to snatch my wig. But then on top of that you craft a convincing case for this Servant in specific? And made me fall in love? WELL DAMN. A Servant who "compels others to look up to them" is such an interesting twist on the month's prompt that I'm inclined to admire the sheet even more out of creativity. Surely not everyone would think of this angle, and kudos for you for that. But the Servant itself also deserves a lot of praise. I particularly liked very much the Skill that denounced the transformation from human to fairy... There was something so horrifying but at the same time, so awe-inspiring in that. Overall, an amazing entry.
Mentor: Of course OF COURSE you'd come here and drop a friggin' bomb. I'm not even surprised at this point, I just accept it. The fact you took the dude who kinda named this prompt is predictable (I was sure someone would make him eventually because he truly was the easiest option), but what you did to him? NOT AT ALL. I WASN'T EXPECTING THAT. (Which proves again my saying that it's never the Servant's fault when something goes wrong, it's the creator's.) And that was the magic of your sheet. It had so much style and so much creativity behind it! (I'm loving the way you're going full FGO too, I could see this unit working in a gameplay way and I'm regrettably announcing I'd pull for her. So much. Goodbye, my quartzes.) Also, Wisdom of Divine Gift? That's a walking cheat if I ever saw one. I know I want to be on her team.
Sun Zi: HOLY CRAP. I wish I could talk about everything I loved about this sheet, but then I'd just copy/paste the whole thing. The Servant was already out of the left field (for me at least), so that was so good I love to be taken aback. It also started so amusing and so "predictable", in a lack of a better word... I was like, "yeah I like this Servant" already, sure... But then, that plottwist? My wig is snatched. My breath is taken. My life is yours. I don't even know what to say other than "well damn, take your crown and run with it, my liege". Amazing entry, amazing idea and flawless execution, I hope you're proud of yourself.
Siddhartha Gautama: Oh man oh man, I love this so much. (I also love it when creators star to play around with the forum's code, it births so many unique sheet styles. This one is a cool example that I've not seen a lot.) I have a lot of feelings for this Servant and the many ways he was already done in the past, but this one? This Servant is a cool take on him. It kept his essence while also adding that "Eni spice", as I'd call it. Also, that NP... Of the many things you could've used, I liked what you did there. It's so terrifying in its concept that it became cool. I WISH I COULD HAD THAT IDEA BEFORE *SHAKES FIST*
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w h i t e f r e n z y ' s
s e r v a n t s . | . m a s t e r s. | . p r e v i e w s
what a way to start my day. Seeing the queen blessed us with 4 posts back to back and then seeing that someone here did something I do not like. My ire becomes clearer later when I post my entry later.
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.
Sounds like you got sniped. Jeez. How terrible. Wonder what that must be like. Poor you. /s
OH QUIET YOU DROPPED A NOVEL. Honestly, doing it this way is how I STARTED making Fanservants-- designing them for game use. So it felt kind of natural to continue to do it that way, I think it makes them just a bit more interesting and it's fun to come up with coherent kits as it is to actually write the stuff. Call it my niche. She ended up as a support servant with an ST NP, which is interesting. Bring her to help you beat Archer bosses, I guess.
When I read about Mentor and realised he was literally just... a sockpuppet for Athena with no actual notable traits of his own besides being a loser, I realised that it wrote itself. I THOUGHT about going Pretender/Faker, but ultimately decided that if Artemis/"Orion" wasn't one, then neither should Mentor/"Athena" be.
And... like I WASN'T going to give her the skill that's literally the thing she does. I don't give a shit if Chiron had it first, it's HER skill. What else would you expect a teacher goddess of wisdom to have?
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"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.
Whens the deadline again?
22/8
noon utc iirc
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.
Ignaz Semmelweis
― The Mad Doctor / The Savior of Mothers ―
Class: Berserker
Alternate Classes: Avenger, Caster, Lancer
Natural Enemy: Robert Liston
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Servant, Male, Humanoid, Earth
STRENGTH: E
ENDURANCE: E
AGILITY: E
MANA: E
LUCK: E
NOBLE PHANTASM: C
Bond 1
Bond 2
Bond 3
Bond 4
Bond 5
Bond 6
Bond 7
Creator Notes:
I said I was going for something wacky for the next contest entry. This turned out less wacky than I thought, but oh well! The idea is that he tried to teach surgeons not to be so absolutely fucking vile (and failed). If you read accounts of Robert Liston, then you'll realize just how bad things were back then. He's the dude with the 300% mortality rate in one operation, fwiw.
The Adventure of the Velvet Room (Sherlock Holmes/Persona) (SB, FFN, AO3)
Blog with all of my Servants so far.
Robert Liston was pretty badass but looking back at his old cases (some of which may've been exaggerated though) does show how undeveloped the surgical field at his time was. Overall this is an interesting take on a "medical Berserker" to contrast Nightingale. That Pioneer Of The Stars variant fits him well and I'll keep that concept in mind for certain other figures (like Frederick Burnham; the man who nearly brought hippo farming to America).
Endure, preserve. Within the bitter fruit of submission and humiliation is the seeds of vengeance.
Observe, learn. Ahead the squirm of a worthless maggot lies a hidden passage towards rebirth.
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had other submission in mind but realize that one's not gonna make it, so here's a slightly polished version of one already posted in og thread, since she fits the prompt either way
Looks like I came back to an ocean of absolute zingers for this month's contest. I do not envy those who'll have to pick the wheat from the other wheat, which is to say I envy myself least of all.
Noob here. Sorry about that.
Semmelweis is a pretty fun one, metacommentary almost to the current situation. And the pioneer skill is almost sad, a curse even, granting a bit of hope and then screwing you still.
Yuenu: Ackshually...
technically not allowed because you already posted it, but it was just few days ago. I doubt Bn or asterism will give you trouble for that one...right?
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.
No complaints here.
Southern Storm
Class: Caster
True Name: Aristotle
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Attribute: Star
Height: 172cm
Weight: 72kg
Source: Historical Records
Region: Greece
Parameters
STR: E
END: D
AGL: D
MANA: A+
LCK: A
NP:
There is correspondence within all matter.
Our physical bodies are lesser internal universes, and they correspond to the greater external universe.
Mirrors are the first tools humanity invented to peer into alternate dimensions.
The image within the mirror is a falsehood, but one can consider that they correspond to your true self.
That is why humanity across the world has used mirrors since ancient times to symbolize deities of various properties.
The act of rewriting a true name, of scribbling spells into the mirror of someone's true self, is called a curse.
A meagre nickname cannot change anything, but a fully fledged curse could even kill.
The shadows projected by the mirror may correlate with the true self, but they are not that nature.
In other words, by intervening with shadows, one can rewrite a true name.
That's what a curse truly is.
And one may find, there is correspondence between the words of philosophers and the reality of the cosmos.
Despair often finds those who understand such a truth.
Others may go mad in the knowing of such a reality.
Eventually, they all reach the same conclusion.
Damnation, the ending of the Age of Gods, the cursing of humanity by the very planet they live on.
Ending everything with a final distress call.
Mother Earth's final hope made to come to wipe out all live.
Class Skills
In the distant future, the Machine Gods of Atlantis, and the Great Spider will not be the only seeds cast to this planet.
Gaia shall accept these foreign lifeforms on their pilgrimage.
The fate of a planet that will come to be devoid of life.
O innocents, turn back.
For this is the terrible truth of the overcount.
Gathering, gathering, just like the rain, just like ashes.
Spilling, spilling, just like the snow, just like blood.
But it will only be a matter of time.
On a morning ███████████, the Earth will die and scream for death.
A world of steel, a sky of grain.
Once the Six are eliminated, a Pilgrimage will be welcomed.
Guided by the Great Cross, watched over by the Eye of God,
The Great Tree will burn again.
Resound, resound, just like, just likefurythunder.grieffire
The Six Magicians will demonstrate. Make way for the Slashing King.
Before the Red Sky draws near.
Before the Black Giant devours everything in its path.
█-███ tend to laze about,
And they are locked in the cage of Hell.
The future does not shine bright.
For the skies have become blood.
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm
Forgive us, forgive us,
For our Sin, forgive us.
The █████s who sought bliss,
The █-███s who sought strength,
Their world will surely be crushed like the 100 Species of Insects.
A world tainted by True Theories,
Piling up countless deaths as all hope vanishes.
But, keep this in mind until the day you die;
All roads lead to the same burning end.
The Curse beguiles the Stars, and the Stars beckon the Flames.
All works of man, all of history--
Everything will fall to ruin.
Black Aristoteles, Black Aristoteles.
It's a fearsome creature, Black Aristoteles.
The Eye of the Giant, the Southern Storm.
Black Aristoteles, Black Aristoteles.
O' Adam of Eden, O' Ado Edem.
O' King of Blades, O' Slash Emperor.
Black Aristoteles, Black Aristoteles.
For our Sin, forgive us.
Personality
Relationships
Author's Notes
ya pussy is too important right now
i'll give this one a miss
adios
Top Level Creator Notes
II
The Master of Chaldea sleeps, yet not.
"What is this place? Am I back inside the Lostbelt? No it feels different…"
"Hello there, ol' chap. Finally, took a while to get through to you." said the somewhat Regal Figure behind you.
"Who are you? Wait, the way you look, this place. Are you--?
"Oh I know who I am, do not worry about that! I get to the point, not much time on my hand. Hehe did not say that for who knows how long.
I lost contact with him. Both of them in a certain sense. And you say my realm is weird, when your Chaldea does the same and then some! I want to know what is happening on your end. Where is my companion?"
"Huh? He should still be here. One probably in his treating room and one behind the cafeteria running his little bar. But now that you mention it…"
"So you do not know? That is a disappointment. I can not do anything from here, he was my anchor to your world. It took me a long while to use the little that was left to contact you. He vanished from this realm as if he was washed away by a fierce ocean current. What I want to say is, Freud has now--"
"Hey Master, what is with the face? Something on your mind?"
...
The door closes behind this strange man that just appeared.
"So…we were talking about Shinjuku?"
"Yes, Master. The scale of it is like Shinjuku, but it is not like a real Singularity either. From what information we can gather, it seems to be similar to both Shinjuku and the Ooku Labyrinth. It is a seperate pocket of time-space, possibly corrupting the area around it, yet not far enough to be a Lostbelt. The peculiar thing is that the corruption seems to stretch across all time in subtle ways we have yet confirm. First look suggests it was always there, yet manifests only now in recent times and moved forward to this day."
"So you are telling us it is a Singularity, yet not, that has no clear starting point, manifested in the near past, but persists right now today, yet is not a Lostbelt either?"
"No, not entirely. imagine it like a temporal anomaly. As if a bubble in time that was formed in Germany's early 1910's rose up and is now on our surface level. But the bubble has yet to break the surface tension. This Singularity is there, yet not physically due to space-time curvature. It is on our surface, but our texture is still above it. All it means is that we can reach it quite easily with a short dive inside the Imaginary Numbers."
Chaldea prepared and dived inside this small scale Singularity. There they were immediately greeted by someone familiar, who changed completely.
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"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.
I had a feeling I was the one who "sniped" you...
Damn, really enjoying the amount of research you've put into this one and Jung. The whole thing with Abzu is such a random but genius idea fitting for the Nasuverse. Even my vague Pretender candidate doesn't have that level of big brain wordplay.
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
Indulge with me in the accomplishments of our abode.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Chamberlain of Create-a-Servant 4.