Create-a-Servant

**You** · November 13th, 2014, 01:43 PM

Originally Posted by BehemothV2

So, Western dragons would be a Phantasmal Species, Eastern Dragons would be Divine Spirits... and Slavic Dragons, demons?

It's a lot more complicated than that.

**castor212** · November 14th, 2014, 03:53 AM

Originally Posted by Funderfullness

Personality-wise I'd say she wouldn't harm innocents, so she'd be restricted to prana from herself, her Master and the leylines.

I just came up with a good mechanical restriction, and that's taking a leaf out of Golem Keter Malkuth and the Hanging Gardens by requiring specific materials as well as an exorbitant prana cost. In this case, it'd be water from the river where she found the egg. I'm on mobile now but I'm gonna edit that in when I get home.

Nice.

**Vagrant** · November 14th, 2014, 03:59 AM

Originally Posted by Funderfullness

Well if they can manage to get 800 year old parchment and jewels or rocks from Baghdad it shouldn't be any harder. Dragons are expensive, man. The only thing that's impossible is China giving you a travel visa within 2 weeks.

Go to Hong Kong, get one the next day. Money makes things easier

**sutaa** · November 14th, 2014, 12:10 PM

Another fairytale Servant! From the same set as the Little Mermaid, which is also pretty much the Shota Grail War. This one's pretty trippy.

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"It's fine... isn't it? Because Big Sis is here for me, I don't have to be scared of the dark or pain or scary things or even the Big Bad Witch! Because Big Sis is here for me, right?"

Name: Hansel 'and Gretel', The Lost Child(ren)
Class: Assassin
Alignment: Chaotic Evil

STR: E
AGI: B
CON: D
MGI: A
LCK: A
NP: E

Class Skills:

Presence Concealment
The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant.

B+: Rather than becoming impossible to see or remaining undetected, this represents Assassin's ability to completely conceal his nature as a Servant, appearing no different from a normal boy, allowing him to 'hide in plain sight' with ease. When combined with his other skills, Assassin is able to avoid suspicion up to the point where preparations to attack are made.

Personal Skills:

Mental Pollution
Makes it highly possible to shut out any mental interference Thaumaturgy, due to possessing a distorted mentality. However, at the same time it becomes impossible to come to an understanding with individuals that do not possess an equivalent rank of mental pollution.

EX: The Servant has become completely divorced from conventional human logic, and is entirely dependent on the effects of his Noble Phantasm to achieve some semblance of sanity. Reasoning is only possible through clever exploitation of said Noble Phantasm, and mental interference is entirely futile. Assassin's thought processes have reached the point where they are only strenuously 'human'.

Murderer of the Misty Night
A skill associated with the Servant's nature as a serial killer rather than as an Assassin, which permits preemptive strike against all opponents. However, if certain conditions are not met, the enemy will be allowed a Luck check.

B: Due to Hansel's nature as a 'Witchkiller', a guaranteed attack may be made against enemies who possess a strong association with magic, or a Mana parameter of C or above.

Self-Modification
The aptitude to merge one's own flesh with body parts of others. The higher the ranking in this skill, the further away one is from being a proper hero.

B: Perhaps due to crossing the limit of what should be considered 'human', Assassin is capable of modifying his own form through devouring corpses, allowing him to change his own physical appearance (though he will always retain a form of a young Germanic child), incorporate things that would not normally be considered 'parts' of the body such as Magic Crests and Command Spells into his own, and gain the abilities of his enemy. In this regard he has already consumed a mighty witch, along with several minor magi, and is thus treated as though he possesses a B rank in Magecraft, Rune Magic, Mystic Eyes (Whisper) and High-Speed Incantation.

Noble Phantasms:

Name:

Gretel

My Beloved Elder Sister

Rank: E
Type: Anti-Unit

An aspect of Assassin's very being rather than a true Noble Phantasm, this is the 'Gretel' of 'Hansel and Gretel' - an alternate personality created within Hansel's mind. While the word alternate is used, she is probably comparable to the voice of a normal person's conscience, as the two personalities are constantly in contact with other and find nothing unusual about their predicament. She has received what remains of Hansel's reason, and thus is crucial to keeping the otherwise uncontrollable Assassin in line, a task she performs with a surprisingly high level of skill, able to construct elaborate plans and weigh the pros and cons of a single decision in a moment's notice. Despite this, she has no concern for anything other than Hansel's well-being, and will do nothing to deter him from his usual antics if not required. When one adds this to her personality flaws, such as her overwhelming dislike for anyone other than Hansel and her refusal to be parted from him, it becomes clear that Gretel makes a poor ally.

While a different 'personality' is usually considered a distinct soul and given its own form by the Holy Grail, this refusal means that Hansel and Gretel remain bound together... usually. Upon his summoning, Assassin is capable of branding any (non-Servant) individual of his choosing as his 'Big Sis'. While this would appear to have no immediate effect, the target will eventually begin to notice changes in themselves, such as a regression to a more childlike frame of mind and an unexplainable affection for Assassin, until such time that these effects pile up and the target's original personality is destroyed. In this undefined state, where they are unable to recognise themselves, Assassin will then recognise them as Gretel, causing her 'soul' to overwrite their own. In this sense, it is an inversion of a technique once used on Assassin himself, and the target will immediately be given power on par with a Servant who possesses no abilities and an E in all parameters.

It is also worth noting there is no limit to the number of 'Gretel's that can conceivably exist, provided Assassin possesses sufficient mana.

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Detail:

Twin protagonist of an old German fairytale, he is both Hansel and Gretel, two children who became lost in the woods.

Born to a kind woodcutter and his wife, those first few years of Hansel's life were completely innocent, almost idyllic in a sense, until tragedy struck. His mother died before he could even understand the notion of 'death', and his father was forced to remarry, found a woman who was as capable as she was cruel. And so under his new stepmother Hansel was made to suffer all many of abuses, forced to work himself to the bone, went hungry as he slept bruised and bloody. While his father, ever kind-hearted, tried time and time again to defend him, time and time again he bowed to the demands of his terrifying new wife.

Like that, it was not long before Hansel broke, and created within himself a new self, one that was everything he was not - Gretel. Because while Hansel knew that he was 'an ugly, ignorant, disgusting little boy who shouldn't even be around', for he was told so every day, Gretel then must surely be beautiful, wise, admirable and truly deserving of having been born, and 'she' would tell Hansel that he was the same each night. Broken as he was, it was now possible for the child - now two - to go on living, until famine struck. Despite the fact that he barely ate to begin with, it was not long before his stepmother demanded that 'they' be abandoned, and once again their father buckled before her. While Hansel, following Gretel's wise words, was able to foil her plans once, soon the two found themselves lost in the forest with no way home.

After days of wandering, they followed a bird to a clearing in the woods and discovered a large cottage made entirely of sweets. Exhausted and starving, the children gladly dug into the treat before them, until the witch who lived inside the house, Black Aliss. A kind-hearted witch who had exiled herself away from the cruel world of Magecraft, she gladly took the boy in, even sealed away Gretel to cure him of his madness, and let him eat delicious meals everyday. In that sense, those days are probably still the happiest of Hansel's life, and he could have quite easily lived out the rest of his years like that, had disaster not occurred. For but a moment, Gretel returned, desperate and enraged, urge Hansel to believe that the witch who had cared so tenderly for him planned to eat him and Hansel, now so used to heeding his sister's words, pushed the unsuspecting woman into the oven and with tears streaming down his face fed on her well-cooked corpse! Truly a story for the ages.

The children stole the witch's fortune, killed their mother while making it look like an accident, and returned to their father. Soon after, Hansel killed his weak-willed father out of boredom, and roamed the world killing Magi and seeking an appropriate host for Gretel, with the same ritual once used to bind her. As a Servant, Hansel is both despondent and deranged, self-loathing and mania combined, likely to attempt to kill his own Master on Gretel's urging, seizing his own Command Spells and setting his sights on bringing the rest of the Servants under his dominion as 'playmates'. While Gretel seeks to grant Hansel immortality so they might once again travel the world without end, Hansel himself... lacks any real wish, perhaps at his core longs again for the witch, for those innocent days where all the world seemed bright to resume.

Should he learn of the fairytale that surrounds him and his sister, he will likely delight in it.

**Rafflesiac** · November 14th, 2014, 12:25 PM

Creepy. Very creepy.

Also good.

**Zork Knight** · November 14th, 2014, 05:58 PM

Servant info:

Spoiler:

Skills

Spoiler:

Noble Phantasms

Spoiler:

(Very Short) Lore:

Spoiler:

**Lycodrake** · November 14th, 2014, 06:56 PM

That you mentioned Roma at all is worthy of a "good job!".

**Funderfullness** · November 14th, 2014, 07:01 PM

<Insert 'her Riding is A+ if you know what I mean' joke>

I demand a HGW of fairy tale characters.

**YeOfLittleFaith** · November 14th, 2014, 07:46 PM

That Hensel. Awesome retelling.

**castor212** · November 15th, 2014, 01:28 AM

Originally Posted by BehemothV2

Servant info:

Spoiler:

Skills

Spoiler:

Noble Phantasms

Spoiler:

(Very Short) Lore:

Spoiler:

The Ten Crowns skillis worth a Noble Phantasm by itself. I mean, cmon. Negating even other Noble Phantasm?

**You** · November 15th, 2014, 01:29 AM

Ten crowns is canon. Just in canon it's EX and wasn't in the profile.

**castor212** · November 15th, 2014, 01:34 AM

Originally Posted by sutaa

Another fairytale Servant! From the same set as the Little Mermaid, which is also pretty much the Shota Grail War. This one's pretty trippy.

faceclaim

"It's fine... isn't it? Because Big Sis is here for me, I don't have to be scared of the dark or pain or scary things or even the Big Bad Witch! Because Big Sis is here for me, right?"

Name: Hansel 'and Gretel', The Lost Child(ren)
Class: Assassin
Alignment: Chaotic Evil

STR: E
AGI: B
CON: D
MGI: A
LCK: A
NP: E

Class Skills:

Presence Concealment
The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant.

B+: Rather than becoming impossible to see or remaining undetected, this represents Assassin's ability to completely conceal his nature as a Servant, appearing no different from a normal boy, allowing him to 'hide in plain sight' with ease. When combined with his other skills, Assassin is able to avoid suspicion up to the point where preparations to attack are made.

Personal Skills:

Mental Pollution
Makes it highly possible to shut out any mental interference Thaumaturgy, due to possessing a distorted mentality. However, at the same time it becomes impossible to come to an understanding with individuals that do not possess an equivalent rank of mental pollution.

EX: The Servant has become completely divorced from conventional human logic, and is entirely dependent on the effects of his Noble Phantasm to achieve some semblance of sanity. Reasoning is only possible through clever exploitation of said Noble Phantasm, and mental interference is entirely futile. Assassin's thought processes have reached the point where they are only strenuously 'human'.

Murderer of the Misty Night
A skill associated with the Servant's nature as a serial killer rather than as an Assassin, which permits preemptive strike against all opponents. However, if certain conditions are not met, the enemy will be allowed a Luck check.

B: Due to Hansel's nature as a 'Witchkiller', a guaranteed attack may be made against enemies who possess a strong association with magic, or a Mana parameter of C or above.

Self-Modification
The aptitude to merge one's own flesh with body parts of others. The higher the ranking in this skill, the further away one is from being a proper hero.

B: Perhaps due to crossing the limit of what should be considered 'human', Assassin is capable of modifying his own form through devouring corpses, allowing him to change his own physical appearance (though he will always retain a form of a young Germanic child), incorporate things that would not normally be considered 'parts' of the body such as Magic Crests and Command Spells into his own, and gain the abilities of his enemy. In this regard he has already consumed a mighty witch, along with several minor magi, and is thus treated as though he possesses a B rank in Magecraft, Rune Magic, Mystic Eyes (Whisper) and High-Speed Incantation.

Noble Phantasms:

Name:

Gretel

My Beloved Elder Sister

Rank: E
Type: Anti-Unit

An aspect of Assassin's very being rather than a true Noble Phantasm, this is the 'Gretel' of 'Hansel and Gretel' - an alternate personality created within Hansel's mind. While the word alternate is used, she is probably comparable to the voice of a normal person's conscience, as the two personalities are constantly in contact with other and find nothing unusual about their predicament. She has received what remains of Hansel's reason, and thus is crucial to keeping the otherwise uncontrollable Assassin in line, a task she performs with a surprisingly high level of skill, able to construct elaborate plans and weigh the pros and cons of a single decision in a moment's notice. Despite this, she has no concern for anything other than Hansel's well-being, and will do nothing to deter him from his usual antics if not required. When one adds this to her personality flaws, such as her overwhelming dislike for anyone other than Hansel and her refusal to be parted from him, it becomes clear that Gretel makes a poor ally.

While a different 'personality' is usually considered a distinct soul and given its own form by the Holy Grail, this refusal means that Hansel and Gretel remain bound together... usually. Upon his summoning, Assassin is capable of branding any (non-Servant) individual of his choosing as his 'Big Sis'. While this would appear to have no immediate effect, the target will eventually begin to notice changes in themselves, such as a regression to a more childlike frame of mind and an unexplainable affection for Assassin, until such time that these effects pile up and the target's original personality is destroyed. In this undefined state, where they are unable to recognise themselves, Assassin will then recognise them as Gretel, causing her 'soul' to overwrite their own. In this sense, it is an inversion of a technique once used on Assassin himself, and the target will immediately be given power on par with a Servant who possesses no abilities and an E in all parameters.

It is also worth noting there is no limit to the number of 'Gretel's that can conceivably exist, provided Assassin possesses sufficient mana.

detail

Detail:

Twin protagonist of an old German fairytale, he is both Hansel and Gretel, two children who became lost in the woods.

Born to a kind woodcutter and his wife, those first few years of Hansel's life were completely innocent, almost idyllic in a sense, until tragedy struck. His mother died before he could even understand the notion of 'death', and his father was forced to remarry, found a woman who was as capable as she was cruel. And so under his new stepmother Hansel was made to suffer all many of abuses, forced to work himself to the bone, went hungry as he slept bruised and bloody. While his father, ever kind-hearted, tried time and time again to defend him, time and time again he bowed to the demands of his terrifying new wife.

Like that, it was not long before Hansel broke, and created within himself a new self, one that was everything he was not - Gretel. Because while Hansel knew that he was 'an ugly, ignorant, disgusting little boy who shouldn't even be around', for he was told so every day, Gretel then must surely be beautiful, wise, admirable and truly deserving of having been born, and 'she' would tell Hansel that he was the same each night. Broken as he was, it was now possible for the child - now two - to go on living, until famine struck. Despite the fact that he barely ate to begin with, it was not long before his stepmother demanded that 'they' be abandoned, and once again their father buckled before her. While Hansel, following Gretel's wise words, was able to foil her plans once, soon the two found themselves lost in the forest with no way home.

After days of wandering, they followed a bird to a clearing in the woods and discovered a large cottage made entirely of sweets. Exhausted and starving, the children gladly dug into the treat before them, until the witch who lived inside the house, Black Aliss. A kind-hearted witch who had exiled herself away from the cruel world of Magecraft, she gladly took the boy in, even sealed away Gretel to cure him of his madness, and let him eat delicious meals everyday. In that sense, those days are probably still the happiest of Hansel's life, and he could have quite easily lived out the rest of his years like that, had disaster not occurred. For but a moment, Gretel returned, desperate and enraged, urge Hansel to believe that the witch who had cared so tenderly for him planned to eat him and Hansel, now so used to heeding his sister's words, pushed the unsuspecting woman into the oven and with tears streaming down his face fed on her well-cooked corpse! Truly a story for the ages.

The children stole the witch's fortune, killed their mother while making it look like an accident, and returned to their father. Soon after, Hansel killed his weak-willed father out of boredom, and roamed the world killing Magi and seeking an appropriate host for Gretel, with the same ritual once used to bind her. As a Servant, Hansel is both despondent and deranged, self-loathing and mania combined, likely to attempt to kill his own Master on Gretel's urging, seizing his own Command Spells and setting his sights on bringing the rest of the Servants under his dominion as 'playmates'. While Gretel seeks to grant Hansel immortality so they might once again travel the world without end, Hansel himself... lacks any real wish, perhaps at his core longs again for the witch, for those innocent days where all the world seemed bright to resume.

Should he learn of the fairytale that surrounds him and his sister, he will likely delight in it.

Gold.

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Originally Posted by You

Ten crowns is canon. Just in canon it's EX and wasn't in the profile.

I.... dont get it.

**Vagrant** · November 15th, 2014, 01:38 AM

Ten Crowns always and forever OP. Thanks CCC.

I do like the way you've built her as a reflection of Dark Sakura, pretty neat.

Hansel is badass. I like that he's basically just specialised in one-shotting magi with a surprise attack and if that doesn't work then he's fucked.

**castor212** · November 15th, 2014, 07:08 AM

Oh, it's CCC.

**Zork Knight** · November 15th, 2014, 11:49 AM

Originally Posted by Vagrant

I do like the way you've built her as a reflection of Dark Sakura, pretty neat.

I... did?

Hansel is pretty great. An Assassin that actually does what an Assassin should do.

**Vagrant** · November 15th, 2014, 11:51 AM

Yeah. the reddening is specifically compared to Dark Sakura's blackening process.

**Zork Knight** · November 15th, 2014, 11:54 AM

Oh, that. I was thinking about Angra Mainyu actually... but then again, Dark Sakura IS Angra Mainyu. With boobs.

**~~Christemo~~** · November 15th, 2014, 12:45 PM

shes really not.

**Zork Knight** · November 15th, 2014, 04:59 PM

Close enough?

**JetKinen** · November 16th, 2014, 02:55 AM

Berserker

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Info

Parameters and Skills

Noble Phantasms

Crossing Five Passes, Slaying Six Generals
Riding Alone For a Thousand Miles(千里走單騎/Qiānlǐ zǒu dān qí)

The Crystalization of the Journey made by Guan Yu famous, respected, and feared across the realm as God of War. Guan Yu, who had sworn his life to Liu Bei, once saw himself separated from his brother and thinking he had died in a battle almost killed himself but was convinced to live thanks to a rival warlord to his brother, Cao Cao who admired Guan Yu's skills and character. Cao Cao was able to convince Guan Yu that Liu Bei could be alive so he shouldn't kill himself yet and invited Guan Yu to join his army at least temporally. Guan Yu agree but with three conditions:

1- Liu Bei's spouses(whom Guan Yu was taking care of) must not be harmed and must be well taken care of.
2- In name, Guan Yu surrenders to the emperor and not Cao Cao (who actually wields state power).
3- Guan Yu is allowed to leave and reunite with Liu Bei if he one day he ever finds out the latter's whereabouts.

Cao Cao agreed and for a brief period Guan Yu fought for Cao Cao bringing many victories for the warlord, but it wasn't long til Guan Yu discovered Liu Bei location. And just like him and Cao Cao agreed, he was free to go find Liu Bei. But while Cao Cao remorsefully allowed Guan Yu to go away, his army thought Guan Yu was too dangerous to just let go, so they send orders hidden from Cao Cao to kill Guan Yu. Guan Yu had to force his way through five passes and slew six generals and his followers essentially by himself to finally reach his sworn brother
This Noble Phantasm takes form of a passive effect that replicates Guan Yu long and bloody journey to reach his brother. To Guan Yu the grail becomes an equivalent to Liu Bei and the other servants become replacements to those six generals that stood in his way. To reach Liu Bei Guan Yu has to defeat those six generals and cross five passes. Whenever a servant falls in the Grail War, Guan Yu reaches a step closer to reach his brother and is considered to have crossed one path(the only exception is the second pass that needs the death of two generals to be considered crossed). The closer Guan Yu gets to Liu Bei, the closer he also gets to future title as the God of War, so to symbolize that his STR, AGI and END will have its ranks raised. A Guan Yu that fully crossed all paths could be considered one of the strongest servants.
Rank A Anti-Unit(oneself)

Berserker also carries with him his trusted Guan Dao.
He is able to use it skifully, but because his memory is too jumbled he can't use it to its full potential, like he would if summoned as a Lancer

Keywords

So how it is?
My wanked sheet?
I was creating him as a lancer but somehow he turned into a Reverse Lu Bu. Where you had to summon Lu Bu as a lancer to not betray you, you shouldn't summon Guan as a Berserker or he will leave you
I don't think his independent action really makes sense

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