Originally Posted by
venomking
True name: envy.
Class: lancer.
likes: joy, love, and of course everything she doesn't have, saki. (As I said above, pretty sure this should be sake)
Dislikes: her history, her master being such a stiff, not being able to drink saki.
Parameters
strength: B
agility: b+
mana:c
luck:E-
endurance: b
backstory: unlike wrath envy was an actual person who's envy was so great upon her death she made into the sin of envy, (comma should be a period) her real name is Alice Von suzel. born (both this and Suzel should be capitalized) into war torn Germany with no family, friends, or wealth of any kind Alice eventually succumb to madness, and grew envious of the rich and any who were loved (period goes here) she grew so envious she eventually killed a rich family who walked down a street when she was around 8, after that she counted killing any person ether rich or happy and making a living off what she stole, (another period) she used an old lance she found in the rubble. After years of doing so and devolving (developing?) an addiction to saki she was eventually cuaght after trying to kill a German Mage in which the Mage killed her in combat, and all record of her were (was) wiped from history, (period) her envy was great even in her death that she was given the throne of envy of the throne of sins, and the lance she used was made a phantasm which represented her entire life.
Personality: envy is fun loving and wishes to enjoy the life she never had, albeit she is still envious of every one and everything including her master she does let this effect her, as she prefers to drown her envy in saki and teriyaki steak, despite her envious nature she feels an almost sisterly need to protect her master and will eventually attempt to make her master enjoy life if she has to use a little force to do so. (Technically speaking this is valid as a complete sentence, though it's very long and rambling. I'd suggest spacing it out with more periods.)
Appearance: she is 5 foot 4 with huge oppais she wear a tight fighting full piece suit and has long following red hair with a scar over her right eye.
Personal skills:
vapors of envy, B
she able to turn her envy into a vapor (forgot a period) Which she can use to to increase her presence detection and also use a light but fast method of attack against enemy servants.
vapor familiars, C.
She is able to turn her vapors into familiars and use them to give herself a 360 degree view of a battle field increasingly (increasing) for (her) ability to react to enemy servants.
instincts, B.
she was born with great Instincts as a child which allowed her to kill many individuals and avoid capture for years, (period) her instincts were greatly increased upon becoming envy.
Class skills:
presence detection, B
At this rank it would take presence concealment of at least A class to hide there (their) presence from her.
Battle continuation, C
at this rank she can hold her win (own) despite lethal injuries for a few hours a day at most.
Magic resistance, D-
as envy was killed by a Mage she does not have very high magic resistance and in most HGW it's master and the caster class that have the highest threats level to her.
NP.
lance of envy, E-EX. Anti phantasm.
This is (a? the?) lance that is the symbolism (symbol) of how envy lived her life killing those who she was envious of and taking what they had, (could use a period here) as such her phantasm per every strike on a servant or there weapon weaken there phantasm and increases the rank of her phantasm until there (their) phantasm is E and hers is whatever class there (their) NP and takes the ability of there phantasm and sublimes it into a version of that NP which can best be used by her, (period) her phantasm does not work on physical based phantasms(example gods hand) or reality marbles. It's (its) takes the appearance of highly rusted bronze spear with dried blood over the tip and has green magic like veins which proves that it has been enhanced by magic(by viens (veins) I mean those cool green lines that appear whenever a Mage strengthens them selfs or an object).