nice Archer Girl! i would like to see her with Atalante in one time !
Does somebody know if it exist also mortals whose vowed to Artemiss brother Apollo like Ipighenia,Atalante?
nice Archer Girl! i would like to see her with Atalante in one time !
Does somebody know if it exist also mortals whose vowed to Artemiss brother Apollo like Ipighenia,Atalante?
Not exactly, no, since Apollo didn't really have anything much to vow upon, unlike Artemis (chastity). There's lots of people related to Apollo and/or blessed by him, though.
The most famous ones would be Apollo's son Asclepius (the legendary healer) and Orpheus (who may or may not be related). Others include Admetus, Phemonoe and King Eurytus. There's also quite a few more minor people related to him.
Closest I can think of is Hemithea, a mortal girl who was saved by Apollo and turned into a minor god.
Funnily enough, she was actually my first idea for a "huntress Servant" (inspired by her portrayal in Riordan's The Dark Prophecy), but there was so little to worth with I quickly settled on Iphigenia instead.
Iphigenia: Alright, so time for nitpicking.
Firstly, I don't really like the Hunter of Artemis skill. Atlante doesn't have a skill like that and she's the most famous hunter of Artemis so Iphy doesn't really have any justification for it. I think just having Clairvoyance or Eye of the Mind works plenty.Next is the Goddess Metamorphis skill. I'm okay with it but I think the magic abilities should be limited to the Caster class, you could have it at rank E and say it's higher under the Caster class. I also had to do a little background reading to piece the sheet together so it could use some more in the fluff department.
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I wondered the same thing about Hunter Of Artemis, but I wanted to give her a Skill that lets her be a serious threat despite her weak stats and general lack of offensive ability. Also, this is hardly the first time a later Skill has been added that begs the question of why earlier Servants didn't have it (such as Arturia lacking Military Tactics despite winning twelve impossible battles), so I didn't worry about it too much.
On Goddess Metamorphosis, I figured the opposite. Caster!Iphigenia would emphasize her role as Hecate to the point where a specific transformation Skill would be unnecessary. I also see what you mean about the lack of fluff, but personally I feel I did a fairly good job of scattering info on her lore and personality throughout the sheet.
Thanks for the commentary Hermes!
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After considering Hermes's advice, I just added a bit more fluff to Iphigenia's Goddess Metamorphosis Skill explaining how it would change if she were summoned as Caster.
I think it's kinda justified that Atalante doesn't have that skill because you lose it if you break the vow of chastity (although she only attempted to break it, but I guess that can count too?)
Goddess Metamorphosis should be a NP like Ágrios Metamórose instead of a skill IMO
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Besides, isn't Goddess Metamorphosis an established Skill already?
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Name; The Unknown Warrior
Class; Berserker
Armament: None
Alignment: Chaotic Mad
Source: ???
Attribute: Man
Traits: Human
Stats:
Strength: C+
Agility: B
Endurance: A
Mana: E
Luck: E
Noble Phantasm: A
Likes: Worthy opponents, the peace after war
Dislikes: Kings, Commanders, Generals, Oh My!
Talents: Mindless fodder
Natural Enemy: Anyone with Charisma
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Lore
Personality
<I>Putting this out was an absolute nightmare to be perfectly frank. The Skills were easy, but the Noble Phantasm feels off and his personality is just Zero Chill: British Edition"
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Well, you did say the Noble Phantasm was difficult to piece together, which I can definitely understand so I'm more forgiving of le generic army summon in this case because that's kind of his whole shpiel.
My only question is what exactly does To Another's Glory do? It says it's a curse, but not its actual function.
Or making large-scale weapons like nukes require time and materials
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"I since a glorifull battle ahead, come master the fun tis awaits us."
true name: ryderch hael.
Class: saber.
alighment: lawful good.
Likes: sweets, glory, and fighting.
Dislikes: cowerdess, trickery, dullness.
Parameters:
strength: B+.
agility: B.
Mana: D.
Endurance: B.
Luck: E.
NP: A.
Armament:
prana armor
he is able to put upon himself a armor which takes the form of an armor he perceives in his mind, and is made entirely of mana
Background: saber was born to tyrant of a king, at a young age he was taught the ways of the sword, and after his father died he took up rue,I got the kingdom, at some point in his life, and one of his most prominent feats he lifted the psword dyrnwyn, a feat prominent becuase only a brave man without dieting. This sword he would use in many battles, and was one of his most prominent feats as only brave man can actually life it. he was a great King, and when when one of his friends was attacked he charged into the battle himself. He died a reletivly peacefull feat, and was recorded into the throne of heroes.
Personality: he is a kind and honorable man, seeking honor in everything he does. His personality is like a more countrol led version of iskandors own personality, he will attempt guide his master, thou is constant need to help others tends to be a hibderance to both his masters daily life, and wallet as saber uses his masters money to give to the poor, every time he sees someone poor, he will teach his master sword play, and due menial chores for his master in exchange for constantly uses up his masters wallet.
Class skills:
Maguc resistance
rank: B
Cancels spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for a Servant to be affected.
rideng.
Rank: B.
Vehicles and horses can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Monstrous Beasts.
personel skills:
Bravery
rank: B
Negates the effect of mind-altering spells and other such effects which would hinder combat performance.
Guardian Knight
rank: B.
Guardian Knight temporarily raises defensive power when protecting others. Raises Stamina by roughly one (+) modifier per rank from D.
Prana burst.
rank:A
Raises Strength, Stamina, and Agility by one rank, but consumes 50 Prana per minute as long as the effect is continued.
Instinct
rank: C
is most effective when used for the purpose, and only works upon direct observation.
NPs:
name: drynwyn
title: "sword if the truly brave."
rank: A.
One if the many swords forged by the fairies, the sword is in fact a highly advanced summoning tool, the glyphs written the blades hilt summons a livening flame that can be counted as a phantasmic beast thou it lacks the will to be called such. once summoned the flame surrounds saber in a protective circle of flame, when saber attacks the flame souriunds soroubds his sword, and when a servant enters the circle the flame will attack them. This gives start the perfect glance and defense and offense. The sword itself is highly durable and can block strikes from the likes of Excalibur.
Curse of drynwyn.
Title: "no cowered may use the blade, lest they face death."
Rank: B.
Should a servant who does not posses a rank in bravery touch the hilt of the blade, the summoned flame attack them from the inside of there body, dealing great amounts of damage. However this ability is two sided should the servant have a rank higher then saber in bravery the sword will become part of there legend regardless as if they have ever seen the weapon if life. And thus become there noble phantasm leaving saber with no noble phantasm.
Last edited by venomking; March 5th, 2018 at 12:26 PM.
This might be the best sheet you've ever done, and that's even given too many skills and Dyrnwyn being wanked.
Well done on improving.
Thx.
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Whoops looks like a put Praha armor in the skills section, let me remedy that.
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Drynwyn isn't really wanked, it's just has really good defensive and offense abilities. not like other A rank weapons, that doesn't even include the fact that if an opponent has bravery then him and touches the hilt the blade he becomes NP less, and his openenents gets a new NP to there arsenal.
Hael: This is probably one of your best sheets, if only because it's a lot sparser then usual and has less chances for your usual grammar issues to pop up. If anything though, it ends up deviating too far to the other extreme.
His Skills are all very generic and there's no explanation given for why he has any of them. A bit more flavor text would be nice here, especially for ones like Mana Burst and Imperial Privilege which have no obvious basis in the lore you provided.
On the other hand, his NPs are actually very nice and well fleshed out. The way you interpreted Drynwyn's "burst into flame" ability is much more creative and interesting then I've seen in other Hael sheets. My only critique here is that his first NP has no listed rank.
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