Omigod, I'd had the same idea for an Aleister Crowley Servant (complete with Charisma and Innocent Monster)! But I couldn't figure out what his NPs would do (other then one would be Liber Legis and one would be Aiwass) so I never managed to actually write it out. Definitely a good sheet that does justice to the figure in question (Liber Legis as an anti-era NP is particularly clever). Out of curiosity, were you inspired any by A Certain Magical Index in writing this?Originally Posted by Paorou
So Zork Knight I've added that skill we talked about. Any feedback on Philoctetes would be great guys.
Class: Shielder (Saber, Leader)
True Name: Edward of Woodstock
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
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STR: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
END: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
AGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ A
MGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ D
LCK: ＊＊＊＊＊ C
NP: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
Keywords
CLASS SKILLS
Magic Resistance: A
The capacity to negate or abate the effects of Magecraft. Cancels all Magecraft of A Rank (High-Thaumaturgy that makes use of magic circles and Instantaneous Contracts) and below. Therefore, he cannot be injured by modern magi. In case of a single stroke, he may even hold back the coercion of the Command Spell.
The rank only became these high thanks to the blessings of his “shield” Noble Phantasm, so it will naturally suffer a Rank DOWN should he lose it.
...if a Saber
...if a Leader
PERSONAL SKILLS
Battle Continuation: C
The ability of returning alive. Strength of vitality for predicaments. A Skill that decreases the death rate due to injury and makes possible to fight even in a condition of bearing serious wounds that would put him on the verge of death.
The stubborn nature of a man who insisted on standing at the battlefield despite having his body consumed by disease.
Charisma: B
The natural talent to command an army corps. Raises the abilities of one's own army on group battles. A rare talent. For the king of a country, B Rank is adequate.
By the tender age of 12 years old, he had already grown used to the office of a monarch. Although he never had the opportunity to ascend to the throne himself, his capacity as a king is beyond doubt.
Weak Constitution: B
The innate disposition to be struck with weakness, a feeble constitution. There is always a risk of a sudden decline in parameters whenever taking any sort of action. The likelihood of this happening is not all that high, but the danger this poses in case it is triggered during combat is unfathomable.
In his case, this is not something he was born with. Edward was never aware of this while alive, but the “mysterious sickness” that took his life was not in fact a disease, but a powerful curse from his enemies. Said curse is harassing him even now after his death.
Weapons
Knight’s Sword
Regarded as the archetypal European sword, this weapon possesses a cross-shaped hilt and a straight, double-edged blade of roughly 80cm. Originally developed early in the Middle Ages as an evolved form of the Carolingian sword (itself derived from the Roman spatha), many variations would later appear along the centuries.
This particular version is characterized by an extended handle (making possible for both a one-handed or a two-handed grip) and tapering blade with diamond grind and a sharp point, tailored for thrusting attacks. Furthermore, it is furnished with a solid, round pommel that can be improvised as a blunt weapon.
NOBLE PHANTASM
Ich Dien – My Honor Is My Shield
Rank: C++
Type: Bounded-Field
Shield for peace. A black shield with a crest of three white feathers printed on it. During his lifetime, Edward favored this armament over all others.
Back in the day, there was a convention of carving a knight’s heraldic insignia on his armor or shield. Other than for the sake of fulfilling the obvious role of identifying fighters on the battlefield, this was in part also motivated by a belief that said insignia – which was regarded as the knight’s honor given shape – could act as a protective charm of sorts. This is a conceptual weapon built based on that belief.
Just equipping this already boosts physical and magical protections, and also grants resistance against mental interference. When its True Name is released, a defensive bounded-field will be deployed. In accordance with that ancient belief, the power of the bounded-field depends on the user’s honor・integrity as a knight. Should he maintain an irreproachable conduct, it will truly be an impregnable wall. However, if he commits an offense against the tenets of chivalry, one of the feathers in the crest will be dyed black and the rank of this Noble Phantasm will fall. On the third offense, this shield will lose all its functions as a conceptual weapon and become a mere piece of metal.
Black Prince – Bloodthirsty Lord
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit (self)
Edward’s secret weapon. A “crystallization of legend”-type of Noble Phantasm that embodies the many anecdotes behind his epithet. It has materialized as the black armor that he allegedly used while alive.
While the saying goes that one must keep his trump card hidden until the very last second, the fact is that Edward cannot arbitrarily employ this. In general, it just remains sealed away, and it is only after his shield has lost its powers that this can be activated. Then, the True Name can finally be released once he attains the resolve to throw away the last vestiges of his pride as a knight and become completely ruthless.
While under the effect of this Noble Phantasm, all parameters raise and his armaments Rank UP – his nameless sword acquires attributes as a magic sword. Furthermore, it also exhibits an effect falsely similar to the Skill Predisposition to Sadism: attack power increase at every turn, but he becomes more and more prone to acts of brutality in exchange. If that wasn’t enough, the gruesome sight of him performing such acts also imposes mental pressure on enemies.
Incidentally, while the assumption that Edward was called “Black Prince” out of his preference for a black-colored gear is more broadly known, a plausible alternative theory also exist. Basically, it was a form of slander by the Frenchmen, motivated by the destruction resulted from his merciless tactics. When you consider that it all happened roughly at the same time when the Black Death ravaged Europe, one cannot help but feel that whoever came up with this had quite the acid tongue.
Background
Last edited by Master of Chaos; February 15th, 2016 at 05:57 AM.
Sounds like a rather fascinating character. I've heard of "the Black Prince" a few times before here, but this is the first time I've actually seen a sheet of the guy. He would especially fit into a Fate setting what with the "ideals versus harsh reality" theme that recurs across the franchise. I wonder how he'd react to meeting someone like Shirou or Kiritsugu, for example.
Very interesting character sheet, my only real problem with it is that I feel like Black Prince should be higher than a B rank noble phantasm, because it does what Arondight ( A++ rank Noble Phantasm) does and more. And I get the fact that Shielder might not even get to activate the Noble Phantasm due to its restrictions, so I would recommend changing it to something like A-, give or take a minus. Other than that you did a great job on the Servant Sheet 10/10 (Far better than mine).
I got a bit from everywhere. I just noted that his most popular picture was a bald guy who liked to dress in robes, so I moved away from bishounen and went into theatrical voldemort-alike.
Bishonen is definitely how I would've depicted him, historical accuracy be damned. Safe to say, anime has thoroughly corrupted my aesthetic sensibilities.
You can just err on the safe side and do Servants of people famed for their looks.
I always took that Arondight's rank was that high because it included both its sheer power as a weapon and the extra effects (RanK UP to parameters and etc). Just so you have an idea, Sakura Saber's blue robe (which was sort of my inspiration for Black Prince actually) also has similar effects, and it is only a C Rank Noble Phantasm...
Edit: also, the restrictions over its activation don't really matter for this sort of thing. Arondight itself also can only be activated after Lancelot seals away his other NPs.
Last edited by Master of Chaos; February 10th, 2016 at 12:00 AM.
I'm well aware of their e̶x̶c̶u̶s̶e̶s̶ reasons for what they did.
I still don't like it.
I like it
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
That's fine.
Anyway, I should probably get to working on that mount NP for Alaric...
Rider
True Name : Erwin Rommel 'The Desert Fox'
Alignment : Chaotic Good
Attributes :
Strength: C (D) (Celebrated Soldier and Hero - upgraded due to nature of summoning)
Endurance: D (E) (Despite being sickly, he continued to fight and survived many battles. Increased due to nature of summoning.)
Agility: B (D) (Known for his speed and mobility, though it is more of a battle abstraction. Increased due to nature and summoning. Further increased due to noble phantasm.)
Magic: C
Luck: B
Noble Phantasm: B
Appearance :
A handsome, blue-eyed, blonde-haired young man in a trench coat and a very obvious dress uniform and hat. Interesting, however, is the fact that there is no Nazi Insignia anywhere on his person. It is essentially a world war 2 german commander's uniform without any markings of rank or nationality. These things only appear when he uses the full might of his noble phantasm.
He is known to wear modern attire when out scouting. He chooses to dress conservatively, wearing a nice suit and slacks even though he rides a motorcycle.
Personality :
On the surface, very professional and compassionate. In truth, he is a highly clever but brash warrior who craves glory. He has a bit of a rebellious streak.
Class Skills :
Riding A (C)
In the traditional sense of the Riding skill, Rider would not have the required level to be summoned in the class. However, his master deliberately summoned him in a specific point at Tobruk, where the legends of his panzer maneuvers are at their greatest, using the tire frame of a Sonderkraftfahrzeug 250 he rode in life, while a movie about his exploits premiered worldwide. The circumstances of this summoning allowed him to achieve a Riding Rank of A (Also an increase in attributes above, then Charisma and Battle Tactics - see below), provided he use only vehicles from the second world war.
Personal Skills :
Battle Continuation B
Rommel was repeatedly injured and sick during his tenure as a commander in two world wars, but survived in all instances to dog his enemies. Many times he was in the thick of battle, leading from the front. He only truly died with an order from the fuhrer himself to kill himself with a cyanide pill.
Battle Tactics A+ (B)
Universal accolades from both allies and opponents mark him as one of the greatest strategists and tacticians of all time. In truth, he had made many tactical blunders during the western desert campaign, mostly glossed over by many historians. This was revealed to be a propaganda ploy by Goebbels and himself, making him the 'poster boy' of the third reich. Further enhanced by his master's mastery of glamour.
Charisma B+ (C)
More than suitable for the field marshal of the third reich. Friend and foe alike respected him for his humane and professional personality. He was popular with both his allies and opponents. However, this was revealed to be a propaganda ploy by Goebbels and himself, making him the 'poster boy' of the third reich. Further enhanced by his master's mastery of glamour.
Innovation - Desert Warfare A
His courage, daring and innovative mobile tactics in the desert are the cornerstone of his legend. Though some historians and even fellow german officers doubted the effectiveness of these tactics, his opponents universally acknowledged them. In any battle that involves the desert or any desert hazards, he gains massive bonuses to mobility, attack power, accuracy and reaction speed against heroes older than him.
Weapons / Gear :
Rommel rides a refurbished WW2 BMW Motorcycle when cruising around the city in modern attire. He can also use it in battle, which triggers the A-rank Riding skill due to its frame originally being used in WW2. The Motorcycle was given to him by his Master.
Rommel has been provided other similar vehicles such as an operational, refurbished Porsche Tiger II Tank and a Sonderkraftfahrzeug 250. They are hidden in garages throughout the city. With his supernaturally augmented Riding Skill, he can operate these vehicles to combat capacity on his own.
He uses an officer's Luger pistol and a Trench Shovel from his days as an infantryman in WW1. He is rather reluctant to use either of them, as they are dead giveaways of his true nature. However, if an advantage would be gained while doing so, he is more than glad to show off all his nazi paraphernalia.
While using his noble phantasm, Rommel may expend additional prana to materialize various types of World War II vehicles from dust and sand. Operationally, they are similar to their real-world counterparts, but have the trait of being of the 'earth element'. They also do not jam or get bogged down in the sandstorm, unlike their real world counterparts.
Noble Phantasm :
The Desert Fox
ROMMEL
Anti-Army A (B)
According to the many propaganda literature generated by the third reich during the opening years of the first world war, 'Rommel' is the arabic word for sand.
This is untrue.
However, the name has become synonymous with the title of 'Desert Fox', such that no one can think of 'Rommel' without thinking about the other. This noble phantasm is the culmination of his legend, both fabricated and real - it is the ability to manipulate sandstorms and recreate the conditions of a desert battle.
This bounded field is attributed as the catalyst for many of his successful desert raids. Upon activation, he calls forth a sandstorm at his location, obscuring and harassing everyone caught within. It imposes a massive visual and distraction penalty to everyone caught in the storm, while he is mostly unaffected by this. Mundane humans may be harmed and even killed by the winds, heat and dust generated.
He uses a lesser version of it to hide his identity, weapons and vehicles. Using it, he can appear as a figure shrouded in a whirling cloud of dust. However, in order to use its full power, he has to reveal his true name and appearance.
His master foresaw the grail war and planned the premiere of a worldwide movie to revive his legend, increasing the power of his Noble Phantasm due to the resurgence of his popularity. He is able to materialize vehicles and weapons using sand - they will operate as their real world counterparts, but have the trait of being of the 'earth element'. They also do not jam or get bogged down in the sandstorm, unlike their real world counterparts.
Seems pretty powerful for such a young Heroic Spirit. Admittedly, you gave reasons for his high(ish) stats and showed what they would normally be, but he's still pretty powerful for someone who (according to Nasu) shouldn't be able to qualify for the Throne of Heroes.
Then again, I've always disliked Nasu's "older is better" rules so I support this.
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I've updated Alaric.
Given him a mount NP and made Direptione Romae actually useful...
Oh yeah, and I made the links I put on his character sheet actually work. Hopefully.
Last edited by Crying; February 10th, 2016 at 04:34 AM.
Yeah, that Rommel does seem a bit powerful but not so much, and the justifications do make sense
I wonder though if the Master made so many preparations to power him up why didn't he just summon somebody stronger
On the other hand, given Alaric's significance I think you could make him stronger (have no concrete suggestions though). I do like the first NP though. It reminds me a bit of a sheet I had made a while ago with a NP that made nearby people mad.
His master was in the propaganda division as a young man and is now a media mogul who secretly funds the neo-nazis. As we all know, occultism and nazis is canon even in the nasuverse (Yggdimillenia's leader) so he's a member of the Order of Thule who specializes in Glamour, fairy magic that manipulates and depends on a person's perception and opinions. He's almost a hundred years old, and is dying - he doesn't possess any more life extension methods beyond the scientific ones he can buy with money.
Summoning Rommel is kind of his last hurrah - if he wins he'll wish to revive the Third Reich, and who better to lead the charge than the poster boy (short of Hitler himself).
It was just a matter of ideology and the resources at the time. (What he lacks in magic catalysts, he has in money, influence and actual historical artifacts of the period)
Last edited by Paorou; February 10th, 2016 at 06:27 AM.
I really like The Black Prince. Basically said he could be summoned as a Saber or Archer regardless so it's nice to see a sheet for him. I feel as if he'd fit into the series very well.
As for Rommel, I think he's to much of a heavy hitter for such a young servant. It's probably just because I never heard of him. Though I understand the reasons for the boost cause of the whole modern movie thing which I think is a great idea.
Last edited by Bird of Hermes; February 10th, 2016 at 09:58 AM.
I really like that Rommel NP
Aus Feuer ward der Geist geschaffen,
drum schenkt mir süßes Feuer ein!
Die Lust der Lieder und der Waffen,
die Lust der Liebe schenkt mir ein,
der Trauben süßes Sonnenblut,
das Wunder glaubt und Wunder thut!
Why would a Neo-Nazi trying to bring back the Reich summon Rommel of all people, though? Far as I know, Rommel tried to assassinate Hitler at one point, and may not have even really believed in the Reich's more far-flung ideals of racial superiority. In fact, I'm surprised that no mention of the assassination attempt was made in your sheet of him, as that seems like a rather big part of his character.
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