Realizing that reading the entire Mahabharata is going to take a long time, so I'll probably read a summary of it, make the servant sheet, then I'll read the full translated text.
Realizing that reading the entire Mahabharata is going to take a long time, so I'll probably read a summary of it, make the servant sheet, then I'll read the full translated text.
I'm not going to read the entirety of the Mahabharata to make Bhishma and I should probably get some work done on him but for a long time I've felt unsatisfied with my Yamata-no-Orochi sheet so I've decided to make a second version.
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Class: Saber
True Name: Yamata-no-Orochi
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Place of Origin: Japan
Strength- A+
Endurance- B
Agility- A
Mana- B
Luck- C
NP- A++
Height/Weight: 200cm/70kg
Likes: Drinking Contests
Dislikes: Law and Order
Talents: Mindless Violence
Natural Enemy: Susanoo
Class Skills:
- Magic Resistance (A) - Cancel spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi.
- Riding (E) - Due to having no experience in the matter, Orochi has difficulty riding anything.
Personal Skills:
- Breath of the Dragon (A) - The ability to release a torrent of mana like the breath of Dragons. At this rank this is considered an A rank attack. His flames are powerful enough to force even skilled dragon slayers into submission.
- Divinity (A+/B) - The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. Due to serpents being the pinnacle of magical beasts in the east, Orochi has the highest divinity possible. However his dislike for the gods had weakened its rank greatly greatly.
- Monstrous Strength (A+) - An ability possessed by monsters and beasts. Grants a permanent Rank-Up to strength.
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So there we have Version Two of everyone's favourite reptile (Sorry Ferdiad). I tried to put a bit more thought into this one and even added an image for the noble phantasm attack, although this will be one of the few - if only - occasions of this happening. Considering I was less than fond of the previous attempt at him some feedback would be nice. Even if it's just shitting on version 1. Hell, i'll probably join in on that. Oh, and for the sake of convinience, here is the 1st version.
I am well aware that i am ripping off the head=tail thing of a certain cat girl we all know but I thought it would be better that way than as a Noble Phantasm with hindsight. Also if someone wants to make up their own idea for one of the heads to make as a servant, go on right ahead (though a mention would be nice.)
Head of Greed - Caster
Last edited by Bird of Hermes; July 29th, 2016 at 05:59 PM. Reason: I made a Head
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Two nitpicks before the actual criticism:
- Wasn't the first record of the Twelve Labours of Heracles in 600 BCE (a poem written by Peisander that's now lost)? While the first mention of Yamata-no-Orochi was in 680 CE (Kojiki)? So wouldn't the Orochi be derived from the Hydra if they are connected at all?
- His Divinity ranking is A+èB. Is this a typo? Not sure what it's supposed to mean.
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Orochi: Well, his FC is amazing compared to the original one for one thing, and Kusanagi is much more worthy of A++ rank now. You were inspired by Naruto with the whole 'drawing it out of his mouth' deal right? He lacks the multi-head summon NP but instead you've worked that into his lore in an interesting way. Makes me wonder what some of the other heads would be like (though honestly I'm not sure how many different Classes they could have other then Saber and Berserker). Breath Of The Dragon is, of course, perfectly fitting. (Well, technically he's a 'serpent' not a 'dragon' but same difference...)
Naruto kinda helped out, he was either going to pull the sword out of his stomach or mouth so I picked mouth as there wasn't exactly anywhere else more suitable (not like I was gonna have him pull it out of his butt). As for the other classes, caster or assassin would probably have something to do with commanding or turning into snakes. Grand Order managed to turn Tamamo into a Berserker first although Assassin would be more appropriate to her original personality. I'm sure you would be able to put an original spin on it though.
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Comments on Orochi later; sorry.
First a son who loved his mother, now a son who hates his father!
Archer
The Overshadowed
Class: Archer
- Alternate Classes: Saber
Place of Origin: Sumeria
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
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Parameters:
Strength: B (displayed as C)
Endurance: C (displayed as D)
Agility: B (displayed as C)
Magic: B (displayed as C)
Luck: D (displayed as E)
Noble Phantasm: E-A
Skills
Equipment:
- Due to his Noble Phantasm, Archer has a near infinite variety of mundane equipment at his disposal. He will have a copy of anything he can hold in his hands.
Noble Phantasm:
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Lore:
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Personality:
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Miscellaneous:
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Last edited by Constructman; June 9th, 2016 at 11:46 AM. Reason: Fixed typos, added Magic Resistance B, added new NP
I doubt a king of no importance with no legends or records chronicling his deeds could ever even end up in the Throne at all, regardless of godly background. Though, your take on such a character is certainly interesting.
He's basically the anti-Gilgamesh as far as temperament is concerned, though I can see with someone like the King Of Heroes as your dad, measuring up would be rather hard (and frankly, I have a hard time imagining Gil as a particularly caring father). Overall he feels like a gimped version of Gil, which was obviously your intent but still isn't as creative as many of your past sheets. Even his NP is just Gilgamesh's from Prototype. I felt your Medus sheet did a better job of referencing their parent figure (with his King Breaker NP) while still being his own person.
Nungal seems like he could be a fascinating character narratively (and it's amusing to imagine an ancient Sumerian NEET), but comes off as rather lacking in a pure stat-sheet.
Last edited by RoydGolden; June 8th, 2016 at 09:26 PM.
Yes, that was the problem I had with making him. With Medus, I had a legend to work with; with this guy, absolutely nothing. Was at the end of my rope, so I decided that "Hey, wouldn't this guy have access to the Treasury too?"
Aaaaand now I can't get NEET Archer out of my head. Would he spend most of the HGW pwning noobs on MMOs? (Or getting pwned himself?)
Came up with another NP on the spot
Re: Orochi:
I had a thought about Orochi as a Servant, but was not sure about how to go about it. Never realized you had a sheet of your own.
Kusanagi is extremely strong, but that strength is warranted. Would a Servant with control over air and wind be able to repulse it, or is it just too strong? I liked the concept of each head being a different Servant, but what class would the Eighth be? Avenger?
Degradation Of Babylon definitely adds a lot of flavor, making Nungal more of his own Servant and less "poor man's Gilgamesh'. In a city or something it'd actually be pretty handy, since he'd be able to do things like erode the skyscraper he and the opponent are fighting on or gradually eat away at a building's supports so it collapses on top of someone. Reminds me a bit of Barragan's power from the manga series Bleach.
The snake orochi was mentioned in Shuten-doji's profile, it's most likely a god.
Ur-Nungal: Just taken a look at this guy. He's basically the anti-Gilgamesh. The Degredation of Babylon was needed to make him stand out. All I can say to change is that if he has access to less high tier weaponry, surely the rank of the gate would decrease? Ko-Gil has it at B+ but that was because his treasury was smaller so i think the rank should show E~A as it would allow for higher tier weapons but the sheer amount of mundane weaponry brings the average rank down significantly.
And as for the eighth class for an Orochi head.... I'm not sure what it would be. You're more than welcome to come up with a 'head' yourself.
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AvengerEmiya called Xuanzang being a genderswap
Damn you Grand Order
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Screw it, he probably needs a little more work, but here's Bhishma.
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Yes, it's been used for this character before but i don't care cause its the best one there is.
Class: Archer
True Name: Bhishma
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Place of Origin: India
Strength- A
Endurance- B
Agility- A+
Mana- B
Luck- D
NP- A
Height/Weight: 188cm/75kg
Likes: Oath Keeping
Dislikes: Women, Backhanded Tactics
Talent: Overwhelming Combat Prowess
Natural Enemy: Arjuna
Class Skills:
- Independent Action (C) - It is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for one day without a Master.
- Magic Resistance (C) - Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Personal Skills:
- Battle Continuation (A) - Makes it possible to fight even with deadly injuries and can remain alive so long as one does not receive a decisive fatal wound.
- Clairvoyance (C) - Connotes superior visual perception and dynamic occipital capture, such as to supplement the long-range aiming of projectile weapons. Capable of keeping track of fast-moving object within a range of four kilometres.
- Eternal Arms Mastery (A) - prevents degradation of fighting skills when under the effect of mental hindrance. Mastery of combat arts has reached the point of being said to be unrivalled in one's era. By complete merging of mind, body and technique, it is possible to make use of full fighting skills even when under the influence of any sort of mental hindrance.
- Relentless (A+) - A skill reserved for those who fought on for long periods of time. The longer that Bhishma fights without stopping or resting, his parameters will slowly increase over time, allowing them to rank up multiple times should the battle be long enough. When combat ends, his parameters will return to their base level. Bhishma was able to fight on terms equal to Parashurama, an avatar of Vishnu and trainer of Karna for almost a month without rest.
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Whew, Indian Servants are OP as hell. My last one, Parashurama, was purposefully put into a class that didn't suit him to balance him but for this one I decided to just indulge in the power. He may come off as a bit wanked but I think it's justified for the most part. Comments are nice.
Last edited by Bird of Hermes; June 12th, 2016 at 04:17 AM. Reason: Added Noble Phantasm
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If you think Bhishma is OP, just wait for Drona. I'm gonna need to nerf his stats, because his skills and NP's will be OP, and he will most likely have an EX NP of some form. Indian Servants are definitely OP. Your Bhishma sheet is very well balanced. His NP is powerful, but it is a one time use. His stats and skills will allow him to still be a threat without having to use his Noble Phantasm
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Be glad Drona's gonna be archer and not saber. His sword, Asi, is basically Ea.
Last edited by ZSB1999; June 11th, 2016 at 01:58 PM.