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    A@Arcueid
    strength, agility, and everything should not be greater than Hercules.

    hercules lifted the entire world in his back.

    arcueid can't compete with that.

    what does Gnadenstob even do???

    is it basically Gaebolg: The chain????

    seriously, this arcuwank needs to stop.

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    Quote Originally Posted by WhatShouldNotBe View Post
    A@Arcueid
    strength, agility, and everything should not be greater than Hercules.

    hercules lifted the entire world in his back.

    arcueid can't compete with that.

    what does Gnadenstob even do???

    is it basically Gaebolg: The chain????

    seriously, this arcuwank needs to stop.
    But it feels too good....

    Anyway did not know Hearcles did that. If he held the entire world on his back, shouldn't his strength therefore be EX? Why is it A+? As for Endurance, she has resistance to most magic and conceptual weapons on Earth and her revival even after MEoDP. And this version is unrestrained! And her last arc supposed to be one of the greatest heights of power she can use. Why else call it a last Arc in MBAACC?
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    It's a legend. You know, part of what Heroic Spirits are?

    And what does surviving death have to do with Endurance and how much damage you can take? That's Luck. Endurance basically means you have high HP.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Brunestud Incarnate View Post
    But it feels too good....

    Anyway did not know Hearcles did that. If he held the entire world on his back, shouldn't his strength therefore be EX? Why is it A+? As for Endurance, she has resistance to most magic and conceptual weapons on Earth and her revival even after MEoDP. And this version is unrestrained!
    ....

    you do know that Servants as degraded versions of the originals, right?

    and so?

    that doesn't fall under Endurance, that falls under magic resistance!

    jesus fuck, you don't know how to make a servant sheet, do you???

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    Quote Originally Posted by WhatShouldNotBe View Post
    that doesn't fall under Endurance, that falls under magic resistance!

    jesus fuck, you don't know how to make a servant sheet, do you???
    apparently you don't either

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    Quote Originally Posted by Arashi_Leonhart View Post
    apparently you don't either
    Hey, we're critiquing one person for the moment.

    move on to me when we're done evisceratiing this guy.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ail Don View Post
    Is Arc the new Simo
    Apparently.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Arashi_Leonhart View Post
    It's a legend. You know, part of what Heroic Spirits are?

    And what does surviving death have to do with Endurance and how much damage you can take? That's Luck. Endurance basically means you have high HP.
    or can stay up really late because you have no parents telling you what to do anymore
    Quote Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    Quote Originally Posted by You View Post
    or can stay up really late because you have no parents telling you what to do anymore
    We can thank Zouken for unleashing Shinji's true potential by getting rid of his parents. Explains his ability to tank Gae Bolg.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Arashi_Leonhart View Post
    We can thank Zouken for unleashing Shinji's true potential by getting rid of his parents. Explains his ability to tank Gae Bolg.
    He did it by being a heartless bastard, didn't he?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Arashi_Leonhart View Post
    Explains his ability to tank Gae Bolg.
    shit it took me awhile to figure out this!
    *poor my sides*
    Kentucky Fried Kirei, nah i'm joking. Nothin here

    well, told ya.


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    'kay
    You jest?:3

    Even ▆▆ end up on that place again

    The special hell on hill full of swords ---------------------------------------------------------The hill of bloody battlefield

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    Servant Saver Alter:

    True Name: Justinian 'Bloodstained Holy Emperor'

    Alignment: Lawful Evil

    Alternate Classes: Saber, Lancer, Berserker, Caster, Ruler

    Strength- E
    Agility- D
    Endurance- C+
    Mana- A
    Luck- B
    NP- EX

    Equipment: A ceremonial sword and royal scepter.

    Appearance:

    Source is here

    Personality: A diligent and idealistic man with a passion for reform, Saver could truly be called one of the last great Roman emperors, by which the fires of Rome blazed most dazzlingly before flickering to extinction. Or at least, he once was. The Saver that has been summoned is not the man he was in life, but an embodiment of the divine monarchy itself, with conquest and destruction as his chief mandates. In this form, Saver's disposition has become cold, with no hints of his former passion visible on his features.

    Due to fully embracing the role of a divine emperor to rule over humanity, Saver has cast off his personal attachments, treating those around him merely as disposable pawns to fuel his own ambitions. Even the wife he once loved now means nothing to him, he merely refers to her as "That troublesome harlot."

    His passion for Rome persists, but it is no longer the country of flesh and blood that he fought for alongside his friends. Rather, it is the ideal empire which exists in Saver's mind alone. He cares not for the present world or its glories, gladly trampling them underfoot to pursue his wish. All for "Rome". All for his ideal.

    He truly is a "Holy demon emperor". A bloodstained messiah to cleanse the world.
    A digression, but Saver utterly despises
    Procopius
    "that man"
    , who documented his rule in life. While most of Procopius' books portrayed the emperor in an utterly positive light, the last secret one depicted him as a mad demon and ghoul who wandered the halls of the palace and performed debauched Pagan rituals. While Saver normally keeps a calm and composed demeanor and can rarely be said to truly hate anyone, he makes a deep exception for Procopius. No punishment is too great for one who betrayed and degraded the emperor in such a fashion.

    Likes: abject loyalty, himself, Rome
    Dislikes: revolts, disloyal subjects, Procopius
    Talent: world domination
    Natural Enemy: Theodora, Romulus


    Class Skills:

    Charisma (A+)- Ability to inspire others, and lead armies. Saver was an incredibly famous emperor who ruled over all of Byzantine Rome, leading it into an age of prosperity unparalleled since the fall of the Western Empire. As the sole ruler of an entire empire, Saver would normally have an A-rank in this Skill, the highest affordable to a mundane human being. However, as his existence has been distorted to match the summoner's impression of an "ideal, god-like monarch", Saver's rank has been raised to a supernatural curse, beyond what he had in life.

    Counter Hero (C+)- A Skill serving to reduce the parameters of "heroes" that the Servant faces in combat. At this rank, all heroic opponents facing Saver receive a singular rank-down to all parameters. Against foes of an anti-heroic disposition, the effect is more muted, merely lowering parameters by a half ranking. However those heroes belonging to the Roman Empire suffer a doubled penalty, as it is unforgivable treason for the sons and daughters of Rome to bear their blades against its divinely appointed emperor.


    Personal Skills:

    Imperial Privilege (EX)- Ability to obtain, through sheer force of will, Skills that would otherwise be outside the Servant's capabilities. Essentially, a manifestation of sheer overwhelming ego and ambition which allows one to encroach upon the realm of the impossible, even to the point of altering one's very flesh. At this rank, even Skills imposing "a burden to the body" such as Divinity may be acquired. As emperor, Saver orchestrated countless great projects such as reforming the law code, building glorious monuments to symbolize the worldly power of Rome and reclaiming the land that had been lost to the Empire since the West's fall. Through his incomparable divine authority, Saver can grant himself a wide variety of Skills including Divinity, Magecraft, Golden Rule, Military Tactics, Rhetoric, Incitement, Eye For Art and Protection Of The Faith at ranks ranging from C to A.
    Emperor Who Never Slept
    Battle Continuation
    (D+)- Ability to stay alive in combat, and continue fighting despite injuries. For Saver- an emperor who never displayed feats of arms- this Skill derives not from his vitality on the battlefield but is rather an abstract conceptualization of the tireless work he spent in service to his Empire. When stricken by the Black Death- a disease which had a nearly zero survival rate- Saver fell into a deep coma but resolutely clung to life, refusing to pass away from this world so long as the empire he crafted still depended on him. Eventually, he underwent a miraculous recovery and immediately thrust himself back into work, continuing to campaign ceaselessly for his empire to his very last breath. At this rank, Saver's fighting prowess is wholly unimpeded by factors such as illness or fatigue, while his body remains operable until a decisive crippling blow is struck.

    Twisted Ideal (EX)- Connotes one who's existence has been twisted, not through internal corruption but a burden imposed by another. Due to being summoned by his foremost general Belisarius who nearly worshipped Saver and believed him to be a true Divine Spirit in mortal guise that would bring salvation to the world, Saver's existence has been greatly distorted to match the perceptions of his summoner. He is no longer "Justinian the Great" but an avatar of Rome and divine monarchy itself, an absolute authority made flesh to conquer and subdue the entire world. Though made far stronger than he was in life, the burden of this role has eroded Saver's human nature almost entirely.

    Territory Creation (EX)- Ability to formulate a territory advantageous to oneself as a Magus. Through Saver's first Noble Phantasm, creation of a 'Holy Empire' which can engulf the entire world becomes possible, infinitely surpassing a mere Temple. Within this domain, his power and divine authority are drastically boosted.


    Noble Phantasms:


    Mirabilia Urbis Romae- Eternal Marvels Of Rome (EX, Anti-World): Byzantium. The Rome of the East. A mere remnant of the once-great Roman Empire after the fall of the West. But to Saver, it was so much more. His dream was of a reunited Rome, one that could stand upon the world stage as a shining beacon of civilization as it had in ages past. To Saver's eyes, Byzantium- that humble empire- would become the seed from which a new and far greater Rome would sprout forth upon the earth. His Rome. The incarnation of his ideals, an empire whose glory would shine forever to the ends of the world.

    Saver's dream- no mere childish fantasy but an absolute ambition engraved into his very being- has been sublimated into the emperor's greatest Noble Phantasm. One that embodies, not the earthly Rome of Saver's lifetime, but the vision of an ideal empire which he poured so much blood, sweat and toil into bringing to fruition.

    Through securing the leylines of the nearby area, Saver can manifest his grand dream in existence as a Bounded Field surpassing even a Reality Marble. His Bounded Field encroaches upon the surroundings, passively overwriting them with Saver's vision of an ideal Rome- defined by endless towers of gold and ivory, majestic shining arches and humungous domed cathedrals adorned with beatific figures. All the wondrous monuments of Rome- from the gleaming dome of the Hagia Sophia to the splendid colosseum, St. Peter's Basilica and many more- can be seen here regardless of whether they ever existed together in history; an anachronistic presentation to the eternal glory of the Roman Empire across past, present and future.

    Within this domain- this holy empire that is more Saver's body then his own flesh and blood- the scope of Saver's power is increased dramatically. Divine authority soaks the air, an almost tangible presence which permeates inescapably through every nook and cranny of the eternal city. Those within face an immense mental pressure that risks destroying the psyches of particularly weak-willed opponents, reducing them to mindless sycophants kneeling and praising the might of Rome.

    Saver can both reshape the surrounding architecture and also spawn off new structures altogether, all at the speed of thought. What exist as marvels to showcase the power of Rome quickly become weapons of divine punishment to all foolish enough to defy it. Huge pointed obelisks erupt from the ground to impale Saver's enemies, towering marble walls sprout up to seal off their escape, bathhouses pour out scalding deluges of water like floodgates and majestic domes enclose from above akin to great jaws of death before collapsing on their entrapped guests. Even stone sculptures of past heroes and emperors can be animated as unfeeling, obedient footsoldiers and brought to bear against intruders.

    Once activated, this Bounded Field will continuously pillage Mana from the local area in order to sustain and expand itself. Given time, it could eventually expand to covering the entirety of a country or even the planet itself, rewriting the universal Reality Marble of Gaea with one where Saver's will alone reigns supreme. And fulfilling once and for all his dream of a revived empire.

    Even without invoking its true name, Saver may also summon particular objects and elements directly from his Bounded Field. While all the glories of Rome can be brought to bear against the emperor's foes, there are some he favors in particular and can essentially be considered sub-Noble Phantasms of the Heroic Spirit Saver.

    These are listed below as follows:

    Spoiler:
    Miklagard- Walls Of The Eternal City (B++, Barrier): The legendary great walls of Constantinople, the capital city of Eastern Rome in which Saver himself dwelt. The city's defenses were said to be some of the greatest in the ancient world and, though laid siege to countless times, the walls remained impregnable for nearly nine hundred years. Saver may manifest a portion of these fabled walls as an incredibly sturdy barrier-type Noble Phantasm. Rather then the true walls from history, this is a conceptual construct embodying all the defenses of that great city layered into a single existence- an absolute barrier to reject all filth from the outside world.

    All the multiple levels of fortification which defended Constantiple from attack have been conceptualized into a layered defense with each row stronger then the last. The outer row, the so-called Golden Gate, is made of solid gold, beyond that is the Xylokerkos Gate, past that the Gate of Rhegion, then of Romanus and Charisius before finally reaching the innermost defense, the Theodosian Wall itself.

    In order to reach Saver, any attack should have to break through all six layers- each of them low-level barrier Noble Phantasms in their own right- and then retain the energy to continue going. Unless they possess special anecdotes of barrier-piercing, only a Noble Phantasm of A+ or higher is capable of such a feat.

    The name of this Noble Phantasm, Miklagard, is not that given by Saver himself. Rather, it is a title used by the Vikings upon first seeing Constantinople, meaning 'The greatest city'. To the Vikings, the stalwart defenses enclosing a city of incredible grandeur and luxury must have appeared a sight straight out of Valhalla itself.


    Spoiler:
    Igne Graeco- The Ever-Blazing Flames (C+, Anti-Unit~Army): One of the Byzantine Empire's most ingenious, not to mention fiendish, inventions. Through unknown engineering means- which were in fact Magecraft from the empire's secret sorcerers, it was devised a special form of fire that would not be extinguished upon touching water. This invention, known as Greek Fire by those who regarded the Byzantines as Greek rather then Roman, quickly became a terror to the barbarian foes of Rome, responsible for many of the great empire's key military victories.

    Saver can summon this Greek fire either directly or from levitating turrets in the shape of ferocious beasts to rain down upon his enemies. The fire- blazing an unearthly emerald green hue- is supernatural in nature and can only be extinguished through magical means, otherwise continuing to burn until there's nothing left.

    At its greatest potential, Saver can manifest several dozen beastly cannons far up into the air at once to bombard his foes with a scourging onslaught of spectral fire, able to reduce an entire fleet of ships to white ashes in minutes. A powerful Anti-Army destructive attack.


    Spoiler:
    Hagia Sophia- Church Of Holy Wisdom (A, Fortress): One of Saver's most iconic constructions during his imperial reign, a holy cathedral created to replace the one that perished in fire during the Nika Revolt. An unrivalled marvel of architecture in the ancient world- perhaps outshining even the temple of King Solomon himself.

    It sports a magnificent domed roof surrounded by four gleaming minarets- a late addition from when the church briefly fell into Ottoman hands. The holy sanctum's interior is decorated with intricate relief images showing angelic figures and past emperors, most prominently Justinian himself whose regal face gazes down up from high, overlooking the proceedings with kingly grace.

    As a holy church, violence of any sort is prohibited within its grounds. A powerful mental suggestion effect applies to any to set foot in the Hagia Sophia, naturally suppressing aggressive intentions so long as they remain. A Skill granting resistance to mental interference of rank B or higher is needed to stand up to this effect. Of course, this applies just as much to Saver himself.

    As such, this Noble Phantasm is most effective for the purposes of establishing of neutral ground for negotiations. Also, this church was created to house the primeval Logos, the "Wisdom of God" personified by the spirit Sophia. While inside, Saver may tap into that sacred wisdom to guide him down the most opportune course of action, temporarily gaining the Skill Revelation at rank C.


    Spoiler:
    Lancea Longini- Sacred Lance Of Deicide (B, Anti-Unit): The legendary lance which supposedly pierced the side of Christ on the cross, becoming a peerless holy relic. Since it too was an artifact of Rome and later allegedly stored in the Hagia Sophia itself, Saver may call upon this lance as another one of his weapons.

    An ornate golden-colored lance sporting a cross-shaped guard. Normally it would possess a powerful Anti-Divine attack reflecting its legend as the "god-slaying spear" but, as he is not the weapon's true owner, Saver cannot unlock that aspect. Instead, he is limited to using it solely as a mundane spear.

    It is his primary weapon to defend himself, but since Saver prefers to avoid close combat this is one of his less utilized treasures despite its great fame.


    Nigrum Mortem- Divine Scourge Of The Emperor (A++, Anti-Human): Saver's second true Noble Phantasm, crystallizing the Black Death which ravaged the empire during his reign. The horrid disease was believed to be divine punishment for the empire's sins, and enemies of Saver regarded his own debauchery as having invited the plague to Rome.

    In Saver's altered form, the concept of the Black Death as a punishment upon a corrupt and decadent emperor has been inverted into a divine scourge by which the true holy monarch metes out judgment on those who sinfully oppose his reign.

    The Black Death itself has been subjugated to Saver's will and becomes the whip that he uses to scourge enemies. Saver can summon the plague at will in the form of a thick dark purple miasma, a very incarnation of the disease given tangible form and spreading to every living thing that it touches. Under his command, the plague can take shape into nearly any form imaginable, from lashing tendrils extending out from his fingertips to monstrous claws and fangs or huge churning waves of disease that can sweep over entire landscapes and reduce them to blighted wastelands. Any living creature exposed to this miasma will immediately come down with an even more potent version of the Black Plague. Normal humans perish in seconds, a strange red rash spreading across the victim's whole body, almost resembling otherworldly sigils as their life-force is rapidly drained away to leave behind an emaciated corpse.

    Heroic Spirits can last longer, undergoing the normal progression of the disease instead of dying instantly. But even they are doomed to a slow, festering demise, growing weaker and weaker as the plague saps more of their vitality. While a high rank in Endurance can delay its progression, what is truly needed to evade the inevitable demise is a power to fight against preordained fate itself. Luck of rank B or higher provides a chance of survival depending on the Servant's willpower. It can also be negated by Skills granting immunity to poisons at rank A. Also, as a curse specifically targeting "humans", it can be resisted by those possessing a degree of non-human nature, such as artificial humans (Homunculi) or demigods.

    By invoking this Noble Phantasm's true name, a massive amount of swirling miasma is summoned before gathering together in front of Saver. After a few moments, the miasma coalesces into the form of a towering grotesque figure resembling a grim reaper, the screaming faces of countless anguished souls visible in its smoky body. It wields a gigantic scythe which is similarly constructed out of writhing smog. This is the truest form of the Black Plague, an avatar of death itself to claim the souls of mankind. Despite its horrid appearance, the creature is an ersatz Divine Spirit reflecting popular belief in the Black Death as retribution for humanity's sins.

    This being is incredibly powerful, a single swing of its terrible scythe able to bring death to a vast swathe of countryside at once. Its smoky body is difficult to damage and will continuously reform when attacked. The black giant is wholly subservient to Saver's will and he can command it through sweeping theatrical gestures, as if conducting a macabre puppet show. Though very strong, summoning and sustaining the giant in corporeal form demands an immense amount of Mana from Saver, severely taxing even his ample reserves. As such, he only calls upon its true form as a last resort when pushed back into a corner, something that is unlikely due to the nigh-unrivalled power that he possesses even without it.


    Key Words/Craft Essences

    The Last Roman
    "I was the last of the Romans.
    Such a romantic title. But what it truly means, is that all others fell after me.
    The empire I crafted crumbled apart after my death into worthless ashes.
    My entire life's work was reduced to naught; a pointless farce. Sound and fury that ultimately signified nothing.
    That is not acceptable. I will not permit the ideal which I sought after to perish from this world so easily. Stain my hands with blood if need be, I will continue to reach for that dream of a reunited Rome with bloodied fingers.
    I shall uphold 'Rome', even if it means becoming a demon."


    Belisarius
    "...That woman? She truly is a perplexing creature. No matter what I do or say, she remains utterly loyal to me nonetheless.
    Hmph. Do I care for her? The man I once was surely held some feelings for her, but in my mind she is but a useful pawn and nothing more. For the sake of my ambitions of a revived Rome I will sacrifice everything, even my own self.
    ...Are my cheeks blushing when I think of her? T-that is merely the heat! Do not even think of such absurd things around me!"


    Words From The Crimson Ancestor
    "It seems you still don't understand. In that case, allow me to enlighten you, oh foolish emperor of the East.

    ...Rome will never fade. Even if the empire crumbles to ash, so long as there are humans striving for a better future, the glories of Rome shall live on.
    A revived Rome, hmm? Such a thing is unneeded. Because, the splendid world around us... that is already Rome, one far grander then you could ever realize.
    Someone who stomps on the hopes and dreams of others, that kind of person can never embody Rome."



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    So, I finally finished up my absurdly wanked Justinian Alter sheet. I think he's possibly one of the most overpowered Servants I've ever done... In any case, I had an absolute ton of fun working on this guy, so that's what counts, I suppose. It goes without saying that he'd end up the final boss in pretty much any Grail War he were to show up in... I also took a cue from Hermes and added a Craft Essences section for extra flavor. Might go back and add one to a few of my older sheets...

    As always, be sure to drop by with comments and criticisms! Thanks. Really curious as to what people think of this guy...
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    Niiiiiiiiiiiiice.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Justinian
    Huh so you actually did it.

    Wow, A guy so overpowered that it seems crazy but embodies a concept so thoroughly that it makes me want to know more. This is amazing work, truely awesome. This is probably one of the most well thought out sheets that i've seen and its breathtaking, well done.

    Now heres the review. At my first instict i want to say nerf it, oh so please nerf it, but the problem is that i don't really see a good way to do it. From what i see everything seems perfect and is all justifiable so theres no problem with that. The best i can do is offer some advice on what i think would be going little to much over the top but thats not really that needed though.

    First will be about Mikalagard, i honestly think its too strong really. While Constinople walls were famous i don't it should be on a level that its superior to both God Hand and Rho Aias, especially for a sub NP. Not saying to change it much mind you but maybe don't make it so effective to all NPs, mabye change it that its more effective against Anti-Army and Anti-Fortress.

    The other crit would be about Imperial Privalage. I think its abit overkill and excessive with all the other things he got but it wouldn't make sense for his concept if he didn't have it and at that rank. The best solution i have would be that he would only be able to use it in his NP and that it be sealed outside it.

    Anyhow this is just some suggestions that i thought up with and you really don't need to change anything really. All and All this is an awesome sheet and you deserve all the praise you can get. Well done good sir
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    Aw, you're making be blush!

    Yeah, he's basically intended to be a ridiculously powerful final boss character who all the remaining heroes would have to band together to defeat. Definitely one of my absolute favorite Servants I've ever done, along with a few others such as Don Quixote. In any case, I very much appreciate your heartfelt feedback.

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    Hey, the website is back online. Neat. Can't say much more than what Ice already did, but that Justinian sheet is seriously impressive.

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    By the way, I've gone back and added Key Words/Craft Essences to my Belisarius and Don Quixote sheets.

    It really does add quite a bit of flavor. Since I don't usually include a lore section, this is another way for me to provide more of a glimpse into character's personalities.

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    I'm so excited because i'm now with the current status of this thread i'm now officially a shitty fanfic writer.
    I dunno if probably know about this dude, but i felt like as a BR i should have done at least one servant.



    (Lourenço Sombra from the brazilian fighting game "Trajes Fatais")
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    True Name:Virgulino Ferreira da Silva
    Also known as: Lampião; King of Bandits; Lord of the Badlands; Raider of the Sun
    Gender:Male
    Alignment:Lawful Good(Lawful Evil)
    Likes:Stealing, Virgin Mary, His Wife, His Crew, Opportunities
    Dislikes: Cops, Being Robbed, Lack of Ammunition
    Source: Brazil's Northeast
    Parameter & Skills
    STR: D
    END: D
    AGI: C
    MGI: E
    LCK: A

    Class Skills

    Independent Action
    A - This is the ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from the Master. At the higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract. With this rank it is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for two days without a Master. However, this is the ideal value achieved by maximally conserving mana and avoiding battle and Noble Phantasm usage.

    Magic Resistance
    E - This skill grants protection against magical effects. With this rank Archer cannot cancel spells, but magic damage is reduced somewhat.

    Personal Skills

    Marksmanship
    C - This is the Skill representing all-round shooting techniques, which includes quick drawing and trick shooting by means of small arms. Archer is a crackshot with most weapons favoring mostly his Winchester Rifle 1873, whom he calls the Papo Amarelo(Yellow Belly), but he trades perfect accuracy over supreme rate of fire.

    High-Speed Action Potential(Firearms)
    A++ - This skill represents one Servant ability to push his number of actions possible when handling an object. In Archer's case this translates in his supreme capacity into pushing the rate of fire of any firearm in his hand into levels that have long surpassed the human realm. There are almost no other servant that is able to lay as many bullets as Archer can.

    Disengage
    C - This ability allows to break away from combat. Bonus effect of returning battle conditions to what they were at the beginning of the match .

    Hero Of Justice(Fake)
    A - An effect similar to Demon King, where one reputation in life distorts their appearance as a servant, but while Demon King uses one's monstrous reputation as fuel to distort one's history, Hero Of Justice is the absolute opposite where one's history and appearance has been twisted by his reputation as a Hero. Archer, much like Nobunaga did with Demon King, actively used the reputation he gained as a hero in his favor during life, and so has control over this skill that others wouldn't have. With this skill Archer can cheat Destiny much like an Hero would, allowing for one-last minute reversals. Because Archer prefers to keep this skill on check to not completely affect his personality he trades precision of use over constant effect.
    Background & Lore
    Virgulino Ferreira da Silva, better known by the soubriquet Lampião, was the most famous bandit of the Cangaço and is the most famous folk hero of Country of Brazil. Born in the small city of Serra Talhada in northeast of Brazil in the year of 1897, Lampião eventually became the leader of a small band of bandits that spread fear & hope throughout the Sertão, the Brazilian badlands, until his death in 1938 in a small farm of Angicos. Lampião exploits would never escape the imaginary of the Brazilian mind, specially of those who lived in the badlands were stories of the bandit, fictional or real, dominated the fiction industry.

    To better understand who Lampião was and what was the Cangaço one should first understand the Sertão, the badlands where Lampião and his bandits roamed. Localized in the northeast of Brazil, the Sertão is a semi-arid region known for its dryness, compared to the rest of Brazil, and is known to have long years of absolute drought and short years where the rain cause great floods. One could compare it to Australian Outback. However more than the Australian Outback or even the American Frontier the Brazilian Sertão is known for the state of absolute misery held by the population. Thanks to the the irregular rain activity, the lack of investment by the Brazilian government, and the centralization of power in the hands of local colonels that controlled most of the important resources of the land putting the lower-class into a state of servitude, made living in the Sertão a miserable experience to members of said lower class. Hunger and poverty were common problems in the Sertão for much of Brazil existence as a independent nation, and up until the 80's it wasn't uncommon for many to simply die of hunger. Morally, Society in the Sertão was also vastly different from most of Brazil. Law enforcement were controlled by the local colonels who used their power to erase their enemies, robbery was considered an unpardonable crime while homicide is accepted by many a normal occurrence. What does it take for one to make banditry their life.

    The Cangaço, named after "the canga" better known as the Yoke in American speaking countries, was one of the main paths someone who had no qualms in killing to survive could take in the Sertão. The first was the path of a Jagunço, or mercenary, who worked for the many Colonels that controlled the outback doing their dirty deeds in exchange of money, clothing and a place to stay. And for those that for one reason or another couldn't work under their rule the path of a Cangaçeiro was their next option. The Cangaçeiro were nomad bandits that traveled in group through out the semi arid desert who worked with some of the most poor citizens of the region to survive.
    There are three types of people who follow that path. The first and the most common one are the ones who are forced out of hunger to join those groups: They make most part of the grunts and generally never rise to positions of leadership under those groups. The second type are the Avengers: People who join the bandits to acquire means to kill someone who has done harm upon them and their family. Those are the most romanticized of the Cangaçeiros. Unable to find in the current justice system ways to realize their righteous vengeance they turn themselves into the outlaw life. While this is absolutely the most romanticized of the versions, Cangaçeiros that are truly in this life to realize their vengeance tend to settle down after managing to do so. The last type of bandit, and the one that Lampião better represents, is the opportunistic one: Here the bandit falls in love with all the benefits of this kind of life. Lampião might have started his career as the second type but it didn't take look before he threw away all pretense of revenge and begun treating his outlaw life as a legitimate career.

    Virgulino joined the group of Sinho Pereira after losing his father in a dispute between families. Sinho Pereira was a competent Cangaçeiro and while he never reached the heights other Cangaçeiros have reached, Lampião had deep respect over his old boss and his crew who Lampião considers to be his real family. It was under the command of Sinho Pereira that Virgulino got the famous nickname of Lampião, or Oil Lamp in english: In night battles Lampião could fire so quickly with his Winchester Rifle that the light coming out of the barrel of his gun was continuous almost like an Oil Lamp. Amusingly Sinho Pereira disliked that habit because of how quickly Lampião was able to spend the ammunition of the crew. Out of everything Sinho Pereira has taught Lampião, ammunition management wasn't his forte. When the old bandit retired, he gave command of his crew to Lampião who quickly rose to the ranks of second-in-command.
    Now "Capitão Lampião", the cangaçeiro quickly rose his influence not only in the region of where he was born, not only in the outback, but throughout the entirety of the Northeast of Brazil. He had alliances with many colonels, many important regilious figure and the admiration of many of the regular citizens of northeast who struggled with their daily lives. Lampião adventures and hijinks against authority, his cruelty against those who betrayed his code of law and his opportunism transformed into legendary tales, some commissioned by the bandit himself, that dominated the imaginary of the northeasterners.

    That fascination didn't stop with his death in a surprise ambush by the police. Lampião was, and still is, arguably the most famous folk hero of Brazil and definitively the most famous legend of the entirety of Northeast of Brazil. His characterization changes between selfless Robin Hood-type hero to Crazed Killer but no matter what version you're talking about the bandit king dominates the scene symbolizing complete freedom. He has talked with Jesus, Robbed Satan and played football with God. And now Lampião, King of Bandits will enjoy life once again in this War of Legends
    Personality & Tactics
    Sly, schemer, always craving for more and incredibly opportunistic, Archer isn't afraid of utilizing any advantage to his side to get whatever he desires. He will try to lie, cheat and steal his way to victory. While he is definitively stronger when summoned in Brazil, as a young legend he still pales in comparison to most heroes having to rely in smart use of his Hero of Justice(Fake) skill to create opportunities where there wouldn't be one. Smart timing of his Noble Phantasms can also create opportunities that could spell defeat to other Master-Servant pairs.

    Lampião hates authority but isn't afraid to use the image of servitude to his favor. He will willingly pretend to serve under a stronger person, but he is also quick to betray them as soon as Lampião gets what he wants. This makes his relationship potentially dangerous for his Master. If a Master is unable to recognize that and mend his ways, Archer will betray him at the worst possible moment and seek another master. However if the Master puts Archer in the position of leadership of the pair or if he somehow manages to resemble like one of old crew, Lampião will stick with him until he deems possible.

    For all his cruel pragmatism Archer is, surprisingly, a religious man. He has immense respect for Men of Cloth, and likes to hear them talk about God, Jesus and specially Virgin Mary much like a simple hardworking man from the Sertão would. He hates the idea of hurting someone from the church and will try to bargain with them first if push comes to shove, but he will fight if unable to avoid violence.
    Noble Phantasms
    Thirsty Lives
    Vidas Sedentas

    Vidas Secas(Barren Lives) is the name given to the classic book written in 1938 by famous Brazilian writer Graciliano Ramos that talks about the the cyclical story of a family of five: Fabiano, the father; Sinhá Vitória, the mother; two sons (just called boys) and their dog called Baleia (whale in Portuguese) in the poverty stricken and arid Brazilian northeast. It's often considered one of the greatest books in Brazilian literature and its part of Cycle of Droughts, a literature movement that focused on the Sertão and the life under the constant drought. In Vidas Secas even when in search for a better hope, the humans in this book are represented as animals clinging to live stuck in a cycle of constant hunger and defeat written in a very dry prose. Baleia is often said to be the most humane creature in the book, specially compared to the family. The state of poverty, defeat and dryness that is one that follows the lives of most people that lived during those times reducing their spirit to one that was lower than beasts. Except for one person

    Lampião rose from that cycle, achieving great victories and acquiring great riches. It wasn't like that he didn't feel the drought that sucked everyone dry. No, he felt that more than anyone. He felt that if he simpley tried to live it wouldn't be enough to survive. He may have joined the bandit group in search of revenge superficially but deep inside the only wanted to quench his insatiable thirst. So he quickly set revenge aside and fell headfirst into the bandit life. He stole, killed and plundered, and every time he did for a second he felt that thirst quenched, but it wasn't long before he felt that desire again. And he continued to felt that craving until he met his end.
    This Noble Phantasm is the crystallization of Lampião's Origin "Thirst". Thanks to his Origin and the barrenness of the Sertão, Lampião has inherited a constant craving for more that is present in all of his actions. Lampião awakened to his origin after a fated meeting with a certain saint in 1926. After that meeting, Lampião thirst grew to immeasurable heights, and as his influence grew more his Origin started to affect not only himself but interacted with the physical world. At the basic level, his Noble Phantasm is an "always active" Noble Phantasm. Every attack by Lampião carries the ability to "drain" one's life force. All that Od and Mana drained will flow directly to Lampião effectively making Lampião a self-sufficient servant if he is always on attack. On the other hand, Lampião consumes more prana than a servant of his level normally would thanks to this Noble Phantasm. Not only that but whenever his Master tries to grant Lampião magical energy, the servant will naturally drains more of said energy from his Master. If the Master isn't careful Lampião might also forcefully take control of the Magical Path between the two and suck his Master dry.
    Rank C - Anti-Unit

    The Cycle of Droughts
    O Sertão Sou Eu

    The second Noble Phantasm of the King of Bandits is more accurately an expansion of his previous Noble Phantasm. Here Lampião expands the influence of his Origin transforming it in a Bounded Field that surrounds Lampião and that its about the same size of an small house. Inside this Bounded Field Lampião will begin to drain all Mana and Od from the zone, slowly transforming the scenery into one that resembles the the backlands from where Archer came from. All that prana will then be flowed directly into Lampião who in turn will use part of that prana to increase the size of his bounded field. Here Archer falls completely into his Origin losing almost any self-control, becoming something close to the human personification of the Sertão, exhausting and ravishing any life form that tries to live in the new desert and using their strength to fortify himself. This cycle of absorption/enlarging will continue either until the death of Lampião or the use of a command spell by his Master
    Rank B - Anti-Country


    I created like two skills for him, mostly because i didn't want him have the same accuracy with guns that Billy the Kid has. If i wanted to just use marksman to symbolize Lampião ability with spitting bullets i would either put tons of +++ in the skill or make him the same level of Marksman with Billy, so i decided to create a new skill. That skill, High Speed Action Potential, or something like it, was actually my headcannon for a Class Skill for the mythical Gunner class. The idea is that with guns the servants have to deal with the limits of machinery. So normally when summoned in a different class like Archer, Billy the Kid for example has to deal with reloading and whatnot and if he isn't careful one of the legends could use that time to kill him while if he was summoned in the Gunner class basically actions like reloading don't trigger attacks of opportunity. Also thanks to that skill as a sideffect Gunners would be able handle machinery and realize minor actions much better than every other class.
    Hero of Justice(Fake) is something he only gets when summoned in Brazil and its mostly used to represent how what he symbolizes become much bigger than his actual actions and the love all the regional writers have of him.

    I had some ideas while writing this sheet so might write other BRs sheets i dunno. Maybe Father Cícero or Curupira. Be ready for Mystic Feet of Illusion i guess
    Last edited by JetKinen; December 26th, 2016 at 10:15 PM.

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    Did you give him "Max APM" as a skill? Neat sheet.

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    Lampião: Wow, that's one "thirsty" Servant. *shot*

    Seriously though, pretty nice job. I wonder how he'd interact with my Sciron? (Saying this since they both have the title 'King of Bandits')

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