Create-A-Servant 2

[Hakuro]

Very interesting sheet, i like it, especially the NPs.
Also want to let you know, theres a typo in IM where you call her Archer. Just want to let you know.

Thank you for the feedback and for noticing the mistake. That was from her last version that was an Archer.

I corrected it, also udpated the Magic Resistance (to D) and the type of Divina Processione (now an Anti-Army).

[MehKitteh]

Beatrice is a pretty interesting choice for a Servant, and I liked the sheet. Tetrangelio is pretty nice.

... Which gives me an inspiration to make a Dante sheet.

On second thought, might hold that idea...

[Bird of Hermes]

Not that anybody probably cares but I made the Bond CE for Uther Lily.

[RoydGolden]

Not that anybody probably cares but I made the Bond CE for Uther Lily.

Okay, that's pretty damn amusing.

[Bird of Hermes]

Okay, that's pretty damn amusing.

Thanks! Thought it was a bit different from the kinda I usually do. I considered making a Cheeky Nando's reference for a second but that would have been a stretch too far for an old joke anyways. I'll probably do another regarding the Red Comet at some point (when I have the time/can be bothered).

I also realised he might get along with Ail's Conchobar due to them both bad reputations regarding their later life. I might add it in the relationship section of if I ever make my own version.

Also regarding Ail's most recent sheet, I've noticed a typo. One of his skills is said to boost it to A+++ but it's already at EX, I'm assuming it was supposed to be E?

[Zork Knight]

Source: Gleaming/Radiance Angel, Rage of Bahamut/Shadowverse

True Name: Saint Raphael the Archangel
Class: Caster (alternatively Ruler)
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Good
Attribute: Sky

Strength: D
Endurance: B
Agility: A
Mana: A+
Luck: A
Noble Phantasm: A+

Class Skills:
Item Construction: A
As the patron of apothecaries, druggists and pharmacists, Raphael can produce all sorts of medicaments. Although he has the knowledge to produce poisons and other harmful substances, he refuses to do so.

Territory Creation: A++
Creation of a "Pool of Healing" becomes possible. Within this area, healing magecraft is greatly bolstered, and the effects of poisons and diseases are halted (but not healed).

Personal Skills:
Baptism Sacrament: A+++
The creator of this style of magecraft was none other than Raphael, who made use of it to defeat and imprison several demons and fallen angels, most notably the demon king Asmodeus and the lustful angel Azazel. At this rank, even true Divine Spirits can be sublimated with little effort.

Divine Core: EX
Denotes one's status as a perfect Divine Spirit from birth. Raphael is one of the seven archangels, the highest-ranking angels in the divine hierarchy.

Nursing of Steel: EX
Despite making use of bizarre and primitive techniques of healing (most of which seem to involve fish guts), Raphael can nonetheless treat any injury possessed by any patient.

Saint: C
When summoned as Caster, Raphael will most likely choose to produce Holy Shrouds, in order to strengthen his master.


Noble Phantasm

Deus Sanat

Lord's Mercy

- Support, Rank A+

The staff given by God to Raphael, the archangel of healing. A fraction of His own power, it possesses the ability to heal any malady afflicting a person - and is not limited to the body. Injuries, diseases, poison, curses, madness, petrification, mental interference, fatigue, etc. - all negative conditions are removed with a single touch of the staff. Even skills such as Mad Enhancement and Weak Constitution can be removed by this Noble Phantasm. However, it can only be used once per individual - for God's mercy is not to be distributed freely. If used on a "purely evil" target (such as a demon, fallen angel, monster or pagan god), the staff will instead have a negative effect, reducing all their parameters by two ranks - in this case, the "mercy" is with everyone else.

Lore

Likes: romantic comedies, medical dramas, swimming
Dislikes: promiscuity
Talents: matchmaking
Natural enemy: Pale Rider

One of the three named archangels of Christian tradition, Raphael is the one most associated with healing. The Book of Enoch tells of how God sent him to imprison Azazel, and in the Book of Tobit Raphael guides Tobit's son Tobiah, saves Tobiah's bride Sarah from Asmodeus' torment, and heals the blind Tobit wish a fish's gall. He is also identified as the angel who gave the waters of the Pool of Bethesda its healing properties, in the New Testament.

Unlike Michael, who does his best to remain an "ideal but distant paragon", Raphael very much enjoys meddling in humanity's affairs, providing aid in the matters of health and love. He is hopelessly romantic, and nothing brings him more joy than seeing a happy couple of lovers getting married and living happily (and healthily) ever after. For that same reason, he abhors sex just for pleasure, and would likely be at odds with most Greek, Roman and, particularly, Irish Servants. He also has a need to care for those around him, giving advices for all sorts of problems, making sure they are fine, pushing them towards a healthy lifestyle, etc.

Although he has no wish for the Grail, he might answer the call of a magus whose wish he finds particularly noble. Specially if said magus is fighting for someone they love, or if a relationship might arise in the War...

Key Words/Craft Essences

Shroud of Raphael

"There are plenty of philanderers and temptresses in Chaldea.
It is quite unfortunate, but they are necessary to ensure mankind's future...
But, never fear. My holy shroud shall protect you from any temptation!
If you ever feel any desire, it will be born out of true love, not lust.

Oh, what's that, Miss Mashu? You want it gift wrapped?"

[SleepMode]

(This is a test servant entry, so if there are any errors or apparent Overpoweredness, please inform me and recommend any ways to remedy it.)

Servant Class: Assassin

True Name: Virginia Hall

Title: "The Limping Lady"

Gender: Female

Alignment: Neutral Good

Attribute: Man

Alternate Classes: None

Catalyst: Her Distinguished Service Cross medal

Likes: Sneaking, Being helpful, "Cuthbert"

Dislikes: Hunting, Running, Germans

Talents: Espionage and Information Extraction

Natural Enemy: Mata Hari

Background:

Born in April 6, 1906, in Baltimore, Maryland, Virginia Hall was a failed service clerk turned spy when she lost her left leg in an hunting accident. Replacing it was a prosthetic which it was later nicknamed "Cuthbert." Afterwards, she joined the Ambulance service in 1940 before transferring to the Special Operations Executive in Britain. After 15 months, Virginia was sent to Vichy to help with the French Underground resistance.

Despite being nearly caught in 1942 and inprisoned in Spain, Virginia still did not stop her involvement in liberating France from the Axis. From mapping drop zones and safe houses to training revolutionaries, she managed to gain norteriety as of the Gestapo's high priority targets. One of her biggest accomplishments is when D-Day loomed, Virginia managed to destroy 4 major bridge routes, derailed supply train tracks, severed key communication lines, killed 150 Germans and captured 500 more.

Upon returning to the U.S. Virginia Hall was awarded the Distinguished Service Cross, and retired from duty to Barnesville, Maryland. Eventually, she died at the age of 76.

Parameters:

Strength - E+
Endurance - E
​Agility - D- (due to Cuthbert)
Mana - E
Luck - A
N. Phantasm: B+

Class Skills:

Prescence concealment - B - Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. It is possible to disappear and become extremely difficult to be detected. The rank of presence concealment drops considerably when preparing to attack.
Even with her prothetic leg Cuthbert, Virginia was still able to stealthily extract information and perform reconnaissance without fail.

Personal Skills:
Eye of the Mind (True) - C - A danger-avoidance ability that utilizes the intelligence collected up to the current time as the basis, in order to predict the opponent’s activity and change the current situation. This is not a result of talent, but an overwhelming amount of combat experience. A weapon wielded by none other than a mortal, gained through tenacious training. From years of espionage,
Virginia Hall is able to develop a sixth sense of sorts, allowing her to retreat in advance before any suspicions arise.

Disengage - B- - The ability to withdraw from the battlefield, or reset the battle conditions.
Virginia is able to flee from the scene of battle effortlessly, although ranked down due to Cuthbert.

Knowledge is Power - B+ - Due to her exceptional ability to gather information, Virginia can increase her parameters the more she knows about her opponents; the lowest boost is knowing the targets' names, which increases any one of her parameters of choice by one rank, and the biggest boost by knowing their entire background, interests, habits, schedules, weaknesses, etc., then all parameters (except for her Luck and Noble Phantasm) will increase by three ranks.

Planning - D-A - Tactical thinking meant for assassinating a target. Unlike Military Tactics, this is constricted to only assassination missions in which few people are involved.
Scales depending on the amount of information learned and time studying the target.

Noble Phantasm:

Resistance Network - Eyes and Ears are Everywhere
Anti-City/B+

Number of Operatives: 101

With information gathering being her forte, Virginia Hall summons the entire Resistance Intelligence Network as an base located 40 Feet below the ground. The underground base not only serves as an information hub, but also as a safehouse in emergency cases. The base can sustain the master for 2 months in terms of supplies.

With the base, Virginia can plant cameras, deploy operatives with the same Prescence Concealment level as her, tap communication lines (even wireless), and create multiple secret passages that only she can pass. All of these allow Virginia to gather information at an exponentially quicker pace. As a result,Virginia having an entire city under her surveillance. Also, the base constantly updates information directly to Virginia's mind, keeping her updated on what her target are doing.

In case if a Servant or Master stumble into the underground system, it would be near impossible for them to navigate the tunnels. Confusing passageways aren't the only defense, as there are multiple traps consisting of pit traps, trip wires, and mines litter the tunnels. Only Virginia, her Master, and the resistance operatives summoned know how to travel through the tunnel system.

Note that this isn't an offensive Noble Phantasm, It can't put up much of a fight after an enemy reaches the main base. The operatives in the base have E for endurance, meaning they can be felled easily.

[4score7years]

Saint Raphael is pretty creative and has a great personality, but I don't really have that much to say about him beyond that. Very well balanced though.

Virginia Hall: Welcome to the forum. A few notes:

I feel like A+ Presence Concealment is a little too high. Luck EX is definitely too high. B-A at most. As a general rule avoid EX rankings unless they're really deserved. Daily reminder that Excalibur is A+ rank. (GO power creep continues to challenge this, though.) You should add actual descriptions to Planning and Disengage (you can copy the generic description from the wiki or the Mats, and add the description for the specific rank of the skill). I think Knowledge is Power and the NP might benefit from more detail and description.

This might seem like a lot of stuff to fix but most of it is pretty minor and can be fixed easily enough. And of course all of it is given with the intention of helping you make your sheets better. In any case, again, welcome to the forums

[RoydGolden]

Daily reminder that Excalibur is A+ rank.

A++ actually, but close enough.

[Spartacus]

Tbh its okay having an OP NP as long its make sense to have one. Its not like having an EX Rank in a certain field can beat Gilgamesh or Saber. But this is just my opinion.

But still, I don't know (and don't think) this Virginia Hall deserve an EX Rank tho.

[zikari8]

@ Virginia Hall

Just to add to some suggestions, you mention Cuthbert a few times in your sheet but the name doesn't actually come up in the background. For simple clarity sake, I think it'd be nice to have it there.

Considering Presence Concealment for a Hassan is A+, I'd bargain that Hall isn't at that level of sneakery. Also, don't take my word for this but I was under the impression one couldn't have both Presence Concealment and Espionage at the same time, since they counter-act one another.

That's all I have that others haven't already said. Still, I like the novelty of the Servant. Good Job and welcome to the forum.

[4score7years]

A++ actually, but close enough.

Whoops! Ah, I feel a little silly for having messed that one up.

[SleepMode]

Yeah, I realized the Luck parameter may be overdone, so yeah, also the Prescence Concealment, too... Overall, Thanks for the suggestions!

EDIT: currently changing them right now...

EDIT 2: Changes are done! See if there's anything else in need of change!

[asterism42]

Another old sheet of mine with a facelift because frankly it's easier than doing a new sheet.

Saber
Don Giovanni


Source

In a more casual setting

Alignment: Neutral Evil
STR: C
END: D
AGI: A
MAG: D
LUCK: B
NP: B

Class Skills

Magic Resistance (C): An ability which grants protection against magical effects. Different from the Resistance effect that merely rejects magical energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. This rank is sufficient to only cancel spells with a chant below two verses, and therefore cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals. Because he himself does not have any innate Magic Resistance, Giovanni’s rank is much poorer than what one would expect from a Saber class Servant. “As if that matters. I’ll satisfy with whatever rank I’m given.”

Riding (A): The expertise to ride animals and vehicles. At this rank most vehicles can be handled with expert skill. In addition, all creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts. Saber specialises in riding animals; as long as it is an animal that exists in reality, even if it is a wild animal, Saber can ride it. However, as he is not famed for feats of skill or a famous mount whilst alive, it might be best not to ponder why his rank in this ability is so high. No, really. Don’t. And definitely don’t ask to see a demonstration of his skills.

Personal Skills

Seduction (EX): The ability to bend others to one’s will using charm and looks. Giovanni’s speciality is seducing women, from all ages and walks of life. Even knowing his reputation as a seducer is not enough, and for any female to spend any amount of time with him is dangerous. He will go to any lengths to get what he wants, employing methods both mystical and mundane to bend them to his will. This skill is the epitome of that single-mindedness, resulting in an aura that erodes common sense and inhibitions. No matter the woman, regardless of age or appearance, he will attempt to woo them. Even beyond his own lecherous personality, it is the influence of his legend that causes him to act this way. So when he says he can’t help himself, he really can’t help himself.

Master of Disguise (B): The ability to create a false persona for oneself to hide behind. Similar, but different to the Presence Concealment possessed by Assassins. Whereas Presence Concealment hides one’s presence completely, Disguise replaces it with a different presence. At this rank, Giovanni is able to adopt a new persona with a simple change of clothes, and he is capable of makings others appear to be Don Giovanni by giving them his clothes to wear. A simple, but effective, suggestion type magecraft. As with any disguise, the instant it is seen through it immediately becomes worthless, and the charm will wear off even those who were fooled at that point.

Battle Continuation (E): A Skill that allows for the continuation of combat after sustaining mortal wounds; it also reduces the mortality rate from injuries. This Skill represents the ability to survive and/or the mentality of one who doesn't know when to give up, consisting of one's strength of vitality in predicaments. It is also one of the powers of a vampire. The best result is achieved when a resilient body is combined with this Skill, though at this pitiful E-rank, it is more useful for slithering out of disadvantageous situations than it is for actually continuing to fight. Giovanni has absolutely no qualms about feigning surrender then stabbing his foe in the back.

Noble Phantasms

Espada Lujurosa

The Sword of Death and Desire

Anti-Unit, C: The sword Noble Phantasm in Giovanni’s possession, a slender rapier with roses patterned on the hilt. When the light shines on it, it gleams with an oily sheen that scatters light across the spectrum and transfixes the eye. Symbolizing both Don Giovanni’s powers of seduction and his contempt for the laws of society, it is coated with a poison that enters the bloodstream as soon as the skin is cut. Against men, it will act to stop the heart in a matter of minutes. However, if it is used against a woman, the poison instead acts as a potent narcotic, numbing both their senses and their inhibitions, making them into Giovanni’s willing slaves. If left alone, he will cheerfully use this ability to gather himself a drugged harem. A despicable Noble Phantasm that solidifies Giovanni’s status as an Anti-Hero rather than a true Heroic Spirit.

Il Commandatore

The Stone Dinner Guest

Anti Army, B: Giovanni’s second Noble Phantasm, calling to mind the manner of his death. Whereas he will make use of the sword freely and happily, he is loath to use this second one and will only do so under great duress. Using this ability allows Giovanni to summon and animate the automaton: a great statue of a man, far larger than he was when he was alive. It has no special powers other than its great strength and resilient stone body, but it is enough as it is capable of crushing entire armies in a slow, relentless march with its stone fists and feet. Despite it being under Giovanni’s control (indeed, it could be called the Servant of a Servant), he is terrified of it, due to him being killed by it in his past life. Giovanni is on his best behaviour around it, as should he misbehave in its presence, there is a chance its autonomy will awaken and it will flatten him.

Lore

Likes: Women
Dislikes: The word ‘no’
Talents: Avoiding trouble
Natural Enemy: Agalmatophobia

Saber is Don Giovanni, perhaps more famously known by the Spanish version of his name, Don Juan. Despite being a Spanish spirit, he uses the Italian version of his name as he “likes the music that was written about me”. A wealthy, seductive libertine, he enjoyed nothing more than seducing countless women, using them and then throwing them away, and, if refused, he would quite happily use force instead. During one of his exploits, he killed the father of a woman he was chasing, before jokingly inviting the statue of the man built on his grave to dinner. The statue then came to life and killed Giovanni as punishment for his acts.

An exceptionally troublesome Servant. He is especially dangerous to a female Master, and will not even consider a Command Seal to be a proper deterrent. In fact, it might be in a lady Master’s best interests to “get it over with”. His personality is something of a double face: towards women his is charming, courteous and flirtatious, but towards men he is, for the most part, aloof and dismissive. Though one might assume him to be a lover rather than a fighter, he in fact revels in a fight, though that will not stop him from doing almost anything to win; he loves winning almost as much as he loves women. With his wish, he again may subvert expectations. Rather than wishing for the love of every woman in the world (“where’s the fun in that?”), he instead will wish to continue his exploits forever, without any fear of retribution or comeuppance.

Bond CE – The Book of the Bedpost

Madamina, il catalogo è questo
Delle belle che amò il padron mio;
Un catalogo egli è che ho fatt'io;
Osservate, leggete con me.

In Italia seicento e quaranta;
In Alemagna duecento e trentuna;
Cento in Francia, in Turchia novantuna;
Ma in Ispagna son già mille e tre.

(That’s 2,095, if you’re counting.)

Character Relations

Queen Medb – Kindred spirits. As Medb treats men, so Giovanni treats women. A meeting between the two would certainly be... interesting, although any observers may want to beat a hasty retreat, as they might not survive. Certainly any nearby buildings won’t.

Mozart – “Finch'han del vino calda la testa, una gran festa fa'preparar. Se trovi in piazza qualche ragazza, if teco ancor quella cerca menar… I like it. It’s catchy. I didn't like the ending much, though. Even if that's more or less what actually happened.”

Lancelot – Even more contempt than he has for most other men. Giovanni despises him, for being similar to him but hiding it beneath a veneer of righteousness. May try to corrupt him in the guise of ‘bros hanging out’.

Astolfo – No comment

[Zork Knight]

"Le Chevalier D'Eon - ERROR"

A fine sheet for a so-so Saber.

[SleepMode]

I'm planning to make an Servant Profile for Perenelle Flamel, the wife of Nicholas Flamel; but I have a few questions beforehand:

1. Given there's little information on her background, do I exercise artistic license to fill in the gaps?

2. Was the Church Executors a new part of the Church's organization? Since there isn't much of a chronological history I can follow.

[Bird of Hermes]

True Name: Saint Raphael the Archangel

Nice, I'm not certain that Angels are eligible as Heroic Spirits, but I've made three Gods so what do I know. Anyways, the sheet itself is pretty good but I think he seems more suited to the Ruler class but Caster works fine too.

Also nice to see skills like Nursing of Steel there too.

Riding (A): The expertise to ride animals and vehicles. At this rank most vehicles can be handled with expert skill. In addition, all creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts. Saber specialises in riding animals; as long as it is an animal that exists in reality, even if it is a wild animal, Saber can ride it. However, as he is not famed for feats of skill or a famous mount whilst alive, it might be best not to ponder why his rank in this ability is so high. No, really. Don’t. And definitely don’t ask to see a demonstration of his skills.

This line killed me.

- - - Updated - - -

I'm planning to make an Servant Profile for Perenelle Flamel, the wife of Nicholas Flamel; but I have a few questions beforehand:

1. Given there's little information on her background, do I exercise artistic license to fill in the gaps?

2. Was the Church Executors a new part of the Church's organization? Since there isn't much of a chronological history I can follow.

I made a Flamel sheet if you need help or need to base it off anything. I also made a guide for just such an occasion with a link to it in my sig.

[castor212]

the important question is is giovanni stamina fergus level

[Bird of Hermes]

His Endurance is only D and not A

[Raylen Cypher]

His Endurance is only D and not A

This out-of-context quote is going into my sig.