erlang shen was apparently born with a Third Eye that was really good at seeing.... and shot lasers. That blew up mountains.
Huh. So he's basically just Tien.
I could see you spinning his Eye as a Mystic Eye if you so persist. Personally, I don't really see it, considering the eye laser power seems... well, Karna does have eye lasers too so...
I could see you spinning his Eye as a Mystic Eye if you so persist. Personally, I don't really see it, considering the eye laser power seems... well, Karna does have eye lasers too so...
somewhere on some continent, in some random city of some merit.
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alright, hey before nay one critiques odin can i get 1 day to do some gramitcal fixes? also any sheets anyone has on him, so i can get some idea on what best to work on?
alright, hey before nay one critiques odin can i get 1 day to do some gramitcal fixes? also any sheets anyone has on him, so i can get some idea on what best to work on?
Odin is mostly okay now that he's been revised. I'm not quite sure what you mean by the "1 day" thing either, since you can fix up or add to your sheet anytime you want. It's not like there's some kind of time-limit.
Regarding your second question, I wrote up an Odin sheet ages ago, but it was one of the first batch I posted up after getting an account here and frankly not at all that great compared to my present ones (thinking of revising it, as a matter of fact). Hakuro wrote one too over on the old thread which was pretty creative, though you'd have to ask him for a link.
He's just putting the bone of his sword into other people until it explodes and lets out parts of him inside them.
Originally Posted by AvengerEmiya
Genderswaps are terrible, but I think I and other people would hate them less if Fate didn't keep ignoring actual heroines throughout history and folklore. Like, why bother turning Francis Drake into a woman when Ching Shih and Grace O'Malley exist?
Originally Posted by Five_X
Fate Zero is just Fate Stay Night for people who think Shirou is too girly
Alignment: True Neutral
STR: D
END: A
AGI: C
MAG: C
LUCK: A+
NP: EX
Class Skills
Independent Action (B): The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master. At higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract. It is both useful and troublesome depending on the disposition of the Servant and the rank of Independent Action. Acting in autonomy from the Master's Magical Energy supply, the Master can concentrate their own Magical Energy on large spells, and the Servant will be fine even in when they are unable to supply Magical Energy due to injury. The downside is that they can be harder to control, making the utilizing Command Spells the only true way to command them. Valentine can stay in the world for two days without a Master. However, this is the ideal value achieved by maximally conserving mana and avoiding battle and Noble Phantasm usage.
Magic Resistance (A+): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancels spells of A-Rank or below, no matter what High-Thaumaturgy it is. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a 'Magus Killer'. The Archer class’s natural resistance is bolstered by Valentine’s piety as a saint of the Christian faith, but as a result his resistance is negated in the face of the church’s sacraments.
Personal Skills
Saint (A): Indicates one who is acknowledged as a saint. When summoned as a Servant, the ability of saint is selected one among "raising the effectiveness of sacraments", "automatic HP recovery", "1 Rank-Up to Charisma" and "production of a holy shroud is possible". As one of the most famous saints of the Church, it goes without saying that Valentine has this skill. The shroud of Valentine can enhance or restore visual acuity and protects the possessor against attacks with a blind, charm or poison attribute.
Protection of the Faith (A+): A Skill possessed only by those who have sacrificed themselves for a religious view, it protects one from mental ailments. Despite being a form of divine protection, it is not a blessing from a higher existence. It is only the absoluteness of one's body and soul, which is born from faith. But if it is too high, it causes abnormalities in the personality. Valentine’s high rank in this skill and his feast day becoming a festival to celebrate love have combined to twist his personality into that of a ‘love freak’, calling himself a “Noble defender of love and justice!”
Battle Continuation (C): A Skill that allows for the continuation of combat after sustaining mortal wounds. It will also reduce mortality rate from injury. This Skill represents the ability to survive and/or the mentality of one who doesn't know when to give up, consisting of one's strength of vitality in predicaments. It is also one of the powers of a vampire. The best result is achieved when a resilient body is combined with this Skill. Valentine possesses this as a result of surviving the first attempt made at executing him by beating him to death.
Noble Phantasm
Omnia Vincit Amor
And Love Shall Conquer All
(Anti-Unit, EX): The mindset of the patron saint of lovers and marriage, one who will fight to defend love, believes that love will triumph in the end, and will defy imperial law to help facilitate it. It is four separate abilities rolled into one, based on the concept of the ‘four loves’. Valentine has given them names that he believes suit a magical defender of love and justice.
Valentine Eros Arrow: Magical Valentine’s arrows of love! Or rather, the bow of the love god, ‘borrowed’ by Valentine. A strike with one of the arrows will cause infatuation in the target with a person of the shooter’s choice. Don’t bother wondering why a Christian saint has a weapon belonging to a Greek god.
Valentine Philia Chain: The bonds of friendship that tie people together. By using this ability to bind two or more people together, Valentine can cause them to become one. They can share magical energy with each other, communicate telepathically, and briefly make use of the other’s abilities.
Valentine Storge Aegis: A shield that represents the desire of a parent to protect their child. Surrounds the target in a magical shield that repels any and all attacks that are a lower rank than it. Valentine, however, cannot take any other actions while the shield is active, and due to its nature he is only able to use it on people weaker than himself.
Valentine Agape Rapture: The most powerful love of all, the mindset of one who is willing to sacrifice everything for their beloved. Burning his own life away to cast this spell, it has either an offensive or defensive use. As an offensive spell, it is a spear of light that pierces through all defences to unfailingly strike the heart of its target. As a defensive spell, it is a blessing that heals all curses, wounds, poisons and illnesses, and can even perform the greatest miracle of them all: the resurrection of the dead. As a magic of sacrifice, Valentine’s life is the price he must pay for casting Agape, and he can only use it for the sake of someone he deeply and truly loves.
Lore
Likes: LOVE, chocolate, other people’s happiness
Dislikes: Empty lust
Talents: Planning and officiating weddings
Natural Enemy: “Saint White!” (he does not seem to be aware such a person does not exist)
Valentinus of Terni, more commonly known as Valentine, is a saint of the Christian faith who’s feast day of February 14th has become a festival for showing affection for one’s loved ones. A martyr from the 3rd century, Valentine was executed for secretly officiating weddings between Christian couples in defiance of Roman law, and as such was named a patron saint of love and marriage.
Ever so slightly enthusiastic about his role as a saint of love, Valentine could be described as a person in love with love. He adores love in all forms, from the steamiest to the most innocent. Despite his enthusiasm, he is aware of the darker aspects of love, the pain it can cause and the atrocities committed because of it, but even so he considers it an ideal worth defending. He is what might be termed a shipper, cheerfully matchmaking random people in his spare time.
Originally Posted by Sandstorm77
He's just putting the bone of his sword into other people until it explodes and lets out parts of him inside them.
Originally Posted by AvengerEmiya
Genderswaps are terrible, but I think I and other people would hate them less if Fate didn't keep ignoring actual heroines throughout history and folklore. Like, why bother turning Francis Drake into a woman when Ching Shih and Grace O'Malley exist?
Originally Posted by Five_X
Fate Zero is just Fate Stay Night for people who think Shirou is too girly
Odin: Yeah, I really can't approve of something that has that many spelling and grammar errors. I don't really care what your sheet is about or how good it is if I can barely read it. It makes the sheets feel sloppy, lazy, and rushed. Sorry to be harsh, but it's that simple for me.
Valentine: Pretty good. The "4 abilities rolled into one" reminds me of that Curie sheet from a while ago, and works about as well here as it did there (quite well, that is). Pretty fun personality to go along with it.
Last edited by 4score7years; February 14th, 2017 at 04:43 PM.
After another hour and a half of editing, My Caster/Assassin Servant Profile is available for criticisms again. So if any of you guys wanted to look it over, take your time.
Additionally, should I make the Personal Traits shorter for my future Servant Profiles? Since it may be too much for other people to read through.
Odin is mostly okay now that he's been revised. I'm not quite sure what you mean by the "1 day" thing either, since you can fix up or add to your sheet anytime you want. It's not like there's some kind of time-limit.
Regarding your second question, I wrote up an Odin sheet ages ago, but it was one of the first batch I posted up after getting an account here and frankly not at all that great compared to my present ones (thinking of revising it, as a matter of fact). Hakuro wrote one too over on the old thread which was pretty creative, though you'd have to ask him for a link.
You made me look for my old Odin sheet, and I noticed that in the OP it is with a typo (Vortan instead of Votan), and the link goes to Hermes' Orochimaru. Unluck like a Lancer should be.
You made me look for my old Odin sheet, and I noticed that in the OP it is with a typo (Vortan instead of Votan), and the link goes to Hermes' Orochimaru. Unluck like a Lancer should be.
FeelsBadMan. It's on the same page, but like four posts too high up.
I remember liking the sheet, though. The drill thing was pretty cool.
You made me look for my old Odin sheet, and I noticed that in the OP it is with a typo (Vortan instead of Votan), and the link goes to Hermes' Orochimaru. Unluck like a Lancer should be.
Nice to see that I can swoop in like that completely unintentionally.
Originally Posted by WhatShouldNotBe
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