Create-A-Servant 2

**Saron** · December 5th, 2017, 03:56 AM

Source: (X)

Name; Madoc ap Uthyr
Titles; Madawg, Firstborn of Uther
Class; Saber/Berserker
Armament: Sword
Alignment; Chaotic Neutral
Attribute: Human
Traits: Human, Dragon, Prince, Saberface

Stats:
Strength: B
Agility: A
Endurance: C
Mana: B
Luck: C
Noble Phantasm: B

Likes: His family, fair combat
Dislikes: Wizards, clairvoyance
Talents: Any form of combat
Natural Enemy: Merlin
Wish: To take his sister’s place

Skills

Noble Phantasm

Lore

Personality

A loyal knight to the end, he surprisingly is a massive lover of peace and prefers finding nonviolent solutions to situations. Unfortunately, his hot blood and often violent temper prevent him from being an effective mediator or peace keeper.

By default, he is a warrior, nothing more and nothing less. He couldn't be happier standing among the corpses of his enemies with more on their way to witness his blade's onslaught. He knows he would be a terrible king, and is a terrible knight for fighting that way. However, he finds Merlin's teachings and advice given to his baby sister unacceptable.

"A king shouldn't be someone who's reached heaven, it should be someone who wants heaven just as much as their people and thinks they have a way to get them there. They should laugh as loud as they want, cry as much as they want, love and hate with their entire hearts. They...they have to be so human it hurts."

Plus, he never quite forgave Merlin for lying to him and his father. The truth is what he values above all, and having his trust betrayed from practically birth has left him with a resentment for the half-demon.

However, instead of trying to get vengeance, he wants to live that lie to spite Merlin. He wished for reincarnation and the crown of Britain to be atop his head, and lead them to such an unimaginable glory that Merlin would be forced to say that Madoc is fit for kingship.

He's a major, major foodoholic. No one is sure exactly how he stacks up to his other family member's appetites, but he's definitely up there in terms of his preferred quality and quantity.

Relationships

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Had to do a lot of the lore myself for this guy since he's only mentioned in two poems, but overall a fun sheet. Had to stretch Nasu lore, and I probably got several things wrong. Also was debating doing a genderbend for him, but changed my mind later on.

**ylas** · December 5th, 2017, 05:52 AM

Image Source

Class: Caster
Alignment: Lawful Good
Gender: Male
Origin: History
Region: Bavaria / Germany
Comment: I like this thing called "Disney Land".

Parameters
Strength: E
Endurance: D
Agility: D
Mana: A(+)
Luck: B
Noble Phantasm: B

Skills

Noble Phantasm

Lore

Creator's Remarks

**Bird of Hermes** · December 5th, 2017, 09:33 AM

Originally Posted by the god of world-0

also, does hermes dont have any opnions on my (killer)rabbit? i thought he was british

As a Brit, I’m contractually obliged to love monty python and considering the whole thing is basically a walking reference to it - it has my approval

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Madoc: As someone who made 4 versions of Uther, I’m obliged to like this too. I would have made his physical parameters no higher than B myself (probably lower too) as in Fake Berserker mode he equals the likes of Herc as Lancelot who he isn’t on the same level as.

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Originally Posted by 34

Hey, thanks for the feedback.
About the whole divine beamu Anti-Evil stuff of the Holy Lance, I took it from that one legend where Galahad destroyed a whole castle (Castle of Treachery) via a literal divine cataclysm. But yeah, it kinda feels a little too much. And about the Sangreal, yeah, maybe I should make it more than just [wish granting machine], but I couldn't think of anything that fits his and the grail's legend better than that tbh.

Idea, keep the Anti-Evil aspect of the lance by tune it down a bit. Make the Grail an ability that heals all allies, removes all debuffs and fully recharges mana at the cost of returning to the Throne of Heroes.

**Spartacus** · December 5th, 2017, 01:02 PM

http://kazemai.github.io/fgo-vz/svtData.html?no=194

So... back with my Sheba ranting...

After reading her profile and NP, I feel really-really dumb. I heavily emphasized on her being a riddler and women of mystery, yet I don't make it into a motherfucking NP, which is very obvious if I think about it. Three Enigmas, while the djinn-rabbits feels very shoe horned in, is very straight-forward and fits Sheba because she simply throw physics at them (I don't know if physic here means the subject physic as atomic bomb or physical manifestation of her riddle, probably both. I would love if someone with a real Japanese knowledge correct me), since you know physics at Solomon era is probably as mysterious as Akasha. Compared to my second NP which is out of nowhere and feels like being there for the sake of making a powerful Servants. Though, at least I have similar personality in mind, that she is very business oriented, and I deeply regret it lefting them out on mine.

But I still stands that her design is very disappointing and even the profile doesn't try to explain anything about why djinn=rabbits.

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I think Story and Lore is the best thread for it, but I wanted to compare it with mine, so pardon me.

**Bird of Hermes** · December 5th, 2017, 05:50 PM

Nothing wrong with comparing creations with what ended up being canon. Not as close as You’s Saint Martha but still a few good similarities non the less.

**asterism42** · December 6th, 2017, 06:20 AM

"I am your Servant, Lancer. If you swear to be all the good in the world, and to lay out the evil in the world, then I shall gladly follow under your banner, Master"

Lancer
Saint Sebastian

Source

Alignment: Lawful Good
STR: C
END: A+
AGI: C
MAG: C
LUCK: E
NP: B

Class Skills

Magic Resistance (A): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells of A-Rank or below, no matter what High-Thaumaturgy it is. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a 'Magus Killer'. Sebastian possesses Magic Resistance on the level of the Saber class, but it cannot cope with the sacraments of the Church

Personal Skills

Saint (D): Indicates being acknowledged as a saint. When summoned as a Servant, the ability of Saint is selected one among "raising the effectiveness of sacraments", "automatic HP recovery", "1 Rank-Up to Charisma" and "production of a holy shroud is possible". As the patron saint of soldiers, Sebastian receives an automatic rank-up to Luck checks made while he is in combat. The rank of this skill would be considerably higher if he were summoned as a Ruler.

Robust Health (C+): A Skill that are made up of anecdotes of "not receiving a wound on the battlefield" and "never becoming sick even once since birth". It is also a composite Skill and includes Poison Resistance. Sebastian possesses this skill due to the dual anecdotes of him surviving being riddled with arrows and, as a Saint, his name being used to cure and prevent plagues.

Protection from Arrows (A): The ability to deal with projectiles, an increased defence against ranged attacks by predicting the projectiles' trajectories through exceptional means, such as hearing the sound of air being cut, or sensing the killing intent of the enemy. Sebastian’s version of this skill is abnormal, due to the details of his legend. In addition to the ability to avoid projectiles, he takes massively reduced damage from them if they strike him. In practice, he is functionally immune to any non-Noble Phantasm projectile.

Praetorian (C): Designates one who served in the Praetorian Guard, the elite corps of the Roman Army and the personal bodyguards of the emperor. Representing as it does a skilled member of one of the most famous military bodies in the world, it bestows the skills Charisma and Military Tactics at the same rank. Sebastian’s Endurance receives a boost when he takes attacks on behalf of another individual.

Noble Phantasm

Sagittae Mauritania

The Life of a Saint Shall not so Readily Fade

Anti-Unit, B: The legend of Sebastian’s failed first execution, wherein the emperor ordered him to be chained to a tree and riddled with arrows by a squadron of archers. Despite being shot so many times, it is said that he resembled an urchin, Sebastian did not die, and was rescued and nursed back to health. The arrows that failed to kill him have become his armour, a resolute bulwark of faith that will not fail. As a passive effect, this Noble Phantasm allows his skin to resist piercing attacks. When activated however, it causes every inch of his skin to erupt into sharp thorns that extend from his body in several directions, becoming a suit of armour made of arrows. A ‘porcupine strategy’, it is almost certain to skewer anyone within melee range, and those drawing close to Sebastian once the armour is active will suffer persistent, continuous damage. The armour responds to attack, reflecting part of the damage suffered on the aggressor. The site of the arrows of martyrdom also fills everyone around with awe and/or fear; allies become courageous and enemies quail. Due to the legend of him being tied down, Sebastian cannot move while the armour is activated.

Lore

**Iceblade44** · December 6th, 2017, 11:05 AM

Sebastion: Interesting, I never heard of him but Saints are always interesting. Now the critiques.

First It's very interesting on how his skill set is very focused around his legend of his martyrdom, very fitting. Tho there are a couple of things that seems odd. Robust health is one, while it has some connections personally it doesn't seem like a perfect fit for his survivability, I'd say Battle Continuation is a better fit. Another would be the Pretorian Guard, interesting skill but comparably I don't think it fits with it's leadership abilities since as a guard I would see it be a little more personal oriented than it would be for a naval captain or military king. The END buff is what I would expect from the description of the skill and it's fitting. The rest of the skills tho seems very good and certainly fits well, especially PoA. Tho as a suggestion I think Georges Soul of a Martyr skill would also fit his line up quite nicely.

Now for his NP, very interesting and certainly fits with his legend. My one complaint about it would be the offensive mode of it, It honestly feels a little lackluster. It's a very cool concept but I think could have been expressed a little better for it to seem more unique and practical. Otherwise it's a very good sheet, twas an interesting read.

**TresserT** · December 8th, 2017, 05:23 AM

Servant Berserker

Stats
Strength: C
Endurance: A
Agility: B
Mana: D
Luck: E
Noble Phantasm: EX

⭐⭐⭐
Max Attack: 7000
Max HP: 8750
QQ(4) A(2) BB(1) EX(4)
Weapon: Scythe

Skills

Passive Skills
Mad Enhancement A

All parameters, barring Mana and Luck, have been raised. Normally, Servants with this skill would be no different from raging beasts. However, due to her Protection of the Faith, her "Insanity" has instead become "Fanaticism".
Increases Buster Card effectiveness by 10%

Presence Concealment D

The ability to hide one's presence as a Servant. At this rank, an enemy will easily be able to detect Berserker if they know she is in the area. That said, even this level of concealment is impressive for a Berserker.
Increases own critical star generation by 4%

Urban Mystery EX

Abilities not possessed in life are attributed to the Servant’s spirit or ghost itself. Skills which would not normally be available can be used.
The legends surrounding Berserker have little to do with the events of her life, and as a ghost she possessed many traits that the original woman did not. However, since these traits are attributed solely to Berserker’s ghost they cannot definitively be called false, rendering her unfit for the ability Innocent Monster.
Replaces Presence Concealment D after Interlude.

Increases own critical star generation by 10%. Increases own critical star absorption by 600%.

Personal Skills
Protection of the Faith A+

The measure of one's devotion towards their religion. Though it's considered a form of divine protection, it doesn't actually come from any divine intervention. Rather, it's the absoluteness of one's faith affecting their body and soul. In Berserker's case, she devoutly punishes anyone whom she deems to be a heretic.
Increases own debuff resist [50-100%] for 3 turns. Recovers own HP [1000-2500]. Increases own Defense [20%-40%] for 1 turn. CD [7-5]

Mana Burst (Flame) B

A form of Mana Burst which infuses weapons with a powerful flame effect. In Berserker's case, it is always active and will affect any weapon she touches. As a result, it has a constant Mana cost.
Increases own Buster Card performance [15%-25%] for one turn. Increases own NP damage [8%-15%] for 1 turn. CD [7-5]

Revengeful Ghost EX

The strength of one’s grudge, measured by one’s persistence as a wraith. The ability to continue working towards a goal even when killed.No matter how many times Berserker is defeated in battle, she will always return with a grudge against her killer. The effects of this skill don’t regenerate the body, but rather create a completely new one around the soul. However, she can be defeated by mana deprivation and holy rites that would normally be ineffective against Servants.
Grant self 3 uses of Guts [1500-3000] for 3 turns. CD [8-6]

Noble Phantasms

Noble Phantasms

Heretical Execution ~ Sinners Deserve to Burn
Madonna Gomorrah
Anti-Army, B
Targets: 1-288

The ultimate manifestation of Berserker's religious devotion. For the glory of God and the happiness of his people, those who sin must be purified. Berserker swings her scythe, releasing a wave of fire. Those caught in the flame will, of course, be incinerated. The flames will leave the surrounding landscape poisoned and barren; the smell alone is enough to make one sick. Remaining in the area for too long can even lead to death.

As it is based on the concept of "public execution" rather than any feat in combat, its direct power is weak compared to abilities of similar rank and style. The Phantasm's true power lies in the long lasting, poisonous odor. Based on an anecdote describing the state of a city under her rule. While the flames of persecution killed only 288 people total, it was said that the smell of burning flesh didn't dissipate for weeks. It reached a point where civilians were unable to leave their houses, lest the smell caused them to fall ill.

The fire will only affect sinners and will harm them in accordance to the weight of their sin. However, in Berserker's eyes most people are great sinners by default, so this effect rarely comes into play.

Buster
Deal damage to all enemies [300%-500%] and inflict Poison on all enemies for 5 turns [500-2500, effect increases with overcharge].

My Children in Another Heaven
Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary
Anti-Unit, EX
Tagets: 1

A Phantasm which manifests the full power of the Bloody Mary legend. While normally Berserker's true power is restricted by her human past self, once this Phantasm is activated she is able to use the full power of her ghostly self.

Uniquely, this Phantasm is not activated by Berserker. Rather, it is activated when another entity repeats the words "Bloody Mary" three times in succession. That person then becomes Berserker's target. By activating this skill, the target trades their identity in order to become "a victim of Bloody Mary". When facing Berserker, the target's skills, parameters, and Noble Phantasms all become meaningless. Nothing will be able to prevent or postpone their inevitable death. In exchange, Berserker loses all reason until her target dies. She will relentlessly pursue them without regard for the rest of the world. At this stage, not even a command seal could break her madness.

While Berserker is bound to pursue her target until she kills them, this is only a matter of formality. Once her name has been spoken three times, the fact that her target dies by the hands of Bloody Mary becomes embedded in history. Even if Berserker or her Master should die, she will still manage to get the last word. It is due to the absoluteness of death that this Phantasm's rank is EX.

Lore

Lore

Mary Tudor, England’s first ruling queen. The daughter of a notorious tyrant. Hated by her father, she took the throne through a series of coincidences. She only ruled for a short period and was largely overshadowed by her sister and successor, Queen Elizabeth, her legacy silently forgotten following her death. In modern times she’s managed to gain popularity as a ghost haunting bathroom mirrors.

Height: 144 cm
Weight: 44 kg
Source: Historical Fact
Region: England
Alignment: Lawful Mad
Gender: Female
She fights using a scythe, but this has nothing to do with her nature in life or the stories that arose after her death. Though it is an inconvenient weapon, one day she began swinging it at her enemies as if it were perfectly natural.

The evil queen who killed hundreds in a religious genocide, earning her the nickname "Bloody Mary". Her acts of cruelty, all in the name of God, shook England to its foundation, sparking a revolution that would change society... or not. In truth, religious persecutions were not uncommon during Mary's time, with her predecessors and successors committing mass executions of similar scale. Mary's short rule was not particularly notable, with the nickname "Bloody Mary" only becoming popular several centuries later. However, Mary was unique in that her persecutions were purely religious with no ulterior political motives, and that the majority of her executions were by burning rather than more humane methods.

With several of her siblings and relatives after the throne, Mary was desperate to produce an heir. Unfortunately, her husband was frequently at war, giving her little opportunity. She eventually did become pregnant. However, when her water broke it was discovered that, mysteriously, there was no baby within her to deliver. Believing this as punishment from God, Mary committed to ridding her country of "heretics", sparking the Marian Persecutions. After killing 288 people Mary managed to become pregnant again, with her husband dying shortly after. However, once again there was no baby to deliver. Mary passed away following this event.

Mary was queen for only 5 years, her rule was preceded by the tyrannical reign of Henry VIII and succeeded by the golden age of the Elizabethan Era. She was all but forgotten, never managing to become a Heroic Spirit. However, she held a strong grudge against the heretics of her country for "taking away her children", and as a result she became a wraith. Uniquely, as a wraith she did not become weaker over time. After several years, rumors of her ghost began circulating. As her infamy rose so did her power. As people's perceptions of her changed, so did her abilities. She eventually evolved into something completely different than the forgotten first queen.

Urban Mystery: EX
A unique skill, available only to those who have become more famous as ghosts than they were in life. Normally the Grail will return a spirit to the state they had in life. However, in Mary's case alone she is able to retain some abilities of her ghostly form.
In this case, she gains the abilities Presence Concealment, Revengeful Ghost, and Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary, Bloody Mary.
As she is still somewhat remembered as "our first queen" within her home country, Mary would receive a power boost due to popularity if summoned in England. However the Urban Mystery skill would be lost, making her all around weaker.

Creator's Notes

**Saron** · December 8th, 2017, 01:37 PM

FCs

Name; Abraham “Bram” Stoker
Class; Caster/Archer/Berserker
Armament: Revolver with silver bullets, kukri and bowie knife, magecraft
Alignment: True Neutral
Source: Ireland, Historical fact, Dracula
Attribute: Man or Earth
Traits: Human, Vampire

Stats:
Strength: D
Agility: C
Endurance: E
Mana: B
Luck: B+
Noble Phantasm: A

Likes: Ireland, quiet nights alone
Dislikes: Vampires, people with silver tongues
Talents: Creating monster stories
Natural Enemy: Dracula

Skills

Noble Phantasm

Lore

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Inspired by a conversation in an earlier post in the thread, I introduce Bram Stoker as Caster.

**Bird of Hermes** · December 8th, 2017, 03:03 PM

Reminds me of the Abraham van Helsing I made like 2 years ago but never got around to remaking.

**Bird of Hermes** · December 8th, 2017, 05:46 PM

"Understand my predicament; I have toppled the King's of Heaven with my bare hands, with a glance I can destroy everything you hold dear and move on without another thought. I have conquered what comes before and I will be there at the end. You're a fledgling incapable of comprehending the sun. I'm old, very old so I invite you to contemplate how insignificant I find your petty boasts of power."

Source: (X)

Class: Rider
Alternate Class(es): Archer
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Region: India

Height/Weight: 178cm/78kg
Likes: Snakes, Strong women
Dislikes: Fights that are impossible to win
Talent: Deep and meaningful conversation
Natural Enemy: Lakshmana, Sefar, Type Saturn
Attribute: Sky
Traits: Servant, Humanoid, Demon, Divine, Male
Armament: Chariot, Arrow

Parameters:

STR: B
END: A
AGI: A
MGI: A
LCK: B
NP: A++

Class Skills:

Magic Resistance: D
Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.

Riding: EX
Denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding.
Given his feats with a mount, he possesses the greatest level this skill can attain and can ride any form of creature, vehicle or transportation.

Personal Skills:

Battle Continuation: A
a Skill that allows for the continuation of combat after sustaining mortal wounds. It will also reduce mortality rate from injury. This Skill represents the ability to survive and/or the mentality of one who doesn't know when to give up, consisting of one's strength of vitality in predicaments. It is also one of the powers of a vampire. The best result is achieved when a resilient body is combined with this Skill.
Never gives up, not even till the very end. Legend tells he only stopped fighting until after his head was removed from his shoulders. Can remain alive so long as one does not receive a decisive fatal wound and makes it possible to fight even with deadly injuries.

Divinity: C
The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. At high levels, one is treated as a mixed race of a Divine Spirit, and the level declines when the Heroic Spirit's own rank as a Monster or Demonic Beast raises. It can also decrease due to one's dislike for the gods. Those who have A Rank Divinity or above has reached the Throne of Gods. It also has an effect which reduces special defensive values called 'purge defence' in proportion to the Divinity's Rank. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig.
Son of the Demon King of Lanka and a mortal woman, Rider possesses a mix of mundane, demonic and divine blood. It is particularly powerful against those with a connection to Storm or Sun Gods.

God Slayer: B
A skill originating from defeating the King of Devas in fair single combat despite being a meagre mortal himself and gaining the epithet ‘Conqueror of Heaven’.
This Skill is super effective against Divine Spirits. A 'plus' modifier is gained when attacking Divine Spirits, wraiths, and Servants with the Divinity Skill.

Mana Burst Lighting: B
The increase in performance caused by infusing one's weapons and body with Magical Energy and instantly expelling it. Simply put, recreating the effect of a jet burst by expending large amounts of Magical Energy.
Originating from his duel against the King of Heaven himself, Rider can infuse himself and his weapons with the lightning element.

Monstrous Strength: A
A Skill that temporarily grants a rank-up to one's Strength parameter for a time limit determined by the ranking of this Skill. This Skill is borne from the holder's nature as a monster or Demonic Beast.
Rider possesses this skill due to being a direct descendent of the near-immortal Demon King himself. The rank is reduced due to being summoned in his noblest aspect however the longer he is under the influence of this skill, the more he will lose himself and his body will slowly warp into becoming like that of Ravana.

Noble Phantasms

Biography

Character

A true and virtuous hero who due to loyalty stood on the side of villains. The Rider class is the ‘Heroic’ side of Indrajit who was strong of heart and mind both and a truly kind soul despite everything, unlike Archer who would manifest as the expectation of a Villainous Demon.

Dignified and just, he is the sort of person everyone looks up to and feels good about. He is a true superman who cares neither for material wealth nor glory but instead to protect the people he knows and loves. Even should it need to arise, he will not fall to restoring upon cowardly schemes. Unreasonably heroic for a demon.

Upon introspection, one will realise the way he throws himself into everything is due to his desire to protect love and… be loved. He holds little true value in himself and bases all his worth upon others; can he protect them, can he care for them, do they love him? These are all questions he asks himself constantly and builds himself off. He would gladly throw away his life in an instant if it would improve the lives of those he loves, even if it was just a fraction. To save his homeland, his people and beloved, he would gladly die a thousand times over. It should be obvious what his wish is, to rewrite fate and defeat Lakshmana, not out of petty jealously, hatred or the like but he wants to see his mother and wife. He wants to see them safe, he wants to see them happy.

He adores strong women in many forms, they could be strong of will, heart, body, he admires each and every one. Although fully capable of romance once summoned, either with another servant or a female master his heart fully belongs to his wife and, should she be brought into this world somehow, he will drop his current lover in a heartbeat. However he will let you know his conditions first to give ample warning.

Due to his experience in astrology, he has some remnant knowledge of what lies beyond the realms of Gaia. He knows planets have a will and their own champions, whom he has something of a negative disposition towards, mainly that of Saturn. He is aware of an “Anti-Cell” that appears every 14,000 years who that is apparently a scourge against gods.

If there is a master who cannot win even after forming a contract with Rider, then they would be the biggest good-for-nothing and an active liability who should not be allowed on the battlefield under any circumstance.

Interactions

Key Words/Bond 10 CE

Creators Notes:
What is UP lads. I'm drunk and I remembered that Karna wasn't the most OP figure in Indian Myths. This is equal parts Alcohol Power Levels and 100% accurate.

I think at least.

**Express** · December 8th, 2017, 07:01 PM

Old Man Too Strong For His Own Good, Very Bored.

**Saron** · December 8th, 2017, 07:18 PM

The fabled drunk Hermes Servant. This is the first time I've witnessed it as it happened instead of after the fact. Most impressive!

**TresserT** · December 8th, 2017, 07:22 PM

The problem I had when making my Indrajit was that he has too many feats and abilities to cram into one Servant. I kind of messed up by trying to get everything in, but on the other hand I feel kind of disappointed that so many of his powers were cut out in your iteration, including some really notable ones. I guess it can't be helped when he's, like, the original Mary Sue, though.

And of course, he's justifiedly op.

**Daneel Rush** · December 8th, 2017, 09:54 PM

I'm still waiting for the idiot who will stat Arjuna/Karna/Indrajit/whoever with every single goddamn Astra. We're getting closer and closer with every iteration.

**TresserT** · December 8th, 2017, 11:16 PM

I feel like I'm calling myself an idiot by replying, but I did make one sort of like that. Though it was more based on the idea that tons of weapons he never had were later attributed to him.

**Daneel Rush** · December 9th, 2017, 12:41 AM

I thought Sukracharya was a really good NP, though.

**Bird of Hermes** · December 9th, 2017, 04:50 AM

Originally Posted by Daneel Rush

I'm still waiting for the idiot who will stat Arjuna/Karna/Indrajit/whoever with every single goddamn Astra. We're getting closer and closer with every iteration.

Fun fact, I still held back massively

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Originally Posted by Saron

The fabled drunk Hermes Servant. This is the first time I've witnessed it as it happened instead of after the fact. Most impressive!

Clearly my (apparent) reputation precedes me

**venomking** · December 9th, 2017, 05:46 PM

True name: melonkomas:
class: assassin.
other classes: none.

paramter:
endurance: C+.
strength: C
agiltiy: B.
Mana: D.
Luck: E
noble phantasms: B++.

Hight: 5"10.
Skintone: olive.
Comllextion: perfect.
Bodytype: muscular.
Hair:black.
Eyes: sea green.
Likes: a good fight.
Dislikes: dishonor, tragedy.
natrual enemies: none.
Natrual allies: none.
Armament: none.
Catlyste: his bones.
Origion: Greece.

Skills.
Bravery, C.
He was said to be has brave as his own body as buetifull, however he was not legendary for it and therefor does not posses a high rank in this skill, with this rank he can resist all forms of mental interference with the exeption of those brought on by noble phantasms, and he not totally unfected by any mental interference he faces weather brought on by an NP or not.

Worrior of skill, B.
A skill given to those who never once gained victory throu luck in any part of there life, this skills lowers the luck parametric those around him/her, at assassins level set ants suffer an instance - decrease to there luck parameters.

Battle continuation, C.
He was allegedly able to fight for entire days withou tireing, thou he never suffered a debilating wound so does posses this skill at a high rank, this skill allows him to fight for days without tiring so long as he doesn't suffer a serious wound.

Instincts, C.
Do to his many matches he devolped a moderate rank in this skill, at his rank he can sense most oncoming attacks, but cannot sense bloodlust, or attacks by those useing presence concealment.

Class skills.
Presence concealment, E.
Pas he was never known to use stealth in life, he does not posses this skill in a high rank, at his level it difficult to pinpoint his exact location but not impossible so long he keeps his distance, the only he is an assassin is because it's the only class he can join.

Noble phantasms:

name: Den édosa oúte élava epíthesi
rank: B++.
Type: anti-unit.
Range: 1.
A noble phantasm which takes his style of fighting and turns into a skill which can only be a noble phantasm. It's special ability allows him to dodge attacks so long the attack or phantasms does not exceed the rank of B, however his to dodge, parry, or block attacks from A rank phantasms is still at the phanasms century level allowing to lesson the damage from debilitating wound to a scratch by dodging or blocking the majority of the strike. However this is not what makes this phantasm dangerous the true danger comes from the second nature of this phantasm every missed strike on assassin increases the cost for the enemy servants attacks, for example if they miss strikes on him the cost of activating there nps increase and the cost needed to stay in the world, etc are then increased by 2 and the strikes the miss the more it costs just to continue fighting this meant to represent assassins style of fighting which involved assassin dodging, parrying or blocking his opponents blows until they were to tired to continue or passed out. His phantasm is passively active as long as he doesn't attack.

Combat: assassin will continue to use his phantasm until the moment the servant is tired out enough for him to land a deadly blow, he will also give advice and hints to servants while they attack him, do to this he a dangerous servant.

Background: born to a good family at young age he relished he possessed super level strength and agility and grew to fear it, not because it made abnormal but because he knew the lives of heroes was a tragic one and did want to breed tragedy into the world, he trained everyday to find to a way to inspire without tragedy and throu boxing achieved that ideal, he would neither receive an attack nor have an attack land on him that was his way to inspire, he died happy thou he wished he can face an opponent who he could go all out on.

Personality: he is wise, kind, and caring person who will give advice not only to his enemies, but also his master and his allies, he does not posses a wish for the grail only to have fight we he doesn't hold back, but if he did have a wish it would likely be take tragedy away from the world.

**RoydGolden** · December 9th, 2017, 08:26 PM

Melankomas 2.0: Definitely better then your first take on the guy. The part in his NP about increasing Mana cost with each missed attack is both a cool interpretation of his legend and a clever way of defeating enemy Servants with his wholly defensive fighting style. I do have a few critiques though.

First off, Battle Continuation is specifically the ability to keep fighting while injured, so just being able to fight for a long time without tiring shouldn't give him the Skill. If you want a Skill to represent his high stamina then I think Arash's Robust Health Skill would be much more fitting, particularly since it even includes never having received a wound on the battlefield as one of the criteria for possessing it.

Also, I brought this up for your first Melankomas sheet but I'm surprised by the lack of any Pygmachia (Greek boxing) related Skill. I'd suggest putting it in place of Bravery though, as 5 Skills would be a bit much.

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