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    Quote Originally Posted by Cataquack Warrior View Post
    Maybe just a noble phantasm or even a skill based on getting a blessing from Zeus, since the altars to Zeus were in what was said to be the king's old house, and he made a habit of doing tribute to Zeus before entering the races. Maybe something that temporarily boosts Avenger's stats and his Riding, letting him briefly overcome his impairment? Do you think that could work?
    Maybe it could be some kind of Zeus-blessed chariot that allows him to live his glory days? Since he appears to lack the ability to summon an actual chariot in his current state (or at least it's not mentioned). Hell, the chariot's remains might even have been incorporated to said altar to provide additional significance, allowing for a roundabout way for it to be summoned due to the king's connection to the festival. Maybe something like Oinomaos "taking over" the Heroic Spirit and disabling Myrtilos' abilities for a moment?


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    Alternate Classes: Caster, Berserker, Avenger
    True Name: Marina
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Origin: America (16th century)
    Armament: Dagger

    Parameters:
    STR: D
    END: D
    AGI: C
    MANA: D+
    LUCK: C (EX)
    NP: C

    Skills
    Class Skills

    Presence Concealment - Rank C+: The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. It is a common Class Skill of the Assassin class.
    Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. The rank of Presence Concealment drops considerably when preparing to attack. Assassin can somehow use Presence Concealment to appropriate costumes and mannerisms belonging to different times and cultures and conceal her identity in this way.

    Personal Skills

    Innocent Monster - Rank B: An attribute possessed by Servants whose true history and existence have been distorted by the monstrous reputations and gossips they accrued across the course of their life and thereafter, without concern for the actual person's will or appearance. As a consequence, the Servant's abilities and appearance have been rendered to conform to the specifications of their legend. Incidentally, this Personal Skill cannot be removed.
    Assassin has been almost universally reviled her people, as well as praised by the Spaniards she aided. The effects of Innocent Monster serve to further sharpen the abilities she possessed in life, as both sides of the story focus on them. Assassin receives almost no negative effects from this Skill.

    Eloquence - Rank B+: The skill of being artistic and persuasive with one’s words. Simply through speech, it is possible to convince anyone of almost anything.
    In addition to the usual benefits of this Skill, Assassin is provided with a knowledge of most languages in history. With this, she can more easily work her way into the confidence of others and appear more favourably to others, boosting her manipulative skills.

    Noble Phantasms
    The Two Cannot be Conquered
    Dona Marina

    Anti-Team (Self), Rank C+
    A Noble Phantasm serving as a crystallization of the relationship between Assassin and Cortez. While Assassin was at her liege’s side, her abilities meant that no failure could broach the conquistadors’ cause. Dona Marina is also a representation of Assassin’s role in the death of her own culture, an action for which she is reviled even centuries later.
    To use Dona Marina, Assassin must designate a willing partner for herself. As long as the two stand side by side, almost no misfortune can touch them, and their Luck parameter receives a huge boost. Conversely, however, if the two are separated, their Luck is ranked down to an equal degree. As Assassin is a killer of cultures, both the targets of Dona Marina receive an additional effect to their actions in the form of a curse that erodes the cultural sphere associated with that which they damage. The effect is temporary and normally carries little effect when used by a mere two individuals, but when fighting Servants, it is possible to weaken those who rely on their fame significantly. Severe enough damage will eventually result in mental damage, as the targets in question begin to forget who they are and where they come from.

    The Weeping Traitor’s Punishment
    La Llorona

    Anti-Army, Rank B
    Assassin’s second Noble Phantasm, which remains incomplete upon summoning due to Assassin’s will. It represents the legend of the weeping La Llorona, who cries for her children, dead by her hand. La Llorona is often identified with Assassin’s own legend, but she lacks the quality necessary for its activation: regret.
    La Llorona is a curse laid down by Cihuacoatl, the ancestral mother of the Mesoamerican peoples, though it is also an act of kindness, giving Assassin a chance to make amends for her actions. At present, the mere concept of La Llorona causes a phantom to appear in Mexico, weeping and causing misfortune all around it.
    If Assassin were to accept her wrongdoings in life, rather than separating herself fully even from her roots, she would become capable of using La Llorona’s full activation and becoming a creature of divine vengeance, weeping eternally for the ‘children of Mexico’ whose death and defeat she caused.

    Description
    Likes: Cultures other than her own, superficiality
    Dislikes: Regret, her roots
    Talents: Language, cultural appropriation
    Natural Enemy: Herself

    Assassin’s true identity is Marina, the Traitorous Interpreter. Her original identity, which she vehemently rejects, is known as La Malinche.

    Marina is, on the surface, a lively and spirited woman. She takes great effort to appear at her best, though she is also careful to conceal her true identity by choosing apparel that doesn’t reflect her nature or history. Marina likes to stay detached from others, preferring superficial relationships to deep ones. Due to this, prying about her personal details can set her off, breaking the image of herself that she shows to the outside world.
    Due to her feelings about her past and her own culture, Marina is extremely fond of other cultures, and accepts them without heed to their flaws or her shallow understanding of them. In her haste to appropriate elements of things that catch her interest, she is prone to appearing ridiculous or unintentionally insulting. Due to her abilities as an interpreter and the information granted by the Holy Grail, Marina is fully capable of conversing with just about anyone in their native tongue and manner.
    As an interpreter that is fascinated by foreign culture, Marina is extremely interested in Heroic Spirits, who come from varying cultural spheres and eras. Her interest in others, however, is largely superficial. She does not possess particular groups or people that she likes or hates, but she prefers the company of those with a businesslike manner, who keep their distance from others.
    Marina is by her very nature someone suitable to be a Servant, though not one that excels in combat. She serves her Master without fail and even infiltrates their day-to-day life in order to be of more assistance. Due to her diplomatic skills, she is bound to get along with almost any kind of Master. Marina does not, however, take kindly to the fact that Masters and Servants share memories, and prefers that such things are left unspoken of.
    Marina’s wish is simply to be able to live with herself. Though she regrets her actions in life, she does not wish to undo them, and is therefore conflicted with how she should proceed. Her wish to the Holy Grail, therefore, would be one of resolution.

    Lore
    La Malinche was a Nahua woman from an indigenous Mexican region, best known for her role in the conquest of the Aztec Empire by the Spanish establishment.
    Born in the Mexican Valley ruled by the Aztecs, she grew up in the Nahuatl-speaking lands at the borders of the Aztec and the Mayan empires. Her father died soon after she was born. Her mother remarried, leaving Malinche as a slave to the Mayan slave traders in the early 16th century. A war broke out between the Mayans and the Spaniards, and Malinche was among the 20 Mayan slaves who were offered to the Spanish conquistador Hernán Cortés. He was impressed by the multilingual skills of Malinche and kept her as a chief advisor, interpreter, and mediator.
    Taking the baptismal name of Marina, she set out to assist the Spaniards in their conquest. She earned a special place in Cortes’ court, always being with Cortés during his meetings and other important events. She also played a great role in Cortés’s victories in her native land. The surviving records state that she understood the Cholula plans to form an alliance with the Aztecs to attack the small Spanish army. She informed Cortés and thus avoided a horrific bloodshed of the Spanish troops. However, this led to a strong hatred for Malinche among the natives. Following this, several assassination plots were also planned, but none of them was executed.
    However, well aware of her tactical skills, Cortés often took Malinche with her to the battles. When Cortes set out to suppress a rebellion in Honduras in 1524, he took Malinche with him to serve as an interpreter. Although she acted mostly as an interpreter, there are many accounts that state that her role was a lot larger than that. She was seen alongside Cortés during important meetings and was also known to take some independent decisions.
    She later gave birth to Cortés’s son, Martin, who is known in history as one of the first Mestizos (people of European–Indigenous American descent). Malinche’s role in the Spanish conquest of the Aztec Empire is known to be one of the biggest causes behind the Spanish victory in the Mexican lands. Cortés Cortés had a wife in Spain, and when she heard about the relationship between her husband and Malinche, she arranged Malinche’s marriage to a knight named Juan Jaramillo.
    History has no mention of her after this.

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    I have returned from my hiatus. I noticed we don't have that many Irish Servants, lemme fix that a second...

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    Ruler

    "A King cannot lead by standing still. He must accept the consequences of his actions and continuously move forward without looking back, for a better future for all."



    True Name: Conchobar mac Nessa
    Epithet: "The King of the Red Branch Knights"
    Origin: Mythological
    Region: Ireland (Ulster Cycle)
    Alternate Classes: Berserker, Lancer, Rider, Saber, Shielder
    Catalyst: The Blood of Christ
    Hidden Attribute: Earth
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral
    Likes: Dogs, Freedom
    Dislikes: Betrayal, Needless Bloodshed
    Talents: Chess, Horse Racing
    Natural Enemy: Matriarchal Figures

    Parameters:
    STR: (B) END: (B) AGI: (B) MGI: (D) LCK: (E) NP: (A+)

    Appearance:
    Having been summoned in the prime of his life, Conchobar is a tall, tanned, broad-chested, muscular young man. He has a full head of wild unkempt raven hair and dark hazel eyes. Above and around his left eye he still retains the scar given to him from the Connacht warrior - Cet mac Mágach. Despite being a King, Conchobar prefers to wear more casual clothes: a simple sleeveless white shirt and untied blue scarf, dark blue pants and black boots.

    Curiously, he doesn't resemble anyone else in his family and if summoned into the modern era, people would surely mistake him for a certain religious figure from Jerusalem. Perhaps it had something to do with his unusual birth...?


    Character:
    [An aberration to the norm as while Conchobar was not a Saint, his baptism in Holy Blood and worship by his people turned him into a kind of Pseudo-Saint that barely squeezes through into the Ruler Class.]

    Conchobar is loud, boisterous, exuberant, and overall acts in a manner unbefitting of a King. However, at heart he is a kind and generous man who always tries to do what he thinks is best both for himself and his people. He believes in the rules of the land, but also that people have to follow their own code of honour, that's why he let his knights like Fergus and Cú Chulainn do as they please so long as they alone accept the results of their actions. He actually envied those two as they were free to go on adventures whilst he was stuck in capital having to rule, rarely being allowed to leave or participate in anything dangerous since his court feared losing him. He loves the thrill of battle first and foremost and has no problem fighting under another person if it means he can face off against brave and strong warriors. To him, no challenge is insurmountable given enough effort, his courage knows no limit to the point of being called a reckless idiot, but his honest valour earnt him the respect of friends and foes alike and even the heart of the Goddess Macha who bore him a son. Speaking of which, despite having more sexual partners than even Fergus thanks to the practise of "Droit du Seigneur", he isn't particularly perverted nor lustful and can be quite chivalrous to a female Master or enemy Servant. Despite his strength, his many incredible weapons and beasts... his greatest asset is actually his deceptively sharp mind. He often loved to play games of chess against Cú Chulainn and his military strategies kept him in a dominant position against the other four Kingdoms of Ireland. It really isn't his preferred method of winning, but if he wants an opponent dead and doesn't deem them worthy of a fair duel then he will use every tactic in the book from feint attacks to ambushes if it works. However his greatest weakness is his violent temper, born of an unhealthy upbringing of his controlling mother who groomed him to be King and tried to dictate his every action which lead to his boyhood self having to bottle up his thoughts and emotions inside until they overflow and explode out - even after having become a man and shrugged off his mother's claws, the scars in his heart never mended and his berserker rage was second only to Cú Chulainns infamous Warp Spasm. This fatal flaw led to many irreversible mistakes such as making enemies out of Medb and Fergus and even his own death. But Conchobar does not regret a single thing, for that would be unfitting of his honour as a King. He can only keep moving forward and hope that by doing more acts of heroism that they can balance out his sins.

    As a Ruler Class Servant, Conchobar does not have a wish upon the Holy Grail. But that's only because all he really wants is to experience the thrill of combat against the other Servants and if he can get that then he'll be satisfied. Though that applies for any other Class he can be summoned in really.


    Skills:

    Class Skills

    God's Resolution - (C)
    A Class Skill of the Ruler class and is the privilege of the Ruler presiding over the Holy Grail War; the right to use Command Spells against Servants, only given to Rulers. Each Ruler is normally granted two Command Spells for each Servant that participates in the Holy Grail War, however one cannot re-purpose the Command Spells of others. While a standard Class Skill for Rulers, it only normally manifests when Conchobar is participating in a Great Holy Grail War.

    Magic Resistance - (B)
    A Skill which grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for them to be affected. As the son of one of the most powerful Druids known to man - Cathbad, Conchobar naturally has a high tolerance to the effects of Magic even if he ultimately did not pursue it himself.

    Riding - (A)
    The ability to ride mounts and vehicles. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. A master charioteer and horse rider, Conchobar is able to operate all vehicles and beasts freely except for Divine Beasts and the Dragon Kinds, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. Conchobar's aptitude is such that when not acting as a Ruler, he is all but certain to be summoned into the Rider Class with his King's Chariot pulled by the monstrous bull Donn Cúailnge.

    Personal Skills

    Charisma - (A)
    A composite Skill consisting of a person's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. At this Rank, one can be said to have achieved the greatest level of popularity as a human being. At the age of seven, Conchobar had ruled for a single year in Fergus' stead yet the nobles decided they wanted him permenantly as King even going against their promise and ousted Fergus. From then on Conchobar ruled so wisely that he was beloved by his people to the point that the men of Ulster obliged him to sleep with their wives on the night of their marriage so as to have his progeny as the first in their family. Even when Conchobar was defeated in battle by Fergus, Fergus' allies argued against executing Conchobar as the war between Ulster and Connacht would never end. As a result, allies he fights with in battle gain a significant boost to their abilities.

    Divine Protection of God - (C)
    A form of blessing from a higher existence granted from sharing the same destiny as Jesus Christ, so that they were born on the same day as well as died on the same day. Conchobar's very body had become nominally sacred to the point where as he lay dying, his own blood baptised him and his soul was immediately taken to Heaven. Curiously this had the side effect of warping his appearance so that he came to resemble a certain religious figure...Not that he really cares. At this Rank it gives a plus modifier to all checks required by Conchobar and his allies.

    Instinct - (B)
    The ability to instantly identify “the best personal course of action” during combat. It is a heightened sixth sense that is innate unlike something that can be gained by anyone through hard work, and it is essentially in the realm of predicting the future as a form of precognition due to having been strengthened by the experience gained from surviving battle after battle. It has a variety of uses from allowing the user to sense and dodge attacks even if they cannot see or hear them but also gauging the strength of an opponent just by looking at them and calculating the chances of victory. As the son of the Druid Cathbad who could see far into the future, Conchobar ought to have this Skill at the highest Rank, but his lack of interest in the Druid arts as well his unstable emotions prevent him from reaching his full potential.


    Noble Phantasm:

    Ochain
    May Our Love Serve As Kingsguard


    [Type: Anti-Unit Armament], [Noble Phantasm Rank: B], [Maximum Range - 1 Metres], [Maximum Number of Targets - Self]

    A magnificent shield symbolising the King of the Red Branch Knights with its red floral pattern and decorated golden leaves. The shield was laboriously created to protect the beloved King Conchobar at all costs and as a result, upon being struck the shield creates a large oscillation effect in order to make a shrill cry that causes all other metals in the vicinity to vibrate as well, amplifying the noise. This serves to destabilise the enemy's senses as well as alerting the people of Ulster that their King is in danger. But the true power of the shield lies in defence, as the people of Ulster's love for the King manifests in the four golden leaves adorned on the shield, each one offering absolute protection against any A-Ranked Noble Phantasm in exchange for breaking a leaf each time, for even the mighty Caladbolg could not break it after three strikes. However once all four leaves have fallen, Ochain itself shatters and leaves Conchobar vulnerable so he must use its power wisely.

    Gorm Glas
    Cerulean Sword of the King Chosen by Providence


    [Type: Anti-Unit Weapon], [Noble Phantasm Rank: A+], [Maximum Range - 1~100 Metres], [Maximum Number of Targets - 1~100]

    A Divine Construct forged by the founder of Ulster - the Goddess Macha who created the ceremonial sword to be passed down through the generations of the Kings of Ulster. As a symbol of authority more than combat, it falls slightly short of other Great Swords like Caladbolg but a skilled enough user can easily make up the difference. The Plus Modifier comes from Conchobar having won the heart of the Goddess who created it and thus it gains an extra boost in his hands. The blade itself has a special ability where those struck by it suffer the Curse of Macha whereby they find their strength being sapped through the wound. Those with a strong enough Resistance to curses can undergo a Check to avoid it, but even those that fail can simply wait for it to pass after about an hour or by having a strong enough Master replenish their energy at a faster rate then the loss of energy.

    For when Conchobar is fighting the strongest of foes, he holds the sword up to the sky and calls upon the aid of the Irish Gods to help him smite the enemy. The sky suddenly darkens and a bolt of lightning comes down and strikes the blade - wrapping it in a fiery aura of blues and greens which expands multitudes of length and width beyond the blade allowing Conchobar to strike down a small army as he swings the sword down upon his enemies. Very few can survive meeting such a strike head on and the best strategy would be to retreat as this attack consumes most of Conchobar's energy and can only be preformed once a day.


    Lore:

    Back when the lands of Ireland were still called Erin (Green), Princess of Ulster - Nessa was walking along the river Conchobar when she met the Druid Cathbad. She asked what the day was good for and using his soothsaying, Cathbad responded that a child conceived on this hour would be blessed to become King (due to being born at the same time as Jesus Christ). With no other man around, Nessa slept with Cathbad and nine months later she gave birth to a son which she named "Conchobar" after the river. Not long after, Nessa's father was slain by the ambitious Eochaid Feidlech who declares himself the new High King of Ireland. In order to protect the people, it was decided that Fergus mac Róich could be the only man strong enough to become King of Ulster and defend against the High King. Years pass by relatively peacefully and Fergus falls in love with Nessa but she will not agree to become his wife unless he allows her seven year old son to become King of Ulster for a year so that all of his descendants could call themselves the "sons of a King". Fergus seeks the consul of his peers and they say that his position won't be jeopardised in any way. And so Conchobar becomes the child king for a year, but thanks to the guided hand of his mother he rules so well that when the time comes, nobody will accept Fergus as king anymore. Enraged at the betrayal, Fergus defected to the new High King Eochaid Feidlech and waged war on Ulster. Conchobar was able to diffuse the situation with diplomacy by making Fergus the founder and leader of the Red Branch knights and taking Feidlech's daughter Medb as his wife. Little did Conchobar realise the problems those two would give him over the years...

    Not long after bearing him a son, Medb grows tired of married life and leaves Conchobar to return to her homeland, her father in an effort to appease Conchobar gives him another of his daughters Clothru which maintained peace...until Clothru became pregnant with Conchobar's son and Medb killed her in a fit of jealous rage. Violence begets violence as Conchobar reached his breaking point so he stormed the Seat of the High Kings -Tara and violated Medb. War broke out between Ulster and Connacht, though Connacht's forces were no match for the Red Branch Knights and so Medb's husband Tinni requests that he and Conchobar settle things in one on one combat but Conchobar easily kills him and Medb is forced to retreat with her army back to Connacht.

    The second tragedy revolved around the woman "Deirdre of the Sorrows". When Deirdre was born the Druid Cathbad foretold that she would bring nothing but death and ruin to the kingdom as men would endlessly fight over her, so the nobles all called for her death but Conchobar decided to hide her away from the world and would marry her when she came of age so that nobody would be dumb enough to challenge him over her. However, Deirdre had prophetic visions of her true love being someone else and upon describing this person to her wet nurse was told she was dreaming of Naoise - nephew of the king. Coercing her nurse, Deirdre managed to meet Naoise and together they eloped to Scotland. Once again his rage overtook his senses at the assumption that Naoise had betrayed him, Conchobar had sent Éogan to kill Naoise and bring Deirdre back. However tragedy struck as Fergus had found the couple and had his son Fíachu to escort them back to Ireland and when Éogan arrived he killed both Naoise and Fíachu. The heartbroken Deirdre commits suicide and the enraged Fergus defected to Connacht to become Medb's lover.

    Medb meanwhile decided that she wanted Donn Cúailnge (a monstrous bull owned by Conchobar) so she would feel superior to her husband and so she called upon all of her allies to raise a massive army and invade Ulster. Conchobar was about to retaliate but an ancient curse incurred by a previous King who angered a Goddess left all the men of Ulster crawling on the ground with pain. Fergus was leading the charge of the Connacht warriors, but out of a lingering attachment to his homeland sends a message to Cú Chulainn, the only Ulsterman immune to the curse (through a loophole regarding his birth) and so Cú returns from his training with Scáthach to fight off the enemies until the curse passes and while he protects the people, he is unable to stop Medb from capturing Donn Cúailnge. Once the men of Ulster regain their strength, Cú sleeps for three days to recover his wounds and Fergus engages in combat and decimates the Ulster forces. Conchobar decides to settle things in single combat but facing down Caladbolg, Conchobar can do naught but block Fergus' strikes with his shield Ochain and on the third strike the king's strength fails and he falls to his knees, accepting defeat. But Fergus is stopped by his foster-son Cormac who argues that the war is already won since Medb has the bull and if Fergus executes Ulster's beloved king then the bloodshed will never end. Still angry over the death of his son, Fergus swings Caladbolg and destroys three hilltops before leaving.

    However Conchobar was still not safe, as he was returning to Ulster the Connacht warrior Cet mac Mágach uses a special bullet and manages to snipe Conchobar in the head. The royal physicians were unable to remove the bullet from his brain but stated it wouldn't kill Conchobar so long as he didn't become consumed with anger. The king agress to reign in his emotions and seven peaceful years pass by when suddenly one day the sky darkens and the king asks his chief Druid Cathbad what has happened, and using his clairvoyance the Druid responds that Jesus Christ has been executed by the Romans. Conchobar explodes with anger at the news, draws his sword and swings so hard he cuts down all the trees in the vicinity before the bullet in his brain explodes and kills him. He was then suceeded as king by his son Cúscraid Mend Macha.


    Relationships:
    Artoria/Arthur Pendragon - "Is that a mini-Caladbolg you've got there? How sacrilegious that it ended up in the hands of the Breatnaigh."

    Cú Chulainn - "Well, Well. If it isn't the kid hero. Let's see if you've surpassed me and Fergus yet..."

    David - "Hmph, standing next to you I can't help but feel inadequate as a ruler. Though the people loved me, I wasn't able to make their lives better as you did yours."

    Diarmuid Ua Duibhne - "This raven hair, ivory skin and piercing beauty. Could you be the reincarnation of Naoise perhaps?"

    Gilgamesh - "The 'King of Heroes' eh? Young Chulainn often called me that whenever he was planning on asking for something. I wonder how I stack up to the real thing!"

    Fergus mac Róich - "I see, even now your hatred of me has not wavered. Very well, let us settle this once and for all. But I wish you to know that even after everything that has happened, I am still proud to have called you my friend."

    Fionn mac Cumhaill - "Oh King of the Fianna, I sympathise with you a great deal. Being the leader isn't as glorious as it's made out to be."

    Ishtar - "Ahaha, that tempetuous attitude. You definitely remind me of another fickle Fertility Goddess."

    Jeanne/George/Martha - "Glorious Saints, won't you lend me your strength to bring about justice?"

    Longinus - "If it isn't the slayer of Christ...And me by extension. I think you should let me punch you at least once for that y'know?"

    Medb - "There is nothing more that can be said. I have already punished you enough for killing my beloved wife, and yet my rage will not subside. Get out of my sight before I do something even more unspeakable."

    Scáthach - "Ah Lady Scáthach, it has been a long time. Could I ask that we spar once more? Not as a request from a King, but as your former student... I wish to see if it's possible that I can grow even further, to stand equal - no, to even surpass Fergus and Cú Chulainn..."


    Creator's Notes:
    I always wanted to try making a Irish Servant, but I could never think of any good candiadates beyond the super obvious that everyone's done. I debated with myself a lot on how to best represent Conchobar as a Servant - from his personality (especially his darker moments) to his Skillset and Noble Phantasm to even what Class would fit him best.

    And before anyone says anything, I know the legend only specifies him being born on the same day as Jesus, not necessarily the same moment but I wanted to make a Castlevania reference so have mercy. I also threw in the aside mention about his appearance warping to be similar to Jesus just so I could justify using the FC.

    The Faceclaim this time around was Monkey D. Garp from One Piece.


    As usual, all comments and criticisms are welcome. ~
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    Alternate Classes: Rider, Caster
    True Name: Benedict Arnold
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Origin: America (18th century)
    Armament: Pistol

    Parameters:
    STR: C
    END: C
    AGI: C
    MANA: E
    LUCK: D
    NP: B

    Skills
    Class Skills

    Presence Concealment - Rank C+: The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. It is a common Class Skill of the Assassin class.
    Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. The rank of Presence Concealment drops considerably when preparing to attack. In Assassin’s case, Master’s are unable to sense his presence as a Servant unless he himself reveals it to them, and he is capable of somewhat obfuscating his identity and abilities in their eyes.

    Personal Skills

    Independent Action - Rank B: The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master; the ability that allows for action even in the absence of the Master. At higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract.
    It is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for two days without a Master. However, this is the ideal value achieved by maximally conserving mana and avoiding battle and Noble Phantasm usage.

    Military Tactics - Rank C: Tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. Bonus modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm.
    Assassin is a general of some renown, and received praise for his many military achievements. Assassin can also use Military Tactics to provide bonus modifiers to an ally’s Anti-Army Noble Phantasm.

    Burn and Pillage - Rank C: The ability to obtain the resources of others and deny resources for others. This Skill allows the user to bestow a burn effect to his own or an ally’s attacks for a short period. Those suffering from burn damage will also find their Magical Energy sapped as long as the effect continues.
    Assassin made effective use of this particular tactic when dealing with his enemies.

    Noble Phantasms

    Traitorous General
    Turncoat

    Anti-Unit (Self), Rank B
    A Noble Phantasm that functions as a manifestation of Assassin’s most infamous act as well as the reputation that followed him to his grave. It is the hallmark of a traitor to all, and as such is something Assassin strives to keep a secret.
    Turncoat requires no activation, being constantly in effect. The Noble Phantasm simply allows Assassin to possess multiple Servant contracts at once. It also grants his words a charm-like effect when convincing others of the worth of his assistance. Assassin is free to use Turncoat to terminate a contract between a Master should he so choose, and is even able to slip away from the effects of Command Spells with this ability.
    Turncoat also allows Assassin to eavesdrop on the normal mental communication between Master and Servant in case a Master is shared between himself and another Servant.

    Description
    Likes: Ingrates, men of honor
    Dislikes: Blind loyalty, men of honor
    Talents: Self-aggrandizement, sudden yet inevitable betrayals
    Natural Enemy: Karna

    Assassin’s true identity is Benedict Arnold, the Turncoat General.

    Benedict is a man of appalling cynicism. Though he respects ideals such as honor, bravery and loyalty, he has long since given up on serving them, and is seemingly devoted only to himself. Despite his respect for men of unquestionable character, he thinks them fools all the same. Most of all he cannot stand blindly offered loyalty.
    Deceptive by nature, Benedict prefers to keep himself calm, cool and detached in all situations. He is adept at convincing others of his worth, as well as keeping his true identity hidden by borrowing from the lives of his fellow generals. He feels little in the way of guilt in stealing their achievements, as he believes they stole the credit for many of his own achievements. Because of the misfortunes he suffered in life, Benedict is highly protective of his own reputation, especially regarding his abilities. As such, badmouthing or insulting him is liable to send him into a terrible fury.
    Though he does carry respect and a sort of hero-worship for many Heroic Spirits, especially more modern commanders that still retained their morals, Benedict cannot truly come to terms with them. Ironically, the types of Servants that he respects most are those of a similar manipulative bent as himself, though he knows that he can never afford to sympathize with them for fear of being at a disadvantage. Though he is in favor of alliances between Servants and can feign camaraderie with them, he is likely to have an extremely poor relationship with Servants that exhibit absolute loyalty to others.
    As can be expected from one of the most notorious traitors in modern history, Benedict has no real loyalty towards his Master. He prizes usefulness most of all, and as long as his Master can guarantee their mutual prosperity, Benedict will serve under them. With his Presence Concealment, he is able to move about without being noticed, and Benedict would likely seek to serve under multiple Masters simultaneously, serving as a mutual spy to them while manipulating events to his own advantage.
    Benedict wishes to undo the effects that his betrayal had on his and his family’s reputation. However, he is not certain how he should go about with achieving this, as he recognizes the colonies as lousy ingrates that deserved his betrayal. However, the British were also ungrateful for his generous assistance, shunning him for the actions he took in their service. As such, swaying the course of history to lean on either side of the issue is a troubling prospect.

    Lore
    Benedict Arnold was an American Revolutionary War general best known for his defection from the Continental Army to the British side of the conflict in 1780.
    Benedict Arnold was born in Norwich, Connecticut, on January 14, 1741. A member of the Sons of Liberty, Arnold rose to the rank of general in the Continental Army during the Revolutionary War. Frustrated by the lack of recognition, he subsequently switched sides to the British and plotted the surrender of West Point. When his traitorous plans came to light, Arnold escaped capture and eventually made his way to England. He died in London on June 14, 1801.

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    ASSASSINS everywhere. I guess I should do something else next.
    Also, the logic behind his manifestation as an Assassin is that like Jing Ke, he attempted to assassinate something, which in this case was the United States.

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    Conchobar: Really cool sheet. I think this is the first sympathetic profile of Conchobar I've seen here. Every other one portrayed him as just a spoiled brat. Goes to show how differently the same mythical figure can be interpreted...

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Conchobar: Really cool sheet. I think this is the first sympathetic profile of Conchobar I've seen here. Every other one portrayed him as just a spoiled brat. Goes to show how differently the same mythical figure can be interpreted...
    Very much of the same opinion. I especially like the NPs, the shield in particular.

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    Arnold: Huh, I see you've done an angsty Assassin Benedict Arnold sheet before me. Though yours isn't really as angsty or regretful as my idea, despite the "moping in the rain" FC. Still, this is a very good sheet, and especially well fleshed-out in the personality department. I'm a little surprised he doesn't have Weak Constitution or a similar Skill though, given the leg wounds he suffered that put him out of commission from the army.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Arnold: Huh, I see you've done an angsty Assassin Benedict Arnold sheet before me. Though yours isn't really as angsty or regretful as my idea, despite the "moping in the rain" FC. Still, this is a very good sheet, and especially well fleshed-out in the personality department. I'm a little surprised he doesn't have Weak Constitution or a similar Skill though, given the leg wounds he suffered that put him out of commission from the army.
    I figured that the wounds simply result in lowered Agility. Arnold would manifest in something of a pre-wounded state to make passing as other generals easier, I suppose. And yeah, he isn't all that angsty, more brooding and spiteful.
    As a side note, his physical parameters are so high due to his notoriety and association with the famous term 'turncoat'.

    It was odd, though, that nobody had done a sheet of him. He is pretty famous after all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Conchobar: Really cool sheet. I think this is the first sympathetic profile of Conchobar I've seen here. Every other one portrayed him as just a spoiled brat. Goes to show how differently the same mythical figure can be interpreted...
    I definitely think that Conchobar suffers the most of the Ulster heroes from an inconsistent portrayal over the years, especially when he's on the opposite side of a protagonist's tale. As a result I tried to reflect that in a more nuanced personality similar to how Cú Chulainn is depicted in canon.

    But I'm glad you guys liked it at any rate.
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    Benedict Arnold: Very interesting take on the famous turncoat. I honestly don’t have much to say about it because like most of your sheets it’s incredibly solid. The most interesting part is the NP. I always love NP’s that mess with the way that the grail war works.


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    Since I assume I'll be busy with other things soon, I might as well submit some Servant ideas in case someone gets inspired by them:

    "Chivalric Romance": A Servant in the vein of Nursery Rhyme, manifesting as the genre of Chivalric Romance. The real notable thing about this is the genre's effect on the legends of other heroes, since the stories frequently featured heroes from antiquity adventuring in medieval Europe. I also suspect that this might be an in-universe reason for some Classical Servants' anachronistic appearances, but I digress. Chivalric Romance would probably be a heroic sort of class, and would likely take either the form of a knight in shining armor or a court maiden or something else fitting the theme of tales of chivalry. They might also possess the ability to distort the Saint Graphs of other Servants in order for them to better "fit the story". Saber, Lancer, Rider or Caster, probably.
    Francesco Petrarca: Also known as Petrarch, essentially the father of the Renaissance (Renaissance - Innovation, anyone?), sparked by his discovery of some of Cicero's letters, hitherto unknown to Europe. As the founder of humanism and the world's first tourist, I'd imagine him to be a really big fanboy of human achievement (and therefore Servants) in general. Might or might not be a mage, but one of his personal philosophies more or less describes the workings of a Reality Marble if you squint hard enough, so he might possess one of those. Caster.
    Matthias Corvinus: King of Hungary, revolutionized the military of his day by having a professional army, not to mention one that actively wielded firearms and artillery in the 15th century. Was a bibliophile and polyglot besides excelling in most everything he tried, which might net him something similar to Richard the Lionhearted's Talented in All Fields/All Forte. I'd imagine his title, Raven King, also being mentioned there somewhere. And so as to avoid the obligatory army summoning NP, his Black Army/Legion could be a Skill giving him Military Tactics and the ability to summon Familiar soldiers. Also has a role in folklore of skulking about incognito to keep tabs on nobles mistreating their people. With his breadth of legend, I have him pegged for Saber, Archer, Lancer, Rider and Caster at the least.
    Huayna Capac: A Sapa Inca, though somewhat unremarkable. A momma's boy of a leader, he still expanded the Inca Empire through bloody warfare. Wielded a sling in battle, was apparently carried by a palanquin. His NP might be related to a lake named after one of his acts, wherein he slaughtered so many of his enemies that the lake was rendered blood-red. Possibly shoots a barrage of blood droplets with the sling or something? Probably an Archer or a Rider.
    'Albert Johnson': Also known as the Mad Trapper of Rat Creek, not much is known about who the hell this guy was. He got into trouble with the mounties in Canada and responded to their arrival by shooting one of them through the door. He then went on to engage an entire patrol, got his shack dynamited (only to reveal a dugout underneath), engaged in a firefight and fled. A search party then tracked him for quite a long distance, despite him losing them a few times (once by trekking over a mountain). Reputedly the only sound ever heard from him was a laugh when he shot one the search party. Berserker or Assassin.
    Saint Hildegard: Polymath Saint, also the founder of natural history in Germany. Was reputedly an oracle of some stripe, even titled as the Sibyl of the Rhine. Notable for the fact that her achievements in the fields of science and faith all occurred without her ever actually being educated in either field. Her works are well-catalogued, so there's lots of material at least. Caster or Ruler.
    Saint Hubert: A minor Saint, mainly of interest for the possibility of making a deer-riding Rider. Patron Saint of hunters. Probably qualifies for Archer, Rider and Ruler.
    Apepi: A sheet broached on quite a long time ago, namely a Foreigner connected with Apep (one of the aliases of the Outer God D'Endrrah). Probably the biggest note on the sheet that in the Cthulhu mythos, Cthulhu actually killed D'Endrrah, so feasibly the power of the Outer God would be up for grabs, meaning that Apepi isn't just a vessel, but more like a channeler of the Outer God's full power. I also figured I'd throw in some nod to the asteroid 99942 Apophis, which might be the remnants of D'Endrrah corpse, or at least the imprint they left on this universe. Hypothetical NPs might include pulling down the asteroid (bolstered by some extra mass from whatever dimension D'Endrrah's corpse actually lies in), with Apep's rivalry with Ra maybe turning it into a dark sun or something. Might also be able to summon a simulacrum-Apep as a mount. Class would be Foreigner, but might also be a Rider or a Berserker.

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    There's this dude from the 18th century who convinced my whole country that he was a Russian tsar in hiding (thought murdered at the time). He was accepted by the people as an absolute ruler and continued to be one for quite a few years until his assassination. What's crazy is that he fooled the wider surroundings for a bit, got gifted luxuries from the surrounding nations. He was also a rather decent, if a bit tyrannical ruler, managing to defeat large armies of both the Ottomans and Venetians (compared to which Montenegro is so tiny it barely registers on the map).


    He's quite the example of uneducated people believing in outrageous bullshit, but I think he'd fit amazingly as a Heroic Spirit with high charisma and the ability to completely steal the looks/skills/NPs of Heroic Spirits that die while he is manifested. Of course, you'd have to limit the power somehow, and I'm not sure what class he'd fit best (Caster? Assassin? Then again him being a "false tsar" implies one of the Knight classes), but I think the idea is really cool. But he's so obscure a character I doubt he'll ever be actualized.

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    Quote Originally Posted by falseCeilings View Post
    There's this dude from the 18th century who convinced my whole country that he was a Russian tsar in hiding (thought murdered at the time). He was accepted by the people as an absolute ruler and continued to be one for quite a few years until his assassination. What's crazy is that he fooled the wider surroundings for a bit, got gifted luxuries from the surrounding nations. He was also a rather decent, if a bit tyrannical ruler, managing to defeat large armies of both the Ottomans and Venetians (compared to which Montenegro is so tiny it barely registers on the map).


    He's quite the example of uneducated people believing in outrageous bullshit, but I think he'd fit amazingly as a Heroic Spirit with high charisma and the ability to completely steal the looks/skills/NPs of Heroic Spirits that die while he is manifested. Of course, you'd have to limit the power somehow, and I'm not sure what class he'd fit best (Caster? Assassin? Then again him being a "false tsar" implies one of the Knight classes), but I think the idea is really cool. But he's so obscure a character I doubt he'll ever be actualized.
    This reminds me a lot of the story of the False Dmitries, though it's around a century earlier and the original Dmitry wasn't actually a Tsar, but merely the son of one. A Dmitry Servant based on those legends would be epic though. I imagine his NP would work a bit like Herc's God Hand; reincarnating him into one of his imposters each time he dies, with each incarnation giving him new experience and abilities. The "true" Dmitry would be a small and weak young boy, but each time he dies the abilities and experience of his imposters would stack, eventually making him incredibly powerful.

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    Class: Saber Foreigner
    Other Classes: NA
    True Name: Maximillian I The Second Empire of Mexico
    Alignment: Lawful Good
    Place of Origin: Mexico

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    Parameters:

    STR: C
    END: D
    AGI: B
    MGI: A+
    LCK: E-
    NP: EX

    Likes: The Empire of Mexico
    Dislikes: The Republic of Mexico
    Talent: Leading an Empire
    Natural Enemy: Benito Juarez
    Attribute: Man
    Armament: Ceremonial Saber

    Class Skills:
    Spoiler:

    Existence Outside the Domain
    Rank: EX

    Divinity
    Rank: C
    Being the favored pet of the Outer God Azathoth has given Foreigner a measure of divinity.

    Magic Resistance
    Rank: E
    Cannot cancel spells, but magic damage is reduced somewhat.

    Riding
    Rank: C
    Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.


    Personal Skills:
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    Emperor of the Republic
    Rank: EX
    The skill belonging to the one who is placed on a throne that does not exist. It encompasses skills such as Charisma, Self Suggestion, and Mental Pollution.

    Imperial Privilege
    Rank: B
    Skills such as Fine Arts, Military Tactics, and Swordsmanship can be obtained for a short period of time.


    Noble Phantasm(s):
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    Chapultepec Castle
    Beloved Home of the Emperor
    The Blind Idiot’s Court



    Type: Fortress
    Rank: EX
    Range: 60
    Max Targets: As many that fit in the Castle


    The Castle that Saber inhabited during his rule over the Mexican Empire. Inside the Castle the world becomes the Mexican Empire, a powerful nation that will never end. In Chapultepec Castle there is a ball to celebrate the glory of the Empire. Those inside the Castle must make a LCK or Magic Resistance check to not be swept into the beautiful dream of the Emperor of Mexico. Those that fail begin to forget themselves and act as members of the Emperor’s court. They will continue to dance in his eternal ball and entertain him and his wife. Carlota of Mexico appears in the Castle as its caretaker summoned as a Caster servant, although she is unable to leave the Castle.

    The Castle will automatically appear wherever Saber is summoned although it can be moved to another location if Saber performs a ritual at the desired place.

    The truth of Chapultepec Castle is that it is Servant Foreigner’s body. The body that goes out and fights in the Holy Grail War is a construction made by Chapultepec Castle. Even if the construction is destroyed Foreigner can create a new one. In the very center of the Castle surrounded by powerful physical and magical defenses is the spiritual core of Foreigner which needs to be hit directly to properly destroy Foreigner.

    Carlota




    Lore:
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    The first and last Emperor of the Second Mexican Empire. The younger brother of the Austrian Emperor and a commander in the Austrian Navy Maximilian was decided upon by the reigning powers of Europe to be the best choice to become the emperor of the newly reestablished Mexican Empire. Maximilian was nothing but a man of the people though and decided he would only rule over Mexico if he was elected by a plebiscite. Napoleon the III however lied to him and claimed that the people of Mexico wanted him to he their ruler and so he went to Mexico to become their emperor.

    Once there Maximilian found that not many of the people truly wanted his rule preferring the president of the Mexican Republic Benito Juarez. He was determined to be a good ruler though and alongside his wife Carlota set about to implement the very same liberal policies that Benito had been implementing to improve conditions for the poor. He also tried to make peace with Benito offering him a position as a Prime Minister. Unfortunately the people of Mexico had no desire to have a foreign monarch sit on a throne they had abolished years ago.

    Civil War erupted and Maximilian supported by European forces fought against the Mexican Republic. Unfortunately for Maximilian Napoleon the III abandoned Maximilian and returned his forces to France after he decided that Mexico was a lost cause. Despite being defended by his loyal generals Maximilian’s forces were defeated and Maximilian himself was executed.

    As Maximilian died, executed by the people he loved, he cried out in fear. He cried out for without him Mexico would be lost. The Second Empire of Mexico needed a leader the same way the solar system needed the sun, the same way the Milky Way needs whatever is at its center. Now it is unknown if it was a cosmic coincidence or a planned occurrence but the being at the center of the galaxy heard Maximilian's cry. It sensed something in him, something that shrugged off part of the creature's cosmic indifference. So hearing this cry the Nuclear Chaos called out to Maximilian and asked him if he wished to be saved. Maximilian refused. He told the great being that he cared not for his own life, but for that of his Empire. All he wished was for his empire to live on without him.

    The Blind Idiot God pondered. For it and Maximilian the time seemed to stretch on for days, weeks, months, years, but in truth it took but a second. The Outer God agreed, he would save the Empire of Mexico, although not in the way Maximilian hoped for. As the emperor died saying his last word "Hombre", speaking of the creature who would save Mexico, so too did the empire disappear from the Earth. The Empire of Mexico would never again rise, for the great Azathoth took it. The mere concept of the Empire of Mexico was taken into this incomprehensible being that lived in the center of the galaxy. In its maw the empire danced to the whine of accursed flutes along side its savior. So deep in space lies the eternal Mexican Empire for which there will be no end. That is what has been summoned, what Azathoth allows to go to Earth and play.


    Thus the Second Mexican Empire ended after only four years.



    Personality:
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    A man who loves the people and wanted to be loved in return. All Maximilian has ever wished for is to be the leader of a great people he would lead to prosperity. Unfortunately as a second son of the emperor he was never destined to become such a leader. As a result he will leap at any possibility to become a leader of men and ignore any evidence or gut feelings he has that it is a trick. However once you are one of his beloved people he will protect you to the bitter end.

    This is not Maximilian though. This is not the kind emperor of Mexico. This is the Empire itself who sends out the ideal Emperor to keep it safe.
    As a result of this Maximilian has become even more clueless to the world around him. Following suit to the title of Blind Idiot he refuses to face the truth of any mater. In the Grail War he is summoned in he believes the enemy servants and masters to be intruders on Mexico's lands and wherever the war takes place to be Mexico City. In his mind he is the Emperor of the Mexican Empire which never fell after all the Galaxy revolves around him and so how could it.

    The Carlota in the ChapultepecCastle appears to be very much a fool. She flits around the ball that shall never end celebrating the glory of the Mexican Empire. If any on the Castle even dare imply anything contrary to this she will fly into a rage and attack them with magecraft she learned in Belgum as a child.

    The Castle itself, or rather the Empire, while not truly possessing sapience has spent enough time around Cosmic Beings to begin to approach one. It has adopted the preferred ideology of the Outer Gods that is Cosmic Indifference. It cares not what happens outside of its walls, after all that is what Maximilian is for. All it cares for is its own enjoyment and the celebration of itself. It will only take notice of a creature truly if they make it past both Maximilian and Carlota and go deeper into the castle. Any offense like that will result in it manipulating the indide of the castle to break their minds until they become a loyal dancer in his eternal ball.



    Relationships:
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    On summoning:
    “Servant Saber. As long as I am here the Mexican Empire will never fall.

    If you have summoned Nero:
    “I see there is a fellow beloved Emperor here. I would love to listen to one of her performances.

    Bond 1:
    “The beloved Emperor, the one who brought Mexico to an age of prosperity. That is me.”

    Bond 2:
    “My power is to protect the people. Any accusations otherwise are nothing but lies”

    Bond 3:
    “You are a fine master. I shall offer you a position in my court. How about Prime Minister?”

    Bond 4:
    “I know what they say of my empire but listen to me. I was the one and only Emperor of Mexico, so that is to say I am the empire, and therefore as long as I am here the empire will live.”

    Bond 5:
    “I suppose I trust you enough to let you in on a little secret. When I say I am the empire I mean it. This body is nothing but a shell for the Second Empire of Mexico to act through.”

    Creator Notes:

    There is a lot of hidden text if you didn't catch it while reading. Have fun. Sorry for those on mobile.

    My first Extra Class that wasn’t modern fiction. This was a lot of fun. Because I didn’t say it directly in the sheet the outer entity that ‘Maximilian’ is bound to is Azazoth the Blind Idiot God who holds court in the center of the milky way with outer gods dancing around him. The inspiration for this servant came from my father who loves the story of Maximilian and Carlota. I wanted to do something special though and so here’s Foreigner.
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    Maximillian I: Interesting sheet for a historical figure I never heard of before. The connection to Azathoth feels underdeveloped though. I mean, it's basically nonexistent apart from his NP and Class Skills. I feel like something as major as being bound to an eldritch god who slumbers fitfully at the center of all reality ought to have a major effect on Maximillian's personality, at the very least.

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    Ah, the failed Emperor of Mexico. A very intriguing historical figure, but aside from the bond lines and maybe the NP, felt a little too barebones.

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    Also, read the blacked out text, and I agree with Royd that the connection with Azatoth is rather underdeveloped. Maybe separate Foreigner and Saber, so Saber represents the more mundane aspects of Maximilian, and Foreigner is the all the juju behind the scenes. Also, the lore section should have included blacked out text or something about when he made contact with the Outer God and why.
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    Yeah looking back I may have gone a little too barebones. I kind of wrote this while waiting for a plane and posted it in a hurry in my excitement. I might redo a bunch of it now that I'm back home.
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    Just added a whole bunch of stuff based on ya'll's suggestions. Changed up the personality and added parts for Carlota and the true servant Foreigner as well as adding to the lore as to how Azathoth became connected to the servant. Also because you might not have noticed Gauo's suggestion of separate servants for Saber and Foreigner is already true with Maximilian being a construction the true servant, the Empire as a concept, sends out.


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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    This reminds me a lot of the story of the False Dmitries, though it's around a century earlier and the original Dmitry wasn't actually a Tsar, but merely the son of one. A Dmitry Servant based on those legends would be epic though. I imagine his NP would work a bit like Herc's God Hand; reincarnating him into one of his imposters each time he dies, with each incarnation giving him new experience and abilities. The "true" Dmitry would be a small and weak young boy, but each time he dies the abilities and experience of his imposters would stack, eventually making him incredibly powerful.
    That's an interesting one. You'd have to take some artistic liberty to be able to make him competitive in the Servant landscape, but it could turn out really well.

    Now I'm thinking of a Holy Grail War happening somewhere between the Balkans and Russia and both of our ideas getting summoned. Think of the possibilities.

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    Class: Assassin
    Other Classes: Saber, Rider

    True Name:
    Alignment: Lawful evil
    Place of Origin: Java, Indonesia (13th century)



    Parameters:


    STR: C

    END: A
    AGI: C
    MGI: C
    LCK: B
    NP: B


    Height: 150cm
    Weight: 62kg
    Attribute: Man
    Traits: Male, king, Brynhildr's beloved, weak to Enuma Elish
    Armament: Kris, light armor
    Catalyst: A page from the original manuscript of ​Kitab Pararaton


    Class Skills

    Presence Concealment (C++)
    The capacity to hide one's presence as a Servant. It is a common Class Skill of the Assassin class.
    Hides one's presence as a Servant. Suitable for spying. The rank of Presence Concealment drops considerably when preparing to attack. Denoting Assassin's talent at guerrilla warfare, this skill receives an additional plus modifier whenever he is setting up an ambush in a forest area. That said, the plus modifier gradually decreases the longer he stays in combat, reducing the rank of this skill to the lowest minimum of C.

    Personal Skills

    Charisma (B)
    At this rank, it is sufficient for Assassin to lead a kingdom as a king. Assassin is revered as the founder of one of Southeast Asia's most powerful empires. With his charisma and careful planning, he managed to lead his people and emerge victorious in a battle with a naval division of the feared Mongol Empire.


    Subversive Activities (A)
    The talent to reduce the enemy forces before going into battle. An expert of traps. However, the higher the rank of this skill, the more one's spiritual status as a hero declines. At this rank, it's possible to disable nearly 60% of the total military force before the enemy advances. In life, Assassin managed to rout an army with considerably greater power compared to his own kingdom with an extensive knowledge of guerrilla warfare, blindsiding them multiple times with sabotage, ambushes, and hit-and-run tactics. This feat granted him this skill at a high rank.


    Imperial Privilege (-)
    A skill that allows its owner to temporarily obtain skills that should have been essentially impossible to possess. This skill is overwritten by the effects of Assassin's Noble Phantasm, Kitab Pararaton.
    Noble Phantasm(s)



    Kitab Pararaton
    Book of Kings


    Type: Anti-unit (Self)
    Rank: C
    Range: 1
    Max Targets: 1 (Self)

    Kitab Pararaton is an ancient Javanese chronicle containing the history of the kings of Singhasari and Majapahit, presented in narrative formats in chronological order. The book is a mix of both factual history and myth, glorifying the kings with feats both real and fictional in nature.


    This chronicle is a Noble Phantasm bestowed upon all kings of Singhasari and Majapahit. Upon activation, the user obtains a rank up in all parameters. It also temporarily bestows the user with various traits and skills such as divinity, riding, swordsmanship, military tactics, eternal arms mastery, and others. These skills are obtained with the rank of C or higher.



    Karaton Majapahit
    Progenitor's Loyal Army, Through Thick and Thin

    Type: Anti-army
    Rank: D (A if summoned under the Rider class)
    Range: 1-50
    Max Targets: 25 people


    The military might of the kingdom of Majapahit, summoned to fight for their king. Every king of Majapahit possesses this Noble Phantasm with major and minor variations, depending on individual feats and their class containers. While the most common variation of this Noble Phantasm is similar to a certain King of Conqueror's, in Assassin's case, it is a crystallization of his guerrilla tactics, and the small amount of soldiers who chose to fight with him against the Mongols at that time in his life.


    This Noble Phantasm is capable of summoning up to 25 Majapahit soldiers. Individually their mana cost is small, but with sheer numbers, it is considered a feat to summon any number of soldiers higher than 10 for more than a few hours. Each soldier is equipped with E rank parameters and D rank Presence Concealment skill. While they wield spears, kris, and have basic combat capabilities, their poor parameters mean they are generally unsuited for direct combat. Rather, their main purpose is to serve as familiars, carrying out reconnaissance, small tasks, and if possible, assassinations under Assassin's behalf. To conserve mana, these soldiers can be de-summoned at any time, and can be resummoned again as long as the master has sufficient mana to sustain them. In addition, the support of these soldiers also makes it easier for Assassin to perform his ultimate Noble Phantasm.



    Layung Pesta
    The Crimson Banquet Marks The Invaders' End

    Type: Anti-army
    Rank: B
    Range: 1-50
    Max Targets: 100 people


    Assassin's trump card, a Noble Phantasm that belongs to him alone. This Noble Phantasm recreates the legend that spelled the loss of the Mongol army, and the decisive victory for Assassin and the newborn Empire of Majapahit at the time. The Mongols lost when Assassin and his men ambushed them in the middle of a banquet held to celebrate their conquest of Java. Assassin had previously formed an alliance with them while advancing his own agenda to reclaim his throne, finally backstabbing them as they were intoxicated and unprepared to fight amidst the celebration.


    This Noble Phantasm uses magecraft similar to a reality marble to build a "banquet hall" on top of the world. This hall can be made in any kind of room, as long as it's presumably large enough to host a feast and contain the "guests". After this hall is made, Servants and anything summoned by Servants will find themselves inexplicably attracted to attend this banquet. Upon entering the hall, they will drown in pleasure, drinking, laughing, and partying without a care, reducing their parameters by one rank. It is during this moment that Assassin and the men he summoned with his second Noble Phantasm ambushes the dazed, intoxicated Servants, using this opportunity to carry out swift assassinations. While some Servants may survive this initial assassination attempt, it is still possible to inflict lethal injuries upon them.


    The most dangerous aspect of this Noble Phantasm is not the assassination itself, but its ability to inflict heavy mental interference upon the targets, sharply reducing their awareness and inhibitions once this Noble Phantasm is invoked. This prevents them from questioning anything about the banquet, and ensure that they will simply attend and enjoy themselves during these last moments before their end. It would require certain mental fortification skills, or a command spell to snap these Servants from their daze, or to stop them from attending at all.
    Description
    Likes: Women, hunting, banquets
    Dislikes: Mongols
    Talent: Negotiation, manipulation, ruling, guerrilla warfare
    Natural Enemy: Kublai Khan

    Assassin's True Name is Raden Wijaya, founder and the first king of the Majapahit Empire.

    A wise, assertive ruler who made effective policies, revered as the one who established one of the greatest kingdoms in Southeast Asia... or at least that's what he's supposed to be.

    While he does have memory of his entire life, the Assassin-class summons a younger incarnation of himself, back when he was the heir to a ruined kingdom, leading a relatively small army against a foe with an army many times more powerful than theirs.
    At first glance, Assassin conducts himself in a way some would consider unbeffiting of both an Assassin and a king. He's hot-blooded, outgoing, and even a bit of a womanizer, evidenced by his decision in life to take four wives not long after his coronation, both out of love and political motives. This aspect of his personality changes, however, when he starts formulating and executing plans. This would bring out another side of him, one that is cold, calculating, and cunning enough to devise all sorts of trickery and deceit in order to claim victory. Assassin still retains the charisma he had in life, a skill he proudly uses both to boost his allies' morale, and to manipulate enemies to fall for his tricks.

    In a traditional HGW, it would be quite difficult to pinpoint Assassin's True Name, due to two of his three Noble Phantasms being shared among a number of other Heroic Spirits, and by the time he unleashes his third, it would be too late to develop countermeasures. Assassin himself prefers to fight from the shadows at the beginning of the war, although he could easily change his tactics and reveal himself at any time, establishing "treaties" with other Servants, while continuing his own agenda from behind the scenes.

    Despite deceit and betrayal being a major part of his life, ironically, Assassin himself fell victim to betrayal when some of his most trusted officers staged rebellions on his kingdom. He was able to extinguish these rebellions, but he deeply laments the loss of his trusted officers. To the grail, he would wish for a chance to have another conversation with his officers, thinking that perhaps he hadn't understood them enough in life.

    Lore



    Raden Wijaya or Raden Vijaya (also known as Nararya Sangramawijaya, regnal name Kertarajasa Jayawardhana) (reigned 1293–1309) was a Javanese King, the founder and the first monarch of Majapahit empire. The history of his founding of Majapahit was written in several records, including Pararaton and Negarakertagama. His rule was marked by the victory against the army and the navy of Kublai Khan's Yuan dynasty, a division of the Mongol Empire.

    In 1289, Kublai Khan sent a demand for tribute to the Kingdom of Singhasari, although the demand was refused by Kertanagara, the then-king of Singhasari, and the messenger was humiliated. Shortly after, there was a rebellion against Singhasari in the country of Jayakatwang. Kertanagara was killed in the attempt to put down the rebellion in 1292, and Raden Wijaya, his alleged stepson, fled to Sumenep, Madura, along with the governor of that region, Aria Wiraraja. There, Raden Wijaya made a plan to establish a new kingdom. Wijaya promised that he would divide Java with Aria Wiraraja if Aria Wiraraja could help him overthrow Jayakatwang's Kediri kingdom.

    In November 1292, a Mongol force landed in Tuban, East Java, with the aim of revenge for Kertanagara's humiliation of the Mongol messenger. However, Kertanegara was already dead. Raden Wijaya made an alliance with the Mongols with the aim of attacking Singhasari, which by this time had fallen under the power of Jayakatwang. Jayakatwang was defeated and destroyed in 1293.

    Upon Jayakatwang's defeat, Raden Wijaya asked for permission to return to Majapahit to prepare for his surrender to the Mongols. Without suspicion, the Mongols entrusted a small squad of soldiers to escort him. Wijaya easily led the escorts to an ambush, swiftly dispatching them. Meanwhile, the Mongols are celebrating their victory, and the fact that they have just earned another vassal kingdom to serve the Khan. Then one day, after amassing enough military forces, Wijaya and his men ambushed the Mongols in the middle of their unprepared, drunken partying, reducing a large amount of their forces with ease. Soon afterwards, he established the kingdom of Majapahit, and crowned himself as its rightful ruler on November 1293. For the next few months, Raden Wijaya would lead soldiers from his newborn kingdom on guerrilla warfare, wiping out any remaining Mongol forces on the island. Eventually due to climate, tropical diseases, and the rapidly decreasing number of their forces, the Mongols are forced to retreat, never to return.

    Raden Wijaya was known as a firm and capable ruler. Aria Wiraraja who had been so useful during the period of the establishment of the kingdom, was given the area of Madura, which was granted a special status. He was also given an autonomous region around Lumajang and the Blambangan Peninsula, and his son, Nambi, was appointed Prime Minister. His reign is not flawless, however, as there were multiple rebellions, some of them led by people close to him, such as his advisers and officers. Nonetheless, he managed to quell these rebellions. Raden Wijaya passed his crown to his son, Jayanegara, and passed away on 1309.

    Relationships


    Robin Hood
    "Wow, a thief, a master of traps, and someone who's not afraid to get his hands dirty in battle! Y'know, I really could've used someone like you in my army during the Mongol invasion, you'd be like, a trusted adviser of mine then!"

    David
    "So, this Abishag girl... Wanna tell me more about her?"

    Kublai Khan
    "Heh, now who do we have here..? Y'know old man, I never got to meet you personally in my life, but if you're the one who sent that army to invade my home... care for round two?"

    Any of the officers who betrayed him
    "Ah, so they're here too, huh... I dunno, I feel like there's so many things to be said, but at the same time..."

    Creator's Notes
    Whew, my first attempt at making a Servant. While he did have some legendary feats and is quite a big deal on my country's history lessons, I hope I didn't make him too overpowered.
    Last edited by BnEl15; May 28th, 2019 at 03:24 PM.

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