Cool sheet overall, but I'd suggest lowering Agility to A+, since it's supposed to be the maximum rank. Welcome to the club, Nominus!
Cool sheet overall, but I'd suggest lowering Agility to A+, since it's supposed to be the maximum rank. Welcome to the club, Nominus!
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Information:
The Queen of Cake
True Name: Marie Antoinette (Alter)
Class: Assassin
Alternate Classes: Alter-Ego
Source: France, Historical Fact
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Attribute: Man
Armament: Knife, Crystals
Likes: Grandeur, Cake, Jewelry
Dislikes: Peasants, Blandness
Parameters:
Strength: D
Endurance: C
Agility: A
Mana: B
Luck: E
Biography
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Others:
Bond Lines
Craft Essence
Notes
Last edited by NominusAbdominus; December 29th, 2018 at 01:45 AM.
Marie Antoinette (Alter): I've initially thought "Let Them Eat Cake" was true, so you're not alone. Admitingly, her personality as an insensitively wasteful person rather than just a standard "Capricious Queen" was a pleasant divergence and surprise. Even the application of Innocent Monster's description of a doll-like woman whose porcelain skin conceals jagged gems - - which was a nice touch and leaves a mildly unsettling imagery.
Skill-wise, however, perhaps add a negative modifier because of Alter-Marie's wasteful and flaunting tendencies - - since it's mentioned in the Personality section. Alternatively, perhaps include that the "Cruel and Evil Queen" aura inflicted by Innocent Monster had also made concealing her presence difficult.
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I've just revised my Zhang Liang sheet in terms of grammar and changing the mechanics of Noble Phantasms. If anyone has observations or critiques, fire away.
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Coffee would be nice, though.
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Motivated Maiden of War
True Name: Agustina de Aragon
Class: Archer
Alternate Classes: None
Source: Spain, Historical Fact
Alignment: Neutral Good
Attribute: Man
Armament: Cannon
Likes: Courage, Apples
Dislikes: Cowardice
Parameters:
Strength: C
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Mana: E
Luck: B
Biography
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Others:
Bond Lines
Craft Essence
Notes
Last edited by NominusAbdominus; December 29th, 2018 at 04:47 PM.
Archer of the Wild Frontier:
Appearance:
Source is here
True Name: Davy Crockett
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Strength- D
Agility- C+
Endurance- B
Mana- D
Luck- C
NP- A
Personality
Class Skills:
Independent Action- A
The ability to sustain oneself in existence without a supply of Mana from one's Master. At this rank, Archer can linger in the world for a full week in the absense of an active contract. One of his country's most famous outdoorsmen and pioneer heroes, Archer also has many anecdotes of defying the authority of those he felt were unworthy of it. Thus he naturally warrants a high rank in this Skill.
Magic Resistance- D
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank only Single-Action spells are nullified. Magic Resistance equivalent in degree to an amulet that rejects magical energy. Archer was born in the modern age, well after the erosion of mystery. In spite of this, due to the many folk legends sprouting around Archer, he boasts a higher resistance than would a purely mundane hero.
Personal Skills:
Rifle Creation- B
An offshoot of Bow And Arrow Creation. This Skill allows Archer to form rifles from his own Mana. Each rifle can only be fired once, so Archer generally favors a strategy of firing one, discarding it and immediately summoning a new one in a rhythmic fashion. Despite the similarities, resemblance to a certain 'magical girl' from a popular anime series is surely no more than a coincidence.
Battle Continuation- B
The ability to continue combat while injured, and emerge alive from even the roughest scrapes. At this rank, Archer can keep fighting after sustaining mortal wounds, but will still perish in the end from amassed battle damage. In the legend of his last stand at the Alamo, Archer was said to have fought against against the Mexican soldiers to his dying breath, managing to kill 21 of them before finally perishing from his wounds.
Pioneer Hero- EX
The greatest hero of pioneer legends, he has arguably become more myth than man. This Skill gives Archer access to Skills derived from any of the feats attributed to him. Beast Slayer, Mana Burst (Lightning), Clairvoyance, Eye Of The Mind (False) and others can be displayed at B~A+ rank proficiency. However, only one ability can be granted at a time.
Child Of Nature (False)- C
A Skill that represents one as born from and belonging to the Reverse Side of the World. Archer never truly glimpsed the Reverse Side in life, but his way of living in harmony in nature has given him favor from some of the beings that dwell there. Archer gains a rank-up to his parameters apart from Luck and Mana while fighting in regions untamed by the hands of man.
This Skill also lets Archer replenish a small portion of his health and magical energy for every five turns he spends there.
Noble Phantasms
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So I was working on a Lilith Servant, but got struck by inspiration partway through and decided this guy would be much easier to write up instead. Given Crockett's Rifle Creation Skill and second NP, you guys have no idea how badly I wanted to genderbend him and go for a Mami Tomoe FC, but in the end it just didn't suit how I imagined his character.
As always, feel free to drop by with comments and criticisms. Thanks!
Last edited by RoydGolden; February 17th, 2019 at 01:25 AM.
Okay, let's give this a try. Sorry if I come across too harsh, by the way. It happens.
I like the idea of this Sheet, but I have some glaring problems.
Considering Cu, who died to much more horrible injuries than this while taking DAYS for him to die and Shuten, who had her head chopped off and still be alive, I don't think Davy applies for A-rank at all.Battle Continuation- A
The ability to continue combat while injured, and emerge alive from even the roughest scrapes. At this rank, Archer can keep fighting after sustaining multiple fatal injuries, only dying when his head is cut off or his heart pierced. In the legend of his last stand at the Alamo, Archer was said to have fought against against the Mexican soldiers to his dying breath, managing to kill 21 of them before finally perishing from his wounds.
I'd say this is more suited to a self-made skill which represents his love of nature. Also, how does goddamn Davy Crockett earn favour from the Reverse Side!? He's a normal human guy, not someone blessed by supernatural beings.Child Of Nature (False)- C
A Skill that represents one as born from and belonging to the Reverse Side of the World. Archer never truly glimpsed the Reverse Side in life, but his way of living in harmony in nature has given him favor from some of the beings that dwell there. Archer gains a rank-up to his parameters apart from Luck and Mana while fighting in regions untamed by the hands of man.
This Skill also lets Archer replenish a small portion of his health and magical energy for every five turns he spends there.
Generic Army Summon is Generic.Remember The Alamo
Last Bloodied Defense Of Liberty
Rank: C++
Type: Anti-Army
A recreation of Archer's legendary last stand at the Alamo. This Noble Phantasm allows Archer to summon the spirits of all the troops who fought and gave their lives alongside him in that famous battle. However, due to Mana limitations Archer can only manifest the soldiers for a single turn, just long enough to fire a barrage of shots at the enemy with their rifles.
As it crystallizes the concept of a "desperate last stand", this Noble Phantasm gains damage modifiers that stack in his favor the more heavily Archer is injured and outmatched.
Also Nobu already has all the Mami-memes anyway. She's literally described as being Mami-like in KOHA-ACE.
Last edited by Anju Addams; December 29th, 2018 at 04:58 PM.
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Word of advice, don't import Servants while tired and drunk or else you mistake the "edit" button for "Post Reply" and edit out Barbara with Agustina. Ah fuck it, I'll add her back later.
Advice-seeking time
In terms of sheets length, do you guys prefer short ones or those with extensive fluff? Just asking so I could adjust my sheets in the future.Methinks my Zhang Liang sheet might have suffered from too much details
Last edited by SleepMode; December 29th, 2018 at 05:49 PM.
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Coffee would be nice, though.
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As long as it's interesting fluff then I'll read it.
"Here's a bangin lil' tune about takin' on The Man!"
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If you're not going to have an interesting twist to the fluff then eh.
That depends. A well-known figure probably needs little more than a basic summary. Someone more obscure probably requires some elaboration. There's also the fact that you can flesh out a sheet's personality section through the fluff (showing instead of telling), though this would probably require a different style of writing. I also feel its better to focus on the key points of a sheet's fluff (meaning where their abilities come from et cetera).
I have to admit that I don't so much read as skim fluff sections myself.
What an unhelpful answer.
I tend to write super-long sheets based around GO Mats, but keep them under Spoiler Tags so people don't have to read them if they really don't want to.
As for fluff, I enjoy as long as it's well-written and engaging. As you've probably seen from a few of my Sheets by now, I like to interpret legends into backstories, CE, personalities and dialogue examples to make what I hope is an engaging character, rather than just a list of skills, Noble Phantasms and Wikipedia lore.
However, I do still enjoy Sheets that are short. I think as long as you can be creative, then it's fine.
One of my all-time favourite Sheets on here is Sunny's Anastasia, which doesn't have much in the way of lore, but it's still an interesting interpretation of the character, that I absolutely adore it.
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I always prefer a sheet that didn't require you to check their wiki by my own. But ultra long yet uninteresting one can shoot their own foot too.
Davy's last stand at the Alamo is one of the most famous examples of "fighting to the bitter end" in America, so I thought that rank was fair enough. Plus Boudica also has Battle Continuation at A-rank with seemingly no other justification than her determination to fight Romans, so clearly there's some leeway in who gets it. I'll consider lowering it to B-rank though. (Which is the same level I gave Bowie).
I considered giving him an original Skill (even made one for my Squanto sheet ages ago), but I figured since there's already a similar one in canon I might as well use that. All that would really change is the name anyways.
See, here I have to disagree. Davy can only summon the army for one turn, so the "barrage of shots" aspect is far more emphasized over the army itself. The army is really just an aesthetic effect. I even thought of having him just summon their rifles and not the physical army, but I decided that would be way too obviously ripping off Nobu. Also, I feel that the "gains power the more disadvantaged Davy is" helps flesh it our more.
Much thanks for the feedback, Remnant!
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Nerfed Battle Continuation to B-rank.
Martyr of the Military
Information:
True Name: Saint Barbara
Class: Archer
Alternate Classes: None
Source: Greek, Historical Fact(?)
Alignment: Lawful Good
Attribute: Earth
Armament: Guns, Explosives
Likes: Freedom, Guns
Dislikes: Confinement, Persistent Men
Parameters:
Strength: D
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Mana: B
Luck: A
Biography
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Others:
Bond Lines
Craft Essence
Notes
Carefree Girl of the Staff
Information:
True Name: Ritsuka Fujimaru
Possessing Hero: Sun Wukong
Class: Lancer
Alternate Classes: None
Source: China, Chinese Mythology / Chaldea, Nasuverse (AU)
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Attribute: Sky
Armament: Staff
Likes: Mischief, Living, Mash
Dislikes: Suffering
Parameters:
Strength: C
Endurance: B / EX
Agility: A
Mana: B
Luck: C
Biography
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Others:
Bond Lines
Notes
Santa Claus
Class: Striker
True Name: Santa Claus
Gender: Male
Source: Historical fact
Origin: Finland
Alignment: Lawful Good
Height: 187 cm
Weight: 251.2 kg
Theme: INTENSE CHRISTMAS! by FalKKonE
Strength: A
Endurance: B+
Agility: C
Luck: E
Mana: EX
NP: A++
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Character
Personal data
Here's your buff Santa, Royd. It's a bit too late for Christmas, but the intention is what counts, right?
Now we only need a Beast Grinch.
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“Towards the endless void… I shall carry forth all that is good in this world.”
Class: Voyager
Identity: Voyager 1
Gender: Female (?)
Origin: Historical Facts
Region: Interstellar Space
Alignment: Neutral Good
Attribute: Star
PARAMETERS
STR: D
END: A+
AGL: A+
MGI: D
LCK: EX
NP: EX
A vessel embarking on a voyage towards the ocean of stars for eternity, she represents the goodwill of a species recently emerging to be a space-faring civilization, ready to leave the planet that birthed them. Travelling through the endless void of the interstellar medium—beyond the sun’s embrace—she carries with her a record, a song, a greeting from planet Earth, a proof of humanity’s existence—like a child lost in the dark saying “Hello? Is anyone there?”
Class Skill
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm
Description and Personality
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First got this idea from Skull’s Beethoven was an Alien Spy sheet, got the motivation to finally put it together thanks to Fate/Requiem.
Last edited by 34; December 30th, 2018 at 07:55 AM. Reason: typos
Voyager is now a waifu. Noice. By the way, there seems to be a problem with the formatting.
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