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next contest i wanna see you give short reviews ON EVERY SINGLE SHEET and in the end vote for 3 of them
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The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Now lets take a look at the newest servants here ~
Ozymandias: hm quite good i must say i say the inncosistences that Delrey pointed out are the product of the two selves interfernces , interetsting nnoblephantasm idea but truely why did the Gods of Egypt let that the Disasters happen had the pharaohs or the pooulaze angered them in some way to let it happen without to intervenate ? a interesting Question i must admit.
Redil: hm intersting in one of my stories is appearing the Sword Ridill as modern noblephantasm ,though my Interpretation of it is different ,nice Profil and welcome back you wernt a while not seen here Zero ! also have i started a new Mage contest as saw you made some are you perhaps intersted ?
Jeanne La Mote: At first be heartly welcomed in our Round ! neat first servant also i must say . i am curious can she use the Gems in form of jewelcraft and has she (i know Assassin servants are rather side line fighters) a form of Combat abbillity ?
Eunus: Intersting i must say well made he is Abit powerfull for such a rather unknown figure but the downsides are balancing that out , a Question has he also a form of Fire Mana burst if not it would be awkward ?
Antigonus I Monophthalmus: I have read from him but for me wasnt a servantify able charackter but i must say well done About his two noblephantasm though both profiles are a bit short i must say ?
Alatheia: nice servant neat ,could be good Friends with my Abre di Tenere.
Linda Richards : a goodBasic servant Nothing spectacular but also Nothing to have against . more casnt i say wait i though i would be currious what she would think f my Hippocrates.
Ziusudra:A really great servant splendid a great Masterpiece !
okay joke aside everyone could you please tell me Feedback of my Grand Rider ?
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Honestly for me its a combo of drawing a blank and getting hooked on Digimon Cyber Sleuth
you mean a game Right ? i understand that i have found lately in a game store a Ds Castlevania game and playing that . but i am curious have you read my Ziusudra servant i am curious and honestly still waiting About the first Feedback .
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This thread, dead? Not under my watch.
Ozymandias (Lancer): Oh man, I don't care what other people say, I will defend the existence of this sheet to my last breath. I liked the way you spun his tale, I like your style (it's so whacky even when it's serious... I wish I could do that), and I like the way this sheet went by in a minute. It was such a quick read, but one that didn't bored me at all. Also, Ozy the Family Man? Ozy, the Butt (snickers) of Rod Jokes? Yes. Gimme more of this version of him.
Dwarf Regin: I love it when a sheet teaches me about a character I had no previous experience with, and I love your sheets, so this could only be a win-win situation. I can totally see this lil' dude deceiving everyone with his "nice guy" façade and the worst part is that he'd be SO convincing. Look at this cute face!
Jeanne La Motte: THIS IS AMAZING??? I wish I could know all the words in the English vocabulary because I feel I'd have more lines with nothing but praise to you... Praises you wholeheartedly deserve! I like it very much when authors paint their villains in sympathetic lines, even when their actions are absolutely despicable, because in a sense it makes us see that the world is like this: it's just a bunch of versions that sometimes clashes, and you have to choose which version you'll believe. She's such an interesting character, and an awesome pick for a Servant.
KAMERAD: YO. I CAN'T EVEN PUT THE SERVANTS HERE, IT'LL BE A MESSAGE AIMED TO //YOU//, DUDE.
WHAT ARE YOU EVEN DOING HERE YOU SHOULD BE SITTING IN YOUR THRONE MY KING HERE YOU DROPPED YOUR CROWN.
(Yes, these sheets are outta this world and I ate them for all their worth.)
Amaltheia: GOAT mom? Yes. GI faceclaim? Yes. What even is there to hate about this sheet??
Linda Richards: I may be biased, but every time a nurse/doctor Servant comes into the fray I get so giddy. I love them so much. So of course this woman here would have all the weight of my bias looming over her head right off the bat, but did she deserved all of it! I love your sheets so much, and this one is no exception. (Also, please. Yes. Mary will pester Linda so much with her love and then they'll both pester Florence later, everyone will be happy. The end.)
DELREY: EXCUSE ME?
HOW DARE YOU POST THIS WITHOUT ANY CONTENT WARNING? MY POOR LIL' HEART ALMOST COULDN'T TAKE IT.
Your love for the Class is a thing of beauty, and it was indeed so cute to see you paying homage to all these amazing characters. I even got to re-read these sheets and get to be amazed all over again... What a ride. (Also, this duo needs to bicker more. I love them.)
(PS: I'm sorry about Tarrare, I'm sorry Chaldea funds.)
Ziusudra: Nice one. Good to see you using your 1500 special for some good content!
A very Koga-ish character, I must say. I'm never too sure if having FIVE NPs with EX rank (or A+) is a good move, but hey, whatever floats your boat am I right?! (THIS JOKE WAS TERRIBLE.)
Thank you Howaito ,about the Noblephantasm well tat is a Grand Servant and they have the Obligation to be Standing at the top , as the Sea has a certain importance how would your Lughaid find Ziusudra ?
and did you took a look at my create a Mage contest ?
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You know what? I wish I could give you a positive answer but he hates gods, he hates authority and he most definitely hates powerful people. When your Servant has these three traits, the result is never something good. He'd probably be mumbling right now in the lines, "what a show-off. I thought Blackbeard was the only embarrassment to the high seas but it's never too late to learn a new fact, it seems."
He's a good kid otherwise, I swear.
Also FORTUNA. I'M WAITING WITH BAITED BREATH FOR YOUR REVIEWS. They're always so thoughtful and so cool, one day I'll be just like you haha.
Thank you Howaito but for that am i certainly not the only one whichs sees you as the Angel or Good Soul of the thread.
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Top Level Notes
"Hello Edvard, how are you today? Are you ready for it?"
"Yes, thank you, Da Vinci. Ple…Please stay a bit farther away from me.
I am prepared. I did as you told me, he should not come out for a while. I even said my proper goodbye."
"Munch-san, like we told you, there is no guarantee that the procedure works, you are the first Foreigner we test this on. And if it works as intended there is still the question how long it will last."
"I am very well aware, Sherlock. Thank you, but I have hope and where is hope there is light. Please, let me wholeheartedly believe that it will work. That I will be free of his darkness and can grasp the flame of usefulness to Chaldea."
*sigh* "Only you can be stubborn, pessimistic and optimistic at the same time, Munch-san. Have you thought about the theme that should act as catalyst for the Saint Graph Alteration procedure?"
"Yes…I have something in mind. I am just a painter, I am no great hero, but I want to stay true to myself. So please, use [Color] and [Life] as my new concept. I am sick of this shell that can only destroy. That is only painting with death and has limited use of color. I want to create color and not destroy it and use it's corpse."
"Interesting. You met the other artists here, that concept is not too hard to create for you. So would you please step in the circle there? We can begin in a moment."
"While we have the few seconds, Munch-san, do you know in which Class you will be summoned? We mostly rely on the words of the Servants itself what alternative Classes they can be summoned in, sometimes offshoot datasets when we registrate your Saint Graphs, but you are another special case."
"I am sorry, Sherlock. I dont know. Once again I can not help you."
"See you soon, Chaldea. Very soon. Enjoy your little vacation with this colorful fool. But beware, it could end up in smoke."Initiation of Saint Graph Alteration Process. Please do not leave the designated Magic Circle.
"Goodbye Dorian."
The Chamber erupts in thick smoke, but this time it looks pretty different.Saint Graph Alteration Successful. 'Summer Alt' detected.
Correction.
Saint Graph Alteration Successful. 'Spring Alt' detected.
It is…
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"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
“I wonder how they are doing. The ones I carried across the ocean to this strange land. So far away from home. They must have been scared, so I wanted to make sure their new home was a good one. I never expected having to come back under these conditions… but I thank you, Chaldea. For giving me the chance to visit one last time.”
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“Now then, shall we save this land our people call home?”
“Why, traveling of course. Never settling down, always searching for a new port. Carrying on my back the dreams and hopes of my crew. No matter who they might be. Is there anything else a ship needs?”
“Retirement. Do you know how bored I was underwater?! Sinking is natural, but it’s still really boring. Which is why I took this chance when the Lucky Seven offered to let me sail again.”
“Ah, Porto dos Santos. This sure takes me back, Master. Now then, does everyone have their things? That damn tree woman might not be able to reject us now, but that doesn’t mean she won’t try something.”
The ship known as Kasato Maru was born as the SS Potosí in England, her original homeland before being sold to Russia. There, she was renamed Kazan and would go on to become a hospital ship while serving in the war between her new home and the japanese for many years.
Until her first sinking.
That, however, would not be her end.
Reclaimed by those who sank her, Kazan would be rebuilt and receive a new name by the ones who claimed her.
Kasato Maru.
During her time with the Japanese, Kasato would serve as the vessel which carried the first wave of official immigrants to the New World, arriving in Porto dos Santos with hundreds of farmers in what would mark the start of mass immigration of japanese to Brazil until diplomatic relations between both countries turned sour during World War II.
Kasato Maru would not return to Brazil, instead having been sunk during the war, with no efforts being made to salvage her, she remained underwater.
Ready to be repurposed.
And that was the intent of the Lucky Seven.
In response to the bleaching of Earth and the arrival of the Alien God, Kasato Maru was repurposed to become a mobile summoning array based on a connection with the Takarabune. She was summoned in the Amazonic Lostbelt, an area of extreme difficulty for Servants of Proper Human History to gain a foothold on due to the actions of the local crypter and his Servant.
‘How do I feel about my history? Well, I suppose you could think of me as the kinda ship who couldn’t keep a steady relationship. Stuff just didn’t work out for me the first or second go around. I don’t mind that, though. Sinking in defeat and being reborn is sort of what I do. Don’t worry though! As the Kasato Maru, I will guide Chaldea through the New World!’
A woman who loves adventure and relishes traveling. She is a dutiful ship who will carry out the purpose she was selected for even if it leads to ruin. But her thought process is very pragmatic and professional. Having been bought, lost, given away to the enemy one too many times have given her a warped sense of loyalty.
She lives in the moment and fights in the moment for those she is immediately connected to regardless of past relationships.
Her nature is such that, if defeated, Kasato Maru won’t hesitate to cooperate with someone who was previously her enemy while maintaining her chipper nature and fondness for her previous Master. It is her nature to be given away and taken from those she is allied with, after all.
That does not make her traitorous, instead you could see her as an ally who will do her duty to the very end, and must be defended from enemies lest she be lost to her own fickle loyalties. Even if she grew to love someone, being defeated means receiving a new name and then claimed by another Master.
Turning a new leaf to serve a new purpose.
It was what allowed the Lucky Seven to summon her in the New World.
What allows her to serve as their protection against Karma Rejection.
Kasato Maru must not be taken, at all costs.
Arms Proficiency - [C]
The signature skill of the Gunner Class, the ability to make use of multiple forms of armament so long as they possess the similarity or connection to modern armament. This allows Servants of the gunner Class to wield modern weaponry in order to fight supernatural opponents, with the effectiveness and damage they are capable of defined by Rank.
In Kasato’s case, so long as an object can be loaded into her cannons and has shape and size approximate to a cannonball, she can cause damage to servants with it.
Trajectory Correction - [E]
Similar to an Archer’s ability to adjust the direction of their shot, this Skill allows Kasato to adjust the trajectory of an attack after it has already been fire. Similar in concept to a heat seeking projectile, it can change directions to follow an enemy, thus making it harder to avoid. As she uses high explosive yield cannonballs, Kasato’s accuracy is extremely low, allowing only for a single use of Trajectory Correction per shot.
She does cheat by firing nonstop with her cannons due to having virtually infinite ammunition.
Divinity - [E]
The lowest rank of divine spirit aptitude. Kasato Maru was built long after the Age of Gods ended, thus she only has this skill due to being summoned as the chosen vessel of the Seven Lucky Gods, whose original vessel could not take them past the shores of the New World without them all being affected by Karmic Rejection.
Protection of a Safe Voyage - [E]
A protection which protects those within the Kasato Maru from curses and environmental damage such as sickness. Perhaps her most important skill, it completely counteracts the effects of Iracema’s Karmic Rejection, allowing Servants to be summoned within the Ship without suffering the consequences of rejection by the Sacred Tree of Life.
Spoils of War - [A]
Kasato Maru’s nature as an object of value which has been taken from the enemy. A Skill which activates upon defeat, changing the allegiance of Kasato Maru from her current Master to the one who defeated her. This Skill completely reboots her, making it so she sees the one who defeated her as her new Master, while healing all wounds.
Heavenly Ship - [C]
A skill denoting Kasato’s current connection to the Seven Lucky Gods and their own ship. By carrying them to the New World in lieu of their official vessel, Kasato gained a similar protection, conveying a form of divinity by proxy, as well as limited access to the treasures left behind in the Takarabune.
Fire Support (Cannon) - [E]
Before serving as a cargo ship, Kasato acted first as a hospital ship and then as a warship during the period of World War II. As such, she has access to artillery which served as the basis for her Gunner Class, which allows her to use anything as ‘cannon fodder’ so long as she can fit it inside her barrels.
Hilariously, she has taken to arming her cannons with the treasures of the Takarabune, shooting them as high impact ammo. Much to the chagrin of the Seven Lucky Gods, who whimper pitifully at the sight of their valuables being used in such a way.
Born as the Potosí.
Defeated as the Kazan.
Reborn as Kasato Maru.
Sunk in battle once again.
Now reborn as the Treasure Ship.
This Ship is one who crossed the world, becoming one with those who she carried through the seas. The ship known as Kasato Maru did not have any noteworthy feats, passed around and given from nation to nation, never settling down. But when the time came to carry those like herself, who journey from their homes towards a new one, Kasato Maru becomes the embodiment of the Land of the Rising Sun in the New World.
A Ship carrying the people of Japan to a land which would welcome them as their own.
Thus, she carries all the ideas, history and beliefs of those people.
In El Dorado, she serves as the lynchpin needed for the arrival of the Lucky Seven to the New World, playing the role of their Heaven Crossing Ship, bypassing Karmic Rejection through her own connection to the people who would call Brazil home for the next four generations.
This Noble Phantasm allows the ship to take human form, while maintaining the space within her body the same size as within a ship, allowing her to stash cargo and crew within her body.
Activating the Noble Phantasm with its true name leads to Kasato Maru temporarily becoming a copy of the Takarabune, increasing her level of Divinity and providing her stats with an all around boost. Her body size also increases to that of a massive star-crossing ark, becoming at least twenty times larger. Doing this, however, tires her considerably, and deactivates all her weapons for three days.
“Finally arrived, haven’t you? Good! You won’t believe who much trouble I went through. But I’m glad you are finally here. Now, hop on! I’ll take you to meet the others and we can finally come up with a plan to take down this Lostbelt.”
“No, absolutely not! I’m not letting you steer! You’re the reason we have that crazy woman chasing us around. Seems like she holds a grudge for being chased away from her home. Who’d have guessed, huh?”
“Ehehehe… sorry for summoning you outta nowhere like this. We’re kinda running short on crew and Chaldea only had your Spirit Origin recorded. Hope you know how to shoot a cannon, your majesty.”
“Really? Even you are getting Rejected? Phew, that crazy tree sure seems picky with who she considers a ‘child’ of hers. Still, you seem pretty strong for someone missing two third of her divinity.”
“Of all people to not be affected… it had to be the dumbest one. How come you’re the closest thing we have to a local Divine Spirit on our side?!”
“You’re… not quite Bishamon. Not the one that I summoned a while later. We… don’t know where he ended up. Who knows what the Golden King has done with him.”
“We will rescue Bishamon, Ebisu. I promise you.”
“That thing… the Golden King… its nature is similar to mine in that we both carry something considered valuable and precious. The difference is in the method. El Dorado can only be used once conquered. The treasures within me are to be freely given during festivals and commemorations.”
“England, Russia, Japan… those are the places where my ‘origins’ are located. I’m sorry I can’t help more of you pass through. Once we defeat that crazy Tree Woman things should be easier.”
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well that is a fun concept. I bet the FC is from that one gacha game about waifu warships? Azur Lane or something?
It is really weird at first glance, but the story significance of her can be seen more and more. And sounds like you use the other LB servants from FGO in your story as well? man the teased plot thickenslike Maru's thighs
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Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Edward Munch: I will be completely honest. My first read through the sheet, I missed the second collapse and thought it was only a Lover Servant. Then I came back to it, found the second collapse, felt stupid for a couple minutes and read the second sheet. As always, your willingness to experiment with the format and the concepts behind classes is very interesting to see. I like how you involved both Avenger and Lover, which we discussed before. And now I see why you were trying to connect them as mirrors to one another. It definetely seems like it works and I love (heh) what you did with it.
Artists are such fun servants to mess around with. We can always do strange and interesting things with them. The only thing I think I would have added is a reaction from your version of Chaldea to the Lover Class. As it was probably their first time seeing it.
Kancolle, actually.
I watched the anime they made about it a few years ago, and came back to it when the time to make a literal ship girl was nigh.
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mi chaldea es su chaldea.
like in my teaser, i see 'my chaldea' as a culmination of all the different creators here. We intermingle our sheets anyways, so viewing each of our chaldeas separate is not really needed imo. So no, they are very well aware of Lover
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
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correct me if i am wrong but in your teaser did i not found a reference on one of my servants ,man ist not a good Feeling to undertake the best efforts but not get any Attention i can perceive as like in the last page on the servants of the others have you reacted almost immediatly but i have to ask Specialy to get an reaction , in short its not fair.
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Damn Wyvern. Boat lady is too good. I especially like the lore justification for her summon. FC is fire and the skills are well thought out.
10/10, would let step on me again.
A) it was a homage to Foreigners. You never made a foreigner and only teased you are working on one.
B) it was also a homage to my favourites of this class, you are not entitled to get a space there.
C) i mentioned in the teaser that even if a creator was not mentioned they are not forgotten.
D) i have nothing to say to ur ziusudra, sry. It is ur typical over the top wank that is hard to read or justify, except this time you can justify it a bit more because they are a grand. Them being a grand rider makes sense tho. Everyone thinks Noah, but that guy is valid for the same reasons.
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"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
Thanks! I wasn't sure whether to go for simple or a more high concept take. But the overall idea is that Kasato Maru is a ship who 'brought Japan to the New World', so she is able to manifest through her connection with japanese descendants in the New World. However, she isn't strong enough to manifest as anything other than a Phantom, so the Seven Lucky Gods and their Ship were used as the blueprints for her Saint Graph. Since she brought everything Japanese to the New World, she can serve as a vessel for heroic and divine spirits of japan.
Her skill 'Spoils of War', is equally important since it allows her to be repurposed to do whatever the summoners wants. But it also means she can be taken if defeated in combat. Which makes her super important in a Lostbelt scenario as complex as El Dorado is turning out to be.
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