I cant really say much. Doing sheets for Philosophers is something pretty interesting, but it needs a certain understanding of their opinion and Thomas Hobbes is had some strong opinions iirc. But I am not that familiar with his work, i remember the "State of Nature" if no government would be in place, it would be a war of "everyone against everyone", something of that line. Together with his Second Noble Phantasm it suggests to me that his skills could be pretty dramatic, together with Leviathan in your concept perhaps even Beast worthy, but like i said i am not familiar with his works. You concentrated more on Leviathans abilities, which comes of as more like a puppet of the beast instead of a Hobbes Servant.
I see you had a horror vision with something like an all-devouring beast in mind, but you kept it pretty bare bones, which did not comunicate your vision well. The potential is there to make it something pretty cool, but i think you took a hefty load as your first sheet. When you have more experience you will likely revisit this sheet and realize the potential it has with a rework.
You can keep your sheets simple, many do it here, others like it pretty extended like me or to a whole other extreme Koga who writes whole books about his servants. Finding a middle ground takes time, but in my opinion sheets of horror or of concept, like you attempted to do here, needs some kind of atmosphere that is created with more words.
tl,dr i actually like the concept idea and i see big potential of it, but the implementation still lacks experience. but it comes with time. do more sheets.
as i wrote this NMR released his sheet. I remember he had other philosopher sheets, His Marcus Aurelius sheet was great, perhaps you can find inspiration in his approach
Robespierre: infamous guy, well
executed (hehe see what i did there?
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At hindsight it would be easy to slap some HPL outer entity into the mix to explain who that "Supreme Being' is, but it would not make sense for him. He was against christianity, but against atheism as well. he quotes Voltaire with "If God did not exist, it would be necessary to invent him" because he knew having some kind of "religion" is necessary to keep social order. Similar like today even non-believers appreciate Judeo-Christianity because their moral compass formed the foundation for European society.
Tho one could spin the Foreigner class differently. If one uses the concept of "fantasy made real" from the FGO Remnant Arc, the 'Outer Being' of Robespierre is the 'Supreme Being' be himself invented. I think that could work if that aspect is well explained.
And just to make sure, because your last lines about making him Foreigner and you laughing at "Foreigner Hitler" and the comment afterwards from few sites ago seems to me like you think making hitler a foreigner is a bad idea, because it would detract from the cruel acts he did.
Or am I just seeing a connection that isnt there?