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    ALTER EGO
    "Never arrive anywhere on purpose, I always say. Causality is not the boss of me."



    Basic InformationBasic Information


    Alias: The Evil Outlaw, Daijin Moreya,
    Demon King of Another World
    Classes: Archer, Caster, Berserker,
    Avenger, Alter Ego, Foreigner,
    Beast
    True Name: Mononobe-no-Moriya Source: Historical fact
    Suwa Daimyōjin Ekotoba
    Suwa Daimyōjin Kōshiki
    Gender: Male Region: Hadai, Japan
    Height/Weight: 171cm/60kg Attribute: Heaven
    Image colour: Magenta Armament: Iron implements

    STR
    B+

    END
    A

    AGL
    B

    MAG
    A

    LUK
    D

    N.P
    EX


    Traits:
    Anti-Hero: "Well, you don't get to be known as the 'evil outlaw' without making some enemies here and there."
    Demonic:
    Divine:
    He is worshipped as Moreya-no-kami, but the actual source of his Divinity can be traced all the way back to a being called the "Demon King" in Buddhism, who himself is an incarnation of a certain god of love who lost his form in the Greater History of Man.
    Demi-Servant: Although not a living human, and despite not having undergone the nigh-impossible process to create one, a constitution almost identical to a Demi-Servant came about during his lifetime and has been kept in his form as a Heroic Spirit.
    Threat to Humanity: An infectant. A foreign body that does not belong here. His very existence is something that should have been purged, and yet...
    Evil of Man: A former standing, now lost. Despite the supertemporal nature of the Symbol, the underlying essential foundation has been negated. It may be possible for it to be recovered, but Moriya seems to have little interest in such a thing.


    Class SkillsClass Skills



    Independent Action -

    A class skill, but redundant. It has been replaced by Independent Manifestation.
    Magic Resistance A

    The capacity for the nullification of Magecraft. At Rank A, it is possible to negate almost anything that modern Magecraft can produce, although there are some exceptions, such as the wide variety of spells that exist specifically to ward off Mara's influence.


    Personal SkillsPersonal Skills



    Divinity A

    Gained a substantial degree of Divine Spirit aptitude from his previous existence. He is venerated as Moreya-no-kami, a tutelary deity guarding the region of Lake Suwa, and treated with the appropriate weight in myth. However, this is nothing more than a fragment. In his current state, Moriya can be likened to a fallen branch from a tree that later burned to ash.
    Oblivion Correction EX

    A class skill of the Avenger class, for those who will never let go of their memories. He does not forget. Even if the people forget, and the land forgets, and time itself forgets that the entire world in which he was born ever existed at all, he will never forget. Never.
    Independent Manifestation D

    Gained through Possession Inheritance. Ordinarily, a skill restricted to the Beasts of Calamity. Something remaining from his former self, the Demon King of another world. However, it is substantially ranked down due to the foundational causality being debased.
    Existence Outside the Domain (False) A+

    "Okay, kids, you might wanna sit down. This is where it gets complicated."
    Denotes a being from outer space, and common to Foreigners as a class skill for that reason. Moriya himself possesses this skill, despite being born on Earth and carrying no alien factors. Even though there is nothing about his being that belongs outside of the Human Order, and everything he carries is purely derived of the Textures that genuinely existed on the planet, his existence as it stands is still that of a being who came to Earth from 600 light years away.
    Lost Depth C+

    A cheat skill possessed by those of pruned worlds that no longer exist. However, they cannot gain this skill within their own world, and so even among those from pruned worlds, this skill manifests only in the incredibly rare circumstance that a being from another world independently establishes a footing as a Heroic Spirit in this one.

    As an existence foreign to the World, he is not completely set within its systems, and can nullify cause and effect as it pertains to himself. This can be expressed in a number of ways: disappearing and reappearing elsewhere akin to teleportation by nullifying his own movement, perfect evasion and defence by nullifying his own interaction with an attack, and even negating magical energy costs by nullifying his position on the World's corrective scales. However, overuse of this skill will agitate the Counter Force, so he tries not to rely on it too much.


    Noble PhantasmNoble Phantasm


    The Sixth Heaven Revolves
    DAIROKUTEN RINNE

    Anti-Unit Class
    Rank EX

    Range: ━
    Max targets: ━

    Eternal recurrence, the cycle of reincarnation. Those who do not find enlightenment do not find finality, but rather will continue to incarnate over and over. The character will die, but the actor will continue. For the one furthest from enlightenment in all the universe, it does not matter if the character is killed, if the script is burned, or even if the stage is shattered - by a twist of fate, he is here now, long after he should have ceased to exist. But that persistence is not what this represents.

    A Noble Phantasm that carries the aspects and nature of Mara, the malicious antagonist of Buddhism with Authorities pertaining to death and rebirth, as well as to desire, illusion, and material existence. Equally, a Noble Phantasm encompassing the miraculous, inhuman spiritual resilience necessary to awaken to such a nature and survive with one's ego intact. Mononobe-no-Moriya, an identity formed based on less than half of a human lifetime, should have sunken beneath the sea of millennia - and yet he refused. Even in the face of his true nature, that true nature elected to embrace his mortal being, a layer thinner than paper, as "the real me". If it had been anyone else besides the one who embraces the material realm, such a miracle... No, such a path would never have been chosen.

    Both the affirmation of his own identity and the anti-Buddhist symbol of rebirth come together to form the primary ability granted by this Noble Phantasm: ultra-high-grade regeneration. It is the ultimate rejection of the transience of the self and the striving for release from suffering. Although Mononobe may be a mere man, Moriya itself will not end so easily, and he will not be destroyed with something so meagre as wounds. It is as though his very being has become a Conceptual Weapon opposing death.

    "I am me. I will remain me. And I will become me, again and again."

    This regeneration, in turn, allows limited use of Mara's Authorities despite the backlash that would damage his Servant container: the regeneration to his spiritual body is sufficient enough that it is nothing more than a temporary suspension of this extraordinary recovery that will heal his body, mind, and soul alike. Although the normal solution would simply be to kill his Master, the presence of his low-ranking Independent Manifestation skill means that even this will not be enough. In the first place, "regeneration" is not the true ability of this Noble Phantasm, but merely a convenient effect that emerged from overlapping concepts.

    Upon releasing its true name, the accumulated Authorities manifest against Moriya's targets in an omnipotent attack that strikes at all the weaknesses of their mortal shell. Death and reality mingle, deceiving even the World itself. For each target, a personal hell opens up and swallows them, scaling in potency and danger directly corresponding to their opposition to it. The Authorities mockingly confirm the target's worst fears of its nature to be true, and it cannot be escaped once it latches onto them.

    Mara represents not quite the real world, but the world as perceived by the mind that cannot directly access it and must rely on its senses. The goal of Buddhism is to see through this flawed falsehood to see the true nature of reality - this is enlightenment.

    An enlightened being would naturally be able to entirely negate the effects of this Noble Phantasm, because the truth is...An enlightened being would naturally be able to entirely negate the effects of this Noble Phantasm, because the truth is...

    ...that this is all bluster. There is no such thing as an omnipotent Noble Phantasm that grants perfect immortality, that strikes at the heart of all weaknesses no matter who the opponent is, and that absolutely overwhelms all beings besides the likes of bodhisattva. Even if there were, there is no way that Mononobe-no-Moriya would be able to wield it. It is not even truly Mara's Authorities, but simply a facsimile of them. This is derived from the transience of the World and Moriya's recognition of that, derived from the Moriya of the Heterotopia and the Moriya of the Greater History of Man. Although he was Mara in the last world, he is not Mara in this one - it is nothing more than self-identity, the very thing that the Buddha told to reject.

    In other words, this is an illusion, made real by the acceptance of it. Its Rank does not indicate sheer power, but the immeasurability of such a thing. The regeneration is derived from Moriya's own self-understanding as a conceptual being who will not truly die even if space and time were to cease to exist. He announces that a perfect hell will consume his enemies in order to bring to their minds the greatest wounds he can wield against them.

    To put it simply: the effect of this Noble Phantasm on any given target is whatever the target believes the effect will be.

    And if they see through that, then he can be defeated even with something so paltry as a mere wisteria branch.



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    KeywordsKeywords

    Amatsu-Mikaboshi/Ame-no-Minakanushi
    The first kami to ever come into existence, supposedly. A Divine Spirit of the highest degree, encompassing the entire cosmos, and certainly sufficient to be called a supreme being if that is indeed the case. The very first Divine Spirits were created from the deification of natural phenomena, and Amatsu-Mikaboshi is no different: it is indeed "the universe as a divinity". However, what this means is easily misunderstood, and those who learn of this for the first time do not necessarily comprehend what "the universe" actually refers to in this case. Since the planet was born, it has been receiving signals from the sky: the light and heat of stars, cosmic rays, the afterglow of cosmic inflation, and so on. The fact that the light of stars can be seen is the demonstration that the universe exists, and so this is the human conception of the universe that is deified. To put it more simply, Amatsu-Mikaboshi is a deity formed from the information and radiation from outer space that reaches Earth.

    Kingdom of Hadai
    In the 7th century BC, the region of India was divided into sixteen independent states named the Mahājanapadas. It was during this period of history that the śramaṇa religions began to develop, the most prominent of which is Buddhism. Moriya's enemy, Suwa-daimyōjin, was once a king from such a state by the name of Hadai. While there, the king performed a number of heroic feats, but did battle with a traitorous vassal of the Moriya tribe named Bikyō who revealed himself to be an incarnation of the Demon King of the Sixth Heaven, Mara. However, upon inspection, a Mahājanapada named Hadai never existed, and is not equivalent to any of the sixteen that did. Nowhere in human history does a "Kingdom of Hadai" emerge. Moriya himself shrugs off the question, saying that "it never happened anymore".

    Echo
    A phenomenon in which a signal, especially a sound, bounces off and is reflected by a surface or object. It will often scatter and travel back to its source. The fundamental principle is vital to echolocation and its artificial imitation, sonar, which use sound to image space and the objects within it, although its potentially long delay means that it is impractical at ultra-long ranges.



    BackgroundBackground

    Imagine that you have forgotten it for a moment. Picture a world in which you have ceased to understand how the human heart comes into conflict with itself, that you have misplaced the keys to the ephemeral truths with which all mankind must wrestle. Love and loss, pity and pride, honour and compassion and sacrifice. They will no longer fit in your hands, because it takes all your strength to carry a single question.

    "When will I vanish?"

    It will come suddenly. You will not notice. There will be no ways to mourn, because there is nothing to witness and no funeral to hold. The absence of a present, and the future and past are moot.

    Imagine learning that fear. Imagine not even having the room in your soul to conceive of the questions of the spirit anymore under the unrelenting mass of such a terror. Imagine that to even acknowledge those most human qualities is paralysing, because it is to acknowledge that the people around you are worth something - and you cannot bear to look at it, because it is exactly what could fall from your grasp at any moment, because it is the perfect reminder that you are nothing and of the nothing you will feel when it comes to pass that it never existed at all.

    Can you?

    During the Asuka period, the Mononobe clan were headed by Ō-muraji, assistants to the emperor. At the time, Buddhism was beginning to filter into Japan, and Moriya's father Okoshi had successfully persuaded the emperor to implement measures to suppress it, but it was allowed to a certain member of the Soga clan after he contracted a sickness. It is recorded that this sickness began spreading alongside the mass practice of Buddhism, and that Moriya connected the two, opposing it. Indeed, put this way, it certainly seems like superstition, but this is not the complete truth.

    There was once a world in which the Kingdom of Hadai collapsed due to disease. The plague spread around the world, bringing human civilisation to its knees and plunging the world into a darkness from which it would never recover. This world was assigned the status of an Item Designated For Removal and culled by the Pruning Theoretical Phenomenon. The light from this world went out, but before it ceased altogether, the glow emanated out into the universe.

    600 light years away, the information radiated by that world hit an object in the depths of space, and reflected back to Earth as cosmic background noise, and became part of the Divine Spirit formed from the aggregation of the universe as seen from the planet. Amatsu-Mikaboshi, through its incarnation as Takeminakata, heard the echo of the culled world, and remembered - or, to put it another way, it was a compatible vessel for the information corresponding to the King of Hadai due to his own similarities with him as his own world's version of the same individual. And he was not alone in this.

    Takeminakata declared himself Suwa-daimyōjin, and Mononobe-no-Moriya encountered him there. Perceiving himself the cosmic radiation as the Demon King Moriya, he too gained insight into his former self, and became the Demon King of Another World. He recognised the plague for what it was - the old world was slipping through the cracks. He knew then that Suwa-daimyōjin had to be stopped.

    A conflict blossomed into a great war between the Soga and the Mononobe, with child priests and would-be emperors at its heart. Suwa-daimyōjin, as Prince Shōtoku, blessed a boy named Arikazu, while Moriya fought for the ascension of Prince Hikohito to the throne instead of Prince Anahobe. The politics ended at Mt Shigi with a fierce final battle. Moriya was struck by a demon-felling arrow, and his true nature was revealed. Thus, the Demon King and the Dragon Sage of Another World decided to settle this matter amongst themselves. The duel was long, harsh, and utterly cataclysmic.

    Suwa-daimyōjin had been bringing the old world through on purpose, because he wished to save his people. Moriya declared that he was a fool, that not everyone could be saved, and that they should focus on what they have now. Suwa-daimyōjin disagreed - he had no qualms with this world, but he could save his old home as well, and he was going to. This world was different. It could withstand the plague. Humans stood side-by-side with Mystery, and could counteract it here. It was possible - the tools actually existed in this world, so he would restore everything using the echoes that came from the stars. He could not save everyone, but he surely could save at least a few people.

    Moriya fought with the irons of Naraka, but it was not enough. Nothing would ever be enough anymore. He had already started to believe in Takeminakata. Without the ability to even believe in his own illusions, he was defeated by a simple flower.

    Moriya-no-kami submitted, and both he and his descendants stood by Suwa-daimyōjin's side to help protect the lake. Even after the formal dissolution of the clan at Mt Shigi, even after a certain Magus removed the guardian deities, the Moriya clan remain at the Suwa Grand Shrine and the shrine to the Evil Outlaw at Mt Moriya.




    PersonalityPersonality

    Likes: Novelty, life
    Dislikes: Pruning Theoretical Phenomenon
    Talents: Manipulation
    Natural enemy: Takeminakata
    Alignment: Chaotic Evil

    Some would call Moriya conniving, and they'd be absolutely right. In fact, he would even agree. A scheming son of a bitch is indeed a self-image that he is proud of. That said, he certainly does not come across in such a way the first time one meets him.

    Flippant, facetious, and frivolous are the three words that best describe the man. It is a far cry to how he was for a lot of his life, but a lot of his seriousness stemmed from what he perceived as a vital yet delicate duty, and then a dire existential threat. Now that neither of those are immediately apparent, he has become the epitome of living in the moment. Responding extremely inappropriately to danger, focusing on whatever he thinks is the most interesting or exciting course, he can come off as scatterbrained and even outright juvenile at times. Although he lacks anything resembling the talent called Charisma, his instinct is to take charge in order to reach whatever he thinks would be fun. It is probably quite natural for the enemy of Buddhism to focus so strongly on whatever is the most gratifying or entertaining thing at any given instant.

    However, it quickly becomes apparent that while this is true, he is annoyingly sharp - and worse, this seemingly childish exterior makes it very difficult indeed to tell when he's planning something, even for his allies. He lies, although never at random, and is perfectly happy to play the long game against his enemies. He has no opposition to truces, rescues, and peaceful resolutions if they are convenient, but he will also rarely hesitate to decimate large numbers of his enemies in order to make a point if he's in a particularly bad mood. It is hardly ever obvious from watching him whether he plans to reason with or destroy an opponent until the moment his plans come together.

    There is certainly a sense of age and darkness behind him, but he keeps it concealed as much as he can - for his own sake as much as anything, because he simply doesn't want to think about it all too much. His past as the Demon King is not something he is strictly ashamed of, and he will even still call himself that, but he simply has no desire to return to the standing of an adversary of humanity now that he has lived as one. Ironically, it seems that he is subject to the very things that he wishes on human beings, and as such is rendered practically impotent as someone who would rather have a good time than cause an apocalypse.




    RelationshipsRelationships

    Demetrius
    "Aha, I almost mistook you for Lajja Gauri! Then again, you'd be getting a little close to my niche. Big fan of your work! Well, some of it. Enjoyed the cereal, not so much all the killing. Nice threads, by the way, very you, or one of the yous at least. Almost makes me want to try on a girl next myself when this one inevitably blinks out of existence. Men are comfy, but they're all thumbs and no fingers."

    A Weird Goblin Who Hates Daylight
    "...Hm.
    You...
    Hm.
    Hmm...
    I...
    Hm. Gonna take a rain check on processing this, I think."


    Hermes Trismegistus
    "Oh, that's very interesting. Beautiful, actually. Never seen a pet rock that I've been forced to respect before. You seem fun at parties. That's usually sarcastic, but I do mean it. Been pretty much everywhere, seen pretty much everything, and I still have no idea what that tablet actually means, and I get the distinct impression that it's not even your best trick. I would love some tea with you. The
    maya
    shapes of things
    are my whole schtick, after all. And come to think of it, being something of an astrologer yourself, let me tell you because you are going to
    love this..."

    Loki=Rod
    "I get it. Who cares if it's a birthright or not? It's worth defending because it's yours now. I think that's all I need to say."

    Sukunabikona
    "Haha! If it isn't Short-Ass himself! Still running around after this world's Mahakala too, eh? It's Shiva in this timeline, right? That thing has a habit of changing its face whenever it gets tired of it... Not that I'm one to talk. No, no, it's a good thing you're still here. You're the most familiar thing I've seen since I arrived. Hm, but judging by that face, I guess you haven't met me yet... Ah well, no point dwelling on it. While I'm here, I might as well book in! You got an empty room for little old me to crash in?"

    Santa Claus
    "...Right."
    He doesn't say what he understands. Of course a photograph will not preserve a voided cosmos. But that's not the point. There is more to the act of taking a picture than just preserving a moment.
    "Pfft. That guy," he muses later, "sure can't mind his own business, can he...?"

    Matarisvan
    "What the hell are you doing here?! No, I'm not complaining, just don't touch me with those hands, I can tell they're bad news! That fire of yours is pretty compatible with me, though. I might try my hand at embezzling a bit of it with my Noble Phantasm... You don't mind, do you?"



    Author's NoteAuthor's Note

    I love serendipity. I wasn't originally going to make Moriya, but he ended up being a lot of fun. I'm also surprised that I managed to get him done so quickly, although I suppose that happens when you lock yourself in your room for two days.

    Does Shinto-Buddhist syncretism hit the prompt? It feels like low-hanging fruit in a way, but this is early enough in the timeline that it feels in my heart like it counts. You may recognise some of these names from the Chart Of Doom I posted a little while ago. This is my attempt to sort them out and actually figure out what's going on. It also minimises the number of bunrei involved, which makes it more satisfying to me. I'm pretty pleased with how the timeline(s) worked out in the end.

    By the way, if what's happening is a little difficult to understand, don't fret: Moriya is by far the simplest part of this equation, and there's a load of stuff that I didn't include here. Just you wait until Unknown Frog God gets involved. Seriously, I wish I was making even one of these bullshit connections up...
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    Dang, Random being Random again and showing us a glimpse of the chaotic tumbleweed that is ancient Japanese syncretism. I know Pine is usually the syncretism guy here, but with a bunch of your Servants (mainly this guy and "God"), I think you're a close second. Gotta admire how you managed to explain his roots in a (somewhat, kind of, relatively) easy to digest manner. I think that's not something everyone can do when it comes to larger-than-life figures like him.

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    It's true. I'm the only one who has posted something so cool for this round

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    "When will I vanish?"

    I would not like to think about that question, thank you very much. :V Because the moment I do I spiral into an existential crisis wondering if I can make the most of time, if I'm going to regret anything at the end, what will happen when I'm gone, will I even reach an afterlife, is there even an afterlife, I--

    See what I mean? :V

    Okay but seriously I think I'm gonna really enjoy this prompt's results because I like bullshit like this. And by bullshit I mean "man it's so cool seeing how it all mixes together" and I can't tell if it's something you noticed or something that's been academically noticed. I think my favorite part was the "echo" bit, how the cry of another world was sensed by ours. It reminds of I think a spoiler from the Zero Escape series that probably doesn't need to be spoiled but I wanna 'cause I stingy about ZE spoilers because I love it. XDthe Morphogenetic Field from the Zero Escape series.

    But man reading this makes me feel like my idea is gonna be bullshit, as "i doubt it's gonna be good even of if i try especially since i'm making up the syncretism", but I know some of that is just my low self-confidence. ^^;
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    Believe in yourself!

    This is a threat.

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    "Believe in the me that believes in you!"
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    "You didn't have to fight for me, you know." "And you didn't have to curl your hair so we'll look even more alike." Ren stared before he softly chuckled, Akira joining him not long after. With one simple decision as a child, Ren Amamiya goes to Tokyo alongside his little sister, Akira. (P5R Sibling AU) (Ren/Ann, Akechi/Fem!Akira)
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    fascinating. you created the reverse of stranger - a servant that consists only of passive skills
    my first thought is that i really dig the story, but not the sheet? with sheet i mean the skills and NP
    the false foreigner skill shows a slight misunderstanding - the skill does not just denote "outer space" but the foreign dimensions of the Outer gods too. Lower ranks do denote outer space in a way tho. but in this case...the Servantverse is said to be another universe, but still somewhat part of ours. it is...conceptually close enough to this case you weaved together. So a False variant may not be necessary here. I wanna complain more about the other skills, but the more i read, the more they made sense. Let me put it in another way.
    These skills paint a picture of his circumstances, but not himself. They do explain the sheet like any good sheet should, but they are missing parts of the personality you explained so well later. Or in the words of a blue dwarf from the best game of the year "ya over yonder described all of da nature of da thing, but nothin' much of da form of da thing. Ya get me?"
    see how deep i gotta dig to tell you something beyond praise?
    lets get more superfluous, bud
    the sections in the Profile part, either space them out properly or underscore the section names. If you open them all, its hard to discern where chapters start or end.
    And idk what you changed in your formatting, but you suddenly got these ugly sliders on desktop because the descriptions reach beyond my screen
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    "Yoohoo, contractor! Summoned into the Lancer class, I…am…a woman?! Wait, no, my name is Deme…trius but still why am I…?"


    True Name: Demetrius of Thessaloniki
    Class: Lancer
    Alignment: Lawful Good
    Source: Miracles of Saint Demetrius
    Region: Greece
    Armament: Spear

    Parameters:
    Strength: C
    Endurance: B
    Agility: A
    Mana: C+
    Luck: B

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    Magic Resistance A
    The ability to resist magical effects. Demetrius was a pious man in life, becoming canonized as a saint postmortem. With such devotion, he, well she, was blessed with top grade resistance.

    "I was a pious woman, I mean man, in life. And such piety was not without reason!"

    Divinity C+
    A skill that represents one's aptitude for Divinity. As a Saint, Demetrius has enjoyed good amounts of worship that elevates her above most minor deities. Though the rank itself seems abnormally high. ???This is due to being subjected to an incomplete ritual of ascension developed by the steadily fading cult of Demeter. The process had tailored her body to channel more efficiently than expected, inadvertently turning it female after she had died. Only when completed does this skill evolve into a Divine Core.

    "Yet something feels not quite right. And I feel it is due to my own ignorance."

    Personal Skills:

    Natural Body B+
    The possession of a perfect body as a living being since birth. An athletic military saint that is always ready to faithfully defend her home from invaders. With this skill, she can temporarily rank up her strength! ???Its placement in her repertoire is as a precursor skill to apotheosis. A completely divine being should a divinely healthy body.

    "But even then, I can still defend you at least. This body of mine can take and deal as much as needed back home!"

    Guardian of Thessaloniki B
    The title that Demetrius was mainly known for in life. Thessaloniki was a city that was constantly sieged by a multitude of invaders by Slavs but ultimately such attacks were miraculously repelled non stop by Demetrius, leading her to becoming its patron saint. A skill similar to Guardian Knight but more widespread.

    "...It's odd I still think of my home sometimes. The actions I've done in the past and the faith I had in my life. Sometimes I question if I could've done more."

    Eleusinian Mysteries D++
    The rites and roles buried within her soul, unearthed in her newfound existence as a Hero. To history, Demetrius herself had never once been involved in such rituals and ceremonies. However, those that worshiped the Earth Mother of Greece had seemingly shifted her existence into her patronage as time went on and her fame became clear. Normally, it is only meant to be transference in name only yet Demetrius displays more potential with the skill then expected.

    "...And the answer was yes. But I feel that in those moments, pushing for more would utterly destroy every part of me."

    Noble Phantasm

    "Yet now? Despite everything, It's still me. The road ahead is deadly. It's dangerous to go alone! Take this! Nestor Blessing!"

    Nestor Blessing: Become the Spear That Pierces God's Enemies
    Rank: B+
    Type: Anti-Unit

    The noble phantasm of Demetrius. The crystallization of the point of her legend where her disciple, Nestor, had come to ask for her blessing in his upcoming match with the gladiator, Lyaeus. Imparting the blessing on Nestor, he was able to defeat the strong Lyaeus with a single mortal blow.

    While as an outside appearance, the noble phantasm looks to be a simple strengthening process that upgrades one's body. However, it is more than that. In art, Demetrius is commonly depicted wielding a spear that pierces a man, commonly identified as Lyaeus though this did not truly happen in her life. And so with that input into her legend, rather than simply upgrading one's parameters, it utterly ascends their existence in a literal manner, turning an individual into Demetrius' noble phantasm, her 'spear' to put it simply.


    Personality

    Demetrius' demeanor that commonly fits what one would expect of a saint. Kind, pious, and a care for others that exceeds the norm of her era, an almost motherly disposition that seemed unfitting her previous gender. One would say being a girl fits Demetrius more but she would respond with "is that so?" and laugh awkwardly.

    However, before the motherly aura of a girl saint is the sternness of a disciplined roman soldier. Though resistance against such an attitude reveals Demetrius as a minor doormat, not enough to complicate her life in a meaningful or harmful way but enough to be noticeable. She would flinch in embarrassment if it was pointed out.

    But even before any of this was…was...


    Lore

    Demetrius of Thessaloniki was a military saint; one of many in the world. Garnering faith in his acts of defending his home from invading Slavs that moved into the area as well as converting the local pagan worshipers to Christianity, he was eventually imprisoned by the order of the Emperor and killed not too long after. A brave man who received many patronages, with an important one among those being that of agriculture.

    In the times long past, there existed a cult that worshiped the Greek Goddesses Demeter and Persephone. As one of the private cults in Greece, their workings, rites, and rituals were not widely known before they were steadily destroyed. But during that time, a ritual was set into motion. A ritual that follows the structure of the legends surrounding Demeter and Persephone to transmute a human into a divine being. A child was used in this ritual, slowly being morphed into a divine being.

    However, before it could come into fruition, fate deemed that history would repeat itself as the ritual was stumbled upon and dismantled. The child was taken away and the Eleusinian Mysteries were once again left unknown to all outside the cult. The child grew up, with parts made divine and others born mortal, incomplete. From there, no interaction was had with the cult until past his death where the rites and roles of Demeter had been inherited into his patronage under the banner of agriculture. What a coincidence.


    An Ear of Grain Cut In Silence

    "The situation seems to be in dire straits. It seems I have pushed too far and cannot see much ahead for us. Only one thing to do now then. Oh Heavenly Father, forgive me."

    Within her heart of hearts laid a ritual left unfinished. Her spirit and body remained incomplete in life but it does not have to stay that way in death. Nestor Blessing was a noble phantasm that elevated one's existence, targeting any one person including Demetrius herself. However, as it is, it's power is not enough to even benefit her beyond minor improvements. But Demetrius does not intend to use it as it is.

    "Descend. Search. Ascend
    A Child Bathed in Divine Fire."



    Demetrius Breaks her noble phantasm, pushing its capabilities way beyond its limits to complete the ritual of ascension embedded in her Saint Graph. Her body becomes bathed in the divine fire of the hearth and her spirit swells, losing all traces of ever once being mortal.

    "Mighty Potnia bore a great son."



    She emerges as a Divine Spirit of the land; the latest in the line of Earth Mother Goddesses incarnated in the world. She is known as Demetra. (Though she honestly wouldn't mind retaining her original name.

    "
    Eleusis Demetra
    An Ear of Grain Cut In Silence
    "





    creator's Note: I am not good with complex sheets but I did my best with this and came out, decently satisfied. Also second sheet of the contest.
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    I blame GUDAGUDA particles, the Servantsverse, our prompt, and DelRey's Simo Häyhä sheet, but most of all myself.

    Third sheet of the contest. The Skills and NP might be too straightforward given the concept, but fuck it, we ball.




    "Hi, hi, hiiiiiiii!!! (≧▽≦)/ Welcome to a brand new *univeeerseee*! Are you ready to meet the best of all Archers? \(^▽^)/"

    Class: Archer
    True Name: "Hmm... I wonder? I think Apophis was one of the earliest ones! (◕‿◕✿) That takes me back!"For a better reading experience, don't click the True Name again until you've gone through everything else.Apep = Apophis = Hou Yi = Chang'e = Orion = Artemis = Diana
    Source: Mythology
    Region: Not applicable
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Attribute: Heaven
    Armament: Bow, shapeshifting
    Likes: Hunting, the moon, monsters, anything beautiful, cute things, huge muscles, pranks, great scenery, mixing drinks, making soup, the Earth
    Dislikes: Bright lights
    Talent: Supposedly bartending
    Natural Enemy: Too many to list




    First Ascension


    Source

    "This is one of my cute looks! (◕‿◕✿) "

    Second Ascension


    Source

    "̸̞̈T̷̟̈́h̴͛ͅȋ̴̙s̶͚͊ ̷͓̄i̸̹͗s̷̱̚ ̶̞͝ó̵͎n̵̥͆e̷͉͌ ̵̦̀o̵̯̒f̷̥͋ ̴̙͘m̶̡̓y̶̧͌ ̵̣͋s̵̗̚c̶̟̀a̷̠͌ř̴̹y̶̱͊ ̵͈̓l̷̲̔ö̷̟́o̵͎͆k̵͔̓s̵͓͝!̴̣̀ ̴̙̌R̶̞͘A̷̹͝Å̴͖Ĝ̵̗H̸̢͂!̵̡̌ ̸̩̀٩̴͙̕(̷̖͝╬̸̟̍ʘ̶̬̇益̷̮͗ʘ̸̹͝╬̶̲͘)̵̖̈۶̶̝͑ ̴͓͌"̸͎͠

    Third Ascension


    Source

    "This is one of my handsome looks! (^_−)☆ "

    Final Ascension


    Source

    "And this is the look I'll be going for today! Unless, of course, you think one of those other three is better? \(^▽^)/ "




    Parameters
    STR | A++
    AGI | B
    END | A+
    MGI | B
    LCK | A
    NP | EX





    Morph | A+


    An ability that encompasses both all kinds of shapeshifting and, in certain cases, possession. In Archer's case, the former is more relevant. In terms of size, there is a limitation, but they can still shrink down to diminutive heights or grow several times larger than any human. In terms of shape, on the other hand, nearly any form is within reach.




    "An oryx, a vulture, a wolf, a lizard, a giant snake fifteen metres long, and with a head of flint to spice things up! That was me back when I was trying to eat up the sun! Or blow it up! Or destroy it in some other way! Really, anything would've done! Why keep around something that makes your eyes hurt when you look directly at it, anyway? (>﹏<) But yeah, I kept getting foiled by this or that Divine Spirit. I was one back then, by the way! Not anymore though!"




    Divinity | A


    Archer may no longer be a proper Divine Spirit, but, as an existence that used to be one, receives a notably high Rank in this Skill.




    "One day, some solar constructs that were supposed to follow the sun around - to keep watch on me and alert the gods when needed - went all haywire and flew at its side all together rather than in shifts! The heat they were sending off was cooking up the Earth something fierce! So my usual enemies were trying to fix them, and weren't around to block my arrows! But I like Earth too, so I didn't go for the sun and instead shot those nine malfunctioning birds down! (* ̄▽ ̄)b

    Of course, once I saved the day, the other gods all blamed the whole incident on me in the first place! (╯°益°)╯彡┻━┻ They stripped away my status as a Divine Spirit and took away my immortality!"




    Magic Resistance | A-


    Cancels all spells of Rank A or below, including any kind of greater magecraft, with the exception of Divine Words and the like, against which Archer is slightly more vulnerable.




    "But you know, after a spectacular breakdown, I just took it in stride and enjoyed my opportunity to unwind with all sorts of adventures as a human on Earth! The fact that multiple of them involved beating up Divine Spirits on behalf of humanity had little to do with it, I assure you! (* ^ ω ^) "




    Hero of the Bow | A


    A composite of a high-ranked Beast-Slayer and an average-ranked God-Slayer, granting bonus damage against Divine Spirits and Phantasmal Species, and representing Archer's exploits against such foes throughout the course of their whole life. The name of this Skill is a title oft attributed to Archer. The fact that it's synonymous in meaning with the Archer Class is representative of just how essential their deeds were to forming the image of heroism and of archery in the lands they touched.




    "Around this time, I was mixing and brewing all sorts of stuff to make up some hooch that'd give me my immortality back! One of the human apprentices I took was all jealous, though, and tried to steal it to get more time to become my equal as an archer! Imagine his surprise when, rather than let him have it, his master's wife tearfully drank it herself! (ಥ﹏ಥ)

    Of course, I was the wife, too. Shapeshifting, remember? I just thought that pretending to be both spouses would be fun! (⁀ᗢ⁀)

    But, back to the immortality grog, it... sort of worked. I could no longer die of old age thanks to it, but it didn't really make me any stronger, or recreate my Divine Core, or anything like that. In fact, it had a bit too much of a kick to it still, so it knocked right out of my head wholesale the bulk of the knowledge I'd used to brew it, and a few other memories here or there! But oh, well, what can you do? ┐(︶▽︶)┌ "




    Item Construction | A-


    Though normally a Caster Class Skill, it's a Personal Skill for Archer, who possesses a wealth of alchemical knowledge, even if no longer as extensive as it used to be. Moreover, Archer is capable of crafting all sorts of devices and weapons that could feasibly be of aid on a hunt.




    "Anyway, I thought I'd play a prank on my apprentice and disappear for a while after that, pretending I'd left for the moon, but I ended up having so much fun in the next place I visited that I'm pretty sure I forgot to return before his death. ( ̄▽ ̄*)ゞ "




    Independent Action | EX


    Archer has never truly died, but not only does possibility of dying still exist for them: they also can't materialise in whichever time they please. They fall short of achieving even the lowest Rank in Independent Manifestation, and possess no additional resistance to instant death effects and time manipulation. However, Archer is so self-sufficient in terms of mana expenditure that, depending on their circumstances, and for periods of time that could potentially get even longer than a human's full natural lifespan, they might forget having a Master altogether. As long as there's no need to use their Noble Phantasm multiple times in a short while and no Command Spells are invoked, that is.




    "So I left China and went on to catch a bunch of beasties in Greece, sometimes as a devastatingly handsome hunter with a super-strength belt that was actually just a normal belt, sometimes as a huntress that always went out in the moonlight and who was beautiful enough to drive anyone mad. So this one time I was with a bunch of girls in a hot spring after a hunt and there were these two who accidentally peeped on us and I was about to go all like 'Kyaa! (⁄ ⁄>⁄ ▽ ⁄<⁄ ⁄)' but then one of them said 'Dude not gonna lie sometimes I wish I could be a girl that pretty' and the other said 'What are you talking about, that bitch's ugly', so I threw a deerskin on the second and sic'd his own hounds on him and I told the other she was a cute girl already and invited her on the next outing. (⌒‿⌒)

    After a while, somehow, a distant descendant of that one apprentice found out I was in Greece, and started sending these killer scorpion familiars after me, which would've been barely an annoyance normally, but kept targeting my friends, so I paid her a home visit to kick her ass, and then stayed in her neighbourhood because it was a pretty nice place. Now that I think of it, lots of people back in Greece must think that one of those scorpions got me in the end. Whoops! ( ̄▽ ̄*)ゞ Anyway, lately I've been revisiting the moonlight huntress shtick near this here friendly village called ROMA."




    Leader of the Moonlit Hunt
    And Still, They Dream To Hunt The Sun
    | A



    The ability to momentarily acquire any sort of Skill that would be of use during a hunt, at varying Ranks, Clarvoyance and Mind's Eye (False) being two of the most obvious examples. This Skill exemplifies Archer's status of a paragon of hunting, in some cases venerated as a divinity of the hunt long after having lost their status as a Divine Spirit; however, to an even stronger extent, it stands for their passion for the hunt.




    "But enough about all that already! I'm sure you're wondering how I could win all the battles I've won and how I was planning to eat the sun, right? Well, it's like this: first, you've got to imagine your prey as, like, a balloon filled with air, but like, stretched *reeeallly* thin. Then, you've got to imagine that, when you poke the balloon, it'll pop. And then, you can also imagine that, when it'll pop, you'll eat it. And then, you actually poke the balloon, by poking your prey. Hope that helps! o(>ω<)o "




    Sun Eater
    Primordial Night Hunt




    Type: Anti-Unit
    Rank: EX
    Range: 5~99
    Targets: 1 prey

    Archer's sole Noble Phantasm. Originally a manifestation of an Authority of Devouring that could work at any range, it has since then been restricted to work exclusively with ranged attacks due to the fact that Archer had been employing arrows as their choice of armament when they were stripped of their status as a Divine Spirit.

    Archer is able to imagine nearly anything as being thin enough to be pierceable by their ranged attacks. They're also able to imagine their target being completely annihilated after it's pierced this way. Lastly, they're also able to imagine instantly absorbing and consuming their prey once it's been destroyed. Anything absorbed this way will increase Archer's power. Though Sun Eater lacks a proper True Name Release, this absorption is sometimes mistaken for one.

    These thoughts will inevitably come true if Archer's ranged attacks connect with the envisioned target at all. However, there are some restrictions. If these aren't fulfilled, a ranged attack by Archer will simply be backed by their overwhelming brute strength but lack any esoteric qualities.

    Sun Eater's effect is limited to one target for each ranged attack, even if the attack ends up connecting with multiple targets. It only works with the target initially envisioned when a ranged attack is first launched, not with any others that might get caught up in it or with anything that may intercept or deflect it before it reaches said target. Moreover, if for some reason Archer can't envision their target, whether because their thoughts are being meddled with or because it's simply beyond their comprehension, this Noble Phantasm won't work as intended. Lastly, the overall scale of Sun Eater's effect has been diminished now that Archer is no longer a Divine Spirit: before that, it would've been possible to classify their Authority as Anti-Star, but since then, some prey has ceased being within its reach, and can no longer by affected by Archer's thoughts. Therefore, the sun is *currently* safe from Archer.





    "Wait, what do you mean eating the sun would've harmed the Earth I love so much!? Liar! You're making that up! (>﹏<) Just find a way to heat up the Earth without so much daylight or something! And do something about the vitamin D and whatnot! That sort of stuff is well within the realm of what a bunch of Divine Spirits combined could pull off, right!? My oh my. (⇀‸↼‶) "




    Relationships

    Orion, Artemis
    "PFWAHAHAHAHAHA WAHAHAHAHAHA SDFFGHJK;LMAO LOL ASDROFLOL"

    Ozymandias
    "Aww! It's kinda cute how proud you are of the whole Ra thing! But I wish you'd quit looking at me like that, especially when I'm trying to have a snack in peace! (>﹏<) "

    Shi Huang Di (SIN Lostbelt)
    "I could've had another immortal bestie if only you weren't so... Emperor-y. ( ̄  ̄|||) "

    Simo Häyhä (Foreign Archer)
    "For some reason, it almost feels like our first meeting was destined! Let's try to always get along, ok!? o(≧▽≦)o "

    Mononobe-no-Moriya
    "A bunch of people seem to think you're a bad guy, you're kinda immortal but not really, and you're also not quite from Master's universe... I totally get how you feel! (っ´ω`)ノ(╥ω╥) Still, given that you can take so much punishment, what about letting me hunt you down once or twice? (  ̄ω ̄)ノ゙⌒☆ミ(o _ _)o "

    Demetrius of Thessaloniki
    "Why so hesitant? It's almost as if you don't believe in yourself! (¬‿¬ ) "

    Hermes Trismegistus
    "You say you love teaching and alchemy, but you won't even take one look at anything I mix! (ノ°益°)ノ Honestly, what's up with you!? (>﹏<) "
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    bro if i can be very very honest I understand nothing from the prompt. can someone make a tl;dr or something so it's easier to digest?

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    Synchretism is when a faith borrow, inherit or adapt elements from another one. The prompt is making a sheet based on that.

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    basically it's when one is adapted from another? am i processing this correctly?

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    Yeah. For example, Amon-Zeus is a combination of the Egyptian God Amon and the Greek God Zeus, brought about as a result of Greek colonies in Egypt spreading their faith to Greece. Or everything about holidays like Christmas.

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    ok... I'm off to research on harbingers of death.


    quick question, can I rewrite literal history if it's not noted on any records or any literature.
    for example, the sequence of an event is a>b>c
    Assuming that only a was actually recorded in history, but not b and c, can i just make my own bullshit?

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    Unless I'm missing the part of history in which early opponents of Buddhism did actually communicate with an ancient Indian kingdom that never existed via radiation from Betelgeuse that a star god ate, I'm going to go out on a limb and say it's fine so long as it's convincing.

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    I don't think you understood the concept. God and Cain are from the same religion, for one.

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    I dunno Random you might have to reconsider now
    It's winter in Sapporo. And as the weather stirs, so too does a new Holy Grail War.

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    I syncretise this timeline with one in which I don't.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Alexcoene View Post
    I don't think you understood the concept. God and Cain are from the same religion, for one.
    I know. I was sharing about a recent brainfart I had (And submitted to school for an assignment.)
    Alright i'm not going to bother you guys. all the best.

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