I thought The Original Sin already existed as Solomon's three Noble Phantasms, one of which being a giant ring in the sky that can shoot tons of Excalibur blasts?
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Damn, that's one spiteful as hell lady. Though, I can't exactly say she's unjustified (what he did to her was about as bad as what Jason did to Medea, after all).
The idea of Ariadne trying to get revenge on Theseus by NTRing him kind of amuses me more then it probably should. Especially with the potential Yuri element involved. By option (B), I take it you mean she'd pull a Medea and keep his Master hostage until they're sufficiently brainwashed/seduced (so, kind of like a reverse Medea then...). That's how I imagine it, anyway.
The tragic thing is, Theseus (or at least my take on him) would probably be too griefstricken himself upon meeting Ariadne again to even fight back. His whole wish is about trying to make amends with Ariadne and knowing she still hates him (understandably) even despite his efforts at atonement would... shatter him, most likely. Though I guess you could say it'd make him even more determined to go back and undo his abandonment of her in the first place. In any case, if he had the resolve to keep fighting he could bypass a Command Seal through marking himself with his 'Spathí Athínas' NP and then invoking it to counter the Command Seal's effects.
What, you assumed you're the only one who can put loads of thought into fanfic ideas that'll likely never come to fruition? Nonsense.
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You should probably do something with it, given that it's the most important aspect of his legend by far. More so then the dream prophecy stuff which, as far as I can tell, wasn't mentioned at all in his lore.
By the way, what'd you think of my idea for it as a Noble Phantasm?
Slightly off-topic, but why does Solomon have Original Sin related stuff anyway? Is he ever mentioned as having a special tie to that concept in Biblical myth? (then again, it's not like he had rainbow orbital death-ray either...)
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That and genderswaps
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I'm back! Decided to do a more grounded, realistic Servant this time. He's pushing the limit how young he is, but Shuwen, Tesla, and Edison got in. Besides, he's really famous.
Rider/Assassin
The Red Baron
Class: Rider/Assassin
True Name: Manfred von Richthofen
Area of Origin: Germany
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Attribute: Man
Parameters:
Strength: D
Endurance: D
Agility: C
Magic: E
Luck: B-
Noble Phantasm: B
Skills:
Class Skills:
- Riding B
Most vehicles can be ridden with expertise- Magic Resistance E
Only weakens the effect of Magecraft targeted at him.- Presence Concealment C+
The rank of presence concealment drops considerably when preparing to attack. However, this condition does not apply when approaching a target via plane from behind.
Personal Skills:
- Double Summon B
Richthofen holds the class skills of both the Rider class (reflecting his career as a pilot) and the Assassin class (reflecting his methods during combat).- Powerless Shell A/-
Outside of his planes, Richthofen is difficult to perceive as a Servant. This skill is canceled whenever he boards one of his aircraft.- Marksmanship B
A skill for those famed for their marksmanship abilities. Richthofen's flying style was not characterized by reckless dogfighting and acrobatics, but by ruthless precision and the element of surprise.- Voyager of the Skies A+
The talent to pilot vessels recognized as planes. As piloting often involves either flying in and leading formations and/or directing support crew inside the plane, this skill also has the effects of Charisma and Military Tactics.- Weak Constitution D
There is a chance for a sudden status drop upon returning to the ground. In addition to a temporary parameter Rank-Down, Richthofen will suffer nausea and severe headaches.
Equipment:
- Pilot's equipment
- A cavalry sword from his days as a cavalry officer. This will be is primary weapon on foot and if he somehow manages to steal a horse after surviving being shot down from both his planes.
Noble Phantasm:
Spoiler:
Lore:
Spoiler:
Personality:
Distant, unemotional, and humourless, Richthofen is a far cry from the hero that German propaganda painted him as. Rather than a gallant knight of the skies, he is a cold-hearted killer, always aiming for the head or the heart. He takes no pleasure from his work, viewing it as his duty as a military pilot. This dour personality of his is more than likely a result of his head injury; he was once playful and mischievous, but in his final days, he was extremely depressed and ill-tempered. Before his head injury, he was cautious and subtle but also resolute in flight; in his current state, he is prone to suffering from combat stress and there is the possibility of him taking reckless action. Nevertheless, he still tries to hold true to Dicta Boelke, as he knows it could save his life.
His wish to the Grail is something that he himself is not sure of, but even if he discovers something to wish for, he probably would not reveal it to his Master.
Miscellaneous:
Likes: horseback riding
Dislikes: being lauded as a hero, idiot pilots
Talents: air combat
Natural Enemy: anybody with an anti-aircraft weapon
Catalyst: the remains of Fokker Dr.I, 425/17
A bit of a different take on this guy and most Riders for that matter, few are capable of flight and none have had planes. The guy seems pretty solid and it would be nice to see more pilots like him and Amelia Airheart around here.
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Class: Caster
Name: Pasiphaë
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of Origin: Greece
Strength- C
Endurance- D
Agility- B
Mana- A
Luck- D
NP- A
Height/Weight: 188cm/84kg
Likes: "Beginnings"
Dislikes: Blame Shifting
Talent: Charm Making
Natural Enemy: King Minos, Poseidon
Class Skills:
- Territory Creation (A) - Creation of a temple, superior to a workshop is possible.
- Item Construction (B) - Berserker is capable of creating powerful Mystic Codes of all kinds that surpass those created with modern Magecraft.
Personal Skills:
- Divinity (A) - The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. Daughter of Helios and demigoddess of magic in the Greek pantheon. In some circles, she is worshiped as a goddess of magic - much like her sister.
- Innocent Monster (D) - An attribute possessed by Servants whose history and existence have been distorted by the monstrous reputations they accrued across the course of their life and thereafter. As a consequence, the Servant's abilities and appearance have been rendered to conform to the specifications of their legend.
Due to her connections with the Cretan Bull, her form has warped to look similar to it. In addition, she becomes lustful easily - much so her chagrin.- Rage Against the Heavens (D) - One who hates or confronts the divine. Pasiphaë was needlessly punished in the stead of her husband who was the one who defied the gods - gaining a hatred of the pantheon as a whole. Enemies with the Divinity skill have their Strength and Endurance parameters decrease in combat against her.
- Witchcraft (A) - The heavenly methods. It includes methods to discern one's time of death and secret arts to obtain influence, such as methods to attain status and fortune (for men) and methods to gain the favour of influential individuals (for women).
Noble Phantasm
Lore
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And here's Pasiphaë! I know you probably have "comments" about her Noble Phantasm and... yeah. It was the only thing there was in her legend that it could be so I went as far away from what it originally was as I could. Like Ariadne, the sheet I did before shes someone who probably shouldn't be a heroic spirit but here she is anyway.
On a more positive note, these "Servants who shouldn't be servants" are generally fun to make, I think I might do one more before releasing the last of the three servants from that one unmade fic.
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Pasiphae: Do I have 'comments' about her NP? Hell yeah. I loved it. A bit of a stretch from her legend maybe but it's wickedly creative and has her go from a somewhat mediocre Caster to highly dangerous threat. Reminds me of Cu Alter's sea-serpent armor thing combined with Atalanta's Agrius Metamorphosis. I once thought of doing Pasiphae as an illusionist of some kind whose NP recreates the Labyrinth (from how she was portrayed in the Last Olympian novel series) but your take on her is far more interesting.
Rage Against The Heavens is awesomely named and adds a lot of flavor to her. Her personality sounds well fleshed-out (whatever you do, don't mention the bull) and I especially like the mention of how she and Europa may have been originally been one person (since I myself made a Europa sheet quite recently). Any ideas what would happen if the two were summoned in the same War?
Pasiphae loves the idea of Europa and has a bit of internalised self loathing going on. It would be a case of utter hero worship as Europa is literally everything she aspires to be.
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this is literally all the info we have for now https://chaldeum.wordpress.com/servant/caster083/
not much detail
Every now and then I come back to Pasiphae and wonder how to make her a good Servant. This is probably the most creative thing I've seen for her. Bravo.q
Also is that a Qunari Inquisitor as the FC?
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"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
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Class: Saver
True Name: Mahatma Gandhi
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Good
STR: ***** E
END: ***** C
AGI: ***** D
MGI: ***** D
LCK: ***** B+
NP: ***** A++
Keywords
CLASS SKILLS
Aura of a Savior: A+
The ability to support others through just one’s presence alone. Improves the moral and provides bonus modifiers to the rolls of all allies within a given distance. Upon coming this far, this is already a type of divine protection.
PERSONAL SKILLS
Charisma: A
The natural talent to command an army corps. Raises the abilities of one's own army on group battles. A rare talent. It can be said that A Rank is the highest peak of popularity one can acquire as a human being.
In his case, other than the leadership necessary for building a nation, this Skill also denotes the eloquence and advocacy techniques refined during his time as a lawyer.
Enlightenment of the Bodhi Tree: C
A protection that only those who reached the truth of the world, the answer of mankind, are clad in. A proof of “protecting the world” also called anti-purge defense. Unconditionally reduces the damage from physical attacks, conceptual attacks and inter-dimensional attacks by the degree of his own HP value. Also, the higher this Skill’s rank is, higher are the chances of mental interference being shutout.
Although his nature is extremely similar to one, since he is not a genuine buddha, the rank of this Skill is confined to C.
Pioneer of the Star: EX
A unique Skill bestowed to a hero who became a turning point in human history. Any and all penances turn from "impossibilities" into "events that can be realized".
As the very first precedent of a successful non-violent revolution in recorded history, his name became a mark in human history as a proof that is possible to change the world (society) by means of something other than strength of arms.
Predisposition to Suffering: B+
A Skill that increases the chances of being targeted by the enemy during group battles. Tends to appear as a Minus Skill, but for a Servant that has a strong defense, possessing this Skill allows one to function as an excellent escort. It also includes some plus modifiers to defensive values.
In his case, this derives from a way of life that followed his pet theory of “proving one’s legitimacy by shouldering all sorts of pains”.
NOBLE PHANTASM
Sabarmati Ashram – Others Seal・Temple of Peace
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Army
Inviolable Holy Ground. The monastery that served as both his residence while alive and the headquarters of the independence movement he sponsored reproduced by means of magical energy. A High-Thaumaturgy falsely similar to a Reality Marble, but while a Reality Marble repaints the world itself, this is molded by accumulating on top of the proper world.
Inside the monastery, one will find himself surrounded by an atmosphere of absolute peace and tranquility. All those within this territory will have their will to fight robbed away, consequentially causing the accuracy rate of their attacks to fall extremely. There is also an effect that causes all sorts of mental disturbances to become undone. Furthermore, because this monastery is endowed with attributes as “the optimal place for Gandhi to perform his work”, he will receive bonus modifiers towards all actions carried out inside of it.
Ahimsa Satyagraha – White Flowing River
Rank: EX
Type: Anti-Unit (self)
The symbol of Heroic Spirit Gandhi. His pet theory, way of life sublimated as a Noble Phantasm. A constantly active-type of Noble Phantasm, but its operation depends on him not performing any attacks as an absolute premise. Should he ever voluntarily cause harm to another, it will permanently cease to function.
Whenever an enemy successfully lands a blow on Saver, his attack power will degrade by means of a divine punishment of sorts. Not only such effect will compound on itself with each strike received (the greater the inflicted injury is, the harsher the retribution will be), but it also cannot be undone by any means – even Saver’s annihilation will not cause the attack power to revert to what it was. Furthermore, normal attacks are a matter of course, but this can even deteriorate the performance and eventually seal away any armament-type Noble Phantasm employed by the enemy.
Back when he was alive, in the daily battle of right against might, the Sage of Peace never raised a hand to harm another, regardless of what sort of abuse he suffered. By sticking to his principles of moral truth derived from love and peace, he eventually robbed a great empire from its means to fight.
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