Create-A-Servant 2

[Alexcoene]

On Diogenes's class, you could perhaps make her a sort of "Fake Berserker" because of the odd behavior and reputation as a madman of her historical counterpart, a bit like Vagrant's version of Odysseus. Like, she could have a false version of Mad Enhancement that gives an impression of her stats being raised as long she acts crazy and her identity is not revealed. As for the NP, she could use her lantern to "shine upon the opponent's true nature", forcing them to act more in line with their inner tougths and act more impulsive. You could also make a NP based on the jar that she/he lived in, tough I have no precise idea about it.

[WhatShouldNotBe]

Servant: Rider
True Name: Than Giong
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Vietnam, Folklore
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Humanoid, Fairy, Dragon
Armament: Armor, Sword

STR: B+
END: B+
AGI: C
MGI: A
LCK: C
NP: A+

Height/Weight: 5' 10 / 190 lbs
Likes: Freedom, his Horse
Dislikes: Oppression
Talent: Showing up out of nowhere.
Natural Enemy: Yellow Emperor, pretty much any Chinese-originated Heroic Spirit

Class Skills:

Magic Resistance: B
In life, Thanh Giong was born into the Age of Gods, the son of a War God who sought to assist the Viet in their wars against the Chinese. Thus, his magic resistance is at B-rank.

Riding: A
He is capable of riding the vast majority of vehicles and animals.
Personal Skills:

Dai Viet: B
In life, Thanh Giong was half-divine, and half-Viet. In the age of gods, the Viet were a race of Nigh-Phantasmal beings, as they were descended from a Dragon and a Fairy. Thus, Thanh Giong has both Draconic and Fairy traits. If he was full-blooded AoG Viet, he would have additional effects, but as he is only 1/2 Viet, he only gains a rank-up to Strength and Endurance by expending prana.

Divinity: A
Thanh Giong was descended from a War God in life. So, he has it at this rank.

Childlike Visage: A+
Thanh Giong was a child until he hulked out into a Giant of a man and beat people to death. So, his stats appear two ranks lower to anyone looking.

Charisma: C+
than Giong was able to lead an army to victory against the Chinese. However, due to his legend, he gains a rank-up in Charisma when acting to gain the support of people who are thought of as 'civilians'/'peasants'.
Noble Phantasms:
Bu Nguoi, 'Giant of the People'

Type: Support
Rank: A
Range: NIL
Max Targets: 1~100

When Than Giong was a child, he was fed by the villagers until he grew into a giant, at his request. This was due to the impending threat of a Chinese Invasion, and the king of the time called up warriors to fight. Thus, this noble phantasm allows Than Giong's allies/supporters to 'donate' Prana to him, which creates a framework of armor around him, similar to a mech. In addition, he can collect metal and food he finds , and either add them to his armor or eat them respectively, and it will generate additional prana for his Mecha-armor, which will steadily increase in size. This ability works best when Than Giong has amassed a large group of followers from the populace, as each one will contribute a meager amount of prana to his Mecha, making it highly durable.

Ngua Sat, 'Great Iron Horse of Freedom'

Type: Anti-Army
Rank: A+~EX
Range: 1~100
Max Targets: 20 people

A massive iron horse, it's eyes burning with fire. It's veins are outlined with gold. It is a Conceptual Construct, given to Thanh Giong to help him drive the Chinese from the lands of the Viet. Passively, it serves as a highly durable mount for Thanh Giong.

It's active effect is to enlarge itself and change it's shape, becoming almost like an ancient asian Train on tracks of fire. This is the crystallization of Thanh Giong driving the Chinese from the lands of his home, as enemies in it's path are terrified by it's approach. As he travels, his allies may join his army by getting in one of the 'train cars', adding the weight of their legend to the force of the train. If they allow it, their noble phantasms will connect to the train, empowering the train with the Noble Phantasm's passive effects, turning the train into a giant machine of death. If Thanh Giong is capable of convincing enough servants to join his side, ride on his train, AND connect their NPs to his, it will be nigh-unstoppable. If targeted by an effect that targets NPs, only the Train will be effected, not the connected NPs. While on the train, the Heroic Spirits who own the NPs can still use them, as the entire train becomes a conduit for the power of the NP.

The origin of this NP lies in the Vietnamese Blacksmiths who forged a great iron horse for Thanh Giong. In the Age of Gods, Vietnamese Smiths were renowned for their capability to forge impossible objects, creating works of unparalleled mystery.

And yes, Thanh Giong can ride on top of the train even in his Mecha Form.

Lore

Thanh Giong was the son of a War God who sought to assist the Viet in driving out the Chinese. He stepped in a field, and the woman who found the enormous footprint became pregnant. The boy who was born was unable to speak, until when the Viet King called for men to fight in the war. Thanh Giong became a giant, by asking the people of his village to feed him until he grew strong, and led the Viet armies to drive out the Chinese. The Viet smiths forged several great weapons and armors for him, including a great sword, a spear, a suit of armor, and an iron horse. In the Rider Class, he only has access to the Iron horse, however, his other noble phantasms would be available if he was summoned into other classes.

Personality

A very precocious and snarky child, in combat, he suddenly turns into a Mecha Anime Protagonist, spouting lines about how he 'believes in you that believes in me' and how 'he can pierce the heavens'. He loves attention, acting like a Pop-idol when confronted with a large number of people unrelated to the war.

Tactics

Thanh Giong is a Heroic Spirit all about gaining allies, as the more allies he has , the more he will gain. From allies among the populace, who fuel his Mecha, to allies among the Servants, who empower his Train.

[RoydGolden]

Than Gong: Yep, most of the issues that Mizu pointed out seem fixed now. I'm a bit disappointed you nixed the sword but I admit it fit Le Loi a lot better then him (in fact, the version of the legend I found online don't even mention a special sword at all). Plus growing stronger and bigger the more others donate 'fuel' to him is very Shonen Protagonisty (Spirit Bomb, anyone?). Next I'd say you could try writing up Le Loi next (so the idea of the sword doesn't go to waste) or else a version of this guy as Lancer (so you can work in the bamboo spear).

[Alexcoene]

So Royd, what do you think about my idea for Diogenes ? You know, the whole "Fake Berserker" thing ?
Well, aside from that, I made another servant.


Source: http://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.p...ust_id=9912741
True Name: Izanami-no-Mikoto
Class: Lancer
Alternate Class: Caster, Berserker, Avenger
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Origin: Myths
Region: Japan
Natural Enemy: Izanagi-no-Mikoto

Parameters
Strength: B
Endurance: C
Agility: A
Mana: B
Luck: E
NP: A


Height/Weight: 186cm/74kg
Gender: Female
Likes: Destroying Izanagi's charges
Dislikes: Cowardly men, Her appearance, Japan
Attribute: Sky
Traits: Monstrous, Divine
Armament: Her Lance

Class Skills:


Magic Resistance: (A)
Protection against magical effects. Different from effects that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells of A-rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer".


Personal Skills:


Goddess Divine Core: (C)
A skill that express being a perfected goddess from birth. A composite Skill that comprises the Skill Divinity, preserves the absoluteness of the mind and the body, repels mental interference and prevents the body from changes and growth.
Lancer was one of the two deities created by the first gods. However, because she was corrupted into a monster by the dark energy of Yomi, the land of the death, her rank in this skill has been severely lowered and she is no longer a full godess, allowing her summoning as a servant.


Creator of the Land: (EX)
A unique skill given to those who not only formed a nation, but created the land on where it lay. Lancer was responsible for the creation of the islands of Japon, wich were born from her womb. Thus, along with the knowledge that allow her to instantly recognize all japanese Servants and Noble Phantasm, she can use her authority over the land that she created to manipulate it. At will, she can command the environment to modify itself by sprouting monticules of various sizes, provoking earthquakes, or even modifying the amount of mana in a given area. Coupled with her fame bonus, she would be near unstoppable if summoned in this country.


Dread Visage: (B)
The ability to strike fear into those who behold the Servant. Those who do not know Lancer's true identity perceive her as something or someone that frightens them, and weakens their attacks against her.
Upon seeing her monstrous state, Lancer's divine former husband immediatly fled in fright.


Lord of the Dead: (B)
Skil given to those with authority over the defunct. The owner of this skill gain twice as much mana as normal when consuming a soul. Furthermore, they can call on the spirit of the dead to communicate.
In japanese mythology, Lancer was the first being to die and the one that is responsible for the natural death of humans.

Noble Phantasm

Ame-no-nuboko
The Bejeweled Spear of Creation and Destruction

Anti-Army
Rank: A
Range: 10-90
Max. Target: 1000

Lancer's main weapon and what allows her to be summoned in this class. It is the bejeweled naginata given to her and her husband by the first gods Kuninotokotachi. Rather than uses it in battle, the godly couple descended from Heaven and churned the sea below with the spear. When drops of water fell from it, the mythical Onogoro Island formed itself out of the water.

As such, the primary function of this Noble Phantasm is not offensive, even if it is a mighty weapon indeed. Rather, it is a crystallisation of her creation of the islands that would form the country of Japan. By striking the ground with it, she will establish the limits of a Bounded Field that she can later activate by calling upon its true name. The inside of this Bounded Field is counted as if it is part of Japan. As such, she will recieves the boost in her abilities from the fame bonus that she would benefit from in this country and she will be able to control the environment inside using her Creator of the Land skill. As a downside, servants that would also benefit from a fame bonus in Japan recieve bonuses from it.

However, this spear also contain a darker nature. After her former husband left her to rot in Yomi, she declared that each day, she would kill one thousand of the people living in the nation they created. As such, the Bounded Field created by this Noble Phantasm does not represent [the nation thatshe created from her loving union with her other half] but rather has been corrupted into [the nation that suffer from her undying grudge]. As such, she can choose to apply her curse to those residing in it. While it won't do anything to those with enough magical energy, such as servants and masters, normal humans will suffer from an instaneous death, as if strangled by invisible hand. Their soul will be then immediatly fed to Lancer, giving her a great amount of magical energy. She can only unleash this deadly effect once a day, no matter if she killed 1000 or less people with it.


Yomi no Guntai
Wrath of the Dead Goddess

Anti-Army
Rank: B+
Range: 2-40
Max. Target: 200


When Izanagi fled at the sight of his former wife's horrific appearance, Lancer send an entire army of demons after him to keep him in yomi. This army included the eight Yomotsu-shikome and the eight Yakusa-no-ikazuchi-no-kami. They nearly caught him when he barely escaped and closed the entrance forever.

As she only released the demonic troops after Izanagi saw her new appearance, Lancer may only activate this Noble Phantasm after having removed her mask and allowing the world to see her rotting corpse of a body. Upon doing so, she will be capable of forming a maximum of sixteen portals that she can move with her mind alone. Each of them lead directly either one of the Yomotsu-shikome or one of the Yakusa-no-ikazuchi-no-kami fro Yomi. While they can't entirely leave the realm of the dead, they can interfere in the world of the living trough the newly-opened gates. In practice, it allow Lancer to unleash two types of attack.

The first is done by calling upon the power of the Yakusa-no-ikazuchi-no-kami, who are themselves minor lightning deities. They will projects devastatings lighting bolts that will struck many enemies. If all eight are called upon, they can easily destroy an army. The second is accomplished by commanding the Yomotsu-shikome, monstrous hags native to the underworld. They will pass their freakily long arm trough the portal to catch any opponent that is too close to them and pull them to Yomi. If they were the only treath, they would be relatively easy to evade, but Lancer's own assaults coupled with eventual thunder-based reinforcements allow for them to be distracted enough to be caught. Upon being grabbing, the chance of escaping are not determined by one's physical strength, but rather by one's own ability to defy fate and escape death. The victim must make a Luck check, with a bonus applied if they are known from returning from a realm of the death in their own legend. If they fail, then they are pulled into Yomi, never to be seen again. If they suceed, then not only do they escape, all of the current portals created by this Noble Phantasm will be closed and Lancer won't be able to use it anymore for the rest of the war, as a reproduction of Izanami's act of sealing the entrance to the underworld after he escaped it. As such, this potential [instantaneous death] attack won't ever be used by Lancer unless she know that her target has no chance of suceeding or she has not other choice.

Lore

Once, there existed two gods: Kuninotokotachi and Amenominakanushi. They were part of the first Divine Spirits, born from the hope and desire of ancient mankind. One day, they decided to create a land where they would be revered as the sole creators of the universe. To do so, they created two beings: Izanagi and Izanami, husband and wife, each an half of an unbreakable pair. Or at least, that was the initial plan.

And indeed, early on, it seems that all was going according to this plan. The godly couple produced trough their union the islands that formed Japan along with several divine offsprings. However, tragedy struck when their last child, Kagu-tsuchi the incarnation of fire, was born. The flame in wich he was envelopped in instantly incinerated her mother, thus making her the first being in Japan to die. Izanagi, maddened by grief, murdered the newborn and went searching for her soul.

And he found her. Her soul was residing in Yomi, where she waited for her husband to come save her. Unfortunately, she was no longer a beautiful goddess. Indeed, the act of dying, wich is contradictory to the concept of an almighty, immortal god has already allowed her Authority over the world to be lowered enough that she could be further corrupted by the dark precense of the Land of the Dead. By the time her coinjoint had arrived, she had already been completely transformed into a monstrous entity, far different from true Divine Spirit. Despite her begging him not to leave her alone in this hellish place, the "great" god Izanagi proved his cowardly nature and fled from the sight of her. Enraged, she created several evil spirits to stop from leaving, but he escaped and closed the entrance by wich he came trough, forever trapping her inside.

Personality

Lancer is a bitter woman, to say the least. She an hateful being that is motivated by one thing only: her loathing of her former husband Izanagi. She (perhaps justifiably) sees him as a selfish coward who abandoned without hesitation his other half just because of her appearance. This also has the effect of making her completely deny the existence of true love. After all, if a divine pair litteraly destined to always remain together was in the end revealed to be so shallow, then how could it possibly exist ? Her hate for Izanagi has also translated in a general loathing of his greatest creation: Japan itself. She sees its landscape as a painful remainder of her former relationship with Izanagi and the people who lives in it as hypocrites who, despite rewarding "honor" and "justice", continued to glorify the legend of this "cowardly bastard".

She is deeply ashamed of her monstrous appearance and nearly always hide it with her mask. She deeply resent that she had to show it to unleash one of her Noble Phantasm and as such, will rarely use that one despite its usefulness. Her wish for the grail is, of course, to regain her godly beauty and finally obtain her revenge against the one who wronged her and his dear people.

[RoydGolden]

So Royd, what do you think about my idea for Diogenes ? You know, the whole "Fake Berserker" thing ?
Well, aside from that, I made another servant.

It's pretty good. Might consider going with it if inspiration strikes me. Thanks!

Oh and by the way, for Izanami you accidentally listed her History section as 'Noble Phantasm'.

[Alexcoene]

It's pretty good. Might consider going with it if inspiration strikes me. Thanks!

Oh and by the way, for Izanami you accidentally listed her History section as 'Noble Phantasm'.

You're welcome!
And how the hell did I not notice that ? It's fixed now.

[Lily Emilio]

I'm pretty sure Izanami is still a goddess of very high status regardless of her pollution. And yamato gods are more OP than you think, especially the "mother of Amaterasu" - the goddess who is unaffected by the time axis.

If anything I expect her to be broken tier god and can't appear as servant normally unless you find a yandere vessel for her to show up as a pseudo-servant.

No mention of the relationship between her and Tamamo is a minus. Since Tamamo called her "

Nami

mother

".

Not enough emphasize on her yandere trait, she's the first yandere in JP mythology afterall.

And she's is quite weaksauce for a super ancient god even if you use servant as excuse, because Ishtar is quite ridiculous.

And the stuffs about ancient gods birth is quite wrong if you knew about the revelations in Extella.

But this is your fanfic, so.....ehhhh

I don't want to give any suggestions because personally I don't see her being a servant at all.

[Alexcoene]

I'm pretty sure Izanami is still a goddess of very high status regardless of her pollution. And yamato gods are more OP than you think, especially the "mother of Amaterasu" - the goddess who is unaffected by the time axis.

If anything I expect her to be broken tier god and can't appear as servant normally unless you find a yandere vessel for her to show up as a pseudo-servant.

No mention of the relationship between her and Tamamo is a minus. Since Tamamo called her "

Nami

mother

".

Not enough emphasize on her yandere trait, she's the first yandere in JP mythology afterall.

And she's is quite weaksauce for a super ancient god even if you use servant as excuse, because Ishtar is quite ridiculous.

And the stuffs about ancient gods birth is quite wrong if you knew about the revelations in Extella.

But this is your fanfic, so.....ehhhh

I don't want to give any suggestions because personally I don't see her being a servant at all.

Yeah, I tought to myself that she wouldn't be able to be summoned as a servant as I was making this sheet. However, I had already almost finished and I didn't want to waste it. After all, like you said, it's pretty much fanfic.
To be honest, I didn't really read her as a yandere in her legend. Must be because I don't care about that character archetype at all.
I didn't write anything about her relationship to Tamano because she's not Amaterasu's mother in the myth and I don't see how the two could ever have interacted since one is stuck in the Underworld.
I don't really think she's that weak compared to Ishtar, to be honest. After all, she doesn't have an anecdote of casually blowing up a mountain
Also, I'm ashamed to say that I didn't really catch up with Extella lore. Could someone fill me up on the stuff regarding the gods, please ?

[Historia]

Also, I'm ashamed to say that I didn't really catch up with Extella lore. Could someone fill me up on the stuff regarding the gods, please ?

Don't feel bad about it. There's a whole thread for it, go read up.

Ain't gonna feed it to you.

[Lily Emilio]

Yeah, I tought to myself that she wouldn't be able to be summoned as a servant as I was making this sheet. However, I had already almost finished and I didn't want to waste it. After all, like you said, it's pretty much fanfic.
To be honest, I didn't really read her as a yandere in her legend. Must be because I don't care about that character archetype at all.
I didn't write anything about her relationship to Tamano because she's not Amaterasu's mother in the myth and I don't see how the two could ever have interacted since one is stuck in the Underworld.
I don't really think she's that weak compared to Ishtar, to be honest. After all, she doesn't have an anecdote of casually blowing up a mountain
Also, I'm ashamed to say that I didn't really catch up with Extella lore. Could someone fill me up on the stuff regarding the gods, please ?

It is due to the trip to the underworld that Izanagi got mudded and gave birth to 26 gods so technically speaking Izanami is responsible for their birth. Obviously nasuverse stuffs won't be exactly 100% accurate to real legend. Tamamo referred to her parents as Nagi and Nami which is something not only you feel strange. But since it's there I felt like you should mention it to add more flavor to the character by establishing connections with canon characters.

About that Extella stuff

extella spoiler

Ancient gods are actually aliens. 14000 years ago during the 2nd age of gods they fought against the White Titan and lost. The god of war ended up became the prototype of Mars and Ares. The story of his defeat became the legend of Ares lost to Athena. The 12 gods who fought against the titan became the prototype for the 12 Olympian gods.

During certain scenes, Tamamo also dropped a few lines in the line of "The events happened tens of thousands years ago matched the account of my ancient self" implying Amaterasu existed during that era. Whether that means she's also an alien or not is unclear but it's probably the case. She also referred to "the gods" as

the gods

nature

not "divine spirits".

Find out more by playing the game or read the spoiler thread.

[Ail Don]

How is Extra considered non-canon but Extella isn't?
This is all really unnecessary and just made up to drum up more fabricated interest tbh.
inb4 Mystery is some secret alien energy source now or some shit, no wonder Vimana is a literal spaceship

[Magikewl]

Everything is canon my guy

[Lily Emilio]

How is Extra considered non-canon but Extella isn't?
This is all really unnecessary and just made up to drum up more fabricated interest tbh.
inb4 Mystery is some secret alien energy source now or some shit, no wonder Vimana is a literal spaceship

Extra has always been canon, idk what you're talking about.

[Ail Don]

FUUUUUUUUUTUUUUUUUUUUURE
Let's replace Divinity with Ayylmaoism.

[Mcjon01]

FUUUUUUUUUTUUUUUUUUUUURE
Let's replace Divinity with Ayylmaoism.

That's just Edison

[RoydGolden]

It is due to the trip to the underworld that Izanagi got mudded and gave birth to 26 gods so technically speaking Izanami is responsible for their birth. Obviously nasuverse stuffs won't be exactly 100% accurate to real legend. Tamamo referred to her parents as Nagi and Nami which is something not only you feel strange. But since it's there I felt like you should mention it to add more flavor to the character by establishing connections with canon characters.

About that Extella stuff

extella spoiler

Ancient gods are actually aliens. 14000 years ago during the 2nd age of gods they fought against the White Titan and lost. The god of war ended up became the prototype of Mars and Ares. The story of his defeat became the legend of Ares lost to Athena. The 12 gods who fought against the titan became the prototype for the 12 Olympian gods.

During certain scenes, Tamamo also dropped a few lines in the line of "The events happened tens of thousands years ago matched the account of my ancient self" implying Amaterasu existed during that era. Whether that means she's also an alien or not is unclear but it's probably the case. She also referred to "the gods" as

the gods

nature

not "divine spirits".

Find out more by playing the game or read the spoiler thread.

Not going to lie, all that sounds pretty dumb. Since when did the Nasuverse suddenly take a turn for the Sci-Fi?

Extella spoilers

I mean, the gods turning out to be aliens in disguise? What is this, Star Fate SG1? Frankly, I think stuff like that, even if canon, can easily be disregarded unless you specifically want to base your sheet off of those aspects of the lore (like I did with my Flavius Aetius).

Even if that were so that the 'gods' were actually aliens, I don't see how it's mutually exclusive with having Divinity or a similar Skill. I'm fairly sure in the Nasuverse, just being worshipped at a great enough degree effectively makes one a kind of god so one's actual origins shouldn't really matter. Admittedly, I'm not too clear on all this myself.

[Arashi_Leonhart]

Since when did the Nasuverse suddenly take a turn for the Sci-Fi?

I hate to burst your bubble...

[RoydGolden]

I hate to burst your bubble...

Fair enough. I suppose sci-fi elements have been around in the franchise since the beginning in the form of TYPES and the like. Still, those pretty much stayed in the background most of the time and you wouldn't even know they existed unless you read the expanded materials. To be honest, they were more scenery then actors driving the plot.

Having aliens actually take center stage and rampage around is definitely quite a jump from what we've seen of the Nasuverse prior. Not at all wrong to explore new things of course (otherwise the franchise would get stagnant) and maybe if I actually played Extella I'd be wowed over how amazing these new revelations are.

[Arashi_Leonhart]

The company is named after an extra-terrestrial superpower.

[Mcjon01]

To be honest, they were more scenery then actors driving the plot.

And just what do you think this Extella stuff is?