Oh god… now I'm tempted to do Lucifer just to see him done well…
Oh god… now I'm tempted to do Lucifer just to see him done well…
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I remember seeing a pretty good Lucifer sheet back on the old thread. One of his NPs was calling on meteors of light to rain from the sky representing the rebel angels who fell from heaven, I think.
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Oh, here it was.
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I've always felt a great deal of sympathy for Lucifer. I have part of the sheet finished already, so I'll post his history and one Noble Phantasm for now, just because venomking's was so bad.
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---Yeah, this is pretty alternative, but I've always liked the thought of the Devil just being misunderstood. Also, it needs a lot of formatting…
Also, I'm not a Satanist. Actually, that's one of the things that's going to be part of his personality. He gets really bent out of shape whenever someone confuses him with Satan just because they're both 'The Devil.'
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Good grief, when did I say that?! Don't put words in my mouth.
Also, wow, that other Lucifer by Erlking was impressive, though it could use a few more paragraph breaks. That's really my only criticism of it. It's really good.
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The first time I read this one I was being stupid, no change there, and read it like it would be a sheet for Satan. It was a very good sheet for Lucifer but I feel like for some of Angels and other Divine Creatures classifying them by weapon would be difficult. And as Lucifer he can't really be a Beast class Servant so either you make some kind of good reason (like this sheet did) or you invent an entirely new class to fit them into (want to leave the opportunity for genderbend Lucifer open).
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CasterTrue Name: "Der Zauberlehrling" (The Sorcerer's Apprentice)
"Say Master, can we just forget about fightin' Servants and play those 'Video Games' instead?"
Origin: Mythological
Region: Germany
Catalyst: A broom that was split in half by an axe
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Likes: Pranks, Slacking Off
Dislikes: Chores, Hard Work
Talents: Academics
Natural Enemy: Adults
Personality:
A cheeky young man who dreams of becoming a great Sorcerer just like his master. Caster has a lot of potential in Magecraft but lacks the discipline to study for long periods of time and would rather goof around and play pranks on people with his magic. Enamoured with the wonders of the modern day, his wish upon the Grail would be to be incarnated into the modern age so he can have some more fun. He is rather inexperienced when it comes to actual combat and is better suited to a support type role to a strong Master. However, he shouldn't be underestimated as despite his youth and attitude, his magical ability far outranks modern Magi and he could easily defeat an enemy Master in a one on one duel.
Parameters:
STR (D), END (C), AGI (C), MGI (A), LCK (C), NP (B)
Class Skills:
Item Creation (B)
The Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. Also, this Skill requires time to gather components and manufacture items. Caster can create and enchant tools to aid his Master in combat.
Territory Creation (C)
The Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana. Caster can modify an area into a shoddy replica of his master's Workshop. Staying in there gives his MGI stat a plus modifier.
Personal Skills:
Familiar Creation (C)
A Skill that allows the user to create a familiar and control it from a distance. Caster is able to create large numbers of small animals that are virtually indistinguishable from the real thing and have them act as his familiars. However, Caster's familiars are rather weak and ill suited for combat so he mainly just uses them for reconnaissance.
High-Speed Incantation (B)
The ability to speak magical incantations at an accelerated speed, thus reducing casting time. Caster should be capable of having this Skill at Rank A...if only he could learn to stop biting his tongue when trying to speak faster.
Mana Burst (C)
The increase in performance caused by infusing one's weapons and body with Magical Energy and instantly expelling it. Simply put, recreating the effect of a jet burst by expending large amounts of Magical Energy. This is a last ditch strategy for Caster to defend himself against enemies with the Magic Resistance Skill. Pouring his mana into his muscles, Caster gets a temporary Rank Up in his physical Parameters. Sadly this does not improve Caster's fighting ability and so all that happens is a slightly stronger kid flails his arms at an opponent.
Noble Phantasm:
Lore:
***A quick sheet I wrote up while bored one evening. Huh, I made it all the way through without making a Fantasia joke. And yet I made a "Princess and the Frog" reference instead, funny that. Anyway, I tried to breath as much life into a short poem as I could. I figured I'd make this since I haven't made a single Caster that actually uses magic so I fixed that. As usual, all comments and criticisms are welcome.
Last edited by Skull; July 1st, 2017 at 08:07 PM.
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I like it.
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The Sorcerer's Apprentice: One day, Merlin and Iskander had a baby... This was quite the funny sheet to read, it was on the whole quite well written and would make for an interesting Servant in a Grail War. I can't help but wonder what would happen to him if somehow the incompetence holding him back was removed, still trying to work out if him and Waver would get along. Now onto the criticisms, I'd like to know even a brief description of what kind of familiars he can summon, I know this must be very obnoxious of me sorry. The Noble Phantasm is, somewhat disappointingly, quite short. Each summon could have been fleshed out and it feels quite anticlimactic, ultimately he would be limited to a support role.
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That Lucifer sheet looks pretty promising, WIP or no. It helps that I'm a sucker for those 'sympathy for the devil' tragic villains...
That Noble Phantasm is pure grade-A nightmare fuel though. Just soul-stealing is bad enough, but invoking the threat of eternal hellfire is something else altogether. Still, it definitely fits his legend so I'm not complaining. I don't think the concept of "Hell" or a traditional afterlife really works in the Nasuverse seeing as it operates off of a reincarnation-based metaphysic (unless you're saying "Hell" is actually his or God's personal Reality Marble, I guess), but I suppose that's a necessary bit of artistic license for the concept of a God/Devil based Servant to work at all.
Flavor aside though, that NP is really hax. If there's no defense or resistance at all (not even a listed range) then it sounds like just invoking it is an instant-win condition for him. I get that it's effectively limited by how reluctant he is to use it, but still, this is way too powerful to be balanced in any kind of Holy Grail War. I'd strongly advise adding some limitations to it, such as having it only work on those of an "Evil" Alignment (even if in name only like Drake or Atalanta, to preserve the element of moral ambiguity), make evasion possible with a Luck check or warding it off through religious-protection based Skills such as Saint or Protection Of The Faith. Anything to make it slightly less OP...
The choice of Skills is also quite unusual and not at all what I'd imagine for a Lucifer sheet (Bravery and Guardian Knight?), but I presume they're more closely tied to his self before the fall from Heaven?
This time using a face claim, my original idea from his aparence was much more dark, but When i see this character, i had to use them
Caster:Helel ben shahar
Fc:
Str:B, End:B, Agi:A
Mna:A, lck:EX, Np:A
Aligment: chaotic/neutral
Gender:none (refered to as he)
Height: 175cm
Weight: 54kg
Place of origin: garden of eden
Armament: none(hidden dagger)
Likes: good discusions, his plans going wright, interesting people
Deslike: prideful humans, his plans going wrong, gods and demi-gods
Talents: planing, lying, writing
Natural enemies: any deity
Skills:
terrioty creation(A+): the creation of a (garden) who is superior to a temple is possible
item construction(A): capable of creating magical itens and potions of high quality, a natural ability of caster who has been around for so much time
charisma(EX): people will follow caster even against their masters, it will affect even familiars and other beings without free will
Magic resistence(A):the ability to cancel spells of A-rank, a remaining of caster's lost divinity
deceiving deity(EX):a skill of beings famous for their tricks, it can grant presence concealment(A), shapeshift(B) and alluring voice(B) but only one at time.
miracle(false)(A+): the ability to fake the impossible. despite the high level, its only effect is granting caster his first and third noble phantasm.
Noble phantasms:
Gan eden: the garden of god(anti-evil: A):
The garden of eden, a reality marble that brings forth the image of a paradise.
Granted to caster by his "miracle(false)" skill, inside the garden nobody can do damage exept those with divinity rank A or higher, Noble phantasm born from evil intentions are also sealed.
Nahash: then your eyes shall open and you shall be as god(anti-innocence:A):
The nature of caster as the serpent of eden in the form of a daggers. both snakes and daggers are symbols of betrayal, so its form is nothing weird.
It can only be used inside "Gan eden" and is incapable of doing damage, However anyone hit by its blade will be cleanse of any type of divinity or divine protection and marked with the "original sin"
Esh umain: he who does acts of creation(anti-sin: A):
The divine punishment of god in the form of lightning. Its only a copy of said power, so its rank has been lowered to A.
Its a simple noble phantasm, upon its name is relesed, dark clouds will take the skys, a strong wind will start to blow and finaly, a pilar of white lightning will strike anyone with the "mark of the first sin", but only those people and anyone else.
Lore:
Caster is Helel ben sharar, more popular know as Lucifer or the devil. He was the most beatyful and powerful of angels and the right hand of god, there are also theories that he is releated to the vęnusian gods of diferent cultures.
He was banish from heaven for rebel against god when ordered to bowl to the first human, he gather a third of the angels on the firmament and raged war, but was easy defeted.
Personality:
Well and soft-spoken, he is someone who exile charm, but also gives a sense of danger. His distracted facade hides a cunning and analytical mind.
He used to disguise itself and strike deals with humans, but is trying to end this habit nowadays
He realy dont hate humanity that much, "only the fools who put thenselfs over the others". Ironically, while hating prideful man, he is very prideful himself
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Just read the sorcerer's aprendice sheet, it was nostalgic and creative, but something releated to music whould be cool
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Wow, looks like everybody is doing Lucifer sheets all of a sudden. Still looking forward to Draconic's take though...
As for World-0's sheet... the NPs are actually pretty well-done and creative, especially how they work together. Though I wouldn't make his Charisma bypass free-will as the whole point of the Devil (of which this take on Lucifer is obviously based) is that while he can tempt people, he can't force them to do anything apart from their own will.
Last edited by RoydGolden; July 1st, 2017 at 08:05 PM.
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I should have explain better, his charisma can affect people without free will, like familiars and such
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Have to say, with all the exotic conceptual stuff we see in Fate I actually quite like the "traditional magician" vibe you gave this guy. I could totally picture him as a mage in, say, Fairy Tail or some similar magic-shonen series... The whole deal with spirit summoning and their various personalities reminds me a bit of Lucy's Celestial Spirits actually, particularly how the water one is a (to put it bluntly) bratty bitch.
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Ah, that makes far more sense. You could probably clarify it a little more in the sheet itself, though...
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I want to make a list of my sheets to put on my signature, but i dont understand how, can someone explain?
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Actuly my idea was closer to yours compendium, is this how you did?
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