Create-A-Servant 2

**SirGauoftheSquareTable** · February 27th, 2019, 01:33 AM

I still think it's functionally one chain even if it is summoned from multiple portals. Gilgamesh also refers to it as the Chain of Heaven, singular.

**cooldownnow** · February 28th, 2019, 09:00 PM

Class: Saber
Other Classes: None
True Name: Tyrfing
Alignment: Neutral
Place of Origin: Norse Mythology

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Parameters:

STR: A
END: A+
AGI: B
MGI: C
LCK: E
NP: B-A

Height: 41’’
Weight: 3.3 Ib
Likes: Fighting, Hervor
Dislikes: Dishonor, Senseless Killing
Talent: Killing
Natural Enemy: Rho Aias
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Sword
Armament: Itself
Catalyst: Its hilt

Class Skills:

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Personal Skills:

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Noble Phantasm(s):

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Lore:

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The ‘protagonist’ of the Tyrfing Cycle the sword Tyrfing brings nothing but pain to its wielders. Forged by dwarves under threat of death by the king Svafrlami they created a peerless unbreakable sword. It was to be a promised blade of victory on the level of Caliburn or even Merodach, however when the dwarves finished the work they cast a curse on the sword making it hold the death of Svafrlami and three evil deeds. And so what could have been a peerless holy blade became a demon blade bringing death to all.

First the original owner Svafrlami was killed in battle with the berserker Arngrim who gave Tyrfing to his son Angantyr who was then killed by Hjalmar in the first of the evil deeds and the sword was buried with him and his eleven brothers. This would have been the end of the short bloody history of the sword but Angantyr’s daughter Hervor claimed her father’s sword and used it to become a successful viking. Hervor was a smart woman and respected Tyrfing only unsheathing him in the most dire of moments. The two became true partners forming a bond much like that between a rider and their beloved horse.

Unfortunately the partnership was not to last as Hervor gifted the sword to her son Heidrek as he had been banished by his father. Unlike Hervor Heidrek loved the death the sword brought killing his own brother as his first act upon drawing the sword fulfilling the second evil deed. He then began a to cut a bloody swarth through the Gothic kingdom betraying as many people as he needed to in order to feed his lust for power. The sword Tyrfing tiring of the constant honerless death and missing the days of Hervor brought about all of its will to bring the last evil deed upon Heidrek having him slain by his own thralls. Heidrek’s son Angantyr and used Tyrfing with less dishonor than his father but still Tyrfing grew tired of the constant battles. So when Angantyr brought Tyrfing out in a final battle between his half brother Hlod amidst the slaughter that died the ricers red and filled valleys with dead men and horses Tyrfing broke off its own blade and had it fall into the river becoming lost forever.

Personality:

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Creator Notes: I was reading up on the Tyrfing Cycle and thought there could be a cool servant there but then I realized how cool it would be if there was a servant that wasn’t actually a heroic spirit but rather the sword many heroic spirits wielded. I imagine an alternate Fate Stay Night where Shirou uses Tyrfing and bonds with it deeply to the point Tyrfing almost becomes sentient just in time for a tearful goodbye. The losing its blade thing is something I came up with because I just thought that it sounded pretty cool and tragic in a very nasuverse type way.

**RoydGolden** · February 28th, 2019, 09:31 PM

Tyrfing: Interesting idea, but I'm a little spoiled by how the winning entry of the first Servant contest used roughly the same concept of a Servant Tyrfing that possesses/uses its wielders, only executed with much more flavor and detail. No offense, but your take seems a lot more generic by comparison.

Also, while I like how you tried to go for a more tragic/sympathetic take on Tyrfing, I'm curious how you reconcile it being (in the myths) a cursed sword that revels in slaughter with its stated dislike of dishonorable killing. You could've done something interesting with it, like having Tyrfing be traumatized by the violence and deaths its curse wrought, but instead you don't really address that duality at all. Instead, Tyrfing just comes off as a generic "honorable living weapon" sort of character, which doesn't really fit its depiction in the myths at all IMO.

Also, on a more technical note I'm curious what the justification for Tyrfing's EX-ranked Endurance is. Was the sword ever described in the myths as being indestructible like Durandal?

**King of Padoru** · February 28th, 2019, 10:14 PM

Inari no Ōkami
Class: Caster
Identity: Inari no Ōkami
Gender: Female
Source: Shinto mythology
Origin: Japan
Alignment: Neutral Good
Height: 151 cm
Weight: 38 kg
Theme: Bushido by KarmawiN

Parameters:
Strength: D
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Mana: A++
Luck: EX
NP: C

Skills

Noble Phantasm

Character

Personal data

Finally got to remake this sheet. I think she really needed and deserved it.

**cooldownnow** · February 28th, 2019, 10:22 PM

I sort of figured that it wasn't Tyrfing causing the slaughter but rather the greed of those around him. Like it wasn't the sword that caused Heidrik to be such a jerk. Similar to the ring in the Ring Cycle while you can say the ring was cursed it was the man's own lust for power that caused the conflict. As for the EX endurance I sort of made a mistake and assumed that part of the legend of it was it being unbreakable but it's only that its unrustable and can cut through anything. I guess I'll change it to just being A+ ranked.

Also I just read the Tryfing sheet for the Create a Servant contest and hot damn yeah that's leagues above what I made. Although I feel we went in different directions with the idea of a living weapon servant theirs being more a malevolent exception that couldn't exist normally while mine is more of a traditional servant of sorts.

**RoydGolden** · February 28th, 2019, 10:57 PM

Originally Posted by cooldownnow

I sort of figured that it wasn't Tyrfing causing the slaughter but rather the greed of those around him. Like it wasn't the sword that caused Heidrik to be such a jerk. Similar to the ring in the Ring Cycle while you can say the ring was cursed it was the man's own lust for power that caused the conflict. As for the EX endurance I sort of made a mistake and assumed that part of the legend of it was it being unbreakable but it's only that its unrustable and can cut through anything. I guess I'll change it to just being A+ ranked.

I guess that's fair enough. It's just that the History section you wrote very much implies it was a literal curse. And personally, I feel Tyrfing's personality would be more interesting if the sword was literally cursed, but at the same time hated itself for the death and destruction it brought. But that's just my take. This is your sheet so obviously you're free to go with what you think fits best.

**Shiki-pon** · March 3rd, 2019, 02:27 PM

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Alternate Classes: Berserker, Avenger
True Name: Goujian
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Origin: China (5th century BCE)
Armament: Sword

Parameters:
STR: B+
END: A
AGI: B
MANA: D
LUCK: B
NP: B

Skills

Class Skills

Magic Resistance - Rank C: Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

Riding - Rank C: A Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding.
Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts.

Personal Skills

Unyielding Will - Rank B: A Skill that represents one's extremely firm will that never yields to any sort of agony, despair or circumstances.
Saber possesses the ability to stand against hardships, affording him some resistance against physical and mental damage. Having subjected himself to pain and discomfort for each moment of his ten years of preparation, Saber can shrug off all sorts of damage.

Mental Pollution - Rank B: A Skill where due to possessing a distorted mentality, it is possible for one to shut out any mental interference thaumaturgy. However, at the same time, it becomes impossible for one to come to a mutual understanding with individuals who do not possess an equivalent rank of Mental Pollution.
Provides a high probability that mental interference magecraft will be rendered ineffective.

Eye of the Mind (True) - Rank C+: A heightened capacity for observation, refined through training, discipline and experience. A danger-avoidance ability that utilizes the intelligence collected up to the current time as the basis in order to predict the opponent’s activity and change the current situation. This is not a result of talent, but an overwhelming amount of combat experience. A weapon wielded by none other than a mortal, gained through tenacious training. So long there is even a 1% chance of a comeback, this ability greatly improves the chances of winning.
Though originally Saber’s intensive training was for the sake of fighting one person, the experience gained from steadfast practice and the battles he fought in preparation can be applied to fighting in general.

Noble Phantasms

Blade Untouched by Time

Yuè Wáng Gōujiàn Jiàn

Anti-Unit, Rank C+

A blade of Saber’s own crafting, serving as his primary Noble Phantasm. Astonishingly, the sword still exists in the present day, and has remained untarnished by the passing of millennia. This is commonly attributed to the airtight fit the sword has with its sheath. Yuè Wáng Gōujiàn Jiàn possesses an unfading edge and is all but immune to most forms of damage.
However, the true Noble Phantasm is not the blade, but rather its scabbard. The near-vacuum conditions caused by the sword’s sheathing can be called to manifest at will now that Saber has manifested as a Servant. When the Noble Phantasm is activated, the interior of the scabbard begins to draw in air at great speeds, sucking everything before Saber towards him. Saber can then strike his targets at will as they enter his range, with their momentum towards him increasing the damage of his strikes.
The suction created by Yuè Wáng Gōujiàn Jiàn only ends when an object blocks the sheath’s opening or Saber re-sheaths his sword.

Blade for the Sake of Resentment

Wòxīn-Chángdan

Anti-Unit, Rank B

A sword technique developed for the sake of revenge. Over his ten years of preparation, Saber trained for the day of his vengeance, obsessively thinking of how he would strike down his hated foe. This preparation gave birth to a technique that would allow him to flawlessly defeat his enemy.
In order to use Wòxīn-Chángdan, Saber and his target must both fulfill a set of prerequisite actions. Each of them must dodge the other’s strike, block another and connect with an attack. Once all conditions have been met, Saber will possess sufficient understanding of his and his foe’s respective abilities to launch his attack. Functioning as a release of ‘stored’ strikes, namely the finishing blows of his ten years of training, the determination born of Saber’s hatred allows him to unleash a selection of these strikes as a flawless combination of attacks. Due to the understanding attained by fulfilling Wòxīn-Chángdan’s requirements, it is almost impossible for an ordinary target to resist the attacks.
Due to the identity of the target of Saber’s hatred, Wòxīn-Chángdan deals additional damage against Lancers and users of polearms in general.

Description

Likes: Being direct, thoroughness
Dislikes: Loss, servitude
Talents: Patience, dedication to a goal
Natural Enemy: Fuchai

Saber’s true identity is Goujian, the Vengeful King of Yue.

Goujian is a person that could be spoken of as a sword, carefully forged and tempered over a decade. He is direct and to the point, and his words often come off as harsh. Stoic and proud, Goujian is the epitome of a warrior king. He is task-oriented and takes to the pursuit of the Holy Grail with a stubborn determination, focusing on the task with all he has. As such, he has little in the way of pity or qualms when it comes to winning a war.
Due to his obsession in life, Goujian is a person destined to remain ‘alone’. His dedication to overcome his rival Fuchai and constant reminding of the bitterness of defeat and servitude have rendered him into a hateful person, unable to share wealth or joy with others. However, Goujian did eventually become aware of this as his wife had left him after his triumph, stating that he had become able to only “share woe” with others. However, due to the habits developed over the years of harboring his grudge, he is not entirely sure how he should go about changing himself. Or whether changing himself is even possible anymore. As Goujian is a person with a boundless belief in his own ability to succeed, the thought of this bothers him deeply.
When dealing with other Heroic Spirits, Goujian remains distant and formal in almost all situations. Depending on another’s social rank, he will treat them as either a subject, an equal or an enemy. The latter category is almost entirely composed of those with no respect toward lawful authority as well as those who dare to think themselves above him. Due to his views, Goujian’s relationship with other Heroic Spirits is likely to be negative.
Goujian will never truly accept another as his Master, seeing himself as a king and his Master as a subject. Despite his harsh nature, he will generally treat his Master fairly. However, thanks to his willpower and stubborn nature, it can be difficult for a Master to truly control him as a Servant. In addition, due to his hatred of servitude and talent for vengeance, using a Command Spell to compel him into taking an action will result in inevitable betrayal from Goujian’s part.
Goujian’s wish to the Holy Grail is surprisingly sincere, given the kind of man he was in life. He wishes to undo the negative relationship between the kingdoms of Yue and Wu. Though he anguishes at the thought of negating his great victory over Fuchai, the heroic nature that lies at the core of his incarnation as a Saber urges him to think of the losses that could be avoided were the years of conflict never to occur.

Lore

Goujian’s life is intrinsically tied to the history and warfare between the kingdoms of Yue and Wu.
The war began when a Yue princess, who was married to one of the princes of the neighboring state of Wu, left her husband and fled back to the State of Yue. This became the spark for the war to come. Also, as King Yunchang, Goujian’s father, developed Yue's strength, he came into conflict with King Helü of Wu, causing a feud between the two states.
Upon the death of Yunchang and the accession of Goujian, Helü seized the opportunity and launched an attack on Yue. At the Battle of Zuili, however, Yue defeated Wu, and King Helü was mortally wounded. Before his death, he instructed his son, the later King Fuchai of Wu, "Never forget Yue!" Yue would be defeated three years later by a resurgent Wu, and Goujian captured, to serve as Fuchai's servant for three years before he was eventually allowed to return to his native state.
Upon resuming his rule, King Goujian quickly appointed skilled politicians as advisors, such as Wen Zhong and Fan Li, to help build up the kingdom. During this time, his ministers also worked to weaken the State of Wu internally through bribes and diplomatic intrigue.
Whilst ruling his kingdom, Goujian never relished kingly riches, but instead ate food suited for peasants, as well as forcing himself to taste bile, in order to remember his humiliations while serving under the State of Wu. The second half of a Chinese idiom, wòxīn-chángdan ("sleeping on sticks and tasting gall"), refers to Goujian's perseverance.
After ten years of economic and political reforms, the last phase of the war began, by which time the State of Yue had come a long way from its previous defeat; as described in the Shiji: ‘Ten years of reforms; the state is rich, the warriors well-rewarded. The soldiers charge in the face of arrows like thirsty men heading for drink…’
Taking advantage of Fuchai's expedition to his north to defeat Qi, Goujian led his army and successfully attacked the Wu capital, killing the Wu crown prince, You. In the 24th year of his reign, Goujian led another expedition against Wu, laying siege to the capital for three years before it fell. When a surrender from Fuchai was refused, Fuchai committed suicide and Wu was annexed by Yue. After his victory, Goujian ruthlessly killed Fuchai's scholars, even those who helped him (including Bo Pi), not allowing himself to make the same mistake Fuchai had made by sparing the lives of his enemies. However, Goujian would not stop there; he would later force Wen Zhong to commit suicide; Fan Li, knowing that Goujian was a man who can share woe but not wealth together, left Goujian after the defeat of Wu.

Notes

**Skull** · March 3rd, 2019, 02:50 PM

Mmm... I always love me a good China servant. <3

Though I am surprised given the focus on revenge, you didn't go all the way and just make him an Avenger instead of just mentioning it as a possible alternate Class.

**Shiki-pon** · March 3rd, 2019, 02:59 PM

Originally Posted by Skull

Mmm... I always love me a good China servant. <3

Though I am surprised given the focus on revenge, you didn't go all the way and just make him an Avenger instead of just mentioning it as a possible alternate Class.

Thanks to how much of his tale is based on revenge, he'd be pretty focused on that no matter his incarnation. Its just that as a Saber, that stuff is at its lowest (which speaks volumes of what he'd be like as an Avenger).

**Skull** · March 4th, 2019, 11:41 AM

Been suffering with writer's block these past few weeks so I haven't posted much. This is a quick and dirty sheet done in a few hours just to get those creative juices flowing. As usual, all comments and criticisms are welcome.

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The Greatest Caster from the Isle of Britain

"To be a "King" is to protect and to protect is to never betray. Neighbours, friends, family - so long as we live in harmony and don't betray one another we have a bond that can never be broken... Yes, that goes for you too Master. You are apart of my family now as well."

True Name: Math fab Mathonwy
Epithet: "The Wizard King of Gwynedd"
Origin: Mythological
Region: Britain (Mabinogi Cycle)
Hidden Attribute: Heaven
Alignment: Lawful Good
Likes: Family, Long Walks
Dislikes: Betrayal, Curses
Talents: Sorcery, Teaching
Natural Enemy: Trickster Gods

Parameters:
STG (C), END (D), AGI (B), MGI (A), LCK (B), NP (A)

Appearance:

Personality:

True to his name ("Math/Goodness"), Math fab Mathonwy is a kind person often acting as a paternal figure to everyone under him. But make no mistake, he is a dangerous man to cross, having built up his kingdom upon the belief that the "Sovereign's Invisible Hand" keeps sinners in check and so he created a code of honour amongst his people and those that broke the law would be punished harshly. He viewed all his subjects as his extended family and strove to treat them all fairly, going so far as to personally punish his own nephews when one committed rape and the other treason. Despite having taken lives in order to protect many more, Math does not enjoy conflict and does not begrudge any of his enemies whether in life or in a Holy Grail War for doing what they must to end battle - so long as it is within an honourable code of conduct, humans caught in the clash of Noble Phantasms is a sad reality but deliberately targeting humans for self gain is something Math absolutely will not tolerate.

Despite Math's attempts at maintaining a stoic composure, it can be hard for a potential Master to take him seriously thanks to the Geas placed on him that results in him talking completely deadpan as he uses every method available to avoid touching the ground - from perching on lampposts to hanging from tree branches. Should he mistakenly stand on the ground, the geas will take effect in the form of black miasma rising from under his feet, rising and swirling around his legs. As long as he breaks contact with the ground before it reaches his heart then he will escape with only a feeling of nausea and a temporary debuff to his parameters. Thankfully this curse is suspended for the duration of direct combat with an enemy. It is for this reason that despite disliking conflict, he does feel a small sense of relief when he sees an enemy as it means he'll be able to forget the worries of his curse for a little while.

His Wish upon the Holy Grail? Obviously to get rid of that blasted Geas that persists even as a Servant, believing he's paid his dues that caused him to receive it in the first place. Just once, he wanted to go on a long walk on the bare ground alongside his beloved wife Goewin.

Skills:

Class Skills

Divinity - (C)
The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. Those who have A Rank Divinity or above have reached the Throne of Gods. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig. Originally a Divine Spirit, Math would normally have this Skill at the highest Rank but the displacement of the old gods with Christianity has recast him as a mere human hero in later legends which has caused a decrease in several Skills but allowed him to be summoned as a normal Heroic Spirit unassisted.

Item Construction - (B)
It is the Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. However, this Skill requires time to gather components and manufacture items. Math was fond of creating several magical items for his personal use and can construct various tools for a variety of uses - from Mystic Codes to strengthen his Master's capabilities or charms to defend against surprise Servant attacks to even laying traps if an Assassin tries to sneak into their base.

Territory Creation - (C)
It is the Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana. However, because it seems that his personality is not suited for it, the most Math can do is create an efficient Workshop to collect and store mana.

Personal Skills

Charisma - (A)
A composite Skill consisting of a person's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. Being the much beloved King of Gwynedd and reigning over both humans and Gods, Math's name was known throughout the land and was respected even by his enemies. As a result, allies he fights with in battle gain a moderate boost to their abilities.

High-Speed Divine Words - (B)
A Skill that assists with magical incantations via a power to activate Thaumaturgy without the use of Magic Circuits. The language of the Age of Gods, back when words played a heavy role in spellcasting - The ability to speak magical incantations at an accelerated speed, it is particularly useful for direct attack magic. By using a language from the Age of Gods, High-Thaumaturgy can be cast at the speed of Single-Action spells, however the Rank has decreased from what it would have been had Math been summoned as a Divine Spirit instead.

Mana Burst - (B)
The increase in performance caused by infusing one's weapons and body with Magical Energy and instantly expelling it. Simply put, recreating the effect of a jet burst by expending large amounts of Magical Energy. While not normally a frontline fighter, Math does employ this technique in his legs to increase his agility back to what it used to be in the prime of his life which is reflected in his current Parameters. This allows him to move quickly about the battlefield to evade the likes of the Knight Classes.

Noble Phantasm:

Lore:

The much loved King of Gwynedd. Though a certain "incident" in his youth led to a geas being placed on him that he could not live on the ground except if he was in battle or he kept his feet on the lap of a virgin. As such he had a special "foot-holder" ready at all times named Goewin who was the fairest maiden in all the land. However everything changed when his nephew Gilfaethwy fell in love with her at first sight, prompting his brother Gwydion to fake a decleration of war between Math's kingdom and the neighbouring one. Math had no choice but to go to battle and whilst he was away, Gilfaethwy raped Goewin in the King's bed. After the death of the enemy king, Math returned home but something was off. Everyone was oddly nervous about something and when he tried to rest his feet on Goewin's lap he immediately felt the geas sapping his strength and so he leap away and Goewin tearfully explained what had happened which was now common knowledge spread in whispered tones throughout the kingdom. Realising that everything had been a ruse by his nephews, Math was enraged and ashamed of himself, he swore that Goewin would now be his wife and Queen to make up for her shame and that the culprits would be punished. Gwydion and Gilfaethwy stayed as far away from the King as they could, but eventually they had no choice but to return after Math forbade anyone from giving them food or water...

Math: "Have the sinners come to accept their punishment?"
Gwydion: "M-my lord! We beg your forgiveness. It was a moment of weakness, we'll never do it again!"
Math: "Three."
Gwydion: "Huh?"
Math: "You say it was a "moment", but your little plan involved three acts of betrayal. You lied to me about there being a decleration of war, you defiled an innocent woman for the sake of your own lust and finally countless good men on both sides died...AND FOR WHAT!? Death? no, that would be too merciful for you two."

Before they had a chance to react, Math descended upon them and struck down Gilfaethwy with his staff. Gwydion tried to escape but Math was already behind him and knocked him out as well. When the brothers awoke, they found they had been transformed into a pair of deer - one male and one female. Math told them that as an added bonus, they could only mate with each other. Math then casted them out in the wild, though had a man keep an eye on them so that whenever they produced an offspring the infant animal would be taken back to Math who would turn it into a human baby and give it to a childless family to be lovingly raised.

After several years pass, Math decides to release the brothers from their punishment though they would still be stripped of their princely status. It was then that Math revealed that he was still in search of a virgin to be his Foot-Holder and in an effort to ingratiate himself to the king, Gwydion suggested his sister Arianrhod as a candidate. Math interviewed his young niece and she claimed that she was indeed a virgin. Math then produced a magic wand and laid it upon the ground before asking Arianrhod to please step over it to prove her claim. Arianrhod reluctantly does so and immediately gives birth to a baby boy. Ashamed, Arianrhod runs out of the castle but as she passes through the door a lump of flesh fell from between her legs and whilst everyone else was distracted by the newborn baby, Gwydion grabbed the lump of flesh and took it home with him and placed it in a chest. Some time later he heard crying from the chest and upon opening it, discovers a second child.

Years pass by and Gwydion reappears before the aging king Math, bringing the child - now a young man named "Lleu" - with him. Math has heard tales of the various adventures the pair have had and asks what brings them to him. Gwydion explains that he had tried to give Lleu to his mother Arianrhod, but she had placed three different geas upon the boy - that he could not be given a name, given weapons nor have a human wife. Gwydion had found ways around the first two, but the final geas has him stumped so he came to beg for Math's help. Moved that Gwydion had turned over a new leaf and was finally working to help others, Math decided he would solve the problem and walked outside into the palace garden and using his magic staff, he summoned up the flowers of the oak, broom and meadowsweet and combined them together into a human shape before breathing life into it, creating the woman Blodeuwedd "Flower-Faced" who would be Lleu's wife because she was not of human born. Lleu then went on to have several more adventures, winning over the hearts of the people so that when it came to end of Math's life he chose Lleu to succeed him as King of Gwynedd.

Relationships:

Creator's Notes:

**SirGauoftheSquareTable** · March 4th, 2019, 01:33 PM

For a rush job, this isn't so bad at all.

**King of Padoru** · March 4th, 2019, 03:35 PM

Ares
Class: Berserker
Identity: Ares
Gender: Male
Source: Greek mythology
Origin: Greece
Alignment: Chaotic Insane
Height: 259 cm
Weight: 458 kg
Theme: Greek Battle Music - Ares by Derek & Brandon Fiechter

Parameters:
Strength: A+
Endurance: A+
Agility: A
Mana: A
Luck: D
NP: A++

Skills

Noble Phantasm

Character

Personal data

Very far from my best work, I know.

**RoydGolden** · March 4th, 2019, 04:07 PM

Ares: Interesting, if simple, sheet. Not sure how well Bravery fits Ares though given he was described as running away from battle several times in the myths, but I can see you wanted a second Personal Skill since just giving him Embodiment Of War would be too one-note. Out of curiosity, how do you see him interacting with my Otrera?

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Also, FYI, that faceclaim isn't showing up properly for me.

**King of Padoru** · March 4th, 2019, 06:26 PM

I knew I should have gone with Disengage instead of Bravery. About Otrera, I'm sure he'd feel very comfortable with her, since she's very similar to his non-mad self and he really likes the Amazons.

The FC appears in my computer, but not in my phone for some reason. I'll change it for a better one

**RoydGolden** · March 4th, 2019, 06:42 PM

Originally Posted by King of Padoru

I knew I should have gone with Disengage instead of Bravery. About Otrera, I'm sure he'd feel very comfortable with her, since she's very similar to his non-mad self and he really likes the Amazons.

The FC appears in my computer, but not in my phone for some reason. I'll change it for a better one

For my part, I kind of imagine a meeting between Otrera and Ares as like Ban and Meliodas reuniting in Nanatsu No Taizai.

The two just immediately start throwing punches at each other and laughing like maniacs. Everyone around them freaks out, but it turns out that's just their foreplay.

**King of Padoru** · March 4th, 2019, 07:13 PM

Well, I said Ares would feel comfortable, and what would be the most comfortable situation for a god of war, if it's not a fight?

BTW, as much as I hate begging, do you have any comments on my re-made Inari?

**Historia** · March 6th, 2019, 03:46 AM

Originally Posted by King of Padoru

BTW, as much as I hate begging, do you have any comments on my re-made Inari?

Either hate it and don't do it, or embrace it and just simply ask "Comment on my thing, I would like feedback".

**Spartacus** · March 7th, 2019, 05:35 PM

Well if criticism is alright with you, her NP is not very exciting.
Maybe it's thematically fitting for her, but I think the effect can be a little bit spiced more to distinguish herself with other area healing NP?

**King of Padoru** · March 7th, 2019, 06:04 PM

Yeah, I have to admit it's pretty bland, but I couldn't think of anything much better than that. I didn't want a temple NP, but I wanted a NP representing her role as a goddess of rice and of prosperity, hence its effects

**Spartacus** · March 7th, 2019, 06:10 PM

mmm... giving suggestion for effect is not really my style of helping, but maybe, try to add something based of the 'transform into a bird' part or the rice itself has an effect.

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Don't change it if you think its already perfect tho, I don't want to influence people

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