Fate/Apocrypha Translation (no spoilers)

[castor212]

I dunno about that, I'm just the image editor. Literally been begging for translation. I take what I can get.

Anyway, any complain on the format?

[Megas]

Nope, it looks better now.

[castor212]

So, you guys okay with this format and writings and whatnot in the pic for the rest of illustration?

[Mcjon01]

I would have rendered that first line in Archer's bio as "Heroic Spirit of the bow summoned by Fiore."

I don't even know what the original Japanese is, that's how I would have done it.

[castor212]

I would have rendered that first line in Archer's bio as "Heroic Spirit of the bow summoned by Fiore."

I don't even know what the original Japanese is, that's how I would have done it.

Original:
http://imgur.com/RSYNf76

[Mcjon01]

Yeah, I was lying, I knew exactly what the Japanese said from looking at the translation.

[castor212]

Yeah, I was lying, I knew exactly what the Japanese said from looking at the translation.

Do I need to capitalize the bow in Heroic Spirit of the bow?

[Mcjon01]

I don't, but I'm not the boss of you. I'm just against capital abuse.

[castor212]

I don't, but I'm not the boss of you. I'm just against capital abuse.

Aye, then.

[Mcjon01]

Oh, you should probably go with "contracted with" instead of "summoned by", though. Since that is what it says. Usually I just truncate it to "summoned by" when they write it out as "summoned by and contracted to" since it's kind of redundant, but since it's just the one verb here there's no reason not to be accurate.

[castor212]

Oh, you should probably go with "contracted with" instead of "summoned by", though. Since that is what it says. Usually I just truncate it to "summoned by" when they write it out as "summoned by and contracted to" since it's kind of redundant, but since it's just the one verb here there's no reason not to be accurate.

Actually, could you do this for this the rest of colored illust? THey take higher priotity than profile pages.

It it isnt too much.

[Mcjon01]

Since I'm pretty sure the lines on the colored pages are quotes from the story I figure it's probably best to just let Canon get to those scenes in his translation and then use whatever he comes up with. For consistency.

[castor212]

Hmm I see.

This is what I get from friend's translation for volume 01. Can anyone get it checked for consistency with Canon's?

"Time for your execution. I'll give an imitation like you the most fitting end, Saber of Black-!"
The Saber of Red raised her oddly shaped sword overhead.
It was clear to anyone who saw it that it was a killing blow, and that strike-

and



There was repeated clanging which sounded like an empty drum can being kicked away, as the stablised truck started to move off. While feeling the vibrations, Ruler stared out as the scenery of Bucharest flashed past her eyes.

[Mcjon01]

Well, this is Canon's Apocrypha translation thread where he posts all his Apocrypha translations, so. I can think of one way you can figure out what his translation says.

[castor212]

Well, this is Canon's Apocrypha translation thread where he posts all his Apocrypha translations, so. I can think of one way you can figure out what his translation says.

......Okay, I feel dumb.

[castor212]

Done. What do you think? If no complain, I will use the same template for the rest of the volume.

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[aldeayeah]

What do you guys think of this

Ditch paragraphs and increase font size as much as possible, it's pretty tiny now. Also, use a font more similar to the original text, like Microsoft Sans Serif or something like that. Try to have the same font size as the original text. That's all.

I'd also use a more bookish rather than manga-ish font in the illustrations, but maybe that's just me. I'm partial to italic Cambria for quotes myself.

[castor212]

Ditch paragraphs and increase font size as much as possible, it's pretty tiny now. Also, use a font more similar to the original text, like Microsoft Sans Serif or something like that. Try to have the same font size as the original text. That's all.

I'd also use a more bookish rather than manga-ish font in the illustrations, but maybe that's just me. I'm partial to italic Cambria for quotes myself.

Font is already as big as the Jap font though. If I made it bigger, I'm afraid it'll take too much space, as the letter count in Jap is shorter than in Eng.

[castor212]

Comparison between font. Vote which looks better, folks.

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EDIT: Also, I take the translation from this forum by CanonRap, but should I use Saber of Xxx instead of Xxx Saber?

[SINIB]

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