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You can't make wholy originals characters into servants. That's one of the cardinal rules of this thread and so I refuse to review this sheet.
Y'all need some avatars. I feel like I'm seeing the same person over and over again.
Your wish is granted!
And as a free bonus, a new servant!
Class: Caster
True Name: The Beast
Alignment: Neutral Good
Likes: Gardening, Being Praised
Dislikes: His current appearance, Fairies
Personality: Despite his monstrous looks, Caster is a really gentle person. He always acts polite and respectful to anyone he met, and will happily lend his help to innocents. He is greatly bothered by his appearance, wich prevent any potential socialising with anyone that is not his master. He is very proud of his gardening talent, and while he will not outright brag about it, he will be very pleased when someone compliment his creations.
While he found love at the end of his tale, the fact that he was summoned in his cursed form means that he has almost no memory of this experience. As such, he sees his summoning as a new chance of finding it and lifting his curse. For him, the perfect partner would be a humble person as kind-hearted as he his and who hold a great interest in biology. He does not hold much importance to their personal appearance as he know that true beauty come from the heart.
He's in the right
Stats-
Strength- E
Endurance- E
Agility- C
Mana- A
Luck- C
NP- A++
Class Skills-
Territory Creation- B
The ability to create advantageous to one's capacity as a magus. Caster can create a "garden" equal to a workshop.
Item Construction- B
The ability to create magical objects. Caster is specialised in the growing and caring of magical plants. Caster know how to create miraculous medecinal plants, deafening mandrakes, various types of ravenous carnivorous flowers capable of challenging servants, and other botanical wonders.
Personals Skills-
Botanism- A
The knowledge of all kind of plants, magical or mundane. Caster will be able to imediatly identify any servants or Noble Phantasm related to plants. Caster was a great botanist that held great pride in his works.
Monstrous Strength- D
The servant is able to tap their monstrous heritage to rank-up their Strength for a period of time determined by their rank in this skill. While Caster was cursed into changing into a monstrous beast, his gentle nature and his dislike of this form limit his rank in this skill.
Terrorising Appearance- B
The ability to instill great fear despite the posseser of this skill's actions or behavior. Any person that sees him will be instilled by a feeling of fear and revulsion. Despite Caster's kindness and richness of his soul, his future wife was still terrified of him until his near-death.
Golden Rule- C
The ability to aquire large amounts of wealth in little time. Even after his fall from grace, Caster was immensely rich.
Noble Phantasm-
La Rose de La Belle~ Precious Plant of Punishment
(Anti-Unit, A) In life, Caster's work whose he was the most proud of was a red rose. It possessed no magical effects, but was more beautiful than any other flowers in history. Even legendary plants created by the gods themselves could barely rivalise with it. One day, a merchant wandered near his castle and was invited him. The guest then saw the flower and was immensely amazed by it's beauty. He decided to take it so that he could offer it to his youngest daughter. Caster found out, and punished him for taking advantage of his hospitality. The wannabe thief was tasked to bring his daughter to him. As a servant, Caster can now create replicas of his flower wich are imbibed with the concept of "punishment by imprisonlmen". When a rule determined at the creation of each flower is broken, Caster may choose to transform the corresponding flower into a vegetable cage to catch the offending party. The transformation is near instantanuous and only those who possesses high agility coupled with a skill like Instinct or Eyes of The Mind may dodge before getting caught. Once in the cage, it is nearly to escape from it even by servants with A-rank strength. While by default, the condition for activating this ability is "someone touches the flower", Caster is able to choose another that affect an area around the plant at the maximum size of a person, like for exemple "someone enter by the window" or "the person carrying the flower is attacked".
However, while the cage serves as an inescapable prison until Caster either chose to dispell it or is killed, due to the fact that Caster's beautiful prisoner was treated the most humanly possible, it is impossible for the prisoner to be hurt by anything while they are inside it. Due to that, it can also be used as a perfect shield to protect Caster's allies, tough they will be unable to do anything while it is active and Caster can not use this Noble Phantasm to "imprison" himself. It may also be used for offensive purpose by surrounding the cage with Caster's deadlier creations before dispelling it.
Malediction de la Bête~ Outer Monster, Inner Beauty
(Anti-Self, A++) Originally, Caster was a prince possessing both spectacular beauty and supernatural talent in the caring of plants. His fame was so great that he was said to be greater than even fairies in both of those categories, a claim that he eagerly accepted. And yet magical beings rarely look kindly at these kinds of boast. Just after he finished his famous rose, a real fairy appeared before him. She punished the arrogant human by transforming him into a dreadful beast, robbing him of his beauty and scaring all of his servants into fleeing. To further twist the knife, she established that he would regain his beauty only when he would fall in mutual love with another person. While a servant would normally appear as they were during their prime in life, Caster's cursed appearance is so famous that he will always appear under this form when summoned.
However, as the fairy said, when Caster fall in love and is loved in return, his appearance will go back to his handsome human form. His Monstrous Strength and Terrifying Appearance skills will be sealed, but he will gain Charisma and Grace of God at A-rank. Furthermore, the fairy magic sustaining his cursed form will be converted into raising his Territory Creation to A-rank and his Object Construction's rank to EX, allowing to recreate any legendary plant mentionned in myth and legends that each function as a individual Noble Phantasm. It should be noted that while Caster know that finding love will allow him to return to his former beauty, he does not known about his boosted magical abilities in this form and will be pleasantly suprised when he discover them.
Interesting pick for a Servant. His second NP seems like good material for a fanfic HGW. His NPs seem kind of really high ranked, but meh, his skillset and stats aren't particularly powerful so it's ok.
I'm curious as to whether we'll ever see any classic fairy tale figures in canon tbh.
Needs more physical Casters. And werewolves.
Appearance
Class: Caster
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Origin: Historical
Region: Belarus
Parameters
Strength: C
Endurance: C
Agility: C
Mana: A
Luck: B+
NP: B
Class Skills:
Territory Creation: A
Capable of creating a "castle", superior to a workshop.
The castle can be massive in size, even reaching the size of a small town, sometimes even becoming larger then the space it takes. Within the temple the cost of all Caster's spells are 1/3 their usual cost, and mana regeneration is doubled. Caster is able to track all intruders within their temple.
Item Creation: D
Caster is only proficient in creating minor Mystic Codes that are directly related to witchcraft.
Caster is capable of crafting simple Mystic Codes without much difficulty, and they will be of good quality. They will still most likely be limited in effect.
Personal Skills:
Born in a Shirt: (A)
The Russian phrase родился в рубашке ('born in a shirt') refers to caul birth (as in the thin membrane that sometimes persists over a baby's face post-utero) and figuratively means "born lucky". It is often applied to someone who is oblivious to a pending disaster that is avoided only through luck as if the birth caul persists as supernatural armor (Ivan the Fool would be another case of caul birth). Allegedly born from his mother's sorcery or by a snake with no natural father, the wise man overseeing Caster's birth told his mother to bind the caul to him to wear as an armor his entire life. A more supernatural take on the caul myth is that the child born will have an affinity for witchcraft and the possibility of becoming a werewolf.
Thus, as a passive skill Caster's Luck is always ranked up by two. Activated when Caster covers his face with anything, he's afforded limited vision into the future. He will, however, be blind in doing so.
Disengage: (B)
During Caster's reign, a whole parcel of Kievan princes were busy squabbling amongst themselves and angling for supremacy, a bigger piece of land, and popularity among the people, which was a darn shame since the Tartars were lurking on the borders looking for a good rape and pillage. After a sound thrashing by the Cuman-Kipchak tribes, a revolt against Grand Prince Iziaslav Yaroslavich of Kiev erupted in 1068, tired of his failure at rebuking the Mongols. It just so happened that earlier that year, Iziaslav had double-crossed Vseslav, captured him during peace talks, and tossed him in a Kiev jail. The Kiev locals wanted him overthrown. So they freed Caster and declared him Grand Prince of Kiev. Eventually he was forced to flee back to Polotsk, but continued to run things there until his death on Good Friday in 1101.
Caster can usually retreat even in the most unfavorable conditions. He also gain bonuses to defense while fleeing. Also has the ability to return an unfavorable battle to the first turn, along with the status of the battlers.
Witchcraft: (A)
Caster is descended from the semi-legendary Prince of Polotsk named Ragnvald which means “the man who manipulates witches” in medieval Lithuanian. Unfortunately for Ragnvald, his rumored ability to control witches didn’t help when he was dragged into a conflict between Vladimir the Great, Prince of Novgorod and Yaropolk, Prince of Kiev, both of whom were looking to Polotsk for military support. Long story short, Ragnvald refuses to marry his daughter Rogneda to Vladimir, siding with Yaropolk; Vladimir kidnapped, raped and married Rogneda, and executed Ragnvlad and all his relatives. Vladimir converted to Christianity in 988 A.D., remarried after divorcing Rogneda and sent her back to Polotsk with their son Izyaslau. For the next two centuries the Principality of Polotsk was ruled by the descendants of Izyaslau, who had a son named Bryachislav, who in turn was the father of Caster. To sum up, Caster was the grandson of the deeply traumatized wife of a murdered man known by a moniker that emphasized his control of the powers of darkness. Thus, Caster is an exceptional Witchcraft user, as it's a genetic skill as well as practiced.
Noble Phantasm
Lore
Last edited by Ail Don; November 10th, 2016 at 02:53 PM.
Here's one I've wanted to do for a while. Feel free to tear me apart for it.
Source: (X)
Class: Saber
"True" Name: Empress Jingu
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of Origin: Japan
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid
Armament: Sword
STR: C
END: E
AGI: A+
MGI: C
LCK: A
NP: A
Height/Weight: 175cm/57kg
Likes: Chaos of the Battlefield
Dislikes: Passive nature
Talent: Combat and Leadership
Natural Enemy: Himiko
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: D
Grants protection against magical effects. Differently from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy. Due to unique circumstances, her rank is remarkably low, especially by the standards of the Saber class.
Riding: B
The ability to ride mounts. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank, and A-rank can allow for Phantasmal Beasts and Divine Beasts to be mounted. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. Most vehicles can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Monstrous Beasts.
Personal Skills:
Imperial Privilege: A
An ability that, due the insistence of the owner, Skills that are essentially impossible to possess can be obtained for a short period of time. For Saber, the relevant skills are: Swordsmanship, Diplomacy, Charisma, Military Tactics, Divinity and others.
Information Erasure: B
The removal of information regarding the Servant's true name, abilities, and appearance from the records and memories of all witnesses, including the opponent, following the conclusion of an engagement. This effect is enforced even within digital recordings by a closed-circuit camera in broad daylight. However, evidence of the engagement is not removed from the scene, and by way of logical deduction, the Servant's identity may be revealed. To this day her identity is obscured to the point where many historians doubt she even existed, if she ever did.
Supporting Shamanism: A+
A skill that causes the parameters of one's opponents to decrease in rank. She has obtained this skill due to her connection to the "Shaman Empress". Offensive spells and curses are performed by a ghostly apparition that stands by Saber - much like a guardian spirit.
Noble Phantasms
Kami no HandanBeads of Primordial Chaos
Type: Anti-Fortress
Rank: B
Range: 1000
Max Targets: 999 People
A Noble Phantasm supposedly granted to a certain Yamato ruler by a god so she may bring glory to her nation. In the form of twin beads she wears as earrings constantly, they are extremely powerful Noble Phantasms.
When activated, she calls forth a tremendous wave of seawater she can freely manipulate. Alluding to a shared concept of a great flood in many mythologies, its true nature is to reverse The World to a primordial state before civilisation sprung. Anything fully engulfed within the rising tides will lose cohesion and dissipate into nothingness though beings of great power can temporarily resist the effects for a short time until escape, though normal mortal will dissolve nigh instantly.
A godly treasure, in the hands of a divine spirit, it would be an EX ranked Anti-World Noble Phantasm. Though in the hands of Saber, its power has been reduced massively.
Nanatsusaya no TachiThe Seven-Branches of Heaven
Type: Anti-Unit
Range: A
Range: 1
Max Targets: 1 PersonA holy, ceremonial sword forged by mortal hands, gifted a Yamato ruler from during her rule in Korea. It is a needlessly long blade forged from the finest iron and gold with six branches protruding from the central blade. An inscription is written on either side of the blade.
“On May 16th, the 4th year of Tae-hwa, the day of Byeong-O at noon, this seven-branched sword was manufactured with hundred-times-wrought iron. As this sword has a magical power to rout the enemy, it is bestowed to the king of a vassal state."
“Never has there been such a sword. The Crown Prince of Baekje who owes his life to the august King, had this sword made for the king of Wa. Hope that it be transmitted and shown to posterity."
It is a splendid blade, equalling the Imperial Regalia. Subsumed into "The Right of Rule." and altered by its wielder as one who conquers. When drawn; STR and END are boosted to A and C respectively at the cost of MGI and LCK decreasing proportionally. In combat, despite its clumsy appearance it can be expertly wielded by Saber due to her Imperial Privilege skill, she uses the lateral blades of the sword to keep her opponents on the defensive and wary.
Despite being a passive Noble Phantasm, there is a high mana cost so the effect cannot be maintained in combat in extensive battles. Additionally, as long as this Noble Phantasm is active, her second is sealed.
ShichishitouSword of Conquest, Great Deluge
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: A
Range: -
Max Targets: 100 PeopleThe ultimate Noble Phantasm of Saber. By invoking its name, the protruding blades on the central sword will dissipate and the Nanatsusaya no Tachi will replicate itself one hundred times, the copies forged from a blazing red - high speed ether. These copies are suspended in mid-air and can be wielded manually or merged into her sword to wreath the blade in destructive and volatile energy. In this state, the Nanatsusaya no Tachi is an ultimate expression of Saber's destructive will and can devestate even the mightiest of opponents with a single blow.
In addition, she can prepare the one hundred ether blades in the air, loaded like bullets and fire them like projectiles across a wide area. She could send out as little as one or two at a time like a constant trickle of water or if desired, unleash a deluge of destructive power. However she prefers not to use Shichishitou in such a manner as in her own words "Shooting swords is foolish, I'm not in the Archer class!" Therefore she would only do so if absolutely necessary.
Lore
Personality
Tactics
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True Name: Ned Kelly
Class: Archer
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Personality and Lore
Parameters:
Strength: D
Agility: D
Endurance: D
Mana: D
Luck: D
NP: B
Class Skills:
Independent Action: B
In life, he refused any form of legal authority over him, striking it out on his own and carving a bloody swath through the country of Australia.
Magic Resistance: E
He never encountered any magecraft, and only has this rank due to his class container.
Personal Skills:
Battle Continuation: C
Even though he was shot several times in the arms, he continued firing relentlessly at the law enforcement sent to apprehend him. Due to this aspect of his legend, any attacks that target the arms do not impair his combat ability, as severed parts reform near-instantly.
Charisma: D
He was able to garner a small but loyal circle of friends and sympathizers that assisted him.
Outback Survivor: B
A man who was able to survive in the Australian Outback, a land that is the closest to the Other Side of the World due to it's proximity to Dreamtime and it being once known as 'The Underside of the World'. Grants a rank-up to all physical parameters.
Noble Phantasm:
Ned Kelly's Armor, 'Contempt for Authority': B
A suit of armor that covers his shoulders, chest, and head, it operates as a potent defensive Noble Phantasm. However, when worn, he gains the equivalent of Bravery at A-rank, as when wearing it, he resisted any attempts to apprehend him short of simply disabling his physical body. The weakness of this noble phantasm is his legs, which remain vulnerable.
A Saber with the stats of an Assassin or Lancer, the Noble Phantasm of an Archer, and lorewise like Kojirou is...interesting to say the least.
Maybe flesh out the lore a bit more if there is anything.
Love me some Ned Kelly, but it needs a little fixing up. For starters, the Noble Phantasm is ranked too high again, especially for a guy at the tail end of the Victorian era. Battle Continuation, while sketchy on the ranking, doesn't reform parts like how you've described. Cu has his at A because he was able to keep fighting despite being beheaded, but that didn't make his head grow back.
I also think you'd like the skill Nature of a Rebellious Spirit, which would make him resist Charisma up to a certain level--fitting for such a stubborn son of a bitch.
Rare to see many Australian heroes around here.
Given that his whole legend was about defying authority I'm frankly quite surprised he doesn't have Nature Of A Rebellious Spirit, so I'd suggest nixing Charisma and replacing it with that Skill (or perhaps giving him composite of the two like I did for my Vercingetorix sheet). Having the Australian outback as a remnant of the Age Of Gods is a fun idea, though the Skill's actual effect is unfortunately kind of boring. Also I wonder if that could justify giving him a higher rank in Magic Resistance.
Other then that, the sheet itself is fairly good. Though I'm not so familiar with Kelly's legend, I can't help but feel that he could have another NP rather then just the armor. (Maybe something to do with inciting rebellion?)
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True Name: Saint Michael the Archangel, the First Knight
Class: Ruler
Gender: Male?
Alignment: Lawful Good
Attribute: Sky
Strength: B
Endurance: B
Agility: A
Mana: A
Luck: A+
Noble Phantasm: A+
Class Skills:
God's Resolution: A
Two Command Spells can be used for each Servant participating in the Holy Grail War. Cannot re-purpose the Command Spells of others.
Magic Resistance: EX
In addition to the Ruler class' naturally high resistance, Michael's nature as an Archangel grants him full-fledged immunity to Magecraft.
True Name Discernment: A
When facing a Servant, Michael is granted knowledge of the foe's true name and status information. Concealment abilities and Noble Phantasms of equal or lesser rank are automatically ignored.
Personal Skills:
Charisma: A+
As the "Supreme Commander of the Heavenly Hosts", who shall lead God's army of angels to victory against the forces of Hell, Ruler possesses an extremely high rank in this skill.
Divine Core: EX
Although they are not gods, angels are nonetheless perfect Divine Spirits from birth.
Guardian Knight: A++
Often prayed to for protection, seen as the defender of the Jewish people and Guardian of the Catholic Church, Michael becomes virtually invincible while defending someone or something else.
Saint: B
When summoned as a Servant, the ability of saint is selected one among "raising the effectiveness of sacraments", "automatic HP recovery", "1 Rank-Up to Charisma" and "production of a holy shroud is possible". Like the other Archangels, Ruler is also worshipped as a Saint. Being a warrior, his go-to choice is "automatic HP recovery".
Noble Phantasm
- Anti-Unit, Rank A+Quis ut Deus?Down the Great Dragon was Hurled
Quis ut Deus? is the literal translation of the name Michael: "Who is like God?". A scornful question for the one who tried to be superior to God, this Noble Phantasm is the crystallization Satan and his angels' expulsion from Heaven, courtesy of Ruler.
A divine sword of authority, given to Michael by God in order to put an end to Satan's rebellion. A fiery blade of retribution, similar to the one wielded by the angel of Eden; however, instead of humans, it is meant to deliver God's justice to angels. As such, it deals extra damage to Divine Spirits and Servants with Divinity. Due to the Devil's association with dragons, it is also super effective against those with draconic blood.
In addition to this, the sword also possesses the ability to remove all "divine grace" from those struck by it. A Servant damaged by this Noble Phantasm becomes unable to use or activate skills and Noble Phantasms that are divine in nature, or were given to them by a Divine Spirit, until the sword is destroyed.
Lore
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As Divine Spirits, I don't see that Michael (or any other Archangel) could be summoned in a standard Grail War. Still a good sheet though. Having him be the 'First Knight' is an interesting way to justify him being a Heroic Spirit (though it's still a bit of a stretch) and the personality you gave him is more then your stereotypical righteous do-gooder.
I think Charisma could easily be A+. A is 'the highest rank affordable to a human being' while Michael's charisma is explicitly divine in origin, so I think it merits a higher rank.
If Michael's in that means Lucifer is fair game too, right.
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Appearance
Class: Berserker/"Brawler"
Alignment: Neutral Good
Origin: Historical
Region: America
Parameters
Strength: C+
Endurance: B
Agility: D
Mana: E
Luck: C
NP: D
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement: (E-)
The user does not receive the benefits of Mad Enhancement nor do they lose any of their reasoning abilities, and overall they just become a little rougher.
Personal Skills:
Athletic Body: (B-)
The ability to possess a perfect body through strenuous training and exercise. Berserker's training regimen was was reported in Belfast by famed Nellie Bly, quoted as follows: "The whole art of training …consists in two things, exercise and abstinence, abstinence and exercise, repeated alternately without end. A yolk of an egg with a spoonful of rum in it is the first thing in a morning, and then a walk of six miles till breakfast. Then another six or seven miles till dinner-time."
Strength is constantly treated as ranked up, however the efficacy of this skill is dulled with consumption of alcohol.
Honor of the Battered: (C)
In the instance that Berserker's injuries are repaired by means of magecraft, the required Magical Energy cost is halved. Berserker also enjoys the benefit of a slight increase in strength the more injured he becomes, reminiscent of his historic 75 straight boxing matches.
Bare Knuckles: (A)
A skill crystallizing Berserker's existence as a champion at fighting with his bare fists. Attacks against fellow unarmed opponents are treated as ranked up. At this rank, a lesser effect is also applied to opponents not wearing magical armor, with Berserker being almost certainly powerless against a completely magically equipped opponent.
Noble Phantasm
Lore
A meme for the discerning taste.
Last edited by Ail Don; November 11th, 2016 at 08:17 PM.
I'm like 90% sure we have yet to see the so-called "standard Grail War". Haven't all the ones we've seen been screwed up in some way?
Anyway, raise his Charisma to A+.