Yeah, John Carter is pretty much a done topic, at least until/if the sheet is done. I kinda like that Telemachus idea, though. It's always interesting to see different takes on a character. I'm not sure if the sheet, apart from the Noble Phantasm, would be different enough from the ones we already have here to merit making though.
Class: Saber
True Name: John Carter of Mars
Alignment: chaotic good
Alternative classes:Archer, Berserker
Likes: Adventure, his wife,
Dislike: People who are complete and total dicks.
Strength: E+
Endurance: D+
Agility: D+
Mana: C
Luck: B
Noble phantasm: A
Skills
Noble Phantasm
lore
I get the feeling there's something wrong with this sheet, but I can't quite figure out what.
@John Carter: For starter, you forgot to close the spoiler for his Noble Phantasm. Secondly, his Magic Resistance is too low for a Saber: even those that never met magic in life, such as Chevalier D'eon, have at least a C-rank in it. And you said right in his lore section that he learned Astral Projection from ancient magecraft. And D-rank is very low no matter the class. I think he could use more skills and I don't really like his Alien Adventurer skill. Maybe replace it with a skill that make it difficult for his equipments and weapons to be identified since they're alien in origin ? Since he was a warlord, I also think he should have Charisma. His Leaps of Barsoom either need a better effect or doesn't deserve to be a NP in the first place. "Jumping really high" sounds way more like a personal skill than a NP. His first NP could also be stronger or/and have more interesting abilities; And does he really have no special items or other famous feats that could be made into NP ? Seem odd for someone who had so much adventures. I think the parameters of his real body should be higher, since he was a trained soldier. And, while it is rather minor, I think the Archer, Rider or even Caster class suit him better than Saber, considering his abilities. All in all, it's honestly not a very good sheet, I'm afraid.
Last edited by Alexcoene; November 23rd, 2016 at 04:28 PM.
This is possibly the dumbest servant i have ever made.
I love him. I didn't even write biography because i don't think i can truly make it work.This was actually a Bottom-up design? I had this idea for an Noble Phantasm like that for a while but i was searching for a suitable heroic wrestler. First i was going with some old pankration champion(Dioxippus of Athens), then i decided to go with an actual pro wrestler, but settled with Jacob himself. First the Noble Phantasm was an actual championship belt, but i couldn't find a good faceclaim. Then the Peleneus/"Face of God" bit clicked and i went with a Masked Luchador who thankfully have plenty of Religious Imagery.
RulerFaceclaimInfoParameters and SkillsNoble Phantasm
The Faceclaim is actually a fanart of El Santo(The Saint), possibly the most famous Mexican Luchador who starred in many movies back in the day and a true icon of Mexican Culture.
Last edited by JetKinen; November 23rd, 2016 at 05:39 PM.
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Luchador! Israel: Oh my God, that is possibly the most hilariously awesome Servant I've ever seen, here or anywhere else. JetKinen, I officially and humbly award you the title King of Servant Crafting. Seriously. While I've seen a couple Jacob/Israel sheets elsewhere, yours is by far the most interesting (not to mention hilarious). I particularly like how you sprinkled in wrestling slang into his Skill descriptions and the like, which just adds to the overall absurdity. He's kind of absurdly wanked with A+++ ranked Strength (several times higher then Heracles) and the like, but he did literally wrestle an Archangel into submission and the sheet itself is so gleefully crazy that it feels wrong even trying to press that point.
You said that you were thinking of writing up a fanfic with Xavier and another Ruler? I'd definitely read any fanfic that features this guy in it....
John Carter: Interesting Servant. Having never read the books myself I can't really comment on the overall accuracy, but he seems well-done. I'd recommend exchanging Eye Of The Mind (False) with a unique Telepathy Skill of some kind, given the effects you gave it are quite a bit more then what that Skill normally has.
Everything else seems fine, or at least I don't know enough of the novels to criticize. Saber seems like a bit of an odd Class for him since there's no mention of a sword of any kind anywhere, but I accept that you couldn't think of any other one to fit him into.
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Yeah, that's fair enough. Are you actually thinking of making a fanfic with this guy?
No, not really.
This is just me proclaiming my love for the art of pro wrestling as usual.
Also too lazy to actually write fanfic
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Class: Saber
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: Historical
Region: Portugal
Parameters
Strength: A
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Mana: C
Luck: C
NP: B
Height/Weight:
Gender: Male
Likes: Reconquista, Catholicism
Dislikes: His mother, Galicia, Leon&Castille
Talents: Weightlifting
Natural enemy: Moors
Attribute: Fire
Traits: Human, Male
Armament: armor, sword
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: (C)
Magic Resistance grants protection against magical effects. Differently from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level ofHigh-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Riding: (C)
Riding, the Class Skill of Rider and Saber, is the ability to ride mounts. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank, and A-rank can allow for Phantasmal Beasts and Divine Beasts to be mounted. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding.
Can handle all manner of animal mounts that have been expertly trained.
Because of a fall from his horse, Saber was forced to return most of the land he had conquered as ransom after his capture. That single fateful fall was almost responsible for all of Saber's life's work to be rendered meaningless, reflected in his Riding skill.
Personal Skills:
Father of a Nation: (A)
A skill based on the independence won from the Kingdom of Leon. As with Septem Colles and other skills possessed by founding figures, Saber can bestow blessings on those he recognizes as his children--heroes of Portuguese descent in particular. Because of Portugal's status as a county previously, and Saber's constant infighting with the French and the Spanish, heroes descended from these two countries will find themselves at a decided disadvantage.
At the end of the 11th century, the Burgundian knight Henry became count of Portugal and defended its independence by merging the County of Portugal and the County of Coimbra. His efforts were assisted by a civil war that raged between León and Castile and distracted his enemies.
Henry's son [Saber] took control of the county upon his death. The city of Braga, the unofficial Catholic center of the Iberian Peninsula, faced new competition from other regions. Lords of the cities of Coimbra and Porto fought with Braga's clergy and demanded the independence of the reconstituted county.
Portugal traces its national origin to 24 June 1128, the date of the Battle of Săo Mamede. Saber proclaimed himself Prince of Portugal after this battle and in 1139, he assumed the title King of Portugal. In 1143, the Kingdom of León recognized him as King of Portugal by the Treaty of Zamora. In 1179, the papal bull Manifestis Probatum of Pope Alexander III officially recognized Saber as king. After the Battle of Săo Mamede, the first capital of Portugal was Guimarăes, from which the first king ruled. Later, when Portugal was already officially independent, he ruled from Coimbra.
Defender of the State: (B)
Defender of the State is the capacity of a Servant to mark a region as his personal dominion by securing the surrounding leylines prior to an engagement.
The Reconquista is the period of history of the Iberian Peninsula spanning approximately 770 years between the Islamic conquest of Hispania in 710 and the fall of the last Islamic state in Iberia at Granada to the expanding Christian kingdoms in 1492. Born into an Iberia that was struggling between a vice-like grip of the Moorish states and troubled Spanish kingdoms attempting to stay independent, Saber was constantly pushing back against all of these forces to protect his newly "liberated" Portugal.
But Saber never rested, even after securing his kingdom. He continued to fight the Islamic Moors well past his retirement age, and stayed fit enough to rescue his son at the age of 76.
At this rank, all of Saber's parameters are reinforced while inside his marked region. However, because Portugal wasn't a unified state at the beginning of Saber's campaign--unlike Transylvania--the area he can mark out is smaller than that of Vlad III's. If he were to be summoned in Portugal it's fair to assume he would be literally unstoppable.
Bravery: (A)
Bravery is the ability to negate mental interference such as pressure, confusion and fascination. Not usable under the effects of Mad Enhancement.
Saber is immune to all mental interference, including distractions, emotions, illusions, etc The Servant is immune to any mental interference below the level of High Thaumaturgy. Even High Thaumaturgy level mental interference will be reduced in potency and duration.
The Siege of Lisbon, from July 1 to October 25, 1147, was the military action that brought the city of Lisbon under definitive Portuguese control and expelled its Moorish overlords. The Siege of Lisbon was one of the few Christian victories of the Second Crusade—it was "the only success of the universal operation undertaken by the pilgrim army," i.e. the Second Crusade. It is seen as a pivotal battle of the wider Reconquista.
In addition to the insurmountable victories he scored against the vast numbers of the Moorish caliphate, the edict that the Pope issued recognizing Portugal as an independent Catholic state was actually demanded of him by Saber himself.
Noble Phantasm
Lore
Personality
Tactics
Last edited by Ail Don; November 23rd, 2016 at 10:33 PM.
Great sheet.
I admit that as a hue, i don't know a whole lot about most of the Luso-figures, but i always have a soft spot for them.
Raia has a really simple but effective design
I just don't know if calling his period the peak of swordcraftmanship is accurate with the Nasuverse.
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Also consider sticking to a single measurement system.