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It's not a well aligned sheet at all, it has the inorganic and forced style that I seem to be making my hallmark sorry. I cannot understand why you see any virtue in this but I insist that both Espionage and Presence Concealment works as they are traits that Abigail displayed, additionally I falsely believed that Espionage would work better with allowing her to approach and intimidate those she wished to use her second NP on. Sorry I was quite wrong in my creation of this sheet I'm sorry to have wasted your time.
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You really don't need to do this. Your reasoning makes sense, and we don't need a half-paragraph of self-criticism that isn't even justified. I even went back and double checked to make sure that my opinion was still the same. It was.
I can't understand why you're so hard on yourself. I'm not really sure what more I can say. Your opinion is your own, so there isn't a whole lot I can do to affect it. But that doesn't make what I (and pretty much everyone else) have been saying any less true. You don't need to be so hard on yourself.
"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
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With the way the keep adding shit to gils vault, soon he will have the root in it.
Life is short, we don't need to shitpost at eachother about nasu.
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Okay this Servant is one I have wanted to make for a while and although he is somewhat obscure, Type Moon and this thread has helped me to learn a lot more about history so hopefully this will teach people at least a little bit about the character, the sheet is inevitably going to be clunky though sorry. Thanks to 4score for getting me to think about literature so much recently, you brought this upon yourself.
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Servant Identity
Biography
Appearance
Skills
Noble Phantasm
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Upon following the pivix link I was unable to reach the original image page, here however is the danbooru image I used:
http://danbooru.donmai.us/posts/1016104
Last edited by sherlock1110; June 8th, 2017 at 02:05 AM. Reason: Biography added as the Servant is obscure
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Archer: pethensileia
Str:B, End:A, Agi:EX
Mna:C, Lck:E, Np:A
Aligment: lawful/neutral
Gender: female
Height: 155cm
Weight: 50kg
Place of origin: greece
Armament: bow, shield
Likes: meat, honorable fights, humble people
Deslike: hunting, volupituos womans, recive pity
Talents: fighting, first aid
Natural enemies:fate and luck
Lore: The yonger sister of hyppolita, the amazon queen. She was know for the strongest throw of all amazons because and haddad pride is this title ho would lad the her downfall.
One day while hunting with her sister, the spear she threw end up hitting and killing hyppolita It was not a miskate of her or carelessness of her sister, but insted the "work of fate and will of luck".
She was filled with grief and only wanted to died, but being a amazon and a daughter of the war god she wanted to do so like a warrior, so she departed to troy.
In the short day in which she fight in the trojan war, she defeted many soldiers, clash with aias the great, and end up face to face with aquiles.
Legends day that she was slayed in one strike and, while technicly true, this was because she dodge all of aquiles initial attack forcing him into a risky manuver who end up hitting out of luck.
In that moment their eles meet each other and, again by a curse from destiny, they bota fell deeply for each other as she died.
Skills:magic resistance(A): cancel spells of A-rank and bellow, even high-thaumaturgy
Independent action(A): can take take actions without the suport of the master, but here noble phantasm will still comsume the mana necesary
divinity(B):she is the daughter of ares and,just like her sister, is cover in tick divine aura
battle continuation(D): while she will keep fighting to the bitter end, the trupe is that she disires death
Injured beauty(A-): a skill that makes she look more and more beautiful as she gets hurt, the fact that she despise this skill resulted in a rank down
Hippolytae tragoedia: tragedy among sisters (姉妹の中で悲劇 ヒッポリュタエ ・ トラゴエヂア * Shimai no naka de higeki Hipporyutae toragoedjia) (anti-unit: B+):
Derived of the fact of her killing her sister by acident, is not the actual weapon (which was a spear) used in the ocasion, but her fellings of sorrow and regret canalyze into a attack. She can use this attack with any throwable objetc, it is stronger agaist people she consider equals or when used with a spear but she refuses to touch any spears.
Akhilleus Kosmos: The Miniature World Enclosed by the Azure Sky (蒼天囲みし小世界 アキレウス・コスモス * Sōten kakomi shi ko sekai akireusu kosumosu) (barrier: A):
The shield of the great aquiles, the one which she fight against/fell in love during her final moments. While she never used such shield in her life, it was placed on her pyre by the aquiles himself (this act would late contribuit to his downfall).
Last edited by the god of world-0; June 3rd, 2017 at 07:23 AM.
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Penthesilea: While you've managed to create an interesting sheet for a character I was not acquainted with I do have some criticisms. You've done very well in your choice of character by the way as often it is important yet secondary characters who are designed well as Servants and this can really help when you haven't had the longest experience in making Sheets. The sheet is good and the only real criticism is a recurring one of expanding on detail, however I can see why this would be difficult as you seem to have some difficulties with English, sorry if that was rude as you are doing quite well , but regardless you've made two good Noble Phantasms that needed expansion. For example while the sheet tells me that she possesses the Shield of Achilles I have no real clue what properties it may possess, so I have to conclude it's a shield with high mystery.
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Bite in the ass by my own carefulness
I end up not put in to many information on akhileus kosmos because he alredy apears on fate/apocrypha so i end up think i whould be redundent put "things that every one knows" without disregard for who not read it or dont remenber
acidental jerkass moment
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Ok now, which of the servants i made whould you prefer to use in a grail war?
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Wait it is in Apocrypha isn't it? Sorry I forgot about that Noble Phantasm. Although it's certainly a strange question to ask isn't Gerda clearly the answer here considering she is a far stronger Servant than the rest? I don't know, what about you?
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Yeah, but she is also realy bad in doing damage, i specificly design her so she whould be hard to kill while strugling to do minimal damage
In resume, a realy tanky white mage
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-Titles: Governor of the Condemned, Mal'akh ha-Mavet, Samael, Sariel, Gabriel, Azra’il, Abaddon, Malach Ahzari, The Fourth Horseman of the Apocalypse, Judge of the Living and the Dead
-Other Qualifying Classes: Ruler, Saber, Rider, Assassin and Saver
-Gender: Unknown
-Alignment: True Neutral
-Origin: Judaism (Israel)
Parameters:
-Strength: B-
-Endurance: EX
-Agility: A
-Mana: C+
-Luck: E-
-NP: B++
Class Skills:
-Magic Resistance (C): Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Personal Skills:
-Scythe/Sickle Creation (A): The ability to create many sickles or scythes for support in battle or create a cheap distraction while going in for reaping. Lancer can summon small sickles or large scythes that cover a wide area and phase through an enemy to destroy their vital organs.
-Espionage (B): Does not conceal one’s presence, but rather makes one's presence fail to register as hostile. This Skill causes others to misunderstand one's status, including mistaking one for a kind neighbor, a harmless pebble, or as the most beloved person.
-Scroll of Deeds (C): Lancer usually carries around a scroll with him, documenting all of the good and evil acts that every sentient being on Earth has carried out while they were alive. This skill somewhat of a useful tool for discerning the identity of a Heroic Spirit or trying to theorise on their varying strengths and weaknesses. Unfortunately, this list does not extend to False Heroic Spirits, Phantom Servants or Pseudo-Servants.
-Chains of Fate (D-): Lancer can summon magical chains out of thin air that literally bind a target in place and neutralize their Class Skills. However, if said target has a strength stat of D or higher, they can easily break free from the chains.
Noble Phantasms:
-Alqadi, Lajnat Almuhallafin Walmunaffidha: Ruthless Angel of Death
*Type: Anti-Unit
*Rank: B++
With a snap of Lancer’s skeletal fingers, a dozen ghostly, glowing hands will materialize out of the ground and drag their target into the ground like a bag of screaming meat. When the ground sink up to the victim’s throat, the hands will simply hold them in place to ensure that they will not attempt to escape, as Lancer conjures up no more than 12 scythes that will hover some twenty feet above their target and he hoists his own scythe above his left shoulder in preparation to deliver a lethal strike. And then, Death and all 12 scythes will converge upon the target’s throat at once in the hopes of dealing multiple slashes that sever the victim's head completely from their neck and end their life in an instant…
...should the target fail to pass a Strength, Endurance or Luck check that requires one of those three Parameters to be two ranks above D, that will allow them to endure the attack or burst out of the ground to avoid the multi-part strike.
-Ascensionem in Caelum Et Ad Inferos Damnatio: The Final Judgement
*Type: Anti-Unit
*Rank: EX
If an enemy is upon the verge of death, Lancer can temporality transport them into a hellish pocket dimension, which he has god-like control over all reality and events. Upon arrival, the victim will be restrained in a set of unbreakable chains that prevent physical movement and seal off the victim's Mana supply. Two angels called Munkar and Nakir will instantly appear to interrogate the target and test their faith by asking questions about their lord, religion and prophet, whilst Lancer reviews over a list of deeds that the victim had performed before or after death.
When Munkar and Nakir have finished their interview with the target, they will converse with Lancer to reach a verdict regarding the victim’s innocence. If the trio decide that the victim is innocent, Lancer and his target will return to reality with his opponent being restored to full health. However, if the enemy is deemed guilty, a massive hole will open up underneath the victim’s feet and Lancer will teleport behind them to strike them down, effectively bisecting the enemy and forcing them to plummet headfirst into the endless and infernal bowels of Hell itself.
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