Create-a-Servant

**ScarletWeather** · February 2nd, 2012, 10:07 AM

Ahem, in the vein of seriousness, I believe I've already commented on Lancer and her Pratchett phantasm before when we chatted, Cyber, but for the sake of repeating it- this is an instance of 'Servant who isn't a magus summoning multiple Servants' which I actually think works, primarily because a) "Hua Mulan" as the profile depicts her is an aggregate spirit along the lines of Sasaki Kojiro and thus multiple candidates exist for her to begin with, and b) rather than 'drain prana, summon' there's an actual cost to maintain the others- she has to dilute her own essence, so effectively the skill isn't so much a summoning as it is splitting herself up. Can't really comment further though on account of "said most of what I wanted already" xD

**petalferrous** · February 2nd, 2012, 01:18 PM

Does anyone like the idea of Coyote (as in the Native American trickster spirit) as a Berserker? (w/ low ME)

**Seika** · February 2nd, 2012, 03:15 PM

Mulan's good. I like it when non-blasty, personal combat Servants come up in this thread - not every hero needs to be able to destroy armies in one shot to take that title. The Noble Phantasm's quite nicely designed; I don't see any problems in terms of its balance, and you're drawing on previous Nasuverse ideas for the concept. Good stuff all round.

**Sunny** · February 2nd, 2012, 06:55 PM

Thank you both for looking at her. ^^ I was a little worried if I made the NP too strong or too weak considering it's her only one, so I'm happy to hear it reads reasonably. It's hard for a player to be unbiased about their own character.

...This was a dumb thought experiment after reading those anime/manga Servants and I will duck thrown fruit as needed. Source is likely obvious.

Servant: Rider
True Name: "The Kid"
Alignment: Neutral Good

Statistics:
Strength: B
Endurance: B
Agility: C
Magic: E
Luck: E

Class Abilities:
Magic Resistance
Rank: D
Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree as an amulet that rejects magical energy.

Riding
Rank: B
The expertise to ride animals and vehicles. Most vehicles can be handled with above average skill. However, one cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Demonic Beast and Holy Beast-rank creatures.

Personal Skills:
Battle Continuation
Rank: A+
Strength of vitality for predicaments. Also, the ability to withdraw from combat and reach allied territory alive after being defeated. At this rank, it is possible to fight even through deadly injuries and the user may return home even through a calamity as long as there is a chance for even one person to survive.

Expert of Many Specializations
Rank: B
Access to and use of many expert skills. At this rank, a total of 16 skills ranging from archery, demolition, hunting, swordsmanship, tactics, and other combat skills may be used with proficiency of Rank C or above.

Instinct
Rank: D-A+
The power to "feel" the most favorable developments for oneself during battle. Though initially his survival instincts are no better than an averagely seasoned warrior, combined with the effect of his Noble Phantasm, Rider's sixth sense gradually sharpens and refines to the point of true precognition, seeing what is to come as clearly as if a voice was narrating it in his ear.

Noble Phantasms:
Bastion - Riding the Winds of Time
Type: Anti-World
Rank: EX
Although it has no direct combat applications and is primarily only useful as a utility resource, the rank of this Noble Phantasm represents the boundless potential of its true purpose, unknown even to Rider. With each day his spiritual body is maintained in the world, Rider generates a "core" of concentrated prana that he may collect and store as a consumable resource in battle, its effects analogous to the consumption of a single Command Spell.

However, the true use of this Noble Phantasm is that should Rider be defeated with a sufficient number of Cores in his possession, travel through time to the beginning of the Holy Grail War is automatically invoked. Although Rider receives no direct knowledge of the events that occurred in his past (and future), his body gradually develops instinctive knowledge of what is to come. Thus, through countless repetitions, he is forged into an ever-deadlier warrior whose chances of achieving his impossible dreams become that much less impossible.

**MssrNeko** · February 2nd, 2012, 07:00 PM

Loving this. Bastion FTW.

Great job, Cyber.

**Caster** · February 2nd, 2012, 07:02 PM

I think Mulan could possibly use some other NP, but mostly I think I just want to see her with more stuff. Definitely not a bad design, at least to me. Following the thread on and off, but usually don't comment much.

**petalferrous** · February 2nd, 2012, 11:20 PM

Apologies.
COYOTE
Class: Berserker
Alignment: Chaotic Insane
Stats:
Strength: E
Endurance: E
Agility: E
Magic: E
Luck: EX
Legend:
Coyote is a Native American trickster spirit, comparable to Loki or Reynard the Fox. So many stories have been told about him that any composite details are difficult to obtain, but he is generally anthropomorphic, with a coyote-like aspect. He is often both benevolent and malicious at once, and can be seen as foolish and accidentally helpful, or a deliberate helper of mankind. Some traditions place Coyote as a demiurge nearly on the level of the Creator, while others consider him a mere trickster. Coyote is not a true Heroic Spirit, but wormed his way into the Grail War when a foolish magus attempted to summon "the strongest North American nature spirit" as a Berserker. His wish is to return the chaos of nature to the world and disrupt its inevitable path to the death of Gaia and the Land of Steel.
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement: E
Offers a small boost in Strength in exchange for an uncontrollable, conniving temperament. However, this may have been Coyote's true nature in the first place. Furthermore, the boost seems to have little effect.
Independent Action: A+
Indefinite survival without a Master is possible, although high-mana actions such as the activation of Noble Phantasms will require an external mana supply. While this ability is not intended to be allocated to the Berserker class, it seems to have been attained through Coyote's insistence.
Personal Skills:
Shapeshift: A++
The ability to alter the self to have the appearance of others. Transformation into anything that can be imagined, from humans to animals to the stars in the sky, is now possible. However, a coyote-like aspect will always remain, and Coyote's statistics will always remain unchanged.
Divinity: E
While Coyote is considered a god in Navajo folklore, and many others, his unruly conduct has caused him to be expelled from the gods' inner circle, thus removing most of the benefits of godhood.
Wild Spirit: A
Provides protection from mental interference and a type of wily charisma and persuasiveness by channeling the Heroic Spirit's freewheeling soul. However, the higher the rank, the harder it becomes to forge alliances. At this rank the Heroic Spirit can no longer seek help from any other participants in the Grail War.
Noble Phantasm:
America Ignatius: The Many Exploits of Coyote, and How He Performed Them
Many stories have been told about Coyote. America Ignatius generates a bonfire around which his four favorites, and the one he can never escape, are actualized. The stories must be told in order and can only be told once per Grail War. Once all stories have been told, Coyote must leave the Grail War and return to wandering the American wilderness.
First Story: Coyote and the Sun God
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
Range: 1~99
Maximum Targets: ?
It is said that Coyote was very clever, and he used his wiles to snatch a piece of the sun away from the Sun God. For a while he gloated over his victory, then descended to the earth with a piece of sun in his mouth. The people there were cold and hungry, and many died during winter, for they had nothing but the sun to keep them warm, and the Sun God was a fickle being. Coyote saw that his piece of sun would let many live who would have died, and also allow many to kill who would not have killed. And this is the way of things, so Coyote gave them his piece of the sun. Thus fire was brought to the people, and they were grateful. There can be only darkness until this story has been told fully. All light sources and light-based abilities in range will be negated for the duration of the story.
Second Story: Coyote and the Water God
Rank: B+
Type: Anti-Army
Range: 1-99
Maximum Targets: 200 people
It is said that Coyote was very wicked, and in his wickedness he stole the child of the Water God in order to cause him pain. In his grief the Water God covered the land with water and all the edifices of the people were washed away. Coyote was forced to give back the Water God's child, but while the flood receded he lead humanity to higher ground in penitence. There they found richer soil and planted better crops, so they were grateful to Coyote in the end. While this story is told a flood will wash over the area, dealing extremely minor magic-based damage to all caught in it. However, the true effect of the flood is revitalizing and strengthening the essence of nature, making the land it touches slightly closer to Gaia and raising the environmental affinity for nature spirits.
Third Story: Coyote and the Stars
Rank: A
Type: Anti-World
Range: 1-99
Maximum Targets: n/a
It is said that Coyote is very impatient. When First Man, chosen by the Creator, placed the stars in the sky, he did so with great care, carefully naming and placing each one. But Coyote could not wait for the stars to be placed as the Creator wished. So he ate them all up from the jar First Man drew from, and then spit them out across the sky. But in the chaos people could not find their way by the stars as the Creator intended, so Coyote created order by showing the people the constellations and giving them names. And so the people were grateful. When this story is told, Coyote scatters the stars anew, confusing direction and rearranging the locations of the area enhanced by the flood. Familiar environs will become a confusing labyrinth even to people unaware of the Grail War's occurrence, but a new order will arise before too long, and people will soon be able to find their way naturally.
Fourth Story: Coyote and the Creator
Rank: A++
Type: Anti-Consciousness
Range: 1-99
Maximum Targets: n/a
It is said that Coyote was curious. While the Creator forged mankind from clay, Coyote skulked about, nudging and bumping in his eagerness to see the new creations. The Creator was distracted, and some of the clay people came out pale or burnt, some large or small. So it is that people are different from one another, and so it is that, through their differences, people came to think for themselves. Perhaps the Creator intended this in the first place, but in any case the people, upon being told this, were grateful to Coyote. When this story is told Coyote will restore to all humans in range the essential self-consciousness given to them by his mistake, making them aware of the decay of Gaia and the new beginning offered by the recreated world before them. It also has the side effect of making everyone in range aware of magi and the Grail War, as the world once was long ago. This is intended to be Coyote's ultimate Noble Phantasm and the conclusion to America Ignatius. The telling of the fifth story will likely require a Command Spell.
Fifth Story: Coyote and Death
Rank: EX
Type: Anti-Death
Range: 1-99
Maximum Targets: n/a
When everything began the Creator was pleased with all creation, and saw no need for death to sully it. But the world grew too crowded as nothing died away, and so a council was called. It was decided to institute death in the world, and open a door so that the dead could return soon after their death.
Many things have been said about Coyote. But above all he was wise. Coyote knew that this could not last, and so, after the first whirlwind spirit blew through the door, Coyote closed it. And so all the dead wandered the earth with nowhere to go, until a road to the spirit realm was discovered. When Coyote realized what he had done, he fled in horror, the outraged living close behind. And so it is that, for all he has done, Coyote is always on the run, the story of death always close behind. As long as this story is being told, nothing in range can die, as the door to death will swing open, allowing those who have died to walk the earth once more, until the story is done being told.

**Zer0light** · February 3rd, 2012, 09:07 PM

Name:Black★Rock Shooter

Class: Saber (can be summoned as rider)

Stats:

Strength: B
Endurance: B+
Agility: B
Magic: D
Luck: C+

Noble Phantasm:

★rock Cannon
a transformable weapon, ★rock Cannon is a versatile noble phantasm that, when in cannon form, can fire 20 explosive projectiles at once or be charged up for 1 powerful shot. in melee form, it turns into a giant blade.

Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit, Army
Maximum Targets: 1-20

Black Blade
a katana like blade and saber's preferred weapon.

Rank: C
Type: Anti-Unit
Maximum Targets: 1

Skills:

Magic resistance: B

Battle continuation: C

Mystic Eyes: C type: unknown

Nature of a Rebellious Spirit: B

Riding: C

**SeiKeo** · February 3rd, 2012, 09:09 PM

...you put a perfect Archer as a Saber.

**Zer0light** · February 3rd, 2012, 10:30 PM

Originally Posted by LeopardBear

...you put a perfect Archer as a Saber.

she works better as a saber. sure, rock cannon is the weapon she's seen with in the ova, but she's still better in melee combat. rock cannon doesn't really have much range on it. it's more of a melee to mid range weapon.

**Zer0light** · February 3rd, 2012, 10:50 PM

Name: Kirito

Class: Assassin

Stats:

Strength: B
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Magic: D
Luck: B

Noble Phantasm:

Elucidator
a black demonic 1 handed sword, equal in strength to Dark Repulser.

Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
Maximum Targets: 1

Dark Repulser
a white holy 1 handed sword, equal in strength to Elucidator.

Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
Maximum Targets: 1

Class Skills:
Presence Concealment: C+

Skills:

Bravery: B

Discernment of the Poor: A

Disengage: B

Eternal Arms Mastership: B

Instinct: C

Projectile (Throwing Picks): D

the main character from the LN sword art online.

**Zer0light** · February 4th, 2012, 12:13 AM

Name: Accelerator

Class: Berserker (can be summoned as archer and caster)

Stats:

Strength: C (up and up another 2 ranks while using vector control and up another while in angel mode)
Endurance: E (up 1 rank while in angel mode)
Agility: D (up 1 rank while in angel mode)
Magic: E (up 1 rank while in angel mode)
Luck: C (up 1 rank while in angel mode)

Noble Phantasm:

Vector Control
berserker's control over vectors gives him the perfect defense. any physical attack that touches him, is automatically reversed and any magical attack under B rank is negated. he can use this power to alter his strength (up 2 ranks) and his agility (up 2 ranks).

Rank: A+
Type: Anti-Unit, Army, Fortress
Maximum Targets: 500

Angel Wings*
white wings made out of 100 feather. these wings are made out of prana and will disintegrate mater on contact. they can only be activated in angel mode, which grants a boost in stats (rank up 1). (this noble phantasm is useless to berserker because of mad enhancement, since it has to be consciously activated it to use it)

Rank: A+
Type: Anti-Army
Maximum Targets: 100

Class Skills:

Mad enhancement: C

Skills:

Divinity: C

Nature of a Rebellious Spirit: C

Projectile (Guns): B*

Military Tactics: D*

(*negated while summoned as berserker)

**Master of Chaos** · February 4th, 2012, 03:21 AM

It has been a while.

Class: Lancer (Rider, Berserker)
True Name: Achilles
Gender: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

STR: ＊＊＊＊＊ A
END: ＊＊＊＊＊ C
AGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ A+
MGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ C
LCK: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
NP: ＊＊＊＊＊ B

Keywords

CLASS SKILLS

Magic Resistance: A
Protection against magical effects. Cancel spells of A-Rank or bellow. In practice, he is untouchable to modern Magi.

PERSONAL SKILLS

Divine Protection: A
A blessing from Divine Spirits, provides bonus modifiers to all saving throws. Furthermore, at A-Rank the Servant becomes immune to all sorts of curses, save those on the level of Divine Spirits.

Eternal Arms Mastership: A+
Mastership of combat arts has reached the point of being said to be unrivaled in one’s era. By complete merging of mind, body and technique, it is possible to make use of full fighting skills even when under the influence of any sort of mental hindrance.

Mixed-Blood: C
Measures one’s aptitude as a non-human. The higher the rank, more one’s quality as a human being decreases.

Weapons

Armor of the Gods (Second)
An armor forged by the Blacksmith Deity Hephaestus. Not only it is richly ornamented, but its performance as a defensive item is also high thanks to being made with divine skill. This is actually the second of such armor. As part of a set, it comes with a shield furnished with enchantments that expand a strong defensive bounded-field.

NOBLE PHANTASM

Lost Death – A Mother’s Blessings
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Achilles immortal body. A conceptual charm that rejects the flaws known as death imbued in his very flesh. This auto-activation-type Noble Phantasm that restores Achilles to a state of full health every time he receives an injury. Not a high-speed regeneration ability that magically repairs wounds, nor a Curse of Restoration that forcefully returns the body to the point prior to being wounded by turning back time, but rather, this is a top-class divine mystery that rejects the very event of being injured to being with. Because carrying the damage of an injury that he never received is a paradox, the world corrects that contradiction by recovering Achilles body. Furthermore, Lost Death also grants immunity to all sorts of physical alignments.

There is a famous anecdote on how Achilles gained his invulnerability by being bathed in the mystic waters of the underworld (Styx River) right after birth. That same anecdote tells about a weak point on his heels, and while Achilles was indeed killed by an arrow that hit that spot, Lost Death’s protection actually extends itself for his whole body. There is no vulnerability on his heels. The true weakness of this Noble Phantasm lies elsewhere.

Pelias Hasta – Fragment of Chaos
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
A large polearm with one spearhead at each end. It originally belonged to Achilles’ father, King Peleus. According to legend, during the marriage between Peleus and Thetis, the wise centaur Chiron presented the King with a stout, ash-colored staff that he found at the top of Mt. Pelion. Athena then gave the staff a polished form and Hephaestus furnished it with spearheads. What nobody knew at the time was that ash-colored staff was something that branched off from the primordial deity (Protogenoi) Khaos. As a result, this spear is a weapon that carries opposing attributes of creation and destruction.

The main, large spearhead (Pelias Omega – Spear of Primeval Destruction) carries a blessing (curse) of death and inflicts unhealable wounds when its true name is called. Even if medical treatment is used to cure the injury, damage will continue to be dealt at the end of every turn so long the blessing (curse) is not lifted. Meanwhile, the secondary, small spearhead (Pelias Alpha – Spear of Terminal Creation) is imbued with a curse (blessing) of life that negates all sorts of negative alignments when its true name is called (including the blessing (curse) of Pelias Omega).

Achilles’ weapon-of-choice, but it surprisingly played little part on his legend. In fact, many modern accounts of his story fail to mention its existence altogether. It was only during the incident involving King Telephus of Mysia that it ever had a significant role.

Background

**Five_X** · February 4th, 2012, 03:24 AM

Watch out, Spinach! There's another one here!

**Spinach** · February 4th, 2012, 03:31 AM

Lol.

**Master of Chaos** · February 4th, 2012, 05:35 AM

Originally Posted by Five_X

Watch out, Spinach! There's another one here!

What? Explain please.

**Five_X** · February 4th, 2012, 05:36 AM

It's a joke relating to an RP he and I are in. His opponent is Achilles.

**ChronoReverse** · February 5th, 2012, 03:09 AM

Ooh this one is interesting. I'm particularly wondering what the real "achilles' heel" of Achilles is.

Achilles really was like a super man of the Greeks, he's definitely worthy of a mighty servant profile.

**Zer0light** · February 5th, 2012, 03:23 AM

Originally Posted by ChronoReverse

Ooh this one is interesting. I'm particularly wondering what the real "achilles' heel" of Achilles is.

Achilles really was like a super man of the Greeks, he's definitely worthy of a mighty servant profile.

it actually WAS his heel, his mom dipped him in the river styx (i think) and it made him invulnerable, but since she was holding him by his heel, that was the only part that didn't get touched by the river, and was his only weak spot.
achilles was more like captain america, the ultimate warrior, said to be unbeatable in battle until he got hit by a stray arrow in the heel during battle...or did he get speared in the heel during battle? can't remember. he would have made an excellent, saber, lancer, berserker and rider.

Hercules was more of the greek superman.

**Mcjon01** · February 5th, 2012, 03:24 AM

He was talking about the Achilles from that Servant profile a few posts up, bro.

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