Gil has the highest "natural" level of Divinity there is without going full goddess like Beach Tamamo.
If Herc is a demigod and he gets A then it stands to reason Gil gets an even higher number.
Because Gilgamesh lol
So yeah skills are weird
Last edited by Ail Don; April 15th, 2017 at 02:27 PM.
Gil has the highest "natural" level of Divinity there is without going full goddess like Beach Tamamo.
If Herc is a demigod and he gets A then it stands to reason Gil gets an even higher number.
Because Gilgamesh lol
So yeah skills are weird
That was sort of my point. In that case the + modifier just seems to mean a "higher" value of A, rather then anything involving conditional multipliers.
That being said, since all you get in a CAS servant is the sheet, it's usually a good idea (at least imo) to work in a descriptor of the rationale or the triggers for the modifier. Gil will get ample opportunity to argue for or display his bonus compared to a oneshot draft.
-Title: Hero of the Emerald Isle, Ireland’s Pirate Queen, The Mistress of County Mayo -Other Qualifying Classes: Berserker, Saber and Archer -Gender: Female -Character Alignment: Chaotic Good -Origin: Ireland
Parameters: -Strength: C- -Endurance: D+ -Agility: E -Mana: A -Luck: E+
-NP: C-
Class Skills: -Riding (B+): Rider's feats occurred as she travelled across the North Atlantic ocean. So long as the mode of travel is limited to sea and is a aquatic in nature, Rider can operate it with great skill. -Magic Resistance(D): Cancel Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.
Personal Skills: -Pioneer of the Stars (EX): All difficult voyages and challenges which are considered "impossible" turn into "events that can be realized". -Nature of a Rebellious Spirit (A): The temperament to never remain at one location and never embrace a lord. A wandering star that does not have the capacity to be king nor is capable of finding his own king. Negates the effects of Charisma with the same rank. -Golden Rule (A): The measure of one's fortune to acquire wealth. At this level money problems are completely unknown. -Military Tactics (C): Tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. Bonus modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm.
Noble Phantasm: -Terra Marique Potens: Might of the O'Malley's *Type: Anti-Army *Rank: B++
It is thought that Rider went on many sea voyages as a young woman. In time, she came to command her own fleet of ships. The ships were small and fast and allowed Rider and her crews to stage surprise attacks on ships filled with valuable cargos, gaining her a reputation for being a fearsome pirate as she opposed the English attempts to remove her.
By the means of a Marble Phantasm, Rider summons a fleet of up 3 pirate ships, each manned by up to 200 men and armed with an impressive array of cannons at their disposal. Calling upon the might of her men, Rider's fleet fires off a destructive volley of musket and cannon fire to enact widespread destruction at her signal upon whatever poor soul who has invoked the ire of Rider’s wrath.
True Name:
Spoiler:
The Pirate Queen Grace O'Malley, also known as Granuaile and by her Irish Gaelic name Grainne Ni Mhaille, is one of Ireland's foremost heroines, whose life was the stuff of Irish legend. Grace O'Malley's extraordinary life centres around the 16th Century Tudor conquest of Ireland under Queen Elizabeth I. Grace was the daughter of the O'Malley Clan chieftain who controlled the south west of County Mayo and its coast from their castle on Clare Island. They were a renowned seafaring family who controlled the sea routes along the west coast of Ireland, charging a tax to fishermen and traders.
In 1546 Grace was married at a young age to the head of the O'Flaherty Clan, but when he was killed in battle, Grace became the head of the O'Flaherty's as well. Grace later remarried another powerful Irish Chief Richard Burke, but divorced him after one year under the ancient Brehon Laws and got to keep his title and Rockfleet Castle near Newport in Co. Mayo. As England steadily gained control of Ireland, Grace came under increasing pressure to relent to the English crown. An expedition from Galway attacked Grace in her castle on Clare Island, so Grace turned to piracy, blockading the port of Galway and attacking English ships in Galway Bay.
When the English governor of Connaught, Sir Richard Bingham captured Grace O'Malley's two sons, she set sail for England to speak to Queen Elizabeth I face to face. Her ships sailed up the River Thames in London, where Grace met Queen Elizabeth at Greenwich. On meeting the Queen, Grace refused to bow, stating that she herself was a Queen of her land and not a subject of the Queen of England. The two, who were roughly the same age apparently, admired each other, and reached a truce; Grace would stop switch from attacking English ships to attacking Spanish ones and her sons were returned to her.
Grace O'Malley died at Rockfleet Castle in 1603, the same year as Queen Elizabeth.
Wow, you're posting these up pretty damn fast. Did you have these in reserve and are only posting them up now that you've got an account here?
Anyways, O'Malley is fairly well-done, though I'd say your other sheets have been more interesting. This feels more like a mix of some of the other pirate-themed Servants we've seen in canon then anything terribly original, alas. I doubt she should have Pioneer Of The Stars at all to be honest (she may've lived an extraordinary life, but didn't accomplish anything truly "revolutionary" that I know of), much less at the same rank as Drake. Nature Of A Rebellious Spirit at a higher rank then Lu Bu who is the face of treachery in Chinese literature also seems maybe a bit overblown, though I get the "refused to bow before the British Empire" vibes you were going for.
Her NP is the usual "summon ships and bombard everything with cannonfire" that shows up in a lot of nautical Servants (understandable, since there often isn't very much else to work with). The only thing I can say is that having it be a Marble Phantasm seems kind of unnecessary. Marble Phantasm is an elemental's ability to call upon natural phenomena, so lumping it in with a pirate's ability to summon her ships seems a little iffy to me.
That's the biggest issue with O'Malley. She totally deserves the spot but it's incredibly hard to imagine a sheet for her that's not on some level a Drake reskin. She hit all the right points to the degree I was convinced she was O'Malley in the lead up to Extra, lol. The most I could think to differentiate them was to try to do something with her castle raids / connection to Ireland itself, but nothing ever came of it.
It's still a good sheet, though, considering. Though yeah, I'm not sure I'd pair Pioneer of the Stars with Luck E, since they go towards the same concept of self-determinism and luck. High luck is supposed to oppose fate, so to defy the impossible with bargain bin luck feels odd. I think to increase the luck or to reconsider the skill is a good idea, but she totally deserves the rest.
Edit: A personal request, but can I ask what anyone thinks of the one I posted last page? I always have the worst timing and consistently manage to post at the end of a page, lol. Curious if it still needs work.
Last edited by Sunny; April 16th, 2017 at 02:41 AM.
Source: http://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.p...st_id=54785455
Class: Lancer
Alternate Class: Berserker
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Origin: Historical/Myth/Art
Region: America
Epithet: America The Beautiful/America The Terrible
Parameters
Strength: B
Endurance: A
Agility: B
Mana: D
Luck: A
NP: C
Height/Weight: American/Woman
Gender: Female
Likes: Conquest, American nationalism, rock and roll
Dislikes: Those pinko commie Whigs, Indians
Talents: AMERICA
Natural enemy: Herself, maybe
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: (E)
Magic Resistance grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
As the embodiment of a country founded as late as 1776, Lancer has zero interaction or immunity to magecraft. Cannot cancel spells, but magic damage is reduced somewhat.
Personal Skills:
Goddess Divine Core: (C)
Goddess Divine Core is a Skill that expresses one being a perfected goddess from birth. A composite Skill that comprises the Skill Divinity, preserves the absoluteness of the mind and the body, repels all mental interference, prevents the body from growth and prevents the figure from change no matter how much calories are absorbed.
Because she is less an alteration of the goddess Libertas as much as she is a brand new one (with only slight hints to her initial Roman incarnation), her Divine Spirit aptitude is somehow lower than that of her Berserker form. However she is undoubtedly still a goddess of some measure, so the rank stops at C.
Civilization Erasure: (EX)
An inborn and unconsciously active skill of Lancer, born from her existence as one embodying the concept of “supremacy” and her nature as the fastest growing superpower in history.
Anything in Lancer's grasp is transformed into its 'best' form currently most suited for herself. This is based on Lancer's own perspective, not necessarily reflecting the object at its greatest or most excellent. In addition, the item in question gains a uniquely American flair.
Manifest Destiny: (-)
In the 19th century, manifest destiny was a widely held belief in the United States that its settlers were destined to expand across North America. The special virtues of the American people and their institutions. The mission of the United States to redeem and remake the west in the image of agrarian America. An irresistible, God-given destiny to accomplish this essential duty. A doctrine of conquest based on pre-supposed superiority, this skill embodies all of that.
It takes the form of a specific style of spearmanship that Lancer channels through her spear. A full-bore offensive style that mimics some of the properties of a certain pair of Mystic Eyes. Manifest Destiny states that Lancer is ordained by God to continue forward and be victorious, so by wielding her spear in just such a way, it will be so. The concept of conquest is inevitable, as the entirety of Lancer’s existence is committed to achieving said outcome. Gains plus modifiers against those said to be “indigenous” heroes. Also cannot be used with any other weapon but Lancer’s specific spear. Because she is currently the only known “user” of such a “style”, it doesn’t carry a rank.
Noble Phantasm
Old Glory Stars and Stripes Forever
(Anti-Unit, C)
Old Glory is a nickname for the flag of the United States. The flag of the United States, often referred to as the American flag, is the national flag of the United States. It consists of thirteen equal horizontal stripes of red alternating with white, with a blue rectangle in the canton bearing fifty small, white, five-pointed stars arranged in nine offset horizontal rows, where rows of six stars alternate with rows of five stars. The 50 stars on the flag represent the 50 states of the United States of America, and the 13 stripes represent the thirteen British colonies that declared independence from the Kingdom of Great Britain, and became the first states in the U.S.
The flag is tightly wrapped around the flagpole, which functions as the pole of the spear. As Lancer is the Heroic Spirit of the personification of America at a relatively young age, she is concerned primarily with expansionism and violent revolution. Thus, her Noble Phantasm is the same way. A touch from Old Glory will inflict...interesting effects. Most notably, any homeland bonus that the enemy might have possessed will begin to fade. America’s global reach is obvious, and its position as a superpower acts to suppress the idiosyncrasies of other nations and heroes. This is the “virus of imperialism” at work, ironically used to force freedom onto others. In addition to one’s fame boost being reduced to nothing, the “virus” will spread to “liberate” other parts of the Servant. As the virus takes hold and reduces Lancer and the victim to an equal quotient of “American”, the victim will also notice a decrease in their combat level. To rebel against one’s own country is a capital sin, leaving the virus with no choice but to rebel against its host from within. If allowed to become fully infected, the victim will be treated as “colonized”, forcing Nature of a Rebellious Spirit of A+ rank onto them, effectively becoming inconsolable. They’ll also become matted over with pretty pulsing veins of red, white, and blue, so look on the bright side.
However, the virus can be applied to other concepts as well. Since its main task is to “liberate”, it can be used effectively in a supporting venture as well. Stabbing a locked door will liberate the lock from the door completely, etc.
Lore
Columbia is a historical and poetic name used for the United States of America and also as one of the names of its female personification. It has given rise to the names of many persons, places, objects, institutions, and companies; e.g., Columbia University, the District of Columbia (the national capital), and the ship Columbia Rediviva, which would give its name to the Columbia River. Images of the Statue of Liberty largely displaced Columbia as the female symbol of the U.S. by around 1920.
Columbia is a New Latin toponym, in use since the 1730s for the Thirteen Colonies. It originated from the name of Italian explorer Christopher Columbus and from the ending -ia, common in Latin names of countries (paralleling Britannia, Gallia etc.).
Parameters
Strength: EX
Endurance: EX
Agility: E
Mana: E
Luck: C
NP: D
Height/Weight: 150’/450,000lbs
Gender: “Female”
Likes: Liberty
Dislikes: Tyranny
Talents: Being huge
Natural enemy: Rust
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement: (EX)
Mad Enhancement is the Class Skill that characterizes a Berserker, raising basic parameters in exchange of hindering mental capacities. In some cases, it also affects and/or seals away some techniques, Personal Skills and Noble Phantasms.
Because Berserker never had any sanity to lose in the first place, her rank in Mad Enhancement is incalculable in the sense that it doesn’t matter. Parameters are not treated as rank up, but her combat ability is strengthened somewhat. Partially due to Mad Enhancement and partially due to her body, she is incapable of speech and complex reasoning. However she is an adequate listener, and will always attempt to enact her Master’s will to the best of her abilities. One just needs to be patient and prepare for collateral. And within earshot.
Personal Skills:
Mechanized Automaton: (-)
Denotes one who is an automaton, an artificial being animated solely by the will of another. While Berserker is technically the mechanized shell used to house a true Divine Spirit, the nature of the World still recognizes her as such an existence. Provides immunity to any variety of Skills, Magecraft or Noble Phantasms that target the mind. This Skill has no rank, as it is not a unique "ability" Berserker has, but rather simply an inherent facet of her own existence. As a side effect of this, Luck is treated as always being ranked C, regardless of any stat buffs the Servant receives.
As an automaton made entirely of metal, Berserker has received all of the benefits and detriments of one possessing Mechanized Armor as skin. She can be dismembered with no immediate impediment to her combat capability (other than severe loss of mobility), however she will surely die if her spiritual core is destroyed. Also, she has an inherent weakness to intense heat and other elements and techniques that would naturally pose a threat to metal.
Divinity (False): (E+++)
Divinity is the measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. At high levels one is treated as a mixed race of a Divine Spirit, and the level declines when the Heroic Spirit's own rank as a Monster or Demonic Beast raises. It can also decrease due to one's dislike for the gods. Those who have A Rank Divinity or above has reached the throne of a god. It also has an effect which reduces special defensive values called 'purge defense' in proportion to the Divinity's Rank. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig.
The false variant of this skill is earned not by proclaiming oneself to be a god and wholeheartedly believing in it, but by attempting to contain the essence of a Divine Spirit in a modern shell.
The “embodiment” of the Roman goddess Libertas, who was officially recognized as such upon the introduction of the Roman Republic. By technicality, Berserker is able to exhibit a pseudo-rank in Divinity equivalent to A. However, the more damage she takes, the more the concept of a metal monstrosity containing a true goddess becomes unbelievable, and her divine power “leaks out” to almost nil.
From Sea to Shining Sea: (B)
The seven pointed crown that Berserker wears, and her symbol of authority of those seeking refuge or acceptance that carries across all seven continents and seven seas. It acts as a (literal) mechanized magical crest, designed in such a way that those attempting to harm New York from the harbor by magical means would be rebuffed by Berserker’s simple existence.
Instead of being able to force mana out through the crest, Berserker is instead capable of absorbing magical attacks directed against the crest from the outside. Similar to Galvanism, thaumaturgical attacks involving no material existence—wind manipulation, energy bullets, beam attacks—are converted to prana and rendered without effect, discharged into the environment. Due to the nature of her body, healing herself with absorbed energy is difficult, if not impossible. Also due to her immense size, the relatively small “magical lightning rods” are really only effective in protecting the head and facial area, however it extends to all angles.
Guardian Spirit: (EX)
Not quite a patron saint and not quite a guardian knight, this skill encompasses every other kind of protective spirit. Vivian (The Lady of the Lake) and Thetis (Achilles’ mother) would qualify for this skill.
Berserker’s placement on the Island of Liberty was purposefully done in order to have her be one of the first things new immigrants would see upon entering the United States through Ellis Island. Therefore she can be considered a protective spirit on a continental level. As a later incarnation of the infant America’s protector goddess, and one specializing in the protection of such a vast country, Berserker only gains defensive buffs when protecting copious amounts of land or people. Because of the necessary scope for activation, this skill is usually sealed.
Noble Phantasm
Mother of Exiles Liberty Enlightening The World
(Anti-Army, D) “Not like the brazen giant of Greek fame,
With conquering limbs astride from land to land;
Here at our sea-washed, sunset gates shall stand
A mighty woman with a torch, whose flame
Is the imprisoned lightning, and her name
Mother of Exiles. From her beacon-hand
Glows world-wide welcome; her mild eyes command
The air-bridged harbor that twin cities frame.
“Keep, ancient lands, your storied pomp!” cries she
with silent lips. “Give me your tired, your poor,
Your huddled masses yearning to breathe free,
The wretched refuse of your teeming shore.
Send these, the homeless, tempest-tost to me,
I lift my lamp beside the golden door!””
The Noble Phantasm of Berserker that takes the place of her gigantic torch. Sublimating the promise of protection and liberty storied in the Emma Lazarus poem that begat the same inscription on Berserker’s pedestal, Mother of Exiles is a non-intrusive non combat Noble Phantasm that seemingly does nothing but good. Holding her torch high, the flickering flame illuminates an incredibly large area, justifying its Anti-Army classification. Bathed under the torch’s light, it acts to remove the various woes that afflict the poor who threw themselves upon her care.
However, just as the poem and Berserker herself personify ideals, so too does the torch. It doesn’t physically remove status ailments and the like, but rather allows for those under Mother of Exiles’ protection to unconsciously ignore them. While this may be beneficial to allies in the short run, someone harshly poisoned will still eventually succumb, even if they no longer act like it affects them. The same goes for the entire concept of pain. An enemy may lose a hand and not even realize it because the pain response has been removed, however the fact the hand is gone doesn’t change. An exhibition of Berserker’s mercy, she likes to bathe her enemies in the numbing pleasure of her acceptance before unceremoniously crushing them. The torch itself may used as a battering weapon, but it will almost always disable one of her hands with how often she holds it.
Lore
The Statue of Liberty is a colossal neoclassical sculpture on Liberty Island in New York Harbor in New York City, in the United States. The copper statue, a gift from the people of France to the people of the United States, was designed by French sculptor Frédéric Auguste Bartholdi and built by Gustave Eiffel. The statue was dedicated on October 28, 1886.
The Statue of Liberty is a robed female figure representing Libertas, the Roman goddess. She holds a torch above her head, and in her left arm carries a tabula ansata inscribed "July 4, 1776", the date of the U.S. Declaration of Independence. A broken chain lies at her feet. The statue became an icon of freedom and of the United States, and was a welcoming sight to immigrants arriving from abroad.
Bartholdi was inspired by French law professor and politician Édouard René de Laboulaye, who is said to have commented in 1865 that any monument raised to U.S. independence would properly be a joint project of the French and U.S. peoples. Due to the post-war instability in France, work on the statue did not commence until the early 1870s. In 1875, Laboulaye proposed that the French finance the statue and the U.S. would provide the site and build the pedestal. Bartholdi completed the head and the torch-bearing arm before the statue was fully designed, and these pieces were exhibited for publicity at international expositions.
The torch-bearing arm was displayed at the Centennial Exposition in Philadelphia in 1876, and in Madison Square Park in Manhattan from 1876 to 1882. Fundraising proved difficult, especially for the Americans, and by 1885 work on the pedestal was threatened due to lack of funds. Publisher Joseph Pulitzer of the New York World started a drive for donations to complete the project that attracted more than 120,000 contributors, most of whom gave less than a dollar. The statue was constructed in France, shipped overseas in crates, and assembled on the completed pedestal on what was then called Bedloe's Island. The statue's completion was marked by New York's first ticker-tape parade and a dedication ceremony presided over by President Grover Cleveland.
The statue was administered by the United States Lighthouse Board until 1901 and then by the Department of War; since 1933 it has been maintained by the National Park Service. Public access to the balcony surrounding the torch has been barred for safety reasons since 1916.
I really really like Servants that are drastically different depending on what class they're summoned into like Jack. I'm not sure what brought it on, but these are supposed to be the same general Heroic Spirit.
Might add Personality later.
Last edited by Ail Don; April 16th, 2017 at 02:59 AM.
Wow, those are both pretty good, and as you said the contrast between the two is quite striking. I like the shift in focus between offensive and defensive between the two.
think you have the wrong ranking for Divinity (False). Shouldn't it be like A- or something?
Also, this is more idle speculation than anything actually important, but presumably someone like James K. Polk would possess a skill or NP based around Manifest Destiny in some capacity. That's very unimportant though.
Honestly, the sheets are well enough made that I'm having a hard time thinking of something meaninful to say, which is usually a good sign. Personality section wouldn't hurt but we kind of already get a sense of what they're like just reading the sheets.
America/Columba: Wow, those are two really good sheets. Were they inspired at all by my speculations about doing an "embodiment of America" Servant a few dozen pages ago? In any case, they're both very well-written, skirting the line between patriotic nationalism and a more sinister take. I think I like the first one a bit better, but the idea of the statue of liberty running around whacking people in the name of FREEDOM is pretty amazing as well.
I also appreciate that you used (a renamed version of) the Automaton Skill I gave to the Golem Of Prague ages ago, though a little credit might've been nice.
- - - Updated - - -
Originally Posted by Sunny
A personal request, but can I ask what anyone thinks of the one I posted last page? I always have the worst timing and consistently manage to post at the end of a page, lol. Curious if it still needs work.
Didn't have much to comment on Cagliostro when she first showed up, but she's good. Lively personality, creative Skills and NP... can't really think of any faults to pick at offhandedly.
I think I like the first one a bit better, but the idea of the statue of liberty running around whacking people in the name of FREEDOM is pretty amazing as well.
I agree.
And now I can't help but imagine Berserker sounding just like Liberty Prime from Fallout 3.
Edit: also, classic Ghostbusters shenanigans (...it would probably work like a charm in FGO's extended setting).
Good job in my opinion, Ali, on both Servants/aspects.
Last edited by Der Geist; April 16th, 2017 at 03:10 PM.
Class Skills: Mad Enhancement(EX): The Class Skill that characterizes a Berserker, raising basic parameters in exchange of hindering mental capacities. In some cases, it also affects and/or seals away some techniques, Personal Skills and Noble Phantasms. Black Knight will become highly protective of her Master, madness warping her views to view her summoner to be Laudine, whom she values above all else in the world. Who is all she values in the world. Magic Resistance(C): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
Personal Skills: Battle Continuation (A+): Skill that allows for the continuation of combat after sustaining mortal wounds. It will also reduce mortality rate from injury. This Skill represents the ability to survive and/or the mentality of one who doesn't know when to give up, consisting of one's strength of vitality in predicaments. It is also one of the powers of a vampire. The best result is achieved when a resilient body is combined with this Skill.
**Note: A+ Battle Continuation was just my way of playing upon the "But a scratch!" trope that we all know and love from Monty Python. In her backstory she actually used this in concert with her Devout Guardian skill to bring herself to Laudine's side once more in a futile attempt to defeat the Knights, lunging forth from the ground while missing her body below the waist and slowly dying before decapitation. It could be chalked up to just sheer determination to defend her charges.
Instinct (B): The ability to instantly identify “the best personal course of action” during combat. Because this Skill allows for the prediction of trajectory, it is possible to avoid attacks from firearms.
Devout Guardian (A): A sixth sense to detect when the Master is in danger and return to their side within an instant.
Noble Phantasm:
-Vengeful Forest Spirit of Broceliande *Type: (Anti-Army) *Rank: (A)
Once the steadfast spirit protector of Broceliance Forest, the Black Knight finds no rest from this duty even after death at the hands of Ywain and his band of Knights. Upon activation, targets will find themselves upon the doorstep of Avalon itself, where the spirit's defensive nature is at it's strongest: the Magic Fountain upon which men come to pillage the magical powers of Gaia. Within this reality marble, the Black Knight calls upon the powers of Gaia and sends those with ill intent into a spiral of insanity to attack the mind as ghosts of the forest attack the body. Black Knight gains boost to all parameters within the short-lived marble space.
True Name:
Esclados the Red, known as the Black Knight of Arthurian Legend. A Natural Spirit of Gaia created to protect the magic fountain that served as a window into Avalon's beauty. Befriends an impoverished Lady named Laudine who displays a shocking lack of interest in the fountain or its powers. Soon comes to face Ser Calogrenant of the Round table and defeats him in battle, only to draw the ire of his cousin, Ywain. Ywain confronts Esclados with a party consisting of himself, Bedivere, Lancelot, Gawain, and Galahad. The Black Knight is defeated and Lady Laudine is convinced of mind control magics being placed upon her person by the "evil supernatural knight".
Black Knight: Why is the text all dark? Yes it might fit thematically, but it's also really annoying to read.
Other then that, this is an interesting sheet for an obscure character of Arthurian myth. Though I think you could stand to include more detail in her Skills section, especially describing how her variant of Mad Enhancement works (since it's ranked EX I presume she's not just the usual "RAWR smash stuff!". Battle Continuation could also use some justification, particularly at such a high rank. (Seriously, that's higher then freaking Heracles!)
Whoops. I have my site theme set to light so the dark text was a default. And to be honest the Battle Continuation was just me playing with the " 'tis but a scratch!" joke we all love so much.
Ah. It looks like my questions regarding her Skills were already explained in the PDF file you provided. Have to say, I think given her feats Battle Continuation at that rank is more then justified. The only thing I can say is that you might want to include some references to the lore in her Skills, rather then separating them out entirely, but it's really your choice.
I also appreciate the effort you put into her lore, making it out as an actual short story rather then just a dry history lesson.
Originally Posted by Ail Don
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