You're dead and all you can think about is the treasure which cursed you in the first place.Originally Posted by Fafnir
That's some greed!
You're dead and all you can think about is the treasure which cursed you in the first place.
That's some greed!
The shinies are very, very important.
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Well, its about time I uploaded one of my servants as well. I have too many of them. I kinda like creating them, as soon as I have an idea about how I can make a servant with a kinda new feeling to it. Starting with a pretty powerful one in my mind. Perhaps i overdid it a bit, dunno:
Real Name: Odysseus
Servant Class: Rider
Gender: Male
Height/Weight: 171cm/72kg
Alignment: Neutral
History: One of the heroes of the Trojan War and furthermore the main hero of the greek Odyssey. He was a legendary king of Ithaca, married to Penelope. He was well known for his brilliance and versatility. In short a cunning trickster. A huge part of his popularity comes from his ten-years lasting voyage back home after the end of the Trojan War, where he was the inventor of the Trojan-Horse-idea, thus making it possible for Troy to be conquered by him and his men. On his voyage he defeated a lot of supernatural foes including sirens and giants, tricked a cyclops, met with the witch Circe and even resisted the God's anger.
Wish: While he may tell that he has no real wish other than competing in the tournament and having a real blast fighting all other servants and experiencing yet another great adventure when asked about it, he may have some hidden aim. Maybe he wants to pay a visit to his now-immortal wive Penelope and mock her for taking his son as a husband. Maybe he wishes to change the past. Unless he wins, he probably won't tell anyone.
Status:
Strength: B
Endurance: B
Agility: A
Mana: B
Luck: A
Noble Phantasm: EX
Class Abilities:
Riding: A
Ability to ride things. Can ride everything besides demonic and holy creatures.
Magic Resistance: B
Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for him to be affected.
Personal Skills:
Divinity: D
As an remote relative to Hermes and Chone Rider gained a D Rank in Divinity.
Survival Specialist: A+
The skill to always survive, no matter the circumstances or obstacles. If there is even a slight possibility to stay alive, the servant will use it. No matter what he has to do in order to make it happen. One could say that it is almost impossible to kill him. On the A+ rank it is even possible to fight off the anger of Gods.
Military Mastermind: A+
The ability of warfare mastery. A charismatic leader and ruthless tactician at the same time. He uses whatever trick is necessary in order to make his foes admit defeat. Somewhat works like both Charisma and Military Tactis compressed in one skill. This ability is awarded to people who greatly influenced important battlefields. On the A+ rank it is possible to change even the outcome and results of a whole war.
Noble Phantasms:
Gift of Αἴολος - Protection from the Wind God
Typ: Anti-Unit
Rank: D+
Range: 20
Maximum number of targets: 20 persons
A bag of wind given to him by the God of wind. It contains all the winds but the west wind. Rider is able to use this wind to further fasten his movement, making it able for him to keep up even with the strongest of servants. When used wind will pulsate roughly around him, indicating his connection to the wind God. Alternatively, he is able to strengthen his attacks with the speed of wind. For example he is able to kind of enchant his arrows with the wind making them fast enough to keep up even with modern firearms. Moreover he can open the bag to unleash a one-time only B-rank wind-based attack against his opponent. If he chooses to do so, he is unable to use this Noble Phantasm for the rest of the war.
Twelve Shot Takedown - Sureshot Firearm of Certain Hit
Typ: Anti-Unit
Rank: B+
Range: 300
Maximum number of targets: 10 persons
A conceptual attack usable with any kind of weapon which can be used as projectile and in any battle stance. It can be an arrow, a dagger, even a sword if thrown. A lightning-fast attack with the strength of twelve attacks combined in one. The manifestation of his feat of firing an arrow through twelve axe shafts after returning home to his wife Penelope. Only he out off all the suitors was able to pull this off.
Armaments of Achilles
Typ: Anti-Unit/Defense
Rank: B-B+
Range: ???
Maximum number of targets: ???
The shield and spear of Achilles, which Odysseus were able to get after his death. To do so he had to defeat Ajax in a battle, after which he was considered the bravest of the Greeks. While he may not be able to wield them on the same level as his previous possessor, mainly because his main weapon is a bow, he has still some kind of attachment to them. The shield of Achilles is able to fend off an enormous amount of attacks, a multi-layered shield much like Rho Aias. Meanwhile is the spear of Achilles able to inflict wounds which cannot be healed, unless the spear itself is destroyed.
My Name is Οὖτις - The mystic lie
Typ: Anti-Unit
Rank: B+
Range: 20
Maximum number of targets: 5 persons
"My Name is Nobody". The ability to trick his foes. In his past he was able to convince a cyclops that "Nobody" blinded him, thus making it possible for him to escape. In the Grail War he can make use of this to erease the memories of a small group of targeted foes making them think they fought another opponent all the time. They will forget every detail of their encounter with Rider, to the point where their status screens are altered artificially. Gained knowledge of his identity, skills or Noble Phantasm can of this encounter can thus be resetted. Depending on a Luck-Check however, it is possible to render the Noble Phantasm useless. Furthermore it can be used only once against one and the same opponent. That's why Rider has to be careful whenever he chooses to reveal himself, because he can use this trick only once.
The Great Odyssey - Trial of the Gods
Typ: Defense
Rank: A+
Range: ???
Maximum number of targets: 1
One of the greatest feats of Odysseus. He was the sole survivor of The Odyssey, thus making him one of the most famous survival experts in the history of mankind. He was able to get past a lot of hurdles in order to reach his home land after ten years in total. In the Holy Grail War he is able to manifest this Noble Phantasm as a one-time-only conceptual protection against any kind of otherwise deadly attack targeted at him. The enemy's attack will just miss its target caused by the effect of the Noble Phantasm, making it able for Odysseus to live on. But, as stated above, it can be used only once. Afterwards he is unable to use this ability.
The Trojan Horse – The Ultimate Trophy
Typ: Anti-Fortress
Rank: EX
Range: ???
Maximum number of targets: 2000
The most famous feat of Odysseus and one of the strongest Noble Phantasm possibly imaginable. It is the greatest Anti-Fortress and Anti-Defense Noble Phantasm mankind has invented. The Trojan Horse alone was able to breach the defenses of Troy allowing the greek forces to conquer the city and winning the war in the process. In this war this Noble Phantasm starts off as a small wooden horse. Rider can give it to any person he wishes. Depending on a Luck-Check, they may not refuse this present. In the course of the following hours, if brought home, the wooden horse will prepare. In this time, even a well-versed magician will have a hard time feeling magic energy in it. Once nighttime, it will expand rapidly, gaining height as is required for the "Fortress" it is destined to breach. Once activated, every enemy Defense Noble Phantasm within a wide range will loose effectiveness. Furthermore Rider will directly beneath the wooden horse, along with his forty compainions with whom he breached Troy. Each of those is by himself a Heroic Spirit, able to kill off most normal humans without a chance for them to resist. Ultimatelty, if he wishes to, he can blast his wooden horse and deal damage comparable to an A+ ranked explosive attack, damaging everyone besides Rider and the forty summons he controls. If he decides to do this, the horse cannot be used again for the remainder of the war.
Notes:
Spoiler:
I'll quote to this to illustrate my main qualm with the sheet. I guess first I might add that I'm not too much of a fan.
In any case. If the intention was to retain all his stuff to perserve his uniqueness I feel like that kind of falls flat on its face since he can just do everything. There is no real consistent theme. He's not just a better trickster. He is almost unkillable due to an A+ Skill and NP, has an EX-rank NP possibly more powerful than Ionian Hetairoi, a variety of different offensive Noble Phantasm, a personal skill that is just two other ones rolled and the ability to completely shut out any planning against someone who occassionally relies on powerful stratagems, denying him any kind of weaknesses barring Ea. To top it all off his base-stats are ridiculous, especially for a Rider.
I guess that's worth bringing up too! Looking at the sheet there's nothing to indicate that he's a Rider because he just does so many damn things!
As for suggestions? Just cut out like, tons of crap. Odysseus possession of Achilles' armaments were extremely brief. He simply won them from Ajax so he could give it to who he percieved traditionally deserved it, that is, Achilles' son. He has a few too many concepts as Noble Phantasms. The Great Odyssey could be argued to be a Noble Phantasm but its effect is so brief as to render just another footnote in his massive arsenal, especially since he has a broken personal skill that almost does the same thing already! The same goes for The Mystic Lie, it is ridiculously powerful, that in itself isn't too bad, but compound that onto the rest of his set and it just seems like a way covering up any kind of weakness.
Then there is Military Mastermind which just seems very uninspired. Whenever I see a skill that is just blatantly two skills in one I inwardly groan. Not only is it stupid to stack someone like that it also seems like a way to mask uncreativity as something original. If you wanna keep the theme I'd probably retool it as something called like "Endless Stratagems" or whatever that reflected his deceptive strategic abilities. His charming attributes came from his silver tongue, which is reflected in your Mystic Lie Noble Phantasm but which I would say'd fit better as a Personal Skill. Survival Specialist seems very boring and I very much would recommend retooling it in a way that better reflects his tricky nature.
Sorry for the wall of negativity, but I honestly feel like a better job can be done here to make him more compelling instead of just piling on an innumerable amount of stuff onto him without thinking of how it all fits together.
Last edited by Petrikow; March 28th, 2014 at 10:01 PM.
This one is pretty good. Maybe his Riding skill is too high, B would be enough. Personal Skills are nice and good. Well, the NP. There are too many of them, even counting that they are all explained and have basis in his story.
Well, Wind Bag. I do think that it for D+ has too much utility. Up his speed to strongest Servants? Power up to his attacks to unknown level? Either you should change it Rank, or just say that it is temporarily gives a + to STR/AGI for example.(And if activated as B+, gives either temp A+ STR or A++ AGI). Twelve Shot Takedown - Sureshot Firearm of Certain Hit - legend implying that it was SUPERaccurate not SUPERstrong or something. Well, I do think that this NP is much more suited for Archer class. And you know maybe it should be unacceptable while he is Rider class. Armaments of Achilles is the most suited NP for Rider class from all, and I like it. Even if it can be changed to another one-time stats up due to his brief owning of them. The mystic lie - is good and quite unique skill. But this one and some another NPs and Skills makes me actually think that his best class can be Assasin from all. Well, lol.
Now, where real problems starts. The Great Odyssey is basically a one-time Avalon. And it gives like full defence againts one NP attack, even Ea or Excali level. I would say that it is much closer to A++ or even EX. Also, the whole conceipt of "can nullify one attack" is going pretty wrong with "survived 20 years with non-stop death danger and God's wrath". I actually can't imagine how to possible change it, but I am sure with one thing. It should be his main NP, even if Horse is genuine trick that changed a war, it is more known as just idea, not his unique doing. While his 20 years of Odyssey is basically his entire life "doing" and his own legend, where his heroic doings break fate. And much more people know him from this adventure than Horse trick in the end. And, finally, EX Trojan Horse. I feel that this skill is terribly wrong. While it genuiely works againts Fortresses, it like almost useless againts single Servant. It is not like random people give you a small wooden horse each day and your accept it. Especially if you are Servant. Almost all of them will recognize his real identity immediately he "gives" them a present. And if you want to make it effective you will need to use one-time Mystic lie, then this is some bullshit for EX skill. Also, when they are directly fighting each other, Rider goes "Wait a sec, I have a present for you, and because you are Eluck Lancer you can't decline my offer". Well, funny. And it is not like there is just a slight warranty that Servant will keep it for some hours or Rider will be ever alive for this time. Especially, when fight is bad enough for him to take a decision of using EX NP. Yes, idea is nice and all, but adaptation for HGW sucks and not even close to EX lvl. Also, with all that skills I thought that he is better suited for Assasin class. Well, at least Present Concealment will help him a little with correctly utilizing this EX NP, as well as his another "trick" skills. Btw, in current form it can be succesfully used to kill enemy Masters. And that's one more reason to make him an Assasin. Some easy solution, I think, can be achieved with creating three different sets of NPs for Archer/Rider/Assasin. This will reduce his powerlevel, but at least it would be easier to correct three different sheets and not trying to balance one big. But, overall, I liked the idea.
Last edited by Riesbyfe; March 28th, 2014 at 10:09 PM.
When we have shuffled off this mortal coil,
Must give us pause: there's the respect
That makes calamity of so long life;
I'm surprised he isn't an Archer given that that was his greatest forte, iirc. Nobody else could even use his bow, which definitely sounds like a Noble Phantasm to me, probably around B or B+, but you don't seem to have it listed except as part of a generic 'use any weapon' ability. The other things that really represent Odysseus are probably the Trojan Horse and the Odyssey. For the horse, it should probably either be an inferior version of Ionian Hetaroi or it should be like Solomon's NP and require the gathering of materials. Possibly both. More on the Odyssey later. He doesn't need nor merit other NPs.
Skills like Independent Action would also suit him and he has the same tricky nature that many of the Archers do. Shouldn't Survival Specialist be Eye of the Mind (True)? Also, if you must keep the great odyssey, I'd make it a passive skill that situationally raises his endurance and insight, not a noble phantasm that outright blocks attacks. I'd drop Magic Resistance down a rank. He lived during the age of the gods, but Circe's magic would have worked on him without divine assistance, so going by the story his magic resistance was no better than anyone else's. Divine assistance that was not something he could really rely on either, mind you.
His stats also look very high for a hero that wasn't even the greatest fighter there but rather the tactician. Sure, Odysseus was strong, but he was not the best of the best and your given stats make him that way. Strength and agility are a little suspect and given the whole Odyssey is a really inconsistent level of luck depending on what god was paying attention to him it should probably be a significantly lower score but with a + modifier.
Class containers are supposed to restrict a Servant. Give him multiple classes and split up the Phantasms across them. Also his stats can then change as needed instead of being way too high for a Rider.
And even then I'd say cut or revamp a lot of the things.
And yes I know I'm being hypocritical given my Odysseus but he had reasons.
Isn't Mystic Lie basically Jack the Ripper's Information Erasure
Originally he was going to be Ilya's Servant in Tabula Rasa (because I had another Servant become Berserker and Heracles is too OP when he isn't under ME), but decided to scrap him in favor of another Heroic Spirit now that I'm rewriting all my story arcs. Keep in mind that this is a paste from my notes 2 years ago and may not mesh with facts learned about Karna's life from CCC or Apocrypha.
If you're wondering about the Divine Astras Personal Skill, it actually allows him to use most of these, and hence is a ridiculously OP skill under a Master who can supply infinite prana like Ilya. It would probably would have been sealed because Arjuna was summoned in Germany and only exists as a hypothetical skill on the Servant profile.
Arjuna
Class: Rider (can also be summoned as Archer)
Master: Ilyasviel von Einzbern
Alignment: Lawful Good
Sex: Male
Height: 175cm
Weight: 64kg
Armament: Chariot, Bow, Armor
STR: B
CON: B
AGI: A
MGI: A+
LCK: A
Noble Phantasm: A++
Legend
Arjuna, one of the five Pandava princes of the Mahabharata epic, was considered to be the finest archer and a peerless warrior by many notable figures in the Mahabharata. He was said to combine the best of his brothers' legendary attributes; possessing Yudhisthira's intellect, Bhima's strength, and Sahadeva and Nakula's grace and beauty.
Arjuna was born to Kunti as a blessing the king of gods, Indra. At a very young age he got acclaim for his sincerity and skill in archery. He was known for his steadfastness and single mindedness in pursuing his goals. He was instrumental in winning Draupadi in a contest for himself and his brothers as their joint wife. He also married Subhadra, the sister of the god Krishna, who became his mentor and guide for the rest of his life.
Apart from archery, he also excelled in the arts of dancing, singing and acting. By virtue of his loyalty to Krishna, Arjuna had the fortune of receiving the divine knowledge of the Bhagavad-Gita. In the Mahabharata war he played a very crucial role by slaying such warriors as Bhishma, Karna, Dronacharya and Jayadhrata. He was the only undefeated hero in the Mahabharata.
Class Skills
Riding: A+
All vehicles and all beasts including those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be freely operated. However, this still does not apply to members of the Dragon Kind. While Arjuna was an extremely accomplished rider, his chariot was often operated by Krishna to allow him to concentrate on archery. Summoned in the Rider class, Arjuna has access to the divine chariot he rode on during the Mahabharata war, a chariot that moves according to Arjuna's will as if it were still being charioteered by Krishna himself.
Magic Resistance: C
Negates Magecraft with an aria of two verses or lower. Cannot defend against large-scale Magecraft such as High-Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals.
Personal Skills
Clairvoyance: A
Clairvoyance is superior visual perception that supplements long-range aiming and increases dynamic vision. At Arjuna's level, not only is he capable of tracking fast-moving objects at a distance of 10km and picking up subtle details such as lip movement from that distance, he is able to predict an attacker’s next move from the slightest muscle tension in their body and counter-attack or dodge without any wasted movement.
Divine Astras: A
The ability to invoke the divine mysteries presided over by specific gods in one's armaments. By incanting the name of the astra in the language spoken during the Age of Gods, Arjuna's weapon is endowed with the power of the respective god, making it impossible to counter by regular means. The knowledge of the astra's incantation is not sufficient to employ it, often requiring direct interaction with the god involved, and as such, their use was lost soon after the Age of Gods. At this rank, Arjuna can continuously invoke any astra not in the domain of the Trimurti (Brahma, Krishna and Shiva) just by expending prana.
Divinity: A
As the son of the king of gods, the sky god Indra, and having united with Indra after death, Arjuna possesses the highest Divine Spirit aptitude. This Divine Spirit aptitude exhibits high defensive power in regards to lightning deity-lineage's Heroic Spirits of Divinity B or lower.
Prana Burst (Lightning): A
The power to put prana into weapons. In Arjuna's case, prana becomes crackling lightning to dwell in the weapon used. This skill is usually active and all the weapons that Arjuna grasps receive this effect.
Protection from Sleep: A
A master of his mind and senses, Arjuna is capable of entering the superconscious state of samadhi. With his system absolutely relaxed as if in suspended animation, every cell of his body gains complete rest, allowing him to rejuvenate himself in a fraction of the time he would normally require. This allows him to fight continuously without tiring, and recover from injuries rapidly.
Noble Phantasms
Gandiva: Conqueror of the World
Rank: B
Type: -
Range: -
Maximum Targets: -
A divine bow born spontaneously during the creation of the world, Gandiva was used and worshipped by the gods for millennia before Agni, god of fire, gave it to Arjuna along with two inexhaustible quivers. The bow is decorated with hundreds of gold bosses, and has radiant ends. When twanged, it makes the sound of thunder. It is said that beside Krishna no one except Arjuna could wield the bow in the mortal world. Every projectile launched with Gandiva ignores air resistance, and there exists no arrow that cannot be launched with this bow.
Svetavahana: O Krishna, Bestow me your Protection
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Army
Range: -
Maximum Targets: -
This luxurious golden chariot upon which both Krishna and Arjuna rode was given to Arjuna by the fire god Agni. It is capable of conquering all directions, wherever it was drawn throughout the three worlds. The chariot is yoked with the four divine white steeds of Krishna, the god of protection. On the top of the chariot flies the standard of Hanuman, a hero and central figure of the Ramayana epic.
The offensive power of this Noble Phantasm is negligible. However, by virtue of Krishna's blessing, it moves according to Arjuna's thoughts, as if the god himself were still charioteering it. The standard of Hanuman bestows the blessing of the wind god, Vayu, who was Hanuman's father, allowing the chariot to fly and move at speeds greater than any modern vehicle. Additionally, by virtue of its divine protection that allowed it to withstand several Anti-Country weapons during the Mahabharata War, it is invulnerable to any type of attack until the end of the current war, at which point it will receive all the accumulated damage it sustained at once.
Pasupata: O Shiva, Devastate the Earth
Rank: A++
Type: Anti-Army, Anti-Country
Range: 1-99
Maximum Targets: 1000 People
The Pasupata is the irresistible and most destructive personal astra or weapon of Shiva, god of destruction. Never to be used against lesser enemies or by lesser warriors, the Pasupata is capable of destroying creation and vanquishing all beings. After performing intense penance for Shiva, Arjuna passed his test and was granted knowledge of this weapon. Rather than a physical weapon, it is the application of a Divine Mystery upon an ordinary arrow, and is separate from ordinary astras because of its origins, immense prana requirement and conditions for use. It cannot be blocked by any defense created by humans and follows the enemy until it hits. Additionally, it cannot be used against any opponent without a Noble Phantasm of A Rank or higher. The Pasupata can only be invoked once in a war, and a second attempt will rebound on the user.
Very, very similar to the one I made, two years ago.
Haha, can't say more than that. I guess we think alike.
Just read yours and you're right. I guess Gandiva was a given, and you attached the astras to the bow (which makes a lot of sense in retrospect). I wanted to deviate from Karna's NPs so I elected not to give him Brahmastra and Brahmashira (even though he definitely has them in the legend). I guess we both based his skills on Karna's, because they were essentially opposing sides of a coin.
Well, I envisioned Gandiva more as a Gate of Babylon-esque delivery system, since it's noticed that the bow is so effective on account of it being able to use all the astras. You can notice I also have a skill that actually signifies Arjuna's possession of the Astra (Divine Protection: A+). I made him a mirror image of Karna very intentionally, since they are among the most well known rivals in Mythology.
Funnily enough I used to have drafts which included Pashupatastra but didn't include due to confusing Hindu mythology continuity. Apparently Pashupatastra and Brahmashira can be interpreted as serving the same story purpose in the Mahabharata. They are different depending on the versions. The most commonly accepted compiled version of the Mahabharata, instead, confusingly has both in them!
Man, I really need to resume reading the Mahabharata... to think that I still have all the Ramayana also... D:
In... heathen Italian!?
<NEW FIC!> Revolution #9: Somewhere out there, there's a universe in which your mistakes and failures never happened, and all you wished for is true. How hard would you fight to make that real?
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Reading the Mahabharata is kind of painful. Through all the book-mining required to have composed the entire narrative it feels kind of a like a hodge-podge.
I personally stopped trying to read the complete version and read a reduced edition. Maybe better if you know Sanskrit!
One of my ex-roommates gave me the Mahabharata in comic form when I told him I wanted to know about Arjuna and it's pretty interesting to read (though it's as thick as the oxford comprehensive).
Hi everyoneI'm new here and I don't know if there are any rules of posting here since I didn't see anything in the first page.
True Name: Xerxes I
Alias: King of Nations, The Destroyer
Age: Early 20's
Class: Archer
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Height and Weight: 183 cm, 79 kg
Homeground: Middle East, Half of Europe
Armament: Axe-Sword
SKILLS AND PARAMETERS
Strength: B
Endurance: C
Agility: B
Mana: A
Luck: C
Class Skills
Independent Action: Rank A- Xerxes believes himself as a supreme being. He does not see himself capable of lowering his pride for a mere human let alone a magus. His Master will never be able to see eye to eye to him and defying him would mean death to his Master. Can remain in this world for a week even after losing his Master. However, to use Noble Phantasms of great prana consumption, back up from the Master is necessary
Magic Resitance: Rank C
-Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Territory Creation (FALSE): N/A
-Xerxes was known to have constructed numerous architectural structures. He has a gigantic taste in architecture and buildings and has a deep desire in creation of large infrastructures. Different from a territory created through magical means, this is territory creation attained through superiority as a king and also the Servant's resources.
Personal Skills
Charisma: Rank B
- It is the natural talent to command an army. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. It is said that a rank of B in this skill is sufficient to lead a nation as its King.
Double Summon: N/A
-A special ability that permits possession of class skills of a different class aside from the class the Servant originally belongs to.
Eye for Art: Rank A+
-It is infatuation with works of art. The Servant will definitely be able to determine the identity of infrastructures of a larger scale especially if its origins are similar to his. Rate of determination depends on how far the origins of the structure or piece of art is from the place where his legend originated.
Military Tactics: Rank B-
- It is tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. Bonus modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm. Known for crushing the Greeks, Xerxes has attained a high aptitude in military tactics but received a negative modifier in the rank due to his loss in the Battle of Salamis caused a stain in his repertoire. Also, he usually gives the commanding reins to his Generals but they still report to him nonetheless.
Golden Rule: Rank B+
-It is one's fortune to acquire wealth. Xerxes has enough fortune to build his architectural projects in gigantic scales. Also has enough fortune of usage of peasants and slaves at his will.
Noble Phantasms:
The Stratagem of Great Persian Navy
Name: Artemisia: グレートペルシャ海軍の計略
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C++
Range: 1 to 500
Number of targets: 1 to 9999
Description and Effect:-Spoiler:
The Gate of All Countries
Name: The Grand Stairway and the Gate of Xerxes: すべての国の門
Type: Anti-Country
Rank: A+++
Range: ~
Number of targets: 1 to 9999
Description and Effect:-Spoiler:
Hall of a Hundred Columns
Name: The Throne Room of the Great King: 百列の殿堂
Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: B+
Range: ~
Number of targets: ~
Description and Effect:-Spoiler:
Name: Hellespont: The Punishment of Whips and Chains
Type: Anti-Divine
Rank: N/A
Range: ~
Number of targets: ~
Description and Effect:-Spoiler:
History:
Spoiler:
Last edited by Rotheos; March 29th, 2014 at 10:30 PM. Reason: Added info
1) Too much bolded text. My eyes ;_;
2) Knock Independent Action down from EX. Gilgamesh has a comparable if not greater ego and willfulness, and his IA is not EX.
Oh, everyone else is posting their Arjunas and Karnas? I guess I may as well dig my old one's up as well. Karna received a slight polish to reflect CCC a bit more, now that we know how his armor works. In this particular version I designed them to be very clear mirrors to each other, right down to the skills, as well as wanting them to be more like combat magi than blessed warriors. So my version ended up with them enchanting their arrows with magical incantations that they may well have learned from Divine sources, but which are in effect no more divine than any other magecraft. These guys, in the story, would have been such masters of the astra branch of magecraft that they were only a step away from becoming True Magicians themselves. So their rivalry was as much one of knowledge and magecraft as it was the traditional one we see in the stories and legends.
Karna
Arjuna
Last edited by Vagrant; October 30th, 2014 at 02:32 PM.
did a lot of edits. sorry about the bold. replaced the rank of ie and military tactics. i forgot that iskandar has rank b so i reduced it to same level. also added (FALSE) to territory creation because it is creation not through magical means. added the noble phantasm: Hellespont: The Punishment of Whips and Chains
Last edited by Rotheos; March 29th, 2014 at 10:26 PM.
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