Finally, a lancer that can satisfy Medb…
Finally, a lancer that can satisfy Medb…
inb4 it's another Beast III that we're talking about.
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Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
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Source: Siriuflong
Class: Rider
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Ayrton Senna
Alignment: Neutral Good
Place of Origin: Brazil (20th Century)
Parameters:
STR: D
END: B
AGI: B
MGI: C
LCK: E
NP: C
Height: 181cm
Weight: 120lbs
Likes: Racing, perfection
Dislikes: Imperfection
Talent: Racing cars
Natural Enemy: Francis Drake, Christopher Columbus
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Male, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: Cars produced by Affection of Nippon
Catalyst: His helmet
Class Skills:
Riding C+: He was noted as a racecar driver. He gains this rank, permitting him to ride average vehicles with a decent skill. This ranks up severely with cars, allowing him to perform utterly ridiculous feats with them.
Magic Resistance E: Senna never actually came across magic in life, and as such, gains a minimal rank in this skill.
Personal Skills:
Affection of Nippon A: He was utterly adored by Japan, becoming one of the most famed people from outside of Japan within it, surpassing even Da Vinci, Napoleon, Miyamoto Musashi, Gandhi, Mozart, Zhuge Liang, and Murasaki Shibiru in terms of popularity. As a skill, all Japanese-related heroic spirits will gain an immediate affection for him and he will have a higher chance of obtaining their true name. In addition, he can ask for almost any nonmagical item and it will float down on a paper lantern, though this costs mana and time. He prefers to use this to collect his cars.
Berserk C: He went berserk many times in his life, entering a screaming rage and attacking. As a skill, whenever he is in an extremely stressful situation this activates, ranking up his Strength and making him close to immune to mental interference below B for a duration, but causing him to attack without any sence of control.
Precision Driving A: He was noted for his extremely precise driving to create the maximum possible speed and the minimum possible time, though this came with the flaw that if he miscalculated he would crash, such as in the Dallas Grand Prix, where he collided with a wall because it was a few millimeters off. As a skill, this allows him to relatively easily calculate situations for the "perfect" moving and easily complete it as long as all of the factors he entered are correct.
Noble Phantasm(s):
Atravesse Tunel
I Enter A Trance
Type: Support
Rank: C
Range: 0 meters
Max Targets: Self
He notably "went into a trance" during his greatest races, envisioning it as entering a tunnel. This noble phantasm is the sublimation of that, causing him to, when activated, enter that tunnel, nullifying outside distractions such as Mental Interference and magic that would stop him in order to "create the perfect race".
Lore: Ayrton Senna was one of the most famous Formula 1 drivers of all time, noted for his extreme precision and speed, gaining record numbers of championships in many grand prixes including the Monaco grand prix. He became famed around the world, but most notably in Brazil, his home, and Japan, where his sports fame has never been eclipsed.
Personality: A perfectionist who adores making the perfect run. He dislikes anyone who doesn't strive for perfection or somehow, no matter whether that was unintentional or even unknowably happening, harms his perfection. But he loves to help everyone else. His wish for the grail would merely be to ensure perfection in every run, especially his last, his greatest regret.
Relationships:
Astolfo: "...Hippogriffs exist? Odd. What is your most favorable run?"
Francis Drake: "First person around the world, huh? It would be interesting to race you."
Christopher Columbus: "...Utterly vile...you were revered, but you shouldn't be..."
Barthomelew Roberts: "Impressive strategies, especially your Noble Phantasm."
Boudica: "I truly admire your kindness... even through it all."
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Assassin of the Flourishing Château
-- Empress of the Rose Garden --
Class: Assassin
Other Classes: Caster
True Name: Joséphine Bonaparte
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Origin: France (18th century)
Parameters:
STR: E
END: D
AGI: D
MGI: E
LCK: B
NP: C
Likes: Roses, paintings, sculptures, her dog, staying far, far away from the battlefield
Dislikes: People who would drag her away from her "safe space" (garden), guillotines, standing out
Talent: Gardening, acting, recognizing art, collecting and cultivating new types of roses
Natural Enemy: Napoleon Bonaparte
Armament: Roses, military pistol, ornamental dagger, Fortune
Catalyst: A light pink rose named after her, the Impératrice Joséphine
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm(s)
Lore
Description
Relationships
Bond CE
Creator's notes
Last edited by BnEl15; August 29th, 2022 at 01:35 PM.
As always, amazing sheet, BnEL, especially that 3rd NP. Out of curiosity, how would she get along with my Marie-Anne Lenormand or King Louis XI?
Ayrton Sena: Pretty solid take on a racecar-driver Servant. I feel Affection Of Nippon could easily be A given how much you hyped him up (still lower than my Alice since he can't call on minor magical items).
"Wahahahaa! Get lost all you wannabes, the world's deadliest martial artist has hit the stage! Now then Master, let's go get something to eat! These muscles need calories!"
Berserker of Deadly Hands:
Appearance:
True Name: "Count Dante" (John Keehan)
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Alternate Classes: Assassin, Striker, Faker
Summoning Catalyst: One of his pamphlets advertising the Black Dragon Fighting Society.
Strength- D
Agility- C
Endurance- D
Mana- E
Luck- D
NP- E+
Personality
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement-EXE-
A Skill that characterizes the Berserker Class, sacrificing sanity in return for raw power. Berserker self-declares to possess this Skill at EX-rank. While able to converse and express himself lucidly, he claims an immense bloodlust simmers within him that he can only barely contain, driving him to kill and brutalize his foes. However this is actually just edginess, as Berserker really only has a much lower E- rank that doesn't rob away any of his sanity and just makes him somewhat rougher than usual. The only thing "insane" about Berserker is his belief that Dan-te is the greatest martial arts system in the world.
Personal Skills:
Dan-te- A+++
Otherwise known as Kata-Dante or the Dance of Death. The street-fighting system Berserker himself developed and taught by integrating elements of other more formal styles and honing them to their most brutal and ruthless extent. While other styles balance attack, defense and spiritual cultivation, Dan-te is a martial art made entirely for killing. Whether striking, blocking or dodging every one of Berserker's motions is focused on snatching the opponent's life. Incidentally while this Skill is proclaimed at rank A+++ that's just because as the style he himself invented, Berserker would naturally be a master of it. Compared to other martial arts his proficiency is only C.
Black Dragon Fighting Society- B
A Skill representing the "secret society" that Berserker founded, promising to pass on the secrets of his deadly arts to any who joined. This allows Berserker to form fliers from his own Mana and offer them to others. Upon accepting one the individual is marked one of Berserker's "disciples" (signified by the symbol of a coiled black dragon appearing over their chest), empowering their stats to the pinnacle of what's reasonably possible for the target's body which may reach up to rank E for a Servant if well-trained.
Theoretically Berserker could amass a school of Servant-level fighters through this Skill but as his Master has to sustain these "secondary contracts" with their own Mana, he can't use it to recruit too many people unless they're gifted in a truly prodigious supply of magical energy. This Skill has no effect on other Servants, who are already "complete existences" and wouldn't gain anything from becoming Berserker's disciple.
Dojo Storming- C-
The anecdote of Berserker crashing the rival Green Dragon Dojo with his students to challenge its members brought forth into a Personal Skill. Grants bonus modifiers to Berserker and his allies fighting in enemy territory and against multiple opponents. However reflecting the disastrous end to the so-called "Dojo Wars", which resulted in the death of Berserker's fellow sensei and best friend Jim Koncevic as well as ruining his reputation, their Luck stats are ranked down and his allies suffer an increased likelihood of taking critical hits.
Noble Phantasm
Thanks to NMR-3 for first floating the idea on this figure. I thought of using Mihawk from One Piece for the FC as he's honestly fairly close to how the guy looked IRL, but ultimately couldn't find an art that had the vibe I wanted so I went with one closer personality-wise instead. As usual comments and critique would be welcome. Hope y'all enjoy!
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 24th, 2023 at 07:20 PM.
Haha, I see! My Grand Lancer leaves people speechless!
Peak sheet creation right there, I know.
I get back to reading sheet once i am home
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
Dantes: Wow that is a fascinating idea, especially the false instant kill NP
And thanks for your comments on Senna, I have bumped Affection of Nippon up to A
Thanks. It's not exactly a third NP, closer to the "true" activation of her second. Basically, it's a seemingly serene "safe space" with horrific implications the more she thinks about it, but she normally doesn't want to do that, so she limits the NP by only thinking of the good things associated with the chateau.
Marie-Anne Lenormand:
"Ah, Marie-Anne! Is that really you? It's wonderful to see you again! We have all the time in the world now. Care to read my fortune again? I'm not a particularly avid believer of occultism, but I do understand just how... fickle fate can be sometimes. I mean, did you ever predict this reunion happening? I certainly didn't. Anyway, here's my first question to the cards: will I... ever get to skip work anytime soon?"
Louis XI:
"A countrywide surveillance system that allows you to control the entire kingdom from behind closed doors... That's not a bad idea, actually. If you know where everyone is, it'd be much easier for you to remove potential threats by... wait, wait, wait! No way! I feel like this is a very slippery slope I'm treading on! Exerting control over the populace sounds nice on paper, but the moment some up-and-coming revolutionary comes around and riles up the masses, everything will come crashing down on you hard! Yup, there is no need for control, no need for conspiracies. I only need my dog and my garden, isn't that right, boy?"
"Bark!"
empress elizabeth: royal incognito is basically just powerless shell. overall she seems rather tame, boring even to other servants of yours. You couldve done more with the berserk because beauty shtick or her having the longest reign in her country. Perhaps claim that the empress has to be the most beautiful woman in the kingdom and she lasted so long because she was obsessed with her beauty and that title. Charity to keep in the good graces of the people too, idk, i didnt read about her life. Her palace feels unfitting too. She was to be beautiful, so vision should not be obstructed. Those prying eyes are in that castle and mirrors are everywhere so she can see her own beauty, while the mirrors distort the looks of others, lowering beauty related skills and stuff like that.
Jiutian: so if her bird has the benefits of her Coat skill, this means it also has Military Tactics? Can it control an armada of little birds autonomously? Would be kinda funny to imagine.
Ladon: clearly, the highlight here is Hera's letter. i echo pine on the rest. Ladon wouldve qualified alone for one reason: he is a ruler that is summoned to actually do a Ruler job.
Senna: So…a paper lantern comes down from heaven to bring him cars he collects? Would be an interesting view to see a Porsche glide down from the sky. Precision driving seems unneeded when Riding exists.
Count Dante: ah this weirdo as a servant. While Garou is fitting, man you also took a badass like him and put the name of a scammer on it. To grant regular humans ranks E like a Servant feels kinda strong. I mean even E ranked Servants can easily overpower regular people. Idk the magnitude how much stronger they are, but seems pretty strong for a fake master of martial arts. Like, imagine another proper famous teacher. how would they buff their disciples? I think here at max "That what is reasonably possible for a disciples body which may reach up to rank E for a Servant if well trained". I really like NP in concept because it is fake like his stuff was, but I think you overhyped it a bit. What I exactly mean is the line "can only be defended against psychologically by Skills like Bravery or Soul Of A Martyr".
Those skills are pretty rare, meaning that this recent no-name could harm many great heroes. I think thats too strict. This can work against some weak artist/writer Servants and the like who have low END parameter and no fighting experience, but actual heroes who fought to the death? They should always endure. Oh, and the phantom fusion came out of nowhere.
BnEl: its late, i read a bunch of the other sheets and yours are usually long, i get to it later, sowwy
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
Delrey:
Thanks for your comments
Jiutian: Yes, the bird definitely can and most likely will do that.
Senna: It's not just cars, it can be almost anything And precision driving is basically a flavored variant of another precision skill that I created for Goddard in practice.
Empress Elizabeth: She actually actively disliked the courtly life and her role as empress, building Achilleion to hide away from all prying eyes and allow no one, not even most of her relatives, in.
I think Dim Mak being a mental attack isn't too bad. I mean, mental resistance skills as a whole aren't massively uncommon, and it's certainly not as busted as Mata Hari either.
Fair And Balanced seal of approval from Random. It's cool and I like it.
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Thanks for the feedback. I balanced his second Skill as per your advice. For the NP, I fudged it a bit just saying it can kill through fear, not necessarily that it will do so for any given opponent. The mental-resistance check is only against being affected by the fear aspect at all, not whether it'll kill. That'd be more on a case-by-case/narrative basis.
A/N: I was originally planning to reserve this sheet for a possible future contest, until I felt that I couldn't really get enough content or do enough with him in sheet form alone for him to do that well in one. I still like the idea of an otherwise average person who only just qualifies as a Servant, and a forgotten composer who's come to terms with that in contrast to Avenger Salieri or Morg's Steibelt... only to be shocked upon being summoned anyway.
True Name: Amedee Mereaux
Alternate Classes: Caster, Berserker?
Source: History
Region: France
Catalyst: Being summoned in a house along the street named for him in Rouen.
Armament: Piano hammers
Description: A 19th century composer and piano teacher known almost solely for his Opus 63, the ‘Grandes Etudes’.
Gatekeeper seemed born for musical greatness, being the scion of a family that had produced multiple talented musicians already. But for all his musical aptitude, Gatekeeper was never able to gain the runaway fame and acclaim of his contemporaries Liszt and Chopin, or even the devoted cult following of Alkan or Reicha, with the difficulties of 19th century travel being the last straw that cut his touring career short. Ultimately, Gatekeeper gracefully resigned himself to the cold reality, that he was not destined to be remembered as a musical legend but a footnote at best. Not that he gave up on music, still lending his efforts to the artform any way he could as a teacher and harpsichord revivalist, in the vain hope that if he would never be remembered as a great virtuoso, at least a student of his might.
Then, thanks to but one notorious collection of compositions he wrote, suddenly he was remembered by history and even recorded by the Throne as a Heroic Spirit.
To Gatekeeper, that someone as unnoteworthy as him could even be considered a Heroic Spirit seems like some bizarre joke, and while not averse to the idea of Grail wars and Grand Orders, he feels completely out of place in them, that his summoning must’ve been a mistake. But when asked to teach people piano, he suddenly feels much more in his area, being stern and initially intimidating but ultimately reasonable as a teacher.
(If somehow summoned as Berserker, Mereaux would be warped from a stern teacher to an outright sadistic one, become completely obsessed with the concept of ‘difficulty’ and forcing it onto others.)
Attribute: Earth
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Likes: Tryers, eager students, pushing people to their musical limits, when people bring up his compositions other than just the etudes
Dislikes: Quitters, travel, unruly students, being a Heroic Spirit
Master: A trainee in musical magecraft, or at least someone willing and open to learn.
Natural Enemy: Slackers like Gilgamesh, envious and discontent musicians like Avenger Salieri
Parameters
- Strength: E
- Endurance: D
- Agility: B
- Magic: E
- Luck: E
- Noble Phantasm: A
Class Skills
Territory Creation
The building of terrain advantageous to one as a Magus.
- Rank C: Creation of a musical ‘classroom’ for the teaching of piano is possible.
Territory Defence
Normally the signature skill of the Shielder class, this is the ability to protect one's allies and homefield from harm.
- Rank E: Damage and interference with students is somewhat reduced.
Personal Skills
Powerless Shell
By lowering Skills and Parameters, can become harder for others to even register as a Servant, at least till the usage of a Noble Phantasm.
- Rank A: It is nearly impossible to distinguish Gatekeeper from a Wraith, given but one sole accomplishment distinguishes him from being but a Wraith.
Protection of the Music God (Fake)
A recognition of supreme musical skill, gained through personal accomplishment rather than divine favour. Makes possible to distinguish all kinds of sounds and play a masterful music performance.
- Rank B: Rank lowered as, while Gatekeeper can distinguish all kinds of sounds and is still able to perform (once alongside Chopin), he is not a noted performer when it comes to music, but a composer, teacher, and preserver.
Technique Elucidation
Interpretation and restoration of formulas.
- Rank B: Gatekeeper was a preserver of harpsichord music and pioneer of what we would now call ‘historically-informed performance’, though he was not without his inaccuracies in this area. With him being an oft in-demand teacher, he can expertly revive musical formulas and instruct others in their playing, including Bardsong music magecraft, but struggles with formulas outside of music.
Noble Phantasm
Opus LXIII – Grandes Etudes
One Who Can Play These Can Play Anything
Rank: A
Type: Support
The series of compositions that single-handedly elevated Gatekeeper to Heroic Spirit status and ensure his pace in collective human memory. His Opus 63 is a collection of what are widely considered to be the most difficult pieces for piano ever composed, said to surpass even Charles Valentin-Alkan in difficulty (his own pieces considered harder than even Liszt’s and Chopin’s). So difficult in fact, that unlike the Concert Etudes that rose in popularity around Gatekeeper’s time, these pieces were intended not so much as performance, but rather a test of utmost musical ability. The intent of them to gauge just how much a student could handle, not to be successfully played (though still perfectly listenable in a concert context), akin to a ‘Kobayashi Maru’ of classical piano.
Following the concept of a Gatekeeper imposing a trial on their Master, if Gatekeeper’s Master or anyone else can gain the ability to successfully play any of these pieces, at the correct tempo and (per classical tradition) without any wrong notes, they will be anointed as achieving the greatest apex of musical performance and be elevated to the status of Heroic Spirit.
If one who is already Servant successfully plays them, their Agility and Endurance will be permanently increased by one Rank and they shall gain or rank up the skill Protection of the Music God (Fake).
We are stretching what can be a Heroic Spirit. I would take less issues if you just said he is a weak phantom, then thats whatever. The throne has thousands of them as seen in Traum. But you went out of your way to describe him as a Heroic Spirit instead because he had one gimmick which is remembered somewhat. I had to look through several sites that list mereux's as one of the hardest piano pieces but only when they listed 30 in which he was 27th.
It really feels like you were just intrigued by "oh that piece is hard" and wanted to do something with it and then scrambled something together. Class skills are from caster and shielder, neither inspired by the physical GK interpretation of Royd, nor by the teacher interpretation of pinetree, nor by the somewhat canon example of Watcher.
Personal skills are generic and just say "music teacher".
Why he is a GK is also questionable at best for a very rare class. I am more intrigued how he would be as a Berserker because thats memorable, a berserk teacher that forces people to play something impossible? I can dig that, that gives me reason to remember him, even if he is just someone that attacks others by throwing a harpsichord at them.
Assassin Rose: good i waited with reading it. The Pug is the star here, i love the gif. The use of the roses is a smart and unique idea. Assassin does feel the most fitting. Flower magecraft stuff is part of her caster/summer version i guess. Dorothea does have a cool looking summer alt. Your idea of a waterpark reminds me of "Tropical Island", a famous waterpark near Berlin that is built inside a former zeppelin factory. Its huge with a large jungle area inside. I can see her do something similar. And I am glad she is not as annoying as Bernadetta. Fun fact: i did not play 3H, i watched the cutscenes. But I know Morg devoured Three Houses and Three Hopes.
Last edited by DelRey; August 30th, 2022 at 06:41 AM.
"Let's see the color of your coin, my friend."
Behold my vault of Heroes.
Where the Heavens and the Abyss breath the Music of Humanity.
The King's duty is to provide. And provide, I shall.
University of Formatting | Gallery of Potential | Memorandum of the Extra Class Kings
Our Kingdom will grow. And we shall know each citizen.
Create-a-Servant 4 soon.
Terrible Idea: Gabriel as a conceptual angel (think Maxwell's Demon) using Gabriel's Horn ( the math thing) as a Noble Phantasm.
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Day 1057
The darkness is closing in. I can feel it. The life, draining from my limbs. Cold fingers gripping my heart, as I creep further into the abyss. I can’t go on much longer.
Suddenly, there is a glimmer of light. Hope, piercing through the darkness. It’s…the final page of the thread. I’ve finally reached it, after so many years. The end has come.
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TLDR: I just finished reading the entirety of CAS, going back to the OG thread from 2011, in the days of Shiki and Simo Haiha. Yes, it took years, no, I don't have a life.
If anyone has any questions about past sheets and they don't want to try and parse the forum's wonky search function, I'm your guy.
I may post some sheets of my own, but most of the stuff I've written out is just reworks of canon Servants to make them either more accurate to the source material or my own personal taste, so I'm not sure which if any are worth posting.
Also, I have to say, BnEL's Josephine and Del's St. Jane were some pretty great sheets to end on. I can't describe how much I like Jane, especially as a foil to your Clemont.
Dang, talk about dedication. I remember back when I was an account-less lurker and spent hours browsing the first two CaS threads here.