Originally Posted by
Christemo
Gonna do another one, and before you call it blatantly overpowered, remember Enkidu is quite explicitly stated to be Gilgamesh´s equal. I wanted to create a version of him who wasn´t Strange Fake´s "LOL THIS GUY IS CLAY YO". Also even though he has alot of High-ranked Skills only a handful of them make a difference in combat.
Enkidu
Class: Lancer (Qualifies for anything that isnt Caster or Berserker)
Stats:
Strength: B++ (A if Saber)
Agility: A+++
Endurance: B-
Mana: A
Luck: D
Noble Phantasm: A+++
Why all the modifiers? I'm sure they'll be explained...
Skills:
Divinity: A+
Enkidu is the artificial creation of Anu and Aruru, the king and queen of the gods. This should make him a Divine Spirit, but due to being made of clay he is instead reduced to A+ rank Divinity instead. That feels a little bit high, but that's just me quibbling.
Animal Dialogue: EX
Enkidu, due to being a "Nature Human", can flawlessly communicate with not just animals but the world itself. He can hear the song of the wind, the crying of the snow, the rage of the ocean and the calmness of the forest. Any species of animal can perfectly communicate with Enkidu as if he was of it´s own species, and the other way around. Shouldn't this be sealed or lowered? Enkidu might have this as a Berserker, but once he became civilized, he lost that ability (more accurately, the animals flee or become alien to him).
Presence Detection: A+++
Enkidu has the highest possible rank of this skill, being able to detect Servants from over ten kilometers away, and can detect the presence of all bodies of water, due to how it "cradles the land". Why not just make it EX? That's the the true "highest possible rank".
Natural Body: EX
Enkidu was made with the "perfect body" by Aruru, and his body rivals that of the Original Human's in raw potential. Shouldn't this be sealed or lowered? Enkidu might have this as a Berserker, but once he became civilized, he lost that ability (more accurately, he loses some strength).
Shapeshift: B
Being made of clay, Enkidu can remodel himself into other shapes perfectly, though he cannot mimic their behavior or other things like smell or speech. Enkidu's ability is such that he can configure his clay body to dodge attacks, both raising his AGI (I suggest this is where all those +++ modifiers to AGI come from, since you don't describe it anywhere else) and providing a natural soft counter to Gate of Babylon.
Vitrification: A+
At this rank, Enkidu is perfectly calm at all times and in full control of his own mind. Enkidu in the legend doesn't really have this. (Turn back now/kill the Humbaba, waving Bull of Heaven meat in Inanna's face) He is immune to all Mental Inference, which makes him unable to be a Berserker, despite his former existence as a feral beast. This level of mental control gives him a C-rank in Discerment of the Poor, as while he cannot decipher people´s personality from the inside out, he is able to understand other´s nature and the reason for their actions far better than any human. Discernment of the Poor (in Karna's case, the only example we have) lets Karna perceive things because he was separated from society. Shouldn't this skill be lowered since he is part of Uruk (and not a natural Berserker any more)? Is that what the - modifier is for? Please explain.
Noble Phantasms:
The Sword of Uruk: Destroyer Of All Opposition
Rank: A+++
Anti-Army
Range: 5000 meters in a forward arc from where Enkidu stroke with the sword.
Maximum targets: Over 10.000
Amongst all the weapons of Uruk, Enkidu himself was the greatest of them all. By saying aloud "O friend, I trust thee with me", Enkidu´s right arm turns into a massive golden sword. By then chanting "O friend, guide my wrath with grace", Enkidu unlocks the power of this blade, which will on the next blow release a giant wave of silver-colored energy, destroying all in it´s wake. The fearsome power of this attack and the damage it does to the world makes Enkidu unwilling to use this unless there truly is no other way to win the battle.
Noble Phantasms are supposed to be reenactments of a Hero's greatest deeds/their weapons/their goal or values/identity crystallized into mystery. Also, they should be interesting/cool. Gae Bolg changes fate so that the target is already killed. Enkidu (Gil's chain) turns a strength (Divinity level) into a weakness, as well as providing character insight. Clarent Blood Arthur represent's Mordred's urge to be like her father (mother) corrupted and turned into hate. Zabaniya (Heartbeat) is the arm of satan that crushes hearts (gets a pass for sheer awesome level).
People rant and complain about army summoning, but they forget that sword beams are even older and less creative.
There's an interesting idea in there. You just grew it the wrong way. Enkidu as the sword/protector of Uruk... Enkidu turns into a sword, sealing all his combat capabilities, but designates an area as unenterable? Enkidu turns into a sword and is wielded by his Master? Enkidu cuts off a piece of himself (clay body) and turns it into a sword that has some sort of special ability?
Gilgamesh: A Friendship Beyond Time
Rank: N/A
Anti-Unit
Maximum Targets: 1
Similarly to how Gilgamesh possesses chains named after his only friend that restrain partially divine beings, Enkidu wears a chain named after Gilgamesh. The Gilgamesh chain however, restrains people more the newer their legend is. To a Heroic Spirit from the 19th or 20th century, Gilgamesh would be little more than a normal chain. However, to an ancient hero from The Age of Gods, Gilgamesh is completely unbreakable to all but the strongest heroes. To preserve the dear memento of Gilgamesh, Enkidu displays extreme reluctance in using the chain, and will only use it to cover his retreat if it is ever neccesary.
Better. This gives you the theme of Gilgamesh's Enkidu beats Gilgamesh and Enkidu's Gilgamesh beats Enkidu, which is perfect for the relationship they had. However, Enkidu (the Noble Phantasm) is based on binding the Bull of Heaven; I see no mythological basis for this.